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BPS 030: RAW TRUTH Revealed: Showrunning, Writing & Producing For HBO & SONY with Daniel Knauf

Today’s guest is writer and showrunner, Daniel Knauf. Daniel Knauf had a couple of small credits to his name—a TV movie here, a stint on Wolf Lake there—when he managed to sell the intricate Great Depression-era genre show Carnivale to HBO.

The series, an intricate blend of meticulously researched period detail and secret-history fantasy, purported to tell the tale of what happened when the last two “Avatars”—superpowered beings of light and darkness—met in the United States on the eve of World War II. The series attracted a cult audience that remains devoted to this day, but a mass audience wasn’t sure what to make of the program, and HBO canceled it after two seasons, saying the show’s story was finished, in spite of Knauf’s plan for a six-season run.

We go deep inside the writer’s room, what it takes to be a showrunner and many of his misadventures in Hollyweird!

Enjoy my conversation with Daniel Knauf.

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Alex Ferrari 1:20
I like to welcome to the show Daniel Knauf. Thank you so much for being on the show my friend.

Daniel Knauf 3:53
Oh, I'm happy to be here.

Alex Ferrari 3:55
So first, first off, you have well you have a very impressive career and resume. So we're going to get into a bunch of the stuff you've done. But first and foremost, how did you get started in the film industry?

Daniel Knauf 4:06
Crazy story that? Yeah, whenever I whenever I do seminars, and inevitably, it'd be like, how do I break into film? Which is funny anyway, because it's like what, you know, because there's larceny is kind of hard baked into the entertainment business. And so the language reflects it. So it's like, you don't hear people say, Well, how do I break into accountancy? Or how do I break into plumbing or destruction? You know, it's like, we got to do A, B and E to get into this business. So that question will come up and in in, it's like, I'm singularly unhelpful in a way. I mean, I was insurance broker until my mid 40s. I did that for like 20 to 23 years I ran a business and And while I was doing it, I was, I'd always want to be a screenwriter. And I'd studied, I'd studied creative writing in college and grown up in Los Angeles. And so I kind of had, then I love movies. I mean, it just, it was my favorite thing in it, but I have three kids, I had to raise them and I had to make money. And there was a certain, you know, lifestyle, I wanted to have a house and you know, be able to pay my bills and that kind of thing. So I kind of set it aside. Um, around the time I was 22 and got married, it was like, oh, yeah, this isn't grownups do. And then, around the time I was, by the time I was 27, I was actually going insane. I mean, I was, like, like, literally, like, I was not a happy kid. And, and, and sighs going through this crushing depression, and I started writing. And it brought me out. And I realized, yeah, um, this isn't something that I want to do. This is something I kind of have to do. I'm just, my brains wired this way. And I need to be doing something creative in order to, in order to, it's like a shark has to swim, you know, I have to do this thing. And I mean, so when people come to me seek I've always wanted, right, I think, Well, I've always wanted to be a bird. It's like, I don't have any choice. So it's a so I started doing that. And I focused on really developing my craft and writing screenplays and reading books about screenplays, you know, Synbio, Syd fields, books, screenplay. And other books that were some of them were useful. So when we're completely useless, taking some seminars, going to UCLA, UCLA Extension here in LA has some great classes. And in just basically focusing on learning the craft, and, and I, getting some mentors, I had a, I had two very good mentors. My first mentor was Chad Fisher, who wrote the last voice we met when I was in a workshop at UCLA, and ended up writing some scripts together. And, and she kind of took me under her wing and really, really taught me a lot. And then and then I reached, I hit. Like, I hit my 40s. And I said to myself, and I put it off. You know what? I told myself, this isn't happening. By the time I'm like, 40 I'm just gonna do something else. I'm start reading how write novels because it's sort of a young man's game. And you know, breaking in is, is any 4040 Something year all you know, slightly overweight. Be an EEG, I'll tell you is probably a lot easier when you're in your 20s. And I, I come from a long line of like, really sore losers, like, we're the guys who flipped the Monopoly board, he throw tennis practice at people, right? Yeah, my brother, my brother always says, His fate, one of his favorite things is, show me a good loser. And I'll show you a loser. So I just said, yeah, it's gonna take one more real run at this, it created a website called movies.com posted the first acts of all my scripts that I'd written up to that point. And, you know, by then I'd had some success I had, I did sell a script in the in 1993. That ended up being a movie for HBO called the blind Cestus as a Western, but then, nothing after that. It was like, yeah, it was like, Dead was nothing. It was, yeah, it was kind of like, you know, check EEG or, you know, bouncing this x 15 off of the stratosphere, you know, it's like, wow, it's coming in too hot. And, and so, I was really, you know, the customer slump. So I, I just created this website and put the stuff on and I got a call from a guy, router kale BOD, who worked for a guy named Scott wine and in Scott was an Emmy winning director. And he had told Robert, you know, I'm tired of reading doctors, lawyers, and cops show me something different. And Robert found the first act of Carnival. And he contacted me say, I'd like to read the rest of your pilot, and I'm thinking what pilot and I remember Oh, yeah, you know, I I've taken this crazy 200 Page screenplay that didn't work and thought maybe this isn't a feature and I I collapsed, the first act of a pilot. And so I showed it to him and I met with them and they were very, they were very helpful and they told me I needed to do a Bible I didn't know the Bible was in a, I did this Bible for Carnivale. And then we took it to HBO and all sudden it was like, they bought it. And, and, and I was executive producing, and in writing an HBO series, so I started my career at the very top of the heap I came in. And, you know, it was weird because it was like, nobody worked with me, I'd never done another television show, I had no reputation in the business, I just came out of like, left field, and I'm running an HBO series, and they're, you know, they only would have like, you know, four or five shows on at a time, it was pretty, you know, kind of a high up kind of position in it for somebody who was really a nobody to be in. And I mean, I actually got to a point I remember reading on on IMDb, there was like a rumor going around that I didn't exist, and that I was under a pseudonym for David Lynch, which was like really flattering, but not good for the brand. And so I did the show for two years, and I really kind of hung on by my fingernails. So it was a it was it was, it was a kind of a terrifying experience. Because it's shark tank in there. And, and just to answer your question, it's like to, for me to give advice to someone on how to get in, I can't really say, I come in, you know, I was a baby writer for a while, and I got a story editor job on another show. And then I, you know, built that up and I went, I didn't do the same trajectory, as most TV writers do. I mean, I know what that trajectory is he graduated from film school, you pull every every favorite you can get, and you try to get into the into a writers room. Whether you're in there as a office, Pa and you're bringing coffee, or whether you're writer's assistant, you're just taking notes. And that's really the way into TV writer, it's in no TV writing, it's really very much. It's, it's very much like the old, you know, like, getting into plumbing issue making back. Joining the guild, it's, it's, you know, the mine, I just I broke right through it. It's sort of the top now that we're way down ever since.

Alex Ferrari 12:26
So you said it was it was a shark tank? Can you explain a little bit about what was about that experience? That was the Shark Tank? Because I mean, you have a very unique story. You're right. Most people don't start off running an HBO series.

Daniel Knauf 12:41
Well, I wasn't running it.

Alex Ferrari 12:42
I mean, I mean, but you know what I mean? Like, exactly producing it,

Daniel Knauf 12:45
The first year run was running. But well, really, the main reason what it boils down to is, is there's a lot of money on the line. And they were putting a bet on an untested talent. And that's kind of terrifying for a major corporation,

Alex Ferrari 13:07
it was, it was like 4 million an episode or something like that, right,

Daniel Knauf 13:10
is 3.75. And first season, as far as I know. And that was, at that time, the most expensive show on TV. And we had a huge cast, and we had extras and elements and a lot of outside days, and some special effects. And so it was it was a it was a hugely expensive undertaking. And they would have loved to had a season hand at the top. And that's what they kind of wanted to do. That it was like if we could find a guy who can take this this other guy's crazy idea and make it work. I'm sure they would have scraped me off at some point. But they found to their kind of their horror. And I'm not saying this, you know, Pat, myself on the back right here. This is what I've been told by other people who were involved at the time, they said, What they found was, nobody else knew how to write that show. So they were stuck with me.

Alex Ferrari 14:06
So you see you wrote yourself a niche.

Daniel Knauf 14:08
Yeah, I mean, really, what else? I mean, basically what I did was created it's like it's like sitting out creating a board game where everything you do well is something that wins that board game and it's custom designed for every single thing you do well and and they realized so I probably guessing to their abject horror that you know that they needed me and they couldn't get rid of me and it would have been easier to get rid of me because I was so green and from my standpoint, I didn't know the rules and we're getting into Hollywood and dealing with Hollywood people in the entertainment business is a lot like suddenly getting into Time Machine finding yourself in the court of King Louie the 14 and year there's a whole battery of sort of Kabuki like rituals and certain things that have to be said and how they're said and pecking orders. I remember my first I sent a memo out one time and the insurance business, you send a memo out and you just it's here it is here. Everybody hears what's going on. But you know, I got called by one of the executive producers who said, What do you think you're doing? It's like, what I mean, what am I doing? I'm setting up this memo, about, you know, some nothing. Oh, he climbed up my ass about, oh, you have to put this person's name first and this person's name Second, and this person's name third. And so it was really a lot about just learning these weird customs and rituals and expectations. I also didn't know, what was a reasonable ask, like, you know, was it a reasonable ask, you know, if I said, No, let's not do this. Yeah, it's pretty easy if you don't have a really strong knowledge of physical production. And I didn't back then, to step on the ant hill. And I did that pretty regularly. I learned very quick study, and I learned and I make, I generally don't make the same mistake twice. I just make every possible mistake, one. Fair enough. And so it was it was it was kind of a jarring, terrifying kind of experience in which I was kind of hanging on by my fingernails, you know, at all times. And feeling like a stranger in a strange land. But I, I did the full two years and in in those two years, I pretty much learned the lay of the land. And no, so after that, I knew, you know, exactly, how, how the sausage is made, and in how to I really had a love for physical production, and ask a lot of people who are very knowledgeable questions and learning about that. And, and so it was since then, that was Carnivale was kind of like film school. You know, it was like hell of a film school. Yeah, I mean, there's just there was a there was no, there was an immense amount of there was there was there was money and stature and everything riding on that. I mean, our The sad thing really is the expectations HBO had for the series were wholly unrealistic. And that's one of the things that killed us. If we went on the air on HBO now, you know, they'd be good. Consider. It's like an unmitigated success. But they were saying, Oh, we expect to score higher numbers with this show than the Sopranos. And when I, the day, I heard that I was going, Oh, God, we are so dead. Because the sopranos is mainstream drama. And whenever you get into genre stuff, even more so back then than now, where genre has kind of, you know, oozed into mainstream. Back then there were people where as soon as Ben heals a little girl at the beginning of the show, they're going to turn it off, and they're not going to turn it back on. Because that's not real, you know. And it's, there's some people no matter how well, it doesn't matter whether it listened to a super good jazz or really crappy jazz, they just don't, they can't differentiate because there's still like jazz or rap or country western. And for, you know, shows involve magic, or supernatural or whatever. If people aren't into that, no matter how good you you do, you're going to lose that audience.

Alex Ferrari 18:34
Do you think that carnival would have had a better chance in today's environment, like on a streaming service, like to have a longer run,

Daniel Knauf 18:41
I suspect we would have done our full run. If it came out. If it came out, I would say even if it came out, like, two or three years after we did come out, we were really on the bleeding edge of everything. And people just weren't really ready for that show. And it would have been easier to because allowed to a lot of what we were doing in the first season in the first season drags quite a lot. But a lot of it was about just teaching people the vocabulary of the show. So that they would understand and people is there never been anything online. It was just it was it was just a really weird thing. You know, I mean, it had kind of a cryptic aspects of Twin Peaks, but it was a period drama, and there was some historical aspects that were based on true, you know, situations and true events and other things that were that were made up and and so we really felt like we kind of had to handle the audience along for the, you know, the first first at least six episodes so they know what the rules were.

Alex Ferrari 19:49
No, can you you said, you said a term show Bible. For a lot of people who are listening. They might not know what a show Bible is. Can you explain what your process was being a newbie

Daniel Knauf 20:01
This so they don't feel you know it's there you know? So they're dumb or anything when when when Scott said yeah firstly you know we need to get a Bible and I'm thinking you're gonna kneel down and pray they buy it King James or the new American way what name your poison a show Bible is basically a document that goes into the, the mill you have, you know the world. First you start basically the logline, okay. You know, power is there is like a war between good and evil as far as in the man blasted landscape of the 30s, Dustbowl, or whatever. So you can't be your, your sort of three liner, or two liner log line. And then you start to elaborate on that you get into the world, the rules of the world, you know, the you might, like I like to put you images just to set tone and give you an idea of what things are going to look like. And you you, you talk about the history of all the backstory, you get into the description of the, you know, to full blown articulation of the bottom three quarters of the iceberg, and talk about the characters, character's history. You know, they'll descriptions of who everybody is and where they come from. And then, and then you go into, you know, first season, this is your first season arc that will be quite detailed by episode one, you do this, to this. And then, you know, later episodes, you're kind of, you know, increasingly shorthand and giving people an idea of where the, the thrust of the show is, what its destination is where, when the show kind of ends, if it fails, I mean, a lot of shows, and when nobody's watching them anymore, I mean, the most episodic dramas, and when people are just tired Watchmen, you know, but a serial, this is a serial. And is that's that's kind of what I put together for that matter. What I did was very complex thing to where people were looking at and going, Wow, is this based on like real people? Because I had, like, I got bored with it. I said, once I heard that description, okay, here's what you have to do. I got Sue, I started writing it now it's going cat. This is like watching paint dry. And if I'm bored, whoever's reading it, whoever's got the misfortune of reading this thing, it's gonna give you more I was, hey, can do so you know. And so I started going, let's have a little fun with it. And what I did is I created the whole thing, sort of, from the point of view of intrepid University professor who had heard about this carnival, and had done a bunch of research and gathered files about the actual carnival. And in it were fake police reports and fake newspaper articles and fake religious tracks and all kinds of stuff that he kind of gathered and put together, there was even an interview with Samson when he's like, 75 years old and old folks home, you know, and he says, this sort of, you know, angry karma Jim, you know, and, and, you know, just just like, you know, can be gone really suppose, you know, and so I just had a blast writing it in. So they saw Nick never seen anything like that. And I've done that since on almost every show that I've developed, because I always figure Hey, you know, why screw is success, but after a while you're doing it. I mean, it's like I'm getting I keep hearing different things. Some people say you need to come in with every dot, every i dotted every T crossed in man, you know, and in, you know, trailers, you know, you know, promos, you know, the shot, you know, whatever, you know, this whole thing, and then I hear other people saying the best best just to go in with a strong pitch. I don't know what the rules are anymore, you know?

Alex Ferrari 24:22
Well, yeah, that Netflix and Hulu, and those guys can throw everything off the wind as far as rules are concerned.

Daniel Knauf 24:30
Very much so. And he really you know, yeah, it's like it's they set up shop so far, you know, kind of upstream, that they wield immense thing in the world. And this isn't just in Hollywood. There's the golden rule, which is he who has the gold rolls in and in Hollywood that's very, very, very much operative. In you know, people I've met Netflix are sitting on billions. and billions of dollars. And they say, Okay, you get some and you get some, and you get some. And I don't know what they're, you know, which projects what, what makes them pick out what project or, you know, whatever. It's kind of, I mean, really, I mean, sometimes I feel it's like that there was this old show that was on, I think, in the 50s, before my time, but it was called the millionaire and it was about a guy who would just go out to random million million dollars you know, into buying island for a million.

Alex Ferrari 25:37
Now you can't even buy it. And then I came to buy a house in Burbank,

Daniel Knauf 25:42
me a four bedroom house and receiver. But the the, with a swimming pool. The sometimes I feel like that's what Netflix is now, you know, is kind of like, all of a sudden, boom, you know, you're gifted with it. So well, it's a very, it's a very chaotic market right now.

Alex Ferrari 26:03
It is pretty insane. And, you know, I've talked to, you know, I talked to a lot of people like yourselves who are in the business who were in the business before Netflix. And I've seen them just disrupt this entire industry. And now players like Disney are showing up with their streaming service. And Apple just talked, just said, Hey, we're gonna put ours in and Comcast or at&t, excuse me, they have one coming out. Like there's so many of these services coming out. And it's really just changing the way everything is done. Yeah. What's

Daniel Knauf 26:33
what's interesting, too, is the impact it's had on just the way people comport themselves. Like I think I don't know who it was, if it was Betty Davis, or one of those old actresses was quoted as saying Hollywood's the place in the one place on earth where you can get encouraged to death, you know.

Alex Ferrari 26:50
Very true. It's extremely

Daniel Knauf 26:52
true. Or, as I like to say, and when people say, hey, you know, it's good for exposure, and people die from exposure.

Alex Ferrari 27:02
I'm gonna, I'm gonna steal that line, I wouldn't steal

Daniel Knauf 27:05
a line on it. posit that he was exposed. exposure. So So you know, but it used to be that everybody was really super, super, super, I was talking to my wife about this this morning, I was just making this observation used to be the people were very, very sort of, sort of, sort of, sort of polite and genteel with each other. Mainly because you really didn't know whether this guy who was you just had every reason to believe it's a completely talentless hack, okay? Or just a straight up Bozo. For all you know, from your experience in six years, could be running a studio. He just didn't know or could be the guy that everybody wants to do business with. So people were generally very careful with talent relations. He didn't want to, he wanted to, you know, it will always be God will really love this, but it's just not right for us right now. We were developing something similar to it, or it's be always that kind of, there always be We love you. We think you're great. But my agent one time called me up. It's like the sixth thing that it's like, not sold. And he says, Yeah, well, they really love you. And I go, No, they don't love because if they love me, they would buy shit from me. I could wipe my ass on a piece of toilet paper and submit that they base it show on it. They'll tell me they love. But there was still that was sort of out of kind of out of out of not respect. I wouldn't say it's out of respect. I wouldn't say it was them being unkind. It's not kindness, it was out of fear. It was fear that the person who's sitting in this chair right now with us, maybe somebody we absolutely need to be doing business with later. So we don't want to burn any bridges. What I've found lately, in talking to other writers and stuff is Netflix. And maybe it's because I read a little bit about their, their internal culture of transparency, you'd say what's on your mind to be totally frank with people and that's the way we do things. Is there is a tendency for them to say, Huh, fuck off, we're not interested go away. I mean, it'll be just like, Fuck off, go away. What and you'll go What didn't you like? What? Fuck you we, you know, we didn't like it. You know? Some didn't work for us. So go stop out, you know, and, and they don't give you feedback. They don't say what they're looking for. They don't want a follow up meeting in and it's Curt and it's harsh. You know,

Alex Ferrari 29:39
I heard that too.

Daniel Knauf 29:41
And, and so it's like, it's like, it's like, Well, does that bode well for them? If they come sniffing around later, and you know, and they're not somebody I want to do business with. They're probably gonna Never throw more money at me to get me

Alex Ferrari 30:02
and they'll and they'll have it. We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show.

Daniel Knauf 30:16
Because they've got the money, but I just think, you know, guys, there's a reason why there's so much as kissing going on in Hollywood before you got here. And that's because you don't understand. Somebody who's at the very bottom of the game living out of their car this week, in six months can be picking up an Oscar, you know, I mean, that's the story of the guy who wrote Dances with Wolves. He was literally living out of his car. And a year later, he got an Oscar, he's got a basically treat people well, because people who maybe you don't need this week, you may need desperately in six months or a year and, and you know, but again, I mean, it's like, like I said, some sort of part of the chaos right now. I don't really care, it doesn't affect me, doesn't really affect my game. My game is I just do the best work I can and move forward. And I'm not a peripheral visionary. I just don't look at what everybody else is doing can't kind of do my own thing. And hopefully somebody responds to it.

Alex Ferrari 31:25
I've always wanted to ask you and also just someone like you will have that experience that kind of lottery ticket when with carnival. What was it like when you got the call? Or were you in the room? What was that experience? Were like, we're your greenlit, we're going to make this show.

Daniel Knauf 31:44
Oh, I can remember exactly what it was like when I sold the thing. You know, because I was set up I was my I was at my literally I was like, at my daughter's softball game. I remember where I was standing. I remember that. Looking at my my looking at her mother and going, Oh my God.

Alex Ferrari 32:04
Our life just changed. Well, it

Daniel Knauf 32:06
was like they're doing it. The The problem was, I just I've never tried to get into TV before them. And so I couldn't fully appreciate how amazing it was, you know, it was kind of like, of course they bought it. It's good. I guess that's my money. I was like, when I was like 17 He took me to Santa Anita racetrack. Right. And I just beginner's luck. I picked seven out of nine horses on the note. And I remember sitting there and I was thinking these $2 bets, but it's give me two bucks and then go make a bet. Go home with a couple 100 bucks. And I'm thinking maybe this college thing is overrated.

Alex Ferrari 32:51
The track the track just seems much more easy way back

Daniel Knauf 32:54
the girlfriend, you know, expecting to impress her and I didn't you know, it's like, yeah, they were like, you know, my horses is like they were shooting them out there. It was like, Oh, yeah. Yeah, I totally humiliated realize, Oh, my God. And there were a lot of aspects of Carnival that were like that I, I wasn't, I wasn't, I hadn't gotten beaten up enough to really fully appreciate it. In the market, I hadn't spent a lot of time and trying to network or sell things. What I've done is I've spent 20 years really honing my craft, you know, and that was good. And if I was going to do it another I'd rather do it that way than the other way. I don't think Hollywood's a good place to learn how to write in.

Alex Ferrari 33:40
So you see, you're basically training for a fight that you never knew was gonna come or not come. But when it finally came, you read Oh,

Daniel Knauf 33:48
yeah, I've been doing like Brazilian jujitsu for 20 years with

Alex Ferrari 33:54
in a basement somewhere. You know, no one knew who you were

Daniel Knauf 33:57
on. Yeah, it's like, you know, bring Yeah, just bringing guys in and breaking their necks, there'd be no fucking witnesses. So by the time I was fully evolved, I mean, I, I really was I had, I had honed it to a fine point. And in utter total obscurity is a lot of people you know, you get into it. The problem. I see what like getting into, you know, graduated for college getting that first job. You reached a point where you're pulling out a six figure paycheck. And you kind of go well, I guess I know everything I need to know about writing and your development as an artist just stops. The other thing is, I had 20 I had 25 Well, but my dad has had for decades plus of living I'd done and I I had a lot of experiences. And then, you know, I had a lot to draw on versus some guy who's 20 years old and he has I had a really bad breakup in high school, you know, it was at time I got kicked in the nards in seventh grade. Seventh grade. I mean, there's just, you know, there's not a lot of complexity to what you can look back on it. 22 years old, whereas it 45 I had three kids feeling. There had been the health, there'd been health problems. We've been, you know, a million, a million things. And so it's like I can draw.

Alex Ferrari 35:30
Now you, you also acted as a showrunner and a few shows. Can you tell us which shows you worked on specifically as a showrunner?

Daniel Knauf 35:37
I was never really the showrunner on Carnival. But I was kind of the showrunner by default on Carnival because the second season Ron went away to do Battlestar Galactica. And I was basically the head writer, I was doing everything a show runner does. But you know, but but at the end of the day, there was another executive producer was was handling most of the post production and calling certain shots. So I wasn't really appear showrunner. But I was making a lot of creative decisions. And a lot of the crew were making end runs around the other guy to say, hey, you know, we're trying to get a decision has, you know, and he's putting this one to committee. And we really need to know now and I'd say, just do this, you know. So, I mean, I know what a shoulders job was. And so I know that in the second season, I was the de facto showrunner.

Alex Ferrari 36:30
Now, what does the showrunner do exactly for the audience. So they understand. The showrunner

Daniel Knauf 36:35
is basically responsible for First of all, pretty much all the scripts and the trajectory of what's going on in the writing room and the story of what's being submitted to the network, feeling low notes to come back from the network, dealing with the production issues that come up, looking at, you know, drawings of sets that are going to be built and signing off on those, you're signing off on everything, you're generally, you're generally, you know, working directly with your key crew, in your, your line producers, to just make sure that everything's running and all the trains are running on time. And in doing what you can do to, to make their job, I would say, I would say easier, but sometimes I think just to make their job possible. It's, it's really, it's really it, this is this is pyramid building, you know, and you're building a new pyramid every week, and you're building each pyramid from the factory floor up and, and so there's a lot of details needed attending to, you're also you're delegating a lot. You can't be you can't have your hand in everything. You just have to make sure that the right people who reflect and understand your vision for things are in the slots,

Alex Ferrari 37:56
you know, now can you talk a little bit about the writers room and what it's like to be in that writers room for people who have never been in a writers room?

Daniel Knauf 38:03
Well, there's I've been in both I've been two kinds. There's really only two kinds of writers rooms. Well, there's there's lots of different kinds of writers rooms. There's writers rooms of work and writers rooms don't work. Where, you know, the shows that I've run, the shows that I've been in charge of the writers room, I take great pride in when when I'm running a room, it's running on all cylinders. And you have five or six writers in a room. And usually writers assistant taking notes. You have you using cards or whiteboards in your breaking story. Your job is to sit as a group and break story. And to me the key is first of all, everybody has to feel safe. You know, they have to feel like they're not going to be ridicule that they come up with something silly. One thing that I really like Ron Moore have brought this to our room and carnival. And in according to him, it's it's an old Gene Roddenberry a tech trick is thing called a stupid stick. And you designate something it can be anything, it could just be an object. And if you pick this thing up, and you hold it and pitch something, nobody can make fun of you. It's got supernatural powers. That's awesome. So and often it's the stupid stick pitch that really picks kids breaks the dam, like usually the reaction is that vacation picked up the stupid stick that's actually really smart. Or it'll be Yeah, that's stupid. But you know, if we did that which flot gets every it just breaks a logjam? And I mean, really the the key to me of successfully running a room and I think the best I love analogies that the best analogy I've found for a writers room is you know, you're drawing you're drawing juice, you're drawing story out of the ether as a writer. It's bubbling up through your story. Well, it's being informed by your own experiences. It's being filtered by your own experiences and interpreted by your own experiences. But that story comes from somewhere else. I truly believe the more I do this, that writers and artists, artists of all stripes are the only people on earth that are actually in daily, who in daily communication was with supernatural. I mean, I just, there's something else. I can't tell you how many times I've written something about where the fuck did that come from? Oh, yeah. Holy shit. Like that's, that didn't come out of me, you know. And it's nothing I've ever seen. And it's nothing I've ever experienced, for God's sake. And it's coming from somewhere else. And so you're, you're basically likable, and there's a power station down, down, down the street, I look at it is, you know, to keep the power station thing going is like you're driving through the desert here in California, and there's your route towards Nevada, and there's these solar collectors, that's, you know, hundreds of mirrors on the desert for all of those mirrors focused on a heat element at the top of a tower. That is, you know, moving turbines down below. And I look at it as good writers room is all the people are taking that, that Mojo that story Mojo that juice and sort of focusing it on, you know, on on the person who's running the room. And, and it's like, it's amplifying everybody there, you can't, if you have a good well, we're on writers room. Nobody can really remember who came up with what it becomes, it becomes it becomes a pure hive mind in I'm not just saying it because I like Star Trek, but it becomes it becomes a hive mind. And there's only one writer in the room. There really is only one writer in the room, but he's, he's the combination of you know, the, the four or six or 1212 writers that are all sitting in the room, focusing their mirrors at that center point, which is just, you know, forging the story. And it all kind of melts together, you know? And so it's not, you know, the 12 equals 112 creates one writer, you know, and that that takes him that immense trust. And, and in the process in and in. Measure generosity in more than that. Just making sure it's fun. And because because creation is play creation is play at a very high level. Yes. But it's nevertheless it's no different than, you know, like six kids in a sandbox. Try playing with trucks, your army man or something. It's, you're in a state of play, and you need to make people feel like, good.

Alex Ferrari 43:14
If not that place. Yeah, cuz if you if you if you're making kids not feel fun, they're not gonna play in that sandbox.

Daniel Knauf 43:21
What they're gonna do is they're gonna retreat to their corners and pound it. I've seen that happen in writers rooms. I mean, there's writers rooms where it's like, it's just everybody's just staring a hole in the whiteboard. And it's like, what if we, what? It's like, just show constipated? Right? This Oh, my God, I've been in rooms like that. And it's just like, and usually it's a function of people at the top. a trickle down effect of and of the way that ideas are received. Shows like that are not fun.

Alex Ferrari 44:05
Now, let me ask you a question. How do you deal with studio notes or notes in general from people who have not sat and bled on the paper like you are on your laptop to build that story? Well,

Daniel Knauf 44:17
first of all, you know, I keep in mind that everybody, everybody involved wants to make material good. Now, you'd argue there's probably a few people out there that just want to get their fingerprints on it. There's a good argument. You know, it's like they want to be able to turn to their wife and see, hey, see that sweater? I picked that sweater out because that actress or something? I don't I don't I think it's more the exception to the rule. Everybody is just dying to make something great. And, and and sometimes if it's coming from people who don't understand the process, like executives, it may not be as well articulated as it would be if you're getting it from another writer. You know, and thank God for that because if they weren't capable of articulating it as well as a writer they wouldn't lead. So that said, you know, I, I'd say, you know, I read every, every year I see some article and some basically on the internet or whatever, some bloggers, screenwriting magazine and be like those snippets, will you ever go as much or read about the delicious food or whoever got it to this day, I've never seen anybody write when saying, the smartest note I ever got. Because I can tell you for every really stupid note I've gotten, I've gotten one where I'm kicking myself in the ass on the way home going, Why the hell did I think that? Sometimes people come up with with things where it's like, oh, wow, you're absolutely right. I think the biggest problem is a lot of them notes. They have a lot of executives, they want to pitch a solution, they perceive a problem. And they, they tend to frame their notes as solutions to problems they proceed. So it'll be Hey, you know, do this and you're kind of going, huh? Like, it feel. And it's like, it's, if there's any executives listening or any future executives, the best thing to do is just frame the problem first, you know, what I mean? Oh, the second hack, or, you know, and be as specific as you can I'm, this really bumps for me, you know, this particular moment, or this, the second scene kind of drags where it seems like this one character disappears. And, you know, in the second act, and, you know, frame the problem, don't try to just pitch a solution. Because the solution, it's sort of like, you know, you got a doctor, there's only one doctor in the room, and then you got a bunch of people are standing around the room. And they bring a patient in, and he's bleeding from the ears. And everybody sits, for God's sake, put cotton in his ears and put some band aids on his ears is usually when you're going. Now, actually, that's indication of like, you know, that's intracranial bleeding. And we really have to get them into an MRI see what's going on with his brain, you know, and it's not a bandaid on the ears situation. So, you know, sometimes it's better just to point out, Hey, he's bleeding on the ears. Not, hey, put some band aids on his ears. Right? It's just better to frame the problem or point out the problem and then propose a solution.

Alex Ferrari 47:40
You aren't good at analogies. By the way, you are very good at analogies.

Daniel Knauf 47:47
I should open up a little store,

Alex Ferrari 47:48
you should just sell analogies. Now, what is the biggest mistake you see, first time screenwriters make

Daniel Knauf 48:00
the biggest mistake screenwriters make, I would say the biggest mistake all writers new writers make and even a few they're like, along the way, is not recognizing a lot of people go, you know, if I can get really good the first time it'll save me time on editing, you know, I can edit and write at the same time I can multitask. I can work with my iPad and watch TV at the same time. So I can edit and write at the same time. And then they sit down which is really editing is using a completely different part of your brain than writing it's a completely it's as different as the difference between Oh, I'm stuck to an analogy. But it's it's different is the difference between skiing and eating a banana. Nothing to do with each other. Now I suppose you could ski while you're eating a banana? Well, the thing is, the thing is, is like it's really they're they're they're mutually exclusive activities in and what I find is the effect is like, when people do that, and they go that way. That's where you get into the it was a dark and stormy night. Oh, no, no, no, that sucks. It was a shadowy and rainy night. Oh, that's worse. This is the recipe for complete writer's block and paralysis, where you're trying to make qualitative decisions about things that are just jumping out of your head, okay, you cannot do it. You cannot do that. You can't do it. It is like, like pegging the accelerator and the brake on your car at the same time. You're gonna make shitloads of noise and last smoke, but the car ain't going anywhere. Okay, and so it's like, it's like under stand that, you know, when you sit down to write, you write like you're being pursued through the jungle by a bunch of guys with machetes, you don't think about it, you go, you can be thinking, Oh, this is shit, I know it shit, but I've got to get through the scene, okay, I know what the next scene is gonna be. And just get through it, get through it, get through it, get through it right forward, don't wait. For Christ's sake, when you sit down to write, don't sit down and read everything you've written before you write it because now you're editing again, stuff that you just sit down to read the last few words and you go, Oh, yeah, that's where I left off, and you just pick it up. And you you have to write like, you're just in now. And then so okay, if you're, if you go off of your outline, that's all right. If something happens, and the character takes you in the direction, you didn't expect to go, Great, okay, you know, and sometimes those are great moments. And so go ahead, but as long as you get back onto your, you know, onto the path again, and arrive at your trajectory and arrive at your ending, but just get that first draft out and get it out as quickly as humanly possible. And, and I can guarantee you that the parts that you thought while you were writing them, which is shit on ice, actually, you'll reread I mean, go, well, this isn't bad. And the stuff you thought where you were, oh my god, I must be channeling you know, ug to you. It's just garbage, you know. And so it's like, it's like, you have no way of knowing how well you're doing while you're creating you can't be here. So that's another reason. So So my advice to writers is understand that process and understand editing in, in, in writing and editing, the creative process, and the editing process are two completely different things. And, you know, in don't try to don't try to multitask that it never goes well.

Alex Ferrari 51:54
I actually heard I actually heard a great analogy from a songwriter, and which I think is amazing analogy for writing. Which is like when you go into an old house and you turn on the pipes, and all you see is that mud come out. You just got to let it go and let that mud keep flowing out of the pipes out of this faucet. And then sooner or later, it's gonna start while it starts getting lighter and lighter and lighter to the point where then you're getting clear water that you can actually drink but you have to get through all that other stuff first, or else they won't you won't get to the good stuff.

Daniel Knauf 52:27
Oh, you just have it you it's like it's like it's it's it's an ugly, messy, smelly process.

Alex Ferrari 52:34
There's nothing There's nothing. There's nothing glamorous about being an artist a lot of times it really is it not that when you're real creative.

Daniel Knauf 52:44
You know when I'm, I'm I'm one of those I'm one of those rare birds. A lot of people are like, you know, a hate writing. Torture. They're sitting in front of their I've seen guys sitting there, sitting there frowning at their screens. And in this. I'm happy and giddy and stupid when I'm writing. I'm just like laughing I'm like, great. I'm just sitting here making basically no, go. Here this is so great.

Alex Ferrari 53:12
Well, you actually just said that. Right? When we got on the on the on the line. You're like I'm writing a ghost story. Like you were so happy about it. Well, you said

Daniel Knauf 53:20
that's because I love this process. I there's tons of love on the page. I just adore writing. I'm not one of those guys. It's like there's all I like having written Yeah, it's like, I like the process. I like I like doing it. It's one. You know, it's funny, there's that I forget what it is that some recent in one of those self help business type books. They made this prop proposal legal. If you do any endeavor for activity for 10,000 hours, yes. And yes, I okay. So if you want to be if you want to be a concert pianist, you just have to play for 10,000 hours. What he doesn't say is that if you didn't like playing the piano, right, you'd have to be the world's dumbest asshole to waste 10,000 hours of your life doing something you don't like doing. People who spend 10,000 of their happy hours of their life mastering some art or craft or science or whatever they master. They have to love it. You have to love doing that.

Alex Ferrari 54:33
But there's a lot of people that don't a lot of people who go to school,

Daniel Knauf 54:38
you have to love some aspect should you know. But you know, I mean, a lot of people fall in love with the idea of being a writer, you know, but I meet writers every day. They've never written a word. They're just natural. retcon terrorists are really good at telling stories. They're just and it's like, where I go for God's sake, or we should sit down write a book or something because you're really good, you know, and then I mean People who are writers, and they're making very good money. You know, I've worked with people who are writers, and it's like, they're not writers. They've worked out the craft, they understand what follows what but they're not really writers. They're just, they're just regurgitating things they've seen in putting a spin on everything to make, you know, to make it a little fresh enough to where everybody doesn't, you know, get scared. Oh, yeah.

Alex Ferrari 55:24
That's an interesting, that's an it's very interesting, because you sometimes you see these movies, or you watch these shows, and you're like, wow, it's just the same, the same stuff. And I've met writers, too. I've met writers and filmmakers, for that matter, who do exactly what you know, they understand the craft their technicians. But, but kidding, like, you know, I could put the paint on canvas, and I know how to do it. And I know the technique. But I'm not Vinci. I'm not, I'm not Van Gogh, I'm not, I'm not being brave. I'm not being you know, I'm not going out there without a net.

Daniel Knauf 55:58
Well, yeah. But that's, you know, maybe that's the cards that are dealt yet, you know, not everybody is, you know, I mean, there's probably guys painting pictures from, you know, photographs down at the mall, that, you know, from a craft, and from a from craft standpoint, as far as mixing colors and laying down pain are probably, you know, highly evolved, you know, but the, there's directors like that I won't name any names, but there's directors that are absolutely masterful, but it's just not quite substantial. There's a there's an, it's hard to put your finger on it, but it's like, there's a sense of a missing depth to my mind. The somebody like Kubrick brings to the party in our or Scorsese or, you know, where there's, there's something really to it. And

Alex Ferrari 56:53
there's something underneath that there's like 50 layers underneath. And you will only see it in 20 or 30 years of watching. That you'll Yeah, Kubrick Kubrick's my favorite.

Daniel Knauf 57:05
You, you know, he was aware of what he was doing and everything, but he was aware of everything he was doing. And no artists really is a lot of it, you're just doing your best and it's coming in that way. But you really have no idea. You know, how, how, why it works that way. You know, you're just focusing on trying to articulate your vision as well as you can. Yeah, I mean, I, you know, I take you go to college lit class, and he gets some clown, you know, up in front. He's your college lit teacher, and he's trying to tell you what was going through Herman Melville's head, right? You know, Moby Dick Or Steven cranes head when he's writing Red Badge of Courage. And yeah, he was thinking about this. He's working with symbolism over here. And I tell people I go, I can tell you what's going through Herman Melville's head when he wrote Moby Dick. It was like, I don't feed my family. And this is due in a couple of months. That's what was going through Herman Melville. Right. You know, right. doing the best you can, you're running through the jungle with the guys with the machetes feeling you that's what's happening.

Alex Ferrari 58:12
You know, it's funny, because Cooper Kubrick's one of my favorite artists of all time, and there's so much I mean, there's volumes libraries written about what people think he was doing in 2001. And in the shining, and, and, and all of those, and I just just see the documentary film worker. I know it's, it's his assistant. Oh, I didn't see that. Yeah, it wasn't a wonderful, wasn't it wonderful. But you hear him and he was the guy that was literally next to him for 30 years. And he's like, you know, the twins in shining? Well, that was me. I brought twins in and Kubrick said, Sure. I guess they're twins now, where everybody's like, in their twins, because back in the day, he shot some photos of twins, and they're putting up like, No, it just

Daniel Knauf 58:57
was. It was the first episode of the first episode of Carnival. It's called millbay. Right? Then I decided you know, when I first created the show, I wanted to name each episode every city they were in. We didn't do that the first year. We did it the second year, you know, but I titled the episode No, no. And the way I found it is I got a period period map of the decimal and sort of looked at dots on the map and found a little tiny dot name no Fe and I went along like that. And so that's what I titled it. So then we make it like two years later, it's on TV and people are talking about it on the internet and going back and forth with interpretations and stuff. And some guy says we you know, and mil Fe is an anagram for family and I'm going homogeneous. I couldn't have been thinking about that, you know, I couldn't have done I couldn't, I'm not going to be thinking about stuff like that. And when I'm making creative, because I'm making 10 10,000 creative decisions in the course of a screenplay, you know, 10,000 decisions to make, you can't be thinking on that level about everything money never finished, she'd still be writing the pilot today.

Alex Ferrari 1:00:21
We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show. No, so good. So when carnival came out, the Internet was definitely off and running is already around for a little bit. And but then the message boards and all that stuff was going on back then heavily. And I remember people just, you know, because it wasn't, there wasn't as much content flying around as there is today. Yeah. And they really delved into the deep, the deepness of Carnival, how is it as a creator, I've always wanted to hear this as a creator to go on. And just like, you guys have no idea what you're talking about, like what he was like, you

Daniel Knauf 1:01:06
know, because, like I said, people have different interpretations for different shots. That's just nobody does that when they're talking about CSI. Right? Are those like house, you know, they're, they're not even really doing stuff, like down on the soprano so much. But the minute they start to interpret stuff, symbolism, and so forth, but things really mean connections between different elements. As soon as people start doing that, you're taught now, that's what people do about art. Okay. And that means, exceeded, you've made art. It's not just a TV show, you've made art. And so that was the biggest thing. I mean, I'm not gonna say, Oh, you're wrong, because they couldn't be right. I mean, to me, it's, it's, it's there's a collaboration happening between the artists in the audience, if the audience draws something out of it that the artist didn't intend. Does that mean it's not there? Absolutely not. You know,

Alex Ferrari 1:02:03
that's a great perspective.

Daniel Knauf 1:02:05
Well, yeah, why wouldn't it it should be if it's open to multiple interpretations, that's a good thing. It'd be that that's because you're reaching people, different people in different ways. It's almost like the story in the Bible of the apostles speaking tongues or something, everybody's different language. That's fine. That's good.

Alex Ferrari 1:02:28
Yeah, like go to go back to Kubrick, every one of his movies has been interpreted 1000 different ways, and will continue to be interpreted for them for decades and decades to come in different ways.

Daniel Knauf 1:02:37
That's because his work is hard. Which is, which brings me to my poetry, I should pitch my

Alex Ferrari 1:02:41
quote, please, please pitch your poetry. Well, I was gonna ask you what's next on your plate?

Daniel Knauf 1:02:46
Well, I'm doing a bunch of stuff. I'm, I mean, it's like I've been, I've been creating shows that don't go on. You can check them all out. I mean, it's a cool book will push you over. Anything since carnival, I was like, no one created like a bunch to show. And for I don't know why I read a bunch of webinars saying this is good. This could go tomorrow. I don't know what the deal is. But I've got a site called off TV. And you can see it's unusual, because you can see the actual pilots in their entirety on some of the projects. There's another thing called the Bible, which we talked about earlier in the show, and you very rarely get to see show Bibles on the internet. This will give you an idea of what a Bible looks like, like what a show by Oh, looks like. So it's a nice resource for new writers. And then, and then, and then there's these things we call decks, which are sort of like anywhere between an 11 and 15 Page version of a Bible like mostly sizzle, very little steak. Just kidding. It's kind of thing they call it leave behind, you might take it to a pitch meeting with you and leave something behind for the executives bass up the chain of command. So some of those two, so they're helpful selling things. And that's all on NOF KNAU f.pb.

Alex Ferrari 1:04:04
And I'll put it in the show notes.

Daniel Knauf 1:04:07
The other thing, the other thing is, I recently I got I started writing poetry, I wrote it, I wrote poetry and first started writing. As you know, when I was an art major, and then I flipped over to creative writing and, and I was drawn to that I did a lot of poetry and worked with a lot of really great, had a lot of great poets and teachers. That was where I sort of cut my teeth in. I started writing again, about six, seven years ago, and for like, five years, I was writing these these poems and just post them on Facebook. I would just post them on Facebook. And because it's like, who gets paid for writing plays What am I get submitted to?

Alex Ferrari 1:04:49
Poetry Poetry Magazine?

Daniel Knauf 1:04:51
Yeah, yeah, poetry. Yeah. jogs

Alex Ferrari 1:04:54
poet she the jugs of Poetry Magazine.

Daniel Knauf 1:04:58
So we we He may still even exist. I don't know it's so. So I just post them in is this this woman was actually collecting, and she contact me. So I've got, you've got like 35 balls in. And I thought, Wow, maybe we should do a book so called another person I knew is a publisher and she said I would love to publish poems by you. And so, we did this thing. It's called Noho glomming. If you go on the if you're on my Facebook page or Twitter, you'll find it. If you go on the net, you want to find it, just put it in Clash books is the publisher. CLA see UCLA sh books. And the book is no Whoa, in Oh, H O. glomming. GL o am ing. And there's links all over my, my web, my social networks, and so forth. And it's a, it's about as pure, I mean, it's like, when you do TV guy, like, we're not meant to know process is this your your vision is mitigated by a lot of people, you know, it's very rare, where you get really the raw stuff up, because it takes so many people just to make these damn things, you know. And, you know, everybody's, you know, it's gonna waver from the way you might have imagined, you know, down to props and camera angles. It's all in the myriad of details. And it was so nice to return to a form where I'm creating the end result right there on a page. And so it's very approachable. It's not, it's not poor, if you don't like, like, if you think of poetry the way I think of mine. And you're allergic to poetry. It's not this precious stuff. It's very relatable. I believe that if somebody I believe people read it, and they'll connect very deeply with it. There's one poem at the end. It's an epic poll. That's just crazy and kind of funny. And it's, it's the story of a guy in the witness protection program. It's not I mean, I'm not writing about ravens, and angels and, you know, dead king trees, right? Yeah. Writing about stuff like Citgo gas stations, right? My influences were Charles Bukowski, and this whole Los Angeles, brown broke school. And it's very down to earth and sort of grounded straight up stuff, and sometimes abusing and sometimes moving. So I urge you to check out my poetry if you like my TV, don't really like that.

Alex Ferrari 1:07:51
Awesome. Now, I'm gonna ask a few questions. I asked all of my guests. What advice would you give?

Daniel Knauf 1:07:58
The actor saying?

Alex Ferrari 1:07:59
Yes, yes, yes. Yes, exactly. Exactly. Just like we actually do

Daniel Knauf 1:08:02
odd types. Don't do that.

Alex Ferrari 1:08:06
If you were a tree, now I'm joking. What advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today?

Daniel Knauf 1:08:14
I would say the best thing you can do is skip film school and just start shooting film. Because you can do that. I couldn't do that when I was starting out

Alex Ferrari 1:08:24
as a filmmaker as a filmmaker. Yeah, I would

Daniel Knauf 1:08:27
film school you will learn everything you learned in four years of film school in five days on a on a set, pretty much no, it's a film schools the world's biggest waste of money unless you go to UCLA or NYU or USC. And otherwise, if you're going to some other college to get a communications degree or film degree or that you're totally wasting your time. If you want to be a filmmaker, take take shit take 25 Tell your parents say okay, I want to take 25% of what you would spend on a college and I want to make a movie with it. Just make movies write them get your friends together. Sony has a good I make him the director now just make go out and start making movies in and you know, you might not mind that but you'll get from here to there much faster than you will if you go to film school.

Alex Ferrari 1:09:22
And how about screenwriting

Daniel Knauf 1:09:24
for screenwriting? You know, I think the most important thing I would tell a writer who wants to be a dramatist, which is a very specific kind of writing. People think novelists think I could not I can adapt this to a script. They usually can. It's very specific. Shakespeare was an actor before he was a writer and I really I didn't really learn how to be dramatist until I studied acting and I studied acting by accident. I thought I want to be a director. And so one of my second mentor who is really important in my development was a guy named cliff. Ozma was acting as an acting coach. He was Armand De Santis, kind of, you know, acting consultant. And I, I met him on a set. And we got to be good friends. And I said, I want to take some of your classes because I'm going to learn about the process so I can interact with actors as a director. And what I did was I ended up learning how to write, I really learned I was really good at pack in the trunk, and I knew how to, to break a story and in and figure out what follows this and what follows that when it came to my character work, I was faking it until I studied acting, and you'll learn. One thing you learned in acting is, is to act in the moment. Now if you still get stage fright, I have terrible stage fright. When I'm playing somebody other than myself, I can get up in front of a zillion people being Dinafem Yeah, but if I'm playing a character, it's scary. And, you know, I just can't build that fourth wall. But when I'm alone in a room I can in I'm writing in the moment, I'm mostly my scene work feels like, I'm just taking transcription. I know my characters, so Well, I know what they're saying. All I'm doing is just trying to keep up with them while they're while they're talking. Going through a scene. I never am going, hmm, what would he say there? Hmm, what would she then say? Another thing? I'd say the young actors or younger young writers is that sort of? So attached to that, is if you're going to a place like that, and you're going, what would I say? If I was in that situation? What would I say? If somebody said that to me? Is nobody really gives a fuck what you would say, Okay? Because you're really not interesting. Actors, aren't doers, actors, or watchers, if you're borings, just boring, boring people, and so nobody cares, what you'll see. You have to understand your character, and what the character would say. They all have to have different voices, they have to be real, you know. So, again, I would really strongly suggest studying spending at least a couple of years, you know, in any way you can, and whatever resources your town or city has. Getting up and studying, acting and doing scenes and seeing how hard it is. And it also helps you develop a really strong respect for your for the actor, and how hard they're, and that's something that's sorely lacking. With many writers in Hollywood, we're all here on guru Aegis sucks, and it's like, has it occurred to you that, you know, you're writing shitty stuff to say? No, there's no way to make work well,

Alex Ferrari 1:12:48
if Meryl, if Meryl Streep was saying, and it wouldn't have worked.

Daniel Knauf 1:12:51
Yeah. I mean, if you can get to where you write it, when you're there, you're doing you're working with actors, you know, actors, you get to understand the kind of stuff the actors want to say that the kinds of moments actors want to play. And if you know that, can you get them on your side? I mean, that's good. That's something that's gonna make you stand out.

Alex Ferrari 1:13:13
Now, can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career?

Daniel Knauf 1:13:18
The biggest? The biggest impact on my life? Or my career or mean?

Alex Ferrari 1:13:24
Or on or? Or either? Or?

Daniel Knauf 1:13:27
I would say at this point, you know, I was late comer to because I think there's also so many

Alex Ferrari 1:13:35
whichever one comes to your mind. The Alchemist of course, I love the alchemist. It's one of my favorite books.

Daniel Knauf 1:13:43
It's an astonishing piece of work. It's like everybody should everybody should read it. It should be required.

Alex Ferrari 1:13:50
It should be required for everybody in the world, but especially those who are artists.

Daniel Knauf 1:13:56
I think yeah, but I think for everybody, I think I think it's a good it's about as close a thing to like, if Homo sapiens came with an owner's manual, it would be the alchemist

Alex Ferrari 1:14:13
Good answer, good answer. Not what is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film industry or in life?

Daniel Knauf 1:14:21
Hmm. They are not always right. You know, that sometimes. I've been in situations where I'm absolutely sure something's not going to work in and in that person has a higher rank than I do. So once you get to call a shot, and I'm thinking he is gonna work, it's gonna work as well as the way I would have done it. And then often I watch it and it works beautifully. You know, and I go, You know what, I was wrong. You know, it's like, this is the way you're just because it's the way you Do it doesn't mean it's the best way to do it. In, in, in, in when it comes to a collaborative art, Passion Rules today, and you know what it boils down to is the person who's most passionate is probably going to win that fight. Don't get hung up on little stuff. If people want this change, the worst place you can go, the least productive, most toxic place you can go is to this place that almost every shitty writer goes, which is Detroit or read my work, you know? And it's like, yeah, they're dumping shitloads of money into this, and they just want to rack it. Because they don't like you. I mean, people should also come on forgot to say, you know, I mean, sometimes, sometimes another way does work. And sometimes it works even a little better than the way you had in mind. Just don't, don't think that you're ever going to watch something that is exactly the movie you had in your mind when you can see it and wrote it, it's always going to be a little different. Some parts are going to be better, some parts you might win sad. Hopefully, the you know, the former is more numerous than the ladder. You know,

Alex Ferrari 1:16:18
they're good. And then the toughest question of all three of your favorite films of all time.

Daniel Knauf 1:16:22
How that is North by Northwest I love I love. I think I'm the see, there's a lot of I'm just gonna see what pops into my head of Catholic course. And I think it's probably it's probably it is it's really kind of a dead heat between China Town. And, and, and, and the shining.

Alex Ferrari 1:16:55
I really love this shot.

Daniel Knauf 1:16:57
I mean, it doesn't work. Of course. Those four

Alex Ferrari 1:17:01
Right, exactly. That just came into mind right now. I agree with you, 100% and

Daniel Knauf 1:17:06
everything but David Lynch can Does that count?

Alex Ferrari 1:17:09
Everything by Kubrick everything by

Daniel Knauf 1:17:12
every other movie by the Coen Brothers. It's like that.

Alex Ferrari 1:17:18
You're right, it is almost every other movie because but when they hit it, they hit it out of the park. I know. But when they strike out, it's but you know what, though? No, strike out. It's

Daniel Knauf 1:17:32
an interesting strike.

Alex Ferrari 1:17:33
I was about to say I was about to say even when they strike out at least they're going to places that is pushing them creatively in places that we might have never even been to. So for every other No Country for Old Men, there might be a lady killer.

Daniel Knauf 1:17:46
And you do do editing on this thing after you're done.

Alex Ferrari 1:17:49
I do not. You don't

Daniel Knauf 1:17:51
go straight through. I'm gonna say hi. I'm on the radio.

Alex Ferrari 1:18:00
Know, my audience is used to this. It's all good. Don't worry. And then where can people find you

Daniel Knauf 1:18:04
Just dropped personson the table probably sounded like the like a bomb.

Alex Ferrari 1:18:10
It's all good. It's all good. Now where can people find you in your work?

Daniel Knauf 1:18:14
People can find all of these things I've done at North TV. And then you can find my stuff. I mean, you know, I mean, it's, I'm pretty active in in on Twitter and the social networks. There's interviews, you know, just Google my ass. And you'll pop up. Daniel Ross, don't google my. There you can find me all over the place. And as far as what I'm doing right now. Right now I'm kind of I finished up a good three years in the blacklist. And I'm kind of been doing a lot of development. So I'm right now I'm kind of I'm, I'm I'm kind of up between jobs. Okay. As Henry and Eraserhead would say I'm on vacation.

Alex Ferrari 1:19:06
Your sabbatical. Sorry, you're on sabbatical.

Daniel Knauf 1:19:08
Yo psychics about

Alex Ferrari 1:19:11
Daniel. It's been an absolute pleasure talking to you. Thank you so much for being so kind and generous with your time thank you.

Daniel Knauf 1:19:19
I enjoyed it.

Alex Ferrari 1:19:22
I want to thank Daniel for dropping some major knowledge bombs on the tribe today, and sharing his experiences his unique experiences as a showrunner and a writer. And guys if you want to get notes to anything we discussed in this episode, just head over to the show notes at indiefilmhustlecom.bps029. There I'll have links and contact information, all that kind of good stuff on Daniel and his work. And if you guys haven't checked it out already, please head over to indie film hustle.tv and check out the screen writing section of the streaming service, it is amazing. We've got new lectures, new courses going up every month, we now just added season three of the dialogue, which has some of the biggest screenwriters in Hollywood working today, sharing about an hour and a half interview about how they do their process, the insides and the ins and outs of the business and so on. It's a great, great series, and I've seen all of the episodes and we'll be putting out another three or four seasons coming up in the months to come. But it's really, really great among other interviews and other lectures and things like that, that we have on the surface. So definitely check that out, guys. And that's it for another episode of The Bulletproof screenplay podcast. If you haven't gone go to screenwriting podcast.com And leave us a good review on iTunes. It really, really, really helps the show out a lot and gets it out there to more and more people. So thank you again for all the support guys and as always, keep on writing no matter what, I'll talk to you soon.


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BPS 029: How to Pitch Your Screenplay in 60 Seconds

You walk into an elevator and just before the door closes Steven Spielberg gets on. You have 60 secs to pitch him your latest screenplay. What do you do? Your goal is to have your audience say yes, I understand, and I care” after reading or watching your brand story.

So how do you pitch  a movie idea?

If your audience just says “now I know” then you have successfully informed them but not enough to make them care, to make them stay to whatever you have to say next. Your career can be made in 60 seconds – if you make the right pitch!

Today’s guest is returning champion Michael Hauge. He is the best-selling author of Writing Screenplays That Sell (now in its 20th Anniversary Edition) and Selling Your Story in 60 Seconds: The Guaranteed Way to Get Your Screenplay or Novel Read

According to Will Smith,

No one is better than Michael Hauge at finding what is most authentic in every moment of a story.” – Will Smith

We discuss pitching techniques, the pitch story arch, and much more. After partnering with Michael on the best-selling Udemy Screenwriting course Screenplay and Story Blueprint: The Hero’s Two Journeys I wanted to work with him again. We came up with the online course Pitching Your Screenplay or Novel in 60 Secs

Enjoy my conversation with Michael Hauge.

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Alex Ferrari 0:00
I like to welcome back to the show Michael Haeg. Michael, thanks so much for coming back on the show. Oh,

Michael Hague 3:49
my pleasure. It's great to be back.

Alex Ferrari 3:50
You know, your your your episode was probably one of the most downloaded episodes in the history of indie film hustle, Jay, because it was one of the early ones I think I don't even remember what the number was. I think it was like 20 or 30. We're now getting we're closing in on 200 episodes. Soon. Yeah, I'm busy. And but that episode was very well received, and the course that that we partnered on the heroes two journeys, the story, storytellers blueprint has done extremely well. And a lot of the listeners have taken that course. So thank you so much for coming back and just sharing your knowledge.

Michael Hague 4:30
Oh, absolutely. And congratulations. I didn't realize the number had gotten that high. But it's an honor to be back. And and I'm looking forward to talking about this because this is this is a significantly different topic than the other one. This is this is in the selling arena rather than the creating arena.

Alex Ferrari 4:47
Exactly. Exactly. Because, you know, I brought you back because we're going to talk about pitching and I think that's a mystery for a lot of filmmakers, screenwriters, people in general, they just don't understand how to pitch and it's such an important skill. So we kind of put together wanted to kind of dig into, you know, a lot of the stuff that you work on on your book, which is called selling your story in 60 seconds. And I wanted to get into it. So what is a 62nd pitch Exactly?

Michael Hague 5:16
Well, this is a pitch that one would give either a novelist or screenwriter would give, or in this case screenwriter primarily when they have a very short amount of time, number one, and they have one goal and one goal only. And that is to get somebody to read their script. Or if you're a filmmaker in another arena, to get somebody to look at your short film or your piece of work that you want to use as a sample. But as opposed to say, a pitch meeting in Hollywood, once you reach a certain echelon, you might be invited to sit down in an agent's office, sit down in a production company's office, and discuss your screenplay or discuss your idea for a script. That's all well and good. But you're never going to get to that meeting, until someone has read your script. And they're not going to read your script unless you know a persuasive way to get them to take a look at it. So this is all about just that, will you take a look at this and read it? And then my script will stand on its own if you'll only take a look.

Alex Ferrari 6:19
Right? So it's basically the elevator pitch, if you will. Yeah,

Michael Hague 6:23
if you're going to a very high floor. Elevator, 60 seconds to get up there. Yeah, I mean, 60 seconds is not a precise shirt. But there's another context where it's not just elevator, but it's a phone call. But also, if you go to a pitch fest, or a pitch mart or if you're going to a writers conferences, screenwriting conference, and you're just have the opportunity to corner someone who has a degree of power in Hollywood, who's in the business, in the hallway or something. And and you can say, you know, I'd love to tell you about my script. Or sometimes if you're just schmoozing with someone in that context, they'll ask you, well, what am I working on, you can't take 10 minutes of their time to talk about all the nuances and details of your masterpiece, you've got to do it in a very short period of time. But in 60 seconds, you can give someone enough information about the script, but they can decide whether or not they want to read it. But you want them to decide yes or no based on an understanding of what the promise of it is. And not because they don't you, you told them, the start of it, and nothing more, because that's all you have the time for.

Alex Ferrari 7:37
Now, what are the top reasons why pitches go wrong? Well,

Michael Hague 7:42
to me without question, the number one mistake that screenwriters make when they're pitching their project is, no matter how short the time span, they try and tell their story. And you just simply can't do that. I say sometimes, if you've got a screenplay for a movie, that that you can tell the story in 60 seconds, then you've got a story for a 62nd film, because that's, that's what you're trying to do. You're trying to squeeze them, this is how it opens. And this is who the characters are. And then this happens. And then all once a body is found. And now we're and if you're at a pitch mark, where they say you've got, say 10 minutes, and you go longer than that, they're just going to take you away and you won't even finish, sometimes you're only given five minutes. But the thing to remember is even five minutes is too long when you have a five minutes like because you've got to have some time left after you pitch it. So the the prospective buyer of that script can talk about it and ask you questions, and find out the details they want to know not the details that you thought were so critical to put in the pitch.

Alex Ferrari 8:53
Now, how do you target buyers and target people who might be interested in either buying your script? Or watching your film or even giving you money for your film? How do you target buyers?

Michael Hague 9:06
Well, what you want to basically do is you want to follow in the footsteps of people who have been successful at marketing and selling or getting scripts optioned that are similar to yours similar meaning not they have the same plot, but they're in the same genre. They have the same general budget. If yours is a period piece you want to find out well, who who has produced period pieces in the past? If it's a horror film, who are the companies pursue, you know, making horror films. So the way you can do that the number one resource I always recommend is the Internet Movie Database. I am the b.com except that for a very small amount of money, you can get a subscription to I am DB pro.com. And when you have the Pro it means let's say let's say you've written a horror film, okay, and and you want to find out well who is making or who has made horror films recently that have been successful. And you find out that this Friday Jigsaw opens, which is kind of a spin off on saw series, okay, so you can go to imdb.com on your computer. And you can just put the search on jigsaw, and it will have pages or a lot of screens worth of information, the title, the name of every character, and who plays that character, the name of all the cast and crew. But here's the thing, it'll also list say, the producers and the production companies involved, not the studios. And we can explain that in a second. But you check out what are the who are the producers and production companies, then if you have the Pro version, which is I say, a minimal investment, then you can click on them, and they will give you contact information. So it will you will then find out well, this is the address and this is the phone number of this production company. And so then what you do either in that entry, or by calling the office, you find out who is the development director or the head of development, or the story editor, whatever the title is, who's in the business, who has the job at that company of getting scripts into the company, find out that person's name, and then you you call them cold or you send an email, you can send a letter, but letters aren't really, they're kind of passe anything

Alex Ferrari 11:31
like sending a fax,

Michael Hague 11:33
yeah, you can do a fax, that's still somewhat doable. But whatever it is, you want to try and track that person down and get them on the phone. And guess what you're going to do if you can get through to them and have them on the phone in their busy schedule. And they're only going to give you 60 seconds, guess how you're going to use it, you're going to give them your 62nd pitch.

Alex Ferrari 11:56
Now, can you discuss the seven steps of a great 67? Great 66/62? Pitch?

Michael Hague 12:03
No, because there's a well then there you go. What are the eight? So I guess the answer is yes, I can with a bonus. So here's here's how to look at it. A pitch is four steps of preparation and forceps of presentation. So there are four things to do to get ready to give the pitch. And then four things you need to do to actually give the pitch when you're on the phone or across the table at the pitch fest or whatever the situation might be. So the first four steps of preparation. Number one, you need to you need to review all of these steps begin with I apologize in the background, you hear a more my next door neighbor has to guard Yes, yes. No. Where else come to Los Angeles? Yes, no rakes leaves,

Alex Ferrari 13:07
if there was, if there was just one thing I could do in my lifetime is to find a way to get rid of those damn.

Michael Hague 13:17
Oh, I know. It's just they make the they contribute to noise and philosophy feels exactly the same time. Okay, so back to the issue at hand. Step number one is review. That means you will look at the story of your screenplay through a particular eye. And what you're looking for are the key elements of that story that your potential buyer needs to know to make the decision of whether they want to see it. So this is instead of telling the entire story, you're going to present your pitch in such a way that you reveal these, these things. So I what I need to do now if it's okay, as I should go through the list of what those keys, go for, go for it. Okay, so I'll make it very quick. And then taking the course, of course I go into detail of all of them. But here's what a potential buyer wants to know. First of all, who is the hero of this story? Who is the protagonist? Who are we rooting for? Next of all, where is that character at the beginning of the story before anything extraordinary happens when we are first introduced to that character? What are they doing? What's their job? What's the setting? What's their life? Like? What has their life been like for some time? It's the introduction of that character. Number three, why do we care about this person? Do we feel sorry for her? Do we? Is she in some kind of jeopardy? Is she a good hearted kind person? So she's likable? Is she very skilled, any of those qualities could create empathy but you have to create you have to let us know why we will connect with this character as we watch her on the screen. The fourth thing is what's the opportunity Unity, that's my term for the first key event of the story that is going to start it moving forward. It's something that happens to the hero about 10% of the way into the script that has never happened before, and is going to get them moving forward moving towards, into some new situations. So the next thing is, what where's that new situation. So it may be they start out in their home, and then they find out, they're going to inherit some money. So now they're going to move to they have to go to England and collect the inheritance or if Luke Skywalker starts off on his planet, and then he sees the the holograph, from Princess Leia, and that's going to take him into a new situation, wherever he'll meet, Obi Wan, and so on. Next point that you want to establish is, what's the hero's goal. This isn't just a situation, this is the visible finish line that this character needs to cross at the end of the movie. So is this a movie about stopping a serial killer, is that a movie about stopping an invasion is about when the love of another character isn't about winning a competition or escaping from danger. But whatever it is, it needs to be visible and specific and have a clearly defined endpoint. So what is that? Next? What is the conflict? What are the big obstacles the hero is going to have to overcome to accomplish that goal? If it's The King's Speech, the goal is to give a speech, but the obstacles are what make it enjoy it, you know, emotional and enticing, and that is he's got a terrible stammer he's going to have to take over his king, he's got to lead his country into World War Two. That's, that's the conflict. The next item is the plan. We need to know well, okay, so how is the hero going to go about stopping the alien invasion or winning the love of the other character. And finally, and this is not within the story, but it's something important to think about, what are a couple antecedents to your script. So what you want to do is in the pitch you're going to convey, or you're going to mention a couple of movies that you could point to and say, well, those two movies made money. So mine is likely to make money, it doesn't mean the plot is the same, it means they're in the same genre, they have about the same budget, they appeal to the same audience, they have a tone that's similar. Because there are romantic comedies that are dark, and romantic comedies that are silly and romantic comedies that are fairly dramatic, you want to pick a couple antecedents that fit into the subcategory of yours. And that's it. I think that was nine qualities of the story that you're going to convey. Now, I haven't talked about how yet, because the class will reveal that. But whatever you're saying, in the 60 seconds, you need to mention these things, because that's what's going to determine their decision.

Alex Ferrari 18:00
Go ahead. I'm sorry. Yeah. So another thing I think sometimes mistakes that I see too, as well. And I've done it in the past too, is when you pitch you when you when you compare it to another movie. They tell us a movie that was unsuccessful. Which was like, you know, my movies just like a star, like really? Suicide Squad all day, like?

Michael Hague 18:24
Exactly, yeah, you don't, you don't really want to go there. You got to be careful. It needs to be somewhat recent needs to be within the lifetime of the person. You're pitching

Alex Ferrari 18:35
it start you start dating. You start dating.

Michael Hague 18:40
And don't pitch Casablanca either. Even though you think it's a great movie, it's my favorite. It's not relevant. 10 years 10 years is a good time. But but the thing is that the mistake some people making their pitches, they'll say, Well, this is this is like up Titanic and and King Kong.

Alex Ferrari 19:07
Oh, yeah, they combined.

Michael Hague 19:09
Because well, like up it has a talking dog and like Titanic, it's a love story and whatever. And you can't do that they've got to be three, they've got to be two movies that that are in exactly the same genre. And and and the more money those movies have made, the better it is because subconsciously what you're doing to the buyer is you're you're saying without this as the subtext is, look, those movies made a lot of money. So obviously, you're going to be interested in my script because it's going to make the same kind of money. Because you you need to realize that in Hollywood, the people in power aren't necessarily story experts, but they do. They are good bean counters most of the time and they know what box office success looks like. They don't know why it was a box office success, but they figured well if this can be the next Titanic I'm all for it.

Alex Ferrari 20:02
Right? Now, what are a few things that people should never do when pitching an idea?

Michael Hague 20:11
Never Well, besides going on and on, don't, don't tell the person hearing the pitch, how great the story is, or why it's going to be successful. Don't say, this is going to appeal to the mass audience don't say this is this is going to be an earth shaking story. Don't make any comments or commentary or judgments about your own script. Let the story stand on its own. Let the pitch stand on its own. So if if this sounds like an emotionally involving commercially successful story, or when the could be, they will conclude that for themselves, you don't need to say, and I mean, I've had people pitch me things that says, I swear this is going to be bigger than avatar. No, it's not going to be bigger than avatar and our company probably isn't interested because that's not your job. It's my job to conclude that your job is to tell me just enough about your script that makes me want to

Alex Ferrari 21:12
read it. Now, how do you gear up for a pitch? Like what are the good things that you should bring into battle, if you will, with you besides the pitch?

Michael Hague 21:23
My suggestion is nothing. Okay, very pointedly, or a bet. See, here's the thing, when you go to a pitch fest, this happens a lot. They'll say bring a leave behind. So you have a one pagers, people bring treatments or something like that? Well, if they say that my advice is okay, go ahead and write a one page synopsis of the story. But here's what you don't do, you definitely don't put it on the table. As the pitch began, don't ever set anything in front of the person hearing the pitch. Because if you do, if you give them something to read, there'll be reading instead of listening to you, and you want them to pay attention to you. You can have it in your briefcase or backpack or whatever. And then if they say, Well, I really my boss insists that we take back an outline, then you can whip it out and say, okay, good. Well, we have this. And sometimes I'll even recommend that someone when they ask that question. The writers say, okay, look, I know you want to see a synopsis, but one page just won't do my script justice. How about if I email it to you, and you just read the first 10 pages. And if you don't like it went by page 10. Just trash it. Just delete it, no harm, no foul. But if it pulls you in, as I know it, well, then you'll get a much better sense of what the value is, they still might say no, that's against the rules at our company. And then if they insist, give them the leave behind, but don't show it or anything else. There are people who recommend taking to a pitch things like pictures of actors who could play the role. I'm not I'm not a fan, because for two reasons. One, I personally am not a multitasker. So I'm either looking at a picture of Matt Damon, which means I'm thinking about Matt Damon, and thinking to myself, Matt Damon costs a fortune, well, you're not going to get Matt Damon for this script. So I'm losing interest by looking at that. And, and instead, you want to create a movie inside my mind, that's what you want me looking at. So you want to tell this pitch. And as you mentioned, these elements, I'm picturing this character, I'm picturing this setup, I'm picturing the obstacles that your hero will face. So you want me in my head not looking at something else.

Alex Ferrari 23:48
Now, is there a big difference or a different approaches for pitching when you're pitching at a pitch fest versus a executives office versus an elevator?

Michael Hague 24:00
Well, in the office, it's different because in the office, they are expecting you to come in ready to have a 10 to 20 minute conversation. What I often recommend in those situations is you can start that meeting by giving the 62nd pitch and then letting that be the doorway into a longer conversation. Many times though, when you go into an office meeting for a pitch, it's more about something they've already been pitched, or a script they've already looked at. And the purpose of the meeting is to discuss it. And that's a different animal altogether. The one thing is in a pitch fest, you have a finite amount of time, but you've paid money to do it. And so they're expecting you to be there on an elevator in those you know, grab them when you can moments or even in a cold call. You always want to kind of ask permission you want to say geez, I I'd love to tell you about the script I'm working on, would this be a good time to do that? Or I don't want to intrude? Or when you get somebody on a cold call, you can say, Look, I know how busy you are. But But I, I just completed a script, I'm sure you know, it's something I really think you'd be interested in. Because because it's in the same arena as this movie, you just, you know, did, or you mentioned something you have in common? Like, I know, you're a graduate of University of Oregon, and so am I. And I thought you might be willing to let me take 60 seconds, but you need to ask if it's okay to give the pitch. If it's an unexpected confrontation, or connection, something like that. The the the one other difference in a pitch fest, that's to your advantage is if you paid money for 10 minutes, you get 10 minutes. And one of the other reasons to have a pitch that's, you know, 60 seconds, or at least under two minutes is, then if they say no, and you have another project that might also be of interest, then you can say, well, we still have, you know, seven minutes left, or even if it's a five minute slot, and you only took take 60 seconds, she's got four minutes left. And I have another idea that's for a romantic comedy. Could could, would you be willing to let me present that to you right now. And so if you truly have two pitches ready, that's the only occasion where you'd pitch twice as if they say no to the first.

Alex Ferrari 26:31
Now, do you kind of touched upon it earlier? But do you have any specific advice on how to establish rapport with the person that you're pitching with?

Michael Hague 26:40
Yeah, I kind of got I know, you asked me about the eight steps. And I took so long with step one, we got sidetracked. But anyway, it's, it's after you bury your story and figure those things out, then then you want to research the person you're going to pitch pitch to, you want to write out and script the pitch, and you want to rehearse it, rehearse, rehearse, that's the preparation, the presentation is that that first art is rapport or relationship. And there are two ways that are very effective at doing that. One is finding a common experience. If you've been recommended to someone on the phone, then you want to say, you know, Bob said I should give you a call, he thought you might be interested in this project. And he also said you owe him a lunch or something like that. So you mentioned the person who's given you the referral. If it's a pitch fest, or if it's a cold call, you don't know the person, but you do know that there are golf fan. And you you know, you were a caddy for Tiger Woods once or you went to the same school, or you have something in common. Great. Now, that's not going to happen very often. I mean, really? How many of us know people that are in power in Hollywood? Or? I mean, most of us if we

Alex Ferrari 27:55
do you do know a few people, sir,

Michael Hague 27:57
I know. But I don't. Okay, I could, I could use an abacus to count them. I don't need to count. Okay, so then what you do to establish rapport is you acknowledge them for something. And it might be because you've researched them, you know, that they, like I mentioned earlier, suppose someone has made horror films, you can, you can say, you know, I was a huge fan of this of the ring if they were produced a movie, let's say, but don't just say that. Just say Why say because it scared the crap out of me or because what I loved about that horror film was that that actually, it developed a relationship between the mother and Senator, don't just say, I'm a huge fan and let it go with that, because anybody can say that, but tell why you were a fan of the movie, or the or a movie that they represented the writer for or something like that. Now, a warning is when you go to a pitch fest, it's possible, you won't know anything about who you're pitching to, or it's going to be an underling at the company. But you can always acknowledge someone for this if they're listening to your pitch, and that is they're taking the time to do it. So you can say something like, look, you know, I know that you probably rather be doing something other than this pitch fest. But it means a lot to somebody like me, who flew here all the way from jerk water USA, just a chance to talk to you and I want to tell you how much I appreciate it. And and that should be gentle. You should really be grateful and no one on the planet is immune to an acknowledgment. It just creates a connection when you say I sincerely say I want to thank you for something you did. So that is probably your strongest tool for rapport.

Alex Ferrari 29:47
And can you continue with the rest of the steps after the report was the other ones of the eight or the eight steps?

Michael Hague 29:54
Yeah, so the next one is I IN OUR in my goal to make everything our sound like our which is the work right? An X is revealed this is when you actually give the pitch part of the pitch you reveal those nine elements of the story. And and I have a tip for that too. And that is or a contrarian suggestion. A lot of people recommend the way to start a pitches give the title and the logline. And I strongly recommend against that, because titles, until you know what a movie is about hearing the title is usually meaningless. I mean, it sounds ludicrous now because it's become part of the culture. But if you heard in 1974, that there was a or 72, before the book came out that there was a movie coming up called JAWS, you would have no idea what it was about. Right? Okay. But if you said it was about, it's about a great white shark, terrorizing the community, and now, three guys have to go out a little boat and try and destroy it. And then you end that pitch by saying so my. So my screenplay and titled Jaws is the story of three men trying to defeat a great white shark. So you put the title and the logline at the end of your presentation of those elements instead of at the beginning. And otherwise, it's pretty much going through them in the order I mentioned, a good way to begin might say it might be to tell them how you came up with the idea. So instead of just jumping in and saying, Well, Susan Smith is a nuclear physicist, he say, I've always been a huge fan of, of thrillers that have strong love stories underneath. And here's where you can add movies like Three Days of the Condor or trying to think of another or body mache, I'm dating myself was asked, because notice how now you're slipping in those antecedents without using the word Annecy, you're saying, I've always been a fan of movies like this, but in so my thriller, the difference is that the the the man the hare hero falls for is really a hitman who has been assigned to kill it. Okay, so you start with how you came up with the idea grew out of kind of movies you loved or grew out of a true story or something that happened to you in the past? And then you say, so I started thinking, what if, and then you get into the hero, and the setup and those other elements, and then you're sort of off to the races.

Alex Ferrari 32:37
It's so it's when you're when you're doing that it's because a lot of people have seen pitch a pitch Fest and and just pitch in general, they just kind of go right to it, they just jump right in. And just like, you know, it's like a machine and there's no warmth to it, there's no connection. They're just like, they're literally a robot because they've been trained to be that way. And they've rehearsed so much that it's literally just a machine where you're sitting down and making a connection with another human being. And by doing what you're suggesting makes a lot more sense to me to like, how you came up with the idea and what movies you like, because that's another way to connect with the person you're pitching with. Like it they like the movie of three, you know, three days in a condor, like oh, yeah, I love that movie. Is it kind of like that? And it starts connecting different synapses in their mind and emotions already, before you even start pitching. Is that a fair statement?

Michael Hague 33:27
Absolutely. Absolutely. I think the way to think about a pitch is it's not a speech. And it's not an ad, it's a conversation. And actually, it's a conversation that you and everyone listening to this has had before because all of us, and all of you have recommended movies to people. You said, Oh, I just saw the big sick. What's that? Well, it's about this guy. And he's from Pakistan and got it done. You tell the high points and you say I just loved it. And it was hilarious. But I love the relationship. You have just given a pitch for a movie you saw you've done it 100 times. You had that conversation. All you're doing in a pitch meeting, or on the phone here is you're having a conversation about a movie you love. It's just a movie that hasn't been made yet.

Alex Ferrari 34:17
Now can you please impress upon people how important a logline is not in the pitch because you asked to do it at the end. But just in general, people kind of forget the logline. They just write a sentence. It's very it's an art in itself, isn't it?

Michael Hague 34:34
Yeah, I guess I don't want to make it sound too lofty because that sounds something difficult. Sure what but but I think loglines this way a logline is a sentence that's going to come to convey the three foundation elements of any story and that is character, desire and conflict. When I said And so Jaws is a it's about a great it's about three guys in a small boat who have to stop a great white shark. That is that is terrorizing their the beach town. I didn't say it exactly that way, because I don't remember exactly. But that's it. All I was saying is character, three guys in a boat goal destroy a great white shark conflict. It's a great white shark and it's terrorizing their their village and wants to kill them. Right? That's it, I it's not so much about honing some magic with words. It's nice if you can do that. But it's much more important that you say character desire conflict, because without knowing or saying those three things, anything else included is not going to give me an idea of what I'm going to go see. Now you can pick, you want to think about the exact words to create a vivid image of it or be very clear about it. You can add a phrase or two to make it distinct from other horror movies or about also stopping demons or creatures or whatever. But but the main thing and the reason a logline is valuable for you to formulate is it forces you to think about those three basic things in your script. And I swear I've read scripts and talked to people and heard pitches by people who don't really have never really thought about what's the goal? They just have this is about a person in a situation and then they do this and then they do that. And then this happens. That happens. It's like but what do we want? What are we rooting for? So a logline forces you to identify those three elements.

Alex Ferrari 36:39
Now, in today's world, it's not only just about the feature film anymore, it's also about series, there's I think 450 series being produced this year alone. So what's the big difference between pitching a feature film versus pitching a series?

Michael Hague 36:57
Well, on one level, it's not all that different. Because it's it's kind of the way I think of it is that you're pitching a series, but you're pitching it by detailing a lot of what would be in the pilot or the first episode of the series, because that's when we meet the hero, that so that's when the heroes set up, that's when we first have to empathize. That's when whatever the opportunity is, that is going to drive that that whole series, if it's an ongoing story, like say, Breaking Bad or Game of Thrones, that opportunity has to occur to some extent in the first episode, because otherwise, nothing's happening, then it's just a one hour setup. If it's let's say you're pitching a more traditional series, you know, under the NCIS, or something like Castle, okay, then you're just pitching a pilot, because you introduce the characters, and they have a goal that they have to accomplish at the end of that episode. So what you do is you think about that episode, and then you kind of experiments say, so this is, so imagine these two people, a mystery writer and a woman cop. And when a body is discovered, and they're thrown together, now they have to solve the murder and each week, and so you then connect it by saying, and each week or if it's an ongoing thing you say so the over arching story is about a cop who has to stop a hitman from committing a series of murders in our town. That's that's the series of Fargo. So if you take the first season of Fargo, the overarching goal is the cop has to stop the hitman. And then, but then what you do is then the one thing you want to add is in so in one episode, this might be by hat might happen. But as but by the end of the first season, this will have happened. So you clearly convey that you've not just thought about three episodes, well, you've not just thought about the opening, but what the ongoing story is going to be and what some of the other characters are going to be woven through it. So I guess the answer would be there's some more detail to add. But you still want to make sure you hit those elements. And you still want to have seeds you still accept now you're not going to pick feature films you're going to pick successful series that are similar.

Alex Ferrari 39:29
Now, is there do you have an example of a pitch that was that blew you away? Or do you remember one at all? I mean, I'm probably not but I'm just asking.

Michael Hague 39:40
I didn't know there would be a test because to convey why it blew me away, I would have to really remember it and present it to you start to find out this is this is all the the reason. In the class I construct an example of a pitch that illustrates all of these things. But that's, that's when I made up for a movie that's never been written just as an example. Got it. But if I guess, I guess I can't keep stumbling along and try and pretend I have any answer. You can say. You can say, great pitch. I've heard great pitches, but I don't remember what they exactly. So

Alex Ferrari 40:22
now, do you have any final words of wisdom as far as pitching your story?

Michael Hague 40:29
Yeah. I have hundreds we don't have time for okay. But I want people to sign up for the course. Of course, I read the book, but because there's all that. Let? Oh, yes, I do. I do have one last thing I want to add. And that is some is about a couple of things in terms of the presentation. And that is notes, and nervousness. Okay. When it comes to notes, I strongly recommend that you take note cards, and on those note cards in big letters with a, what do they what do they call that a, you know, grease pan, they used to call it a Sharpie shirt with a sharpie, you just write down keywords that will remind you of that step in your pitch. So it might be how you got the idea is you're going to refer to two antecedents just write down the antecedents. And then on card number two is your so what if, in other words, it's not something you have to look at steadily. But you want to have that as a backup, even though you've rehearsed your, your pitch. By the way, what you absolutely never want to do is read somebody a pitch. Just when I coach people on their pitch, I won't let them read their pitch to me even when I'm coaching them unless there's no other choice because it is so hard to concentrate when someone's reading to you. You have to be ready to say it as a conversation, you have to really be like an actor have to rehearse it so much that you can just make it natural, you can make it into a conversation. But notecards are good idea. Because if you have that backup, then you probably won't need to use it. The other thing is when it comes to nervousness, stop worrying about it or trying to think of a magic way that you won't be nervous because you will be just excited to save yourself. Of course, I'm nervous. I'm not used to doing this. I'm meeting somebody, this is important to me, I they're in power, and I haven't met them before, etc. So of course I'm going to be nervous. And here's what I would tell you I have worked in Hollywood now for more than 35 years. I've talked to a lot of executives, a lot of agents, I've heard them speak and I've had conversations. Never in my entire career Have I ever heard somebody say, God, I heard this great pitch, this movie would make millions it's one of the best I've ever heard. Unfortunately, we're not going to option it because the writer was so nervous. Because they're right. To put it bluntly, they don't give a shit. Right? They are, they are there. Their job is finally a good story. They want your story to be good. They don't care one way if you're nervous, if you stumble, if anything, they're looking for a story they can take back to their boss, put a feather in their cap if they if you if they can say you got to look at this because this is a terrific idea. This is the terrific story or the or they'll go back read the script, and then they'll say that. So take note cards, and don't worry about being nervous because it's not an issue.

Alex Ferrari 43:43
Michael, thank you so much for sharing a lot about pitching today. And I know again, it's such a mysterious art form and hopefully, the course that we're putting out called how to pitch your story in 60 seconds, and your book store. Please name your book again.

Michael Hague 44:02
Okay. It's tricky because there's they sound the same. The story is selling your story in 60 seconds, right? Because the book is designed for screenwriters and novelist because they're both in the situation. I'm trying to get their material read. Our course is called pitching your screenplay in 60 seconds because the course is zeroed in specifically on screenwriters.

Alex Ferrari 44:25
Michael, thank you again so much for being on the show. Again. It's an absolute pleasure as always talking to you my friend.

Michael Hague 44:30
Yeah. And it went so fast. We probably we probably been talking for three hours. Like doubly done. There's so much more to say. Period myself. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to listen to myself. My greatest joy.

Alex Ferrari 44:46
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BPS 028: The Art and Craft of Writing a Comedy with Peter Desberg & Jeffrey Davis

If you ever wanted to know some of the secrets of how to write a comedy then today’s guest might be able to help. Peter Desberg and Jeffrey Davis are the authors of Now That’s Funny!: The Art and Craft of Writing Comedy, a new book that provides an intimate look into the minds of twenty-nine of Hollywood’s funniest comedy writers from movies and TV shows like:

  • Saturday Night Live
  • Frasier
  • The Simpsons
  • Everybody Loves Raymond
  • Monk
  • Modern Family
  • The Honeymooners
  • There’s Something About Mary
  • Dumb and Dumber
  • Cheers
  • Home Improvement

The writers were asked to develop a generic comedy premise created by the authors, giving readers a window into their writing process. There were no rules, no boundaries, and no limits. What emerges is an entertaining look—illuminating and hilarious—at the creative process behind hit comedy TV shows and movies.

Enjoy my conversation with Peter Desberg and Jeffrey Davis.

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Alex Ferrari 0:04
I'd like to welcome to the show Peter Doesburg. And Jeffrey Davis. Thank you guys for doing the show.

Peter Desberg 3:49
Thank you. Our pleasure.

Alex Ferrari 3:51
So let's get started. How did you guys first meet and well first, how did each of you get into the business? And then how did you meet?

Jeffrey Davis 3:59
How did we How did I get into the business either? Yeah,

Alex Ferrari 4:02
both of you guys.

Jeffrey Davis 4:03
Well, Geoffrey got into the business. I love it. When I talked to myself. Third person. I was born into it. I'm three generations. My uncle was a composer. My dad started at MGM in 1947. A lot of the stuff of cm Turner's stuff he wrote, he went into TV in the early 50s, and ended up producing things like The Odd Couple of that girl and, and forward and my stepfather was a producer of television felt movies back in the 70s 80s and 90s when they were going through that golden age of TV movies. And I had a stepmother who was a MGM player and who was one woman named Marilyn Maxwell best movie is champion with Kirk Douglas, which is an independent film you've ever seen it? So I kind of grew up around it. And I've been around it my whole life did go back. I was bi coastal before Peter Allen invented the term so

Alex Ferrari 5:07
Okay, fantastic. How about you, Peter?

Peter Desberg 5:10
Well, for openers since since this is a podcast and you have the power to edit, I'm going to answer the first part of your question about how Jeffrey and I met, okay. Um, I'm sitting up here in my house one day, and Jeffrey is down in his car. Our kids are having a play date. They're eighth graders. And he's waiting for a son to come down, honking the horn, the kid is not coming down. And he's dreading walking in and having another Oh, hi, what do you do? My name is here's what I do. organization. So he comes in, we start talking. And one of the things he tells me he's writer, but now he's working as an academic. Jeffrey is too much to tell you is the current chair of the screenwriting department at Loyola Marymount University. Very cool. So he says, but now they're asking me to do academic writing. Do you do any Well, being that I was a college professor as well. I started laughing, saying that's all I've done forever. And as we continue talking, I told him about a project that I did years and decades ago, that I got started with where I was working with a I'm telling you the long version of the story. If you want, I can edit it. Now. It's fine. Go ahead. So I was working with a some woman calls me up one night and said, I heard you do research on the psychology of humor. I'm doing my master's degree in that area, would you be on my committee? So I said, Well, what are you doing? So I get on, I'm doing a chapter on the psychology of humor, sociology of humor, Anthropology of humor, and I'm interviewing a famous Hollywood comedy writer. I said, Who was it? And she gives me a name of the fellow whose name is on the cornerstone of the Writers Guild building. Its first president. Okay. This fellow wrote a couple of the biggest Bob Hope movies Lemon Drop, kid. I mean, lemondrop kid,

Jeffrey Davis 7:12
obviously, oh, he wrote for Abbott and Costello,

Peter Desberg 7:14
Costello. And so I said, How do you know this guy said he's my dad. So um, his name was Edmund Hartman, for people like to know. And, and so I said, Well, I'll tell you what, I'd be glad to work with you. Let's throw out your three chapters. Could your dad get us some of his friends to interview and say, Oh, no problem. And so we did. For hers, as we started asking these people instead of just, you know, we wanted to avoid interviews, like, well, you know, what got you into comedy? Well, when you're a fat Jewish kid, on the Lower East Side, you got to learn how to fight or be funny. We didn't want that kind of project. So we constructed a bunch of situations and had them solve problems that comedy writers have to solve. So I'm telling Geoffrey the story. And all of a sudden, he said, who were the writers you interviewed. And as I'm telling them, each name, his eyes are lighting up bigger and bigger. Everybody you mentioned, used to play poker around my crib with my dad every week. And he'd literally jumped off the couch and said, Let's do it. So within 20 minutes, I met

Jeffrey Davis 8:23
at Tom Cruise style.

Peter Desberg 8:27
Being a psychology professor, he yelled at me for that. And, and so from, from 20 minutes of just having met, we agreed to write a book together.

And we changed the face of it. Notice we're suddenly shifting into now that's funny, the the book together, where what we did was we wrote a generic comedy premise, gave it to each of the writers we're working with, and we said develop it. And surprisingly, they did. What we were worried about is when you ask somebody, tell us about your creative process, you have no idea if they're telling you anything that's remotely accurate. One of our one of our favorite phrases is the highest form of fiction as the autobiography.

Alex Ferrari 9:16
It's very true. So

Peter Desberg 9:19
we were really lucky. We got these quick. We had show creators show runners, I mean, amazing people. And they did it. We got to give them this premise. And right on the spot, they just started making stuff up in the room while we're sitting there.

Alex Ferrari 9:35
Thomas have an amazing,

Peter Desberg 9:37
unbelievable,

Alex Ferrari 9:38
so you guys wrote this book. So you got that wrote this book, show me the funny and you basically interviewed some of the top and legendary comedy writers in Hollywood. Sorry,

Peter Desberg 9:48
but it's called. Now that's funny. Oh, now

Alex Ferrari 9:50
that's funny. Okay. Oh, that's funny. Okay. And, and you interviewed these amazing creatives. So what was the what was the biggest revelation? you guys found from interviewing so many amazing and talented people. If there's one or two that you can

Jeffrey Davis 10:09
well, there is one common denominator and that is we asked them, was it a story or character that they started? That's a great way to watch them do it. See, that's the great thing about the interviews, is they're really in a way not interviews, because we mostly we asked some questions, but we mostly stepped aside. And they develop the same premise 24 ways. And they all neither, they didn't say character or story, they said conflict. That, for me, that was the biggest revelation. And then also the, the diversity of stories, the how different each story is, and how many lessons there are in that it's kind of, that's kind of cool. I think, you know,

Peter Desberg 10:54
there are so many books on how to write comedy, or just how to write scripts. And yeah, each one makes it sound like, well, here are the steps you have to do. This is the way you write. And it was so nice to see that exploded in real life, where each person is taking a really idiosyncratic view. And we were just fortunate to be in the same room.

Alex Ferrari 11:15
I must have been insane. So which, let me ask you, can you discuss a little bit of a few of the Comedy genres or sub sub genres? Like, you know, fish out of water? Or, you know, is there are there a few of those that you can even discuss for the listeners?

Jeffrey Davis 11:31
I'm sure. In the book, you mean that when they ended up selecting? Yeah. Like that? One? I think that's the best one.

Peter Desberg 11:41
Um, yeah, what? One, what we told him at the beginning was, here's our premise, feel free to change it in any way. You know, our view was, Hey, your comedy writers, you're not going to, you're not going to follow rules anyway. It's not like they're accountants, they're going to do what they want. So we said, we'll just start out by stepping out of your way. And the premise that we we did was basically a 50 ish woman, husband passes. And they've always lived very well. So she assumes that they're going to continue living well. And she didn't know that they spent everything they made. Okay, so the sudden is an early 50s woman with no skills and no work experience. She's left out Nicole with nothing. So she has to move in with her, her young corporate daughter in New York. And one of the one of our favorites was this fellow threw out the daughter, and had the mother get into a work relationship with a man who ends up being a Bernie made off character. And so all of a sudden, she has to expose this horrible thing that he's doing. So I mean, they went all over the place. And, you know, in a number of cases, several male writers said, you know, I've actually never been a mother or a daughter. But I sure know a lot about fathers and sons. So that's what I'm going to do. We said, please go for it. And one of the things that we enjoyed the most, was that a lot of them thought out loud for us. And they actually narrated while they they work. The premise on one of our favorites was Walt Bennett. It's a little tough to use the C word now in any public forum, but he wrote for The Cosby Show, yes. And fair enough. And Walt was so incredible, he said, Okay. So let me see, typically, if somebody says they're coming to visit you, you know when they're coming, so I'm going to have the mother come unannounced, because that's going to create more conflict. So then he says, Okay, so if she's going to come announce, what's the worst time she could possibly select, to make her entrance? Well, it's late afternoon. The boyfriend's over at the apartment. They're in their little bedroom. There's a knock on the door. So it says how can I make this even worse? Well, she lived in a big house in the Midwest. And now she's coming to this little efficiency apartment in New York. And normally a person comes to visit with a couple of suitcases. She's got the moving band downstairs. And as she's walking up the stairs, the cousin is lugging up this huge sofa which will barely fit in the door, and certainly not in the apartment. So at each point, he's constantly saying it was Jeffrey was saying conflict using How can I create the conflict and how can I escalate it? How can I make it worse?

Alex Ferrari 14:46
That's a great that's a great tip for me cuz a lot of people will write comedy in that ad any conflict

Jeffrey Davis 14:52
you can have. I mean, that that's the problem with with comedy even more than drama, which I think We pretty much all know that comedy is harder to write because everybody has an opinion. I mean, there are more agreed upon standards of what makes a Drama Comedy is very much personal taste and what you'd like. I mean, like, I'm sure we would like same things.

Peter Desberg 15:16
Obviously, Jeffrey and I have proven that point. Many times.

Jeffrey Davis 15:19
The other one that I particularly like, is Lou Schneider, who was in the room on everybody writers room on Everybody Loves Raymond. There's grandparents in the premise, but they're kind of off to the side. And it really just says it, he took the grandpa and just says that they don't really understand. They relate more to their granddaughter than their daughter. And he made the whole story between the mother who's kind of a fish out of water with her parents there. And he had a whole wonderful bid, I think, like some of my students have said, I've taught them has taught them a lot about how you can construct character, where he has the 80 year old father teaching the 50 year old mother how to drive. You know what I mean? And how you, you

Peter Desberg 16:11
know, he took he took the standard joke of dad teaches his teenage daughter to drive and he switched it to 80 and 51.

Jeffrey Davis 16:19
One of the things that one of the things that I learned is that, and I've been, as I said, I've been around it, most of my life, but you know, you can help someone get better at comedy, you can give them a lot of techniques. But I think one of the things we learn from these people is comedy writers are different. They think differently. They think, as one of them said, I think Peter Casey said it's not in the book. But he said, he said to us before the interview, it's a matter of thinking to the left. And and drama writers don't have to do that. And I'm not putting down drama, right? It's just a gift. But to

Peter Desberg 17:02
give you an example, we interviewed Eliot Schulman who was the was the show runner for home improvement. And he told us a great story at the beginning. We said my, my father committed suicide. So I went back East. A few years later, got my sister, and we recreated the drive from his office to the bridge where he jumped on this cab and you can't imagine a heavier emotional moment. And I thought my father was a German Jew, and kind of cheap. I wonder how much he tipped the cab driver on the way to his own suicide.

Alex Ferrari 17:45
That is a that's a one. I mean, that's a wonderful line. That's such

Peter Desberg 17:49
and once again, it just shows you as Jeffrey was saying. They see things that a lot of people miss. Um, we had a comedy team, cinco Pauling, Ken Dario, they wrote My Dinner for Schmucks, there are a whole bunch of things. One of the movies they wrote was bubble boy. Oh, I remember bubble boy. So it told us a story that they went to producer with the script, said I really liked the script a lot. But do you think maybe by the first act, we can lose the bubble?

Alex Ferrari 18:20
The movie is called Bubble Boy.

Peter Desberg 18:22
So can turn to the whispered Yeah, we can call it boy.

Alex Ferrari 18:31
That's G. Know You Were talking to you, guys.

Peter Desberg 18:37
I'm just following along with what Jeff was saying about conflict. One of our favorite interviews, we interviewed Bob Meyer, who among other things, was the showrunner for Roseanne for a number of years. And tell him who he mentored. Oh, he

Jeffrey Davis 18:51
went to Chuck Lorre.

Alex Ferrari 18:55
Who's this? Who's this? Chuck? i You speak of? Yes, exactly. So anyway,

Peter Desberg 18:59
he he is such a consummate Pro, that it took him like, you know, some people sort of fumbled around to get started. He said to us, first thing I'm going to do is I'm going to take these characters, and I'm going to cast them so I can see the actors I'm writing for. Okay. And it took him maybe five or six minutes, and he wrote a perfect little sitcom, like a network sitcom version was unbelievable to see how quickly and fluidly he wrote. So Jeffrey looks at him and says, Could you darken it a little? And I'm, I wish that I could transmit the look, he got on his face that sort of impish grin. picture somebody with their hand on a dial saying, how dark Do you want it? Mm hmm. And so within a couple of minutes, he says, Okay, I'm going to kind of lose the mother. And I'm going to take this, this young corporate girl and I'm gonna change her occupation. She's Gonna be a private detective, because that constantly puts her in danger, which will keep a lot of conflict going. And she's very pretty an audience is like pretty people. But I got to give her a problem. So I'm going to give her a pretty serious drug habit, because that makes her an underdog and we like underdog or still, we're still comedy, right? Still comedy got it. And so she's got the big case that she's solving. And she finally has the opportunity to break the case, she's got a secret witness, who is going to reveal everything. So she's got this meeting set up, and she's on pins and needles waiting to go to this meeting. And to calm herself down, says I'm going to stop home and change, which means do some drugs. The minute she opens the door, there's everybody she knows, ready to do an intervention Jesus. And, and literally, and I mean, he was making this up in the room as we were talking to him. And as soon as he finished, he said, You know what, I'm going to pitch this story. You know,

Alex Ferrari 21:01
I was about to say, Why aren't these guys pitching these stories? These brilliant,

Peter Desberg 21:05
several people told us they pitch the ideas that they came up with. We told them everything they come up with is theirs. We just have the right to reprint it. Yes.

Alex Ferrari 21:15
That's awesome. Now you talk a lot about, you know, we're talking a little bit about structure and comedy. Is there. Is there such a thing as like, a comedic hero's journey, if we're gonna cause some sort of structure in regards to just writing either television, or feature films.

Jeffrey Davis 21:35
I'm not aware of one. I'm sure there is I'm sure there are people who try to sell that hero's journey. I'm not a big fan. I'm sorry, I'm not a big fan of the hero's journey. I understand there's valuable things in it. My, my problem is what's happened. And I think we're kind of leaving this period, there was a period in the early 2000s, late 90s, where there were all the gurus, you know, mentioned any other names, we all were they are where it became almost SDN, you know, where you had to follow, you know, I went to one, I remember, a producer sent me to one, I was working on something, I'm not gonna mention the person's name, who I went to, and I think the producer wants to pay $1,000 for my then partner, and I go and, and he got to, he got to a point in it, where he said, Well, now he had it. He had like, a bunch of steps. And he said, you know, he said, When you go to the studio, don't mention my steps. Because I remember calling up my father, who I went to, you know, for advice, because he was a great comedy writer, and he said, call the producer right now and get your money back get his money. Yes, comedy? No, I mean, I think, pretty much, particularly with this generation. I think, you know, they have seen so many movies have read so much television. I think they're starting to read again, hopefully, you know, they have, they have an innate sense of structure. The problem I have is when teachers put structure ahead of character and conflict, character and conflict is where structured comes from, not the other way around. And so often it's easy to teach strut, well, you know, it is easy to teach structure.

Alex Ferrari 23:34
Yeah, it's ABCs. Right?

Jeffrey Davis 23:36
What difference does it make? What happens on page 15? If you don't know who the characters are?

Peter Desberg 23:41
Now, I don't want to be divisive here. But I think we have to divide your question into two parts. Okay. So I'm hoping you'll tell me what they are.

Alex Ferrari 23:52
Okay. The two parts of my question.

Peter Desberg 23:56
Sorry, sorry. I was just messing with you. When you talk about comedy writing comedy, you have to distinguish a bit between writing for TV and movies. And your question really pertained to writing film comedy, where you have a story with an arc. And with it's the opposite in writing, like sitcoms, because although you have arc blitz for every episode, the characters have to kind of remain the same, because you're counting on those characters being there next week, with their same characteristics. And so the arcs of the stories are very different. And they're much smaller because everything has to kind of remain the same.

Alex Ferrari 24:41
Makes perfect sense. Yeah, yeah. Obviously, striding for films and writing for TV is two completely different worlds. And because you have a course of a season to kind of do arcs, but even writing comedies I don't, it's not like Breaking Bad, you know, which I could argue is a comedy, but But but dark. It's a dark, it's dark. Yes. But

Jeffrey Davis 25:04
yeah, I could I agree with that. But I would also point out that comedy off network comedy is more and more serialized. So so, you know, a lot of feature writers are writing for television now. And I remember as a kid, hearing my parents talk about, oh, gosh, we'll never get so and so because they only do movies, they don't want to do television. And that is all flipped now. Oh, it's complete. Everybody wants to do television now?

Alex Ferrari 25:33
Nobody. So what do you guys think of this whole new streaming revolution that we have going on with with the Netflix and the Hulu's? And, and I think

Peter Desberg 25:41
it's wonderful. I

Jeffrey Davis 25:42
think it's great. And I'll tell you why. I think it's great. More work, less money. When you're starting. I have two students who graduated two years ago, and are on the reboot of very successful the reboot of one day at a time, which is a Hispanic, we're gonna Moreno is in it. A lot of you know, an actress who was on six feet under for the whole run is the star of it, Rita Moreno is in it. And these two young writers are the junior writers on the show. And yes, they're making a lot less money than they would make this as us or other network shows. But they're getting the break, which would have been much harder to get before. They're learning their craft from the two showrunners. One is a graduate of LMU, many years ago worked on How I Met Your Mother and a billion other shows. And she and her co creator. It was on everybody loves right. And normally or comes in every day at 93 years old. And he is yeah, he's amazing. He is amazing. And so yeah, it's a wonderful. It's a really good reboot. I mean, I could say some not so great things about some other reboots. I think it's I think it's great. Because I think we have more. It's basically now who's not making pro product. Right?

Alex Ferrari 27:09
There's so much product going on, but it's insane. Yeah, I think last count was like 500 shows, wow, on on scripted shows on television right now are on. You can't even say television anymore. But on your

Peter Desberg 27:23
Jeffrey's comedy history was bad two really, really tightly controlled sitcoms, and six jokes per page.

Jeffrey Davis 27:34
But six to be like six,

Peter Desberg 27:37
you told me was six. Oh, I lied. And I quote.

Jeffrey Davis 27:41
Well, they used to make you put jokes in the head, nothing to do with the story. It

Peter Desberg 27:45
was a joke. Joke per page count.

Alex Ferrari 27:47
Really so so that structure it's

Jeffrey Davis 27:49
really an old school thing. You know, shows like taxi and cheers. And Frasier broke that, you know, and also the Mary Tyler Moore Show broke that because those were what you know, write writers say those were really beaut those were beautifully written shows did go broke fat

Peter Desberg 28:07
when, when we interviewed Peter Casey and he talked about Frasier said, we'd be in the writers room, and somebody will come up with a brilliant joke. And then somebody else would say, You know what, only 10% of our audience is going to understand that. And Peter Casey said, that's why we're keeping it in. We're keeping our 10 percenters the things that made that show so brilliant,

Alex Ferrari 28:29
you right, because there are a lot of jokes like over, you know, people's heads in that show. I remember that show, even when I was younger watching it. I would laugh, but like some things I just wouldn't get. And then as I watch it as an adult, I'm like, Oh, I get that now.

Peter Desberg 28:42
Once it went to cable and beyond, it's everything is unshackled now and you can do pretty much what you want. Yeah,

Alex Ferrari 28:50
I was gonna ask you, do you feel like because of these new opportunities for writers, they're really, there are the shackles are off. I mean, the creative freedom on some of these shows, these Netflix shows and Hulu shows, Amazon shows there. There's nothing that would ever go on network television.

Peter Desberg 29:05
I mean, if you go back to the days where, you know if the hero was going to kiss the arrow and one foot had to be on the floor,

Alex Ferrari 29:12
right?

Jeffrey Davis 29:14
Yeah, I'm surprised. The Netflix model is very different. They, they don't interfere in the same way that the network's do. And, you know, they'll give you notes but from what I understand from the people, I know who we're working with Netflix that they just love it. I don't know anything about Hulu. I don't know. I don't I know they, they did a wonderful. They took them out. This is not comedy, but they took the Margaret Atwood book. And they're doing that and she was happy with it. She's letting them do a second season, which was not the novel. So So Handmaid's Tale. Yeah, I think you know, is there always going to be crap? Yes, yes. Always good.

Peter Desberg 30:00
But it's much clearer crap now. Yeah,

Jeffrey Davis 30:02
I think the one thing that, you know, everybody says, Oh, the network's will go away. I do not believe they first of all the networks on a big chunk of basic cable, so they want something. The big hit on the networks right now is the show called this as us which is created by a comedy writer. And it's sort of melodrama has comedy and drama in it out the definition of melodrama, but has that. And I know somebody who is running the Jennifer Lopez show, which is a detective show. And this is the network's what they do, as opposed to, to Netflix and Hulu is they gave this guy who's a very successful guy, they gave him the note, make it make the scenes more like this is us, which is a family show. And he's writing a cop show Jesus was so that still goes on at the network's I think networks did Spartan up a couple of years ago, they put they went back to summer replacement. They realized they had to when I was a kid, you know, I forget someone would go off on the Smothers Brothers would come on or you know, they would be summer shows. Now we're back to that on the network's they have to to keep the ratings up.

Peter Desberg 31:22
But it's interesting and almost every writer that that we interviewed, managed to say something bad about who they had to write for. A number of them said, You know what, I've made enough money as a writer now I'm becoming a playwright. Because nobody can touch a single word in my script unless I permitted, right. And they were just so sick of the idea that somebody is always taking this stuff and rewriting them or reinterpreting them.

Alex Ferrari 31:53
Yeah, do you? Have you guys seen that show Grace and Frankie, that Jane Fonda is great. It's amazing. It's amazing when I saw that show come up. And obviously, it's not aimed at my demographic. I'm a younger guy. But I've had I've had millennials. I know millennials, who are huge fans of that show. Well, they were very

Jeffrey Davis 32:13
smart. And the way they wrote it is that they had they had a younger demographic because of you know, they don't pay attention to demographics. Anyway. For who's watching Sharon, what are they watching? So I can see as a form of demographic, it's not the network. It's not

Alex Ferrari 32:34
the deals. No, no, it's changing the bunch are seeing

Jeffrey Davis 32:36
younger generation in the show. Hmm. All I can say is there are so many shows on television that owe a huge debt to Neil Simon and the odd couple. If Grace and Frankie is not the odd couple of God, you know who created that show? Is a Grayson. Frankie is Martin Kaufman, who created co created friends. sort of see it's a deep version of friends.

Alex Ferrari 33:05
Yeah. And but yeah, the point was greats and Frankie's like that show would never I don't think ever hit network television.

Jeffrey Davis 33:13
Oh, no. Well, it would have during the time of the Golden Girls, The Golden Girls and look at that. You know

Alex Ferrari 33:20
that? You heard how have you heard that there is a monster, like resurgence in the Golden Girls like the fan base is all these millennials. It doesn't surprise me at all. It's great. I was watching it when I was a teenager. Yeah, I was in love with that show. I was just such a wonderful show was so well written. The characters were so well developed.

Jeffrey Davis 33:39
Susan Harris isn't amazing, right?

Alex Ferrari 33:42
I mean, it was wonderful. And you and then you go back and you go Oh, my God. I was a teenager watching The Golden Girls like how is that? But it's amazing. But when

Jeffrey Davis 33:52
again they made sure that the stories were universal. Yep. And then that works didn't want to make a show about older women past 50 You don't want Estelle Getty was doing that. I don't know if you know this when Estelle Getty was playing be Arthur's mother. She was actually younger than Bea Arthur.

Alex Ferrari 34:10
Really? No idea why it was good makeup on her part that

Jeffrey Davis 34:16
you well, you know, the great thing is now that's funny has all of these stories in it to about show business and about the history of showbiz? Peter tell the

Peter Desberg 34:29
one of the interesting things is that everybody practically that we interviewed said, You know what we find that we're telling you stories that we don't normally tell in interviews, because of the difference in format that we've done. And all of these things came up in really interesting ways. One of my favorite stories. You mentioned before you were a fan of Frasier. We asked. We asked Peter Casey about about the chair Yeah. And he said, We treated that chair like a character. Frazier was a spinoff character from cheers. And he was getting a chance to build a new life. He was now gonna be a minor celebrity in a secondary market. He had a building and the the coolest part of Seattle, he hired one of the best decorators and every style and curve of furniture and color matched and was coordinated. And then all of a sudden, at the last minute his dad moves in. And that chair was the reminder that you're never going to have the life you planned. It actually showed you a concrete version of the conflict. He said, we brought in a set designer to find the ugliest fabric that he could find. Then he brought in a swatch book of the every color that you could have of that horrible pattern. It picked the most clashing color. And then they brought it in they they created the chair, and then they they took a utility knife and slashed it, and then put in duct tape all over it. Oh, cheese. And there it was in every show. You said, see.

Alex Ferrari 36:15
That's brilliant. Now, what are some of the common mistakes you find writers making when they're writing comedy?

Peter Desberg 36:24
Go ahead. You're wrong. Yeah. I think common mistakes. I can I mean, okay, I can give you. One usually is that you create a joke that's too esoteric. Because a joke is based on shattering an assumption. And people don't know enough to make that assumption. It's not going to be funny. If I make a joke about a postal delivery guy, well, we have a whole bunch of reactions we have to the post office. And that's going to work. If I give you a joke about a pastry chef, and how we use the wrong kind of shortening.

Alex Ferrari 37:12
No, not so much. Only the pastry chefs in the audience will get it

Peter Desberg 37:16
exactly. And so that's one thing you're always going to do. Another is there's a level of tension you have to get in order to get a laugh too little and you don't get it too much. And you gross out the audience. So it's it's another place where we're terrible things happen.

Alex Ferrari 37:35
Okay, so So movies like There's Something About Mary, which arguably is a classic.

Peter Desberg 37:42
Well, we have a director who wrote that no wrote it,

Alex Ferrari 37:45
right. And that movie at the time, I mean, for the audience, for members in the audience who weren't around or didn't understand that time when that movie hit. It was a gigantic hit.

Peter Desberg 37:56
And 11 years to get made. Did you know that

Alex Ferrari 38:00
that did not know that. But it doesn't surprise me at least because that movie is

Peter Desberg 38:04
it was a great story that Ed told us that he took it around, couldn't get it made, bumped into one of the Farrelly brothers, who said, how did that move your viewers to reset it never got made? He said, You're kidding. When I give talks to students, I used that script as an example. We got to make that

Alex Ferrari 38:21
movie. And they were hot, hotter than hot at that moment in time.

Jeffrey Davis 38:24
Exactly. And they got it made, I think within months.

Peter Desberg 38:30
Again, you could see, we just talked, for example about how much tension do you put in there? The fact that you're making jokes about a person who has an intellectual deficit is a touchy subject for a lot of dowel movie,

Alex Ferrari 38:45
it was a touchy subject.

Peter Desberg 38:46
That scene where all

Alex Ferrari 38:49
the hair the hair seen?

Peter Desberg 38:51
Yeah, you've got gonna borrow some of that moose, right.

Alex Ferrari 38:55
I mean, in normally they teach you not to kick the dog, but they do more than that.

Jeffrey Davis 39:02
But the trick was that, and John talked a little bit, John and John Strauss wrote that with a director, and they had the script out there forever. But what Ed talked about was the fact that you liked these people so much that you liked everybody in the movie, except maybe not even that Dylan was such a nerd.

Peter Desberg 39:32
No, but they use such a great device. When when we when we interviewed Charlie Peters. He told us that one of the things he loves to use as a device called a third object, he gave us an example of Beauty and the Beast. Were at one point they're having this this lavish dinner outside and they see a wolf and the beauties their heart is pounding and She's frightened and the Beast is salivating looking at dinner. And it showed you immediately, there's their separate reactions to the same object, and you immediately saw their character differentiation. And so, in, There's Something About Mary, the, the, the intellectual deficit boy acted as a third object, where one character was really empathic, and went out of his way to be nice to him. And the other character would kind of kick them and push them around when nobody was looking. So saw their personalities, by the same way they treated the third object in this case, that boy,

Alex Ferrari 40:35
was just as you were talking about that I just think Franken beans just came in Frank impedes fracking, such a great movie.

Jeffrey Davis 40:47
That's my favorite scene, of course, this because, and then the other thing that this is about the stories you learn is that is, is that one of the fair, I think Peter fairly said, we're gonna we're gonna do this, Ben, with you playing yourself at 17. And he said, no one will ever buy that. And of course, we look at the movie now. And we say, it wouldn't work without that. Say it's funny how these decisions get made in comedy. And there's a lot of stories like that in in in the book.

Alex Ferrari 41:21
Now, I've been around and been working with stand up comics, probably for a better part of a decade. And I've, I've been around the sad clowns. Alongside, some of them are my best, some are my best friends. And just from your point of view, because I'm sure a lot of the people you interviewed, or we've talked to do some sort of stand up comedy, in one way, shape, or form. Do comics, in your opinion, need therapy?

Jeffrey Davis 41:51
Like that, because I'm a I'm a, I'm a client, or a patient

Peter Desberg 41:58
as somebody who has done that very thing. Okay. First, going back one of the, we found two interesting things. One is that a number of the people that we wrote, had graduate degrees in math and science. And what's interesting is, in when you're in a writers room, they kind of break down into two groups. They're either story guys or joke guys, and all the ones with math and science backgrounds. We're story, guys. And, uh, I have probably a third to a half of the the writers we interviewed had standup experience. And obviously, they were the joke guys. And it's a very different approach that they took. And you, you may find this interesting that we, one of the questions we asked, after all this was done was, how do you know if your stuff is funny? And, you know, I remember back to a guy interview decades ago, who said, you know, that's a really tough thing for me as a writer, because I sit in my office by myself working on a movie, and I come up with what I think is a good joke. So I walk out to my secretary 14 years and say, Do you think this is funny? And she says, yeah, that's real funny. He says, with stand ups, it's a survival skill, you tell that you tell the bit, you've got a half second to find out if it worked or not. And you learn to survive by getting that instinct of is this gonna work? And interestingly, we had four or five teams of writers. And they said, we find out instantly if something's funny if we make our partner crack up.

Alex Ferrari 43:35
That makes Yeah, that makes perfect sense. They're, they're their own bouncing boards.

Peter Desberg 43:39
And they're always trying to make the other guy laugh, and in their

Alex Ferrari 43:43
heart, and they're probably harder to make laugh than anybody else, because they know each other's techniques.

Peter Desberg 43:47
That's right. It's it's interesting that I worked with a friend of mine named Greg Dean, I don't know if you've run across him, who is a stand up coach in Santa Monica. We wrote a piece of software teaching people how to write jokes. Okay. One of the things we talk about is that basically stand ups rant, that's what they do. They talk about stuff that frustrates them that gets them angry that and so again, you have to find material that other people are also going to find kind of annoying, and then find a take on what you do. And so again, we get this idea that that stand ups are either angry people or they're a lot of people like you know, Louie CK, one of our favorites. mm x about personally painful stories, but makes them funny. Yes, he does. These people are depressed. But I'm telling the Louis black story but

Jeffrey Davis 44:48
Oh, I love Lewis. I mean to. He was, you know, his, his, his persona is he's a very, very angry guy. And I hurt a couple years ago i Some idiot journalist was, you know, who obviously hadn't prepared was asking him a question. It was one of those events and they were, he was probably getting interviewed like 20 times in this one red carpet event and they said, so are you this angry offstage as you are on stage? And he said, I hope this has distorted pewters thinking, Yeah, I'll be in big trouble later. He said, No, obviously not. If I were I would have had a stroke by now. You know? He's gotta be angry that no, he said it's his persona. And he just talked about he actually talked in that same interview about Jack Benny, who I worship and who was actually in real life and incredibly generous person work to with Rubenstein I think to save Carnegie Hall was incredibly generous, he would be helped so many people, but that's not funny.

Alex Ferrari 46:01
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Jeffrey Davis 46:12
Cheap is funny. Generous is not in a so that's what Louis Louis Black was saying. And also, I don't know if you know, Louis black started as a playwright.

Alex Ferrari 46:22
That makes sense. He's he's he so sharp. He went, he went to

Peter Desberg 46:25
Yale Drama.

He has a master's degree in drama.

Alex Ferrari 46:28
Wow. Hey, what

Jeffrey Davis 46:30
the hell no know I lay right next to me school.

Alex Ferrari 46:35
After being around stand up comics for so long. You, you see their stage persona, and then the guys off stage are not generally that very rarely do I see one that's on all the time. And if they are on all the time, they're gonna burn out sooner rather than later. I was

Jeffrey Davis 46:51
thinking about one because he died the other day, Jerry Lewis, Yahoo. God, yeah. Who was on all the time and needed to be the center of attention. And I'm sure that it came from an enormous insecurity and his childhood or something. I mean, don't have to be a psychologist to figure that out. But yeah, I was much sadder about Don Rickles. Because Don, life was a great guy.

Alex Ferrari 47:20
I heard that from people that he was he's just a very sweet man was a great guy. He was a sweet man. He was not nearly as not what's the word I'm looking for?

Jeffrey Davis 47:31
Sona. But if you really look at my I took my son six months before he died, I took my son to see Rickles. And he was still in a wheelchair, but his mind was clear. And he was really funny. And, and the thing is, is that if you really look at it from our perspective of 2017, it wasn't a lot that mean, you know, and it wasn't right. You know, the one thing I wanted to just go back for a second, one of the things that we did in the book is we asked a lot about process. Okay. And one of the things that I've noticed is that what most people say, I don't know, this always got into it, because we did a lot of editing we, the book would have been the Bible, if we have you know, it is once you start writing, don't go back. Keep writing, you know, on the first draft, if there are places missing, keep going. A lot of people liked outliers, but just as many didn't know, in television, I don't know if you're aware of this, but this might be of interest is people don't outline first in comedy. You sit in a room and this is what I thought that the great thing about now that's funny is that is that you actually are going into a writers room. And the thing Peter talked about, that Bob Meyer did is exactly what goes on in writers room. You just keep pitching ideas and stories. And and then you come up with something and you'll be in there 1213 hours in in, in the real world. But one of the things they've all said is yes, you can outline. But in TV, you break a story in a room. I know they did that even on breaking that you sit with the other writers, and you break the story. Then someone goes out and writes the outline, and then I know should madman which had comedic elements. All of the scripts were written. The scripts were written in the room with all the writers together, which I've never heard of before, but it worked. And guess what? All the writers except one on Mad Men had been sitcom writers, including that leader or whiner at an actor announces it. Who was on Golden Girls. That was his big thing. Break. The guy that created madman was a sitcom writer. You know that Alan Ball started as the sitcom writer that I made that makes a lot of sense. Yeah, he was uncivil. Okay, the play right like Sorkin you know, and but the big advice I've gotten over the years and that's in the book is, once you start, Don't stop, keep going to get a crappy first draft. And, you know, because otherwise you'll be on it forever. I, I have a colleague who, who keeps talking to me about a screenplay he's been writing for 20 years. Well, maybe if you're writing a novel, you might take 10 years, a screenplay? No,

Alex Ferrari 50:45
no, I've talked to numerous screenwriters on this show. And, yeah, the professional they're all obviously professional screenwriters. So when when I tell them stories of you know, I've had this guy who's been on a screenplay for three years, they're like, that's, they're not professionals. They're, they're professionals. Don't do that. No, one's there's no, there's no honor. In the struggling writer who took five years to write the movie that there's this, there's that's ridiculous.

Jeffrey Davis 51:13
I think you're writing a novel that is unique. That's

Alex Ferrari 51:18
really different for that's a different form. But as far as screenwriting, or sitcom writing or anything like that, it'll take that long to do IT professionals knock it out. And the best advice?

Jeffrey Davis 51:30
Yeah, and I think the thing you're saying is, and I completely agree with it, is they have to learn to manage the, the feeling that it sucks. They have to deal with that and that professional does,

Peter Desberg 51:45
to give to give a little empirical support to what Jeffrey saying, what's

Jeffrey Davis 51:49
the word empirical mean? I don't think

Alex Ferrari 51:50
that is it. That's a 52 cent word,

Peter Desberg 51:53
sir. Well, I'd like to say I'm bucking the trend, but you'll say that's 100 cent word.

Alex Ferrari 52:01
It's a phrase, sir. That's a phrase. He said you were saying?

Peter Desberg 52:04
Yes. Before I was what? There was a huge study on creativity at Berkeley. And they found two traits that cut across every field. In terms of creativity, the creative people, a have the ability to tolerate ambiguity, and be the important one. They've learned not to judge. They avoid judging, they suspended. And what Jeffrey's always telling me is students will write a draft or two and they say, Oh, this is no good. And they don't want to go on because they haven't created a masterpiece in their first draft. We, we like, we like Hemingway's phrase of right drunk, edit sober.

Alex Ferrari 52:50
That's a that's a great way. It's a great, great saying. And it's so true, is it I know Mamet said it but I think he took it from Hemingway. What writing is easy. All you have to do is sit in front of the typewriter and bleed.

Peter Desberg 53:04
Yeah, watch the blood spots appear on your forehead.

Alex Ferrari 53:07
I'm not sure who said it. But I don't Mamet said it. But I think he took it from me.

Peter Desberg 53:10
Right? It was Hemingway. It was it was anyway. Yeah. No, the

Alex Ferrari 53:14
best advice I ever got for screenwriting, or writing in general, was from and I say this story all the time on the show, but I'm gonna say it again. Jim Uhls, the writer fightclub Sure. He said, If you're going to begin writing, sit down, write a screenplay. Do not stop. Go all the way through, do not edit, just write it out. When you're done, put it in a drawer. Sit down, start writing the second screenplay, and then do the same thing. And then start writing a third screenplay. When you're done with the third screenplay, pick up the first screenplay and then start rewriting that because by now you're a better writer than you were when you first started. That's great advice. Isn't that amazing?

Jeffrey Davis 53:51
It's amazing. We had Pedro Almodovar to the University last year, and I love his process. He's amazing. He will write three things at once. And he'll have different desks which I think Freud was the one who started that he only has two. So he'll he'll have different desks. So if he gets blocked on one project, he'll go to the other he doesn't stop and and I think that's kind of what you're what you're saying is is if if you get frozen on something, rather than suffering over it, go to another project and problem will probably be solved when you come back. I always recommend even though it's not a screenwriting book, I always think the Anne Lamott book Bird by Bird, any writer should read

Peter Desberg 54:42
that before free go past this point. An old comedy writer that I interviewed, and this was before the days of computers we was writing on a typewriter said whenever I find myself blocked, what I do is I go back and I take the last two pages I wrote and I tear them up Oh God, I don't care how clever it was it got me into this corner.

Alex Ferrari 55:05
Yeah, that's so you purposely delete what you just wrote in order to get you to start writing again.

Peter Desberg 55:12
And you may not realize that you box yourself in but you did.

Alex Ferrari 55:16
No, of course. Of course. That's Oh, that's, that's brutal, but yet very effective.

Jeffrey Davis 55:21
Yeah. That's a good Yep. Peter, I don't think you've ever shared that with me.

Peter Desberg 55:25
But I have, but you don't pay attention when we talk.

Alex Ferrari 55:28
I'm glad. I'm glad I could bring you two together a little way. And

Peter Desberg 55:32
it'll be gone for lunch.

Alex Ferrari 55:35
All right, so I have a few more questions to ask you. What advice would you give a writer wanting to break into writing for television and today's world?

Jeffrey Davis 55:44
Well, my advice is going to be coming from my now 14 years at Loyola. And nine years. Oh, good. God is coming up on nine years as chair of screenwriting. I'm not talking about the grad students. Now I'm talking about undergrads are very well come out at you know, anywhere between 22 and 24. You take any job you can get some of them come out, and they say, Well, I want to be a writer's assistant in the writers room, because I want to write well, you got to earn that. That doesn't, it would vary what the story I told you about my two students who are on who were on one day at a time now they had one of them was Jeff Carlin's assistant for a year and a half, almost two years, and then worked on the TV show he's on now. And the other one made independent films and shorts and did temp jobs. And then this producer, a Creator, who had been their teacher at school, brought them together as a team and brought them on the show. But you take any job you can get as long as it's in the business. All of my seniors from last year are working.

Alex Ferrari 57:04
Let me see.

Peter Desberg 57:05
Let me just add something to what Jeffrey said, by using the N word networking. The number of jobs you know the number of people that get into a room because a friend of ours, you know, friend of his said, Hey, there's a vacancy in the room, come on in numbers, the people that get in because they're so wonderful. And so you know, meet as many people as you can work with as many people as you can. And be pleasant while you're doing it.

Jeffrey Davis 57:32
Yeah, I think the days when you could be a spoiled entitle person, or over, I'll tell you, JJ Abrams, who some of you know this, but JJ is like we're best buddies. JJ Abrams, dad was a big producer. AJ is not first generation, his dad was a TV movie producer. And so he was raised inside the business. And he, he says that the minute someone who comes to work for he and his wife looks entitled, they're out. They don't give them a second chance. Because there's too many people who want that chance. I couldn't be spoiled and entitled and difficult. I'm very proud of the students at LMU. Because they don't come out with that entitle level, they are willing to start at the bottom and pay their dues. The odds of I mean, aside from what happened to the two students I mentioned, that's mostly going to happen to grad students. And even then it's going to take a couple of years, you have to be prepared. If you want to be a writer in television, I can't speak to movies, because movies are entirely different business now. And and the majors don't make that many movies, right. But television, you have to be prepared to give it a minimum of five years. So you're where you think you want to be.

Peter Desberg 58:58
I moonlight as a clinical psychologist, and I only work with people who have stage fright. And I remember one actor coming in to see me. And his first words are, I'm an actor. I don't do commercials and I don't do soaps for suck now. That lie and I said oh, when you forgot and I don't work.

Jeffrey Davis 59:20
Absolutely say that or, you know,

Alex Ferrari 59:22
I did it well. Yeah, no, no, it's that that that kind of mentality is the I don't want to do this or I don't want to do that is that the worry the business will beat them out of that. Eventually, you know, because you're someone who never

Jeffrey Davis 59:37
says that. That's why everybody loves her except Donald Trump.

Alex Ferrari 59:42
Mm hmm.

Jeffrey Davis 59:43
Meryl Streep does not even today. Have that attitude. And she certainly could if she wanted to. Her attitude is she doesn't want to do something is she's very gentle. And she's very loving and she sometimes will even wear commend someone she thinks is more right for something. But that's why she's Meryl Streep is not just because she's a brilliant actress. You know, there is never a reason to be unkind to other people that you were. And you will be remembered for that. Other than Peter being unkind to me on a daily basis, which I've gotten used to,

Peter Desberg 1:00:22
if you have three or four hours, I can give you a couple of really good stories.

Jeffrey Davis 1:00:27
But he's unkind to me. Exactly. Yeah.

Peter Desberg 1:00:31
We've barely scratched the surface, I

Jeffrey Davis 1:00:33
think I think it's a really important thing for young writers to remember is you got to earn it, you've got to earn it. And even when you get into the room, if you get the room to sit, oh, I'll give you an example. I'm trying to think how can I not make myself the hero of the story? No. I had a student listen, because this is the first the best undergraduate joke writer, um, character that I've ever had in the 14 years of being there. She was 21. I mean, this is how good she was, she could look at somebody else. Because I run my I run my classes, like a writers room, particularly the upper division class. And because that's how I was taught, and, and she could look at somebody else's script and come up with like, eight jokes that fit the characters. She had studied their script, so much knew their scripts so well. And that's what you want in a writers room. And she said to me, I'm going to go out, and I'm going to get in a writers room right after I graduate. And I said, Diona, I don't think that's going to happen. And if it did, I think it would be a really bad thing for you. 22, you'll be looked at as the baby writer and baby renters are usually between 25 and 30. And you'll be you will be out of the business by the time you're 25. What about grad school. And so she on her own, looked up some grad programs. And they had just started the Harold Ramis Second City master program. That's where she is now she's finishing out I told you, it didn't work. I'm still the hero of the story.

Alex Ferrari 1:02:25
But giving her that that given her that extra time

Jeffrey Davis 1:02:27
with her in April when she was in town, because it's in Chicago, the program. And they you know, they were trying to honor her ramus and by naming it after, and she's a different person. She's calm. She's loving school. She loved being an undergrad.

Alex Ferrari 1:02:46
Well look at the instructor, she I mean seriously. And of course, she

Peter Desberg 1:02:49
is an instructor. So

Alex Ferrari 1:02:52
by giving that little extra time for nurturing, and just time to kind of develop a little bit even as talented as she might have been. It's kind of like it's kind of like throwing Michael Jordan or LeBron James into playing basketball when they're 15. They're really talented, but just give it a couple years. You know,

Peter Desberg 1:03:09
I told you the story before about wall Bennett. He told us a story that when he was a new guy in a room, he you pitched a joke. And it was like the wind was blowing. Nobody heard anything. 20 minutes later, one of the more seasoned writers told the same joke just pitched the same joke and everybody cracked up. And Walt said, Wait a minute. I just pitched that joke. They looked at him said Come on. Don't be like that. Oh, wow. And you know, it's interesting that Jeffrey talked about Lou Schneider before who told a great story that they're in the room. And the writer next to him, grabs them and pulls them down below the table and says pitch this joke for me it yourself because you did stand up your pitcher better

Alex Ferrari 1:04:00
Wow.

Peter Desberg 1:04:00
The nice thing about Lowe is he gave her credit.

Alex Ferrari 1:04:03
That's nice ever that's that's rare in this this

Jeffrey Davis 1:04:07
aliens are not

Peter Desberg 1:04:08
and it only took him four months to get around to it.

Jeffrey Davis 1:04:10
We interviewed someone that we have not yet found the book for but a stand up named Carrie snow is an old friend of mine. And when they she was she got a one afternoon she got a letter with a check for $500 in it from Robin Williams and he said I was doing stand up. This is maybe like 1020 years ago, and I inadvertently use one of your jokes so I felt I had to pay for it.

Alex Ferrari 1:04:41
Wow. Yeah,

Peter Desberg 1:04:43
such a sweet guy. Uh, he

Alex Ferrari 1:04:44
was I had I had the pleasure of meeting him once and he's, I did the thing with Robin when I met him is that have never met another human being whose energy you could literally feel the vibration off of him. And he wasn't on. He was calm. He was with his wife. You know, as his comments gonna be, he was not cracking jokes. He was just a normal human being. But you can sense that energy off of him. And I've never met another human being like that.

Jeffrey Davis 1:05:14
You know, his mentor was like that, because I grew up around Jonathan Winters. I knew him pretty well.

Alex Ferrari 1:05:20
I heard about that with Jonathan. He

Jeffrey Davis 1:05:22
was close friends with his close friends with my stepfather and I, I and I hope you weren't planning to use that piece of paper. You should never put blank paper in front of me. I'm going to write, you're gonna have to do some editing here, my friend.

Alex Ferrari 1:05:38
It's fine. We just let it go.

Peter Desberg 1:05:43
So did you have some I guess

Alex Ferrari 1:05:45
I have to have two more questions. I wanted to ask you guys. What is the lesson that took you guys the longest to learn whether in the film business or in life?

Peter Desberg 1:05:55
Oh, that's an easy one. You can give yours first and then I'll steal it.

I give me an answer. And Jeffrey will say me too. As far as life lessons are concerned,

he hasn't learned and he

says I'm still a student, huh? That's, that's a really tough one. Um, well, I I'm good at answering narrower questions. Uh huh. But, you know, the other day I did a podcast and somebody said, this was a screenwriter and she said, What's your favorite sitcom, your favorite comedy movie of all time? And I looked at her and I said, tell me your favorite movie? And she laughed and said, I can't answer that one either.

Alex Ferrari 1:06:41
That was gonna be my next question. So is there any lessons life lessons that you can think of that kind of really, that took you really long time to figure out do you like, Oh, my God,

Jeffrey Davis 1:06:54
so learning, Peter will back me up in this, but if he has any class, he won't say anything?

Alex Ferrari 1:06:59
Well, apparently no class,

Peter Desberg 1:07:03
easy. It's easy to keep learning when you have so much to learn.

Yeah, exactly. You ruined it. Okay.

He never takes notes when I talked to him, which is

Jeffrey Davis 1:07:13
really, it's really hard to study for a test when you don't know what the answers are gonna be. My entire college and grad school career. I got a new people got me the answers. But no, I think it is the same lesson. I think that the lesson in writing that you never stopped learning is the same lesson in life is you have to constantly teach yourself to listen, it's hard. It doesn't come naturally. Man, anybody most people love to talk. And listening is hard. And if you're going to be a writer, you have to listen and observe and that's true of any kind of writing any kind of acting any kind of stand up

Peter Desberg 1:07:49
is a great phrase. The opposite of talking isn't listening. It's waiting.

I tell you what, I'm

telling you. I'll leave you with my answer to that one before those experiences a lousy teacher it gives the exams before the lessons.

Alex Ferrari 1:08:04
Yeah, that's great.

Peter Desberg 1:08:06
Is it regular walking Bartlett's home quotation is

Alex Ferrari 1:08:12
alright, so name if you can't. Both you guys, one of your favorite sitcoms and one of your favorite comedy movies, or movies in general.

Peter Desberg 1:08:22
Well, I can't give you my favorite sitcom, but I can give you my favorite current sitcom. Fair enough. I'm a sound like I echo alien when I say I'm a big Big Bang Theory fan. But there have been so many great sitcoms, you know again, cheers Frasier, taxi Seinfeld. They just they're too many. And they go all the way back to I Love Lucy and just it'd be easier to tell you the ones I haven't liked. With there been so many great movie comedies yours. Where do you start?

Alex Ferrari 1:08:58
One that comes into your mind? Or do you start

Peter Desberg 1:09:00
I can tell you Jeffrey's favorite comedy was Porky's. Yeah, right?

I actually never saw Porky's, believe it or that? He's lived it?

Alex Ferrari 1:09:12
How about you, Jeffrey, Eddie answers?

Jeffrey Davis 1:09:14
Well, I guess my favorite classic comedy would have been married John Moore Show. I just love that show. I can watch it over and over and over again. I think one of the more recent it's off the air now three years, but I just thought it was much better than friends. And I'm sure it owes something to friends and is doing very well in syndication and on Netflix now ran nine seasons, and was written by two theatre guys and then they went on to work for David Letterman before they created How I Met Your Mother. I just think it's a brilliant show. I think it's so beautifully written and imaginative and risky for a network show just the way they did it going in and out of satire, double points of view and then I guess Chuck Lori's show. The only one that I watch. I'm not saying because Peter loves the Big Bang, and I like it too, is it's just not my kind of humor, but I like it. I appreciate it. But I love mom, which and I level Grace and Frankie. I think Grace and Frankie is amazing. And there's also there's, they're going backward to the shows that I unfortunately wrote in the early 90s. There's a show called the ranch on Netflix. Yeah, a new one with Kathy Bates. Yes. And, and I don't find either them remotely funny. They're like, it's the old three jokes a page thing. They're going back to her premises a woman who owns opens up what? Six years? Six jokes three jokes. But I don't I don't remember that rule. I only remember 340

Peter Desberg 1:10:56
years of old talks when you said that.

Jeffrey Davis 1:10:58
I lied.

Alex Ferrari 1:11:00
You guys could discuss it afterward.

Peter Desberg 1:11:03
Oh, no. during,

Jeffrey Davis 1:11:04
during Of course. We're a lot more entertaining when we're arguing. I think I get

Alex Ferrari 1:11:09
but yeah, I've heard both those shows are not doing very well. And that's probably good reason why.

Jeffrey Davis 1:11:15
And yet one day at a time is doing really well. Because the ghosts are all from character.

Alex Ferrari 1:11:24
Where are the where's that show playing?

Jeffrey Davis 1:11:26
Netflix?

Alex Ferrari 1:11:27
Is that Netflix? Second season? Yeah. Okay, I gotta look that up. I haven't even I didn't even hear about it.

Jeffrey Davis 1:11:32
Hey, Gemma here, Rita Moreno isn't anything I'm there. She's

Alex Ferrari 1:11:36
wonderful. She's wonderful. Now where can where can people find you guys online?

Peter Desberg 1:11:41
If you go to let's see now. That's funny dot lol. You can find us.

Alex Ferrari 1:11:50
Okay, fantastic. And then the name of your books. Now that's funny, though, which is available on Amazon, Barnes and Noble and all the fine. All

Peter Desberg 1:11:58
this bad or bad taste. I will plug my most recent joke book, go for it, which is the bad sex manual. I wrote my friend Tom, who wrote and directed Friday the 13th part six as big as you want. It's like, okay, but before we finish, can I just quickly say you have made this so easy for us? Yeah. Right. You asked great questions you wrote up with a lot. You're really good listeners. Well,

Alex Ferrari 1:12:28
thank you so much. I appreciate that.

Peter Desberg 1:12:30
So you've made this enormously fun and easy for so we appreciate that. Oh,

thank you. Oh, so when you when you turn off,

he wants to tell you what he really thinks once you turn.

Alex Ferrari 1:12:42
So once I turn once I stopped the recording, then you can tell me what you really think. Well, I appreciate it. Guys, thank you so much for taking the time out to talk to me in the in the in the indie film hustle tribe, I truly appreciate it. Thank you,

Jeffrey Davis 1:12:55
thank you, you made this really fun.

Alex Ferrari 1:12:58
Peter and Jeffrey, were an absolute riot. And I hope you guys have a better understanding of what it takes to make people laugh. And what it's like to actually write a comedy. I know when I was working on this as mag, which is a drama, drama, comedy. There are a lot of comedic elements in this as mag. And, you know, I just sat back and watch some of these amazing actors that were in the cast. Just come up with this humor and sometimes it worked. Sometimes it didn't we figured it out in the editing room. But it was just such a wonderful thing to be on a set where you're laughing almost all the time. It was just an a very enjoyable process. And I hope you guys can bring some comedy into your into your work whether even if it's the if a drama, you know some sometimes a little joke here or there brings the audience in and just and keeps them going in your story and in your journey. So I hope this was a benefit in value to you guys. And if you want to link to Peter and Jeffrey's book now that's funny the art and craft of writing comedy. Just head over to the show notes at Indie film hustle.com forward slash BPS zero 28. And guys, we will be launching indie film hustle TV next week. And I'm so so so excited to share everything I've got in store for you. We've got interviews with some of the biggest screenwriters in Hollywood talking about billion dollar screenwriters. We have the dialogue which is a series that does in depth interviews with Jim Uhls are at our fight club, David Goyer, the CO writer of the dark night and just you know, Paul Haggis Academy Award winning Paul Haggis, there's so many just like literally so many screenwriters and that that show alone, let alone a list screenwriting lectures, as well as Writers Guild sponsored lectures that are only available through ifH TV or at another places are extremely expensive if you want to rent or buy But here, they're part of the service. And I've got so many more things coming up courses by Linda shear is going to be on there the legendary script doctor, her courses on here, as well as documentaries like dream on spec, which is a documentary, specifically about screenwriters trying to get their screen screenplays produced, while being a while interviewing some of the top screenwriters in Hollywood. I mean, there's just so much stuff, guys, I can't even go into it. We've got hundreds of hours of content for screenwriters, filmmakers, and content creators. So if you want to sign up early again, head over to ifH tv.com to get early access. I'm going to be releasing and send you guys a private email with a private link to get in early if you want to jump in and explore before anyone else. So that's ifH tv.com. And that does it for another episode of The Bulletproof screenplay podcast. As always, keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you soon. Thanks for listening to the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay.com That's B u ll e t e r o f s CR e n PLA y.com


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BPS 027: How to Story Map Your Screenplay with Daniel Calvisi

Today’s guest is author Daniel Calvisi. Dan wrote the book Story Maps: How to Write a GREAT Screenplay. He breaks down stories and shows you how to map out your own by analyzing how the masters construct their screenplays. Here’s a bit more on today’s guest.

Daniel Calvisi is a story analyst, speaker, screenwriter and author of STORY MAPS: How to Write a GREAT Screenplay, STORY MAPS: TV Drama: The Structure of the One-Hour Television Pilot, and Story Maps: 12 Great Screenplays (Raiders of the Lost Ark, Up, Rocky, Sex and the City, X-Men, Black Swan, Juno, The Matrix)

He is a former Story Analyst for major studios like Twentieth Century Fox, Miramax Films,and New Line Cinema. He coaches writers, teaches webinars on writing for film and television with The Writers Store and speaks at writing conferences and book signings. He holds a degree in Film and Television from the Tisch School of the Arts at New York University. 

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Alex Ferrari 0:00
I'd like to welcome to the show Dan Cal VC, man, thank you so much for being on the show.

Daniel Calvisi 3:15
Thanks for having me.

Alex Ferrari 3:15
I appreciate it, man. So I wanted to first get into how'd you get into this crazy business?

Daniel Calvisi 3:21
Well, I went to NYU film school and like everyone there I wanted to be a writer director. And but I really got into screenwriting there, I really found that the screenplay was was really where my heart was. And I took a script analysis class that I really liked. So that was kind of the first time I ever really took apart like professional scripts, their structure and everything we studied, you know, Sunset Boulevard, and the silence of the lambs and really a wide swath of scripts and movies. So that really turned me on and I heard about this job of being a reader. So when I got out of college, I found my way to becoming a reader for various companies like Miramax, and Fox 2000, and I worked for Jonathan Demi's company, clinic estetico, and new line and other things. So that was freelance reader work that I was doing. But I was working for enough companies where I was supporting myself and I learned on the job, you know, quickly, I had to because they give you a bunch of scripts, and you have to return them two days, or maybe the next day, you know, maybe do an overnight job. So I had to do written analysis of all of these scripts and a lot of books as well. And so I really learned under fire and I started course finding patterns and similarities and the bad scripts and the good scripts and seeing what worked and what didn't, especially structure. And that's how I started to develop my story maps structural method as well. So

Alex Ferrari 4:55
so how how does a young screenwriter break into Hollywood? As a script reader, like, What's that process like? Well,

Daniel Calvisi 5:03
I think these days probably hone your craft a little bit, get your feet wet with contests. With contests and film festivals. They probably won't pay you at first. So I would say do some free reader work, you know, reviewing the first round of submissions to, you know, the Austin screenwriting conference or something like that, or the final draft contest. So contact them directly. Say you want to volunteer to be a reader. Hopefully, they'll give you a test script to do test notes on and confirm that you do know what you're doing. Then from there, I would say it'll either be word of mouth, you'll hear about an opening or contact directly agencies, management companies, production companies and studios. And if you contact enough and you send them in sample coverages, hopefully eventually there will be an opening and they will hire you for that I got my one of my first jobs, the way I got into Miramax Films was through their genre unit Dimension Films.

Alex Ferrari 6:12
This is and then you got in at a time when Miramax was at the height of its powers.

Daniel Calvisi 6:16
Yeah, they were absolutely at their peak, they were winning Best Picture. And I this was Dimension Films, they had the Spy Kids franchise, the screen franchise, they were huge. Yeah, they were huge. And it was funny, because I was told by a friend that he had been a reader there, he knew a guy there. But he said don't call them because I know for a fact that they don't have any openings. And so I call them anyway, the guy dimension and the first thing he said was, we have an opening for a reader Do you want to test for it? So the lesson there is be persistent. You know, somebody tells you not to do something as long as you're not a jerk about it. Go ahead and try and get your foot in the door. It doesn't hurt to make a phone call. That's one thing I always tell people is, you know, people still make phone calls in this town. Mm hmm. So cold calling can work. You know, it's it's

Alex Ferrari 7:09
pretty remarkable. You know, doing this show for so long. I cold. I don't cold call cold tweets. Or I cold email like I did to you. And it's amazing. You know, you ask and people will like Yeah, sure. I'll come on. Yeah, for sure. I'd like to have a meeting. Sure. It's, it's fascinating when you ask what happens?

Daniel Calvisi 7:28
Yeah, yeah. So what I find one thing, it's hard to do. But if you can give them something like a piece of information they may not have had. Or if you can stroke their ego to maybe in a unique way, like let's say, you're contacting a company that makes a lot of big blockbuster movies. But you're talking to an executive who happened to have made this really small indie film 10 years ago. And you tell them, hey, oh, my gosh, I saw that film. I really loved it. You know, I'd love to learn more about it. Because you're, you know, you're kind of appealing to them to their passion, you know, not just their their latest superhero movie, which they may not have had anything to do with, you know,

Alex Ferrari 8:11
yeah, that's something and now with IMDb, you can literally do that research fairly quickly. Mm hmm. Yeah. And do you agree that when you are reaching out to to gatekeepers or or people that you're trying to work with in one way, shape, or form, providing value of some sort is or, like you said, stroking the ego is one way in, but also providing some sort of value in whatever that might be? Whether that be free work, whether that be anything? Do you think that's a good rule of thumb?

Daniel Calvisi 8:41
Yeah, yeah, totally, totally, if you can offer them something, because Because I mean, really, they get, if they're getting 20 scripts a day, they don't really need your script, you know, or your whatever you're trying to send to them, you know, they don't need to give you your break. So if you can somehow offer them something of value, you know, a piece of information or I don't know anything, maybe a bottle of their, their favorite barbecue sauce from Brooklyn. You know,

Alex Ferrari 9:10
if you do that kind of research, I guarantee you if you do that kind of research, and you hit up an executive, and that they you that you found the favorite barbecue sauce, and you're like, Hey, I heard this was your favorite. It could be a little creepy, but yet it opened the door. Yeah, totally,

Daniel Calvisi 9:23
totally. I also find if you if you see them talk on a panel. Mm hmm. It helps to say Hey, I saw you talk on this panel. And I really liked what you had to say, you know, space and then given a specific example, because you know, people go to talk on panels because they want to be listened to, you know, and they want to be adored, and they want to, you know, feel like they made a difference in somebody's life. So they may not have actually taught maybe they had to leave quickly. So they didn't talk to anyone in the audience or maybe they were only approached by annoying people after their Talk, you know, God. So you guys, we all know there's there's always that person in the front row who just has the most inane questions, right? Una

Alex Ferrari 10:09
Yeah, like, how do you get $100 million? To make my first feature? I'm like, Oh,

Daniel Calvisi 10:12
yes, yeah. So you can show, you know, say something really smart and say, you know, you got some value out of their thing, then that sounds really nice to them, you know, they're glad that they did it.

Alex Ferrari 10:22
So what's the big difference between a script reader and a story analyst in regard? Are they the same thing in the studio system?

Daniel Calvisi 10:30
They're the same thing in the studio system. outside the studio system, I would say, a story analyst is probably more of a consultant like me, a writing coach. And also someone who feels comfortable analyzing any kind of narrative, whether it's a book, a movie, a TV show, or a video game, you know, or a myth or something like that. So that's something I like that term story analysts because it's kind of a universal thing, saying, I have years of experience analyzing narratives and you know, taking apart the structural differences between let's say, a fairy tale and a studio feature film, you know, so I analyze story.

Alex Ferrari 11:13
What are some of the common traits? You see, since you've read so many? Since you've read so many stories in screenplays? What are some of the common traits you see of successful screenplays?

Daniel Calvisi 11:25
Wow, well, um, well, I always say you got to come right out of the gate and suck in the reader. So your opening has to be great. Open with something unique, ideally, something we haven't seen before, or something that really endears us to your main characters. They need to have really strong motivation that we identify with them, and they have a really strong need. That's one thing that you just don't see enough in scripts and in movies as well. You know, someone, an actor, being a movie star is not enough, anymore game by Yeah, and not just at the box office, just when you're watching a film to gain my interest in following them. If their character is a total jerk, and just an immoral person. They still need a code of ethics that we believe in, they still we still need to believe in their goal. And root for them, you know, and so that can be tough to generate that rooting interest in the reader or the audience.

Alex Ferrari 12:27
Can you give an example of a movie that did it right? Like that opening? I mean, I'm thinking off the top of my head like Shawshank or diehard or lethal weapon or these kind of characters. Do you Do you know of a can you come up with a movie that has that kind of opening? Like you really just fall in love with that character? And that character, that leading character has that need? Mm

Daniel Calvisi 12:48
hmm. Wow. I mean, I mean, there's so many. The classic example is Raiders of the Lost Ark. You know, we see this guy do this amazing thing where he rescues this, you know, golden idol from from this temple. And then it's, and then it's taken from him by by this evil guy, so we really, we really, you know, feel for him, and then he makes this dashing escape so So and I think that that was necessary in that opening to have a Balog, the villain, you know, so we don't just think okay, this is just a random archaeologist who's just trying to get this golden idol because it's worth a lot of money. You know, you needed the villain to come in there and say, hey, you know, I'm, I'm the evil guy who, who wants this for myself, you know, where's your your the pure one. But trying to think of a more a more modern film, I would say, Well, let's look at this summer there was the Spider Man homecoming, you know, we do feel for Peter Parker because he's a kid. And he doesn't really know what he's doing. And he's struggling with, you know, kids stuff like he likes the pretty girl. And she won't give him the time of day. Although she does kind of like him too much. That was one thing about it. I thought it was kind of too easy for him to get the girl kind of already liked him. But um, so and that's something with like superhero movies, you still have to endear us to the character, especially even more because they have these superpowers. Right so they could be just a superhero. Not a regular person. But so in Spider Man. He wasn't normal kid with normal problems. Yeah, I thought that was really intentional on their part.

Alex Ferrari 14:36
I think they did it. I mean, out of all the Spider Man movies, I think they nailed and I do like to Tobey Maguire first and second one but I felt that that in Spider Man homecoming they nailed the comic book spider man there. He was a kid with me. It literally almost turned into a John Hughes movie. When you're watching it, you just feel like this really emotional attachment to his kid problems. By the way, he's also fighting villains and dealing with his form of puberty, which is superpowers.

Daniel Calvisi 15:07
Yeah, and he's not, he's not that powerful yet, you know, he's still figuring out his superpowers and making mistakes. So right,

Alex Ferrari 15:13
which was endearing. So you know, he doesn't just come out and he's perfect right away, especially with the character we have such history with, I think they did a fantastic job. But that's a really good, a really good example. Now, what are some of the common mistakes you see screenwriters make? Again and again?

Daniel Calvisi 15:31
Well, speaking of openings, you have a slow opening. Mm hmm. That just doesn't suck in the reader, it starts with maybe too much exposition. That's one description that explains too much. And it's too wordy. Those, you know, canyons of description, that black ink on the page, those super big paragraphs, that's just death to a reader, you know, that's a reason why they're going to stop reading the description and start reading only the dialogue, which I always tried not to do. But it's your job as the screenwriter to make them want to read the description, you know, to come out of the gate, because they're going to read everything, let's say the first few pages, you know, there's that bleary eyed reader who's up at 4am. And they've already read three scripts that day, and they're cracking your script. And they don't, the last thing they want to do is read another script, right. So firstly, you don't want it to be 127 pages, because they don't want to read that much. They're getting paid the same amount of money to read the 127 page script as they are to read the 95 page script. So if you can keep it lean and mean, that's great. Keep it in that 95 to 110 page range. And then if you there, so no matter the length, they're hopefully going to read at least the first two to five pages, you know, description, and dialogue. So it's your job in those opening pages that have such great, lean, terse, descriptive description that really captures tone and mood, and really makes them want to enter this world and explore this world with your lead character. And then endear us to their character. I hate to say it, but that save the cat moment. Blake Snyder was brilliant and identifying that, you know, that moment where we really do connect with the main character. And we really do root for them that rooting interest. So if you can nail that in the opening pages, that's great. That overall length is huge, having a really strong midpoint halfway through that, really ups the the stakes and the conflict and launches and new, through line unforeseen through line that's going to push to the end of the script, you know, a disaster that we didn't see coming, right? And then of course, hitting all hitting all those those great signpost speeds, you know, along the way.

Alex Ferrari 17:58
Right. And those are that what leads me to my next question, what is the structure that professional screenwriters use as a general statement?

Daniel Calvisi 18:06
Well, I call it the story map. And it's my estimation is 95% of commercial movies use this structure. Because pretty much 100% of movies that I study, and I've studied a wide swath of, and read a lot of professional scripts use this structure. It's always in the same order. So I'm not, you know, mixing and matching and placing beats all over the place. But to just mention the titles, excuse me, the titles of my beachy, my story map specsheet, it would be the opening, inciting incident, strong movement forward, end of Act One turn and decision, first trial, first casualty midpoint, declaration of war slash assumption of power, end of Act Two, turn and decision. And it's important to end those acts on a turn and direction and a decision that propels us and the main character into the next act. And then now we're in Act Three. And we have the true point of no return the climax and the epilogue, and you want to end as soon after that climax as possible. So obviously, there's a lot of lot of characteristics that go with those beats. But those are just the rough titles just to you know, get you thinking in that direction.

Alex Ferrari 19:23
Now, and this and this is the structure that you found that most professional scripts about 95% of the scripts written in Hollywood use

Daniel Calvisi 19:30
good ones, yes, professional, good ones. And there, there are professional bad ones as well. So then,

Alex Ferrari 19:35
so and I always like using this when I have when I have a screenwriting expert or story analyst on the show, I always like to bring up the script of Pulp Fiction. And what a genius script that was. And a lot of people feel that that script was not in the conventional beats. But because the story was thrown all over the place out of order but from From my understanding, it did actually hit all those beats in a weird way. And that was the genius of that script. Do you agree with that? And what's your? What's your analysis of that script?

Daniel Calvisi 20:10
Well, I haven't seen in a long time, right? I don't know. I'm guessing that it does hit every one of the beats. But the the overriding point to make is that even if a story is told, nonlinear out of narrative order, it still should hit the beats, you know, so an example I know better would be momento. No, I broke down memento, in my book story maps the films of Christopher Nolan, because I'm obsessed with Christopher Nolan, as you should be, as I should be. Yes. And so in Memento, obviously, it's told in this crazy backward structure, it's not quite backward, it's uh, it you know, it has its own unique thing going on. It's kind of a horseshoe structures is what he called it. But even though it's told backwards, quote backwards, it still hits all of those beats, you know, the inciting incident and the strong movement forward in the end of Act One and all those things. It's just the order that it's told it hits those beats. That makes sense. It makes

Alex Ferrari 21:20
perfect sense. And that that movie is, I mean, if you're a young screenwriter, he I mean, to watch to try to break down or try to analyze that movie with Will will screw with your head. Yeah, I think you should break

Daniel Calvisi 21:31
it off. It almost killed us. When we when we were doing that.

Alex Ferrari 21:34
It's it's just such a well, he's such an amazing filmmaker, and screenwriter and storyteller that he's on a different level playing field than the rest of us. Well, he's,

Daniel Calvisi 21:46
you know, he's saying, How can I make this different? You know, like, he just he just had Dunkirk this summer. And instead of telling an absolutely straightforward, historical epic biopic war film, he said, How can I make this different so he did a triptych structure where he was telling the sea air and land story. And he decided for better or worse that he was not going to give any real context to the battle, he was going to throw us into it and give us that you know, ground level view of the grant the troop, the troops view of the situation. So if they didn't know much, we didn't know much either. And he told us out of order, there was that moment where you realize that came together where you realize that it was told, slightly nonlinear, you know, because you had the the boat, the boat sequence was one day, the sequence on the beach with the Mole was one week and then the aerial sequence with with Tom Hardy and the plains was one hour, but they all did converge at a certain point, I think probably

Alex Ferrari 22:56
done 75 minute mark, and no support. Yes.

Daniel Calvisi 22:59
Okay. No problem. But anyway, you did. Without any spoilers. It's you realize the true structure. Well into the film. You know what I mean?

Alex Ferrari 23:09
It since we're on since we're on Christopher Nolan, I'm such a huge fan of his as well. What do you feel is his best screenplay and film? Wow, you had to pick one.

Daniel Calvisi 23:22
That's really tough. It's tough, but it would be between Memento the prestige. And I would have to say inception over the dark night. That dark nights amazing, but he wrote and directed inception. Right. He wrote and directed momento.

Alex Ferrari 23:45
Wow, Inception is it's such a unique film. It Yeah. It's basically the biggest budget. Independent Film. Oh, you think so? Yeah. Because of the concept. I mean, look at that, look, what he's trying to do. It does take big, broad strokes, you need big, you need a big brush. With that movie. You can't do that on an independent level. But to tell that story inside of a studio system is pretty remarkable on the last person I could even think of ever doing something like that would be Kubrick, you know, and what he used to do constantly with every one of his movies inside the studio system. And I think Nolan is one of those guys right now. That is probably the closest thing to a Kubrick we have currently in cinema Do you Would you agree with that statement?

Daniel Calvisi 24:32
I would say well, I like to say he's our modern day Spielberg just because he works with big budgets. He makes popular films with universal themes, but with incredible directing and visuals, you know? But yeah, he's a little bit more I guess cerebral than Spielberg was in his in his period when he was you know, in his 40s as as Christopher and also basically

Alex Ferrari 24:56
Kubrick and Spielberg had a kid and it's it's Nolan.

Daniel Calvisi 24:59
Yeah. He's British. He always wears dashing clothing and he looks very dapper.

Alex Ferrari 25:05
Yes, he does. Actually, I actually met him once at the powwow, I met him in the back lot of Warner Brothers. And he is he's always got a suit on. He now has no phone does not care to have. He's not on any he doesn't have email. Yeah, that's crazy. He does everything through his wife, and who's his producing partner, and she is he she's like, Look, if something's important, it'll get to me. And that's, and he goes, that way, I have more time to work. And more time to tell stories. I was like, Wow, that's so amazing. But he's in a different he's in a different world than the rest of us. In many ways. Yeah. So I'm back back to our interview. What is the what's more important in your opinion, structure or character? Which is the ultimate question in screen Wow. Or are they both combined? The same? What do you think? Well,

Daniel Calvisi 25:58
it's funny? Well, the great structure doesn't really matter if we don't believe in and root for your character and want to follow them, you know, right. So I like to say character equals action, because characters are defined by action. And then of course, the structure is the form in which you put their actions into it's not formula, its form. It's the shape of the story. So I don't know, I guess I would say, if I had to say I would say structure. If you're talking about unforeseen actions taken by characters surprise, you know, surprising us within the traditional classic structure. We don't want to be able to predict the beats you know, we don't want to be able to protect predict the turns that has to still be surprising. And that's good writing. Guy, but you know, character? Well, I guess it means you can't you can't root for

Alex Ferrari 27:03
structure.

Daniel Calvisi 27:04
you root for character. Yeah, yeah. But I if I really was pressed, I would say structure because that would mean an intriguing, surprising story that's compelling. You know, God,

Alex Ferrari 27:16
probably feel that I would probably feel that they're both without the structure. You you. I mean, can you have a movie with great characters and very loose loosey goosey structure and still be successful?

Daniel Calvisi 27:28
Yeah, I think you could, you know, if if we want to turn the page if we if we just really want to follow these characters. I mean, Paul fiction's a good example, Pulp Fiction. If you really want it to get nitty gritty, you could probably cut 10 to 20 minutes from it, you know, and still have the same story. It's definitely an hour or two or film that was made by a director who loved his dialogue and loved his characters and was willing to, to spend time with them, you know, just sit and hang out with them. But the editor in me and the script analyst, and he would like to cut time from that and pretty much cut time from almost every Tarantino film.

Alex Ferrari 28:11
Yes, he does. He does talk a bit sometimes

Daniel Calvisi 28:13
he does enjoy, you know, his his dialogue and storytelling a little bit too much. It's sometimes you know,

Alex Ferrari 28:21
I would I would I would agree with you as a critique of Tarantino if there's anything sometimes he just goes a little too far. And I think he's gotten worse over the years, like Hateful Eight. I thought he really let that go a little too much. In my opinion, but but he's still I mean, he's a once in a generation kind of filmmaker.

Daniel Calvisi 28:38
Yeah, yeah, he's still absolutely unique and and you're not gonna see anyone who's like him. You know, I didn't see Hateful Eight I was to the point where I'm to the point where I almost feel like I don't want to be tricked by him anymore into watching, you know, ridiculously long dialogue scenes and overly violent scenes. You know, I just I think he he almost is gleeful and his violence and it goes past. Like what it really needs to be you know, but he's got millions of fans and they love them. So

Alex Ferrari 29:15
yeah, and I'm looking forward to seeing his his Chuck Manson film. That should be interesting.

Daniel Calvisi 29:20
Yeah. Wow. That's interesting. So I say I will say one thing about Tarantino, which is a good exam, which is a good lesson to screenwriters is he he usually makes movies about movies or straight genre films that don't necessarily give us a lot of insight into the human condition. And that's my main problem with his him is I don't really know what he cares about in the world. You know, I don't really know who Quentin Tarantino is. I don't really get universal themes from him, other than making you You know, like, let's say the Kill Bill movies for example, I really enjoy the Kill Bill movies and they're really cool kung fu operas, you know. But I'm not taking away much about the human condition. I'm not really that invested beyond watching a cool revenge story.

Alex Ferrari 30:19
We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show. But I think you know, I think that Tarantino in this is just my humble opinion, I think Aaron Tinos point of view is that he his movies are a complete reflection of who he is, which is that video store guy who loves movies and thinks he thinks of cinema as a religion. And he's not really interested in delving into the human condition. He's more interested in delving into cinema, and his his pure of a cinema, cinematic director as I've ever seen in the history of cinema. Because he you're right, he does all his films, you know, after you watch Django Unchained, there's really not a lot to discuss a little bit maybe about the human condition, but generally, you know, Kill Bill, Hateful Eight, these are all cinematic operas. Yeah, about cinema, or about the making of cinema. So I think that's Are

Daniel Calvisi 31:19
you say, I mean, are you saying, not in a bad way that he's a shallow person who only cares about movies? Because that's probably accurate, right?

Alex Ferrari 31:26
I mean, no, I think, look, I think his entire world revolves around cinema. I mean, everything in his life his cinema has been for since he was a child. And so ever since I've definitely since he was in Tibet, in that video store. Me being a video store clerk for four years, I feel him. I understand. I understand that completely. But I think that that is his religion, that honestly cinema is his religion, and whether it's shallow or not, it's his point of view. And it's such a unique point of view that there is literally no one else out there on the planet on planet Earth, that has Tarantino's perspective on anything. So whether it's shallow or not, that's that's opinion, but that he really lives for cinema completely. He will die with celluloid, wrapped around him. But that's but that's who he is. And that's what he wants to me. He owns the Beverly here, theater that only shows 35 millimeter here in LA he has an insane 35 millimeter print collection. Like who has. I mean, I know Scorsese does, but you know, but like, who has the collection, like his collection will be on archive? Because there's movies that he has, uh, nobody else has. I remember listen to a story that it was a or I forget who it was. I think it was from Wu Tang. When he was scoring Kill Bill told them. Oh, man, I got this kung fu movie. I just got it on VHS is super rare. He's like, Yeah, that's nice. I got the 35 print. And he's like, whoa, okay, so I'm on a different playing field. But that's who he is, I think that think about

Daniel Calvisi 33:11
and this is I know, this is we're getting off in it. No, no, no, no, it's

Alex Ferrari 33:14
Coco. Coco.

Daniel Calvisi 33:15
What if you had a painter who only painted referential works to other painters? At one point, wouldn't you want to say well, what's what's your what is it about you that you want to put into these paintings? Or what are you saying, really about the world? I agree with that not matter because there's already a million other painters that are doing that? Well,

Alex Ferrari 33:40
there's a difference between painting and cinema cinema has so many more elements involved with just painting. So if I had a painter that, I mean, if you had a painter that would just kept rehashing any Hall on any nanny Hall on Warhol and Basquiat and Van Gogh, and all these guys, and just kept putting his that wouldn't be as interesting. It might be for a little bit, it wouldn't be that interesting. But the wealth of cinema that there is and the the masters of different masters of art, that you need to be master of the different kinds of art forms that you have to be a master of to be a filmmaker is so so vast and deep that for someone like him, he could continue to make movies forever, and never get boring because of that, that debt and then he also has that knowledge. I mean, he has an encyclopedic knowledge of every movie he's ever seen it

Daniel Calvisi 34:33
Okay, well, here's okay. Then here's my conclusion. Yes. I want to see him do other genres. I want to see him do a character drama. I want to see a comedy. I'd love to see romantic comedy, you know,

Alex Ferrari 34:46
can you imagine?

Daniel Calvisi 34:48
If he truly is a student of all cinema, not just action films, thrillers, exploitation films, you know, I want to see him go on to try some really different things, you know, I would think that would be really fascinating.

Alex Ferrari 35:02
I would agree with you. And I think he has kind of, he has stuck to a little bit of of same genre films and but he has in recent years kind of moved on to me he did the Western, he loved the Western so much that he did Hateful Eight. And you can argue Django obviously is a form of Western but more blaxploitation. So he is going to different genres within the genre world within his likes and dislikes. I'm really curious to see what he does with the Manson murders like that is insane. I can't I mean, and he wants Brad Pitt to pay Manson. You know, so I'm really curious to see where he goes. But that's the thing that how many filmmakers, can you say I'm curious to see what he does next? There's very few filmmakers out there like that, in today's world, and he's one of those guys. So I'm glad that we've gone on a complete Tarantino tangent. But I think it's

Daniel Calvisi 35:59
I would say to bring it back to screenwriting. A good thing that he does is he does focus mostly on genre films, you know, yes. The thriller to action, Kung Fu westerns, exploitation, at least for exploitation, at least for his last like, you know, three or four films. And for a screenwriter, if you're looking to break in by selling spec screenplays, it's good to focus on genre, you know, you're the thriller guy, you're the horror guy, you're the romantic comedy, woman, you know, whoever, whatever your genre is, write five or six scripts in that genre. And maybe by the time you get to the fourth or fifth, you have something that's really, really ready for submission, and could really establish you and get your foot in the door, you know, so you

Alex Ferrari 36:46
do suggest that screenwriters stick within a genre at the beginning. So they could because if you got a and I know, that's, that's like, the common mistake a lot of screenwriters make is in there. They write five screenplays, but they're a comedy, a drama, horror thriller to show range. And that's wonderful, but that's very difficult for an agent to sell.

Daniel Calvisi 37:04
Yeah, yeah. Yeah, definitely. I would say, right, you know, be willing to write different genres to find yours that you're best at, you know, but if you're, if you come out of the box, and like you love horror, that's your passion. And that's pretty much all that you want to write. It's okay to stick to horror, you know,

Alex Ferrari 37:26
right, and MB. And then eventually, you either get locked into that horror, or you move into something else, but at least you're in the picture. You're in, you're in the business at this point, you're making a living. And then if you want to go off and make something else, you can go off and make something else later, but like, you know, Sorkin and, and all these big screenwriters that, you know, they were in one form, but then they started to branch out into, you know, like Charlie Kaufman, for God's sakes. Did you ever read? I mean, I'm sure you've studied Charlie's work, right?

Daniel Calvisi 37:56
Oh, yeah. Yeah, I've definitely seen his films. And I'm trying to think if I read any of his scripts, the the beast casually I didn't read any on the job. But I did. You know, I have read them.

Alex Ferrari 38:07
He's, he's pretty amazing. He's a pretty, pretty amazing screenwriter. Now, what is the difference between protect a protagonist in a film a feature film versus a television pilot?

Daniel Calvisi 38:20
Hmm, well, a feature film, the big difference between a feature film and a TV show is that closed ending that a feature film has a closed ending. So it's that it's that beginning, middle and end, and it does end. And it's a satisfying story unto itself. Whereas a TV pilot has to have some kind of open ending, some kind of cliffhanger that makes you want to come back for more, you know, as far as the main character goes, I would say probably the, the TV main character has more emotional baggage, which may not be, we may not and probably shouldn't see all of it in the pilot. So there's still stuff left to come that you can explore in the rest of season one, and then season 234, etc. So there's going to be more complexity and emotional baggage that will come out over time. I would say a nice sense of mystery also about your main character really, really helps. You know, even if there's something that you know, like, let's say in scandal, we know that she had a lie. We know that she had a an affair with the President, the United States, he actually says that he's still in love with her. But we don't know the particulars. We don't know Well, how did they meet? You know? How far did their relationship go? Where are they at at this point? Did they break up at some point? Does the wife actually know? Does anyone else know? So we're just hinting at that. And that's a pretty fascinating thing to find out. Okay. Well, she had an affair with the president United States. He's still in love with her. Wow, I really want to tune in to episode two and see see what this is all about. And then in season one they do explore when she was an intern at the White House and, or a new new hire, and you know how they actually develop their relationship? So yeah, so there's kind of more of a sense of mystery more to explore about them. That makes us curious about them. But it doesn't give us everything.

Alex Ferrari 40:26
So then would you say, like, one of my favorite television shows of all time is Breaking Bad, which on paper is the worst pitch ever? For a television show?

Daniel Calvisi 40:37
It's the best long term pitch long term pitch by Mr. Chips to Scarface, which Okay, over time, yeah, this is going to be a massive character arc.

Alex Ferrari 40:46
Right. So So can you kind of break down Walter White and how that because that pilot, honestly, I was listening to Vince Gilligan, talk about it. And they said, if you just change a few things that's in release, that's at Sundance, it's probably one of the greatest independent films of all time coming out, because it's just so brilliantly done. It was so wonderfully done. Can you can you talk a little bit about that? Or do you have enough knowledge about breaking bad to discuss it a little bit?

Daniel Calvisi 41:17
Yeah, yeah, well, I break down the pile. And in my book, story, maps, TV drama, so I have a full beat sheet of that. And I mentioned it a lot. So I'm definitely well versed on Breaking Bad. So that the famous pitch was for the show was Mr. Chips to Scarface, so basic, boring guy ends up becoming this incredible drug lord, who will kill at a moment's notice, you know? And we begin with, he's a high school chemistry teacher. And one of the great things is that motivation that he has cancer, so and, and the decision to keep it from his family at first, right? And he needs money, because he has, I think he had $7,000 in the bank, and he used all of that to buy this RV, which they're going to use to cook the method. So we know he has no money. He has cancer, he needs money. He's a family man. He has a son who has, is it cerebral palsy or something? Yes, yes. So I'm sure that that costs a lot of money. So he has a credible amount of motivation. And to the outside world, he's the nicest guy in the world, and the biggest just kind of wimp nebbish Mm hmm. And you say, Wow, this guy's going to become Scarface. That's, that's a journey I want to go on. Now, it's a risk because the executive say, Well, wait, he doesn't get there for another three, four seasons. And he's not going to get fully into, you know, murder or mode until Season five or six? Well, that's a big investment, you know. So it took someone coming off of a couple of hits shows like then scale again, in order to sell that, you know, I don't know if a completely new writer who just has one pilot is going to be able to sell that pitch, but it's still a great pitch, you know?

Alex Ferrari 43:14
Right. Right. And it's, it took it took a brave company, it took a great studio to do it, it took a very and it took them a while to find the audience. It took them a little bit, it took them a couple seasons before it started to pick up. So I didn't pick I didn't grab on to it to probably runs season four. Season Four is when I first like I'd heard about him, like let me just sit down and start watching and I binged it. And I actually got all the way to like half of season five, the last season left. And so I watched the last five or six episodes like everybody else did, but I binged everything up until that it was such an amazing script. And it says something to study, because it's such a remarkable footnote in, in television history, I think.

Daniel Calvisi 43:58
Yeah, yeah. For me, it was just the show that came on. It was either before or after, I think was after madman. Excuse me, because I was such a huge madman fan. It was Oh, what's this show? And I just started watching it and got sucked into it, you know,

Alex Ferrari 44:15
and it doesn't work without Cranston. I mean, he just was amazing in that character. Now what I'm

Daniel Calvisi 44:23
right there, the casting, excuse me. One second. Excuse me. The casting was perfect because they cast it a guy who was previously known for playing a dorky dad. Yes. Yes. So we can't imagine him becoming this heartless murderer, you know, right. That was the genius of the casting.

Alex Ferrari 44:45
They actually fit they actually said that Malcolm in the Middle was the I think it was the prequel to Breaking Bad and then that Breaking Bad was a bad dream. That he wakes up and he's like, what? I thought it was amazing. pin or something like that, and they actually shot it, they actually shot that scene like that, that Bob Newhart. It was all through the whole, the whole, the whole series was a dream. And he wakes up in bed with his old life from Malcolm in the Middle. Like I had this dream, I was a drug kingpin, and I killed people. He's like, just go back to sleep. Now, can you tell me a little bit about story maps and what you're doing with story maps?

Daniel Calvisi 45:24
Well, story maps is my structural method that I've written a number of books about. And a story map itself is a really powerful outlining tool that breaks down your narrative into its most crucial basic dramatic elements. And then the, the four to six main story engines. And the 10 to 15 major story beats those signpost beats in your plot. And you can use the story map to construct a new story, a new screenplay, TV, pilot, or even even a novel or short story. And you can use it to deconstruct an existing narrative like, you know, your favorite movie or a bunch of movies from your genre of choice to see how they were done by those professionals, or a bunch of TV pilots to help you learn how to write a TV pilot. The great thing that I always suggest that people say, okay, so structure is so important form is so important. Again, it's formula form, not formula doesn't dictate your choices. It just gives you a shape and a form to put your choices into that's based on years and years of successful structure of films and TV. Excuse me. Wow, okay, sorry about that yours. And so you can not only deconstruct your favorite films and stuff, but you can use them as structural templates. So let's say you want to write a crime John crime drama pilot, and you want your main character is going to be a guy from quote, the normal world, you can use the Breaking Bad pilot as your structural template. So you start with breaking it down into a story map, or you get my book story maps, TV drama, the structure of the one hour television pilot, and you look at that beachy for Breaking Bad. And you use that as a template to write your own script, at least the first draft, and then you can deviate from that as your story demands that allows, you know, so such a starting point, it's a great starting point. Yeah,

Alex Ferrari 47:37
I'm a big I'm a big, a big proponent of, of structure, because I feel it, it's like a roadmap for you to kind of like start tossing your characters into and start moving them around. Yeah, it just gives you, you know, posts along the way as your journey makes life a little easier.

Daniel Calvisi 47:53
Yeah, and being and having come from the world of being a reader on the job for for studios and production companies and, and, you know, professional companies, I was looking for those structural signposts, you know, I was looking for an act one that was around 30 pages now, a lot of act ones, and exactly on 30 pages. And that's great. And I would give them a standing ovation for that. And that would make me feel really great. Because that was familiar, but it could end on page 29, or 28, or 31, or 32. And that would be okay, you know, as long as it was working, and in every other way. So it doesn't have to exactly be, you know, a 30 page Act One, but you want to have those story beats in there that are the classic story beats that are in 95% of movies. And the thing is that the reader is looking for that. So if you have a 47 page, act one, then that reader is going to know their red flags is going to go up and they're going to say, okay, maybe this person doesn't understand structure. Maybe they are overriding because they're in love with their, with their words, you know.

Alex Ferrari 49:07
And that's when that's when story maps or structural guy kind of helps you along the way.

Daniel Calvisi 49:13
Yeah, cuz you can look at these other examples from so many other films and you can map out your own favorite films and say, Okay, well, they had a they had an exactly 30 minute Act One. Well, there's must be something there. You know, if Christopher Nolan and Steven Spielberg and and Darren Aronofsky had an exact 30 minute Act One, and every one of them was working in a different genre, there must be something about that 30 minute or 30 Page Act One, so maybe I should stick within that structure.

Alex Ferrari 49:45
And then once you get three or four or five or 10 or 20 screenplays and you want to start playing around with structure and making a little bit more artistic that's that's your prerogative but I think you need to learn the rules before you break them.

Daniel Calvisi 49:56
Yeah, yeah. And and even in in mapping popular films and scripts, you do find little anomalies and things that are interesting. Like I just mapped lala land I gave that out as a freebie to my newsletter subscribers. And if you want to sign up for that it's on its act for screenplays calm.

Alex Ferrari 50:17
I'll put it in the show notes. Okay, cool.

Daniel Calvisi 50:21
So, I mapped out lala land and I originally had the turn the end of that one turn coming right at 30 minutes, because that that 30 minute arc is when they're at the party. And she she's marked him because she sees him in the 80s, the 80s cover band, right. And he had previously always thought he was such a serious musician, and she sees him in this cheesy 80s cover band. And he confronts her, they argue, and he says, Alright, I'll see you in the movies. And he stalks off, and that's like, exactly 30 minutes. And so I thought, Okay, well, that's the end of Act One. But I ended up changing the end of Act One to 25 minutes. And I'm trying to remember what was the moment I don't quite remember what the moment was, but it was. It was an earlier moment, which I felt really capped off at one it was them. Oh, it was the moment when she we we seek we finally realize the fruition of what she was looking at when she heard that and chanting, jazz music, piano music and she comes into the club. And we originally had to see her eyes looking off camera, you know, really in trance, and then we cut away. So now we come back 10 minutes later, and we see what she was looking at. And it's him at the piano. So it's that big moment where they already had their quote, meet cute, which was her flipping them off, you know, in the traffic

Alex Ferrari 51:49
and lovely LA traffic. Yes, yeah,

Daniel Calvisi 51:51
yeah, but, but this was really the fruition of them, the first moment of them romantically coming together. So I said, You know what, this was a 25 minute hack one, which may not sound like that big of a deal. But when 90 95% of act one's around 30 minutes to change that by five minutes, it can actually kind of be a big deal sometimes,

Alex Ferrari 52:16
depending on the story, depending on the story. So now I'm going to talk ask you a couple questions. I asked all of my, all of my guests. So what advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business?

Daniel Calvisi 52:30
Okay? Does it have to be one piece of advice, you can get two or three, go for it. Okay? Well read as many scripts as possible that you can get your hands on, you can download a lot of them online, you probably have friends that can send you the PDFs, read as many scripts as possible professional scripts, and break down or StoryMap as many films as possible, to really see how the professionals do it. You know, use those as templates. Don't just watch movies and think about them do written analysis of the movies, even do your own coverage reports, you know, do do a page or two of actual notes, commentary critique of an actual film. And maybe you want to take that professionally and become a reader, you know, but do written analysis, whether it's a beat sheet, or your own little essay about film, because it forces you to really take it apart, you know, to really think about that. Okay, where is the end of Act One? Is it 25 minutes? Or is it 30 minutes. And if you force yourself to decide on that and map it out, then you're really going to see how how these things work and really take them apart and see how they run.

Alex Ferrari 53:51
Perfect. Now, can you tell me? Can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career besides story maps? Of course.

Daniel Calvisi 54:00
Yes. Um, you know, I have to go back to Syd field screenplay, because I got that. I can't remember I think it was my senior year of high school actually. I think my mom found it or something and and that just was my the first time I even learned about feature film screenplay structure, you know, so that just really blew the doors open for me.

Alex Ferrari 54:24
Same here. When I read that book in college, I was just my mind was blown. Like what? Every movie is the same what it just it kind of blew my mind as well. What is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film business or in life?

Daniel Calvisi 54:39
Wow. Well, it's funny, I will say something that I'm learning now is I'm pursuing more the independent route with my own scripts and pilots. I'm working with friends to ideally produce my own work, you know, we're just Still in the development stage, but because it is really hard to if you only have a script to convince that studio production company, network, agency, whatever to take a chance on you, because it's just a script, you know, you don't have actors attached, you don't have financing behind you, you don't have a director attached audience, an audience built up anything an audience built up a track record. So I think I'm coming to the point where I'm just like, you know, what, got to do it yourself. You know, and I've been getting that note for the past 10 years. Even more, you know, especially with the dawn of YouTube, and all these streaming streaming services. Everyone keeps saying, do it yourself, do it yourself, you know, you, you can get your hands on a camera, that's, that's cinema quality. If an iPhone can shoot a movie, Now, anybody can shoot a movie, you know. Now, the problem with that is anybody can shoot a bad movie that's unprofessional and never sells, you know, and maybe goes to 10 film festivals, and you have to pay to travel to 10 film festivals. And before you're done, you're $20,000 in debt. But you know, let's look on the bright side. And say you're going to make a good movie, you know, that is going to go somewhere, or is just going to become your, your sizzle reel or resume to get you a good manager and a good agent and really get you moving. But I would say it's the do it yourself thing, you know, a script. A single great, awesome script should be enough. But the reality is, it's so competitive, that isn't always enough.

Alex Ferrari 56:43
I mean, the block, the blacklist is a good example of that how many amazing scripts are on the blacklist? And it's still hard?

Daniel Calvisi 56:49
Yeah, it's still hard for them to get produced, you know. But the only thing that you have, the only thing you need, the requirement you need to start is a great script. Okay. So if you're going to produce it yourself, for $10,000 and shoot it with your iPhone, you still need a great script. If you're going to sell it to Warner Brothers for $100,000, you still need a great script. You know, if you're going to attach an indie producer who has a track record, who won Sundance, you still need a great script. And that means you're going to have to spend years developing your craft, you know,

Alex Ferrari 57:26
Hmm. Well said, sir, well said. Now, what are three of your favorite films of all time?

Daniel Calvisi 57:33
Well, that's interesting, because I have, I always say, my two favorites, I can't choose which is my, I can't choose which is my number one favorite film. So I actually have three favorite films. They are Raiders of the Lost star, Goodfellas, and the Wizard of Oz

Alex Ferrari 57:52
great combo.

Daniel Calvisi 57:53
They're incredibly different films. I mean, you can't get any more different. You think, but, but they're so different. You know, I mean, they're so amazing that those are kind of my top three spots. And depending on how I'm feeling at the moment, one of them may be number one, or they may all three be number one, but yeah, got it. They're amazing.

Alex Ferrari 58:15
Now where can people find you and your work?

Daniel Calvisi 58:18
Well, you can find me at act for screenplays.com That's my homepage and that is a CT fo you are screenplays.com and you can learn about my consulting and you can get my books and you can get a lot of free advice and downloads and things like that. You can also sign up for my newsletter there, and I give out exclusive articles sometimes leads from producers, and sometimes free story maps through my newsletter. So you can learn about that. You can also learn about my story maps masterclass, which is an eight week program that begins with an eight week program where you develop a TV pilot or feature from the ground up from concept and logline straight through to a finished draft. You probably won't finish the eight weeks with a finished draft, but you'll definitely be on your way you'll probably finish with a rock solid story map, a great scene list, you know, comprehensive scene list and the first 10 to 30 pages of your screenplay. So then from there, you're armed to, to you're well on your way to creating a great script. And what's unique about a masterclass is that I bring in channels to actually give advice on your loglines and to actually do q&a conference calls with my writers to give them career advice as well. That's awesome. So let's say you're workshopping to log lines. You're not sure which one you're going to write. I'm going to give you notes. If it's a group class, your peers will give you notes and then these two industry professionals like right now I have a Former studio executive who was at the studio level, he was involved with films like Groundhog Day, great movie, Lord of the Rings, you know, so he was really top like President of Marketing at big companies like newline and MGM. And then I have a very successful screenwriter Jeffrey Radek, who is responsible for the final destination franchise. He's big in thrillers and horror. So these guys are going to give notes on concepts from my writers for my next for my next class. Awesome. So you get this feedback from these people who are executives, managers, assistants to agents, screenwriters, they've been in the business for a long time and they say you know what, this first logline sounds interesting, but this is more of a passion piece. This is not something that in the current marketplace from a newbie is really gonna go anywhere. But this second logline feels more commercial to me, although you maybe don't have all the elements worked out yet. So then you have this information, and you're going to decide whether you want to go with the first concept or the second concept. Very cool.

Alex Ferrari 1:01:06
That really helps. Well, Dan, man, thank you so much for being on the show. You've dropped a bunch of knowledge bombs on the indie film hustle tribe, so I truly appreciate your time.

Daniel Calvisi 1:01:16
Well, thank you. Thanks for having me on. My goal was to drop knowledge bombs.

Alex Ferrari 1:01:19
And you did sir.

Daniel Calvisi 1:01:22
That was achieved.

Alex Ferrari 1:01:24
I want to thank Dan for coming on and dropping those knowledge bombs on us and I hope you guys got something out of it, you know, after he's been reading just 1000s of screenplays. Over the course of his career. I think he has a decent grasp on story. And if you guys want to check out his books, just head over to the show notes at Indie film hustle.com forward slash BPS zero 27 for all the links to all of his work, and that does it for another episode. So as always, keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you soon. Thanks for listening to the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay.com That's B u ll e t e r o f s CR e n PLA y.com


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BPS 026: IFHTV – The World’s 1st Streaming Service for Screenwriters

The wait is over! This is what I’ve been working on for months. May I introduce you to IFHTV (Indie Film Hustle TV), the world’s first streaming service dedicated to screenwriters, filmmakers, creatives and content creators.

IFHTV is the natural evolution of Bulletproof Screenwriting. My mission is to help as many screenwriters on their writing path. I hope to grow the platform into a Netflix-style place for people to learn and be inspired. IFHTV has over 2000 videos and growing more every day.

IFHTV on-demand streaming content will cover:

  • Screenwriting Courses
  • Screenwriting Workshops/Seminars
  • Screenwriting Feature Films
  • Screenwriting Documentaries
  • Screenwriting Series
  • Documentary Filmmaking
  • Social Media and Marketing
  • Film History
  • Exclusive Interviews
  • Exclusive IFHTV Original Content and Shows
  • Inspirational Films as well

It will be accessible on over 1000 devices including iOS devices, Android devices, Macs, PCs, streaming media boxes such as Roku, Apple TV, Chromecast, and Nexus Player.

Take a listen to this episode to get all the low down on what I’m doing with IFHTV, including screenwriting content, films, and documentaries we’ll be launch with. Thanks for your support and I really hope you love IFHTV as much as I do.

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Alex Ferrari 0:00
Welcome to the bulletproof screenplay podcast episode number 26. All things come to those who wait. Mary Curie broadcasting from a dark windowless room in Hollywood when we really should be working on that next draft. It's the bulletproof screenplay podcast showing you the craft and business of screenwriting while teaching you how to make your screenplay bulletproof. And here's your host, Alex Ferrari.

Welcome to a special episode of The Bulletproof screenplay podcast. I am your humble host, Alex Ferrari. Now today's show is sponsored by bulletproof script coverage. Now, unlike other script coverage services, bulletproof script coverage actually focuses on the kind of project you are in the goals of the project you are. So we actually break it down by three categories micro budget, indie film, market and studio film. There's no reason to get coverage from a reader that used to reading tentpole movies when your movies going to be done for $100,000. And we want you to focus on that at bulletproof script coverage. Our readers have worked with Marvel Studios, CAA, WM E, NBC, HBO, Disney, Scott, free Warner Brothers, the blacklist and many, many more. So if you need your screenplay, or TV script covered by professional readers, head on over to cover my screenplay.com. So guys, today on the show, I have exciting news about the thing that I've been working on for months. It is called if h TV indie film hustle TV. And I wanted to thank you guys for your patience, because you guys have been hounding me on email and through messages on what the hell I've been working on. And this is one of the three big things I've been working on. But this is all by far one of the biggest of the three. Now you might be asking yourself, so what the hell is ifH? TV Alex? Isn't that like your YouTube channel or something? It is not. I've always wanted to have a place where filmmakers could kind of go learn, be inspired, learn how to be be an artist, be a successful artists learn business, learn marketing, watch, and geek out on movies, about the business all sorts of things like that. And I've never found a place like that. But so I decided to create the world's first streaming service dedicated to filmmakers, screenwriters, and content creators. Imagine a Netflix for the indie film, hustle and bulletproof screenplay tribes. And that's what you have with ifH. TV. I've been working feverishly trying to build an entire streaming platform with my team for months now and has not been easy. We've been not only creating new content for that platform, but a lot of you might think Well isn't this kind of like what you were doing with Master circle with your membership site and like, it is nothing like what we were doing with our membership site. And I'm going to talk about the master circle in a minute. But a lot of the content that is on the master circle will be included on ifH. TV, and there was a slight bit difference. I went out and started licensing shows features documentaries series, all dedicated to the craft of filmmaking, screenwriting and content creating. So just on screenwriting alone, we have probably a few 100, videos, lessons, things like that. But the categories that we have so far and it's still continuing to grow our screenwriting, cinematography, documentary filmmaking directing series, feature films that are about the film industry about acting about screenwriting about storytelling, film production, post production, my entire interview series that I do from Sundance film distribution, of course, we'll have a few shorts with all of how you did it, how we did it, archive of the podcast, social media marketing, a content creator section where there'll be movies, just dedicated to content creators, crowdfunding pre production, Film History acting, and one of my favorite carousels in the entire platform, inspirational which will be movies that will hopefully inspire you to be better artists, better human beings that will hopefully translate into you making better art for people. So let's go over what we're going to be launching with category by category so you guys can have a little taste of what we're going to be bringing you in ifH TV. In the cinematography world, we're going to have a documentary called light and shadow which is amazing. The legendary Kodak cinematography master class, the entire set, I was able to license which we'll go over How they lit Dances with Wolves Dead Poets Society, how you shoot for drama for fantasy for black and white for location lighting and for even studio lighting as well all taught by ASC DPS legends in the world of cinematography. We also partnered up with Zacuto films, and all of their insane content dedicated to cinematography cameras in deep interviews with ASC cinematographers and series as well. Now, for all you screenwriters out there, you are going to be in for a treat because I have a treasure trove of just amazing content that's going to be on ifH. TV. Just at the launch. We have the entire the dialogue show which interviews some of the biggest screenwriters in Hollywood there'll be eventually, four or five seasons of it in total, like 27 episodes of an hour, hour and a half each talking with screenwriters like Jim Uhls, friend of the show, writer fightclub David Goyer, the writer of The Dark Knight Paul Haggis, the Academy Award winning direct writer and director of crash as well as the writer of Million Dollar Baby and Casino Royale just to name a few. Jonathan Hyde sly, who is the writer of Armageddon, the rock, all of those Jerry Bruckheimer his big event films and a ton more guys. We also have interviews with Joe Osterhaus, the legendary writer of Basic Instinct, as well as the art of screenwriting and adaptation taught by Eric Roth, Robert Jacobs and Phil Alan Robinson. We have a whole series by the legendary Linda Seeger in regards to the craft of screenwriting. We also have an amazing documentary called dreams on spec, which follows screenwriters who are trying to make it in the business while being while interviewing some of the biggest screenwriters in Hollywood. We have the science of storytelling from Akuto, and a TON TON more. On the directing side, we have directors life behind the camera, which interviews, I mean, we have about four and a half hours of interviews with Martin Scorsese, James Cameron, Steven Spielberg, every big director of the current age in this series, which I bought years ago. And now we have the license to show you now, we also have a whole series on how to make money as a filmmaker, film school or no film school, how to run a successful production company, and a ton more stuff in that area as well. And one thing that's going to be really unique is we're going to have documentaries about the filmmaking process, the screenwriting process, as well as content creation. And not only documentaries, but actually Narrative Feature films that are all about the business. You know, I wanted a place where a film geek go and just immerse themselves in filmmaking in screenwriting and storytelling, I would have killed for stuff like this, I was hunting for stuff like this on laser discs, and on DVDs back in the day and on VHS back in the day, even looking for these behind the scenes of how to get in. And I have large plans for the platform. And I really am going after some big big fish, if you will, to get more and more content in addition to original content from ifH. TV, which will be my films, my courses that I'm going to be creating and when creating a lot more of those courses coming up, because we ever now just built out an entire studio dedicated to creating brand new content for ifH. TV. So get ready to see a ton more stuff coming out from indie film, hustle. And of course, for those who of you who have not seen it, this is Meg will finally be available on ifH. TV. And we will have commentary tracks, not only for myself, but we're also going to get the cast when you get Gil to come in. We're going to do some behind the scenes of how we made it. We're going to talk about a lot of that stuff. And eventually on the corner of ego and desire. We'll also be making a debut here on ifH. TV so you guys can watch it here as well. And of course, how we made it and all sorts of other stuff that we're doing. Oh, and by the way, this is going to be just like Netflix in the way that we will be available on Apple TV, on Roku, on Fire TV, on a Google Apps on the I in the iPhone App Store, as well as for your iPad, your mobile devices and of course online in the website. And of course ifH TV will be world wide. It will be available in any and every country that has access to the app store to the Android store all of those areas, as well as like I said the other platform but it will be available internationally. Now I know there's a lot of you out there who are part of the master circle and would like to know what's going to happen to the master circle. And what I wanted to do is create a better experience for you guys. So everybody who is in ifH, his master circle membership site will get a special offer for ifH. TV, which I will be emailing you guys all directly and individually in the coming weeks. So don't worry, because you guys were part of the membership site, you will be getting a beautiful deal on ifH. TV, I promise you that. Now as far as the future of the master circle, we will not be supporting it anymore, because I'm going to be putting all my energy into ifH TV, which I think will be better for everybody involved. We're taking this up a notch guys, we are definitely pushing the hustle hard on this new platform. And honestly, I think this is just an evolution of what I've been doing with indie film, hustle, and just trying to create more content and try to reach more and more people with what I'm doing here at Indie film hustle. And I think this is just a natural extension of it. And I think it's the future of where we're going to go as a platform. But don't worry, podcasts are still coming, all the content that you can expect that from indie film also will still keep coming as well. This is just going to be an extension of the world. So you will also be able to download apps for all of this. So you will have access to indie film, hustle content, not just ifH. TV, but you'll have direct links to the podcast, and the blog, easily on an app that you can download for free on the App Store. So I know what you guys are thinking right now you're thinking, oh my god, this is just so much amazing content, we have probably over six to 800, I think almost closing in on 1000 pieces of video content on the platform. And it will be growing and growing more every month. But I wanted to create not only this entire platform, but I wanted it to be affordable for filmmakers to make it so much value so much content, that there could not be any arguments about it. So we are going to launch November 1, and the price will be 1099 for 90 days. And I'm going to be extremely strict with the 90 day rule. At the end of January, it will go up to 1399. So I give you guys all plenty of time to jump in early. And if you come in at 1099, you will stay up 1099 You are grandfathered in for as long as you stay on the platform. And you will also have options to get a year pass, which will give you a free month of content. So you'll be paying for 11 months as opposed to 12 and getting a full year. So I will release the URL for this new platform in a few weeks. We're still building it out, we're still finishing it up, uploading content, getting things ready for you guys. I'm so excited. I can't even tell you how excited I am. To launch this. This is probably the biggest thing I've done with indie film hustle since I launched indie film, hustle, I am so so excited to be bringing you guys this insane platform that I really am building straight from the heart. And I want this to be of an immense amount of value to you guys on your journey and be a continuing value on your journey. So as we grow as a platform, you keep learning, you keep growing as well. And honestly, guys, I couldn't do this without you without the tribe. Without all of these amazing messages I get and all these stories I hear of what the work I'm doing, at ifH is doing and helping you guys on your journeys, as storytellers as filmmakers, as screenwriters. You inspire me every day to do what I do. And I am so grateful and humbled and honored to be able to continue being of service on your path. And thank you so much for your support guys all these years. We're only about three years old, a little bit over three years old at Indie film, hustle, and this is a huge step. And I really hope that you guys love it and support it. Because the more you guys support it, the more amazing content I can get for you guys, the more of you guys sign up, the more movies I'll be able to get the more original content I'll be able to create the more exclusive shows and filmmaking stuff and I'm going to be going back into the depths of Hollywood and trying to make deals with some of the studios to get some of their amazing libraries of documentaries feature films, classics on about filmmaking and films and just all sorts of cool stuff guys, I just I'm so excited. I am so so so excited. About this, and I really hope you guys are as excited as I am. So November 1 is when it will launch. And trust me, you will hear about it. So thank you guys for listening. Thank you for all your support. And don't forget, there are still two big announcements coming. Just huge announcements coming this is probably the the thing that's taken me the most time to do. But the other two announcements are game changers for you guys as well. So stay tuned for those that's coming in the next few weeks as well.

I love it, man. I love it. I love you guys. And thank you so much for everything. And as always keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you soon.


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BPS 025: Writing Screenplays that Actually Sell with Lucy V. Hay

Today on the show we have Lucy V. Hay from Bang2Write. Lucy is an author and script editor, living in Devon with her husband, three children, and six cats. Lucy is the associate producer of Brit Thrillers Deviation (2012)and Assassin (2015) both starring Danny Dyer.

In addition to script reading and writing her own novels, Lucy also blogs about the writing process, screenwriting, genre, careers and motivation and much more at her blog Bang2write, one of the most-hit writing sites in the UK.

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Alex Ferrari 1:27
I like to welcome to the show, Lucy. Hey, thank you so much for jumping on.

Lucy V. Hay 2:34
Well, thanks for having me. So nice to be here.

Alex Ferrari 2:37
I know it's taken us a minute to get to this point.

Lucy V. Hay 2:41
Yes, we had, I think it was six months, I think we align our schedules.

Alex Ferrari 2:47
I know our schedules are a bit hectic, but I'm so glad we finally be able to make it work. I've been wanting to get you on the show to pick your brain a little bit about about the business. But before we jump in, how did you even get started in the the film business? All right.

Lucy V. Hay 3:02
It's a it's a really kind of long and involved story.

Alex Ferrari 3:06
A short version then.

Lucy V. Hay 3:08
Okay, the short version is I did I did a degree in screenwriting for film and television. Back in the day, I was here in the UK during that course in 2000. I graduated 2003 I was a single mother back in those days, and I didn't have any child care. And I really, really wanted to be involved in screenwriting in some way. I wasn't really sure how I just knew that I wanted to be part of the industry and, and I really love the development of stories and, and just really kind of being involved in whichever way I could basically. And during the time that I was on the degree, I had to do some work experience to pass the course. And during that time, I managed to get a some work experience reading screenplays for a literary agent, and various other places as well. schemes and a lottery funding initiative and various things like that. So as it when I came out of university, I thought well, you know, maybe there is room for someone who can actually read people screenplays, and actually consult on screenplays to actually help people get better and have better opportunities and better ways of kind of breaking in because when I was reading in the spec pile for agents and for producers and for various schemes and competitions, one thing I noticed was that there were a lot of first drafts or really obvious mistakes and people weren't really doing peer review so much then it was all before social media. It was all before blogs and things like that. So I thought well, you know, maybe there's a room for somebody like me who could be some sort of a visor. And then I can be involved in, in screenwriting, and with screen writers. And the it was just it took off really quickly. And I thought I would be dealing predominantly with new writers, writers who were wanting to break in. And whilst that was true, I very quickly started getting clients who are much higher up the ladder. And I was reading for people who were working in television is working in movies. And before I knew I was even even had some clients who were, you know, pretty famous. I was like, wow. So I figured I must be doing something. All right. And I think one of the the key elements for that for kind of making the splash that I did was probably the blog. I was one of the first people to kind of get into screenwriting. As a blogger, although there were lots of screenwriting blogs, from screenwriters point of view, there weren't so many about the actual craft of screenwriting. In those days, especially in the UK, there was things like John August's blog, and around the same time go into the story started. And various other website or wordplay, ones like that, but they were all very, very American. And I saw that there was this, this kind of gap in the market, if you like for UK, screenwriting advice, specifically as like a teaching blog. So yeah, I dived in with both feet and, and so like 1015 years later, here we go.

Alex Ferrari 6:36
Awesome. Now, what are some of the biggest mistakes you see in first time filmmaker or first time screenwriters?

Lucy V. Hay 6:44
Oh, God, I think probably the first thing would be that they don't they have an idea or they see a trailer in their head, or they see some like imagery in their head, or maybe just a character or something like that. And they don't really know what the story is, they don't know what it's about. They don't know how plotting works. They're thinking probably really deeply thematically, but they're not necessarily thinking about the actual blow by blows of the plots. And so they get themselves all tied up in knots as to what the story is really about versus what's literally happening. And so they end up writing these crazy, crazy drafts where you can read your whole, like 100 and page 120 Page screenplay and you still have no clue what what's happened. It's just like an explosion. It's like a stream of consciousness all over. And that's probably what everyone does. I think at some point, I know I did that literally everyone, when they start out, whether they're writing a screenplay, or a short story, or a novel or whatever, they can't really get their thoughts in order. They know that there's bits and pieces that they want to want to say. And maybe they've got a really interesting voice or a really interesting idea or an interesting character, but they just can't make it all gel together. So I think that's probably the first kind of most obvious thing that happens. Another thing that happens is people's concepts and loglines, just really half baked, you know, they either don't make sense, or they're really derivative, or they're just boring. And you kind of go what, what the hell is that? I don't know what that is. And that usually happens after they've come to the realization that Oh, actually, I can't just write the stream of consciousness, I've got to try and kind of organize it but then they might over organize it organize it in such a way that it's still not recognizable, or as come out of the left field, or is to say me, too, what's gone before. Other things that are really obvious is dialogue, there's far too much dialogue in the average spec screenplay. Even if it's good, they probably still don't need a third or even half as much as what the got. So they forget that it's a visual medium, you know, they've fallen, a lot of writers fall in love with dialogue. And some of them are really good at dialogue, but they forget the visuals. Alternatively, maybe they go too far the other way. And it's really nice and visual. But again, it's not coherent. You just you don't know what's really happening. And so you actually need more dialogue. But that doesn't happen very often. It's nearly always too much dialogue, I find which I think's really interesting.

Others other things, structure is a big issue. People just don't know how structure works, because they haven't done enough research into what structure means to them. Lots of people say, Oh, well, you only need a beginning, middle and end and not necessarily in that order, which is what bank to write believes as well. But you also do need to know how other people have structured things before you and that doesn't mean you have to use pictograms and worksheets and all that kind of stuff. But it does mean that if you're movie is like Blade Runner is like alien or is like, whatever. You do need to know how those stories were structured and why they were so interesting to you, and why you want to do something in that kind of vein. Because if you don't know how they crafted their stuff, then how are you going to know how to craft your own stuff. So it doesn't really matter how you structure, it doesn't matter if you use save the cat doesn't matter if you use three, three acts, or the mini movie method or the 22 steps, use whatever you like, no one cares. But it needs some sort of structure. And very often things go wrong in structure, like a very classic one would be starting too early. So you end up with a really lumpy kind of first act in particular. Or it starts really well but then it has a massive dick in the middle and, or you end up running on the spot or something like that, or resolutions, you know, the endings can be too rushed, and it's like, oh, it's all over what the hell just happened? That kind of thing. So those are the kind of classic structural issues. And then finally, I would say the kind of the next obvious one would be characterization. People don't know what good characterization is. And what what is good characterization. Well, I mean, how long is a piece of string, but the two things that you need for good characterization is a role function, what they're doing in the story, and then also their motivation, which is why they're doing things you know, why? What do they want in the story? Very often writers will understand motivation, but they won't necessarily understand role function. Role function of things like protagonist and antagonist they usually get those Okay? protagonist, usually, these days antagonist can be a little bit more up in the air but usually most of them can get those two main ones it's usually the secondary characters where things go wrong, the mentors the jobs words, the love interests, you know, all those kinds of secondary supporting kind of characters will go wrong, they'll be boring or they'll or they will have over thought them some somehow I mean, very often people get really angry about love interest so as being female for instance, but rather than actually changing the love interest to a male and making it a gay love story, for example, which might make it a bit more fresh. They will turn it into like I read a lot of rom coms that have no romancing. Like

why is there no romance in his rom com which sounds insane and that's because it is because we need romance in a rom com and if you don't like the fact that certain characters or love interests for instance, for instance, then don't write rom com you know, something else, but people try to reinvent the wheel a lot and things get out of control very quickly. I mean, even an auntie rom com is still got romancin You know, it's just that the you know, an xe rom com is like a sad rom com You know, it's funny, but it's tragic because it don't end up together you know, something like 500 days of summer that was a great Auntie rom com something like Crazy Stupid Love was an auntie rom com, you know, it's all about the relationships where things go wrong, and maybe you won't recover from them. But you learned something and so it's still hopeful and it's still useful in it's not a tragedy tragedy, where everything is ruined. So but they don't know the difference between a rom com with no romance and an auntie rom com and, and I think what I'm really talking to you about now is the fact that writers don't do enough research, they don't do enough research into the craft, and they don't do enough research into their art. You know, if you want to write a rom com, you should be watching as many rom coms as possible. If you want to write a horror, you should be reading, reading and watching as much horror as you can. You should be reading novels in that genre, you should be immersing yourself in your craft, and also in the in the styles that you want to do. It's it's it sounds obvious, and that's because it is but unfortunately, a lot of writers don't really get that they say I haven't got enough time. I haven't got enough time. I haven't got enough time to write. So I want to write every night and it's like, well, you'd actually get your writing done a lot quicker. If you immerse yourself in in the situation. That's what pro writers do. They immerse themselves in a story. And in that story world.

Alex Ferrari 14:33
What so what you're telling me is that my idea of to bring back dinosaurs and have them in a park is probably not going to fly nowadays.

Lucy V. Hay 14:42
Well, I mean, you could give it a try. I think someone might have got there before you. I mean, certainly. I mean, everybody everybody loves dinosaurs. You know, literally every

Alex Ferrari 14:52
I'm joking. I'm joking.

Lucy V. Hay 14:55
If you actually could find some sort of twist on that dinosaur story, then By all means, you know, I mean, we were talking there about genre busting, you know, if you can bring us something that we've seen before, that's pre sold like dinosaurs, like vampires like werewolves like whatever. Zombies, yeah, if you can actually bring us something that we've never seen before, and make somebody like me, a script reader or a script editor go, Oh, God, why haven't I seen this before? Then they're going to pass it up the chain to their boss and say, you know, I've, you'll never guess what I've seen, you know, a new take on the vampire myth. And they'll be like, You're joking. It's like, no, I really have here you go. And that's what gets everybody excited is this notion of genre busting, and bringing something that we've never seen before. I mean, we're talking about the same but different, and most writers do get that after a while, but they probably concentrate too much on the same Enos and not enough on the difference.

Alex Ferrari 15:52
Now what to say is you've read so many scripts, what do script writers look for, in a screenplay, specifically, like these the little the little giveaways and like, Oh, this is this is I'm gonna I'm gonna I'm gonna pass this and, and take it up. Take it up the ladder.

Lucy V. Hay 16:07
Aha, so a script reader, what does this? Yeah. We're looking for something that looks like a script in the first instance, you know, you wouldn't believe some of the

Alex Ferrari 16:20
stuff written in word not so much.

Lucy V. Hay 16:22
Oh, no, thank you, tech. nerd, I think so something that looks like a script, in the first instance, is always a plus. We have this thing now. I mean, everybody knows about the first 10 pages and how it's got to, you know, do what it's, you know, set it set up the story and introduce the characters and, and make us understand what, where it's going in the first 10 pages, even if that's a lie. But in real terms, because there's so many submissions, now, you need to really start on page one with a bang, you really, really need to grab someone massively on page one, now you need a great visual, you know, if you've got dialogue on page one, then it needs to be a really cool line. You know, it can't be something really boring. And the average first page of the screenplay is really dull. It's somebody literally walking into the frame and talking about something. And doing Oh, this is a big introduction scene of some kind. And it's like, that's not interesting. You know, when we want to start with something really intriguing, or shocking, or devastating, or interesting, something that makes me go, I mean, I read screenplays all day for God's sakes. And yet, I hardly ever sit up and go, ooh, on page one, because I'm used to things being, you know, not necessarily grabbing me. But that very first image, that opening image has got to really grab me. I mean, I read one yesterday that I was blown away by it was awesome. It was the first thing, you know, the first thing I did, after reading it was call up my all my friends and say, you'll never guess what I read a brilliant page one. And they'd be like, No way. Because script readers don't read brilliant page ones very often. So that's, that's part of part of it. Another thing that we're looking for is confidence. You won't believe how kind of apologetic a lot of writers write, you know, you've got to really own the page, I suppose. That's what people mean, when they talk about voice, this notion of confidence, and actually opening the page and actually saying, you know, this is my script, you know, we don't want all these vanilla screenplays that are really just really bland, we want something that's going to grab us. Again, we're talking about this notion of being really hooked. So not just imagery, but the way you write it as well, you know, a sense of confidence, a sense of voice. Another thing that we want as well is an intriguing character of some kind, something that we haven't seen before. Because although sometimes storylines can feel a bit like they're, you know, like we've seen them before. I'm so bored of seeing the same characters over and over again, and there'll be the same characters in different genres and different styles you know, people are going to think a bit more outside the box. And I'm pleased to say that we're actually seeing a lot more diversity now. You know, there was a point where it was all male leads they're all white all the time. And of course there are some great films and TV shows with with white male leads. It would be absurd to say that there there aren't there are some really, really good ones. But does it have to be that guy every time every time you know what more can you bring to this character there's a situation by making it a woman by making it a person with a disability by making it somebody who's gay or straight or transgender. And just, you know, just mixing it up a bit. And, and just a great sense of structure. It's so rare to find a well structured screenplay. It's so rare. So every time that happens, and it makes, it makes it so easy to read, and when something's an easy read, you read it fast, and you pass it on fast. If you have to read it, and it takes a long time, your your interest is going to wane, you're going to forget, you're going to put it to one side, you're going to forget to call your boss or your or your collaborator or whatever. Whereas if you read it and go, Wow, amazing. You're going to be picking up the phone, you're going to be writing an email, you're going to be writing a tweet going, oh my god, I just read something amazing, you know, and all that kind of stuff. And that creates buzz, and that makes you far more likely as a writer to get into someone onto someone's radar.

Alex Ferrari 20:46
Very good. That's an excellent answer, by the way. Excellent answer. Now, what are some tips on selling dramas in today's marketplace, which they are just so difficult, but I'd love to hear some ideas of yours?

Lucy V. Hay 21:02
Well, of course, I wrote a whole book on this called Writing and selling drama screenplays. But basically the potted version of rights of saying you know how to sell a drama, because you're absolutely right. Drama is a dirty word in the current marketplace. You know, there's a lot of a lot of producers out there selling their dramas and thrillers, for example, when they're not really thrillers at all, although some of them do a very good job. I mean, I saw one of my case studies, and the book is called hours. And it's by the writer of a rival Eric Kaiser. And it was his directorial debut. And was a fantastic drama. It wasn't about fatherhood, it was about responsibility. It was it was just beautiful. It was really, really good. And it was the last job that's the late Paul Walker from Fast and Furious did

Alex Ferrari 21:58
the movie Yes. Yeah, it

Lucy V. Hay 22:01
was a great it was a great film, I loved it. But they did sell it as a thriller, the distributor, they had him on the on the front cover looking all rugged and stressed was going, you know, like it was and they had him on the back. And he had any carrying a gun and all that kind of stuff. It does look like a thriller. So some some distributors, and some producers as well will sell dramas as thrillers, especially if it's got a very compelling kind of survival elements in it like ours, because it was set in the New Orleans hurricanes. So if you've got some sort of hook like survival situation, then maybe you could do that as a thriller. But that is a bit of a cheat, really. But but it can work. Having said that, you can tell it is really good. I'll sell it as a comedy, as well, because there was a movie about cancer called step mom said starring Susan Sarandon and Julia Roberts, beautiful story about an ex wife who has to leave the care of her children, with her with the new wife's husband. She's dying of cancer, the ex wife and she has to leave her young children with Julia Roberts, the new wife and their father, and it's all about the two women getting to know one another. And actually getting over resentment, and, and, and the unfairness of the situation because of course, she doesn't want to die and all this kind of stuff. And it was it was heartbreaking and beautiful, really, really well done. But they sold it as a comedy. And although there were bits that were funny, because it was very much from the tragic element of you know, if you don't laugh, you cry. It wasn't a comedy. It was a drama. But the distributor sold it as a comedy. I remember the trailer and see. Yeah, and I don't think they even mentioned cancer in the trailer.

Alex Ferrari 23:53
They do. Of course, who's gonna watch that movie? It was

Lucy V. Hay 23:57
exactly so but it was a beautiful film I saw on Yeah, sores on television by accident, and I was weeping buckets. It was so good, brilliant performances. So yeah, so thriller or comedy, you know, trying to give it that kind of sense. That can work again with this notion of issues as well things like cancer, things like teenage pregnancy with Juno, you know, you can you can give that as a hook, you know, using issues as a hook to sell them can work. That said, when it comes to drama, generally, you're not going to sell a drama in the classic sense, like you would sell a genre piece not in not in the in the current marketplace. So basically, what happens is you're not selling stuff in terms of in terms of actually, you know, getting a check and going in and you know, saying jaws in space and getting them to do a blank check to you and all that kind of stuff like you know, like everybody wants but basically what you're doing is you're writing The Best Drama that you can think of the best devastating one both best whimsical one, best survivalist one, whatever that is, and your recruiter, and it's kind of like a recruitment drive, you're kind of getting people on board with you, you kind of essentially call yourself the writer producer, if you like or, and you're recruiting everybody onto your journey and making them kind of get on board with you and help you make this film. I mean, I was reading about or forgotten his name. The guy who did he was the producer of Dallas Buyers Club. And we're gonna be talking about Yes, and it's just completely gone out of my head, which is, which is really annoying.

Alex Ferrari 25:46
That's a straight drama, that is a straight drama. Exactly, exactly.

Lucy V. Hay 25:49
But of course, it's about issues. And it's it's a it was a very kind of preside prescient kind of issue because of course, it introduced to the mainstream, the notion of transgender characters. And it was it was something that was quite dark, and also had some some moments of of light and shade, and made a massive cultural impact in the same way that probably something like Philadelphia did with Tom Hanks about 20 years before. And interestingly, around the same time that Philadelphia was made and was getting all its Oscars with Denzel Washington and Tom Hanks, Dallas Buyers Club was doing the rounds, it was literally in development for about 20 to 23 years. Originally, apparently, Woody Harrelson was going to play Matthew McConaughey is part which you can see can't use. And it just it just stayed in development hell for a long, long, long, long, long time, because nobody wanted to make that film. And anyway, the producer Kassian yields that his name Catherine your last finance multiple times to to make Dallas Buyers Club. Because basically, it was his pet project. It was his passion project. He really, really wants to make this movie, because he thought it was important. And he was absolutely right. And eventually, when he lost it for the third time, he just got out his Rolodex or his filofax, or however he does it and just call people up begging them for money. And he eventually found someone who said who he said, Look, mate, I gave you your start in filmmaking. So now give me the money to make this film. And the guy said, Oh, no, no, no, no, I don't, I don't think I don't want to make that film about about AIDS and stuff, it's too much of a downer. I don't want to do it. I don't want to do it. And he goes, Look, it's really important. We're going to win all the awards, it's going to make a massive cultural impact. I guarantee it, you know, Cassie newels had that much belief. And the guy said, You know what, I'm going to give you the money. But when you go to the Oscar ceremony, you've got to take me with you. The rest is history they want all those Oscars and casinos took took his mate to the Oscars within, you know, and it's, it's like, wow, you know, you've got to have that kind of belief, when you're making a drama, you have to understand that, unless you're willing to get behind it 100% like that, then it's probably not worth writing a drama, you probably want to be doing something else, you know, you probably want to write a horror or something that you can sell a lot easier. Because if you think that writing a drama and selling it just because it's lower budget than average is going to make it easier. It's not, it's still like 30 million times harder to make a drama than a genre piece. So that's always really worth thinking about. Whenever my writers come to me and say, I really want to do a drummer, I say, Well, how are you going to do this? And if they look at me blankly, I go, Oh, dear. Because you don't know the half of it, you know, but it you know, sometimes they'll come to me and say, right, I'm gonna make this amazing drummer because this subject matter is really important to me. And I've got this strategy, I'm going to go I'm going to get the money from from this scheme I'm going to get the money from from these kinds of product placements and various investors and all that kind of stuff. I'm gonna take it to all the various film festivals, I'm going to win loads of awards, I'm going to make sure it gets into the Oscars. I'm going to go all out to go you know, to the nth degree with that, and I and every time somebody comes to me with that, I go fantastic. I will help you because they know what they're talking about.

Alex Ferrari 29:42
Yeah, then dramas are dramas are such a unique genre in film because they're the one that kind of like you can easily tweak it to make it a comedy or you could tweak it to make it a thriller, or at least have those elements in it. For some for selling points of view where You know, sometimes there are those stray dramas like Dallas Buyers Club, you know, I don't even remember if there was any humor, I think there had to been a joke or two in there. But you can't sell that movie, obviously, as a comedy. And the other, the other genre that gets really abused is thriller. Now, what is the definition in your opinion of a thriller? We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show.

Lucy V. Hay 30:32
Well, Thriller thrills, so you know, that's that's kind of, you know, everybody knows that because it's in the name. But, you know, what does thrilling actually mean? And and I think there's two kind of key things that are in a thriller, again, something I mean, both thriller and drama are two things I feel really passionately about which I had to because I've written a written a book on each of these terms, in terms of thrillers, in terms of the what I would call a definition of thrillers is a thriller usually has some kind of element of mystery to it, there's usually they usually have to find out some sort of answer to a question of some kind, who was behind it all, if you like. And then it could be a straight mystery as well, you know, the notion of the whodunit as well. But even if it doesn't have a mystery elements, because not every thriller has a mystery element. Because at the end of the day, a thriller just has the thrill, it can just be exciting. That's the point. So I think what is predominantly the point of thrillers is that it's about the chase of some kind, whether they're looking for like a mysterious answer to a question, or whether they're literally chasing someone. It's about the chase, literally or metaphorically.

Alex Ferrari 31:49
Now is there is there cuz in a horror films, a lot of times can either be tweaked to be thrillers as well, because, arguably, you know, I just watched it the other day, and it is thrilled, it definitely thrilled, you know, but it also scared. So, how do you play around with that definition? Or are we really just getting into the weeds?

Lucy V. Hay 32:14
Now, I think there's I think there's a considerable difference between thriller and horror, a lot of people kind of mix them up and say that, you know, that they're the same. And certainly there is some mixing within the genre, you know, thrillers can be horrifying. And horrors can be thrilling, you know? Whereas, but if you've take it right down to the foundation levels, a thriller is for the chase, and a horror report the scares, you know, horror is supposed to scare you. And so, you know, sometimes you find being scared, thrilling, and that's great. But is there a sense of mystery there? Is there a sense of Chase, they're probably not necessary. I mean, something like it, for example, is a classic horror, because yes, there are thrilling elements in it. I loved it, when he jumped out of the fridge and out of the room, and all that kind of stuff. I loved all of that, because it is thrilling to me because I enjoy being scared. But ultimately, it And arguably, most of Stephen King's work, in general is about vanquishing the beast, there is this bad thing, and you have got to stop it. That's the point of horror. And so it's about being scared. And it's about vanquishing the beast and who, who could be more both Beasley than Pennywise.

Alex Ferrari 33:31
He's horrible. Oh my God. What a beautiful. What a beautiful rendition of that novel. It did. They did such a beautiful job, and always good. I can't wait for the sequel. I can't wait for chapter two.

Lucy V. Hay 33:44
Yeah, no, I can't. I mean, I, I've enjoyed the first TV series version of it. Very awesome. But a lot of the plotting was quite wack. Really. It was just it was it was just a bit lumpy and strange. And it really kind of it was very 90s. And a lot of really weird stuff going on. It was it

Alex Ferrari 34:07
was also to the movie. So it wasn't, it wasn't an actual, you know, full blown feature films might have not taken as much time that, you know, the caliber of the writers might have been different. It could have been a whole whole sorts of reasonings. But yes, I did not see the Tim Curry version. Or if I did, I don't remember it, as well. I do remember him. But this, right, but this version, but this version, he was just eerie and scary. It was just it was beautifully done. Beautiful. And I love that that was in the 80s. That yes, because now we tap into that wonderful, the wonderful thing that's just running rampid right now over Hollywood and over movies in general is nostalgia. Can you talk a little bit about nostalgia and what is it right now because we've had nostalgia for a while. I mean, you can you can go back to examples like American Graffiti. That wasn't For the 50s, and it's always a couple of decades back, I noticed it's like two or three decades away. And then we can go back and be nostalgic about it. But the 80s has something very special about it, there is something unique about that, that that 80s And now 90s, to both, which

Lucy V. Hay 35:20
I think it's unique. I think it's just the fact that we're old now. People, people who are 35 Plus are looking back on times of the 80s in the 90s, with such fondness because everything seems simpler, then, you know, there was no social media, there was no people in your face with, you know, you could go away for the weekend. Nobody could hassle you, you know, now you've got bloody mobiles all the time.

Alex Ferrari 35:44
We weren't at war, the economy was good for the most part.

Lucy V. Hay 35:47
Not necessarily. I mean, there was a lot of stuff going on. And certainly in the UK in the 80s. There's the miners strikes, there was a massive recession, you know,

Alex Ferrari 35:57
before, before us in the US. I mean, yeah, we had the Cold War, but the Cold War in the 1980s, late 80s and 90s, were pretty much an economic boom for us. Yeah, you know, there was there were, you know, and we weren't at a war until the 90s with the Desert Storm, but it wasn't like an ongoing war constantly. And it's just a much more complex time now, without question.

Lucy V. Hay 36:21
I'm not sure it is actually, I think I think there's always been crazier, you know, crazy things going on in the world. I think we just hear about them more now. kinds of stuff going on in the 90s that we never heard about at the time, you know, the Taliban taking, you know, the stronghold and stopping all the women going to work and you know, the the Chechnya and rebels and the destruction of the USSR and Yugoslavia was gone. And

Alex Ferrari 36:49
I think we were ignorant back then. And that just we didn't get the information as much. It's just now we're overloaded with it.

Lucy V. Hay 36:56
Yeah, I think so. I mean, you know, the the genocides that are happening in places like Rwanda, for example. It just every bit as bad as the things that ISIS are doing, and Yeah, apparently, this is this is these are the worst times that we've ever lived in. Actually, I think we've always lived in terrible times. And I think we've always lived in wonderful times. I think it depends where you are. And and I think we're looking back with nostalgia for the 80s and 90s. Because we're looking through rose tinted spectacles. Now, I loved my, you know, being a child or being a teenager, and all those kinds of things. But I'm not, I'm not denying the fact that I had problems and the world had problems at the time. And I think I think that's something that a lot of people forget. And the Victorians believe that nostalgia was actually a disease, you would actually become sick, you would actually become sick for the past. And I think that's what a lot of us do now. And of course, it's easier than ever to be sick for the past, because of course, you can look on the internet and see all these great things that you used to have or used to believe you had. And, and now you think that now the present is is rubbish. And I think that's a real shame in lots of ways. Because you know, you've only got now there is no, now

Alex Ferrari 38:05
there is no you don't have tomorrow, you don't have the past, it's all Now,

Lucy V. Hay 38:10
none of us know how much time we have. And unfortunately, a lot of us wasted by worrying about things that have already gone, worrying about things that might not happen, and saying that everything about now is terrible. And, you know, everybody worries, everybody gets annoyed about stuff, you know, they got a crap boss or their teams, let them down or anything like that. But at the end of the day, you have to kind of try and keep gratitude in your heart for the fact that you're not dead.

Alex Ferrari 38:45
Very, that's a very good point. At the end of the day, like you know, what you should be grateful to you're not dead, I mean, you're here might as well enjoy it while you're here and enjoy the present moment. And that's the only thing you really have control over. And I think that's a great way to write a character. You know, because also characters a lot of times have the same neurosis that we have as human beings

Lucy V. Hay 39:11
which was going to ask you like ology, I've had I've suffered from depression before? So it can be done.

Alex Ferrari 39:20
Without question can be

Lucy V. Hay 39:22
Yeah, it's it's something you know, a lot of people get really annoyed and say, oh, you know, when you say that, you you're you're sticking the boot into people who have mental health issues. And it's like, no, I've got every sympathy for people with mental health issues. You know, life is hard. And sometimes, you know, the chemicals in your brain really screw with you. I know that just as much as anyone. But you know, we have to reframe things, the bad things, and we have to kind of hope for the best because what else is there? There is literally nothing else.

Alex Ferrari 39:53
Pretty much pretty much. Now, you also wrote another book about writing diverse characters. Can you give any Vyas in a small tips on how to write a diverse character and what is your definition of a diverse character?

Lucy V. Hay 40:06
Well, I mean, diverse character, you know, the notion of the word diversity, it just means variety. You know, for a lot of people, as soon as you say diversity, they think that you mean race, or they think that you mean, LGBT or female leads as well, we'll come under that because of course, female leads are so much less prevalent than the male leads. So those are the three that people immediately think of. And then I would also say, well, disabled characters are as well. And it's actually shocking how little diversity there is, in showing the disabled experience on screen. It's really, really surprising if you actually break it down how many disabled characters you see. Nearly always wheelchair users nearly always male, nearly always white, they nearly always want to kill themselves. It's, it's pretty sad.

Alex Ferrari 41:05
It's actually pretty sad. It is really sad. I mean, the my left foots of the world are rare. Yeah,

Lucy V. Hay 41:11
yeah. I mean, it's, it's, it's unfortunate, because, you know, one in five people in the UK and the US have a disability of some kind. And there's many, many in what they call invisible disabilities as well that people can't necessarily understand. Because they physically can't see them. But they creates, you know, massive challenges in people's lives. We also tend to see disabled people only in drama, because drama is about struggle. And we initially we you know, able bodied people immediately think oh, well, if you're disabled, then your life is bad, which of course is nonsense is absolute builds. And so it's really great to see more and more disabled characters in genre pieces. So, for example, Furiosa would be the obvious choice, that was great. She was so good. And she you know, she didn't just have a disability, she had essentially an upgrade, because Because had she not had the robot arm, then Max would have fallen from the rig and gone on to the wheels of the of the truck. And of course, she saves him. And she would never been able to grab him like that with her normal arm, she could only grab him with her robot arm. And we've seen robot arms a lot in Hollywood, which I always find really intriguing. You know, Bucky from Marvel has got a robot arm now got a vibranium arm over Canada gave to him. There's detective Spooner, played by Will Smith in the iRobot. In 2005, he had a robot arm as well. And we've seen other robot arms in general. And of course, the Mad Max universe has always placed disability at its heart, right in the very first movie across the franchise. And so I would like to see more characters, you know, in disabled story worlds, where people, you know, have issues to do with their disability, but maybe, but not necessarily the whole their whole story. I would love to see that. I would love to see more working class characters, especially from UK writers, you know, we have we have a bit of a hang up on lords and ladies and all that kind of stuff over here.

Alex Ferrari 43:22
Is there is there I heard there's a wedding going on.

Lucy V. Hay 43:27
I've no idea. Seriously. I was on a train on last week. And one of the things came over the tannoy saying, Oh, that there's going to be major disruption on the line next week next weekend. And I thought What the hell's happening next weekend? And I had to Google to find out it was the royal wedding. I was like that's how disinterested the average person is in the in the royal wedding.

Alex Ferrari 43:48
I know. They're obsessed about it here. I mean up cess it's yeah, my

Lucy V. Hay 43:53
sister lives in Australia and they're obsessed with it over there as well. And you know all my Australian friends and American friends keep saying Oh, you're ready for the for the royal wedding is like how can I be ready for the royal wedding? I'm not going everybody you know people assume that everybody in Britain is going to this wedding.

Alex Ferrari 44:11
I guess it's the because we don't have you know, kings and queens here. So I guess I guess that's the thing I guess like I don't know. I don't know why why Americans are so enthralled with it for so much. I'm not I just every time I turn the television on. I see these guys. I'm like, I know way too much my way. I know way too much about the wedding already. And I'm not even following it.

Lucy V. Hay 44:34
Yeah, I've managed I've managed to mute and unfollow pretty much everyone who likes the wedding now. So I've managed to be in blissful ignorance. So that's great.

Alex Ferrari 44:46
Now so again, one one last question want to ask you? How do you construct a proper pitch because I know that's such a difficult thing for for writers and for filmmakers in general to pitch their ideas in your in your opinion. How do you think proper pitch?

Lucy V. Hay 45:02
Well, I would say the first thing you need is to think about your logline and how you actually communicate your story and the logline. I often talk on bank to write about what I call the three C's of a good logline. So we're talking about clarity, which is obvious, it's got to be clear, but you won't believe how many log lines just aren't clear. And so you don't really know what's happening. And it's a really good thing to do is to check for clarity always and post them in places like well, the bank to rights Facebook group will have a, you know, you can write it on the wall and all the banker writers will chime in and give their feedback on the on the log lines. And that really works especially on clarity issues. Because then you've got like, very often 10 or even 15 people will chime in with their feedback. And if they're not getting it, then you know that you got a problem. There's another great website called log line it. So it's log line.it. And you can actually put your log lines up there and ask for feedback. Another one that you can do is Reddit has a great group called just called screenwriting and you can put your logline up there you do have to be fairly strong stomachs to Oh,

Alex Ferrari 46:17
yes. Anytime you go on to read it, you have to have a strong stomach.

Lucy V. Hay 46:22
Yeah, you do. So if you get upset easily to don't go on Reddit is my is my brutal advice.

Alex Ferrari 46:30
Brutal, like they're the worst?

Lucy V. Hay 46:32
Oh, absolutely. Brutal. I mean, there was this guy on Reddit the other week. I mean, he was going on and on and on at me, I had to mute him. In the end he was going on about how I didn't have done the thing in my career and how I was really sad, blah, blah, blah. I was like, Whoa, you're unleashing so much vitriol on me. I mean, for God's sake. But you know, whatever. Exam it's very sad place, no doubt. But yeah, so Reddit can be brutal. But in the banter writers Facebook group, we're always very, you know, the whole point of it is moral support. And, and peer review. So you know, by all means, put your loglines there so clarity will be the first see of the three C's character is another one. So, you know, who was in this? What do you know? What's, what is their motivation? What is what is the point of them being in, in this thing. And very often, we have the same kind of characters, even in loglines. One thing I've noticed over the years is what I call the negative adjective female. And there's always, you know, the guilt stricken young woman or the bereaved mother or something really negative, and then she has to overcome something, you know, even in a genre piece, and it's like, Oh, my God, why can't we just have a kick ass females? Five ones? Why do they all have to be guilt ridden? Why do they all have to be traumatized? Oh, my God, you know, so. So, again, flag up some really interesting things. And then the last one would be conflicts, you know, what is the situation this character finds themselves in? So we're talking, clarity, character, conflict, that's the three C's and the keys of a good logline. From there, I would say in terms of pitching especially if you're pitching in real life like a pitch fest, or or on you know, one of those, you know, Skype meetings that you can book with, with various producers and stuff. Now, the first thing I would say is, introduce yourself, you know who you are, whether you have any credits, and actually say what you're going to be pitching whether going to be pitching a feature or a short film or

Alex Ferrari 48:48
TV. Just don't just just don't just jump into it.

Lucy V. Hay 48:52
No, no, don't know don't just read out your your logline. So I've had a lot of very bad pitches over the years where they basically just kind of sit down and go and just bark a logline at you. And you're like, Whoa, what's going on? We're

Alex Ferrari 49:04
human beings remember that? Exactly. You

Lucy V. Hay 49:06
know, and it's really, really good. If you can make some sort of connection, all the best pitches I've ever heard someone sat down and said something like, Oh, hi. Oh, you know, I've read your blog. I really liked your article about blah. You know, I know you like female leads, I know you like thrillers. So I'm going to be pitching a thriller feature for you today. And I'm immediately thinking, Oh, this person's done their homework, they know what they're talking about. They know me they know of me. And it just gives you a good kind of connection at the beginning of the pitch. You don't have to say you like things if you don't. But if you have happened to have watched something that someone's made or read their articles or or something, you know, you have some sort of like prior knowledge or you've met them before maybe you know, I've had had a good pitch only the other week when a lady came in and said Oh, hi we met women in film and TV. which is a union for women who work in film and television here in the UK. So we met there before. And we had a little chat quickly about that person. Then she told me a logline. And you know, we had that kind of sense of connection and rapport. And of course, I remembered her afterwards. And that's always helped. So yeah, introduce yourself, say what you're pitching, say your logline, try and deliver it conversationally, if you can, don't just read it out, and then be available for questions about it. And before you go to the pitch, try and think of the questions that they might ask. I mean, that doesn't mean that you're necessarily going to cover all of them. But to actually have an idea of what they might say will give you confidence and confidence is what always powers a good pitch.

Alex Ferrari 50:45
Very cool. Now, can you tell me a little bit about bank to write in the good work you're doing over there?

Lucy V. Hay 50:51
Banks, right is a well, it started off as a screen writing blog only. And then over the years, it started to kind of change. And I started to talk about characterization. Generally, I started moving more into script editing, as well as script reading. So I started to I got commissioned to write those two books on writing, which in turn, got me more jobs on working on dramas and thrillers in particular. So I started to kind of really talk about genre really talk about drama, especially because I found myself talking about thriller and horror a lot. So I talk a lot on the blog about drama, a lot about thriller a lot about horror, started talking more and more about diverse characters as well, which that led into the into the third book. But also, one thing that I noticed over the years was that people, you know, writers really wanted to connect with me. And so I created the Facebook group, which is really lively, and really connected and really encouraged now. And so I've kind of bringing that back and forth between the main sites, and the social media kind of pages, and also the main bank right groups. So whatever they're talking about in the group, I will make sure that I write about on the main site, because I know that it will, you know, power the site and power the chat in the thing and increase the sense of community and just make it more cohesive. And one thing that I noticed that the bank writers really liked was things like quotes and success quotes and inspirational quotes. So I put a lot of quotes on the on the blog, and what we can learn from them as writers, I did one recently about Rocky and how he used the Patriot to say to writers, because I really think that I think it's great, because he's so motivational, and he's so spiritual. And so you've got to go out there and do it, which is something that I truly believe as well. And also in terms of other things they like, they like productivity articles, so you know how to get writing done. You know, there's a lot of writers out there who have, you know, very diminished windows in which to write I know, I do, I mean, I'm a professional writer, as well, I write novels, and blog copy. And, you know, I'm just writing stuff all the time constantly. But I still have less time than I want to write my own speculative work as well, you know, I've got, I've just been planning a project recently that, you know, I haven't even shown to my agent yet. It's just a story that I have, I feel a burning desire to, to tell. But I know that I've got a million other things to do first, so I'm going to have to do it on you know, keep it on the back burner and keep writing, you know, 1000 words here. 1000 words, they're just like the banker writers who may still have day jobs in completely unrelated things. So I write a lot about productivity, I write a lot about self belief and motivation as well, especially when the bank writers have have been through, you know, really bad rejections. Because one of the great things about banker writers on Facebook is that when somebody is rejected, they might post in their resume or be rejected. Everyone's like, ah, chin up, it'll be alright, you know, keep going, all that kind of stuff. Because only other writers really know what it's like to be rejected. You know, I can say, I mean, I got rejected, yes. And my husband came home, and I told him, I've been rejected. And he was like, Oh, no. And he went out and got me a bottle of wine, which is very nice of him. But I know, he doesn't, he's not a writer, he doesn't know what it's really like to be rejected. So the first thing I did was get on the phone to some of my writer friends, and so be rejected immediately, like, ah, Nightmare, you know, and I'll do the same for them as well. We do the same in the Facebook group as well. And so yeah, we talk about and that, you know, loads of different things to talk about novel writing more and more as well. Because of course, I'm getting really into that I love writing my novels. And it's just because it's nice to have a change as well, because I spend so long right reading screenplays, and, you know, writers stuff. It's sometimes nice just to write in a completely different medium. Although I actually think of screenplays and novels as being the same. I certainly outline them in the same way you know, with reacts and character motivations and role functions and all that kind of stuff. I do them exactly the same way. It's just novels are three times longer, and a bit more psychological as well.

Alex Ferrari 55:12
You also write nonfiction books as well. Yeah,

Lucy V. Hay 55:15
yeah. So yeah, I will write it. Yeah, I've even write those really with three acts, to be honest.

Alex Ferrari 55:24
What are the three books that you that I know off the top of my head is the one the writing drama, running? That's

Lucy V. Hay 55:30
right writing and selling drama screenplays, writing and selling thriller screenplays. And then it's writing diverse characters for fiction TV and film. So that third one actually incorporates novels as well, because of course, we're talking predominantly about characters. And of course, character, right? Whether you've got a character in a screenplay or a character in a novel is, you know, the same thing. They're just maybe presented differently. But other than that, they have the same kind of genetic makeup, very makeup.

Alex Ferrari 56:01
Now I'm going to ask you, some council a few questions. I asked all of my guests, it's going to be kind of like speed round. What advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today?

Lucy V. Hay 56:13
I would say get a website and do online networking as much as possible. Learn about what it is to do good online networking via social media and via your blog, and actually how to bring people to you. So in other words, create a platform. I think that's really really important. Looking back, I did that kind of instinctively. And and it's really led me it held me in good stead.

Alex Ferrari 56:39
Very cool. Now, can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career?

Lucy V. Hay 56:46
Oh, blimey, there's been so many. I mean, I read it, I read about 100 books a year. So it's difficult to say really? Is it fiction or nonfiction button?

Alex Ferrari 56:55
Either one, and just something that comes to your head?

Lucy V. Hay 56:59
I think for me, weirdly, the one that kind of really sticks out for me when I probably and I'd probably recommend the most to people would probably be we've world by Clive Barker, because it made such a massive impression on me as like a 13 year old school girl. I mean, it was it was filthy in so many ways. And but it wasn't Yeah, exactly. highly imaginative. And so visual, it was so massively visual I went on to read all his other ones like image occur and, and the midnight meet train and all his comic books and all this freaky weird stuff, Cabal and, and all that kind of stuff. And it and it made a massive, massive impression on me, even though I don't write fantasy, just the visuals of it. They never left me and I can even when I think of those words, I can see them in my head. So yeah, I wanted I wanted to be like him. And, and really, you know, hopefully one day I will be as good as him.

Alex Ferrari 57:59
Now, what is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film business or in life,

Lucy V. Hay 58:04
um, don't take things personally, I think especially when

Alex Ferrari 58:08
you're on Reddit.

Lucy V. Hay 58:12
I mean, sometimes people kind of get under my skin, but nine times out of 10 Now they just bounce off me, it just doesn't bother me, especially online. And certainly, because I've started to notice that when you have a massive online platform, you start to notice the the trolls and the and the negative people say exactly the same things exactly the same way. And so the more you're exposed to it, the more you become immune to it, it's kind of like a mad online kind of vaccination if you like. So it's quite rare that things really bother me online. Unfortunately, in real life, when things happen, I they really still can get me down even Now, having said that, I recover a lot quicker than I used to. It used to be that you know, something happened with my family, or something happened in my marriage or something like that. It would take me You know, I wasn't resilient. It took me ages to kind of recover from it emotionally. But now, because I've been doing lots of work on myself about that. I think I think I'm much better than I used to be definitely so yeah, don't take things too personally specially not in the industry. Because people say things for

when they just work on the basis that they don't mean it and and if they do mean it, just tell them to go you know, F themselves.

Alex Ferrari 59:35
Okay, and three of your favorite films of all time.

Lucy V. Hay 59:40
First one has to be alien left a huge, huge elbow mark. I watched it when I was about 11 That will do it. That'll do it. Yeah. And and I was really shocked and and it just totally overwhelmed me and I just couldn't stop thinking about it. And then I rewrote alien in my in my Various notebooks for about five years afterwards, just right in the same thing about a girl going into space and getting attacked by monsters. And some of them were Alright, so I've got a couple of mine notebooks and thinking, well, maybe I should do something with some of those someday. So yeah, if you ever see if you ever see a space story from me about a girl being attacked by monsters, you know why? Another one that really kind of made a massive impact on me would be Blue Valentine, the drama starring Ryan, great. Another Cassie Newell's one actually, that he produced. And it was so good. It was so true about you know, the nature of divorce and love and that, you know, the the relationship between men and women. It was it was, it was so brutal. And so true and so beautiful, and tragic. And just awful. And oh, God, it was just it was so good. I really, really loved it. So yeah, Blue Valentine would be another one. And I think the other one would be Toy Story. Because I had, I was about 14 when that movie came out. And I remember, you know, I'd never really seen 3d 3d Animation before that. I mean, I know it was around but I don't remember ever seeing it. Certainly never seen a movie with it. And I remember going to the cinema and and I remember being dragged to see it because I was gonna go to see kids movie, I'm a grown up. And, and I was like, wow, I could not believe I could not believe my eyes. I mean, actually, when you look at the first Toy Story, now it looks quite dated in glory three. But at that time, that was the best they could do. And it was I was amazed by it. And I was also amazed by the fact that it was a family movie rather than just the kids. And I just loved all the you know, like, Hey, I'm Picasso and his sight paid based on sideways, you know, the potato. And I was just I remember get I remember getting it and laughing. And I was the only one that laughed in the cinema. But it was because it was because I live in Devon in the UK, which is tiny. And there was only about 20 people in the cinnabar. But I remember thinking Why don't the grownups get it? And that's when I started to think, oh, you know, there's such a thing as a literary illusion. And there's such a thing as subtext. And there's such a thing as, as these things that are put in, you know, these in jokes for grownups and for cultured people in things that are comedy and stuff. I started to notice different different things and how you could be 14 and get a cultural reference like that. But a grown up sitting next to me didn't get it. I was like, Oh, that's interesting, different responses to different to different things. Not everybody's the same. And so, you know, all of these movies really kind of, you know, set off things in my in my head as it were, I mean, because of Blue Valentine. That's when I wanted to write the drama screenplays book, so when my publisher said to me, you know, do you want to write another writing book the first thing I thought of was Blue Valentine but I want to write something about that somehow I want to I want to kind of do you know, look into what drama is and what the minutiae of of that thing is because drama can be anything can literally be anything so how do you get down you know, at least with thriller, you know that thriller thrills and it's got to be thrilling in some way and it's got to be about Chase It's got to be about the mystery or in it so that Chase is figurative or or literal. But you know what is drama? What is it and what is it that makes me interested in it when something is so devastating as say Blue Valentine versus something like Little Miss Sunshine which is not devastating at all, but it still has pathos in it so what what is the difference? And so yeah, that that set that off and made me think yeah, what is what is this thing about emotional truth and drama?

Alex Ferrari 1:03:51
Now working people find you in your work

Lucy V. Hay 1:03:55
well, you can find me all over the all over the internet. I'm like germs I get everywhere. So if you Google my name Lucy V hay ha why you'll find me if you Google Lucy hay or find the Countess of Carlisle in Scotland. I can't win against her unfortunately, cuz she's a historical figure from the 16th century. If you Google Lucy V Hey, or find me if you Google bang to write you'll find me BA and g number two w r i t e, that's one word. And I'm going to write.com I'm Lucy V Hey author.com as well and I'm basically on all of the platforms I've already I'm on Facebook, I'm on Twitter, Pinterest, Instagram, you know, you tripping you're tripping over me I'm I'm literally everywhere.

Alex Ferrari 1:04:43
Well, I'll make sure to put those links and also links to your books in the show notes. Lucia it's been wonderful talking to you for this last hour. Thank you so much for dropping some nice knowledge bombs on on the tribe. Thank you so much.

Lucy V. Hay 1:04:56
Oh, you're welcome.

Alex Ferrari 1:04:58
Thank you, Lucy for dropping Some knowledge bombs on the tribe today. If you want to get more information about Lucy and her work at Bank to write, just head over to the show notes at Indie film hustle.com, forward slash BPS zero to five, where I'll put links to everything we spoke about in this episode. And, guys, if you haven't already, please head over to screenwriting podcast.com And leave a good review on iTunes. It is so so helpful to the show. And it helps the rankings of the show and I really want to get all this information out to as many screenwriters and filmmakers as humanly possible. So that's screenwriting podcast.com. And that does it for another episode of The Bulletproof screenplay podcast. Thank you so much for your support. I hope this episode was of service to you on your journey as a writer, as a creator and as an artist. As always, keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you soon. Thanks for listening to the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay calm that's b u ll e t e r o f s CR e n PLA y.com


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BPS 024: Screenwriting Confidential – Inside the Dark World of the Script Reader with Deepthroat

Have you ever really wanted to know what goes on behind the scenes at Hollywood’s major production companies and studios? How do new screenplays get read, approved and pass on by the script reader? What are the politics behind the scenes that make it almost impossible for a screenplay to make it through the Hollywood System?

Today on the show we have a former development executive, current script coverage reader and professional screenwriter. In order for him to be completely honest, he asked to remain anonymous so I just refer to him as Deepthroat. Yes, I know that’s a bit on the nose but we both thought the Cloak and Dagger angle would be funny.  He is a screenwriter that has worked in both television and features, a sought-after script doctor (he’s worked on some MAJOR studio films), and is a script coverage specialist.

Deepthroat spills the beans on the inner workings of some of the biggest studios in Hollywood. He discusses how an idea he presented his boss years ago was once stolen from him within the system and was turned into a successful property and shares tips on how to impress those studio readers that are the gatekeepers to getting your screenplay sold and produced.

He is one of the amazing script coverage specialists I have working with at Bulletproof Script Coverage. Deepthroat agreed to do this interview in order to help screenwriters trying to break into the business. He’s tired of seeing so many talented writers get eaten up by the system.

The information in this interview is raw, real and will give you a much clearer idea of what happens behind the scenes in Hollywood. If you enjoy this episode, please share it with as many screenwriters and filmmakers as you can. We need to get this information out there.

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Alex Ferrari 0:01
I'd like to welcome you to a very special episode of The Bulletproof screenplay podcast today because today we have an unknown script write a script reader by the name of Deep Throat, I wanted to bring in Deep Throat to give him complete an unlimited, to say whatever he is that I say that we're talking about, something like that, something like that. So English, my second language. So I wanted to have someone to come on and be free to talk about everything that goes on behind the scenes in regards to script coverage, script, reading, working with the studios development, all that kind of stuff. And deep throat is definitely that guy. So welcome to the show Deepthroat.

Deepthroat 4:10
Thank you. It's awesome to be here. The freedom that I have right now is dangerous and exciting. I love it. Yes, it is. I I am very excited to give you all the dirt on anything that you'd like.

Alex Ferrari 4:25
Oh, thank you, sir. I appreciate that. So are first of all, how did you and again all these questions yet we'll have to watch ourselves. But how did you get started in the business? As much as you can say so people can find out a little bit about your background.

Deepthroat 4:39
Okay, cool. So I back in the day, once upon a time,

Alex Ferrari 4:45
the 90s

Deepthroat 4:47
Right. I went to college for creative writing loved it. While I was there. I wrote a script that ended up winning. Actually, I wrote two scripts that place first and second and a writing competition I ended up selling those two scripts to a no name, producer, husband, wife, couple in Florida didn't have a manager didn't have an agent didn't understand what weta minimum basics were at all. So they basically wrote me a check and say goodbye and said, thank you very much. Instead of going to law school, I packed my car full of my crap, but my dog in the front seat and drove to Los Angeles, where I used that money to get an apartment and eat for like four months, because it wasn't a whole lot of money. And LA is expensive. And I managed then to intern at as many places as I could using my free time. talent agencies, production companies, you name it, that was before they you had to like claim school credits, like people were looking for free work wherever they could take it. So I got my foot in the door at a lot of these places, mostly mom and pop shops, but also like big agencies as well. So I was on the front lines of like, and they all knew that I was creative writing now. Like, I'd read a script, and I give them feedback on it, whether it was for an actor or for a producer or for Director, whatever, whatever. I was able to give them notes. And they were like, this kid actually knows what he's talking about. So let's give him more work. And eventually, that led to me going into development. And eventually that led to me producing, getting my own work out there in some capacity. And then, you know, reading for production companies and studios, giving them notes on their scripts, doing rewrites, etc. So that's kind of where we're at now. And I also got involved with a couple covered services. Can I say those names?

Alex Ferrari 6:38
I would say no, let's hold those off. Let's keep the names off. But you are working with other coverage you working with? You worked with covered services.

Deepthroat 6:44
Yes. And the goal there is to discover talent, you know what I mean? Like I have some pretty solid relationships in town now. And when I see these writers coming in, who don't who you know, living, for example, from Anchorage, Alaska, and they've got no idea what the film business is like, but they've got some writing talent, we hone that a little bit. You know, I've got one client I've worked with for a year and a half. And she's, you know, last year, she was a semifinalist in the Nichols competition, you know, what I made, and she didn't have any writing experience, her first draft looked like a transcript of a, of a show, you know, what I mean? Our training, you know, how you can download those training. Like, that's what she was going off of, and that's what she thought it was supposed to look like. And then, you know, a year and a half later, she's now you know, in the process of being wrapped, and she's, she's talking to producers about her script. And it's, it's wonderful to see. So and you also work the

Alex Ferrari 7:39
development of it? Yes, yes, I did. What's that process? Like?

Deepthroat 7:45
So I worked in? So that's a great question. So I worked at several different levels, right? Intern, Assistant, Development Coordinator, etc. And I actually, at one point, started my own production company with a couple buddies, and we were I was active CEO of that company, so and we acquired a couple scripts, and it was good. And then we all had creative differences, as as you know, can be expected in

Alex Ferrari 8:09
no way. It's very difficult to hear that everyone works. So well together here in Hollywood.

Deepthroat 8:14
Everybody does. Everybody wants to be so friendly. And just we just want to get stuff made, you know, nothing to do with ego, nothing. Yeah, and, and money has nothing to do with anything.

Alex Ferrari 8:22
Exactly. So,

Deepthroat 8:25
yeah, so the so the process was when I was an intern, it was like, here's some scripts from writers that we already represent, or movies that we've already purchased, like, here's, let me give you, why don't you write up some coverage on me in this latest draft? And we'll see where that goes. So that would be basically what it was, right? So I'd write coverages for scripts that they had already acquired, that they were currently developing, meaning like, they were taking it, they they wanted to make this movie, they had either a pitch that went well, or they had an internal idea that they then went and hired a writer for and this writer is now writing the script, and it's like, their various stages, you know, you get x amount of drafts, and then the ideal thing is you make the movie, right. Alright, so. So from an intern standpoint, it was like, Okay, I don't know what the purpose of this is. But sure, I'll read it. I'll give me notes. And then eventually, I found out the purpose was like, they were testing me, right, like, do your notes match up with my notes? Do we think alike? You know, do you have an understanding of what structure and character development and pacing and dialogue? Do you understand the concepts of what actual screenwriting is and what actual development work entails? And finally, when I had written enough coverages, they hired me as a development assistant, in which case, I was paired with a specific producer who found my notes especially useful and then that went from here's a project that we've already acquired two projects that we potentially could acquire, or here's a book that we're thinking of, but that's going to be released in two months. Like, read the book. Is there a movie there? If so, what kind of movie what do you think you pitch it so that then we can pitch it to a writer as an open assignment? Right? So that happened a couple times, and then when We, when I started working as a development coordinator, it's like, Okay, now we have a list of, of projects in development. And it's like this one's for this along. So now we're acquiring talent, or we're looking for a director, the scripts out for investment opportunity, blah, blah, blah. So there's, when you get to the coordinator, it's sort of more of like project management status, right? You're, you're giving notes on projects, sure. But it's more of like, let's keep things on track for where they're supposed to be at X amount of time, right? Because as we know, time is money. And every time we do a draft, that cost money, we got to take time to wrap the project, etc. So then when you get to the sea level, it's now it's about what do we want to be as a company? Do we want to specialize in sub 1.2? million? Do we want to go the low budget route? Do we want to go medium budget route where we co produce, you know, which would look you know, two to 12 million, depending on who he CO produced it with? And then past that, it's like, do we want to be somebody who gets a first look, deal with the studio or making studio quality movies, whether that be in the or, you know, the Suicide Squads of the world? You know,

Alex Ferrari 11:04
yes, good. Good example.

Deepthroat 11:07
So that's, that's sort of the spectrum of the development ladder. And I'm sure that there are people out there with different experiences I've did that's just speaking from my own. And if there's one thing that I want to tell other people who are aspiring to be developers, or readers or whatever, they're, it's done several different ways at several different companies. That's why there are different companies, you know what I mean? That's why there are different companies that make better movies than others, or there's why some people specialize in making B hot horror movies, as opposed to the Black Panthers of the world. You know, I mean, that's two different styles of readers. That's two different styles of writing. And that's two different styles of development. So each one, I will say to that, though, that I've sat down at multiple companies as an intern, like I said, when I first got out there, I did everything I possibly could, right. There were a number of of, and I'm not promoting this book by any means. But there are a number of companies that basically slapped down the book, save the cat, and they were like, go read this, and then we can talk and it's like, okay. Don't need to read it again. But like, that's why I feel like a lot of these movies nowadays are so formulaic, right, but it's paint by numbers, almost, you know, that doesn't mean that it's easy, and that people do it well, but there is, I mean, you can watch pretty much any movie and the inciting incidents gonna have between 10 and 15 minutes, and the first actor is going to happen between 25 and 30 minutes of the movie, it's just, that's how movies are made. Audiences have been conditioned to do like that. So you kind of have to write and develop a movie that speaks to that, you know,

Alex Ferrari 12:37
at that, but at those huge studio levels, absolutely. Course. Yes. Even when you're in the indie world, even though it's even some of the most successful indies follow it in one way shape, or form

Deepthroat 12:47
into like, the indie market, like, that's where the art is made. I mean, like, let's not kid ourselves, like, like, yes, we see a lot of these huge budget budget movies that are that are really well done and really great movies and they gross a lot of money. But a lot of it has to do with spectacle and a lot of it in a you know, story off in an art often become secondary to revenue and profit. And, and, you know, other things that, you know, that tentpole movies are sort of built on, you know what I mean?

Alex Ferrari 13:19
So when you so when you were doing the, when you were in development, can you tell me a story that you were just like, I can't believe I'm witnessing this. As as much as you can give away without actually giving everything away, you can make a little bit

Deepthroat 13:36
brought about a really good cautionary tale, because I'm still sore about it. And I could tell I could hear it in your voice. So this is this is gonna be funny. And I have another one too. So go for it. So I'll start with the one that's not about me. How about that? So I read this book, right? I read this book, I was a development assistant. I was like, I was in the office every day like 730, my Boston show until 1030. And I was sitting there reading when he got there. Even calling it he didn't like reveal me. Sure. Anyway, so I read this book. And he always told me he was like, if you see something that we could acquire, like, make sure you tell me about it. Like make sure you bring it to my attention. I'm like, Okay, sweet, like for sure. So I'm about 30 pages into this 900 page book. I want I run into his office and I'm like, Dude, we've there's, there's so much here.

Alex Ferrari 14:26
It's Harry Potter, isn't it? Just tell me. Tara Potter's Harry Potter.

Deepthroat 14:29
I just covered Harry Potter. So we, we he was like, Oh, great. Like I finish it and write up the coverage. I'm like, now you should probably start reading this now. He's like, Oh, yeah, cool. And I was like, Dude, you told me if there's something online not to wait. And he was like, okay, you know, all right. Well, I'll see what you got. So I spent hours and hours I read this book. I didn't sleep for three days getting through this book. I wrote up 11 pages of coverage, which obviously young, obnoxious, too long did not read type of shit, right? So, uh huh. So I said handed to him and I'm like, boom. It was like two days later, three days later, maybe. And I'm like, Alright, I sent it to you like, and he's like, okay, good. Cool. I'll read it over the weekend. So a week goes by, I don't hear a damn thing. Another week goes by what happens that fall? Going Friday, the book was optioned for $1.7 million by Warner Brothers. And it will currently be be adapted by a writer who had just come off and asked her when, and I'm like, I told you, I was like, I told him all the dude wrote me back was good instincts, period. That's it. That's all the acknowledgement I got. Oh, good. And I was like, You got to be kidding me, like, so all these guy, all these production companies are out there looking for like the next great piece of material. But it's also worth understanding to from a writer standpoint, like, they're just inundated. You know, I mean, like, he had scripts that were towering, you know, seven, eight stacks that were taller than I was that he had yet to read, you know, and it's just like, good projects slip through the cracks. Taste is often an issue. Art is subjective. So, like, if you get 1500 knows, all you need is one yes. You know what I mean? Like, you could be that diamond in the rough. It's just a matter of somebody seeing, you know what I mean? It was just disappointing that that could have been like, Hey, this guy found this great project. And, you know, we're gonna make a whole bunch of money off of it. And good for him. Now, let's promote him. Now. Let's give him producer credit, and blah, blah, blah, blah, blah. that ever happened. I'm curious to know what my past would have been like, had he been like, oh, yeah, I'm gonna read that tomorrow reads it and is like, Oh, dang. Like, this kid? He's right. You know what I mean? Like, let's go buy this, let's go. And they didn't have a $1.7 million. But hey, if they've gotten and presumably had, you know, it's not like that deal happened overnight. You know what I mean? In hindsight, it's like, that deal was probably being negotiated Well, before I was even given the book. So you have to take that into account too. But it's just a matter of like, things. It's like, sit around and wait, and then sprint, and then sit around a wait, and then sprint. And that's kind of like the business, you know, I mean, and it's very much a hurry up and wait, kind of kind of deal. So, you know, I would say a lot of these young writers, like, be patient, you know what I mean? Because when it happens, it's gonna happen really freakin fast.

Alex Ferrari 17:15
You know? And what's the second story?

Deepthroat 17:16
So the second story is different company, different company, bigger company. It was a manager slash production company, right? So I was they wrapped writers, they wrapped actors, they did a lot of packaging house, they got a lot of movies made, and they wrecked some pretty awesome people. So I felt blessed to work there, right. And they had this really cool thing where they would bring us all in and we get to talk to the executives for lunch. And like, they really made it so that like we met people, you know what I mean? So we got to know the people that we were working with and working for, which is really cool. One of them happened to be a manager that I really liked. And we bonded over fantasy football. I actually, obviously. And my script that I wrote, it was a it was a pilot. It was I was like, hey, this it's a sports related drama. He likes sports. So I was like, Hey, let me would you be interested in reading this? And he was like, hell yeah, I'll read it, blah, blah, blah. And he actually did, which was awesome. You know what I mean? After he read it, he came back the next week. And he was like, Hey, man, I'm gonna need you to sign the submission, like our submission agreement, because it's technically unsolicited material and you know, blah, blah, blah. And I was like, alright, yeah, cool. What's the worst they can do? I mean, I work here, right, blah, whatever. So then I sign it, and I don't think anything of it. And then I can see where this is going. Yeah, it's a heartbreaker dude. And let's just say my script ended up being the companies that they then shifted, so that there wasn't any legal issues to a different sport and a different, it was a one hour drama, and they put it into not a one hour drama. And let's just say it's, it's a it's it made it.

Alex Ferrari 18:56
Oh, and it was your story. It was my story. So So okay, so there's that there's a lot of look, there's a lot of people out there that always are concerned, especially young writers about they're going to steal my idea. They're going to steal my story. And then I've always heard that, like, look, professionals don't worry about these kinds of things, because you'll get sued. But you that's a perfect example of them, taking it, twisting it a bit. And all of a sudden, they've got it. So showing your opinion is thievery a major issue.

Deepthroat 19:26
And no, I think it was one guy who I trusted when I maybe shouldn't have I'll say this too. He no longer works there. Shocker. I'm sure that's not the first sleazy thing that he's done. So it's a person by person basis, right. Are you a good judge of tat? Are you a good judge of character? Those are the two things that really come up in this business. You know what I mean? So, because there's a lot of sleazy people out there, yes. But I would say that it's a one in 1000 chance that someone's gonna steal your project. So I would say in the big scheme of things, register it. If you want to spend the extra money Get the copyright from the Library of Congress. bucks. Yeah. But but you know what? Don't worry about it as much as, like, I'm the exception, not the rule. You know what I mean? So while I do have some horror stories, right, it also gave me the fact that like, it was a learning it was, you know, it was, my script wouldn't have gotten made, you know what I mean? Like, I'll say that right now, they turned it into what it needed to be, I just wish they would have done it with me, as opposed, which is, which is, again, if I had written the script, largely on company computers with company resources, it was theirs. You know what I mean? Because of those laws. And it's just like, having an understanding of what intellectual property law is, is different than writing a spec script in your basement and sending it out to people. Like, it's completely different. You know, what I mean? Like, don't worry about submitting your script to contest that somebody's going to rip you off. It's not going to happen. You know what I mean? And if so, you have, you have your receipt, you have the person, probably who read it, if it becomes that, at least the company does. I would just say that it's, it's again, I'm the exception, not the rule. And while that is a terrible story, it's it's rare, if ever happens, you know, and it's just my luck that happened to me. So. And that's where I would end it, you know what I mean?

Alex Ferrari 21:14
But I also heard the mythical story of how when Tim Burton was working at Disney, he drew Jack's skeleton and a bunch of the characters from Nightmare Before Christmas, and threw them away in the trash can, someone picked it up and said, these are great. And these are great. And he put them away. And from that point on, it was owned by Disney, because he signed the contract that said, anything they creates, while they're on company, time is theirs.

Deepthroat 21:39
And the same thing works. So where I work now, it's the same situation, right? So it I don't know, should I even say what I do now? Yeah, okay, that's fine. So. So the, it's the same way, right? So if I develop something on, like, I'm even scared because of that process, to like, bring my personal computer in and use the Wi Fi. You know what I mean? Because they could, even though I'm doing it on my computer, I may not even be working at that time. But I'm still using technically their resources, because they're the ones paying for the life, you know what I mean? So it's like, I don't even it gets crazy. You know what I mean? So it's like, if you're going to be working at a company, like a production company, and you're going to be one of these low level employees with thoughts of like, I'm going to get my work out there. Just be cautious. Just understand the game. You know what I mean? Don't do it on your company computer, which, at this point, sounds like common sense, right? It didn't five, seven years ago, you know, right. So I wasn't even thinking that that would be a thing. But it was a learning process. And I've since sold other things. And I'm not, you know, it's not like I'm my dreams were shattered. My, my swan song that I was getting out there. It's like,

Alex Ferrari 22:50
well, one thing I find fascinating about your story in general, is that your your script, you also do, obviously script writing or script reading and script coverage, which we're going to get into but you're also a, a successful screenwriter, you actually sold material you've developed material, you're not just a script, a script reader, or a script, or script, someone who does script coverage, which I think is an assumption that a lot of people, especially screenwriters, young screenwriters think that the script coverage guys are all, you know, 18. Yeah. You know, and there is some truth to that there is there is.

Deepthroat 23:26
So, again, I'm the exception to the rule. All right. So I've actually, I've actually been in talks with, you know, actually, we'll talk about that, when we'll talk about that when you and I sure. But you know, so there are sites out there, you know what I mean, that do have working writers. But to be perfectly honest with you, you don't want to get the coverage notes that you're going to get from a working writer necessarily all the time, because those aren't the people that are going to be reading your material at the production companies. You know what I mean? The first line of defense at any production company is the internet is the development assistance. So if you're writing for the people who are actual writers, you're going to get a vastly different perspective on what the material should be, versus what the 18 to 24 year old fresh out of college doesn't have a effing clue about what good writing is. And it's just hoping to maybe become a producer or a low level employee at this company that they're working for. Those are the people that are reading scripts.

Alex Ferrari 24:26
So let's go so let's go real quick. Let's back up for a second let's go through the process of getting coverage like can you explain to the audience what the process is completely from soup to nuts, so they can get a better idea?

Deepthroat 24:38
Yeah, so are we talking from like a coverage site? Or are we talking coverage from a development company

Alex Ferrari 24:45
I'm gonna go development company because I mean, when you go to a coverage site, like like, you know, my coverage site, or something like that, you're you're working with readers, and they're just you're getting notes from your you know, and trying to help the writer move forward with their process in one way, shape or form? Is that accurate? Yeah. Okay. But now when you're sending it to a development company production company, I would rather get that workflow involved because I think that's a little bit more behind the curtains.

Deepthroat 25:14
Yeah, yeah, it's Yeah, I agree with you. So the big hurdle that you have to get over it, right is getting it there in the first place, you know, because a lot of these companies, it's not like, you can call them up and be like, Hey, I have this script. Do you want to read it? Because they're not even gonna answer your call, you know, get get past the gatekeeper. If you send them to like the info at production company.com email address, it's gonna go straight to the trash, you're gonna get a note that says, hey, we don't accept unsolicited material. By the way, please sign this, your script is not going to be read your blah, blah, blah, you ended up in the trash. So get it. So how do you the question should be first, how do you get there? Right? And you get there by having a friend who possibly works there. You know what I mean? Which means, you know, there's a lot of runners out there, like, oh, I don't have to live in LA. If you're an aspiring writer, chances are you do have to go out there at some point, you don't I mean, you have to you have to do your time. You have to Yeah, everybody has to, you know what I mean? Go Live, go get coffee, go grind it out. That's why I interned you know what I mean, because I got to know these people, who could then get my script into places without me needing representation. Now, the other side of that is if you have a manager, or you have an agent that can say, pick up the phone and be like, hey, Steven Spielberg, do you want to read the script? Oh, yeah. Thanks, John ROM, and then, right. So there's that side of the coin, too. For people who are looking to get, you know, to break into the industry? That one's more rare than the other side of the coin. Right. So my was to pull the curtain back a little bit. You have to understand the level of fear that these developments teachers and assistants have?

Alex Ferrari 26:46
Well, generally, the business in general is

Deepthroat 26:48
fearful. Yeah. Oh, and yes, absolutely. And I think the higher you get up, the higher the stakes are, but those people are already making, presumably a decent amount of money. You know what I mean? It's the people who are making $450 a week who are there from seven o'clock till 10 o'clock at night reading scripts, who are wanting to put their neck out there because they want to get noticed and appreciated and, and promoted, etc. They want to get to that next level. But it's like you get just to like, you get one chance to submit your script and impress a producer. It's the same with being an intern or an assistant. If you bring them garbage, they're going to think of you as a person who enjoys garbage, you know what I mean? So the level of fear at these places and this is why you get 1500 nose is because you have to have you have to find the person who's got the stones, or you know, the the guts.

Alex Ferrari 27:39
Oh, nice Kahunas right to to be like,

Deepthroat 27:43
Hey, boss person, I think I found a really good script. And I think you should read it, you know what I mean? Like,

Alex Ferrari 27:50
okay, because they got one shot. So as much as the writer has the one shot, the script reader has the one shot

Deepthroat 27:55
exactly. And as I think as writers, we forget that, you know what I mean, especially aspiring writers, because it's not just your career that's in jeopardy here. It's it, you start at the entry level, you your entry level script, goes to the entry level person. Now, do you think Jonathan Nolan scripts go to the entry level person, you got to be out your damn mind? All he has to do is pick up the phone and say, hey, it's Jonathan Nolan. You want to read my script? And it's like, oh, we'll buy it. You know, like the page one title. Okay, great. It's got a title page, this is probably going to die. You know, I mean, right. And let's like, so that's a completely different scenario. But the people who aren't on the people who aren't Jonathan, the ones of the world, and the people who maybe are like, second and third tier, Jonathan Nolan's even, they go straight to the development assistance first, you know, and I think that that is something to understand his level of fear and hesitation there. So they're always looking to find what's wrong with your script. They're looking, I worked for a boss once who told me to read a script till it's third mistake, and then throw it in the trash. So that that could have been grammar that could have been spelling, they could have been formatting, which is a big one. Because if you don't know how to format a script, you don't know you don't understand what a script is, you know what I mean? So it was like, we read the script to the third mistake. And if it's in the first 10 pages, throw it away, you know what I mean? If you get past 30, and then you get it, and it's like, you already invested in the story. At that point, you might as well just finish it, you know. But if they make three mistakes in the first three pages of the first 10 pages, like people always say like, it's your first 10 pages that sell you know what I mean? If nobody's gonna watch if you're not hooked in the first 10 pages of a book, or have a have a play, or have a film or have a script, like it's dying, you know what I mean? The same goes for us aspiring screenwriters. So it's like, you have to be sure that that at least the your first 30 pages are absolutely flawless. You know what I mean? And I'm not just talking story, I'm talking formatting spelling.

Alex Ferrari 29:49
Yeah, talk a little bit about that, because that is something that is unknown to me, because I've read so many scripts that I'm like to spell check man, right? Like just for me, it's final draft. You format, this is not difficult anymore, guys. We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show.

Deepthroat 30:15
You know what it is? Honestly, it's a pride in one's work. And if, if you're asking somebody to take an hour to three hours out of their day to read your script, you better give them something that's looks like you put a lot of effort into it. You know what I mean? Because if you're trying to get somebody to buy your stuff, but you have, you can't spell the name of your main character, right? Four or five times? Why should we? You obviously didn't care? Why should we? You know what I mean? And I think that's another thing that goes missed on people. So it's like, as as when you pull back the curtain, those are the things that first stand out, right? The first thing that anybody's gonna do when they read your script, as a development assistant is flip to the back page and see how long it is. Yep. They're gonna say, this is going to take me. So if you're submitting 130 page script, they're going to put that on the bottom of the pile and go to the 90 page script, because the in their eyes, it's like, oh, I can go tell my boss that I read four scripts today. So I'm going to do the short ones first and save the long one for the weekend. You know what I mean? So again, something to acknowledge right

Alex Ferrari 31:14
now. But also, I also heard that sometimes you can lie and change the the number count inside. So if you're like at 101, you could put you could just omit numbers in the middle of the script to make it look like it's a 90 pig script when it's actually really, I've never heard of that. You've never heard I've seen that.

Deepthroat 31:34
That's hilarious. I've probably read scripts where I was just flying through it so fast that I didn't realize that there was that for page four.

Alex Ferrari 31:43
They just skip a page and you just forget about it. And but that's it. I'm not suggesting anyone does that. But I've heard of it. So I didn't know if you've ever apparently worked because you've never seen one.

Deepthroat 31:54
Yeah, right. Yeah, exactly. Which is, which is an interesting thing. But also it's like I it's pretty easy to tell when you've got a 90 page script sitting next to 130 page script. Well, then if there's

Alex Ferrari 32:03
yeah, there's only a handful of pages you could cut off with that technique. Yeah. Yeah. Five, six pages, Shane, like

Deepthroat 32:10
101 to 1909 is gonna break. If you're really hiding pages at that point, like, yeah, like, I think you've got bigger problems.

Alex Ferrari 32:18
You know, you're absolutely right, if you're exactly if you can't shave eight pages off, or 10 pages off, you're going to close,

Deepthroat 32:25
you know, and that's, so my manager, and my agents are very good about allowing me, especially my early drafts, to write what I want to write. But then, you know, when we're about to go to market, they're very good about being like, listen, you're at 117 right now, which is fine. But like, go through the script, again, take a couple days off, get drunk, you know, maybe smoke a joint, like, do do whatever it is that you need to do to get out of the writer mind frame and get into the reader mind frame. And think to yourself like, this is your final draft short, but what absolutely doesn't have to be there. And undoubtedly, I end up cutting four or five scenes, which brings it from a 117 to a 108 or a 104. You know what I mean? Because it's so it ends up being like, no, yes, I love this sandwich. It was Ernest Hemingway that says, like, go back through, delete all your good lines. See if the story still works, or something like that. Yeah, something like that. It's like, it's so true. You know what I mean? Because we as writers, we like get attached to certain things that as writers we love, but it's like readers, it's like, okay, this is just more for them to get through to get to the next point. You know what I mean? And I hate to say that, because that's where a lot of the art comes in. You know what I mean?

Alex Ferrari 33:42
Well, no, it was Hemingway or Mamet that said, writing is easy. All you have to do is sit at the typewriter and bleed.

Deepthroat 33:48
That's a Yeah, that was a Hemingway. Yeah, yeah, that's Yeah, yeah, exactly. It's so true. You know what I mean? And it's even believed even more, because he's also saying writing and after all, is rewriting, you know, I mean, so he's, he's a big proponent of like, Sure, bleed, but then go back and cut yourself open a few more times. And when you don't die, that's, that's the script of the story.

Alex Ferrari 34:11
It is, it is it's quite brutal sometimes.

Deepthroat 34:15
To be really diligent, because those are the types of things that is development assistance. If you go through and they, they see that you've got like, eight scenes that don't necessarily, like if you've got a savvy reader, you know, you're lucky, but you're also in a spot where it's like, you better be on out. Yeah, you your script better be on because this guy is gonna be or this girl is gonna be, you know what I mean? So it's like, she's got a great perspective of what a good script is. So you're better you better fit the mold, you know what I mean? And realize too, that like when you pull back the curtain i, this is I think I speak for every development or reader person, regardless of you're in, you know, a major studio or a small production company, you're looking for reasons to say no, you know what I mean? Like from, from the title page, the end of the script, you're looking for reasons to say no. And protect your little area of comfortability that you've built it your internship or your development assistant jobs. Yeah. You know what I mean? So it's like, you're looking for reasons to say no, because no doesn't put you risk, you know? Uh, yes. Is immediately when you like, roll the dice at the craps table, you know what I mean? So, I think from and, Dude, I gotta tell you, I read some fantastic scripts, as well, that like, didn't fit in line with what our production companies mandate was at that time. You know what I mean? So even though we had, we've maybe had won an Oscar for a drama movie, we were focusing on low budget comedy. So while I've got this great script that I would love to recommend, because yeah, when you look at our, our, our IMDB page of scripts that we've done, it's like, yeah, that would definitely fit into the mold, but not our current mandate. You know what I mean? So like, understanding what a production company's current mandate is, and understanding that that's fluid and changing. Whereas like, you know, most production companies, if your horror, your horror, you know what I mean? Like your blue house, your blue house, you could sort of have a mandate. It's like, we're looking for female led horrors, or we're looking for, you know, paranormal type of stuff or, you know, purge just did really great. Can we find our own purge? You know, what I mean, it's like, they think like that, you know, what I mean? Like, trend followers, writers like to think of themselves as trendsetters, where do you find the balance of fitting into what these production companies are trying to do moving forward in the future? And the truth is, is that a lot of them don't have a clue what they want? What

Alex Ferrari 36:37
do you agree right now, how many production companies around town are looking for the next Crazy Rich agent agents?

Deepthroat 36:44
Oh, I think I think every everyone, right,

Alex Ferrari 36:47
everyone right now is looking for that script.

Deepthroat 36:50
But three years ago, whenever when that was going out to market, nobody would have Crickets. Crickets, you know, I mean, it's the same way the Stranger Things I don't know. And our story, you're wrong. I I've only heard it secondhand, but they got like, reject everybody, every network. Every right. Yep. Look, they're like, We don't understand the tone. We don't understand the tone. Like why are these kids like swearing and stuff like that, like, we just don't is as an adult adult show his kid show it's fantasy. It's

Alex Ferrari 37:16
reality could not deal with it. They just couldn't deal with it. They couldn't wrap

Deepthroat 37:20
their heads around it. And now guess what they're doing? Everybody wants their own Stranger Things? You know, of course. So like, if you think if these companies like if you live in LA, and you meet a producer at a bar, and you're getting drunk next to the pool or something like that, he's like, oh, yeah, you know, we're looking for female led crime thrillers that are four quadrant. And you're like, yes. Okay, I've got one of those. You know what I mean? Like, say, Yes, obviously, you know what I mean, right? Even if it doesn't fit all those bills, because they're not, they don't know what they want, they know what they think they want. And you have to convince them that what they think they want is actually what you have, you know what I mean? But isn't it just, there's just so many hurdles that you have to get through, you know,

Alex Ferrari 38:06
but there are those few those are those few producers and companies who are ahead of the curve. And I think 99% of the rest of the town is chasing the

Deepthroat 38:16
chasing. Yeah, I agree. I agree. 100%? Because those

Alex Ferrari 38:20
because the ones the first ones through the wall are always bloodied.

Deepthroat 38:23
Yeah, exactly. And and, and I think to that, like, it's a great observation to make, because those are also the companies who may not be around in five years, you know what I mean? Correct? Because, because they were willing to take chances. And I think it goes back to what we were talking about before, which is like, why do we, why are we risking our comfortable ball here to potentially be out of business in five years, because we went and bought three scripts that we're not going to be able to get cast or financed or packaged, or in front of screen, you know, in front of viewers, you know what I mean? So it's like, I, everybody wants to call themselves a producer. You know what I

Alex Ferrari 39:01
mean? Oh, everyone's a producer. And everyone. Yeah, and

Deepthroat 39:05
it's just like I, you know, it comes back to what my first story, which is, are you a good judge of character? Are you good judge of talent, pair yourself up with the people that you trust that you work with that, you know, and before you start slinging your script around to like, everybody in their mother trying to get in front of as many people, it's not about getting it. It's not about a numbers game. It's about the right people. Because if you get in front of the right people, like I've got a buddy that works. He's a very successful agent, and he works in a very successful company. He he came out a couple years after I did, I knew him through a friend we've since become great friends. Even though he read some of my he actually read that that script that I was talking about, he was one of the guys that read it and he was like, Dude, this is a fucking great script. Like, I want you to change this, that and the other and then all that shit went down and it was like dude, don't worry about it. Work on Next one. And he was very good about like keeping, he wasn't even my agent. And he was really good about like keeping me more like, focused, you know? He says, And he was like, Dude, it's not going to be the only good thing you ever write. You know, it's just the first thing, first good thing you ever wrote. So, keep writing and just know that this door's always open. And even if I say no, even if it's not for me, I'm not closing the door on you. And that's the type of people that slider should look for. You know what I mean? Because you build the bond first, I didn't meet this guy, knowing that he was going to become this great agent, I met this guy, because, again, ironically, we bonded over football, he went to a big football school, I went to a big football school, my buddy, who I knew from high school, went to that school, we were rivals, we were at a we were at shit with Barney's Beanery, watching college football, I get I get introduced this guy who's a low level intern at the point at that point, and I'm like, Dude, I like you. Let's hang out, let's get beers. And we became friends. And as he climbed the ladder, so did I. And even to this day, if I wanted to fire my current agent, I'd know that I had an open door at his because I know that I could send him stuff. And that's the type of people that you need to be looking for. It's not the it's not the numbers, it's the quality is quality, not quantity. So make the relationships with people. Keep those relationships up. I think if you come out here, looking for money, and looking to network and meet as many people as you possibly can to help you, you're going in with the wrong mentality, you go in knowing that like, you want to make this place a home, you want to make this business a home, you want to make these people, your friends. And that's so rare to find in LA. And that's why so many people turn tail and run after five, six years, because they can't afford it. And they know that their yoga job isn't gonna make them enough money to survive and raise kids, you know,

Alex Ferrari 41:45
who do Uber job, every time I get into an Uber, I always go, how's the script gone? I've actually done that a few times. And they go, how do you know, you know? Are you a producer? I'm like, No, I'm

Deepthroat 41:57
not. Sorry, but I guarantee you, they said, if you said that you were they'd be like, Oh, well, do you mind if I get your email address? It's like, that's not a relationship built on trust and integrity is really built on wants and needs and unrealistic expectations.

Alex Ferrari 42:11
That's a great, great, that's a great way to put it. It really is. Because I always tell people like if you if you met someone at a party, you wouldn't just jam your script in their face. Yeah, you would meet them, you introduce yourself, if you're if you're a human, if you introduce yourself and go, Hey, how are you? And I always tell people, you always ask them what you can, what can I do for you? How can I be of service to you, then that's a great way to start a relationship and start building

Deepthroat 42:39
truly is and you know, and even like so, even outside of that, you know what I mean? Where it's like, it's like, Hey, you we have something on common ground to bond over? You know what I mean? Maybe they're excited about going to see Crazy Rich Asians. And so are you. It's like, dude, let's go together. Right? You know what I mean? Let's go together. Let's go talk. You know what I mean? Like, build a relationship up from the ground, just like you would if you were moving to, you know, Podunk Ville, wherever. Yeah. And I mean, it's like, how are you going to meet people, you know, what I mean, you're going to get involved in the community, you're going to do things that the community likes to do, you're gonna find common ground. And maybe I have a different perspective, because I moved around a lot as a kid. So whenever I go, it's like, when I was going to a new place, it was like sports, it was clubs. It was it was, you know, community, you know, meetings, whether it be churches or whatever, you know what I mean? Like, that's how our family integrated in the community and you have to go out with the mentality of like, I'm going to integrate into the community first. And you're going to find that like, if you go out there with genuine intentions to like, meet people, instead of meet people that are going to help you. The perspective is it may not seem like it, but the perspective is drastically different. And so are the results.

Alex Ferrari 43:55
Amen, preach, sir, preach

Unknown Speaker 43:59
my candles.

Alex Ferrari 44:02
Now, as going back to being a script reader, what is the biggest mistake you see screenwriters make?

Deepthroat 44:09
So every I've met a woman, changed my life, changed my perspective, really, on what it meant to be a writer. And granted at this point, I'd already sold two scripts, blah, blah, blah. You know, got my, my creative writing degree. I got my MFA in screenwriting, I got all this stuff, right. And I went to the WNBA. And this woman, I'm not gonna say her name. She was giving a talk. They're super successful. And she was like, you know, everybody around town has kind of come up with that next great idea when they should be coming up with the next great character. And that really spoke volumes.

Alex Ferrari 44:47
Let's see. That's deep, but yet simple.

Deepthroat 44:50
It's so simple, right? And it's like, I'm sitting there in the audience and all of a sudden, it's like, light bulb going off and like I'm getting tingling feelings in my feet and my toes. wasn't I'm like, oh my god like she's so right i mean you think about it like like madmen great great great show but is a great character Breaking Bad Breaking Bad sopranos Walter White sopranos like all of these great shows all the even movies like like looking at Little Miss Sunshine all it is a great character you know I mean that's filled with great characters William Wallace in Braveheart Braveheart wouldn't be Braveheart without that character. You know, I

Alex Ferrari 45:31
mean, and I think yeah, Jones, of course, Indiana Jones,

Deepthroat 45:34
Indiana Jones like it, it complete. And that's the, that's the biggest thing that I feel like writers don't understand is that they're trying to write for the spectacle and not for the character, you know what I mean? And he can, he can, I mean, I was about to say structure, because they don't understand structure. And, and, and I think that's one of the most important things to learn, right. But really, when you come down to it, when you approach the premise, or the idea that your structure comes later, right, from simply from an idea standpoint, like, if I don't care about your character, or I don't know what they want, or what they're after, you could have the most structured story in the world, it's not gonna make sense, because I need to know exactly who this character is motivations, right? what their goals are, why they're working towards it, and subconsciously, why do I give a shit? You know what I mean? And that, that, I think, is a lot of what, you know, a lot of these scripts that I cover, don't seem to understand, because I've given the note. I mean, I could probably give this note on every single script that I see coming in from a first time writer, which is decent story, it functions, but like, why do I care? You know, and I'm gonna care when I care about the character when you when you've created a good enough well rounded character. And I mean, that character could exist in a tentpole movie, it can exist in a micro budget $100,000 film, I don't care. That note applies to every single budget and genre that there is if you don't care about the characters if they're not making. So I call it the Cha Cha Cha has of storytelling, right? It's it's a character that is approached with challenges. And then in the end, they change, you know what I mean? It's like those three simple things, the Cha Cha Cha, character challenges changes, if their script isn't built on those three simple things. It's, it's just not I'm not gonna care, you know. And I think crafting a really solid character with clear motivations and a clear flaw that we can both sympathize with and root for that that's when magic starts to happen. structure it any way you want at that point, because at this point, I care about the character, I'll spend 20 pages in their normal world because I'm interested. You know what I mean?

Alex Ferrari 47:47
I mean, look, I mean, I watched I watched the last Indiana Jones film purely because of Indiana Jones. Right? The script was

Deepthroat 47:54
right, and you make these good characters, and it does it creates its own franchise. I mean, like it they call it, what is it the Spielbergian way of crafting a character or introducing a character like he does it so wonderfully? You know what I mean? Yeah, yeah. And Paul Thomas Anderson, what am I mean? I want to clarify, it's not that you have to like the main character, no, no, activated by the main character. So like, There will be blood as a great example of that first seven minutes of that movie. Both I mean, the script is a little less, right. And if you look at the final draft of the script, like it's a little it's different than what you see in the movie, but the premise of it is the same, right? This this guy, who is relentless, and unbelievably motivated to get rich, you know what I mean, to the point where he drags himself, leg broken, and all to go turn in the little chunk of silver that he has to start his takeover

Alex Ferrari 48:46
of the world? Basically, yeah.

Deepthroat 48:49
And I didn't like I knew from like, the instant that this guy was on screen, I was like, This guy is a maniac. But I can't take my eyes off of him. You know what I mean? And David Lewis did a great job. But even on the screen, when you are even in the script, when you read it on the page, it's like, this is a such a well crafted character. You know what I mean? And know the summation. I don't want to spoil it or anything to know what that person goes through. You have the script. It's like, you don't have to like him to care about the movie. You know what I mean, and to care about what happens.

Alex Ferrari 49:17
So right, Joe Pesci in Goodfellas. I mean, he's a psychopath. But whether you're like, you cannot take your eyes off of him, or Jack Nicholson and the departed, you just can't take your eyes off.

Deepthroat 49:31
Yep. I mean, and that, and that, to me is like when I enter into a script, like, I get really excited when I read a shitty script with a fantastic character because like, they're miles and miles ahead of somebody who's got a a good script with a bad character. You know what I mean? Yes, yes. Like that. I mean, you can sell, you can sell a bad script with a great character. You can't sell a decent script, a functional script with a bad character. It's just not gonna happen.

Alex Ferrari 49:59
Right now. I just actually just started watching the Americans for the fun if you guys seen that show, have you seen the show?

Deepthroat 50:04
Graham Yost is probably my favorite writer ever him and I really love Taylor shared I'm really into Taylor Sheridan right now but like,

Alex Ferrari 50:11
but this I mean, I just we're literally in season one my wife and I, this is the summer we you know, our shows haven't started yet. And I'm like, This is so well, the characters are are so well crafted you hate you love. They go back and they go for them. Like we're six, seven episodes in. I'm like, There's six seasons of this. I can't wait. Yeah, it's so well done when you put it but it begins with character. It always began with character, at least with this show. And with most of the shows that are great. It's always character. And you're right, you can you if you have a good character with a bad script, you could turn a bad script into a good script with some other work with it. I can work but to create a good character is much, much more difficult.

Deepthroat 50:55
Like, so we just watched justified. Yeah, my wife and I, I'd seen it before she had again, great character, right. Like it's, it's say what you want about the show? I mean, I think it's a great show. But like, if you read Elmore Leonard's short story that it's based off of that is all about character. You know what I mean? That that translated well into the actual show, and obviously, character is more. What do you say? Like it's put on a higher pedestal when you're watching a TV show? Because it's built on characters, right? Like the stories, whatever. It's not supposed to end his stories and television are all about keeping it going. Right? Whereas a film, like let's end it properly, right, right, right. So the reason we keep coming back, especially to like procedural shows, like NCIS, for example, it's like, we keep coming back because we love these Knossos, these Eva's these, you know, like be that we just love these people. And it's like, it's, it's, it's pretty outstanding. And

Alex Ferrari 51:51
yeah, I get you. And no, no, absolutely. Without me character and structure. I think both of those two, those are the two things characteristic first, and then you got to get that structure. You have to you have to have a good, good clothes to put on the character, if you will.

Deepthroat 52:07
Yeah, yeah. And I actually made a mistake earlier, the Americans is not by Graham Yost. But

Alex Ferrari 52:12
no, it is. It is enough for guys to Judge Joe Wiseman. Yes, yes,

Deepthroat 52:15
yes. But but they're very similar. You know what I mean, especially in the way that they currently portray their characters. And I I feel bad that I messed that up.

Alex Ferrari 52:23
But it's, it's all good. It's no one knows who you are. So it's fine.

Deepthroat 52:29
Sorry, Graham. Sorry. Yeah.

Alex Ferrari 52:32
So in general, well, first of all, can you give us any tips? On what get that? What would catch the attention of a script reader? For that low level? I think we kind of touched on it. But is there any specific thing besides having a great character?

Deepthroat 52:47
So I feel like a lot of is just to make the readers job? Easy. You know what I mean? So it's like in in when you're reading a novel, like, you can spend six pages describing the color of the lamp? Yeah, yes, in a script, you just say the lamp is yellow. And if that doesn't matter to the scene that the lamp is yellow, then get it the eff out of there. I mean, it's like, so one of the first things that I'll see on page one, which is like, if it doesn't have to be there, it shouldn't be. And I can tell right away, whether or not the reader or the writer is going to be showing us is going to be showing us the thing, the information rather than telling us you know, and leaving enough room, and acknowledging the fact that this is a collaborative endeavor, you know, what I mean? Like you shouldn't direct the scene you shouldn't have, you know, close up here. Really good scripts, describe those moments in a way that they don't have to sit there and tell you that you're reading a script, a dolly shot in, yeah, like, take that out, you know what I mean? Like, if you can tell right away, so that would be one thing that I would say is like, don't direct the script, don't director writers understand formatting, grammar, spelling, take pride in your work, and then do a good job of making us care about your character in the first three pages, you know what I mean, or at least make it interesting enough, or fascinating enough to where we can't take our eyes off the script. And there's a trick that my manager actually taught me, which is, uh, you know, it's not just about hooking them into the first couple pages, right, if you can hook them to the point where you leave something at the bottom of page nine, that makes them turn to the page, top of page 10, and then leaving something at paid the bottom of page 10, that forces them to turn the page. It's super hard, right? But once you start getting into the final drafts of your script, like it should flow like that, you know what I mean to where it's like, they can't stop turning the page, you know? But it's super, it's, it's very, very difficult to get on that microscopic level. But if you're submitting a script to a production company, you should have thought about those microscopic things. It's very easy to tell when a writer has or hasn't simply, you know, grammar, spelling, formatting, you know what I mean? So make sure that those are the those are the things But right off the bat and if you've got 130 page script like, I hope it comes with a two page treatment or something like that, because they're gonna get too long did not read. Well,

Alex Ferrari 55:10
let's Tarantino's names on it. Sorry, well, unless Tarantino's name is on it.

Deepthroat 55:15
Yeah, exactly. I mean, Jonathan, Nolan's Dark Knight was like, what, like 152 pages or something like that.

Alex Ferrari 55:21
But it's Jonathan Nolan and Chris Allen. And it's okay. And I

Deepthroat 55:25
get that a lot with new writers. And they're like, oh, but so and so did it this way. It's like, Yeah, but so and so made a shitload of money in the last. And so it's like, you're not, you're not so and so

Alex Ferrari 55:37
you're given? Is it fair to say that you're given a lot of leeway in this business? Once you start making a lot of money?

Deepthroat 55:43
Well, 100%, you could do. And that's why I tell I'll tell young writers too. It's like go read scripts, right? And it's like, but I'm going to tell you right now, don't describe characters like they do. Don't format like they do. Don't do that kind of stuff. Because they've earned the right to misspell their character's name. They've earned the right to have formatting errors. You know what I mean? They've earned that right? So you haven't. So you have to play by those rules before you either a are too lazy to break them or to care, or you are established enough to where you can break them and break them. Well, you know, so. Yeah, I mean, that's, that's another thing. It's like. Don't compare yourself to successful writers just yet. Oh, God, I know, I get that all the time. Like, I don't like okay, good lord. I also hate when people use the word we in scripts. I know a lot of people do it, especially professional writers, and especially writer, director types. It's just like, it just reminds you that you're reading a script, you don't say we see this or we see that? Yeah. And at the very basic level, what you're trying to do is you're trying to absorb the reader, especially a reader who doesn't really have a clue about screenwriting, or storytelling. Like you're supposed to absorb them into the story as much as possible. So your imprint on the script should be as minuscule and invisible as possible. And when you start bringing in we, we know you're a real person, we know this is written by somebody. It's not just a story that we're, you know, swimming around. And it's, it's a, it's a script, and I think if you can make like, Brian Delfield does a really good job of making you forget that you're reading a script. Have you have you read any of his

Alex Ferrari 57:18
I have not read any script? Can you tell the audience who he is and what he's done? Yeah,

Deepthroat 57:22
he just had a movie coming out called the babysitter.

Alex Ferrari 57:25
Oh, oh, yeah. The one by MC G. Yeah,

Deepthroat 57:29
yeah, he has a so Brian Duffield. I think somebody told me this. I don't quote me on it. Don't. Don't tell me if it's right or wrong. I don't even really want to know. But I like telling the story that he sold more spec scripts or had more time. He's one of the more successful spec writers over the last like five or 10 years.

Alex Ferrari 57:47
I think so. I think Astra house has that.

Deepthroat 57:50
Yeah. But it's like it's like a you read their script. It's a I you can find it online. Good. I'm in fact, I'm going to do it right now. The babysitter, it's like it's, it's okay, there it is. It's 93 pages. The first line is interior nurse's office day call is 12 years old and losing his mind. That's the first line.

Alex Ferrari 58:15
That's a good symbol.

Deepthroat 58:17
You know what I mean? Yeah. And it's like, you don't have to overthink it. You don't have to over describe it. And I love Brian Duffield writing because he lets the he lets you make the picture in your own head just as if, like, you're I had a I had a writer once told me that what you're writing is actor bait. You know what I mean? And it's so true, right. But it's also director bait. You know what I mean? So if you're over describing your scenes that just takes away from the creative side that a director, the creative imprint that a director can put on to the, to the script, right? So it's like, the less you can tell the more leeway you can give to those other creative elements that are brought on to make to bring your script to life. Like do it. You know what I mean? So like, I think less is always, always, always, always more and it's so difficult to like, get that to come across people because they're like, what does that mean? And it's like, if it doesn't absolutely have to be there. Don't let it be there. And Duffield is so good at it. And he's, he's always properly formatting stuff. And even though he's an established writer, you can tell like, he doesn't shortchange the other like, two pages down. There's another wonderful description. Cole is waiting for the school bus besides Melanie, another 12 year old also his neighbor also definitely not a potential love interest for coal. So whoever told you that is an idiot and a liar and loser and it interrupts the conversation with her dialogue. So it's like, it's like you've seen it happen. You know what I mean? You has a voice? You know what I mean? Like, I don't know, like, I go read Brian Duffield scripts that he's a fantastic writer as well. The guy deserves a lot more credit.

Alex Ferrari 59:51
Now than we asked you also, can we please just put out there in the universe to people stop using 75 cent words in script in screenplays. We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show. Is that Is that a big is that a big? No, no, they want to prove to you that they have to have a complete grasp of the English language and want to prove to you how smart they are by using words that no one has ever used in conversation.

Deepthroat 1:00:26
You again, it comes back. Yes, short answer your question? Absolutely. It again comes down to knowing who's reading your script, right? If you have to send a 19 year old out to go get a dictionary. You know what I mean? So it's like, Have you ever read the alien script? Yeah, well, I

Alex Ferrari 1:00:44
love that script. Walter. Walter helps amazing interior engine

Deepthroat 1:00:47
room, empty, cavernous. That's it. Like straight up. That's, that's it, like jammed with instruments, all of them idle console chairs for to empty. It's like, Yes, that's what you need to be doing. Like, paint the picture, build it up, there's a

Alex Ferrari 1:01:02
patina of the walls can be smelled and like, you know, do know that that's a book. That's a book.

Deepthroat 1:01:10
Exactly. That's no your medium. You know what I mean? And then like, a lot of writers I see too, especially young writers. And I see a lot of this with writers who, and this always gets me where it right where it's like on the title page, it'll say written by, you know, John Stevens, based on a book by John Stevens. Like, oh, God, this is gonna be rough, because it's Jon, snow literary background, you know, what I mean, a prose writing background? How is that going to translate? And sometimes I've been surprised there have been a couple writers who have surprised me. But for the vast majority, it's like, yikes, you know what I mean? Like, you're basically copying and pasting certain elements of description from your book into the script format. And dialogue editor, like there was one writer who I could tell was copying pasting dialogue directly from like his Microsoft Word document into the final draft document, because a lot of the dialogue like he forgot to delete the quotation marks like parts. So I was like, Oh, this is great. Or it would be like said eagerly.

Alex Ferrari 1:02:10
At the end of the dialogue,

Deepthroat 1:02:12
oh, man alive. Okay. So note that I'll say about that is like, if you can't see it on the screen, it shouldn't be in the script. And there are exceptions to that, especially when like, describing a character for instance, like, I feel like you can do a little bit of editorializing in those moments, to give a bigger shape to like who that person is, you know, or like Shane Black had a really good one where it was like, he's always really good at describing things, right. But he also has a voice and at this point, he was Shane Black. So he wrote something. I can't remember what it was. It was like, it was like, a huge penthouse, the type I'm gonna own with this fucking movie. So

Alex Ferrari 1:02:47
yeah, yes, that is so shameful. Introduce yourself.

Deepthroat 1:02:51
Like if you can, if you can inject yourself into the script in that way. That's different than what we were talking about earlier, which is like, Do you know what I mean? Yeah, I

Alex Ferrari 1:03:00
mean, yeah, there's I have heard of God. I've heard of screenwriters, I've read screenplays that have that kind of stuff. Like they'll put a little note like, and this is for the script reader, and blah, blah, blah, like those. But they're at an established point. They're an established point, and they can play with a medium a little bit, but Shane Black is a perfect example. You read lethal weapon you we kiss me? I was gone. Kiss me. Long Kiss. Goodnight. Yeah. Any of those? I'm dying to see predator, the predator. I can't wait to see that. But he's amazing in the way he writes. You're like, okay, I get it. But he is that kind of writer. You're absolutely right. It's like, the penthouse. Like after I saw the script.

Deepthroat 1:03:40
Yeah, he's got a voice. You know what I mean? He's got a voice that doesn't interfere with the story. In fact, it does the opposite, where it's like, I want to see what else this guy's got to say shit. You know what I mean?

Alex Ferrari 1:03:50
Because if you have the balls, if you have the balls to do that, and again, I wouldn't suggest have no

Deepthroat 1:03:54
time to go out right like Shane, battle black for sure.

Alex Ferrari 1:03:58
It's been done. It's been tried many times before and it's fail. It's like when people try to look after Pulp Fiction came out. Forget everybody was trying to write chapters. Everybody's writing chapters. Everybody was writing chapters. Everybody was trying to be Yeah, that was that was that movie that came out of how to die in Denver. What to do in Denver when you're dead. And there was like a bunch of rip off pulp fiction movies. Right afterwards, Pulp Fiction course.

Deepthroat 1:04:20
There's gonna be a whole bunch of crazy rich Asian movies that are but you can't

Alex Ferrari 1:04:23
write like Tarantino, I always tell people like you can't direct like Fincher, you can direct like Nolan or Kubrick, you could be inspired. Absolutely. But at the end of the day, they're going to do them much better than you could ever do it.

Deepthroat 1:04:37
One of my one of my best friends is a very, very talented writer. And he doesn't write he does write scripts, but he mostly writes prose. published the works, you know what I mean? And he was like, when I first started out writing, he was like, I was trying to I would read a book by somebody that would really impress me. And then I would go and try to write like them and he was like, it took me years to get something published because I was Isn't writing for who I am, or what I want to say I was writing what I thought people wanted to read. And I think that that you know what I mean? It goes back to like, don't don't think that you are submitting, writing that somebody else absolutely wants to read. Like, don't go, don't approach it like that approach. If you're starting from that place, you're already making mistakes, you know what I mean? It's gonna take you a long, long time to figure out that you're making mistakes. And hopefully, like, you have a really stable job at Starbucks, because you're going to need it, you know?

Alex Ferrari 1:05:31
No, and that advice goes exactly for directors as well. Because I mean, I've made those mistakes. I have my Robert Rodriguez Quentin Tarantino film, that I tried to make that look just like theirs and tried to show everybody Oh, hey, look how cool I am. And it didn't work out. Because I wasn't using my own voice. And well, I didn't find I didn't. I didn't know who I was. Yes, yet. And I know that sounds pretentious as fuck. But it's true.

Deepthroat 1:05:55
It doesn't though. It doesn't because it makes so much sense. For those for those of us out there who actually did that, you know, who who tried to write like the people that inspired us only to find out like, like, okay, maybe certain elements of them work for me, but I'm not going to be successful until I find my own. And it Hey, writers out there. It's gonna take you years to figure that out. Do it is to keep writing. And for you directors, the only way to do it is to keep directing the garbage so that you can figure out what you like to do you know what I mean? You can figure out your inner Spielberg, without having Spielberg attached to it. You know what I mean?

Alex Ferrari 1:06:32
I mean, JJ, JJ Abrams, who is is probably close to Spielberg as your path today, but JJ movie is a JJ movie. Yep. No question. I mean, you could smell that you can, even when he did Super Eight,

Deepthroat 1:06:46
was gonna say Super Eight was like, Oh my gosh, it was literally

Alex Ferrari 1:06:50
like if Spielberg was reincarnated. Yeah, but it still had his flavor. Absolutely. It was not a rip off. It was not a rip off at all. So that's why those movies are successful. Now before before we finish because I mean, we could talk for hours, I can say I don't know. Right. And I appreciate your time. I appreciate your time, Deep Throat. Um

Deepthroat 1:07:13
give me some nuggets. You know, you've

Alex Ferrari 1:07:15
dropped a lot of stuff. Honestly, this this podcast, I'm going to recommend anytime I made a screenwriter, I'm like, you're going to need to listen to dethrone screenwriting about the bottom. Yes. No, no, no, it's because you're showing you have given. I mean, a lot of the stuff I knew from being in the business, but you don't talk about it. But I definitely don't have your perspective. Because you're you've walked, you walked in places I haven't walked. So it's fascinating to see the inside story about other things that I didn't have access, I didn't know about. And it's the truth and you are completely liberated to say whatever the hell you want to

Deepthroat 1:07:48
say. I know when you when you told me, we're just gonna do it anonymous, I was like, that completely changes my brochure, I was just so sweet. Because it's like, now I get to actually talk about the stuff that matters. You know what I mean? Like, I get to tell these young writers or even established writers who are kind of hitting like a LOL, you know what I mean? Cuz that happens to happens to me. I think it's super important to just understand and be reminded of what you're up against, you know what I mean? And, and, and knowing that it's a fluid process, you know, what I mean? Like the end. Another thing to keep in mind, too, is like, the turnover at these places is insane. God is insane. So like, you could submit a draft to an assistant who doesn't put it up, but then that assistant could go on to work at another company who then it does work, or the newest system was hired and you can resubmit to that person inside knowledge of like, okay, the turnovers happening, like or, or, you know, what was it like? Legendary, legendary, like, revamp their entire executives, you know what I mean, I had a script in there that they had passed on. And I didn't even get an acknowledgement of the first around. They had the turnover my agents, resubmitted it, and they were like, oh, let's get a meeting. You know what I mean? Like, like, the new regime is willing to meet me but the old regime things on garbage.

Alex Ferrari 1:09:08
It's a lot. It's a lot of so much politicking. And it is and it's just it's a it's a game of, of humor. It's a human game of personalities and psychological psychology. It's, it's so more complex than what people think it is like, Oh, you submitted to a company and oh, it doesn't get in. You don't get in? No, this is a game. It's chess,

Deepthroat 1:09:30
basically. Yep. Yep. And I think there are certain ways and we talked about this already, there are certain ways to go about it that make you seem more genuine. And I think that if you can find if you're more genuine, you're gonna be you're gonna find people that are more genuine, and then you don't have to worry about anything else. You know what I mean? Those doors are gonna be open for you. You can write a script that isn't that great, but like, the genuine nature of that relationship is going to leave that door open. You know what I mean? And that's what I feel like a lot of writers are gonna be surprised I think to hear because Because I think even when I was coming up, I was told by people that it's like you have one shot with these people. And while there's a lot of truth to that, there's also the truth. It's like, yes, with the people that you don't know, you know what I mean. But a lot of what you need to do when you come out here, and you should come out here is, like, just go out and meet people and be genuine. Like, be yourself. Don't be Oh, I'm the aspiring writer and, like, tell myself that, like, I'm the writer, that's gonna be the next big thing. It's like, No, dude, go talk to somebody about your fantasy football team. That's what's gonna get you in the door.

Alex Ferrari 1:10:32
You know what the funny thing is, though, when you say that, you have to remember that it is so difficult to be yourself at every stage of growth in your life. That's true. And only because you know, both you and I are in similar vintages. As far as age is concerned. We take it for granted now because I don't I am who I am. And if you don't like it, go off yourself. I just don't care. Yeah. But it took 20 years to get to this place in my life.

Deepthroat 1:11:04
And a lot of it was the last What 1015.

Alex Ferrari 1:11:09
I want to say the last go through all

Deepthroat 1:11:10
of that to figure out that, okay, this is how it's done, you know, and then business I am.

Alex Ferrari 1:11:15
And then the second I decided to finally just be myself. All the doors swung open. Yep, everything's clicking, everything starts clicking the second you are yourself, and you're comfortable within your own skin, which is has less to do with the craft of screenwriting, and more about your own personal development, but it is part of the equation.

Deepthroat 1:11:33
Yep. Yeah. And it's funny that you say that because one of my best friends successful writer, really, I mean, dude, this kid got talent out the ass, right? Like he's such a talented writer has, has like a stack of scripts that I think anybody would love to buy. Right? But he can't sell them for the life of him because he is not personable. Oh, yeah. Like, he's great at making these characters personal. But you put him into a pitch room and done, the guy just shuts down. Like, he's like, the most dry person to like, I mean, if you could, if you could, like, split a bottle of whiskey over a pitch meeting, like he would be good to go, you know what I mean? But like, I feel so bad for him. Because like, honestly, he's brought me into his pitch meetings being like, Dude, I will put your name on the script, if you helped me pitch it. I mean, it's just like, a lot of it has to do with like, putting yourself out there and confidence level. And like, those are all things that like are ancillary. You know what I mean? Writing, it's all you're all safe and sound when you're in your dark room, and you're typing in the glow of your computer and everything. Like that's all great, right? But the true reality is, is that this is a human business. It's and you have to make human connections with people and and you can't be a robot trying to sell your script. And and realize, too, that when you go out and meet these people at the bars, they're used to people being like, oh, this person only wants to talk to me, because they know I can help them get something. Right, right. Now,

Alex Ferrari 1:13:08
we could talk for hours about this for hours.

Deepthroat 1:13:11
No. Question.

Alex Ferrari 1:13:15
No, I do have I have one more question because we were talking about this before we started recording. And I said, don't stop, stop. I want I want to put this in. You have done rewrites on some major studio tentpole things that and I want you just to give a little bit of a glimpse behind the scenes of those studio movies, those writers that first draft that final draft conversation?

Deepthroat 1:13:39
Sure, sure. So a lot. And you'll see this a lot when you work in development, right? Where it's like, we'll have acquired the script. It's from a talented writer, you get the first draft of it. It's absolute trash. You know what I mean? And I think

Alex Ferrari 1:13:54
they buy it, but why do they buy it? Is it because of the concept? Yeah, they,

Deepthroat 1:13:57
I mean, sometimes it's open assignment, right? So it's like the production company itself will be like, we want a movie that is about a guy that finds a girl in the trunk of his rental car. And that's the premise of the movie. That's all we've got come and pitch us on your take on that, right? And then it'll bring in like four or five writers and one of them will be hired to write the script because they came in and they did a good pitch, you know what I mean? Like, that's, that's one way. And then they go out and they rush through the draft because they have a deadline of like three weeks. And I guarantee you they didn't start it until four days before because that's what we do, you know? And then it's like, then the then who reads the first draft? It's like, first, it's the development assistant. Let's get your take on it. How's the story function? We've trained you to do this, we understand that you have good notes like you read a first while I read it. And if you have a really cool boss, like we'll compare, you know what I mean? The other the other side of the coin is like, Okay, we've hired this writer or we bought the script, hoping that this guy would like or this girl will be able to rewrite it. You know, we paid them for a rewrite, you know, but realize that the WJ They standards have certain fees for rewriting and in a contract, you're guaranteed certain aspects. And the reality is if like, if you don't deliver in that amount of time, they own the property so they can go out and they are they have an option to the property so they can go out hire their own writers to rewrite your stuff for the WJ standard, if that writer then changes more than 50% of the script or something like that. And I don't know the rules, I'm sure there's probably somebody out there. That's like, that's not entirely true,

Alex Ferrari 1:15:26
yes. But the concept was

Deepthroat 1:15:29
significant changes to the actual piece of property that was optioned or acquired, then your name gets put on is like, uh, you know, whatever. And most of my rewrites have been about like, you know, restructuring story or punching up jokes, or something like that, right? Where it's like, I'll do a past that purely Comedy Based where it's like, okay, we've got the story now. But we're struggling to find the areas of comedy, like, we need to bring in somebody who's not as close to us to see where those opportunities lie, you know, so that's when they bring in sort of an outside resource, like myself, or like many, many other people out there who make a living off of rewriting as opposed to selling their own stuff, sometimes in the lols. Right. So it's like you go in, and you'll punch up like a good bit of the jokes, or maybe like, change the perspective of one character's voice, and it ends up working out. And then it goes to script and you get to know your girlfriend or your wife and be like, hey, that one was mine. Look, everybody's laughing at it. And you know, and it's super fun. And you get to, you know, you get to buy, you get to, you know, make your car payments for a little while and buy a nice steak dinner. And that's about it. I mean, it's like, if you're Aaron Sorkin, you're brought on to do a dialogue punch up and you make half a million dollars. I'm not Aaron Sorkin, so I don't get that kind of, right. But at the same time, it's like, you see a wide variety of quality, a wide quality of scripts, right. So like, if you're brought in to rewrite a second draft, that the writer, you know, was hired to write their idea didn't pan out, they've got two cracks at it. And now this is this is you're bringing on somebody else? You know, I mean, like, sometimes those scripts are, are painful to read. A lot of it, I think, is because and I and I think I speak for a lot of writers that get to the level of where they're being called into these meetings, it's like, or pitching for open assignments. It's like, a lot of writers actually hate the physical act of writing. You know what I mean? Like, oh, it's a burden to tell stories, they love to craft characters, but like to sit down and actually do the work is like excruciating. Sometimes, you know what I mean? Especially when it's somebody else's idea and not your own, you have to sometimes find the passion. And it happens a lot on TV shows a lot on TV shows, because you're all hired drag, something that somebody else created. And especially if it's an early season, it's like you're trying to figure out what the show is, in, people bring in stuff that, you know, they're given a week, right? Like, you go off the script, and you come back, and it's like, one week later, and it's like, now we have to spend the next month punching the script up as a group, you know what I mean? Like, that's kind of how it works. And to the level of quality that you see from like, these professional writers with big names, submit these drafts. And when you're brought in as a rewriter, do it, the quality is variable, sometimes it's a really great script. And you're like, God, I can't believe that they weren't, that they weren't on board with this, like this is a great take. But again, you got to think about their mandate, where they're going, where they want to go, what they expect to see who maybe they have somebody attached, who doesn't like it, you know what I mean? There are a lot of auxilary issues that could be there. Whereas if you're just brought on to the scripting phase, with no attachments, and this is just an open assignment that they wanted, and you come in, and it's like, you can tell that this writer put together a pitch like 48 hours before they got the meaning. And it's like, okay, this, you can tell that in the script, because they didn't really have, they may have had the hour long pitch thought out, but they didn't have the, the actual story fleshed out and given like, you know, two or three months, or six months, or 40 days, whatever it was, to write the script, you can tell that it's suffered, you know what I mean? Because it's even hard for us professional writers to go in and be like, Okay, I completely understand what this is, like, it's a process for us to, you know, and I think that, again, a lot of these young writers probably don't understand that that's the case. They're like, Oh, I'm gonna sell my script to this production company, and it's gonna go straight to principal photography, and it's gonna go straight to theaters, it's gonna have my name on it, it's gonna be exactly how I did it. And you have to be out of your mind, if you think that's going to be exactly how it works. Like you're going to sell the script you make, if you're lucky, get a crack at the rewrite. If not, they're gonna bring in somebody who isn't Aaron Sorkin or is an XYZ, you know, that they can afford and that fits with the genre or whatever. They're gonna do the punch ups. If they rewrite more than you, they're gonna be the ones that get the credit, you may be lucky enough to get a producer credit or a story by if it's in your contract. If you had a good manager, agent, whatever, right? And then at the end of the day, you may go to the theater to watch the movie that you set out to write and it'd be completely different than Your pitch that actually got you the job in the first place. That's how it works. It's like, it's like when you make a product for it's like Apple updates, like you get a new Apple update every three days. You know what I mean? Like their Apple updating scripts every three days, you know what I mean? Right. And I think that as rewriters, as writers in general, like, understanding that that's the name of the game is critical. I've seen, I've seen some

I've seen, let's say that I've seen some scripts that will never ever see the light of day because they were good. And I've seen really bad scripts get made because of those auxilary factors. You know,

Alex Ferrari 1:20:38
a man actually gets actual wants to do it. That's yeah,

Deepthroat 1:20:40
yep. Yep. Whether or not the original writer who pitched it is good. You know, and a lot of it's done in house, if you get hired by a management slash production company. They have a team of writers and a team of directors and a team of actors, like they have all of that stuff in house, so they can go in and package it and then sell it. You know what I mean? Right, as a package, which is a lot of how movies get sold these days, you know, at the big

Alex Ferrari 1:21:02
book studio stuff. Yeah, without question. Yeah. And

Deepthroat 1:21:05
it's like, if you if you have a shitty draft, that Matt Damon is like, Yeah, I'll do that movie. That sounds like a cool movie. I'll do it. Like when we read the script, and you get like an attachment letter. And there's a big PR release. And like, it's a variety and all this stuff. Matt Damon signs on to blah, blah, blah. That movie could never get made. Sure. But it's going to end up in the trades because they want to generate buzz and they want to keep the momentum flowing. But honestly, it all it all comes back to is the script going to function? Is the script going to be good? Is this going to be ready? You can have all the elements attached in the world. And even then, Guillermo del Toro will tell you, it's not doesn't mean it's going to hurt Terry Gilliam, I mean, is going to be like, Okay, I've had what does it Donquixote now, in terms for 25 years, you know what I mean? Yeah. And, you know, it just,

Alex Ferrari 1:21:53
it's exactly what happens. Alright, man, you've been so frickin amazing. Deep Throat. That is deep throat that you've dropped some major bombs on knowledge bombs on on the on the Dr. Mensa. Thank you so much. I have a few questions. I asked all of my guests. So that's kind of rapid fire. What advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today? Cross your fingers. It's very uplifting. Extremely uplifting, sir. Thank you. Um, can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career? Harry Potter. Okay. What is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film industry or in life?

Deepthroat 1:22:44
Mmm, that's a great question. I would say being genuine and and owning who I am as opposed to what I think other people want me to be.

Alex Ferrari 1:22:56
That's a great lesson to learn.

Deepthroat 1:22:58
It's applies to both business and life, man.

Alex Ferrari 1:23:01
Absolutely. Now, what are three of your favorite films of all time?

Deepthroat 1:23:05
Three of my favorite films of all time. Okay, off the top of my head, I would say Braveheart. Okay, excellent film. A movie network.

Alex Ferrari 1:23:16
Another amazing both very well written. Uh huh. You know,

Deepthroat 1:23:19
and, and a Lord of War. I love Lord of War. Really? You like what do I know if I wanted to throw you a curveball? Something that like maybe wasn't, you know, really, Lord. But I love that movie. I mean, say what you want about the story and the writing and my wife hates the ending. Like, I love that movie so much. I love how it starts. I love how finishes I love the character I like can't take my eyes off of him. I love the midpoint reversal and best

Alex Ferrari 1:23:47
part of that movie. That stuff. For me the best part of that movie was the opening title sequence.

Deepthroat 1:23:52
I mean, that's an opening title sequence. It's so good. And it's like, I for those I'm not gonna ruin anything for those who haven't seen the spoiler alerts here, right? Because go out and watch it I think is awesome. And say what you want about the writing and say what you want about the characters like that movie kept me entertained. I cared about whether or not and I love like movies where it's like there's an antihero. You know what I mean? Like I grew I'm rooting for the guy who's the bad guy. You know what I mean? I love that. And that was like one of the first times where and I could have set the matrix I could have set Jurassic Park and I mean the last in my real life in my in my life. first movie I ever saw was Land Before Time. Genius film. My mom took me it was the first movie I ever saw in the theater. And I was like, blown away. I was like, oh my god, movies are great. I've been obsessed ever since. And yeah, Harry Potter was what convinced me that I wanted to write matrix changed my entire perspective of the world and of filmmaking and but my favorite movies are Braveheart network and board of war because I wanted to put something in that you probably haven't heard before.

Alex Ferrari 1:24:54
That's never been on the show on any of my pockets. Ever been on the show. So you,

Deepthroat 1:24:59
like at this point? They're probably like, I wasted an hour and a half listen to this dude and his favorite movies Lord of War.

Alex Ferrari 1:25:05
This guy knows nothing. But then again, because we don't know who you are, it doesn't matter. So you can be free. Maybe I'm wrong. Maybe you did you don't know.

Deepthroat 1:25:16
But I definitely, it was Andrew nickel, I think

Alex Ferrari 1:25:18
yes, it was it was now the, the this is the part of the show where I generally ask where we can find you. But you will now go back into the into the darkness of the parking, the parking,

Deepthroat 1:25:30
maybe, maybe in a future episode, you can drop my name as being like, Oh, if you guys are looking for somebody who can help you develop your script, you know, check this guy out, and we just never know who it was.

Alex Ferrari 1:25:41
Maybe we could do something like that if you like. But now you're gonna go back into the shadows of the parking garage, sir.

Unknown Speaker 1:25:48
Thank you. Thank you.

Alex Ferrari 1:25:49
Thank you, man so much for being so candid. And and really, I think I think we helped hopefully helped a lot of people listening because there was some great, great practical industry advice in this without question. And you didn't expose yourself too much, sir.

Deepthroat 1:26:04
No, I mean, we only had to, we had to edit out one part. So just one

Alex Ferrari 1:26:07
part. That's it. Thanks again, man. Little seed

Deepthroat 1:26:11
there for the people listening to be like, Oh, I wonder what that was.

Alex Ferrari 1:26:15
Exactly. Thank you. Thank you for your time.

Deepthroat 1:26:18
I appreciate it. Thanks for having me.

Alex Ferrari 1:26:21
As promised Deep Throat brought the mega knowledge bombs this episode. And I want to thank Deep Throat for coming on and just being so candid, and sharing so much about his experience his behind the scenes point of view of being a script reader being a development executive, and all the juicy, juicy details and morsels that he gave us in this episode. I really hope you guys got something out of it. I know I did. I there's a ton of stuff that I had no idea about. And I'm really, really grateful that he was able to come on and share his knowledge with you guys. So this is a point of the episode where I say if you want to go to the show notes and get links to everything we talked about, just head over to indie film hustle.com forward slash BPS zero 24. But there will be no links to him. Because obviously, his deep throat he is now back living in a parking garage somewhere in the shadows, reading a script or writing one I'm sure now if you want to get deep throat to actually read one of your scripts, you can submit your screenplays to the bulletproof script coverage service at cover my screenplay.com Thank you for listening guys. And truly if you found this episode informative, and it helped you in any way, please share this episode with as many friends screenwriters, filmmakers, as you know, I want this information out there to help as many people as possible so please, share, share, share. And if you haven't subscribed to the podcast already, please head over to screenwriting podcast.com Thank you for listening. And as always, keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you next time. Thanks for listening to the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay calm that's b u ll e t e r o s CR e n PLA y.com


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BPS 023: The Nutshell Technique: Cracking the Secret of Successful Screenwriting with Jill Chamberlain

Today on the show we have author/veteran script consultant Jill Chamberlain who’s book The Nutshell Technique: Crack the Secret of Successful Screenwriting has taken the screenwriting world by storm.

Jill Chamberlain discovered in her work that an astounding 99 percent of first-time screenwriters don’t know how to tell a story. What the 99 percent do instead is present a situation. In order to explain the difference, Chamberlain created the Nutshell Technique, a method whereby writers identify eight dynamic, interconnected elements that are required to successfully tell a story.

Now, for the first time, Chamberlain presents her unique method in book form with The Nutshell Technique: Crack the Secret of Successful Screenwriting. Using easy-to-follow diagrams (“nutshells”), she thoroughly explains how the Nutshell Technique can make or break a film script. Chamberlain takes readers step-by-step through thirty classic and contemporary movies, showing how such dissimilar screenplays as Casablanca, Chinatown, Pulp Fiction, The Usual Suspects, Little Miss Sunshine, Juno, Silver Linings Playbook, and Argoall have the same system working behind the scenes, and she teaches readers exactly how to apply these principles to their own screenwriting. Learn the Nutshell Technique, and you’ll discover how to turn a mere situation into a truly compelling screenplay story.

Since its publication in 2016, The Nutshell Technique: Crack the Secret of Successful Screenwriting was an instant classic. It is the go-to manual many professionals swear by, and it’s on the syllabus at colleges across the U.S. including the world-renowned screenwriting program at Columbia University.

Enjoy my conversation with Jill Chamberlain.

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Alex Ferrari 0:29
I like to welcome to the show Jill Chamberlin. Thank you so much for being on the show. Jill. My pleasure. So how can you? First of all, how can you share with us how you got into the business in the first place?

Jill Chamberlin 2:40
Sure, um, you know, I was a frustrated screenwriter. I was getting a note, something along the lines of, I don't understand why this character is on this journey now. And another version of that note would be something along the lines of your failing to tell a story, what you're presenting is a situation. Just kind of a devastating note to hear. But no one could explain to me the difference. And none of the books could explain the difference. So I started deconstructing movies probably partially as a procrastination technique. Right, we're always looking for those, but and also because I was truly blocked. And I didn't know how to get around this problem. And I had had some good training at Columbia University, and also some private programs in New York City that dealt with aspects of this, but no one was putting it all together. And I kind of sensed there was an answer to, to this story versus situation dilemma. And decided to figure it out. And I watched your hundreds of movies and finally boiled it down to eight sell essential elements that are required in order to tell a story. And I probably somewhat put them all I was very excited when I finally figured out that I could put this all on one page form. And glibly wrote on this form, you know, screenplay in a nutshell. And hence my natural technique was born. So it's eight essential elements that are in here's the key is they're interrelated elements, it is not like, so many of the beat sheet methods, I would call them that are out there that tell you, you're supposed to hit 15 or 22, or I've even heard 120 pre prescribed beats. This is that these are not moments in time. There's really I mean, there's two moments in time that are part of my eight elements. The other elements are not frozen moments in time. They are part of a system interactive system. And and you The key difference is, again, it's not just unconnected moments in time that there's a connection between these parts that no one else is pointing out. And and here is the difference between a situation and story.

Alex Ferrari 5:15
One of the reasons I wanted to have you on the show, obviously, is because you've written one of the one of the best selling books on story right now, which is called the nutshell, the nutshell technique. So can you kind of, can you go into those eight a little bit, or at least parts of that without giving away everything?

Jill Chamberlin 5:32
Sure, well, you know, I am going to actually give away everything for your listeners can download the natural technique worksheet was gonna be? Yeah, it's gonna be in the show notes. And I actually can't even tell you, I think it's Jill chamberlain.com/worksheet.

Alex Ferrari 5:48
I'll put it in the show notes. Make sure he gets it.

Jill Chamberlin 5:51
Yeah, you can download this is this is my method that these are the two nutshell technique forms, they're in their worksheets for figuring out your story. And it's so much easier to figure it out on a one page schematic than it is when you've already done 120 Page screenplay. And people tend to, you know, they pay me good money to analyze their screenplays as a script consultant. And I wish they come to me in the beginning, and looked and started with this form, because I don't need to read 120 pages to tell you whether or not your story works, we can actually figure it out. In fact, it's way easier to figure it out. When we're looking at these eight essential elements. We can see them right there on this visual schematic, and you can see what's working and what's not working.

Alex Ferrari 6:45
Well, can you go? Can you go in a little bit to those eight? Those eight things?

Jill Chamberlin 6:49
Yeah, um, I've tried to it's kind of visual. So um, but I'll try and hit on the I guess the main are a couple of the the elements that are involved. So first of all, I divide stories into two forms. One is for comedy and what is for tragedy. And we're why I'm using the word comedy. I'm not talking about the genre of Ha, ha ha, comedy. I'm, these are the original definitions, and even blame Aristotle, if you want to blame. Those are his definition.

Alex Ferrari 7:22
Oh, that guy. That guy. That guy

Jill Chamberlin 7:25
who told us more about story structure, then then the sum total of all the books that have been written since then, yes. And I also make it easy for you don't have to read Aristotle, which is not an easy read. I discussed in my opening chapters, the Aristotelian principles behind it, and how it comes with Arsenal. But at the at the most basic form, a story is going to involve a protagonist, one protagonist. So I'll mention, even if it's an ensemble picture, one of the characters is a protagonist. Now this can be the writer secret, by the way, this is this is for the writer to know the audience doesn't have to know this, the audience can think it's an a buddy picture an ensemble picture and not worry about who the protagonist is, it's going to be real helpful, though, for the writer to know who's truly the protagonist, and that that character's journey is going to be the backbone. And so the natural technique, if it's a comedy structure, that means basically, it doesn't mean haha comedy, but it doesn't mean a happy ending. And it means that the character has changed and learned and gone 180 degrees from an initial flaw to its opposite strength. And all I said right now is literally from Aristotle. That's Aristotle. Now what my technique does is point out a couple other Aristotelian elements that come into play that one of the things of making sure you're telling a story instead of present a situation that was something actually Aristotle talked about. He referred to it as that is episodic, actually, as we would do, but the best stories are ones that are not episodic, where there's a logic, it's not just an unconnected event, but there's a logic between the events. So that's among the things we're going to be setting up that it is, is there's a reason why we're putting this character on this journey and makes it inherent that that character is the protagonist and and it wouldn't be for a different character. And there's certain moments that are going to be are specifically designed. So for example, the break into Act Two Which goes by a bunch of people here a couple of different ways that people refer to that. And the term I use is the point of no return. And the idea is that contained in that point of no return is a, the characters getting two things, they're getting something they really want. So Michael Dorsey in Tootsie wants an acting job, who gets that in the point of no return where he gets the soap opera, the part of the soap opera, but there's it gets up that he doesn't want. And that's the catch. And the catch is going to be this perfect to Encap just gets to dress up as a woman, right, and that's going to be a character. And that's going to be the perfect test of his flaw, which is that he doesn't respect women. So those are just encompassed a few of the eight elements there. But what's the point of no return? The catch, and the flaw? That's for the eight right there. And kind of this method is about figuring out what are you married to, like in the beginning, we've got a bunch of plot, we've got a character idea and maybe some different plot things bouncing around or had some of which probably contradict each other, but in our mind, we think are working. And this is forcing you to start to put some of these on paper and figure out what am I really married to am I really married to this premise of a guy who gets apart on soap or he's gonna have to dress up as a woman, or my married to a flaw? And maybe we had a different blindness? Surely that implies that He is arrogant, which is actually one of Michael's flaws, but it's not the nutshell flaw, that flaw doesn't particularly work with this specific catch. The fact that he has to dress as a woman now happens to be the perfect test of someone whose flaw is they don't respect women.

So I feel it's gonna be I described something that is a lot easier actually, for your listeners, when they will see the form. It's very visual, you know, it's almost it's like a graphic novel, right? designed the form. And in my book, I have 30 examples of movies in the back of just every all on this identical form. Everything from Casablanca, to the godfather to Pulp Fiction to several Linings Playbook, all use to The Big Lebowski all use this identical structure. And yeah, so the goal is to help writers make sure they don't so what I found was that 99% of writers fail to tell the store, um, 99% of screenwriters present a situation.

Alex Ferrari 12:51
Now, can you can you make it? Can you? Can you explain the difference between a situation and a story? It's, um, so so we can kind of get an idea?

Jill Chamberlin 13:00
Yeah, yeah. Um, so yeah, I wrote a whole book about it, just to, you know, get into the details of it. But I can, a couple ways I can briefly kind of give you an overview is, life is a situation. Life is, this happens, then this happens, and this happens, then this happens. That's not a story. Story is, this happens, which leads to that happening, which makes it I want it when this thing happens, etc. There's a connection between the parts. And another way to look at it, it would be if I can take your protagonist out of your plot, and put a completely different one in and maybe with a couple of tweaks, it works just as well. That's a situation. That's not a story, a story. I shouldn't be able to do that a story should be unique to the protagonist. Um, one example I like to give often in my workshops is Yeah, I was talking about Tootsie a 99% of writers the writers who are failing tell a story or are writing what I call fat Tootsie. That Tootsie is let's imagine we have the exact same plot of the movie Tootsie. Michael Dorsey out of work after desperate for an acting job and gets a part of soap opera, but I'm going to make a change instead of him getting apart as a woman. He's going to get a part of a man but the man is the male character is supposed to be an obese man in this fictional survival role. Michael really wants this part. So he's going to get a makeup artist friend and a costumer to make him a fat suit and prostheses so he can pretend that he's actually a Batman and he's going to get the part. It would almost very similar to the real tuxedo. It almost works as well. You know, we tend to find it funny when when a guy is trying to pretend to be a woman, it could equally be funny to have a little guy like Dustin Hoffman pretending to be a big fat guy. And he's got to get in and out of his fat suit and grows to hate it. And, you know, going to the climax, he's going to pull off the skirt suit and reveal his little just Brooklyn. It almost works. But that Tootsie is a situation. It's got nothing to do with the character of Michael Dorsey, Michael Dorsey who doesn't respect women. Right? So we put the character in an arbitrary plot that sounds sounds like it could be amusing. But without making sure there's a connection between these eight elements. You've got a situation and not a story.

Alex Ferrari 15:51
Yeah, because it basically the mean even if you made him into like a character who hates fat people has a big problem with fat people. It doesn't ring as powerful as a man who disrespects women, and now has to be a woman to get to the point where he wants to go.

Jill Chamberlin 16:09
Yeah, we chase that flaw. If we did chase it, it would be much closer to a story, wouldn't it?

Alex Ferrari 16:14
It'd be a little bit, it would be a little closer, but not as powerful or as funny as, as a guy and drag as throughout cinematic history has shown us.

Jill Chamberlin 16:23
Right, right. But I think actually, it could potentially work as well. Yes, it's 99% of writers are right or writing fantasy they're writing. They're putting their character in an arbitrary situation. That's not that's nothing to do with the character, inner character. And that's one of the biggest flaws, the biggest flaws you can have as a screenwriter is not understanding that difference.

Alex Ferrari 16:49
Well, the so so if I understand you correctly, you focus a lot more on the character. And as far as their journey through the story, as opposed to the story itself. It's a very symbiotic relationship, as it should be, where the plot is helping the character develop. And vice versa, as opposed to a lot of stories that are either all plot driven, where you could kind of replace the the main character almost, and it doesn't really matter. Or it's all character driven. And there's no plot and that just kind of Moran during, throughout the story, if we call it that. Does that make sense?

Jill Chamberlin 17:27
Yeah, I would say, though, that, for something to truly meet the definition of a story, at least the one I'm trying to use in story versus situation, character and plot are not separate, that there are specific Inner Inner intersections between the two that you must hit in order for you successfully to tell a story otherwise. So you could have a great character with a great character arc, but he didn't develop the right plot to test that character, you still have a situation, so it doesn't matter if you're, if it's character driven, or it's plot driven, you could end up with a situation, for it to be a story that there are very specific interests, these two things are interconnected. And this necessarily so So the problem with the situation is both with people, you know, isn't isn't subject just to one or a plot approach or character approach. Either one, if you are gonna fall into that trap, if you don't find these, these intersections between the two.

Alex Ferrari 18:42
What I like about your technique is that, unlike, let's say the standard Joseph Campbell's hero's journey, you can't attach that to every story. I mean, if you try to do the hero's journey on a detective story, it doesn't work nearly as well as it does on a adventure movie. But your technique can actually be placed on every kind of story because it isn't it trickled to storytelling with this symbiotic relationship of plot and character. Yeah,

Jill Chamberlin 19:11
right. So it gets down to the the definition of a story. And it's not limited by Shawn, I went to great efforts in the book to include, you know, every genre and every time period, you know, in the history of film to show how universal great storytelling can be, it doesn't matter if it's, you know, the matrix or August Osage County, both of those have have a great story elements, that because they have all eight of these elements and to have those proper interconnections that make them a story, not a situation.

Alex Ferrari 19:49
When you start writing, where would you start with the the character or the story and then how do they interact? How do they when do you bring the other one in We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show.

Jill Chamberlin 20:12
Well, I think it depends on the writer, I tend to be a premise. I think both approaches are valid I, I can sort of look writers into two large categories, I would say they're those who are our premise, they start with the premise. What if somebody woke up and it was the same day again? A great movie, right? And I tend to be a premise person, I start with the idea what's what you know what this happened? And, and then I tried to figure out well, what would be the most interesting character to put on that journey? Right, you made the mistake of putting the reader character the love interest in the ending McDow day making her the protagonist, we would lose the emotional, it would again be a situation on story. Because it's not test, it's not, she doesn't have a flaw that is that this journey of being stuck repeating the same day is a good one to repeat, I was saying her flaws, something like she's a little naive. That's not a, that's not really gonna be tested by having to repeat the same day, every day. It happens to be a great test for somebody who's a selfish prick. Right? Because that's gonna you know, it's gonna get tiresome it just doing that, and he's going to have to, it's going to force him to finally become a better person. Now, there are other people who I think start with a character. I think that's a valid way to start. You know, what if I had a guy who's a jerk, weatherman, who thinks he's better than everybody else? Hmm, what would be an interesting journey to put them on that would test that? I think it's a little harder to stumble upon the great premise seconds. So I tend to be the other way. But both are valid ways to work.

Alex Ferrari 21:57
I mean, if it's like Rocky, you know, what if there was a bum, who got a shot at the title? And, and he just wanted to go all the way that starts basically, it's it is a premise, but you're starting with Rocky. Yeah, yeah. And then you're working the story along the line the plot along that way. So it does have I mean, I don't know where Stallone started if he started with I think he did, if I remember correctly in interviews, he started with Rocky, he's like, what if that guy got a shot?

Jill Chamberlin 22:24
Probably. Well, I guess Yeah, I would guess them too. Yeah. Well, I think it all comes down to ultimately they are if you're succeed in telling a story that there are it's almost impossible to separate them you know, it's kind of hard to tell in the Rocky example which one you know, we can guess and I think it's a pretty good guest that he started with the character but they are you know, what makes it unique. It's not about a underdog you know, trying for a title that's not particularly unique. It's this guy doing it that makes it unique.

Alex Ferrari 23:00
Right, exactly. And if you start going through the Rocky movies, if we use going down the rocky tent terminology as I'm thinking each movie he is tested and it changes in different ways, but it's always surrounded around rocky as opposed to I don't know what's what were the situations bigger than the character sometimes almost like Jurassic Park almost Yeah,

Jill Chamberlin 23:24
right star the Star Wars. It's not just about Luke. Right now.

Alex Ferrari 23:29
It's about 1000 things going on at the same time. Yeah. Now as a screenwriter in your opinion, how do you surprise the audience? You know, what is that thing that just that because we're so savvy as as audience members now we consume so much content it's consumed over 100 years now of cinema, not to mention television. You know, things that worked in the Casa Blanca days do not work today. How would you surprise your audience?

Jill Chamberlin 23:58
Yeah, well, I'll give you I'll try and sum up one of my best tips out there so the so where we really want to be surprised is in the climax right that that and that event that starts off are x three M and because that's what everyone paid their money for. By the way you know it you know, typical climax probably only lasts literally two minutes but that's we all came to see that climax so it that's the real struggle is to find a surprising climax is is often said that a great ending is inevitable, yet unexpected. And when they say that the ending they really mean climax, so that would be the climax is inevitable yet unexpected. That's a pretty tall order, by the way. That's a pretty tall order, but that's our goal. Um, so a movie like for example, yeah, Tootsie if you saw it, especially if you saw it in today Today, it probably wouldn't be a surprise. But if you saw it in in movie theaters, when he lived on the air reveals he's a man. You never saw that coming. That's the unexpected. Once you see that, you can't imagine the movie any other way. That's the inevitable. So here's my best advice, okay about how to find your inevitable yet unexpected planet, how to find your surprising handle. Right before the climax of movie, your protagonist typically is going to be at the lowest place, and you really want them between a rock and a hard place. You can't have them between a walk and soft place, because then we'll know they're going to choose soft place. Or if they go to someplace we're not going to buy, they're going to be between a walk in her place. Two bad choices, two terrible choices they don't want to take. Alright, so now we're beginning at three, they got to make a choice. So what are they going to choose? They're gonna choose walk, or they're going to choose hard place. No, they're going to choose and now I'm going to tell you a very important technical term I use with my writers, they're not going to choose rock, they're not going to choose hard place, they're going to choose banana. Banana, that is my technical term we use. We literally use that in my workshops, we want to find the banana. It's not a rock. It's not a hard place. It's not even the same family. Right? It's not even a mineral. So when Michael Dorsey pulls up the up the way and reveals he's actually a man underneath that it had nothing it had no direct we did not see that coming because it's too bad choices before that were either continue on the show, which he's miserable about because his love interest won't even speak to him or deal with some sort of legal nightmare. When he picks banana, we didn't see that kind of so that is your That's my best advice to writers about how to find your healer surprising ending is trying to find an unexpected third choice. And, and that is easier said than done. You don't want it to come completely out of nowhere. So it they set it up in some ways that sometimes that soap opera goes live and they have to they have to add live lines on the spot and so that we believe that but they hid that well enough that we did not see we did not see that as an option, that he was suddenly going to change the wholesale proper and, and change the life and claim that he was a male character underneath the female character.

Alex Ferrari 27:51
So finding something that just comes out of left field in many ways.

Jill Chamberlin 27:56
Yeah, I think I prefer calling it left field in that just because, you know, we don't want you know, don't sex machi not it's not right. Yeah, of course, yes. Not some external thing that suddenly saves the day, it's something they're going to find in with themselves that that we didn't see coming, but at the same time, it has to have an emotional satisfying logic to it. Right? You can't you can't have the character by let you know that I hesitated left field. Just because we don't want the character suddenly doing something out of character, quote unquote,

Alex Ferrari 28:29
was gonna like it's kind of like Luke and Star Wars like he, he decides to use the force, which comes out of left field. But It completely makes sense for the journey that he's been on. But most people not most people who saw that movie never saw coming. Like what what, like, at the end of the day comes out of nowhere.

Jill Chamberlin 28:49
Yeah, he's been resisting it. Forever, right. And oh, just another random example of a movie. It just has such a great climax for me, you know, flight?

Alex Ferrari 29:03
Oh, yeah, of course. Yeah. The Robert Zemeckis film with Denzel.

Jill Chamberlin 29:06
Right. What a wonderful climax that movie has where to you never saw that coming? We go into that we've got we're going into that hearing. And we think rock and hard place we think the bad choices are, is it going to get nailed by them, and, you know, found guilty or to get to get away with that. Those are the two choices. We think that there are. And we goes in basically making that to be a hero, and that they're going to pin the blame on on his lover Katrina, who's dead by the way and won't go to prison. But you know, and it you could totally get off scot free. But we can see it in a space we never saw coming before that moment. But we totally buy. Of course. It's a great course by Denzel on top of that. In that moment, we can see it on his face. It's like the most important lie of his whole life. And he's been lying his whole life. Right. He said that two seconds before he went in there. The lawyer said you know this It's quite as coaching him and he says, Don't tell me how to line up my drinking. I've been lying about my drinking for 20 years. Good luck. This is the he doesn't have to lie. By the way. He can just say when the woman says, you know, it says to him, you know, who do you think was responsible for the vodka bottles was a Katrina, he could just say, I don't know, you know, where I don't have an opinion. He can't even do that. And you can see it on its face. It's the easiest lie he's ever been asked to do the most important wise ever been asked to do. But it can't do it. And so it's and that's unexpected, but it's also very fitting in the character where we felt this inner conflict, but he's hasn't even been in touch with the fact of this is denial of his culpability at what's happened.

Alex Ferrari 30:46
Got it. Now, let me ask you a question. Because you work with a lot of writers. What is the main difference between professional and amateur writers?

Jill Chamberlin 30:57
A number one, I would say the story versus situation, I gotta tell you 99%, of writers of amateur screenwriters are our time and time again, are presenting a situation. It's an arbitrary plot, and maybe an interesting plot and maybe a clever plot, but it's arbitrary. It's got nothing to do with that character. Can you can you

Alex Ferrari 31:17
can you can you give me an example of a movie that does a situation that's in the in the mainstream? If you can, if you can, like that's why it didn't work?

Jill Chamberlin 31:27
Um, the situation? Surprisingly, few professional movies actually

Alex Ferrari 31:34
get to that point even even even studios? Yeah,

Jill Chamberlin 31:37
um, I'm sure there are. It's a little off the top of my head.

Alex Ferrari 31:45
I mean, I hate to say it, but I'm trying to think of something like Justice League, which was such a horrible FOB. I wonder if, I mean, there's some of those characters you could just pull out of there. No care.

Jill Chamberlin 31:58
I didn't see it. But I think that is a one of the problems with a lot of superhero movies is that they are, they're episodic, right. That's, that is not. And that's another way to say situational, so they're not focused so much on telling a satisfying story, but in setting up a sequel,

Alex Ferrari 32:19
right, exactly. So you could you know, exchange one hero for another. And it would be fine because the plot will take them, you know, they'll fight the villain. They'll do all that stuff. But that's why the Nolan Batman's was so powerful. And so well done. Because every everything was about the character, his character

Unknown Speaker 32:36
driven everything they make different and that

Alex Ferrari 32:39
night probably being right one of the best written superhero genre films ever was because it was a perfect mirror. The Joker was such a perfect mirror to his Batman and every which way from chaos to structure and, and so on and so forth. It was so brilliantly done. But you're right, and when you start watching the suit, because I watch all the I'm a big superhero movie fan, Marvel, and mostly Marvel. You see, did you see the movie Logan? I didn't see like, Logan, arguably one of the best written one. Also, one of the best written superhero movies that come out last year was amazing. But it was all about what that story, you could not pull Logan out of that story and replace it, where you could do that with some Marvel movies and some other superhero movies.

Jill Chamberlin 33:23
Yeah. And I say I'm not a big, huge fan of superhero movies. Because I find them because of that issue that we're talking about. But also, I find them so predictable, especially that third eye, yeah.

Alex Ferrari 33:38
There's always a villain that comes from the sky.

Jill Chamberlin 33:42
And they're gonna, you know, they're gonna finally defeat them in the same kind of way. And I argue I you know, and I understand people love superhero superhero movies, people want to see superhero movies, they want to see movie stars, they want to see big special effects. And they make a lot of money. I would argue they could do that amount of business plus 10%. If they added the depth to it, if they did find the surprising third out that they could bring in people like me more consistently.

Alex Ferrari 34:12
What do you look at you look at the dark night, you had no idea how that was gonna go? Yeah, you have no idea. Like, what the joke like? How was that going to end? You had no idea. And it was so brilliantly written? Yeah,

Jill Chamberlin 34:25
yeah. Yeah, I consulted on a superhero movie. Recently like $150 million movie and I really work to try to add irony in some of the concepts for my book and try to make it less predictable. And I found I could not successfully get any headway, though. And on the less predictable third, and that part I couldn't seem to make any grounds. get anywhere with the powers that be about that.

Alex Ferrari 34:56
Now, let me ask you a question in your opinion, without getting yourself in trouble. What what Why do you think that's the case? Because it just feel that that's a formula that's working. And they don't want to mess with it?

Jill Chamberlin 35:06
I think so I think they're afraid they'll I think, I think they're wrong. They're afraid they'll somehow hurt their base, if they have more depth where and like I said, My argument is you could do all the business you're doing, plus 10%, if you had some more depth to it, that's my opinion.

Alex Ferrari 35:27
Now, in your opinion, today, we have this binge watching effect, that we're just now because of streaming and because of watching shows so much. How does that affect writers in today's world?

Jill Chamberlin 35:41
Well, very talking, I mean, that's really a product of television.

Alex Ferrari 35:44
Yeah, more episodic America. Because I mean, you look at a show like Breaking Bad, which had a beautiful arc over five seasons. That's a very different kind of storytelling. Does the nutshell technique work within television? Or is it strictly for cinema?

Jill Chamberlin 36:00
It does work with television. I have not unleash this to the public yet. But I am in the process of developing it for television now. It does work absolutely for television and it's but there's so I think there's a lot more variety in the types of there's so much more variety, particularly in recent years, you know, where you know, it's not just your sitcom anymore, you know, or sitcom or your one hour dramas now we have you know, we have anthology series, we don't have series of references of like something like Breaking Bad where they actually planned out the ending. And then we have more open ended most much more are gonna be open ended, right? You have no idea and even braking, Dad had no idea how many years they'd be renewed. And so there are a lot of different approaches as far as looking at it season and series wise. But I will tell you, the Nichelle technique applies per episode, I'm seeing these same eight elements in good episodic television. You have for years, I think people have said, well, but the characters don't change in TV, certainly not in an episode maybe over the course of a season. I gotta tell you, they do. You know, the pilot episode, we think of Breaking Bad, right? It's famously about a good man who becomes a bad man, right? Very first episode very first, the pilot episode. He goes from being nice to in that same episode. becoming quite assertive, by the end of it,

Alex Ferrari 37:42
right running around in his underwear with a gun in a Winnebago in the middle of the desert with meth in there.

Jill Chamberlin 37:48
Just like making this very passionate, it ends with him, you know, very passionately making love to his wife, right? I when she asked, Where do you bed, you know, and she's like, who are you? Right? That's in the very first episode.

Alex Ferrari 38:02
As your dogs he agrees. So let me ask you, I'm going to ask you a few questions. I asked all of my guests. What advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today?

Jill Chamberlin 38:18
Right, learn story, learn how to write, story and write screenplays. And you got to write lots of them. Too many people think that to break into the business that the business is looking for screenplays, that's actually kind of a myth. They're looking for screenwriters. Right. A screenwriter doesn't just have one screenplay. How, how attractive is it going to be to somebody you know, a manager who's going to make all of you action your screenplay. That means you'll make about $4,000 They'll make about $400. Right? A big whopping 400 bucks. Right? Right. It's gonna buy them lunch in Hollywood. How attractive to the writer who has one screenplay versus the writer who has six.

Alex Ferrari 39:13
Okay, good. Good. Good. Good tip. Now, can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career?

Jill Chamberlin 39:24
I'm one that really change the way I look at things. The books out of print, although you might get it via Amazon or something, is a book called The Elements of cinema. It's by a fellow named Stefan Sharpe, who sharp sh AR FF and I actually had him as a professor when I was at Columbia, and he blew my mind. Um, I you know, I took this class I was actually a freshman. I'd never considered structuring film before that I've loved movies, but I'd never considered structure never really paid attention to. I mean, I knew movies were edited, but I and you know, that were your wide shots and close up and I never paid attention to how they're put together. And he really pulled back the curtain. And I think it's a big part of what got what got me to having my deconstructed nature of trying to deconstruct you know, what works with story and things like that, to try to pull back the curtain and parse it out.

Alex Ferrari 40:36
Now, what is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film industry or in life

Jill Chamberlin 40:41
ah, perfectionism is not your

Alex Ferrari 40:46
friend. Amen.

Jill Chamberlin 40:50
You just got to get it done.

Alex Ferrari 40:51
And what are three of your favorite films of all time?

Jill Chamberlin 40:55
Ah, well, okay. Paper

Alex Ferrari 40:58
Moon. Yeah.

Jill Chamberlin 41:00
I would say it's a masterpiece, and I know you have your screenwriters, it's great for story director should really take no, it is a it is really an masterfully directed movie. Just in particular, I think writers to look at that first act and how information is doled out how the story unfolds. And really that how that first the very first scene, you know, the protagonist is a con man, we don't know that. Yeah, he's a con man who shows up at this funeral. And without any dialogue. He kind of approaches this graveside funeral. He steal some flowers off of another gray to present them. That is that is just wonderfully delicious screenwriting right there. It's in the script, by the way checked. The stealing of the flowers. It tells us everything we need to know about this guy. Right. He's a con man we know we're know right off the back. But he also means well at times.

Alex Ferrari 42:04
He's a comment with a heart.

Jill Chamberlin 42:06
Comment with heart. Yeah. Oh, he said three movies. Yeah. Next one is the verdict. Oh, yeah. Paul Newman. Yeah. You ever hear your protagonist is supposed to be likable? Guy, right. So he's not even you know, heard of ambulance, chasing con men are lawyers, he crash and then a funeral crashes. He crashes funerals. He's a hearse chasing lawyer. He's a hardcore alcoholic. He's a liar. He lies throughout the movie, he hits a women. Um, I mean, it's it's hard to imagine a a protagonist, you know, play by Paul Newman of all people. You know, that could be more unlikable on paper, right? But even this guy deserves redemption. And that's the theme and by the end, we're totally on the sky side. To me, that's really powerful screenwriting. It's easy to get us to root for a nice guy.

Alex Ferrari 43:04
Right to get us to like a son of a bitch is a whole other thing.

Jill Chamberlin 43:07
Standing on her feet cheering for a guy himself, you know, punch a woman a few scenes before. It's kind of amazing.

Alex Ferrari 43:13
And what's the third one?

Jill Chamberlin 43:15
Groundhog Day system, brilliant film. Another great example of unlikable character. You know, there's, there's nothing he's funny. But other than that, there's nothing likable about him. And frankly, it wouldn't work if he was likable.

Alex Ferrari 43:30
Right? Exactly. If he was a really nice guy who just gets thrown into the situation. people be like, oh cares, but because he's such a sob in the movie. I mean, he is he's funny. But other than that, he's really is a horrible person. pretty horrible

Jill Chamberlin 43:45
person. Yeah. So you'll see a thing here and my favorite movies, unlikable characters, you do yourself a real disservice. If you're focusing on that. Way, it's a much more interesting feat to get us to like a character who starts out as unlikable.

Alex Ferrari 44:05
No. Do you think in today's studio world that a film with an unlikable protagonist that's not being written by someone who's established or doesn't have a big star attached to it has a chance?

Jill Chamberlin 44:17
I do think it has a good chance because if you could do it, if you could pull it off, it's you're gonna it's going to be much more memorable. Think about how much more you know how many how many nice guy protagonists, screenplays, just do the gatekeepers see from new people trying to break in and how, how likely is that going to be memorable? Versus someone who's unlikable?

Alex Ferrari 44:45
I'm just having a tip of my tongue the question if they're unlikable. Okay, I lost I lost my train of thought completely. I had a great question and it just flew out of my head. This is what happens as you get older But but thank you so much for being on the show. I really, really appreciate it and where can people find you and your book and everything you have to offer? Yeah.

Jill Chamberlin 45:09
So Gil chamber.com is my main website and I do script consultation you know worldwide via Skype. My book is the nutshell technique crack the secret of successful screenwriting. It's not going to be on you know, Amazon and some of your minor bookstores. Oh, by the way, I recommend the paperback instead of the Kindle, because I've got those big nutshell diagrams. And it's a larger format book. And with the Kindle, you're stuck with that little, you know, two inch, my beautiful diagrams are shrunk down to two inches there. And I also do I split my time between LA and Austin, Texas, where I do group workshops. And that's my group workshop. Website is the screenplay workshop.org. And you'll also find me on Twitter and Facebook under my name.

Alex Ferrari 46:02
Jill, thanks again, so much for sharing your nutshell technique with the audience. And it really does make you think a little bit differently about story, which is our goal at the podcast that trying to make you think a little bit differently when you're writing your stories. So thank you so much.

Jill Chamberlin 46:15
My it's been my pleasure, enjoyed it.

Alex Ferrari 46:18
I want to thank Jill for dropping some major knowledge bombs on the tribe today. Thank you, Jill so much for taking the time and I hope you guys learned a little bit about her technique in regards to how to crack the secret of a successful story. Now if you want links to her book, the nutshell technique or anything else we discussed in this episode, just head over to indie film hustle.com, forward slash BPS zero 23. And if you haven't already, please head over to screenwriting podcast.com. And leave us a good review. It really helps to show out a lot. And the show has been growing leaps and bounds. So thank you all for listening and for all the support. And I'm so glad that I'm able to provide some value to the screenwriting community and all those filmmakers who are writing their own screenplays. I'm so glad I could be of service to you guys. And as always, keep on writing no matter what. I'll see you next time.


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BPS 022: Lessons From the Screenplay with Michael Tucker (CROSSOVER EVENT)

Today’s episode is a CROSSOVER between the IFH Podcast and this podcast. I do this every 6-8 weeks when I find a guest that would be great on both podcasts. In this episode, we have Michael Tucker from Lessons from the Screenplay. LFTS is a YouTube channel that analyzes movie scripts to examine exactly how and why they are so good at telling their stories.

I’ve become a HUGE fan of what Micahel is doing and wanted to have him on the show to drop some knowledge bombs on both tribes! I’ve highlighted some of his work before on the blog: Social Network.

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Alex Ferrari 0:00
How're you doing, brother?

Michael Tucker 3:22
I'm good. Good. I see him right here. You guys.

Alex Ferrari 3:26
Thank you so much for being on the show. Man. I am a huge fan of what you do over at Lessons from the Screenplay, man. It's, it is very inspiring and extremely helpful to all of us screenwriters out there. So thank you for the for the work the God's work that you're doing, sir.

Michael Tucker 3:42
Well, my pleasure, thank you. I'm glad glad people are enjoying it and finding valuable.

Alex Ferrari 3:47
Now why did you? Why did you want to become a screenwriter in the first place?

Michael Tucker 3:52
Well, I'm pretty much always loved filmmaking like since I was a little kid. I remember watching Star Wars and just like having the thought of like, I want to do this. And so I've Yeah, since I was a little kid, I knew I wanted to get into filmmaking in some respect. And at first it was I wanted to blow up X wings, because that just looked like so much fun, obviously. But as I write, but as I got older, I sort of realized that the reason I was excited about those x wings blowing up is because of the story around it that like filmmaking is storytelling. And so that's when I sort of got more into wanting to be a director. And so a lot of my attention to writing came kind of through the lens of wanting to be a director. And so if you want to direct something, you have to have something to direct. And so that's kind of where all of my writing aspirations came from is like, how do I create the best screenplay for me to then turn into a movie because that's the part that I love and I've a lot of fun with. So that was sort of the beginning of my journey into writing and filmmaking.

Alex Ferrari 5:00
Now what is the genesis of lessons from a screenplay? At what point did you said, You know what, I'm going to start a YouTube channel. And I'm going to do this.

Michael Tucker 5:07
Yeah, so I have been in LA since 2010. And I came down and I did a bunch of short films and worked with friends on creative projects. And it was really great and learned a lot, but quickly realized that short films do not pay the bills. And so then I spent a lot of time doing like documentary editing, or just shooting random going on random shoots and stuff. And so 20, at the beginning of 2016, I was working on a documentary project that was going to sort of pay for my life for the next year. And then it all of a sudden got cut short. And it was like, literally within 24 hours and went from I'm employed for the year to, it's all over goodbye. And so I sort of found myself suddenly without any obligations, and had been working enough to have saved up a bit, sort of for the first time since being in LA. And so I had this free time, and I had this little bit of cushion. And so my thought process was like, Okay, why don't I use this time to go back to focusing on creative stuff. And sort of where I left off in my creative journey was realizing that my, the writing side of my skill set was sort of the weakest link. Like I directed lots of short term web series and stuff, and they don't really feedback was like, the directing is good. It feels like a movie, but the story is kind of weak. And so with this free time, I decided, Okay, I'm going to just dive into screenwriting, and relearn all the basics and kind of dive in to those fundamentals that I probably rushed through too much when I was in film school. And so I started reading a bunch of screenplays. And then as I was reading them, I thought, well, maybe I can write a blog post for each screenplay that I write. And that will help me retain the information that I learned. And then also can I can share it with people and maybe they'll find it valuable and it can become a thing. And so in the process of writing that first blog post, I was thinking like, well, actually, I think this could probably be a video and no, I followed nerd writer and every frame of painting and had seen sort of video essays and was a big fan of the educational side of YouTube with like, Sideshow and V sauce and CGP Grey and stuff. So, as I was writing that blog post, I was like, Okay, well, I think this could be a video and I think I, you know, I have this skill set that I think I could make this happen. So why don't I try that. And so that was kind of the inception of the original idea of the channel. Now, when

Alex Ferrari 7:41
you started the channel, I'm assuming it did take off right away, or did it it did take a little time to kind of get get its feet, you know, get it get its feet under neath itself

Michael Tucker 7:50
and actually took off right away, which I was pretty surprised about. I spent a lot of time preparing before releasing the first video. I think there's probably two or three months where it was just me brainstorming like what is the channel? What is the video look like? My first video, which is the Gone Girl video. Don't underestimate the screenwriter. I think I did somewhere between like five and seven versions of that video before arriving at the one that I uploaded. Because I wanted to make sure that I knew what I was doing when it came time to launch to channel and so part of that was figuring out what is my voice? What is the thing that I want to say about screenwriting? What is already out there? How can I add to the conversation and not just, you know, copy somebody else? And so and then that all kind of culminated I'd done the Gone Girl video and my Independence Day video, which is the second video before releasing. But yeah, the on the first day that I released the gun girl video, I think it got 200,000 views.

Alex Ferrari 8:57
How did that happen? That doesn't happen.

Michael Tucker 9:01
Yeah, I mean, it was incredibly lucky, I think. I mean, I it was, it was largely just to to read it. Like I posted it to Reddit, and that happened to take off and get traction there. Sure. And so, yeah, within the first day or two, probably it was at 200,000 views. And I think at the end of the first day at 8000 subscribers, so in one day going from zero to 8000 Yeah, that was crazy. So saying it was a really good sign because, you know, putting aside life for three months and saying like, maybe I'm going to become a YouTuber, and that's going to be my career is kind of a risky thing. So it was definitely affirming when that first video like, you know, caught some attention. It was like, okay, cool. I think maybe I'm not crazy. Maybe this can be a thing.

Alex Ferrari 9:47
So how long does it take you to do a typical episode nowadays?

Michael Tucker 9:51
The average I would say is about three weeks. And it's interesting because no two videos are the same. And each one has different challenges. And over time, I've gotten faster, but then that also allows me to work on other projects and develop new ideas at the same time. So generally my release schedule has been about one a month with each one taking about three weeks to make like a week of Research Week of writing, and then a week of kind of post production on it.

Alex Ferrari 10:26
Now you are an editor by trade as well. Correct? Are you do that as well?

Michael Tucker 10:30
Yeah, that most of my like professional gigs have been in the editing realm. That is

Alex Ferrari 10:35
why these videos look as slick as they do.

Michael Tucker 10:39
I mean, yeah, cuz certainly has helped.

Alex Ferrari 10:41
Yeah, cuz I see some of these these video essays and you're like, Oh, that was an eye movie, wasn't it? That a Star wipe?

Michael Tucker 10:51
Yeah, I mean, that was one of the things when I first had the idea. And I was like, trying to do the crazy test of like, this seems like it's crazy. Are there reasons why it isn't crazy to do this. And one of the things was like, I kind of realized I had a very nice, well rounded skillset for it, like I knew, after effects and motion graphics and editing and had, you know, I know, Randy and I made films and so all that. It seemed like I had the things that I needed to make it happen. So it was it looked out that way.

Alex Ferrari 11:21
Now, you've covered David Fincher his films more than any other director. Is that is that a purposeful?

Michael Tucker 11:29
I don't know that it was conscious. But it's definitely because Fincher is my favorite director. And I think his his films have are some of my favorite films. So yeah, I didn't sit down and say I'm going to, like do feature films more than than any other, but they get requested a lot. And they're some of my favorites. So it has worked out that way. Yeah.

Alex Ferrari 11:51
What are some of the biggest mistakes screenwriters make that you've seen in your journey through lessons of screenplay?

Michael Tucker 11:59
That's a good question. I mean, kind of because of the nature of the channel, I've pretty much only read really good screenplays. But, um,

Alex Ferrari 12:09
but from your experience in general, what do you think some of the big mistakes that you've made personally, when writing?

Michael Tucker 12:14
Mm hmm. Yeah, I mean, I think I sort of like I was saying, I kind of came at screenwriting from a director standpoint. And when I make my videos, I'm often picturing as the audience me in film school, like, you know, film school, Michael, who was really into directing and, and I think it's easy to get excited about the clever ideas or like, you know, this twist is going to be so cool, or like memento, or like half of its told backwards, like, I like stories like that. I don't like normal stories, which does normal character, arc, and blah, blah, blah. And so I think that's something that I've found that myself and other people I saw when I was in film schools, getting excited about the clever high concept stuff and skipping past the very fundamental basics, like what is what is a simple character arc? Like, how do you design like a normal, conventional structured film? What can you learn from that, that then lets you, you know, play with those conventions later. But it's just kind of that old adage of like, learn the rules before you break them. So you know, how to break them in intelligent ways. And I think that's something that I think a lot of aspiring filmmakers do is try to rush past the basics that make people care about that clever twist that you have in mind. For the end of the film,

Alex Ferrari 13:37
I just want to eat the cake. I don't want to make it. Right. I don't want to know all the nuances about how to actually put the ingredients together. What, what fun is that? Exactly. Now, in general, do you struggle more with writing plot character structure? Or? Or all three? Oh, combination? Because I have my I have my answers to

Michael Tucker 14:01
that. Yeah, I think, for me, it's, I think a lot of it is character. I mean, I definitely try to approach whatever I'm writing, you know, keeping in mind, all of those aspects need to be connected. But I think I'm, maybe just because I've spent so much time editing, I think I'm much better at taking pieces that are laid out on the table and putting them together in the proper way than I am generating new ideas from scratch. And so I think, for me, a lot of it is, you know, probably in the character realm of like, I know, I can figure out the structure and like these beats need to happen and these character changes need to occur at this point, you know, for the optimal, you know, dramatic impact. But when it comes to figuring out the specifics of that character, that can be tricky for me, because that's when it kind of gets into a realm of like, well, there are tons of Things that could satisfy, you know, the needs of the story. So how do I decide the right one? And how do I make sure that like this choice also measures but this other character choice? And so I feel like that that can be a part where I spend a lot of time running around in my brain frustrated trying to figure out the best way.

Alex Ferrari 15:18
Are there any tips on how you can evoke emotion in a story in a screen or in a screenplay?

Michael Tucker 15:24
You know, I think one of my videos I talked about was in Game of Thrones and sort of how they evoke emotion. And I think, from a structural point of view, I think they're very good about making sure every scene has that sort of transition of values that McKee talks about where you know, the beginning of the scene, everybody's happy, at the end of the scene, everybody said, like making sure that there are significant, you know, value changes happening on a scene level, and on a sequence level, on, you know, the greater story level. And I think that is definitely key, I think the films where I find myself kind of getting bored or not as engaged are the ones where it seems like things are going fine for too long, and there aren't those big changes. And when I, you know, read, either like friends scripts, or sort of, you know, people, you know, aspiring writers scripts, that is something that I see a lot too is like, scenes and sequences that are there just to get from point A to point B, but they're not, they don't have those turns, they're not really telling the story. They're just moving the plot forward. And so I think that's kind of one of the disciplines you have to internalize is, you know, making sure a scene isn't there just to get the characters made to be but like, what is the lesson they're learning? How is each scene and sequence pushing them further on their character, or arc? And I think that's why writing is so hard because you have to do so many things at once. Exactly. It

Alex Ferrari 16:53
is there is a lot of plates, you're spinning, especially. And you look at some of these complex films that have so many things going on. And some of these writers just do it so effortlessly, effortlessly. And you just like God damn it, and how the hell are they doing this? So I'm gonna geek out a little bit with you. Considering that the Avengers was just recently released. Did you see it yet? Yes, I did. We won't talk about it. No spoilers. But why? Why is Marvel getting it right and DC getting it so wrong? In your opinion, because I know you did a Marvel episode or an Avengers episode. Specifically, what is it about? In your opinion that Marvel has done so wonderfully? Right? Whether you like them or not, for whatever reasons they are successful? Where DC seems to be floundering so badly?

Michael Tucker 17:46
Yeah, I mean, I think it was really interesting doing my Avengers video because I went and rewatched almost all the Marvel films. And it was interesting seeing the progression that happened, like going back to the original Iron Man, which I loved when it came out. It also, it's weird watching it now because it feels kind of outside the kind of model that Marvel has arrived at, at the same time. And I think probably a lot of it is that DC is trying to do a lot of catch up. I think like they were trying to jump too far ahead. Especially I mean, I haven't seen Justice league like I've seen enough. It's just no,

Alex Ferrari 18:25
you don't need to watch it. It is the most atrocious thing you've ever watched. It's so bad. I watched it just because I wanted to see the car crash. I wanted to see the car crash. And it was absolutely the car crash. And then some it was oh, sorry. There's a you know, the funny thing is, you can actually tell scenes that just wait and wrote, like I can like, oh, that's just waiting right there. Like, oh, there's that scene, it was like, that's way too fun and clever. for it not to be just waiting. And you could just tell the moments that Josh put in because they are those Marvel moments not enough to save it by any stretch, because the structure was all off and the background of the characters and all that stuff. But you could tell the individual little scenes that they're just little gems, but there's not enough for the movie, but but you could tell them to save it not enough to save it, but you could still tell.

Michael Tucker 19:20
Yeah, that's funny. Yeah, I mean, I think what's also interesting about DC is I think they were trying to kind of ride the wave of the dark night, which was sort of this like, it's an anomaly. Right. And and I think what was great about it was that it was kind of a darker take on a superhero film. And it was very grounded in reality, and it was sort of like a post terrorism commentary about like, there was a lot of things happening and that that was really good. But I feel like it was kind of the exception to the rule. And I feel like they tried to then kind of paint everything in that same color and I think it just, it doesn't seem like don't have like a tone and a style that superhero films want to live in, or at least not bad. And I think Marvel has found. But yeah, I feel like Marvel has found their tone and their voice really well. And, you know, having seen Infinity War and sort of the more recent films, I am really amazed that each film, you know, in some ways, it's, it can feel cookie cutter because you go in knowing what to expect, and you get exactly what you want, pretty much. But that's also really impressive. And I think they know their audience really well, I have found their sort of formula that also lets different directors come in and play and do sort of their own take, like, you know, Thor had a lot of personality and guardians and all that stuff. So yeah, I feel like, I think the focus seems to be on, like, the characters and the humor and making sure people are having fun with the characters. And I think that, especially in infinity war again, I'm not going to spoil anything. But that was something that that stood out to me as like, they're making sure that we're having fun.

Alex Ferrari 21:13
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Michael Tucker 21:23
When we're watching these films, and I think not every film needs to be fun in the same way. But like, I remember watching Batman versus Superman just being like, just wanting to tear my hair out. Like, why, why, why? Why are you making me watch this? Yeah, like that. There's clever idea. Like, even if the story in the elements are interesting, like having interesting stuff isn't enough. Like it has to be compelling and people have to be emotionally involved in all. I think that I think there was so much isn't quite figured out on how to do that.

Alex Ferrari 21:57
I see. I think that DC had so much fear. I honestly believe it's fear of being left behind, which they already are. They're they're completely Marvel's got a 10 year jump on them. So rather than try to compete, just the roadblock, the roadmap has been laid out. They could have easily brought in Aqua Man what they did wonderful, wonderful job with Wonder Woman. I thought that was that's one of the highlights.

Michael Tucker 22:19
Do you agree? Yeah. Yeah, absolutely.

Alex Ferrari 22:21
You know, and and, and they could have brought Aqua Man and they could have brought in the flash and did the same thing they did with Avengers. And then and then at the end, bring in Justice League. And then you know, then slowly bring in Martian Manhunter. And because they have great characters, but they're just I don't know what the hell they're thinking. But yeah, but we don't need we don't need a brooding Superman. I Superman's not a brooding character.

Michael Tucker 22:46
Right, or like, like, don't have that be like his defining quality. Like maybe that's, you know, the dark part of like, one of the films is eating like doubts things, but like he still asked to, I think that that was something that I really liked about Wonder Woman as I left, feeling like I really knew what wonder woman stood for. Yes, like intellectually, and emotionally. I was like, okay, she is a superhero that stands for this. And I get it, and I'm on board. And that's great. And I feel like I never got that from Batman or Superman or other DC characters.

Alex Ferrari 23:18
And then it just just jammed them all in there at the end anyway, we could go on for hours talking, etc. But there was another video you did that I found riveting, which was the Rogue One versus Force Awakens. With the two leads, and you're comparing the two. I know you're a Star Wars fan, because there's a lightsaber on your, on your icon. Which is quite nice. By the way, I need you to do one of those. And so I know you've you're a big fan of Star Wars, and I'm sure you've seen all of them. And now we're in the golden age, if you will of Star Wars films, because now they're just coming in every year. Hopefully the quality will will continue moving forward. What was your Can you just talk to the audience a little bit about your take between Rogue One and Force Awakens and the two leads and how they differed? So, so much but yet they kind of didn't? It all depends on your point of view.

Michael Tucker 24:15
Sure, yeah. It's funny, because after I release a video, my brain immediately like forgets everything that I talked about. So it's gonna take me a minute to load it back up but but I remember watching The Force Awakens and just kind of like falling in love with the rake character because I feel like it was just a very well rendered character. We understood her background you understood kind of what she wanted, and it was just, you know, fun to see her be put in these situations, at least for like the first half of the film. And I remember watching Rogue One and just feeling like bored the whole time. Like I didn't understand who Jen was like, you see the opening scene you know, you see her backstory, and I feel like that was really good. But you don't really get to see who she is in the present. And that was sort of what that video was about was like how to kind of define your protagonist and make them an active protagonist and how important that is. And I think that was the main thing that was missing for me in Rogue One was gin. doesn't really make any choices like right, ostensibly, she's the protagonist of the film, but she's pretty much along for the ride, or she's given choices that aren't really choices. It's like, do this or you die? I guess who's gonna do it? Yeah. And making choices. That's, that's how you define the protagonist. That's how you learn what they care about. And I feel like she just wasn't given many opportunities to do that. And so I feel like that's why she was not a compelling protagonist. For me, even though I like I love the actress, I feel like the performance was great. It's just there wasn't a whole lot of character development there for her or really any of the other characters I thought

Alex Ferrari 26:06
before So why can I say like, unfortunately, then she was more of an active protagonist.

Michael Tucker 26:11
Yeah, I think, you know, for especially for the first half of the film, you kind of see her day to day life, and you see her make choices, like she's gonna save BB eight, and she's not gonna like sell him to the drunk trader. And like, those are like little things. And maybe they're kind of obvious things, but they're at least that helps you understand who they are and gives you information. So that later when they're forced with more difficult choices, you kind of know where they're coming from, and so you understand why that's a difficult choice, and it's more compelling that way.

Alex Ferrari 26:41
Now, what do you agree with? I mean, obviously, Force Awakens is similar in structure to new hope. If I remember the video correctly, you gave a good explanation why you felt that they went down that road?

Michael Tucker 26:57
Um, yeah, it's funny. I can't remember that specific point. But that that's definitely something you know, people say. And I think there it is, it is definitely similar to a new hope. I think that was intentional. I feel like a lot of those elements are kind of universal elements. But I feel like for as many similarities as there were, it didn't really bother me because I felt like there were a lot of new things that they were doing also, like the introduction of defin character was a cool, you know, new take on what a Star Wars character is, like getting to know a stormtrooper. We spend a lot of time with Kylo Ren and you know, get to know him as a character for more than you do Darth Vader in the original and yeah, so I've I feel like there was the it did have kind of the same big beats, and I'm in agreement that like if there's another death star at any point, I'm just gonna like, Wait, like they just need to stop having Death Stars.

Alex Ferrari 28:00
Or, or in Marvel, or any superhero movie, the villain be a cloud in the sky

Michael Tucker 28:06
that's destroying the blue light beam. Yes,

Alex Ferrari 28:09
the blue light beam red sky. It's a Suicide Squad when I stopped like, you guys got to be kidding me.

Michael Tucker 28:15
Right? I remember thinking that it was like we really like we've done that so many times now. Like, come on.

Alex Ferrari 28:21
Now. Now lastly, on the Star Wars on the Star Wars front, last Jedi. thoughts, thoughts, critiques, comments.

Michael Tucker 28:34
I'm not going to dive into it too much, because I may or may not be working on a new video that will go into that a lot more detail.

Alex Ferrari 28:41
Good. That should do well.

Michael Tucker 28:43
Yeah. Yeah, hopefully, I will probably end up angering one half of the internet. Yeah, one way or another or both.

Alex Ferrari 28:51
But but that's the way with everything is it I mean, anything you put out you're gonna get somebody off?

Michael Tucker 28:57
But yeah, my sort of overview with The Last Jedi I think is I really like the things that they went for and that they attempted to do and I think I liked all of the Rey Kylo Ren Luke force storyline stuff, I thought that was an interesting addition to the Star Wars universe that wasn't just like replaying you know, the original trilogy over again. And I feel like the the Finn rose post storylines while intellectually interesting, and again, I liked what they were going for. It was not very fun to watch and I feel like it was not executed in a way that that that made the things that we're trying to accomplish resonate with me anyway. So I have sort of like a love hate relationship with a film where there are parts where I feel like it's has things that I think are really important to bring to the Star Wars saga, and in some ways heading does those things better than maybe any of the films and then there are other parts that are like prequel level. Like why that's those are those are those are fighting

Alex Ferrari 30:01
words. Prequel levels. How dare you, sir? No joking.

Michael Tucker 30:07
Yeah. Can't win with Star Wars.

Alex Ferrari 30:11
It's true. And but you know, I think that movie will age. Well, I think I think in five or 10 years, I think you'll age. Better than that. I think the prequels have gotten worse with age. Mm hmm. I mean, because I remember when I first saw Phantom Menace, I thought, oh my god, this was awesome. When I first saw it, but also I was starving for Star Wars movie in their home was the greatest character the Star Wars ever created at the time. But I'm double bladed

Michael Tucker 30:34
lightsaber, what else do

Alex Ferrari 30:35
I mean? He's got horns Come on. And I recently watched it with my my six year old daughter and I, and I just was shocked at how horribly bad it was, like the story structure, the characters, the dialogue, I was just like, Oh, my God did I like this. It's kind of like going back to the 80s. And watching a John Claude Van Damme movie. Because at the time, it was like the greatest thing ever. But now that's so much.

Michael Tucker 31:06
Right? Well, I think it'll also be interesting. I think episode nine know what they choose to do with episode nine will probably affect the perception of eight because I feel like they can either kind of double down and keep going hard in that same direction. Or they could try to walk it back and do another JJ Force Awakens. Kind of lighter, fun take on the ending.

Alex Ferrari 31:26
I think JJ and I feel like that Jays there. So I think that might be where it goes. Yeah.

Michael Tucker 31:30
And that's kind of kind of worried about that. So it'll be interesting to see what what happens.

Alex Ferrari 31:36
And what are we ever going to get an old republic

Michael Tucker 31:39
trilogy?

Alex Ferrari 31:40
I want an old republic. Right? Well,

Michael Tucker 31:43
I mean, maybe that's what Ryan Johnson's working

Alex Ferrari 31:46
on. He said he's not he said specifically, he's now but we'll see. Okay, we'll see. So sorry, guys, we just had I had to go down. I had to geek out about this, because, you know, I wanted to hear his thoughts. I'm sorry. So let me ask you, you've read a tremendous amount of screenwriting books because I know you refer to many of them. Throughout your, your videos. What is your favorite screenwriting book? Which one? Would you if you had to buy one for? If you're a screenwriter, you're gonna buy one? Which are they? Which is

Michael Tucker 32:18
actually a really hard question? I mean, I think Okay, three, my three books, three books. Okay, that makes so. So my answer is going to be the anatomy of story by John Truby, which is probably my most used book. But I think the reason I like that one so much is because I've read the others. And I think it kind of added a missing piece for me. And so I think story by Robert McKean, is sort of the counter part to that in my head of just like, these are the fundamentals there. And then recently, I've been reading John York's book into the woods, a five act journey into structure or into story. And it kind of covers a lot of the the same things that sort of the older screenwriting books, you know, like the writers journey by Christopher Vogler, and like sort of all those things it talks about and then makes commentary on and sort of updates them in ways that I find interesting. So I think those are the three. That really resonated with me. And I feel like that's kind of my litmus test for screenwriting books, because I think, in a lot of ways, they're all talking about the same thing. Sure. And so I think it's about finding the one or two that click with you make you go, Oh, I get it like this. This resonates with me, I understand how to internalize this and actually apply it.

Alex Ferrari 33:43
Now, how has lessons from a screenplay helped you as a screenwriter? And as a filmmaker?

Michael Tucker 33:51
Yeah, I mean, I think it's, it's opened my eyes to all all the things that I was doing wrong. I think it has, I think the most valuable thing is it made me appreciate those fundamentals. Sort of like how I was talking earlier, you know, Film School mean, just wanted to, like, be creative, and like, kind of want to follow the rules, I want to do something interesting and like, not cookie cutter. And I think I've come to appreciate that story as we know it anyways, as our culture and our society is kind of based on a formula and it's there for a reason, like there is a psychological reason that we respond to things that are told in a certain way. And so I think I've come to appreciate that and value, the importance of that and structure and character arcs and all those those fundamentals. And then that has also helped me appreciate even more stories that either, you know, do their own twist on them and kind of turn our expectations on our head. or films that follow them to a tee. But do it in a way that still feels really fresh and engaging. Like I'm, I'm as impressed by people that can do everything conventionally and have it still be, you know, an exciting film experience as I am people that can break the rules and create that same kind of effect.

Alex Ferrari 35:18
Very cool. Now, can you discuss a little bit about your Patreon? And what is Patreon in general?

Michael Tucker 35:27
Sure, it's a Patreon, I kind of describe it as kind of like Kickstarter, its people know, Kickstarter, it's sort of like an ongoing Kickstarter. So you can go on Patreon and pledge a certain amount to a creator that you follow on like an ongoing basis. So my Patreon could go on and pledge, you know, $3 per video that I release. And so it's sort of a way to help for you to help the creators you like to make their creations sustainable. And so yeah, so my Patreon. They're sort of like Kickstarter. They're different tiers with different perks. And so there's the $1 tier where you get to know ahead of time what film I'm working on for next video. There's a $3 tier where I release like extra content, where I sort of talk about, you know, another thing I love about the film, and it's just sort of like a short video that I make just for patrons. There's a $5 tier where you get early access, you get to see the videos before they go live. And then a $10 tier, which is really fun, where you can join like a Google Hangout, like we have a monthly Google Hangout where me and all the patrons like talk about movies that we've seen, like, discuss the latest video. And that's actually I was kind of nervous about putting that out, because I wasn't sure what what that experience would be like, but it's actually been really great. Getting to know some of my patrons really well on talking about our favorite films and just having really cool discussion. So. So yeah, so those are the different rewards available on my Patreon.

Alex Ferrari 37:03
Very cool, and yeah, and like $2 Doesn't sound a lot. But when you got 1000 or 2000 people, then all of a sudden,

Michael Tucker 37:09
yeah, and what I love about it is that it really is freeing because my videos don't have to, like live or die by how many views they get on YouTube. So like, that helps resist the urge to do like click Beatty titles or like try to dumb down my content to reach a wider, wider audience. That's Patreon is really great at enabling creators to make the authentic content that they want to make.

Alex Ferrari 37:34
That's why you haven't done a Marvel vs. DC. One, right?

Michael Tucker 37:40
With Mike, do we need another one of those.

Alex Ferrari 37:42
I actually accidentally did one of those when I was interviewed Ozuna consulting session with with a filmmaker and he asked me and I'm like, shit, alright, let's do this. And I laid in 1520 minutes. And then I popped it up on my YouTube channel just for fun. I swear to God, I got like, 20,000. And I'm like, Really? Really, there's so many other good things on this channel. This is the one

Michael Tucker 38:07
right that is. So it is frustrating, because that's sort of how my Star Wars video was also that way. And it's kind of the one negative video that I've done, where I'm kind of like criticizing the films. Sure. And it's kind of unfortunate that I think, like criticism creates more like stirs people up more, so they share it more and like, debate about it more and that helps the algorithm and stuff and it's a try not to like feed into that side of the internet's I feel like there's too much of that. So I try to be constructive with my, my videos are actually true.

Alex Ferrari 38:38
You are actually you're fairly because I think you're right, the Star Wars is the only one that you're actually with kind of like downing of something that you were covering, generally you're you're uplifting, and saying what they did, right as opposed to what they did wrong.

Michael Tucker 38:49
Yeah. Cool. Yeah, my hope. That's my goal with each one.

Alex Ferrari 38:54
Alright, so I'm gonna I'm gonna ask you a few questions. I asked all of my guests. What advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today?

Michael Tucker 39:01
Get really good.

Alex Ferrari 39:09
You are safe, you are safe.

Michael Tucker 39:12
I'm a genius clear. But But I think that has in my kind of somewhat limited experience, you know, interacting with the industry, I think there is something to just being like undeniably good at what you do. And I think a lot of people trying to break into the film business. I kind of jump several steps ahead of like, I need an agent. And I need to do this and kind of like this one screenplay I have is going to sell and I'm going to make it and all this stuff. And I think it's much more helpful to practice a lot, write a lot, make a bunch of stuff so that you build up your skill set. So when you do have that opportunity, you're able to really capitalize it, capitalize on it, or in the meantime Make your own opportunities because you know how to create good stuff. So I think that's sort of my, in my experience, what's helped me is like, rather than getting like tunnel vision on this one thing, put that thing aside, work on another thing, create another thing, put it out there work with people. And I think the more you keep yourself going, that attracts other people that want to keep going. And eventually you build something that breaks through to the next level.

Alex Ferrari 40:26
Very cool. Now, what is the book? Tell me the book that that had the biggest impact in your life or

Michael Tucker 40:32
career? I think I think it is John troubIes. The Anatomy of story. Yeah. Because I think that was the screenwriting book that like I said, it really like clicked from an all this sort of Robert McKee like arts and crafts and like that intellectual side of things, I think McKee explained it in a way that felt very organic and actionable, and just really resonated with me and kind of finally opened that door for me to enter and appreciate those sort of fundamentals of storytelling.

Alex Ferrari 41:05
Now, what lesson took you the longest to learn whether in the film business or in life?

Michael Tucker 41:14
I think the creative self discipline, I think, is hard. And I sort of mentioned that before, but yeah, knowing, like, knowing the difference between you're just excited about an idea versus like, is that idea. Good. And like, I think, in the past, I've had ideas, you know, like me, 10 years ago, if I'd had the idea for Lessons from the Screenplay, I probably would have just written a video and made it and uploaded my first version and just sort of dominant and gotten to the fun part. And I think what I learned over my time, and Elaine, working all these other projects and stuff was that it's good to put in the work needed before you get to that fun part like that discipline is the thing that will let you, you know, succeed and get to that the part that you enjoy. And so I think that for the rest of the screenplay, like I said, was a lot of research and practice and doing lots of drafts. And, you know, not taking good enough as the final version and really pushing myself to do that extra work. And I think that is what helps the channel become, you know, as successful as I'm lucky enough that it has been is that putting in that extra work that I may have skipped when I was younger?

Alex Ferrari 42:42
Yeah, the age there is something to age isn't there?

Michael Tucker 42:46
There is. I mean, there's there's grading, but it's

Alex Ferrari 42:48
it's frustrating, and there are things that are not so good with age. But, but yes, I agree with you. 110%. Now, this is the probably the toughest question. You'll as you'll be asked today, named the three favorite films of all time.

Michael Tucker 43:05
Oh, boy. Okay. Star Wars, obviously. Oh, hate this question. And so hard.

Alex Ferrari 43:12
It won't be on your tombstone. Just three that that tickles your fancy today?

Michael Tucker 43:16
Okay. Star Wars. Alien. And I got seven. Oh, god.

Alex Ferrari 43:24
Yeah, we can hang out. Seven is one of my favorite one. Seven is one of my favorite films of all time on my top five is that in Fight Club, because I just love, love, love seven. And funny. Funny. I'll tell you a real quick funny story. When I saw seven. I was in college. It was 95. I was in college. And when I walked out, I there was a garbage can right by the exit of the theater. And I saw film in it. And I said, What the hell is that? And I pull out the film. And it was a trailer to seven. And I literally just grabbed another bag, tossed it in the back and I just ran out the door. And it's still on my amazement, it's still on my shelf that they have a 35 millimeter print I have never played but I have a 35 and you know, I cleaned it because it was like soda on it. And other stuff on. I put it in the tub. It's so good. And it's still It looks great. I hold it up everyday and I still own the one of my prized possessions.

Michael Tucker 44:27
Yeah, no, that's amazing. That's like a priceless piece of like memorabilia. And that's awesome, though. Um, where can people find you? So they can find me on YouTube? The channels Lessons from the Screenplay, and then on Twitter and Instagram, my handles at Michael Tucker LA. Yeah, those places Michael man,

Alex Ferrari 44:49
it has been a pleasure and an honor speaking to you sir. Man. Please continue doing the good work that you're doing and helping screenwriters and filmmakers out there with those awesome videos man. Thanks again.

Michael Tucker 44:59
Awesome. Thank you for having me.

Alex Ferrari 45:01
I hope you enjoyed that episode with Michael, thank you so much Michael for coming on the show and dropping some knowledge bombs on the tribe. And if you want to get links to anything we discussed in this episode, just head over to indie film hustle.com Or you can go to indie film hustle.com forward slash BPS zero 22 for all the listeners over on the bulletproof screenplay podcast. So I hope you guys enjoyed this crossover event. I do these every few months or so every maybe month, month and a half, six weeks or so I try to grab an episode that I think will talk to both audiences, both for indie film hustle podcast and the bulletproof screenplay podcast. So I hope you guys are enjoying this. And I have a bunch more stuff coming. I just can't wait to tell you so much stuff. So many things happening. I can't I'm like I'm about to burst seriously. But guys, I really appreciate all the support. And if you haven't gone already, please head over to filmmaking podcast.com And leave a good review for the show. And if you're listening to bulletproof screenplay, please head over to screenwriting podcast.com And leave a good review for that show. We are brand new with Bulletproof screenplay. So every review really helps us out a lot in the rankings. So thank you again, so much for listening, guys. And as always, keep the hustle going. keep that dream alive. And keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you soon.


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BPS 021: How to Tell Your Internal Story with Jen Grisanti

Today on the show we have Hollywood Story/Career Consultant and former Studio Executive Jen Grisanti. Grisanti is also a Writing Instructor for Writers on the Verge at NBC, a former studio executive, a blogger for The Huffington Post and author of Story Line: Finding Gold in Your Life Story, TV Writing Tool Kit: How To Write a Script That Sellsand her recent book Change Your Story, Change Your Life: Using Shamanic and Jungian Tools to Achieve Personal Transformation.

Over twenty years ago, Jen Grisanti started her career as an assistant to Aaron Spelling, who served as her mentor for 12 years. She quickly climbed the ranks and eventually ran Current Programs at Spelling Television Inc., covering all of Spelling’s shows including Beverly Hills, 90210, Melrose Place and Charmed. In 2004, Grisanti was promoted to Vice President of Current Programs at CBS/Paramount where she covered numerous shows including Medium, Numbers, NCIS, 4400 and Girlfriends.

In January 2008, Grisanti launched Jen Grisanti Consultancy, Inc., a highly successful consulting firm dedicated to helping talented writers break into the industry. Drawing on her years of experience as a studio executive where she gave daily notes to executive producers/showrunners, Grisanti personally guides writers to shape their material, hone their pitches and focus their careers.

Since launching her consulting firm, Jen Grisanti worked with over 1000 writers specializing in television, features, and novels. Due to her guidance, over ninety of her clients have staffed as writers on television shows, fifty-three have sold pilots, and six of those pilots have gone to series.

Enjoy my conversation with Jen Grisanti.

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Alex Ferrari 0:47
I'd like to welcome to the show, Jen Grisanti. Thank you so much for being on the show.

Jen Grisanti 3:16
Oh, thanks for having me. I appreciate it. You are a very, very busy lady, and doing lots of lots of good work for a lot of screenwriters out there. So thanks for taking the time out to talk to the tribe. It is my pleasure. Thank you. So how did you get into this crazy business? You know, I went to USC and I studied cinema communication, never heard and.

Alex Ferrari 3:42
And I and then I yeah, I got out of school. I really didn't have anybody contact wise. I knew I wanted entertainment. I didn't know exactly what capacity. So I went to Friedman, a job pining agency, which is focused on entertainment, jobs. And that helped me build my resume. I also, which is great for people to know, like, just take cold calling and called all my top places that I want. I wanted to work and I said I'm willing to intern and that helped me build my resume. And then I real quick is that something that you think that is is doable, even in today's world with so much more competition? I definitely do. I mean, I talked to so many people who do cold calling, and it's fat. Well, first of all, when you're offering to work for free as an intern there that that that certainly has its leverage, you know, it's just can you afford to do that? So I don't I recommend like what I didn't know and of course I was in college is a whole different time than now. But what I didn't know is like I should have started

Jen Grisanti 5:00
During college doing all my interns what I did, yeah, save, that's the smart way to go. And so and yeah, I've definitely believe in the cold calling is a good way. And then the great thing is when you do apply to an agency, like the Freedman agency or the COMAR, agency in Beverly Hills, then you have a resume already started. So you're not like going into these companies with nothing on your resume. And, and then you get placed, I got placed in the spelling office. So you know, through Freedman, and that changed my entire career. I mean, you know, that was a pivotal moment, in the deciding of what direction I was going to go with my career. Now, let's talk a little bit about the spelling office and your use a spelling office, you're talking about the legendary Aaron Spelling for them. For the audience. for audience members who don't know who Aaron Spelling is, please tell a little bit about who he is and what he did. And then how, what was it like being mentored by by a giant horse, of course, so Well, Aaron Spelling, APU, I'd like the younger audience doesn't have near as much knowledge and I and I totally understand and appreciate that C W has done a new Niner to one hour and a new Melrose Place. But Aaron Spelling was the originator of like, dynasty TJ hooker in a million shots like he is one of the most prolific producers in history with the number of hours of television that he produced. And then when I started in his office, he 902 When I had been going for a year, like there was a point near his career that

that they call the ABC because he had seven shows on ABC, they called it Aaron's broadcasting company.

And then and that didn't go over too well. So so that you know, so he went through that era, and then he and then he all of his shows got canceled at a similar time that were happening at that time. And then he kind of went through a dry spell before nine or 210, which really so when I entered his office, he was in such a place of he was so humble and so open because of what he had experienced and, and 92. And I was taking off at the time that I was in the office, it was the first year and then Melrose Place was the day that I started Melrose Place was being cast. So the original the original Melrose Place in the original Beverly Hills Niner two went out. So that that was you know, then spelling was on fire again. And then everybody wanted to be in business with them. And he did a lot of business with Fox obviously because of 90210 and Melrose Place, and then branched out into CBS and other network NBC and I and it really things took off again. So it was a very good time. I was 24 he was 69 So it was a very good time because he was in a life place where where he wanted to mentor and he really wanted to teach me how to be his eyes and ears for you know, for scripts and story coming in. So I was very blessed. You know, I'm at the right place at the right time. I was yeah, it was a good good thing for people listening I mean the can't underestimate the power of what nine to one no did and Melrose Place did at the time. It was a phenomenon. It really it really was. I actually lived down the street in Florida in that mall where Luke Perry created the the riot. Oh, I love that. Great. I mean, it was a pivotal time in my life. And even though like I had graduated college, when it was first started, it was still such a pivotal time because High School is such a time for every single one of us. It's such a growth period that wewere going through like a huge arc of growth. And so looking at them kind of go through their their joys and their trials in their tribulations. It brings us back into it, but they weren't but they were all 27 At least Yeah, exactly.

Alex Ferrari 9:46
Outside Yeah. Nobody who was a creative Liberdade.

Jen Grisanti 9:52
No doubt about that.

Alex Ferrari 9:54
I mean, Luke Perry, I think was like 3030 years old man.

Jen Grisanti 10:00
That's so funny. I remember all that went with that choice. Yeah. Yeah.That's a good guy.

Alex Ferrari 10:09
Now, what did you What were some of the biggest takeaways you got from Aaron?

Jen Grisanti 10:15
You know, I mean, I, I, again, it was a gift to be taught by a gentleman who was so about the work and so passionate about the work. And so, like, he expected a lot from you in that he expected, you know, expected perfection. And that was a very hard thing to learn to really operate on that level. But it was the greatest training ground and because he expected perfection from himself, and he gave it at, it really helped you to look at things and really operate at a high level. Now, it's not to say like, when I say the word, perfection, you you are going to make mistakes along the way in every path. And, and it really, I think what a lot of what he taught me was, you know, If a mistake is made, then it's how you fix it that makes the difference in it's how you respond after it, how you take responsibility for it, how you move forward after it, he he was a master when it came to story. So watching him in the we would have rough cuts in his office of the episodes and a rough cut is after production is done. And it comes into the producers office. And then you watch what's called Rough Cut. And, and it was always a really amazing to see how you could take a script and do all your notes on the script. And then when it would be filmed then recognize Well, there are changes that I want to make, and through editing, like just watching how he would do things to like, make the outbreak more impactful, or how he would move around scenes so that the story will work in a lot stronger way. And and really, you know, learning about I think the thing that made him the happiest was, you know, knowing that he had the ability to discover young talent. And by young I don't mean age, I just mean young at the beginning of the career. So he to discover newer talent and and know that he could open a door that could change someone's life. Now how long were you with Aaron's filling? 12 years? Wow. So you were there for a while? Yes. Yeah. And you and yeah, I'm assuming you, you rose in the ranks? I did I buy now, again, it's always good for people to hear like, it's really focusing on what you want. I was lucky that at the time I was in his office. Um, my mom had given me tapes from Tony Robbins. And that tape set had really helped me hone in on what do I want? And how do I get there? And what are the action steps that I need to take? So when I was in his office, I recognized there was no one reading scripts in his inner office in his immediate office. So because he would always do like five or 10 calls, trying to find the answers to things I thought, Well, why don't I just read the script. So of course, that meant that I worked till 830 at night and read scripts till 1130 At night, but it was worth it. And so that is what began the process of me reading scripts, and then we go over the script the following day. And that's really what taught me and then from there, I became a coordinator of current programming than a manager than a director. And then I ran current programming at his company for my last two and a half years before I was promoted to CBS Paramount where I was vice president of current programming. And were you there during the charm dears? I was yes, I used to love that show. Yeah, yes, charmed was a blast. It was amazing with that show to see where it started and see where it went as well. I think that was the most rewarding part of current programming was, you know, really watching a show develop and find its voice and find its audience within the time and certainly we're in a day and age where a to the TV shows don't have the luxury now that they did when I started my career and that now they really, you know, ideally, a current show usually can take anywhere from five to eight episodes.to really find his voice and to really blend the network, the studio and the showrunners vision into something that really works. And now, the hard thing is, is very often you don't have that kind of time. So you have to find what the show is sooner,

Alex Ferrari 15:19
Right because there's just too much competition. I mean, before there was too much out session, there was three channels, and you could just sit, you could either watch what we're putting out, or you can watch nothing. Exactly.And there was three, there was three shows on at nine o'clock.

Jen Grisanti 15:34
I know, I knew when I started my career, the only specs people were writing were sopranos and Sex in the City. You know, I mean, it was like, you know, how fascinating how different things are now? Very much. So. Can we talk a little bit about about the explosion in scripted series? And the opportunities for writers today? I mean, isn't there like 450? Yes, years now. It's fascinating. Like, even though there's massive opportunity on television, and there definitely is, it doesn't make the path to getting a job much easier than it did.

Alex Ferrari 16:15
There's nothing it's just more competition there is if there would have been 450 shows in 1990.

Jen Grisanti 16:24
Yeah,

Alex Ferrari 16:24
then yes. Anybody who could literally just drag it up to a typewriter?

Jen Grisanti 16:28
Yeah. And write a script,

Alex Ferrari 16:30
something like a monkey could get a job. Yeah. But there's so much more.

Jen Grisanti 16:35
Now, if you're not the case. I mean, it really takes a village to get a person staffed. Like when I was starting as an executive. You know, really, I mean, I really worked hard on staffing, most of the shows that I worked on, I worked with my executive producer, and I was in all the meetings with the writers and I handled many of the calls with the agents. So you really saw you know, what went into why, why the people were getting stabbed? Were getting stabbed. And so it was an it shows you and I definitely think, and trust me and my, my, my business, Jen Grisanti consultancy, Inc. I've been doing this for 10 years. And I look at how many feature writers I've worked with that I I've gotten to write television. And just because there definitely is more opportunity in TV. So if the talent is there, in my opinion, the platform to be ivn his television right now.

Alex Ferrari 17:45
That's what everyone Yeah, talking to says the exact same. Well, there's a rabbit. It's a renaissance. Yeah, it really is. And it started with this approach. I would agree. Would you argue it started with the Sopranos? Yeah, I would totally agree. Yeah, it's kind of just went from there. Yeah. Cuz could Breaking Bad have happened in the 90s.

Jen Grisanti 18:04
I know. I mean, you do look at the pivotal shows. And the fascinating thing now like when you look at shows now like, like, Doa and sense, aid, and fleabag. And there's a great show on Netflix called a Depor. Song 10%, or call my agent is the English title. And that it's brilliant. And so, you know, I think the work being done right now, a lot of the shows that I teach from currently, I can't tell you like, like, so many of the shows that I teach from our British shows to, you know, that land on network, I mean, on Netflix, or Amazon or Hulu, and they get to go outside the box, they have more freedom, and because they have more freedom, and more creative liberty, I find that I'm able to create story tools from the writing on there that I'm able to pass on to the writer so that they can write the script that can't be ignored, that will lead to a sale that will lead to them getting staffed.

Alex Ferrari 19:15
And do you suggest that writers do a screenplay or teleplay first, which one do you think if there's if you're a screenwriter and you want to get attention? Do you write a teleplay first or do you write a feature screenplay first as a proof? Not proof of concept? Oh, no. I mean, you certainly like when you're looking at writing portfolio right? Yeah, you could have a feature script in it. Now you're never going to get someone in television to read a feature script unless they hear it so good. And the content in it is so right for the show that is being staffed. So So really in TV you want to write now. No, of course yet. What you're asking I think as well is do you write a spec script

Jen Grisanti 20:00
Have a show that's already on? Where do you write in original? And you know, there are different schools of thought, certainly when I came up the ranks, you had to have two spec scripts in your writing portfolio that were current No, no older than two years old. And two originals. And I would definitely say there's been a shift, and that there are writers out there who really don't want to write TV spec scripts, or the existing shows they only want to write original material. It used to be that you couldn't, you had to have it. And the reason was, because when you would try to, you know, when I would pitch a writer to my executive producer with a TV pilot, they would read the pilot first and be, you know, and really want to know, the original voice of the writer. But then they'd want they'd ask for the spec script, because they wanted to know that that writer knew how to mimic somebody else's voice. Right. And that's a really good point when you're when you're writing for a show, because a lot of writers have a very unique voice. You know, Tarantino has one of the arguably one of the most unique voices out there. And he did do some writing, he did a CSI episode with an ER episode. I love it. Oh, that's great. I didn't know that. They did. And they and he wrote them.

But he was Talentino. So they let him kind of go off a little bit. But generally speaking, generally speaking, when a writer comes on staff, he has to mimic the show, he can't just be himself or herself. Yeah. How do you? What kind of what kind of tips do you have for writers to be able to adapt like that? Well, you have to know I think, also now more than ever, you have to understand your voice. And and I always ask writers, do you know what your voice is? And then I'll get like, say, a third of a room

that knows? And then I'll say, How would you describe it. And then I'll have like, maybe four hands left, that, that really want really know how to describe their voice. And so I think part of the journey for the writer is, knowing what your voice is. And then when you're mimicking somebody else's show, I've had many writers say, Well, I can't really use my voice on someone else's show, because it's a show now that that's not true, because you want to write it, you know, I remember, Danna Shannon, who's an Emmy Award winning writer from Modern Family. He said to me, like one of his strategies, and I, I loved it, of winning the staffing for shows that the beginning of his career was, he would find out the character that they struggled the most with writing wise. And he would make, he would have a pitch ready with that character in a stronger light, so that they would realize they need him on that show. And so I thought that was such an such a great approach. But I, I think like for me when I remember watching a show, like save big glove on HBO. And I would know as soon as I saw the writers name, I would know if I was going to love the episode, because I so understood the voice of each writer and the capability of each writer with the story so so there's definitely even in mimicking somebody else's voice like you with your spec scripts, you definitely don't want to write a spec script that doesn't feel like a produced episode, you want to write a script that feels like a produced episode. But you also want to write a script that dives and digs deep into, you know, the emotional aspect of the story, or the uniqueness of the story that makes it so that yours is a script that can't be ignored. Like I remember, I remember there was a writer on Charmed, who I brought him into the executive producer and he got staffed in the room. Based on the strength of his spec script. He wrote a sopranos script that was so memorable. Like, I still remember it and it was, you know, Tony, when he they showed a flashback of Tony when he was a child, and he got caught masturbating by his mom. And and the shame that was in that moment, transferred to everything that was going on in the current plot. And so he threaded it through so that everybody could connect with what that experience must have been like, which brought you so much deeper into the story and it was a memorable script, you know, and then like, I mean,

People did stuff like I had writers write combination spec scripts, like I had, there was a writer that wrote a sopranos and Sex in the City mixed in. So there certainly were different strategies that people use. That's Tony and Terry, in the same episode. Yeah.

I'm sure he got some notice for it. I know, in the end, people remember this, I remember there was also a writing team who had been together for many, many years. And they wrote a pilot that was loosely blit, based on their split. And everyone wanted to know that story. So that became, you know, so I definitely think there are there are such original ways. And as I said, when you look at shows like fleabag, and the OA and Depor song, like, there, you there are ways to go outside the box with your voice, but still have a strong structure. There are also shows that

that are succeeding, quite honestly, that are, the structure isn't great, but the voice is great. And so you know, so So there's something to be said about this as well. That's why I think it's more important now than ever, to know your voice and create concepts that really utilize the strength of your voice. Again, that voice is so strong in a show like Stranger Things, which is a phenomenon at this point, they have an eye out. But that voice is so strong, and so specific. It is 13 reasons why I mean so many like there's just so many smells that's now up for Best Comedy. Yeah, there are so many shows that that people are going outside the box and they're taking risks, and they're not doing traditional structure. And sometimes it works. And sometimes it doesn't. But there's a freedom to do that stuff. Yeah, we're they're included. You couldn't do it before. Yeah, I look at a show like Frank and Frankie and grace of Frankie. Yes. Which is I just love that show. Yeah.

Alex Ferrari 27:16
Well written. Yeah. It is so funny. And it's so out, like they would never put that would never be on network television. It just couldn't. It couldn't I agree. So wonderful to see them all. Yeah, pounding. You know, the stories are just pounding at the, at a high level as you Yes. Now, what is the biggest mistake you see first time writers make?

Jen Grisanti 27:39
You know, I think it when it comes down to development story, I think the biggest mistake made in pilots is either too much character, not enough plot, or too much plot not enough character. So I think it's really recognizing that, you know, a TV is a character based business. So your audience is coming back because of your characters. So, so it's really doing the work on developing two to three of your characters in a very strong way. That brings your audience back. And I think that many writers, you know, first they'll populate their show way too much and have way too many characters and, and they'll have several characters serving the same purpose and doing the same thing. And so, you know, I think it's understanding, it's really understanding that less is more and and when an executive like when I would have 300 scripts behind me during staffing season, and I opened a script. First of all, with dramas you want to be around 58 to 60 pages Max, and I and you don't want it to be so complex that the executive would have to read it three times to really be able to grasp the concept. So so it's really writing toward that recognition. And I would say newer writers, you know, have the weight of oh my god, I have to make this stand out. And it has to be a dynamo. And in order to be a dynamo so many people think they have to reinvent the wheel. And in doing so they lose a grasp of what it is they're trying to say with their story because they're trying to impress Yes. No, with that, on that topic trying to impress, and this is something I've seen and I've heard from multiple places, I'd love to hear your opinion. What sometimes when you're reading a script, especially from a new writer, you you see them using not only 50 cent words, but dollar 50 words that are just you know, so out there, as far as you know, just reading Do you feel that by doing that you alien

Meet the reader sometimes because, you know, it's not supposed to be a vocabulary test. You know, I know that note is definitely given him writers on the verge of NBC. I'm a writing instructor they're like, and I've done that for nine years now. And I know that one of the notes that is often given

by my colleague, Karen Horne, who runs the whole diversity program at NBC, on all of the diversity programs, Karen, like, she's definitely given the notice, if I can't understand it, then you know what I mean? So, so you have to guess you have to think of those things. Like if it's one thing like to go, oh, I want to use big words, because I want to impress my audience. Now, it really is looking, I always say like, you always have to think what serves the story in the strongest way, right.

Alex Ferrari 30:56
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Jen Grisanti 31:07
And what you know, and but if the reader has to literally stop reading your script and go to the dictionary, because they can't really place the use of the word, then there's a problem. You're interrupting the process, you're interrupting the flow. But I am a person, I have to be honest, I like the high vocabulary. I am interested. And the people who get and I like the lyrical and the poetic use in the language. I'm a big person of I love when I read an action lines that they even get really creative with the action lines like that, for me is I love all that. Now that I read in, in Stephen King's book on writing, he actually brought that up, he's like, look, you know, and he's arguably one of the most successful writers in history. Yeah. He's like, look, I can use big words, watch. And he just lays out this little paragraph with 40. I mean, 45 words I've never even heard of, and he's like, Hey, did you understand that? No, that means I didn't sell that book. So stop it. Yeah. And I could not I could not agree more. I have to admit that. Like, I don't think I've ever put a script down and said, those words are too big. And I can't get it now. It rare now. But also very experienced.

For 25 years. Yeah, there's

no audience reading scripts today. Yeah, it's true. Now, it's very true. Well, and I have to say, it's fascinating thing to get in what people have to consider, like, you know, I have writers in my storywise community, and they're always on a private Facebook. And I always look at the comments and see what writers are talking about. And I knew recently, I've had several my writers from my story wise, 10 week, teleseminar end up doing incredibly well in the competitions, and writing programs. And so they were talking about this one festival, which I'm not going to name but they were talking about this one festival, where, you know, several of them had won or placed in several competitions based on the script, their one script and, and then they sent it to this festival. And suddenly the feedback didn't at all align with all the other feedback that they've gotten. And, and that's because some of these festivals pay their readers nothing. And their readers are 25 years old. And they don't have the experience with story, to be able to give the feedback that really, really reflects what the work is. And so when you're writing the big words, and you're going over the top, you have to think about things like that, like if you have a 25 year old reader who misses the whole point of your story because of your vocabulary, that's problem. It'll never get to a person like you who can actually understand it, because yes, the gatekeepers will let it go through. Yeah, it's it's strategy as much as it is writing. Yes, it is. No, everything is strategy. I always say to writers, like when you're designing your writing portfolio, you have to think, what are the three top shows that I would die to write on? And then you have to look at your portfolio and go does my portfolio support that outcome?

Alex Ferrari 34:47
Fairly simple, but very, it's something that is missed quite often. Yes. Yes. Like the director who wants to direct action movies, but he's only done period dramas.

Jen Grisanti 34:57
Yeah, you know, I am

Believe me that I see the dream happen all the time. So I'm definitely not a person who's gonna say the dream doesn't happen because the dream happens every day. And and you have, I think the biggest, the strongest component for the writers I've worked with that have made it in a big way, his belief, you have to have belief in your talent, because if you don't believe nobody else will. Now what is what stops screenwriters from being successful?

Getting in their own way? I mean, I see it all the time. I see it all the time. You know, you see writers who write too much, and don't know how to edit back. And, and they talk like that as well, when they're in a room like there, there is so much being said that you have to really fish out what is the main point of what is being said. So that's certainly a way and I know that's nervous energy. And that's, and you, you have to go through things to really know them. But things like in other things, ways people get in their own way is they'll, they'll, they'll be in a room and they'll alienate other people, or they'll,

they'll talk, they won't talk at all, they won't contribute. So that's a problem, or they'll talk too much. And you'll feel like, okay, they just want to hear themselves think and and, you know, there's not valuable stuff coming out here. So I think the whole editing process on the page, and in the room is the biggest part. And then I think you have incredibly talented writers who are very internal people, and to make a writing career happen, you have to be external. So so that journey, you know, the the perfect pilot that went into that was Silicon Valley. You know, Richard when Ehrlich said, Dude, you got to make something a pied piper, you're out of the house, Richard, then who was a very internal person had to learn to become an external and in the first scene, he's pitching his Pied Piper idea to these two guys at the sink at the office, and they laugh at him. And and that, you know, but that's the process, like the growth process is, yeah, you're going to make mistakes, you're going to pitch ideas that people don't like, that's okay. At least you're trying and you're learning and you're growing, and you're evolving, and you're moving forward. And that's what you want to be doing. You certainly don't want talent, like it drives me crazy when I see incredible talent may never be realized, because of one thing that gets in the way of the outcome happening.

Alex Ferrari 38:04
happens in every aspect of life. But in the film business, I've seen a two directors get in the wrong way. You've seen it publicly to some Yes. Oh, yeah. That's

Jen Grisanti 38:18
a whole new world going on right now. I think Do you know like, for me, though, and not to go into any thing on that, which I certainly could. Sure. But I you know, my feeling with that is now that it's been exposed, and and the careers and livelihoods and everything else or have are gone or have gone down the drain. And now it's like it has to be about the focus needs to move into changing systems. So that this doesn't happen. Like that is more important than ever right now. I certainly love that. Out of all this. Our young daughters are sewing to be able to go after the dream without having to go through that like that makes my heart very happy to know I don't have kids, but my go to vendors. Yeah, like that. It's an important thing. And so I think it I think it's a growth time for everybody in the business to really look at the behavior and understand it. Yeah, the one thing I find fascinating about it, and I've never seen this, I don't think ever other than maybe in the McCarthy day know McCarthy but it's the McCarthy. Well, they were they were doing the they're doing the communist hunt. Yes, yes. Yes. That I don't think that's, you know, everything that's happening right now is completely valid and needed without question, but I've never seen complete careers Oscar winning careers are now gone.

Like it's gone. Kevin Spacey will not work again. I can't see I can't see a path back. Yeah, I can't see a path back Hollywood love to redemption story. I do that I like there are people like Harvey Weinstein, he's gonna pay Bill Cosby that you look at and you know and there are other there are other big ones that I'm not even going to

look up you know you sit there and you go they can't they can't like it was too dark in there were too many people saying too many things that aligned and so you have to but I you know see stuff like this intrigues me on a psychological level because I would love to see a show done where the lead character is like a Kevin Spacey or Matt Lauer or Harvey Weinstein and how do they move through life after that fall? So you bet interests so like a Breaking Bad, but yeah, selling meth that they're they're harassers depriving their life. I mean, they're having to figure out that's where they went wrong. And how do they get life back on track that intrigues me? Because that's a curiosity to like, after, you know, I mean, literally, they wiped Kevin Spacey from this movie. Yes. A few weeks before the release, that's wild. That is like you're raced. That's like you're gone. You're doing it now. Because now your house of cards and all this kind of stuff. And the funny thing is, I I'm talking to my friends who you know, are in the business, but you know, I've been around a bit longer than them. And I'm like, This guy's gonna come out next. This guy's gonna come out next. And next to it.

Funny that you said that, like, I was at dinner with a close friend of mine who had a big project with a big producer. And I said his days are numbered. And two days later, it was in the trades and the Yes, and surgery. It's I mean, I was talking to my buddy the other day, I'm like, you know who's coming out next. It's gonna be Ratner's coming next.

Ratner is the one we all heard. I know, we all knew. And I Oh, by the way, I heard those stories when he was in miami pre rush hour. Yes. Before he was a big so I've heard these stories. And then I heard about Bryan Singer. Oh, I heard about half before that happened. Yeah. Brian and Kevin. Both I heard about them back in 2001. Yeah, I was hearing about those two. That's how long ago it was. It's insanity. Well, and the thing that thing that's hard about this, too, is there, there's a lot of hypocrisy. So So you know, there's certainly a you know, things have to change. Absolutely. Has there. There are a lot of people that supported this who aren't being punished. Oh, yeah. And who were a part of this happening. So it things have to change so that we don't have a careers going down the toilet left and right every day. Like literally, it feels like a PR thing of who gets what day when they come out. I mean, it's It's so wild. It's insane. And it's not just our business. It's not every business and it's all over the world. London is now heavy into it. And then Australia with Geoffrey Rush. I mean, everybody is in it now. It says it's Yeah, yeah. Yeah. It's gonna get pretty. We've got we've gone way off topic. Yes.

That's all right. That's what's going on right now.

But that is our lead draw from that and bring that to the page. Without question, and that's, that's very, very valid now. Um, can you can you talk real quick about some bad habits you see writers do all the time? Um, well, you know, there are people who will harp on typos and this and that. And I, I say, Whatever you can do have as few typos as possible, I definitely agree that it will distract you. However, I have also seen writers who just kill themselves worry wise after they enter a program because they find two typos. And what you have to know is if the content is there, that's what sells so so. So you really have to trust in the content, I would say, you know, so they, you know, things like things to look out, like, you know, study scripts, I mean, look at you know, look at scripts know how many pages are per act? No, you know, and there's no steadfast rule on how many pages prep but have a general

idea like don't have a 30 page Act One. And then five pages for every other act like really know things that you should know through that through looking at scripts, certainly you can go the Writers Guild library, there are many people who say, Well, I can't get a whole scripts number I on my website, and I'm sure you have resources as well, where you go to my resources, page and my links, and I have all the websites that have scripts, and so you can get scripts. And then I would say another mistake writers make is they're not prepared for meetings, they don't know who they're meeting with. And there's no excuse for this right now. Like the internet tells you everything about everyone. And so you you know, walk into a meeting, be prepared, be ready to I always tell writers to to think when you're going into a meeting, have three marketing points that you absolutely do not want to leave the meeting without sharing, have three points, then you could relax in the meeting, but know that you have to bring up those three points. Now, what are those? When you mean marketing points? What do you mean exactly? Well, anything that markets you as a writer, so say, for example, I'm

there I had, I had, I'm not gonna name him because I don't want to embarrass him. But it was actually I love that he shared this I had a very big show runner, one of my seminars share a story that he had gone into a meeting that was the medical show, and he had 13 years background as a medical administrator, and he forgot to bring them.

Yeah. So you know, there are things that you know, you get nervous, and you forget. And so,

yeah, so that's an example like you, you have to be prepared, you have to know, what is the show I'm up for? What do I have in my background that shows the executive that I have a huge well of story to be able to tell story. For this concept. If you're going on a specific show, if you're not going on a specific show, then you want to know like, what are my overall general story points? And that can you know, you definitely want to think about what is a personal anecdote that I have that reveals something about me, for example, you know, I can say for myself, when I started my own business 10 years ago, on my two main story points for our you know, I was in a long relationship that ended in a short marriage and represented the depth of the fairy tale. And I had a, my career was interrupted mid flow when I was a vice president, because I thought I was going to run a studio. And so when the job when my contract wasn't renewed on the heels of an unexpected situation, then I had to read, readjust and redefine and everything that I was a blogger for Huffington Post for like seven or eight years, and my books, my two books sold on those two story points. So you have to really, really, and you know, and when you share your emotional truth, that's how you discover your audience. That's how you find one I'll go into a room. And I'll say, oh, Aaron Spelling was my mentor for 12 years, and I've been in the business for all this time. I've been a writing instructor for NBC for nine years. I this I that people don't connect with that, because they don't know that life experience. But when I say I was in a long relationship that ended in a short marriage, and represented the depth of the fairytale how many people know what it is to have your heart broken than you ever have a room big everyone knows. And then I'll say how many people have lost a job then you're the other half of the room, raise their hand and it's like, then then it's like, I see you you see me? And that's what you want to do. Now, can you discuss a little bit about your books? Yes. Um, so storyline, finding gold in your life story is adding fiction to your truth. So as a an executive, the biggest thing I was known for was really diving deep in my writer meetings into the wealth of story of writers. And then I would say, Have you ever written about that? No, I'll say not in an autobiographical way, but in a way of sharing your emotional truth and, and the difference in the gift of sharing your emotional truth is that you can heal and writing is healing. You can heal and bury your truth in fiction, which is

Why people, right. And so, you know, it's really this book is all about through breaking down features and television. And both books are based on my philosophy of story, which, in simplistic terms, and I certainly go into a much more advanced look at it in my books. But in simplistic terms, my formula that I discovered that Oscar nominated, Emmy nominated Golden Globe nominated stories, what I found when I extracted a formula was that every story starts with a powerful trigger incident that pushes the character into a dilemma. And then the choice that is made in that dilemma is what defines the external goal. And then every action taken obstacle head needs to link back to that goal. And it's when the goal isn't defined that the story doesn't work.

So we have to know what the character wants and why they want it.

And so that philosophy is, in every single one of us, like you talked about Michael Hague, and everyone out there. And you know, Lee Jessup, Pilar, Alexandria, and Dara marks, you know, like everyone, the gift of, of storytelling people really is that we are sharing what we know through our lens through our worldview, a story I happen to come from the studio executive worldview. So that's how I see story I see story through that lens. And then, after leaving that view, and becoming a writing instructor for NBC and building my own business, then that lens became even more enhanced, because I was, I had the time to dig deeper into the story process and really see what it was and read every single thing out there. I mean, I, I highly recommend that every writer like read every script, you can get your hands on read every book that comes out on story and recognize there's a value and a gift through understanding other people's worldview and understanding how to utilize it in your voice and your worldview.

That is a very good point is understanding and when knowing when you're following people and it because there's so many people, so many podcasts out there, yes. So many blogs out there. Yeah. And a lot of them are saying a lot of the same stuff. Yeah. But it's all about perspective. And I think that's one of the reasons why it separates you. Right? Because I mean, look, a lot of the information that I put out there through indie film, hustle is out in other places, but I have a unique perspective. And you're right, never thought of it that way. But my worldview is coming from post production and film and kind of like the the trenches, if you will, but not from directing the $200 million movie. Yeah. value in your perspective, because we need to know all of it. You know, like, you'll have people who will say, I'll have people say, well, Jen, have you ever written a script and I have written a script, but I'm not a writer, like I am, I recognize that my strength is internal with writing. So writing articles, content and books is where my love and my passion is, and screenwriting is not my passion because I was raised on the analytical side of it. And that's, that's the side that I love. I love diving into why story works, and how to create tools to pass on to writers so that they can make their story work. Now, I'm going to ask you a few questions. I ask all of my my guests. So this kind of like rapid fire. Yeah. What advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today?

Ah, I think right, right, right. Is the probably the biggest I know so many writers who don't, right? So you have to have a body of work. You have to fearlessly move through every story and recognize that you grow with every script you write. So you have to you know, really and I think it's it's it's understanding your passion and your emotional truth. And then it's also looking at what the market but not But recognizing your passion is what sells so the market has room for new ideas. So don't think you have

After write only toward the market know that you have to write toward your passion because your passion is what sells. Now, can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career? Ah, you know, I've had so many that's such a good question. I mean, like on a spiritual level, uh, you know, there are

a god, there's a book called

understanding the why I can't I forget the name. Exactly. But I would say in a in entertainment in writing my favorite books, and I have so many of them. I'd have to say, I love stealing fire from the gods great book. I love I love DB Geils book, The screenwriter within, ah, I love Oh, my God. There's a book that I'm reading right now. And I have to tell you, I have never heard of this writer. And his book is blowing me away. And his name is Matt bird. And it's the hidden tools of story. And in the wild thing is, is I think it's structured toward fiction writers not specifically television or film, but he goes so deep into television and film that, that I look at him and I think all right, if there were a book that I if I had the time to go at the level, he goes, like, that's a book that I wish I had written. What's the name of the book because it's got here I'm looking it up. I think it's the hidden tools of story. Um, it is. I'm looking at it right now. Um, but Matt bird Okay, I'm going to put it in just when I put the link in the description. Yeah, put it link in because that book I have referred to people and my my clients have been blown away by it. Like, literally, I dog eared so many pages. It was crazy. I'm I also love Crispo where I also love Michael Haig. Sure, no, I am a key Oh, here it is. I am a huge of the secrets of story. Okay, so it's called the secrets of story, innovative tools for protecting your fiction.

Okay, great. So um, so the Yeah, that will give you an I'm, I'm a very spiritual writers. So the type of

Alex Ferrari 57:34
authors that I'm drawn toward are people who think in the same way. Perfect. Now, what lesson took you the longest to learn whether in the film industry or in life?

Jen Grisanti 57:47
Ah, probably, you know, I do think the idea that I'm always learning is,

Listen, before you speak, like, really? Listen, I think the biggest gift and I do practice every day is really like, I think what we tend to do, certainly in the writers room, and meetings, and everything else is we tend to, like, either defend, or get ahead of like, we're, we're hearing but we're already thinking of our answer that we're not really listening. So I would say the thing that I am always, I feel like the greatest gift we give each other is our time and our attention. So so that is something I think when I think about my, my arc of growth in the business, and I think of when when we first start our careers, we always think, oh my god, we have to speak up. We have to say stuff, we have to make a point and and you do but you don't want to do it, just to do it. You only want to do it when you truly have something to say.

Alex Ferrari 59:03
And what are three of your favorite films of all time.

Jen Grisanti 59:06
I would say my very favorite film of all time is the lives of others, which is a German film that won

best foreign film won the Oscar for Best Foreign Film in 2007.

That is definitely and then I would say The King's Speech, I think was beyond perfect film.

I also I would say I mean there are so many that I love that it's ridiculous but I wish there were more I say that there are so many I'm talking over like a 10 year period. I wish there were more and one year Birdman I have to say like one word man, I watched I saw Birdman three or four times. Like for me that was that was just brilliant. It's it's a

At that movie when I when I saw that movie, I was watching the screener. And I was like, oh, that's what a director does. Yes. Yeah. Oh, I forgot, cuz I haven't done so long. Yeah, that's what a director does. It is. It's fascinating when you see something too, like, what I can say like, there was an remember when I first watched The Hurt Locker. And I thought, oh my god, there's something so special here, but I have to watch it again, because I feel like I missed some of it. And when I watched it again, it was so impactful. To really see just where true brilliance comes from, and and how we feel story, you know, so Yeah, Mommy, she did make one of the greatest action movies of the 90s. Obvious Yeah, yeah. Exactly. Exactly. Yay for Katherine.

No, now, um, what can people find you online? They can find me. Very easy. Jen. grisanti.com. So I, that's very easy. My email is Janet. Jen Grisanti comm also very easy. And if you Google me, you can find out everything there is to know just like I've mentioned that you should do on every person who you go to meet. I also have to recommend to like it. I don't know. Are you familiar with film courage? Yeah, I know them. Sure. So it's interesting because Phil, I did an interview for film cards that they divided it into, like 10 parts. And I have so many people who say, Oh, my God, I learned so much through that. So that that's, that's if you want to know me and understand my philosophy. That is that dives pretty deep into it. Great. I'll put some of those in the show notes as well. Ryan, thank you so much for taking the time

on your show, and I love everything you're doing and I'm honored to be a part of it. And I love that you are getting out the word out and helping writers. I think there's nothing better. Thank you again, so much. All right, thank you.

Alex Ferrari 1:02:08
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