BPS 036: What is Maximum Screenwriting with Jeff Schimmel

Today on the show we have screenwriter and author Jeff Schimmel. Jeff wrote Maximum Screenwriting: 25 Commonly Asked Questions and Straight Answers.

Jeff Schimmel began his Writing/Producing career in the 1980s while attending law school in Los Angeles. When not studying for the bar exam, Jeff wrote and sold his original Cold War spy thriller, Archangel, to Phoenix Entertainment Group. Soon after, Jeff was chosen by comedy legend Rodney Dangerfield and award-winning Writer/Director Harold Ramis to co-write the full-length Warner Brothers animated film, Rover Dangerfield. This led to a sports comedy screenplay assignment from Orion Pictures and 20th Century Fox, and Jeff’s first TV writing job as Story Editor on ABC’s top ten sitcoms, Full House.

Next, Jeff co-wrote and produced The Schimmel Papers, a series of several short films for Fox TV’s Sunday Comics, then went on to write for the groundbreaking, Emmy Award-winning sketch comedy series, In Living Color, worked as Story Editor on the WB network’s first-ever sitcom, then served as Writer and Producer on Laughing With The Presidents, NBC TV’s final comedy special starring Bob Hope, with appearances by Presidents George Bush and Bill Clinton, actors Tom Selleck, Don Johnson, Tony Danza, Ann-Margret, Naomi Judd, and many more.

In 2016, Jeff took over as Executive Producer of Fuse network’s music intensive Skee TV series, working with hip hop artists like Snoop Dogg, Tyler the Creator, Post Malone, and T.I.  Also in the rap world, Jeff was credited as a producer on three multi-platinum selling CDs by Busta Rhymes. In 2017, Jeff’s book, “Maximum Screenwriting,” was released and has earned Amazon’s five-star rating. Jeff has appeared as a guest lecturer at L.A.’s famed Screenwriting Expo, is a popular speaker at prestigious universities and film schools, and has worked closely with the Writers Guild of America to protect the best interests of writers.

25 COMMONLY ASKED QUESTIONS AND STRAIGHT ANSWERS

The entertainment industry is the toughest business around. To achieve success as a professional screenwriter, you will need every advantage you can get. A writer who faces readers, agents, producers, and creative executives are no different than a soldier going into combat. To have the best chance of survival, both would be wise to bring every weapon they can carry into the fight.

This book is ammunition for the battles every screenwriter will face as it teaches: How to create a bulletproof outline, How to build and breathe life into compelling characters, How to defeat crippling procrastination, How to avoid being ripped off, and How to deal with a myriad of situations other books never mention.

The one thing this book will not do is tell you what the proper margins are for a screenplay, where to place a parenthetical in dialogue or what is supposed to happen on page 30. There are dozens of books and free online lectures for that. Maximum Screenwriting was written for one reason only: to teach you what other books don’t and to tell you what other writers won’t.

Enjoy my conversation with Jeff Schimmel.

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Alex Ferrari 0:37
I'd like to welcome the show Jeff Schimmel. Man, thank you so much for taking the time out to be on the show today.

Jeff Schimmel 2:46
Thanks for having me, Alex.

Alex Ferrari 2:47
I appreciate it. And we're gonna get into the weeds of screenwriting and in your book, amazing book, maximum screenwriting. So first and foremost, how did you get into this crazy business?

Jeff Schimmel 2:59
Okay, it's really a story that I don't think anyone will ever duplicate. I was in law school out in LA and I was trying to finish up in one night I had a dream, I actually dreamed a movie. And I woke up in the morning and said, Wow, I would pay to see that that was such a cool story. It was a cold war spy movie. And I was thinking this was in the in the late 80s. So I was thinking, wow, Charles Bronson could play the Russian spy and Clint Eastwood could play the American spy. And as I was sitting in class, for the next few days, I was just writing notes and trying to remember as much of the dream as I could, through a really bizarre chain of events. I ended up pitching the idea. I didn't even know what pitching was. I ended up pitching the idea for the movie to JJ Abrams, Father, Jerry Abrams. He was a partner in a company called Phoenix Entertainment Group. So it was Jerry Abrams and Jerry Eisenberg. I think they were the two Jerry's. And as a result of that, I sold the story to them, I got an agent. And then I went back to school and I was just doing my work. I never thought I would have another idea worth talking about. But all of a sudden, I had an agent. It was crazy.

Alex Ferrari 4:15
That that's not generally that's not the way it's done.

Jeff Schimmel 4:18
No. And you know, had I known that JJ Abrams was gonna turn out to be who he is, I would have been a lot nicer to Jerry Abrams, I probably would have tried to babysit JJ or something. So that happened, and then right after that, every now and then I would call my agent and I would say is there something I should be doing? And he said, Yeah, study for the bar exam. You know, you're not a writer. You're not really in this business. And my brother, who was a stand up comic did Rodney Dangerfield, young comedian special for HBO, and I was going up to Las Vegas to meet Rodney with my brother. And I called my agent and told him Hey, you know, I'm going out of town to meet Rodney Dangerfield. And he said, You're not going to believe this. I just got the script to Ronnie's new movie, his next movie. I just got it delivered to me. It's on my desk. So if you want to read it, come by pick it up. So I read it in the car on the way to Las Vegas. And when I met Rodney at the craps table at Caesar's Palace, I said, I just read the script to your next movie, and it's not funny. And he was stunned by that. And he invited me to his to his show that night, he invited me to dinner afterwards. And we just sat in his hotel room. And he had a joint one hand, the glass of vodka and the other hand, and I just sat at the way at the other end of the dining table, just telling him why. I thought it wasn't a funny movie.

Alex Ferrari 5:48
And how and where did that go?

Jeff Schimmel 5:51
Um, he listened. And I told him, I said, Look, I'm a big fan. I'm a big fan of yours. And I'm a big fan of comedy. And you know, I grew up watching you on Ed Sullivan and the Tonight Show and I've seen all your movies, and I just can't believe you're doing this. And he took my name and number down, he put it in his row pocket. And I thought for sure he won't remember that. What he did with my number. But two weeks later, he called me he left me a message and he was and he was like Jeff Rodney, you know, I I prepaid a ticket for you. Okay, you know, he invited me to come to New York and stay in a hotel for the weekend. And I ended up moving in with him for a year. Wow. And that's how I that's how I really got started. And it was such a crazy thing because I had no idea what I was doing. He didn't know that I really had no idea. And then one day, there was a knock at the door on Harold Ramis showed up Jesus and Rodney and Harold and I sat in Ronnie's kitchen writing a movie together. And it was so nerve wracking. Because I just didn't have a clue. I love movies. I don't know anybody that's into movies more than I am. But I didn't know what I was doing. And I would have to wait till three in the morning until Rodney went to sleep to sneak into my bedroom in his apartment and read. You know, Syd field? Sid fields? Yeah. Exactly.

Alex Ferrari 7:20
Holy cow, it's you literally got thrown into this business.

Jeff Schimmel 7:25
Yeah, it was nuts. And then as a result of that happening, I came back to LA after living with Rodney and my agent called me and said, How would you like to work on a sitcom? And I said I wouldn't. I'm a big movie writer now. You know, why would I stoop to that? And that's just so dumb. And you know what, that's why that's one of the reasons why I wrote the book, and teach the classes is because no one told me anything. When I was starting out, they never gave me advice. They didn't warn me about the dumb stuff. You know, here's what to say. Here's what to never say, Oh, I've tried to warn people about these things. And you know, some people take it. And some people just think no, you know, that won't happen to me. But

Alex Ferrari 8:17
of course it does it. Of course it doesn't. It doesn't matter what that was that happened in the 80s. That wouldn't happen like that now. Yeah, would. Yeah, of course. So that's the reason why you came up with the book. Yes. And so tell us a little bit about maximum screenwriting.

Jeff Schimmel 8:32
Okay, so I'm gonna show it to you. Here it is. It's beautiful. It's a

Alex Ferrari 8:36
stunning. It's cool. It's stunning.

Jeff Schimmel 8:40
You can get it on Amazon. It has it has a five star rating, which I'm really proud of, especially considering it's higher rated than the Bible. But fair enough.

Alex Ferrari 8:50
I'm gonna use that one of my new book.

Jeff Schimmel 8:53
Okay, so I teach classes across the country. And invariably, this is so interesting, at least to me, it doesn't matter where I go. People have the same questions. And usually the first question they'll ask is, How do I get an agent? And my answer immediately is, why is your script done? And usually they'll say, Well, no. And then I'll tell them Well, then don't worry about getting an agent, you're not ready. And the last thing you want to do is annoy an agent or try to get their attention and then you know, you win the booby prize, they are willing to read and then you don't have your script. But I started noticing that the same questions would come up, like I said, no matter where I would be, and no matter you know, male, female, young, old experience, no experience, they always asked me the same question. So I wrote this book. That's 25 of those questions and my answers, but they're long questions and very long answers.

Alex Ferrari 9:58
Fair enough, free long. So, um, what is one tip that you would give a writer who wants to start right? Right going to try to get a writing gig and TV, or as a feature film and a feature film?

Jeff Schimmel 10:10
Well, you can't get one of those things, you're not going to get a TV job. Oh, by the way, I sound very absolute, don't i You're not. But you're not going to get a job on TV writing for TV, unless you have a great sample, you're not going to get anywhere in the feature world, if you don't have a great sample, or two or three. And you're not going to have a great sample, if you don't outline the hell out of whatever it is you're writing. And that's my biggest thing outlining and, and following through and staying true to your outline and not going off on these crazy tangents. Because if you do, I can pretty much predict you're going to quit at about page 55. A lot of people have have written screenplays all over. Oh, yeah. You know, but they don't finish because they get lost in their own story because they didn't have a good outline. So that's a long answer to a short question.

Alex Ferrari 11:08
You know, I'm when I write I always outline as well, when I wrote my book, when I write screenplays, I always, because it's just, it's a, it's a, what is a roadmap for you on your story, because you will get lost in the weeds, you will get lost in the weeds of the story and the character and the plot and things like that. But if you have these kind of markers on the road, at least you can go back and it doesn't. A lot of people always say that. They feel that, that outline stifle creativity, and I say the opposite. It's just gives you a structure. Like we wouldn't be walking without the structure of our bones, you need a structure,

Jeff Schimmel 11:43
right? And without the structure you might be creating, but you're not creating anything that you previously thought, you need it right? Oh, all of a sudden, you're going off on something else. And it might be great. And that's awesome. But I think if you stay true to the outline, you will eventually finish and then you can always go back and rewrite. And that's another word of advice I have for people don't hate rewriting. No, if it make rewriting fun, and for me that I love rewriting more than I like writing the first draft.

Alex Ferrari 12:16
And also rewriting it, I always find myself in a bad habit. And I try not to do it is rewriting while you're writing. And that's a horrible, horrible thing. It's so many young writers will spend a month on one page, because they're rewriting it and rewriting it.

Jeff Schimmel 12:33
Okay, so do you want me to tell you why writers do that? Yes, it's a symptom of a couple of different kinds of fear that are going on. But look at it this way. If you never finish, you never have to find out if your script is any good, fair enough. So it's, it's much easier to just say, you know, I'm going to go back to page one, and I'm going to right, up to this point, well, let's say I'm on page 15, I'm going to keep going back and honing it and paring it down and punching it up and changing some words and Okay, that's great. But you're going to end up with a solid 15 pages and nothing more than that. Because you're probably afraid that you're going to end up with something that's just not up to snuff. And then you don't want to hear that. And it's all subconscious. It's not like you're sitting there saying, Oh, my God, what if this is no good? No, you're you're not thinking that you don't know why you're doing it. You're just you just continue to keep going back?

Alex Ferrari 13:32
Well, let's talk on that on that subject for a second fear. Fear. You know, there's a great book called The War of Art by Steven Pressfield, which is amazing book on how to conquer your fear as a as a writer. What are your techniques on trying to conquer that fear? Because it is really I mean, looking at that white screen with the blinking cursor is terrifying. For for most writers, even the most skilled writers in the world, it's for that one second, it is pretty terrifying. So what do you what are some tips on how to break through that fear?

Jeff Schimmel 14:04
Okay, well, I can tell you where this comes from, because I'm not a genius. But I used to sit at my computer and watch the cursor blink for hours, even if I had a deadline that was imposed externally, and I needed to turn something in, I would sit there and stare at it. And it got to the point where I wanted to find out what was wrong with me if I mean, if I could tell people I'm passionate about a script, but I can't seem to start working on it. There's got to be something wrong somewhere. So I went to a therapist, who had just graduated from college, she was doing her a certain number of hours that you need, you know, as a requirement before you can get your license like a residency almost right. So I went to her she was brand new, and I told her what my problem was. And she just like that just answered it. And she explained fear to me and she said, You know, there's a couple of different kinds of fear that fear of success and fear of failure. And I said, Well, I can't possibly have a fear of success. Because I mean, I want to make it and I want to get rich, and I want to have a big house in the hills and you know, have people over and you know, all that. And she said, okay, but you're looking at success in the wrong way. You're looking at it very superficially. But there's a lot more to it than that. I mean, if you're, if you write a script, and you're successful with it, guess what? You have to duplicate that? And what if your fear is that you can't live up to it? What if you can't do it again, you caught lightning in a bottle, but it really wasn't you some things came together, and you got it done, and you sold it, but that may never happen again. So that's a fear. A fear of failure is similar in some ways that what if I write something and it never pans out, and no one likes it, and I get exposed, oh, my God, I got found out, I don't have any talent, blah, blah, blah, whatever imposter syndrome. It's enough to stop you cold. I mean, like, you won't do anything, because you don't want to hear those words. So you have those things happening. And if you're really unlucky, and a very creative by the way, this occurs to more intelligent people, like people that are dumb, don't have this problem. They're not sitting there worrying about whether or not they have enough talent to pull something off. They're, they're basically sitting there contemplating lame stuff that has nothing to do with anything. But if you're a little bit intelligent, or a lot, and and you've got some talent, that is what you're worried about. So you will sit there and watch the cursor blank, because you don't want to end up in one being, you know, having one fear or the other play out in your life. But there is a cure to that. And it's one of the things that I actually teach in my class, I do an hour lecture on how to kill procrastination. And it's actually very simple. And if I tell you here, no one will come to my class.

Alex Ferrari 17:06
You can tell me after we cut the recording, sir.

Jeff Schimmel 17:09
Not gonna get suckered into that.

Alex Ferrari 17:12
Fair enough. Fair enough. Well, before we keep going, I wanted to ask you about your time and in living color, because that that show is, you know, I love that show. And it was such a landmarks series. How did you get involved with UN What was it like, writing for a show that that it seemed from at least from the outside, so crazy, they had no rules, almost like, you know, where Saturn at live might have had some sort of like, you know, rains in living color seemed to me at least had none, you know, at least in the heyday of living color. So what did you think?

Jeff Schimmel 17:48
I think the climate at that time had to allow for, you know, Kenan to stretch out more and do more. And it was really an experiment. If you remember that was right after like Hollywood shuffle. Yeah. Amen. Yeah. And Hollywood was forced all of a sudden to look at different things. I mean, other stuff was happening boys and other it was happening. And there was a lot of stuff that was making people pay attention to different stuff for the first time. So Kanan created the show, and I tried to get a writing job, the first season that it was on. And now I had done two TV shows before that, and I was actually working on a comedy show called Sunday comics that Fox was doing, which was a lot of fun. It was great. I did a series of short films for for that show. And then I went and I pitched to in living color. I didn't make the cut. But the second season, then I did. So I got on the show. And it was crazy. I can tell you that seeing Jim Carrey and what I consider to be as infancy. Yeah. And people like David Allen Greer. I saw David Alan Grier not long ago, and I can't even look at him without laughing because he's so funny. My favorite thing on the show was watching him in rehearsals because he, you know, he's a Yale trained actor. And he would turn the most ridiculous stuff into really funny stuff in a rehearsal, but they wouldn't do that on the show, but I just used to sit there and laugh until it hurt. He was great. There was a day that Jim Carrey pissed Keenan off so much that he was pretty much fired from the show and then rehired later in the day.

Alex Ferrari 19:41
Can you tell us about it? Can you tell us what it was? He gets it?

Jeff Schimmel 19:44
Yeah, of course. He we were in a table read. And I guess there was a sketch that Jim didn't want to do. And he stood up and he did that thing where he bends over and hooks out of his butt. Yeah. Right. Yeah, he did that kind of of pointing his his ass at Kenan and it didn't go over. So I was I had an office upstairs. And I was the only one I think that had a couch in their office. And so Jim Carrey was laying on my couch that day, wondering about whether or not he was going to have a job. And now I, you know, when I think back on it, it's like, wow, that that was wild. Kenan had his own way of doing things. He created his own template for writing sketches. So you couldn't just take a standard or, you know, some kind of pre existing format and use that. So we had to all learn that. And he made every buddy take a crack at pretty much every sketch. So if you pitched something, and he picked it, you would write the first draft, but then it would get passed around to 20 other writers and by the time it got back to you, it was unrecognizable.

Alex Ferrari 21:02
Right. So, you know, being there during Jim's infancy. I imagine he was one of the breakout stars during that time. And I know before Ace Ventura that really blew him up. He was he was the white guy on the Living Color. That's what everyone knew him as his you know, and pharma, martial bill and all of his great characters. That must have been insane to be front row to that.

Jeff Schimmel 21:24
Yeah, it was. And, you know, I think a lot of people probably didn't realize the staying power that what we were doing had, you know, not just within a matter of weeks, months, whatever, but over the years I It's ridiculous. It's on several times a night on, I don't even remember what channel it is. But every now and then I'll see it in the channel guide. And I'll watch it for a few minutes. And it's it's just, you know, silly. But I remember the night actually, Jim was the only cast member that had a an office up on the second floor where the writers were. And one night I was leaving, we used to leave very late at night. And one night, I was leaving probably two in the morning. And Jim was in his office with another guy. And they were writing something and I kind of just walked in and sat there and I was introduced to Tom Shadyac. He was the other guy that was in there. And Tom Shadyac ended up directing Ace Ventura, and I remember them telling me about the script. And I walked out to the parking garage, and I was like, okay, no pet detective. Sure. Why not? Yeah, of course. And when it came out, I don't know if you remember when the book came out Hollywood reporter and a lot of other publications just killed the movie. Oh, yeah. This is a D minus this is garbage. And it was such a huge hit. It really launched Jim, you know, Anton, actually beyond, you know, in living color. But yeah, I remember that night meeting him and Tom Shadyac. And I had something in common. We both wrote for Bob Hope now. And I think I know for a fact, I was a writer and like associate producer on the last special he ever did for NBC. Which was another crazy story that was just rude. I got fired off of that job for caring too much about Bob Hope.

Alex Ferrari 23:26
It sounds like it sounds like you could read at least two or three more books. Just on your stories alone.

Jeff Schimmel 23:31
Yeah, yeah. I love Bob Hope. I mean, I grew up watching him on TV. And in the movies. He did some movies that I thought were funny. I mean, he and Bing Crosby pretty much invented the the buddy comedy. Oh, yeah. Yeah, that question wrote movies. And when I met Bob Hope, I think he was 94 years old. I went to his house and I met him and he would start to talk and fall asleep in the middle of a sentence. So his daughter would wake him up and so he could finish the story. And I was like, wait a minute, we're putting him on TV like this. You know, he's going to be trying to recount his his, you know, performances for presidents and stuff like that. And he's gonna, you know, stay, you know, Yeah, boy, I was with JFK in the South Pacific. Yeah. So I told his daughter who was the executive producer of the show, I love your dad. He's one of my idols. And he he doesn't look good, you know, his, his. His eyes are droopy. Yeah, he's all mad. And, you know, let's not do this to him. And she was like, wow, you know, I'm impressed with the fact that you care so much. And then I got fired. So then more or less story is don't tell the truth. This is not the business, but tell the truth

Alex Ferrari 24:56
to shatzer. Now, what are some Some of the most commonly seen mistakes or issues you see with with first time screenwriters or screenwriters in general that there were their teleplays or their screenplays.

Jeff Schimmel 25:09
Okay, I would say one thing is that a lot of people think the rules don't apply to them. And there are rules, as you know, and I know and everyone knows, there are certain things you have to conform to. And, you know, you could have a great idea for a movie, but you're not going to write it on a cop cocktail napkin and get an executive to read it. So there are certain rules and but there are people that think no, no, my story is so great. transcends Yes. I don't have to follow that. Okay, great. Go for it. A lot of people don't believe that. Stories lay out pretty much the way they have always laid out. Since you know, ancient Greeks were telling each other stories, you know, stories feel a certain way to us, you know, from that when we're laying in bed when we're little kids and our parents are telling us stories or reading us books, we start to learn about how stories lay out. And you don't want to Yes, okay, so someone you probably heard this too. I don't remember where I learned this, but you want to know how a story ends. You just don't want to know how you get there. You know, the the the fun part is the roller coaster ride, you know, the twists and turns that you can't really anticipate. But it does have to pay off in a certain way. And people think no, no, no, that doesn't apply to me. You know, I don't have to do things that way. My script can be 200 pages long. Because it's so the story so good at nothing can be cut. You know, and when I hear like, okay,

Alex Ferrari 26:51
yes, yes. So unless your last name is Sorkin or black, it's really you can't really get away with a 200 page script.

Jeff Schimmel 26:59
No, and and even if you do get away, even if you're someone else, and you do get away with it, at some point, they are going to say, unless you're directing it, you better pare it down. I mean, if you're directing it, you know what you want to get out of it. Right? Do you know Do you know who Ed louder was? No. Okay. By the way, am I ruining your flow here? Please go for it. Okay, so Ed louder was the actor in the original Longest Yard. He played a half an hour the the, you know, the main prison guard. And he was in a lot of great movies. So one day back in the late 80s, early 90s, probably no later than 90, when people when we used to go and print our scripts out at the copy place, bring a little floppy disk. I was in there waiting for a script to be printed. And Ed Lauder walked in. And I started telling him his movie credits, you know, as if he needed to know about own career. And he had a floppy disk. And he gave it to the girl that worked there. And he said, Please print out my script. So he was telling me he wrote a script I'll never forget, it was called Oh, no, Roberta. Okay. And he said, I've been working on this for years. And finally, I'm done with it. And the girl came back with a stack of pages like this. So he said, I only wanted one copy. And she said, this is one. It was a 400 page screenplay.

Alex Ferrari 28:30
He didn't realize it was a

Jeff Schimmel 28:33
no, because do you remember something called Warren script applications? Yeah, that was a precursor to like final draft and movie magic and all that. So he wrote this. I don't know how, but it was 400 pages. And he said, I don't know what I'm gonna do. I can't cut this down. So I said, Give it to me. And I started flipping through the pages. And I said, if you get rid of all the Moors and continues, that you're going to probably be able to cut 50 pages. Like that, right? You know, why don't you maybe do this and do that. And we have this really nice conversation. But I mean, I've seen it in real life. I've seen people write monsters. How do you fix a 400 page script?

Alex Ferrari 29:20
You can make it into a trilogy like like Lucas did?

Jeff Schimmel 29:26
Right? Yeah. But I mean, the things the things that come up are ridiculous. I mean, there's people that say, You know what I want to do I want to be the guy to write the next Iron Man movie. What okay, what probably probably not going to happen unless you can convince the studio based on your previous work that you have the chops necessary to do that. You know, DC Comics and Marvel are gigantic franchises. A studio is not going to look at a brand new writer who has nothing to show and say We want you it's a

Alex Ferrari 30:01
very ignorant way of looking at things. I mean, you could you could argue with what's his name? Kugler? Ryan Coogler, who did Black Panther, he had already done one or two features prior to that. And then they gave him $200 million to write co write and do that. And he did very well with it. Yeah, but you know, that's a that's a rarity. And he's also the director. Right? Yeah. Well, that helps. That always helps. We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show.

Jeff Schimmel 30:40
I believe, first of all, at my age, it's so weird when I see myself like, I look like Moses, right? I believe and I tell people, you should probably aim at the bullseye. Like, if you're trying to get somewhere aim at the bullseye, don't try to aim at the edges, and try to be the one in a million person that's going to get away with it. Look, the odds are it's not gonna it's not gonna work. Can I say that? You know, for sure. And you it will never pan out? No, I can't say that. But what I can say is, if you're writing a comedy, let's say you're writing a broad comedy, try to keep it within the realm of successful broad comedies. If you're inventing some other thing, you know, good luck to you. I just don't see it. I can't coach someone and say yes, go for it. Right. You know, and you know, something else that goes along with it is if you're going to write a comedy, make it funny, please.

Alex Ferrari 31:44
Just it's just a small thing, just a small thing. Just a little thing, make it funny. Now, this is a this is a lost art or an art that's never been actually created as an art. But how should screenwriters talk to executives, you know, like, it is a very, you know, it's one thing learning the craft and this and that, but when you get in that room, if you don't know what to do, it's, it's kind of like you didn't even write anything, you really don't need to understand that process.

Jeff Schimmel 32:10
Right? Well, okay, so, a Be confident. Mm hmm. Um, they need you as much as you need them. Without writers, there's, there's nothing to shoot, there's no TV, and there's no films, right. So they do need you even if you're a fledgling writer, you're there for a reason. But you remember in the beginning of Raging Bull, when, when Robert DeNiro, as Jake LaMotta was in his dressing rooms about to go out and perform, and he kept on repeating, you're the boss, you're the boss, you're the boss. That's not a bad idea. I mean, if you're a new writer, and you're and you're, you're not used to going into these meetings, it wouldn't be a bad thing to stand or sit out in the waiting area and just think I'm the boss. I'm running this meeting. I mean, they might be behind the desk, and they may be the one asking the questions, but they're not gonna push me around. At least not too much. You need to have that in your head first. Another thing and I know this sounds really crazy. But you asked me so I'm going to tell Sure. Okay. If you walk into an executives office, and you've never been there before, take a split second to look around the office. Yes. If they've got a Boston Celtics jersey, signed by framed on the wall, talk about it. If they have some unique piece of furniture that a lot of other people wouldn't have, or you would never expect to see that and executives office. Ask them about it. Talk about it, because now you're talking to them about something, you know, they like don't have to just make small talk like this inane, you know, talk, that doesn't mean anything. How are you? You know, what's new? What are you working on? Okay, whatever, you know. But if you can talk to them about something they get excited about? Well, they probably already like you by the time you're getting around to talking business and what's wrong with that.

Alex Ferrari 34:13
That is something that writers and filmmakers underestimate is that power to connect with them as a human being? Right, and you know, all things being equal, you're talented, you got a good script. Everything being equal, they're always going to pick the person that has some sort of human connection with even if it's as superficial as I love Larry Bird to I've got a signed autograph Jersey in my house, right out alone is it goes so long, and they don't teach that anywhere.

Jeff Schimmel 34:43
No, they don't. I do in my life. Of course

Alex Ferrari 34:46
you do in your class or in my class, but like at film schools or you know, or big institutions, they don't teach stuff like that. No, it is unwritten rules.

Jeff Schimmel 34:55
Yeah, I went to him and like I said before, you know, no one told me anything when I was starting out, because for some reason writers, maybe they still do it. But at that time for sure. Everyone looked at each other like competition. Yeah. But how was I as a new writer competition to someone that had a ton of credits and we weren't going up for the same jobs? Why would you not give me some helpful hints along the way? I mean, I'm not preventing you from working, you know, but but that's the way it was. But I like to tell people these things. And again, a lot of them people think like, ah, that's baloney that, you know, that can't be true. No, if I'm telling you, then it's true. I mean, no, I don't get anything out of lying to

Alex Ferrari 35:39
you. Exactly. And that's,

Jeff Schimmel 35:42
I mean, I didn't go to a meeting once and I met a guy. Okay, I'll tell you a great one and a horrible one. Okay. I met a guy who mentioned Myrna Loy. So, Myrna Loy was an actress from way back in the 40s 30s. And 40s. I'm pretty sure. And he mentioned Myrna Loy. And I think he thought I wouldn't know who that was. And I immediately started talking about Myrna Loy and then said, By the way, you know, I used to have an office on the Sony lot, and I was in the Myrna Loy building. Well, we connected on Myrna Loy. And all of a sudden, the meeting just became like two pals sitting in a bar talking to each other. We're still friends that had to have been 10 or 11 years ago. And we're, we're friends as a result of Myrna Loy. Write the bad meeting, I can tell you, this is such a great one. That's probably a better story. I went yeah, but I see. The other one, though, serves a purpose, because I know that you talk about something. Sure. Okay. Something important. So I went to this meeting once at Fox, and I walk in and the executive is sitting there, I sit on the couch, and he's playing those electronic drumsticks on his desk, you know, they're not plugged into anything. They're just like, wireless

Alex Ferrari 37:03
and batter fairly, fairly douchey, fairly douchey. Yes, he's

Jeff Schimmel 37:07
playing the drums on his desk. And he's like, Hey, how you doing? And I said, Great. And so he was like, so your agent sent Jan, and he's still playing the drums. He put the drumsticks down, and I thought, well, now we're gonna get to business. And I'm not kidding, this is real. He picked up a little like remote control thing. And he started flying, a helicopter took off from his desk, and was making this really high pitched sound like he right, it took off from the desk, and he was flying in around the office. While I'm trying to talk to him about the project, what he was allegedly interested in. And he's making, he made it land on the coffee table in front of me. And then it took off and flew around. And it landed on his desk. And I started noticing as if that wasn't enough. He had a bunch of scripts thrown around that were open to the middle and like laid down. He never read anything all the way through. It looked like he just had a bunch of half read scripts. And nothing. That meeting went nowhere. I mean, it was just him playing with stuff. And I just stopped talking. And when I stopped talking, the meeting was over because again, nothing to say, Wow. That was the second worst meeting I've ever had.

Alex Ferrari 38:30
Well, you have to tell us now what the first worst meeting was obviously, the first

Jeff Schimmel 38:33
meeting was so bad that I was thrown out of the office so fast that the valet didn't have a chance to park my car yet. When I came down the valet said, oh, did you leave something in your car? And I said, No, I'm done. And I gave him the valet ticket in the tip and I drove

Alex Ferrari 38:54
away. What? So what happened at that meeting?

Jeff Schimmel 38:57
i This was back in 2008. I had just come back from overseas. I was gone for a while. And my agent said you know because of the strike. Yeah, right. There's very few jobs out there that you can get. So if I were you I would start really paying attention to unscripted television. And I think at that time at that by then I hadn't watched too much reality television, maybe with my wife, I'd lost like a slur or something. But I really didn't know anything about it. And I was so heartbroken to hear that but I started watching shows, and I came up with an idea for a show that was very much like the bachelor. But it was about a guy who met 25 women and he was trying to find the perfect girl for him. The only difference was that he was currently married or was the adulterer. Oh, this was a guy who was ready to file for divorce. Right? Just looking for A soft place to land, like when I get out of my marriage, who's who am I going to view is

Alex Ferrari 40:05
fairly brutal?

Jeff Schimmel 40:08
Well see, I told him, I didn't want to really come up with these ideas. So what I didn't know was that the woman I was pitching the idea to was going through a horrible divorce, right? And apparently cheated on her. And she really, she kicked me out. I was probably about a minute into the pitch, maybe a minute and a half. Right. And she stood up and said, the meetings over. And that was it.

Alex Ferrari 40:37
He's please get out. Wow. That's just bad timing, sir.

Jeff Schimmel 40:43
You know what I think that show could I still think it could work?

Alex Ferrari 40:48
I could, I'll see that on VH. One, or Bravo.

Jeff Schimmel 40:51
I mean, these the people that are on the bachelor in the Bachelorette, they just want to win. Yeah, like at a certain point. I don't think they care who the person is. They just want to be the last one standing. Yeah, of course. Of course. So yeah, I think and by the way, the that they don't know that he's married until you're like 10 episodes. And it's like Joe

Alex Ferrari 41:09
millionaire back in the day. Yeah, I'd love that show. I thought that was a great show.

Jeff Schimmel 41:17
I didn't know I think it could work. I think we're

Alex Ferrari 41:19
now back to your book. A lot of a lot of writers have this fantastic book. A lot of writers have what we like to call the writer's block. What do you suggest about breaking through that kind of like, you know, procrastination, or I am blocked? I personally don't believe in writer's block. I do believe that there's, there's things that stop you. But there are techniques that you can use to get that flow going again, personally. What do you what's your? What's your vibe on it?

Jeff Schimmel 41:50
Okay, well, first of all, I forgot to tell you this, that the my cure for procrastination is in the book. Okay. It's in here. Okay. So go to Amazon and get it. Yes. But as far as writer's block goes, to a certain extent, I agree with you, I think it's a it's like a defense mechanism. Or it's kind of a, you know, it's a it's a creation out of some need for something. But this is what I suggest, go to a movie. That's, that's what I would say, if you have writer's block, if you're sitting there going, I can't think my way out of this. Or it's not just I can't get going. I just can't think my way out of this. Well, I would say this, go to a movie, take it easy, relax, forget about your thing that you're writing. Go watch a movie, sit in the theater for a couple of hours in the dark with strangers, and watch a movie and get lost in it. If you're writing. Let's say you're writing a romantic comedy, why don't you like go on Netflix and watch a couple of romantic comedies? Because you'll start to see how other people figure it out what they were trying to do. Right. And it might spur something, you know, you might go Oh, yeah, you know, I? I could do that. Not that but I could I could see a way out of where I'm stuck right now. I don't think it's that big of a deal. I mean, I guess I agree with you, you know?

Alex Ferrari 43:19
Yeah, I mean, you there are moments where you just like Man, where am I gonna go with this? And I'll either watch a movie or I'll read something or, uh, you know, just kind of get other, get outside of what you're doing whatever that might be. Even if it's going to a park and watching people watch. That alone could spark ideas. Yeah. And there's, yeah, just different ways. You can go back into your own past and your own stories, people, you know, and start thinking about those kinds of things. And it'll just come. But

Jeff Schimmel 43:50
yeah, no, I agree. And when people tell me, for example, another thing that I have similar advice for when they say, You know what, I finished my script yesterday. And I'm already rewriting it, I tell them, you know, what, don't put it in a drawer. And don't think about it for two weeks. This is what I usually say, don't even think about it. Now, that doesn't mean start working on something else. It just means leave it alone. Because if you come back to it with fresh eyes, you'll notice things on your own with that you've never seen before. Yep, you'll see things that you were so used to reading and rereading while you were writing that they just became whatever automatic in your head. But after you haven't looked at it for a while, it'll seem different. And you might spot things that you like more or like a lot less. So before you rewrite, get away from it, and then come back and look at it and also, you know if you're going to give it to your parents and your friend's wife and all that just let them say what they want to say about it, but you know, unless they're giving you the money to make it like people or people don't read scripts, even a lot of writers don't read scripts. So if you're going to give it to your parents and hope to get notes, what are your parents gonna say? Well, if they're Jewish parents, then they're gonna say, oh my god, this is fantastic. I'm Jewish, by the way. Being anti Jewish, I'm the opposite. Saying is like, if I gave a script to my parents, if they bothered to read it, they would have said, Oh, my God, this is fantastic. We're going to show our friends. Sure,

Alex Ferrari 45:28
sure, sure, no question.

Jeff Schimmel 45:29
They get real, a real critique from anybody that likes you. What are they going to say? This is horrible.

Alex Ferrari 45:35
Yeah, it's a rough place to be if you put in that position, generally, if you know the person unless they really truly are good friends. And you really do have your an educated reader, let's say and give really good notes, then that's a different conversation. What advice do you have for screenwriters to help them stand outside of this insane crowd of competition, if you will? Or just product? I wouldn't say competition because I truly don't believe that. I can compete against Aaron Sorkin and or Shane Black, acquit and Tarantino because they have such unique voices. But But how do filmmaker? How do screenwriters generally, in your opinion, try to stand out of the crowd? How can they make an agent or manager or producer an executive take notice?

Jeff Schimmel 46:22
Write something good. Next question.

Alex Ferrari 46:27
Next question. Writers only really, really good but

Jeff Schimmel 46:29
something really good? No, I mean, look, if you're faking your voice, you can't, then it's gonna be tough to reproduce that. Like, God forbid they love it. And then they want you to do the second one. And you're like, Ah, I can't, you know, I don't know how to get back into that. You got to be yourself, speak the way. I mean, I'm not saying speak the way you speak. But you have your creative voice, you have your style, style is really important. Don't copy someone else's, because it's pretty obvious, right? Doing that, you know, but be yourself and be put your energy, your creativity, your view of things, you know, your perception of things, and you live or die with that. Try it. And if people respond to it, then you're on the right track. And if they don't, you might still be on the right track, and they just don't see it. There's, it's tough.

Alex Ferrari 47:27
The whole the whole process is tough, to say the least. Now, what are your feelings on festivals and contests?

Jeff Schimmel 47:37
Probably that they're the worst thing ever created.

Alex Ferrari 47:41
For screenwriters.

Jeff Schimmel 47:43
Yeah. And I know that there are some people that are not going to like me for saying that, but I'm still right. Look, it's math. And sometimes when I teach a class, I actually do the math on the dry erase board. And I'll show them, you know, if this many people sign up, and they pay this much, and there's this many weeks of judging that goes on, and blah, blah, blah, whatever. It's a money making factory. That's what it is for the people that run the contest. They can't guarantee you even if you win, even if you're lucky enough to win, you're gonna get a giant cardboard check for X amount of dollars, they're gonna put it on their website, that picture of you holding it, can they get you an agent now? Can they get you a deal? No, they can make a lot of money. And by the way, you won. But let's say there's 5000 other people that didn't win? Well, they're going to get bombarded with emails saying, you know, you came so close, you were a quarter finalist or semi finalists or whatever, buy this book, take this class, do this webinar series with us. And maybe next year, you know, you'll win, and people are going to buy that stuff. But here's something that, I think is really the most important thing I can say. If you do the math, and you figure out how many scripts they get, how much time they have to read them and get notes on them. And you know, get them get them analyzed before they can pick winners. The math is impossible, unless they're hiring, just schmucks off the street, pretty much to do it. And that's what they do. And I can tell you, I know for a fact that some people I know have taken part or participated in contests, where high school kids with no experience reading scripts whatsoever, were paid minimum wage, to read scripts and write notes, cheeses, and that's real. That's true. That's a true story. So and by the way, I've been invited to be a judge in screenwriting contests. I've always turned them down because I'm not going to be hypocritical and say, Yes, I'll be a judge. But you The what they would tell me the invitation would say, you know, you don't really have to read the scripts, read a few pages. If it looks like it's going somewhere, finish it if it doesn't just say so. Well, I would hate to be the guy that paid 125 bucks to enter that contest and find out nobody's reading it. Oh, yeah. Brutal. It's brutal.

Alex Ferrari 50:24
Brutal, brutal. Yeah. And, finally, I'm going to ask you a few questions. I ask all my guests. But this one last question. Is there anything that you can say as far as creating a daily winning routine for writers so they can actually get their scripts written in a timely fashion? Which is that that's the key point timely fashion, because you can write one sentence a day, and that's a routine, you know, but that's not really going to help you out. So what would you suggest?

Jeff Schimmel 50:53
Okay, well, I would suggest doing something other than what a lot of people in my classes have done before I've met them. And that is that they, it takes them years to write a script up not months, years. And all yes, I'll meet someone, let's say, I'll meet someone in, you know, New York, they, they come to my class, and they tell me I wrote this script, it took me three years to get it to this point, and blah, blah, blah, whatever. And I'm almost done. I'm almost done with it. And I'll see them again the following year at a class. And I'll say, How did it turn out? I'm almost done.

Alex Ferrari 51:36
I have, I've interviewed enough professional screenwriters. And I've spoken to enough and I've done enough writing myself to know that professionals don't do that. Professionals just do the work. They take three to six months tops, to write a screenplay, most of the times even faster than that. And they just go and it's just a machine and you just keep writing. And you're and you just keep going this whole like, this is the only script I'm working on for three years, you're done. You're just not done. Well. What

Jeff Schimmel 52:08
are you going to do next time? I

Alex Ferrari 52:09
mean, right now the three years like,

Jeff Schimmel 52:11
let's say it turns out great. You go to a studio, they love it as a sample. They say we're not going to buy we're not going to make this movie, but we love it. We think you're unbelievably talented. We want you to take a crack at this project. The next Iron Man. Yes. What do you do? Tell them? Well, let's see. It's 2019. Now, what are you doing in 2022? When I have the first draft done, they're gonna throw you out. Right, so. Okay. To answer your question, staying on track is a function of having a fantastic outline. Yes, if you create that outline, and you have it, it's increments that are manageable. You know, I don't think outlining in your head is great thinking is great. Put it down in some form, either, you know, look, a program like Final Draft, has the index card function. Yes, it's great. Why index cards you can. And that's what I suggest people do. I actually like the physical cards, because there's something about writing out a card, holding it and tacking it up on the wall. But if that's what you're gonna do, then write a card at a time. Look at the wall and say, you know, the next thing in my outline was this chase scene. I'm going to write that chasing right now. And if it takes me all day to do it, well, I can go to sleep tonight looking at myself in the mirror when I'm brushing my teeth, and I can say, I did what I set out to do today, I did accomplish that thing. It might be two cards, it might be five, it might be one, I don't know what it is for you. But if you have a great outline, and you stay on that plan, you cannot help but get to the end. Just don't go back. Right. Oh, go back to the previous pages go forward. You have plenty of time to rewrite it later.

Alex Ferrari 54:06
Now I'm gonna ask these questions ask all my guests all my guests. What advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today?

Jeff Schimmel 54:17
Wow, I had so many thoughts fly through like

Alex Ferrari 54:19
your second Secondly, right?

Jeff Schimmel 54:21
Yeah. Um, read a lot of scripts. And make sure you understand what how they tell a story. A lot of people write way too much dialogue. A lot of people write too much, you know, action description. And you know, if you have too much action description on the page, nobody's gonna read it. They're gonna I've seen people do it professional readers like and just beaters. They'll flip through and and if that stuff's important, well, you made sure they would never see it right? overriding it. So don't do that. So I would say read a lot of scripts until you're comfortable with the idea of how scripts exist. And the other thing I would say is watch a lot of movies. If you're going to write movies, you better watch movies. And it's funny, because I'll have friends tell me, I mean, people that are they're not as old as I am. But let's say they're 4035. And they want to write the next great western, which there's not a huge market for that. But let's say they want to write the next great western. I'll start talking to them just you know so excitedly about the original 310 to Yuma, or, you know, Once Upon a Time in the West course, or something like that, and I just watched them gloss over. Oh, I've seen either one of those movies. Oh, yeah. I've never seen The Magnificent Seven, even though that's not really a Western. But how in the world? Are you going to write a Western if you haven't seen westerns?

Alex Ferrari 56:05
If you ever seen Sergio Leone, work? Like how can you sing it? Or cleanse work? Like how can you?

Jeff Schimmel 56:11
Yeah, and I'll just start naming I'll just start rattling off movies. And they're like, no, no, never saw it. I'm not saying see it, so you can copy them. I'm just gonna see what it's done. You got to see it. You got to see how it's done. Right?

Alex Ferrari 56:26
No question. And it was funny. I was actually doing this is years ago, I was a colorist doing a music video. And this hot, big time hot, you know, young director who's like 20, you know, to 23?

Jeff Schimmel 56:37
I know it is, but

Alex Ferrari 56:38
and he was. And I'm like, Hey, so do you want me to do kind of like a Blade Runner thing here? And he's like, I don't know what you're talking. Like. You're a music video director. And you haven't studied Tony and Ridley Scott's work? Like, are you kidding me?

Jeff Schimmel 56:54
Yeah, no, they're not. You know, there's a lot of executives that have never seen the movies classic movies that their studio

Alex Ferrari 57:02
owns that Godfather, or?

Jeff Schimmel 57:05
Yeah, I want to tell them go in the vault. You know, and and get it for free? I'm sure you could watch it for free. Yeah, I mean, come on it. But you've got to know you have to watch movies and you have to read scripts, I would say best. Absolutely.

Alex Ferrari 57:20
Now, can you tell me what book had the biggest impact in your life or career?

Jeff Schimmel 57:25
About this stuff? Anything

Alex Ferrari 57:27
life or career?

Jeff Schimmel 57:30
Okay, it's not technically not. Wow. I don't want to paint myself into a corner with this. Okay, how about this? How about I tell you a script, I read that change things for me. Okay. Okay. I don't know where I was. I know that I read the screenplay to the firm. Yeah, yeah. Yeah. Yeah. Great movie. And yeah, it was a good movie. I I remember one night I read that script. And when I got done with it, I was so impressed. And I just thought wow, the movies the movie, but this graft if I could ever write something this tight. Yeah. You read with my tight? Yeah, man. If I could do that. I'm going to be really happy. Another script I read. I read the script for Hannah and Her Sisters. Oh, yeah. I wanted to jump out the window when I read that because I was like, Damn this. There is no fat in this. There's no wasted word. Yeah, you know, and Woody Allen's dialogue he's writing stammering it's not it's just it's unbelievable. I wrote to him I wrote after I read that script, I wrote a letter to Woody Allen and I said, if I could ever write anything that comes anywhere close to the worst thing you would ever write, then I can be happy and I can quit and he wrote back to me and he said wow, thanks I'm glad you like my movies. So he took the time to write back to me but he No encouragement just thanks. Thank you, thanks for recognizing that

Alex Ferrari 59:03
um, what is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film business or in life

Jeff Schimmel 59:11
keep your mouth shut.

Alex Ferrari 59:14
Very good.

Jeff Schimmel 59:16
So basically, Ash don't tell the truth. Because really doesn't matter. I mean,

Alex Ferrari 59:24
in certain scenarios, I would agree with you Yes. Don't tell the truth in certain scenarios, especially when you're dealing in in a creative art in the film business with studios and executives that I get completely

Jeff Schimmel 59:33
Yeah, they you know what they want a as this sounds, I don't know people are probably if they ever watched this, you're gonna be like, God, you should have kept your mouth shut them. Okay. But But look, here's the thing. What's most important to higher ups in the entertainment industry is is that you're a team player. Yeah. They want you to be a team player. They really don't care what your opinion is, especially if it's different than theirs. Right? So really, they just want to be a team player. They want to know I can count on this person to back me up. So that's why I'm saying like, keep your mouth shut or you know, say the right things. But listen more

Alex Ferrari 1:00:13
talk less. Yeah. And three of your favorite films of all time.

Jeff Schimmel 1:00:19
Wow. Okay. Well, Casablanca

Alex Ferrari 1:00:22
Yeah. And that comes up quite often on the show has to

Jeff Schimmel 1:00:24
it has to I had a neighbor that hated it and photo was one of the worst movies ever made. And then I forced him to watch it with me. And I would start it and stop it every 30 seconds. And by the end of it, he got it. He understood why it was so great.

Alex Ferrari 1:00:39
He's also dead inside. But that's another story.

Jeff Schimmel 1:00:43
But but here's the thing. His idea of a good movie was Dude, Where's My Car?

Alex Ferrari 1:00:48
Well, hey, you know, hey, look, when I was in high school, John Claude Van Damme was the greatest actor of all time, you know, so

Jeff Schimmel 1:00:55
I get it. So. So anyway, yeah. All right. So that the Godfather, of course, and Godfather two, but I think those are so great that they don't even really belong on the list because they're beyond a list. They've transcended the list. Right? So but I could just I mean, Once Upon a Time in the West is gray. You know, The Wild Bunch for certain reasons is great. Anything with William Holden, where he plays a real smart ass American like Stalag 17 is great or executive suite is great. Pretty much almost anything with Montgomery Clift is great. Almost anything was Steve McQueen is Nash and say almost anything but like bullet

Alex Ferrari 1:01:42
not bullets. Insane. Yeah, bullet. They would

Jeff Schimmel 1:01:46
never make that movie now. Because the scope was complicated enough to where I think executives would think that the audience couldn't follow it now.

Alex Ferrari 1:01:55
Yeah. And let alone trying to do all I mean, all that well, Mo be all CG now. It wouldn't be right, isn't it kid? Yeah. Great. Great. Well, that going down that line, the sting? I mean, staying?

Jeff Schimmel 1:02:06
Yes. Fantastic. I mean, when you get Robert Redford and Paul Newman, yeah, either. I just remember sitting there in a theater looking at them thinking, why can I be as cool as either one of them? And then of course, Butch Cassidy which, you know, I loved William Goldman, like as a person. Yeah, of course, his movies are just ridiculously fantastic. But I remember reading an interview with him where he said he hated Butch Cassidy. Why didn't he hated it? Why? He said he thought it was too cute. Like, the characters were too

Alex Ferrari 1:02:43
funny, and everyone's a critic.

Jeff Schimmel 1:02:47
And I would, I would have loved to sit with him and talk to him about it and convince him that he was wrong.

Alex Ferrari 1:02:53
That would have been a good interview, that would have been a good conversation with Azalia. And then where can people find you in the work that you're doing?

Jeff Schimmel 1:03:00
Okay, so the work that I'm doing right now, I never talk about. But the work that I've done, or about me and what I'm doing as far as teaching and stuff. Yeah, yeah. Okay, they should go to my website. It's called Maximum screenwriting.com. It's got a lot of stuff in there. There's one like video lesson that's in there. It's like eight minutes long. And it will tell people about things they've probably not considered when they're writing. But I set up classes around the country for writers groups, and I usually teach weekend classes I pack so much in and it's eight hours, Saturday, eight hours Sunday, and if they read the testimonials on the website, they'll understand what happens during during those classes. I'm really happy. I've had screenwriting professors from universities and film schools come and take the class. All kinds of creative executives have taken it. Obviously writers take it all the time. But that's what I do. And I love doing that. More than anything right now. Because I like to see the light go on. You know, when I tell someone something and boom, I see the flicker.

Alex Ferrari 1:04:10
Fair enough, man, Jeff, thank you for dropping some major knowledge bombs today and also some amazing stories along the way too. So thanks for taking the time out. Okay, Alex, thanks. Thank you, Jeff, for coming on and dropping those knowledge bombs on the tribe today. If you want to get links anything we talked about in this episode, as well as links to his books and to his seminars, just head over to indie film hustle.com forward slash BPS 036 for the show notes. And if you haven't already, please head over to indie film hustle.com forward slash mob to pre order my new book shooting for the mob, a story of how a young 26 year old Alex almost made a $20 million movie for a mobster as well as running through Hollywood meeting big movie stars. studio heads, billion dollar producers and so on while constantly dealing with a bipolar, ego maniacal gangster. So again, go over to any film hustle.com Ford slash mob to go to the Amazon or you could just type in shooting for the mob anywhere on Google and it will come up and you can buy it there. So I really appreciate the support guys. And that is it for another episode of The Bulletproof screenplay podcast. As always, keep on writing no matter what. I'll see you next time. Thanks for listening to the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay.com That's B u ll e t e r o f s CR e en PLA y.com


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BPS 035: How Bad Do You Want Your Screenwriting Dream?

What are you willing to sacrifice to make your filmmaking dream come true? How bad do you want it? These are the questions I’ll be discussing in today’s episode. If you are looking for something to get you revved up look no further. This is my “tough love” episode. I keep running into filmmakers and people in the business who just like to talk or hide behind excuses. I have two things to say about that.

  • Life doesn’t care about excuses.
  • The film business doesn’t care about your circumstances.

There are 24 hours in a day. I breakdown 24 hours and I promise you will find out that you have, at least, 4-6 hours a day to dedicate to your craft and dream. Yes, even for those who have a 2-hour commute, work 8 hours and have a family. The power to make your dream to become a reality is only in your hands. No one else’s! I really hope this episode lights that fire in your belly to make your dream come true.

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Welcome to the bulletproof screenplay podcast episode number 35. If you don't have time to read, you do not have time to write Stephen King, broadcasting from a dark windowless room in Hollywood when we really should be working on that next draft. It's the bulletproof screenplay podcast showing you the craft and business of screenwriting while teaching you how to make your screenplay bulletproof. And here's your host, Alex Ferrari. Welcome. Welcome to another episode of The Bulletproof screenplay podcast. I am your humble host, Alex Ferrari. Now today's show is sponsored by bulletproof script coverage. Now, unlike other script coverage services, bulletproof script coverage actually focuses on the kind of project you are and the goals of the project you are. So we actually break it down by three categories micro budget, indie film market and studio film. There's no reason to get coverage from a reader that used to reading tentpole movies when your movies gonna be done for $100,000 and we wanted to focus on that at bulletproof script coverage. Our readers have worked with Marvel Studios CAA, WM E, NBC, HBO, Disney, Scott free Warner Brothers, the blacklist and many many more. So if you need your screenplay or TV script covered by professional readers, head on over to cover my screenplay.com and today's show is also sponsored by indie film hustle TV, the world's first streaming service dedicated to filmmakers, screenwriters, and content creators. If you want access to filmmaking documentaries feature films about filmmaking, interviews with some of the top screenwriters and filmmakers in Hollywood, as well as educational online courses all in one place. ifH. TV is for you. Just head over to indie film hustle.tv. Today, guys, I have one question and one question only to ask you. How bad do you want it? That is the question we're going to explore in today's episode. This is what I like to call my tough love episode. I've been talking in consulting with a lot of filmmakers lately. And just meeting them on my you know, when I talk and, and workshops and things like that, and I just wanted to address this and wanted to address this and hopefully this episode will light a fire in your button anytime you're feeling a little low or down. This is the episode you're going to turn back on to get you revved up. So the question again is how bad do you want it? What are you willing to sacrifice to make your dreams come true? And I don't want to hear any excuses. I know we all have life. We all have things that we have to do. And we have financial restraints and all this kind of good stuff. I get it. Trust me, I get it. But I have one thing to tell you. Life doesn't care. This business does not care about your problems, your excuses, or your circumstances. Period.

No one is coming to save you. Let me repeat, no one is coming to save you. There isn't going to be a magical God from Mount Hollywood, who's going to come down and bequeath you the new David Fincher, the new Chris Nolan the new Tarantino, and they're going to give you $200 million to go do whatever you want. That doesn't happen. I promise you, that will not happen. Just like Mark Duplass says, the Calvary is not coming. You've got to do it yourself. And I know a lot of you listening right now like well, you know, you know Tarantino got this or, or you know, got this opportunity. Or Chris Nolan got that opportunity. Or David Fincher and I'm just using a few guys, you know, the Coen Brothers, it goes on and on many, many different directors who've made it into into Hollywood and working in bigger sandboxes than we are. And I know you probably say, Oh, this or that they had this happen if I would have that happen to me, I wouldn't be able to do it. I promise you something that nobody in this business has gotten to where they are without busting their butt. Without hustling hard. I promise you. Okay, there's no royalty, that automatically gets you. And I'm sure there's nepotism. But there's no royal you know, if your last name is Spielberg doesn't mean that you're going to direct the next big thing. It doesn't work that way in Hollywood. It only gets you so far. If you do have that luxury. The most of us don't have the last name Spielberg or or Scorsese or any of the other big names. It's about you hustling, busting your butt and killing yourself to get where you want to be and what you're trying to do. Alright, so just take that myth right out of your head. Nobody got anything handed to them. No one. I've been in this business long enough. And I've studied and spoken to enough filmmakers to see that every single one of them started somewhere. They all started wherever they started, whether it be in commercials, whether it be making an indie film, whether it writing a screenplay that got him some notice, they all busted their ass. All you guys see is what happened afterwards. Everyone just saw Tarantino and Reservoir Dogs. That's all they saw. Like, oh, he just blew up overnight. The man was busting his ass in town for close to a decade trying to get his stuff done and get seen and made. Okay, mariachi, another one. I was like to bring up Robert Rodriguez. Everyone says, Oh, he got a $7,000 movie. And it was all this or that. You know what, but no one talks about the 40 or 50 short films that he'd made prior to that, or all the hustle and creativity at the bust to get El Mariachi out. And the list goes on and on. I could talk about filmmakers all day with these stories. They all busted their butt. Now I know a lot of you listening right now are telling me Alex, I work for a living man, I don't have time to dedicate a lot of time to dedicate to my, my art my craft my dream. I've got to pay the bills, I get that. I get it. But I want to let's break that down for a second. You've got 24 hours in a day. Okay, 24 hours in a day. So let's break it down. So let's say you sleep for seven hours, I'm being kind by giving you seven hours. Let's say you sleep seven hours. All right, then I'm going to give you an hour to wake up, take a shower, brush your teeth, have some breakfast, and get ready for the day. That's eight hours gone. Now I'm gonna even give you two hours of commute an hour, they're an hour bet you're you're hustling hard to get to work. Most of us don't have hour, an hour, hour and a half commute to work many of you do. But I'm going to give you those two hours of commute. Okay, whether it's 30 minutes or an hour, I'm going to give you that. So that's two extra hours while you're commuting. By the way, you're generally going to be either riding a bike, walking, driving a car, or on a train somewhere, generally, that's what it's gonna be. So during that time of commute, what can you be doing to get you closer to your dream? What can you be doing? Could you be listening to audiobooks? Could you be listening to podcasts? Could you be educating yourself? That is a perfect time to grow as an artist as a craftsman, as a person who's trying to get to whatever goal you're trying to get. Educate yourself. It has never been easier or cheaper, or even free to get information. So you could be listening to audio books. I mean, you get a free audiobook just by signing up to audible.com.

And you could be listening to podcasts which are free and there's a ton of information, as you know, because you're listening to this podcast. So now we've gone through 10 hours. Okay, now you're at work. We're going to work a standard eight hour day. Alright, standard eight hour day we're working today. While you're at work, what can you be doing? Are you sitting at a desk? Are you crunching something? Are you editing? Are you doing other things? At your job that you're sitting around? Could you listen to audiobooks during your day? Even if an hour or two here or there? Could you listen to podcast? Possibly even if you know if you if you have a certain kind of job? Could you even watch a course? Could you watch an hour of course, you know or listen to that course online course. Again, educating yourself every day moving a step forward every single day. And I'm going to give you a trick with audio books, podcasts, and online courses. I listened to all of my books that 1.75 to two times as fast. I've gotten used to two times as fast depending on how fast the narrator presenters speaking. But even if you go to 1.25, the speed that he's speaking or she's speaking, or 1.5 it just cuts down dramatically the amount of time you're spending and you could absorb more information. I read two to three books a week, a week because of this technique. And it gives me so much information, so much knowledge, so much inspiration to move forward in whatever I'm doing. So now you've come back home you did that hour commute, it's already been included in the total and you want to spend time with your family or your girlfriend or whoever you want to spend time with. And I'm like I like to spend time with my family. I need to eat dinner and you know that great you got two hours and I think two hours is enough. But if you want to even push it to three hours fine, but I'm gonna say two hours. is more than enough to get home. You know, unwind, make your dinner and hang out with the family play with the kids before they go to bed. All right. Now also, I'm gonna ask you another question. While you're cooking dinner, could you be listening to an audiobook? Can you be listening to a podcast? Could you be doing something that moves you forward in your, your quest for your dream, for your goal? Educating yourself is the biggest thing you can do when you're trying to move forward towards a dream or goal. The smarter you are, the more knowledge you have, the more dangerous you are the skills that you're putting in your toolbox, the tools that you put in your toolbox grow more and more and more. And it might not seem like a lot right now. But I promise you, you keep doing that. You read one book a week, listen to one book a week, at the end of the year, you have 52 books under your belt. Do you think you're going to be a little bit better at what you're trying to do? Do you think you're going to be a little have a couple more tools in those toolboxes? I promise you you will. So now, with all the math, if I've done the math correctly, you've got four hours left for the hustle for the side hustle. During those four hours. What can you do to get you to your goal?

Can you practice whatever you're trying to do? Anything if you're trying to direct? Go take an acting class, I promise you it will humble you. Learn how to work with actors, bring over some friends shoot some stuff. If you're trying to be a director, it doesn't matter. Spend that time honing your craft every day. Every day. You want to be a writer you want to be a screenwriter, right? Right for those hours read screenplays, just like Stephen King said at the beginning of this episode, if you ain't got time to read, you ain't got time to write. Okay, so read screenplays and write screenplays, read books listen to books about screenwriting about the craft. You know a lot of people always say oh, the Guru's they haven't done like, you know what a lot of these guys who write books, a lot of these women who write books, on screenwriting, on story on Character Arts, all this kind of stuff. There's always a nugget of, of great information in those books. If not one, there's hundreds. But you never know just read, I promise you you will grow. Don't let your ego get in the way. Read the books, listen to the books, listen to the podcast, those things will will help you I promise you. You can't get better at your craft, unless you practice that craft. Unless you do that craft. If you're going to build a table and you want to be a carpenter, I promise you the first table you make is going to suck. But the fifth table better be good. Same thing goes for what we try to do in the film industry every day, whether that be cinematography, whether that be production design, whether that be directing, writing, acting, whatever, hone your craft and practice every day. What else can you do during that time, take some time out to meditate. Take some time out to center yourself to go within. I promise you that the best best ideas I've gotten are during my meditations, meditate for 30 minutes minimum, give me a five minute 10 Minute Meditation 30 minutes minimum. I would prefer an hour hour and a half personally, but work your way up to that. But I promise I can't keep saying promise because I've been here. I've do I'm doing it right now with you. You will grow so much more. A lot of the ego will start to wear away. When you meditate. A lot of ideas will start flourishing coming up, you'll become more focused, sharper, your mind will think clearer. Okay. What else can you do? Why don't you work out, you can put that at the beginning of the day. If that works out better for you work out for 30 minutes. You don't need a gym. You don't need any of that stuff. There's so much information online, go to YouTube, and watch, do yoga, do jumping jacks, push ups, old school, whatever, get that heart rate running. Because also another thing I'm going to promise you is if you get yourself physically in better shape, your mind will be better and your work will be better. You'll have more energy to keep going and going and going. So many people ask me how I'm able to do all the work that I do is because I work out every day. As many of you know, at five o'clock every day I wake up at 430 every morning to go work out for an hour. And I still work in a meditation for at least an hour if not two a day. So it's doable. It can be done. And finally, what can you do during this time? Just take online courses, watch ifH TV, you know not for a same shame. This plug wherever you want to go Skillshare Udemy masterclass, I don't care, learn, learn, educate, educate yourself and learn. Alright, stop watching Netflix, stop watching Game of Thrones, it's not getting you anywhere, it's not moving you where you need to be. Okay? I used to do the same thing I used to sit down and watch three, four hours a night of TV and, and just chillin or going out with my boys and drinking and I hadn't drank, but you know, going out with my boys and hanging out and watching football or whatever that was, okay. Stop it. Because if you want to do that, that's fine. I have no problem with that. You go out and eat on wine at night, great online, take 30 minutes, take an hour out of those four hours if you want to, to unwind, okay. But if you don't do what I'm telling you in these four hours and do that hustle. I don't want to hear any complaining from you. I don't want to hear that, oh, God, I'm not getting where I want to be. The opportunities are not showing up. I don't want to hear any excuses. Because it's on you.

It's on you. You've got to make it happen for yourself. Stop waiting for permission from other people to make your dream come true. Stop hiding behind other people, oh, they didn't give me the shot, or I didn't get this opportunity. Or I didn't get the money for the film. If you're looking for $10 million for the film, and it's your first film, no, it's not going to work out for you. I promise you make something cheaper, make something that you can go make by yourself. And if you feel scared, I'm sorry, you're gonna have to go through it. Because you know what, if you don't go through it, there's 200 people right behind you who are doing everything I'm telling them to do. And they're hustling harder than you are. And you're going to see them fly by you. Okay, I want you to understand this. So So clearly, at the end of the day, you're competing with yourself. But as you see people fly by you, you start asking yourself, What am I doing wrong? Why am I not going as fast as they are? They're a good barometer. But at the end of the day, it's up to you. And you only have to compete with yourself. So look inside yourself, and ask the question, How bad do I want this? What am I willing to sacrifice to get to where I want to be in life, in my career in my dream? Or is this all just Bs, and you're hiding behind something and talking a lot. I can't stand people who just talk and talk and never do. And we smell you coming from a mile away in this business. And I meet them every day I speak to them every day, whatever the reason why they do it, whether it's ego, whether it's fear, I hate to tell you, this business doesn't care. Life doesn't care, and I don't care. You need to get off your butt and do what you need to do. Hustle every day, the power for your dream is in your hands and no one else's. You have to out hustle outwork everyone else around you. I don't care about talent. I don't care about connections in the business. That doesn't matter. Give me someone who's hungry, who's willing to hustle, who's willing to put in the time the effort to get to where they want to be. I'll take someone like that any day over someone who's more talented, or might have more connections, who's willing to sleep for hours, five hours a night. So they get that extra time in their hustle in their side hustle before it turns into their main hustle? Who's willing to do that? Are you are you willing to put in the effort? Ask yourself the question. What am I willing to do to make this happen? Am I willing to give up? Go into McDonald's every day so I can get into better shape so I can focus more so I can put more energy into my dream? Am I willing to work? Am I willing to put that hustle in? That is the question you really need to ask yourself right now. Because that's what's gonna get you to where you want to be. I've got a family. I'm 44 years old right now. And I hustle harder than most 20 year olds I know. Okay, I don't want to hear excuses. Because no one cares. No one cares about your excuses. Make it happen for yourself, guys. Please, I'm begging you. I want everyone listening to this to make it happen for them. Whatever that dream, that goal is, I want you to have that success in life. Because even with all the work, and all the hustle all the blood and the sweat and the tears and everything, it's worth it. Because it fills your soul, it fills who you are. And there's nothing more powerful on this planet than someone who loves what they're doing. And they get up in the morning to do it every day. They run to work, they don't dread going to work. That's where I want you all to be. That is what my wish and dream is, for everyone in the tribe. For everyone who gets to listen to this, a want that dream for you. Whatever your dream is, work on it every single day, you've got an hour, give it an hour, you got three or four, then use three or four hours. We'll make it happen for yourself.

Please, I'm begging you. I want you to so so bad. Please make it happen for yourself. But I do promise you one thing. There is someone right behind you doing everything I'm telling you to do. And you're gonna get angry and bitter. When you see other people around you. Hustling harder than you. There's no excuse. Hustle is something that you can do and will out work everybody else around you. Hustle is the great equalizer. Hustle doesn't care how much money you hustle doesn't care where you came from. Also doesn't care who you are. If you work, you'll get there. Be smart, educate yourself, and just put 120% into whatever you're doing. If you're making one phone call to get that internship or that job, make 20 instead of 20, make 40 I want you to succeed. Please don't make any excuses. I want you to make it happen for yourself. Because at the end of the day, you are in control. You have all the power to make your dream come true. Right? I can't tell you is going to happen in one day, or one week or one month or one year or one decade. But you put in the work put in the hustle, you will get farther than you where you are right now. You'll get closer than where you are right now. That I promise. Guys, I hope this episode really lit a fire in your butt at something I've been talking to myself about doing for a few weeks. Now I've been kind of mulling it over and seeing how I was going to present this information to you. And I really do hope that it has lit a fire in your button. And I swear to God, I really, really hope it has. I'm going to put a couple books that I recommend for you guys to listen to and read to get this, this new transformation in your life up and going in the show notes at Indie film hustle.com forward slash BPS 035. Now, I also want to let you guys know that the filmmaker indie film hustle contest where I'm going to give you $30,000 To make a web series contest is still going on. It is going to be going on till February 4. And please, I want more submissions. I want more people to get take care take this opportunity. I mean swear the last year's winner got an HBO deal. This is a serious contest, guys. I want this opportunity for everybody in the tribe. So please submit before February 4. And it's been and you guys have been submitting like crazy. So I can't wait to read all your submissions, and take a look at what you got going on. And I'll keep you guys updated on what's going on. And finally, ifH TV is growing every single day. Thank you so much for all of the tribe members who have signed up for indie film hustle.tv And, and enjoying all the new content that we're putting out weekly. If you have not signed up for indie film, hustle TV, please do so because February 1, which is next week, or this week, I'm not sure I think it's this week, it will go up to 1399 the regular price of 1399 a month. Right now it's at 1099 a month. So if you want to jump in, jump in now, because after that, it will go up and stay up at 1399 and then go back down to 1099. Alright, please check it out. Thank you guys for listening. And I really do hope this has done some good in your life today. As always keep on writing, no matter what. I'll talk to you soon. Thanks for listening To the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay calm that's b u ll e t e r o f s CR e n PLA y.com


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BPS 034: The Hidden Tools of Comedy with Steve Kaplan

Today on the show we have comedy legend, author, and writer Steve Kaplan. For years, Steve Kaplan has been the industry’s most sought-after expert on comedy. In addition to having taught at UCLA, NYU, Yale and other top universities, Steve created the HBO Workspace, the HBO New Writers Program and was co-founder and Artistic Director of Manhattan Punch Line Theatre. He has consulted and taught workshops at companies such as HBO, DreamWorks, Disney, Aardman Animation, Sony Pictures Network India, Globo Brazil, and others.

In New York, Steve was co-founder and Artistic Director of Manhattan Punch Line Theatre, where he developed writers such as Peter Tolan(Analyze This, The Larry Sanders Show), writer and producer David Crane(Friends, Episodes), writer/producer Tracy Poust (Ugly Betty, Will & Grace), Michael Patrick King(Sex and The City, Will & Grace), David Ives(Venus in Fur),  Howard Korder (Boardwalk Empire), David Fury(The Tick, Buffy, The Vampire Slayer), Lisa Loomer (The Waiting Room), Tom Donaghy (The Mentalist), Kenneth Lonergan (Manchester by the Sea)and Mark O’Donnell (Hairspray) and introduced such performers as Lewis Black, Mercedes Ruehl, Oliver Platt, Helen Slater, Fisher Stevens, Veanne Cox, Sam McMurray, Vickie Lewis, and Illeana Douglas.

In Los Angeles, he created the HBO New Writers Project, discovering HBO Pictures screenwriter Will Scheffer(Big Love), and performer/writer Sandra Tsing Loh(Aliens in America),; and the HBO Workspace, a developmental workshop in Hollywood that introduced and presented performers such as Jack Black and Tenacious D, Kathy Griffin, Bob Odenkirk and David Cross(Mr. Show), Josh Malina and Paul F. Tompkins. At the Workspace, he was Executive Producer for the award-winning HBO Original Programming documentary DROP DEAD GORGEOUS. Steve has directed in regional theaters and Off-Broadway (including Sandra Tsing Loh’s ALIENS IN AMERICAat Second Stage).

In addition to private coaching and one-on-one consultations, Steve has taught his Comedy Intensive workshops to thousands of students in the United States and countries around the world, including London, Toronto, Galway, Athens, Paris, Tel Aviv, Sydney, Melbourne, Rio, Munich, New Zealand, and Singapore. This year, he will be presenting seminars and workshops in Los Angeles, Brussels, London, and via Skype, Sweden.

His new book The Comic Hero’s Journey: Serious Story Structure for Fabulously Funny Films. I can’t recommend it enough.

A comic hero or heroine also goes on a journey, but for the comic hero, it’s often quite, quite different. The hero decides to go on the adventure; the comic hero often has no choice. The hero has a wise old man; the comic hero often meets an idiot who inadvertently says something that can teach him a thing or two. Steve Kaplan will show you the diverse paths that comedy takes in The Comic Hero’s Journey.

This interview is EPIC! If you want to learn how to create “funny” in your screenplays or projects this episode is for you.

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Alex Ferrari 0:02
I like to welcome to show Steve Kaplan. Man, thank you so much for jumping on the show today.

Steve Kaplan 2:52
My pleasure.

Alex Ferrari 2:53
Thank you, man I've been I've been wanting to get you on the show for a long time. And as you've like I said earlier Off, off off air is like I've seen your work fly through my feed so many times and it's just like, I gotta reach out to see one of these days. I gotta reach out to sequences. It's just everything get caught up. And I finally have you here to talk comedy.

Steve Kaplan 3:12
We're both excited. Good.

Alex Ferrari 3:14
So you have a a long and illustrious career in the business. How did you get started in the business?

Steve Kaplan 3:22
I started out as a as a bad actor, or mediocre actor, okay. And, and a and a kind of a frustrated comic. I was I was not very good as a comic places asked me never to come back like not even as a customer. And, and I was I had two friends who were actors. And I started doing some directing. And they they said, Well, you know, we can't get we want to control our own careers. So we want to start a theatre company in New York. And I said, Great, let me think about it for a second. So I came back to a meeting with them and I said, Let's do something that no one else is doing. Everybody else does, you know serious theater and they do productions of checkoff in turtlenecks and, and expressionistic abstract plays I said, let's, let's be different. Let's do comedy. Let's be a theatre company that's devoted only to comedy. And, and they thought about it for a second and they they realized that it at the time in New York, it kind of filled a niche that no one else was filling. So we started this, this theater company. We called it Manhattan punch line. It wasn't a comedy club it. We did plays we did, but we did stand up nights we did improv and a lot of great people came out of it. We had David Crane who went on to do a little thing called friends. And Oliver Platt is great actor and We had people who later went on, like skips Grove in and David Currie they later went on to become executive producers and television. Michael Patrick king who did Sex in the City, two Broke Girls. He was the he was in our improv group. So a lot of great people came out of it. And as, as a young man, in the arrogance of youth, I thought I knew everything there was to know about comedy. Of course, I would. I was fascinated by comedy as a kid. I watched all the old Bing Crosby pop, road movies, Stan, Laurel and Hardy all you know, African Costello, I thought I knew everything there was to know about comedy. But after producing and directing for a couple of years, I thought to myself, Okay, I don't know everything. But I know it's not funny goddamnit. And shortly thereafter, I thought to myself, how the frick does this stuff work? Why is something funny on a Thursday, no longer funding on a Sunday? Why is Why is a script, sometimes the funniest the first time you get some actors around the table to read it. And after that, as when you're working on it, the more you work on it, the more you rehearse it, the less funding it becomes. So I saw what was going on. So I started doing experiments, I started, I was teaching an improv class to actors. And I started creating and designing improv games and exercises to try to understand what comedy is, why it works, what's happening when it doesn't work, and how can you fix it? And, and out of that 25 year exploration came this book, The Hidden tools of comedy. And I did that because when I came to Los Angeles, a guy who had been working with Robert McKee, your first Yeah, right? Story, of course, yeah. Yes, story. And he said to me, he said, you know, you could do for comedy with Robert McKee does for story. And I thought, Oh, that's interesting. Because up to then I just been a theater director, I'd work with actors, I taught acting, and improv. And so then I started to work with writers and do workshops for writers. And that kind of snowballed, and pretty soon, I was being flown out to Singapore, to London, to New York, to to Australia, and, and pretty soon on traveling around the world and, and doing comedy. And it all came out of the fact that I was this frustrated performer who tried to get his class to laugh successfully. I was, you know, most people are class clowns. I was a failed class clown. Well, you

Alex Ferrari 7:55
know, it's interesting that you say that, because I, you know, I find it that there are people who are innately funny, like, they could just you throw them in front of a room, and they could just make the crowd laugh. And then there's people who can write funny, but you throw them in front of a crowd, they just won't be able to do it. And sometimes, and then sometimes you get the magic of both, you get someone who's amazing writer and amazing performer. But it sounds like you were more of the writing style, as opposed to

Steve Kaplan 8:24
actually actually I was I was more of the, if you get me in a room, at a party, put a couple of drinks in me, maybe, you know, maybe a cigarette or two, you know, and, and I can be pretty funny, but, but it was getting up in front of strangers and, and writing materials. So what I found was my, my skill or my, my gift was was not in creating material, but in working on other people's material. And that's, that that's why I was good director. And I became a very and I am a very accomplished story, analyst and story consultant. So I do a lot of script consulting, for writers and, and producers and production companies. You know, what, I,

Alex Ferrari 9:16
when when analyzing comedy, because I've loved comedies, I've been I follow comedies on like I you know, even every every part of the kind of work I do as a director or as a writer, I always have some sort of comedic element into it. It's just, it's innate in me. And I've been fortunate or unfortunate to know many standard comics and worked with many standard comics over the years, which are generally the saddest people.

Steve Kaplan 9:43
They are they are big, dark, broken, broken people. Ray Romano one said that if he had been hugged once as a child could be an accountant. Exactly. And they're you know, they're filling their you know, even more than Then actors, comics are trying to fill in an unfillable hole that can never be never be completed. Doesn't doesn't mean that every comic is is depressed or has to be depressed. But well adjusted. People do not go into

Alex Ferrari 10:22
Amen, sir. Amen. So no, what I find funny is like growing up in the, you know, I'm an 80s kid. And I, you know, a lot of the comedies from the 80s, and even from the 70s, a Mel Brooks stuff, Spaceballs, Blazing Saddles, silent movie, history of the world. Some of that stuff's still still like Young Frankenstein. You can watch him Frankenstein today. And it holds

Steve Kaplan 10:46
it whole Frankenstein holds up. high anxiety does not

Alex Ferrari 10:53
correct. Yeah, there's certain there's certain things that do so in your opinion, why

Steve Kaplan 10:58
I think the difference is, a Young Frankenstein, even though it's full of gags, is about is a story. Yeah, that a guy trying to create a relationship and trying to figure out his place in the world. Whereas high anxiety is simply a series of parodies on Hitchcock with, with a disposable story that you you know, if you think about it, you can't really believe in it, you don't really believe in the relationship. So to me, comedy that that sustains and that, that that holds up over time. Even if it's as silly as airplane is always it is always about characters in crisis, as opposed to Scary Movie four, which has, which has as many gags per minute as airplane does. But you don't care about those characters, your your they never asked you to take them seriously. They never ask you to care about them to empathize with them. So that's to me, that's the big difference

Alex Ferrari 12:03
airplane is it's on my top, top 10 comedies of all time, I mean, it's just a brilliant thing. And those kinds of films, though they do hold over time. You watch even Some like it hot. You watch some like a high. And that thing is like it's like a Swiss Swiss clock is just hitting boom, and boom and a boom. And it's and it holds in how old is that? What that was? From

Steve Kaplan 12:27
the 50s? In the 50s? Yeah,

Alex Ferrari 12:30
so that I mean that movies over half a, you know, a decade a half a century old. And it's still hold.

Steve Kaplan 12:38
Hey, don't be ageist. Hey.

Alex Ferrari 12:44
No, no, no, but it's still no but like, you know, 50 years young, obviously, obviously. But, but there's a lot of things that even from the 90s Don't hold and from in early 2000s that were pipe might have made noise when it came out. But you go back and watch it now just like, like bar at which I still find it. I couldn't believe Borat was made. I went back and watched it a little bit. It doesn't mean I know all the jokes coming. So it doesn't hold as much as it did when it first came out. You know when it did and that kind of comedy. But it was very, it's just very interesting. What makes things hold and what doesn't make you know, and you're saying it's more story

Steve Kaplan 13:22
character. It's character. It's it's a, it's the great combination of character, premise and theme. So that so that even something as silly as airplane again, has all those three things. Whereas you know, deuce Bigelow, American Gigolo does not? For me. When when people ask me, What's my favorite comedy? I have many favorites. It's like asking what's your favorite kid? But for me, one of my favorite comedies of all time is Groundhog Day, because I think it's it's an amazing combination of comedy, you know, just pure laughs great performance by Andy McDowell and Bill Murray. But it's also about about something it's about what do you do with if you had a million lifetimes? What would you do with it? How would you spend it right? How would you how would you spend your day? How should How should you be mentioned the world and bench is Yiddish word that means marriage. That means a good man that means a person. Yes. And, and so. So to me, it hits on all those cylinders, right? And so I look for a film. For me comedies have to tell something true about being human has to tell something true about what humans you know, struggle with and deal within their lives has to has to be based on some incredible impossibility or implausibility. So that it doesn't have to be a fantasy like Groundhog Day, it can be something as simple as that movie with James Gandolfini and Julia Louis Dreyfus. Enough set, right, right, which is just this really cool, you know, simple, quiet story about a misuse, you know, is kind of struggling, she meets a guy, maybe he's going to be her new boyfriend, at the same time, she meets a client who becomes a best friend. And the client is the ex wife of the new boyfriend, who hates James Gandolfini and keeps on saying terrible things about him, which starts to affect her relationship. Now, is that impossible? No. But it's improbable. Yes. So you take, you take an improbable or impossible situation, and then you let it develop. That's the only time that you can lie in a narrative. And then you let it develop, honestly and organically. So a movie like big, and that's one lie in it. A kid makes a wish on a fortune telling machine he wakes up, he's 30 year old man, could that ever happen? No. But if it did happen, what would happen then? And every step of that movie develops organically and honestly, out of that premise. Now, some people might say, Yeah, but how does he get a job? At a computer at a toy toy company? And the answer to that is because that's the theme. The theme of big is sure. What's the connection between adulthood and childhood? So of course, you want him to meet some guy who works in that field in that area? You know, what would be the point of him meeting a guy who, who owns a gas station, so he ends up working at a gas station? You could do it, but it has nothing to do with the theme of the movie. So that to me, are those three elements that make a great comedy, character, premise and theme?

Alex Ferrari 17:08
Now, can you talk a little bit about what are the keys to making a good comedic lead character? Because there's there's you know, there's normally a leading man or leading woman, but a Kumi a good comedic leading character, what are some of the keys for that?

Steve Kaplan 17:25
I think I think the the main key is the ability to, to not only not take yourself seriously, but make fun of yourself. A great example of that is Jon Hamm. Who, arguably, you know, did a great dramatic job in in Mad Men, but he's able to make fun of himself, he's able to let himself be seen in a ridiculous or negative light and, and not pretend that he's that he's pretending to be that guy, he owns it. So that it's the ability to take the pie in the face, and not pretend it's somebody else.

Alex Ferrari 18:11
But that's, that's more of an actor, but I'm talking about like, on an actual character on a writing standpoint, what makes a goal leading character, comedic leading character, in a story

Steve Kaplan 18:23
yourself, yourself or your your, your mom or your dad. So in other words, when you're writing a character, rather than trying to make this character, the stupidest guy you've ever seen, or the, or the or the clumsiest guy you've ever seen. Just tell the truth about yourself all. All narrative, all fiction is actually a autobiography, your your, your writing about the world that you see your perceptions, your take. And so when you create a character, just make him as human as you are. People like to say, Yeah, but my you know, but my, my character is, is is not that smart. And my answer to that is, so what makes you a genius? Hmm. I mean, you know, what I'd like to say is, you know, people are not as smart as they'd like to think they are. On the other hand, they're not as stupid as they, as they feel they are. Right? Ah, you you might my best examples are the classic sitcoms, all in the family and everybody loves Raymond. Yes, the character of Archie Bunker, how did they come up with that character? Oh, my God. It was it was based on a a British sitcom. Till death us do part in which a bigoted British guy was always always in battle with his liberal son in law. But when Norman Lear wrote that, he didn't give two things. For this British guy he wrote his father, he put his father in the in the character of Archie Bunker. Archie Bunker always used to say stifle when he wanted Edith to stop talking. That was an invention. That's what his father said to her. His father would say to his mother stifle one of the, in one of the first episodes, Archie says to Meathead, he says, You are the laziest white man around and and meathead says That's racist. Well, then you're the you know, and then he makes something else. And it's exactly what his father said to Norman Lear. He just took it from life. And the same thing in terms of Everybody Loves Raymond, in, you know, Ray Romanos Italian, but Phil Rosenthal, who wrote the pilot, and was the executive producer is Jewish. That mother, it's his mother. That father is his father. Yes, they they, he used some of the autobiographical elements from Ray Romano, his comedy, but he doesn't live in, in Ray Romano skin, he doesn't walk in his shoes. He's he lives in his own skin. And so he offered his own family as the as the grist for that comedy mill. So how do you create a great character? Look in the mirror, and and, and if you're, if your mirror isn't wide enough, then go home, go home for Christmas or Thanksgiving, and look in the mirror but take a selfie with all those people behind. Look, when we get together at family gatherings with our cousins. What are we laughing? We're laughing at our family we're laughing at her and and how crazy they are. Just Just own it, just share it. The hardest thing in the world is to give up the veneer of respectability and normal sake. Yes. I mean, you know, we all want to appear smart and capable. And this and that. And we know deep in our heart of hearts, how truly messed up and how broken and how crazy we are. But we want to hide that at all times. In comedy. We don't hide anymore. We just, we just let it out.

Alex Ferrari 22:23
And it being you have to be authentic is what you're saying and be vulnerable as as a writer.

Steve Kaplan 22:29
Yeah. And as George Burns once said, The secret of success in show business is authenticity. And the minute you learn how to fake it, you've got it made.

Alex Ferrari 22:41
Very true. Very true. And no, I heard a quote I actually used in one of my podcasts the other day is like your best the best friend you have in Hollywood is someone who stabbed you in the face. And I was like, wow, that's that was such a great. That's I had to use it. It's great, great light. Now Now let me ask you How does comedy structure differ from dramatic structure? Because we were beaten in with the you know, this, you know, dramatic structure. But there isn't a lot of talk about how comedic structure is different?

Steve Kaplan 23:14
Well, when you're talking about structure, you're talking about a three act structure or Michael Haig has his six turning points. It's not what's what's different about the the comic hero's journey, as it were, from the hero's journey. And I use that term only because

Alex Ferrari 23:35
you have a book called The comics, comics hero's journey,

Steve Kaplan 23:40
which my friend Chris Vogler wrote the writers journey, and I called him up and I said, Chris, I'm ripping you off, but it's with love. I'm taking your title, and I'm making fun of it. But out of love, yes. And so So I think one of the differences is, when creating when creating a structure in a comedy, it, like I say, is that you get to make up crap, make up shit once, and then you have to play it, play it straight and play it honestly. So if this weird thing really happened, if I'm in this weird situation, what would happen then? So So rather than thinking about plot, you're thinking about character, you're following the character through the narrative as opposed to and let's throw this at the character that the character so in one sense, dramatic structure is a character you know, heroes have to be thrown obstacles, otherwise they'll just win, right? But think about us think about people. We can't even go we can't even get out of the house on top. let alone have an obstacle thrown at us.

Alex Ferrari 25:06
You're right, you're right. Like not being able to get a cup of coffee. It's It's night. There's no, I didn't ask for soy I asked for whole milk. Ah, the whole days gone.

Steve Kaplan 25:16
Right? So So rather than thinking in terms of, okay, we've got to throw this obstacle at them, we have to have this villain. What you notice from watching a lot of comedies, is that you don't need villains. You don't need antagonists, in comedies, sometimes there are simply because of the structure the story, but you don't need them. Who's the antagonist? In Groundhog Day? It's himself. Yes. He has to he has to evolve from himself who's the antagonist? In 40 Year Old Virgin? There is none no one's trying to stop him from getting laid.

Alex Ferrari 25:55
He has a breakthrough his own thing

Steve Kaplan 25:58
fact. In fact, everybody is hell bent trying to help him. Right. So so so there's there's a number of differences in in a dramatic structure. You have a hero who has all the skills they need to to do whatever they need to do. Bruce Willis in Die Hard. No, he walks on class with with no shoes and he kills off. He kills like a dozen bad guys and, and he's any he has wisecracks all the way throughout. He's got all the skills in the world. And so you have to keep on figuring out, how can I make it harder on him and harder on him. Whereas in a comic structure, your hero starts off with a minus a negative, they're broken, they have a hole inside them that they don't know. They're not aware of. So in the beginning of a comic story, your character thinks that they're fine. We in the audience can tell, well, that guy, Phil Connors, in Groundhog Day, he's a jerk. That guy, Andy in 40 Year Old Virgin, he said, dweep he needs to you know, meet a girl. But they think everything's going okay. They don't want to rock the boat. And when something happens to to rock their boat, the first thing I tried to do is they go into denial, it's not happening, or they are they desperately want to go back to the normal world that they think is working for them, that we that we see is not. And then what happens over the course of the structure. As they, as these broken people who start their stories off with, with damaged or absent relationships, they gather families around themselves. And so and so everybody, every character, every hero character in a comedy is is forming a kind of dysfunctional family around themselves to help them through their transformation. And as and when they get to the end, they there's usually a a segment in which there is and this this is similar in in dramas, there's an all is lost moment, right? But what's what's why that's so important for comedy, is that people sometimes forget that the most important moment in a comedy is the pain is the loss is how characters deal with that pain. And that loss, as opposed to well, let's just make it funny. Well, here's another funny thing. Oh, here's another funny thing. Wouldn't it be funny if we do this? So wouldn't it be funny if we do that? So So part of the part of the difference of the structure is that in the hero's journey, the hero goes off into the unknown world, and brings back in elixir that will heal the world, right? In the comic hero's journey, the hero, the comic hero is thrown inadvertently or against their better judgment or against their will into a world they don't want to be in. And as a result, have to transform and thereby heal themselves to be to be able to be better able to be a person, a mensch in the world. So they're not really changing the world as much as they are changing themselves. So all comedy is transformational.

Alex Ferrari 29:34
That makes amazing sense. A character

Steve Kaplan 29:37
in a comedy doesn't realize that they have to change, but they have to change because the world as they knew it is taken away from them. They're they're in Oz, or or they're, they're a 30 year old men when they're really 12 years old, or they're living the same day over and over again. Or they just find themselves in In a weird situation, and what do they have to do they have to, they have to become different, even though they don't want to become different, and over the course, so another difference in structure is that in a, in a dramatic structure, your hero has a goal in the beginning of the movie, I'm going to catch the killer, or I'm going to solve this mystery. Or I'm going, you know, what is Luke say in the beginning Star Wars, he says, I want to, I want to be a pilot, I want to join the rebellion. So what happens by the end of Star Wars, he saves the rebellion. He's a pilot. But in a comedy, your hero has a short sighted goal. Their initial goal is is wrongheaded or short sighted. What is a? What does? The kid in big one, he just wants to be big enough to ride on a on a ride at a carnival to be with the girl of his dreams? Right? What does Phil Conners want? He just wants to get a job? Well, you just want no in the beginning. He just wants to get a better job at a bigger new station where he can be a weatherman, in a bigger station. You're now in 40 Year Old Virgin, what does Andy want, all he wants is to be left alone. Because these days are filled. He's you know, he's playing Halo. He's practicing the tuba. He's painting his little figurines. He's happy. He thinks he's happy, right? So. So what happens in a comedy is that your characters have a discovered goal, a goal that wasn't apparent to them, or us in the audience at the beginning of the movie, that later becomes something they discover as they're transforming. And, and so, Midway or a half, you know, three quarters the way through, or 40% of the way through, they discover that they want something else they want something new, and then they put all their attention and focus to try to get that discovered goal.

Alex Ferrari 32:07
That's Yes. That's a great great, great answer, sir. To to a question. Yes, the heroes, the comics hero's journey. It's it's quite it's all there. It's all there. It's all here. It's all in here.

Steve Kaplan 32:19
I'm available on Amazon.

Alex Ferrari 32:23
Do you have the audio book yet?

Steve Kaplan 32:25
No, no, I'm even though I have a face. That's right. That's great for Radio. I'm not. Audio books are people have asked me about audio books. But what they don't realize is that you have to pay unless you're James Comey and somebody asked you to make one. You have to pay to make an audio book and then your publisher has to flog it. It's not it's actually it's not as not as easy as people like to think it is also having to stay in the studio and read this entire freakin thing. Oh, man.

Alex Ferrari 33:03
Um, yeah, I know, I know. You're doing the audio version. I am doing the audio version of my book. But I'm a podcaster and I've been playing for a long time and I have the gear. Yeah, so I'm doing it but it is. It's not like this voice I when I'm reading the book, it's not like Hey guys, how you doing? It's not that it's in today. So I have my my audiobook voice

Steve Kaplan 33:25
which is your your like the NPR girls on the SNL sketch. today so we have what he

Alex Ferrari 33:32
calls that similar to that but not completely sweaty balls. What a great what a great bit. Um, no, I wanted to I wanted to touch upon a genre of comedy which, and I just want to hear your thoughts on it fish out of water, which is such a great comedic world to be thrown into like the crocodile, Dundee's Beverly Hills, cops, you know, those kinds of things. Any tips on what, what writers can do to do because I haven't seen a good fish out of water? Comedy in a long time. Honestly, what was the last good one you saw?

Steve Kaplan 34:09
Well, I mean, there's there's there's been a dearth of great. A great film comedy most, almost everything that's really good. Or a lot of everything that's really good is happening in on TV or streaming?

Alex Ferrari 34:23
Yeah. Yeah, there's that's very true. Yeah. The greater the Grayson, Grayson, Frankie's of the wild,

Steve Kaplan 34:29
I guess, I guess, you know, Spy with Melissa McCarthy. She was a fish out of that would be Yeah, that was funny as hell, Todd. You know, for me, for me. We are all fish out of water. We're swimming around. It's everything seems great. And then we're forced as as, as Amy Sherman Palladino wrote, we're forced out through through a hole that's smaller than a lady's purse. And we're we're thrust into a world we didn't make we didn't ask for. And we don't know how the hell we got there, we can't do anything. We are a fish out of water. Our our whole lives are fish out of water. We, we like to pretend that we're in water, you know, we're swimming in our waters, but for the most part, everybody is a tale of a fish out of water. In fact, that's why that's why comedians who are outsiders in their culture are so successful. That's why Canadians

Alex Ferrari 35:38
in America, right,

Steve Kaplan 35:39
yeah, because because they're, they're, you know,

Alex Ferrari 35:43
perspectives.

Steve Kaplan 35:44
They can't fight the in, you know, the encroaching American culture, but they're, they're kind of outsiders to it. African Americans, New Jews, you know, all the all the ethnic comedians who came up in the 20s and 30s, and 40s. They're there in a way outsiders, and so and so in that way, everybody stories, a fish out of

Alex Ferrari 36:09
water. Very, very true. Now, there's a bit when you

Steve Kaplan 36:13
when you when you take a situation in which you tear somebody away from what his normal world is, you create a fish out of water, Bill Murray's a fish out of water is living the same day over and over again, the character big is a fish out of water. So a fish out of water just doesn't mean a a nerd, gets caught in a space capsule and has to be the world's first astronaut, right, they've actually made that movie. But that's not the only way to that's not the only way to tell that story.

Alex Ferrari 36:49
Got it? Got it. So so you're what you're saying because I'm calling it more of like when I say fish out of water, it's more like the Beverly Hills Cop, literally the toy cop in Beverly Hills completely out of out of his place. But you're saying that there's elements of that in almost every story. And one way shape or form almost especially Yeah.

Steve Kaplan 37:06
Well in a comedy once the characters have have experienced what I call the WTF moment. They are, in fact, fish out of water who at first desperately tried to swim back to two more familiar more familiar waters, Tropic Thunder, you have a bunch of give a bunch of actors pretending to be in Vietnam, the director is is literally getting punched out by the studio head. And he gets this idea given to him by by Nick Nulty to bring everybody out into country to have them experience what it would be like if they were really in country in Vietnam and two minutes in he gets blown up and they're they're stranded and they have to make their way back to the extraction point to get back to their hotels right they're automatically fish out of water right they're forced to be soldiers when they don't want to be soldiers they're actors. And and only only one of them Jay bearish only one of them's actually read the manual, so he knows how to read a map. So So I it would be hard for me to think of a movie in which your character isn't a fish out of water at some point.

Alex Ferrari 38:35
That's a very good analogy. Very good. Now, romantic comedies, which is a whole other sub genre of what we're talking about. That's a whole other beast. In your opinion, what makes good romantic comedies work because when it's good, it's really good. You know, when When Harry Met Sally, Sleepless in Seattle, you know, any Hall, right? Those I mean, when they work, they're just hitting on all pistons. But there's been a lot of bad ones too.

Steve Kaplan 39:06
Well, the the I remembering I can't remember the name, but they all have Catherine Hegel. And, oh, and the guy, the guy from 300. But they

Alex Ferrari 39:20
Yeah, Jared, Jared. I'm Tara Butler, Gerald burger.

Steve Kaplan 39:23
They all they all feature Heather and Hegel and Gerald Butler. And I remember watching this movie in about 15 minutes in, she's up a tree, spying on him, I'm thinking, Oh, that'll happen. Here's, here's the problem with bad romantic comedy movies. They think that romantic comedy is about getting to people who are destined to be together. And then because they're destined to be together, you have to come up with ways of keeping them Apart, let's just come up with ways of keeping them apart. But that's not really the problem that people have in relationships. People don't have the problem of keeping you apart. The problem is how do you stay together? And not kill each other? Yes. Yeah, absolutely.

So the so the really good romantic comedies are, you know, I guess I would put sleep as in Seattle as an exception, because that's, that's really a romantic comedy in which to faded people who are a part of the entire right away to figure out a way to get together, right. But but you know, but they start off on opposite ends of the country. You don't have to create an artificial obstacle to keep them apart. But But movies like When Harry Met Sally pretty, pretty well. Yeah, pretty woman I, to me, that's a really a great example of the genre on I'm thinking more like 500 Days of Summer.

Alex Ferrari 41:04
Yes. Any haul,

Steve Kaplan 41:08
any haul, even even about a boy, which is not a not a romantic comedy, insofar as Hugh Grant is going to be romantically involved with that boy, but it is a romantic comedy, because it's about him connecting with somebody else besides himself,

Alex Ferrari 41:26
or Notting Hill, it doesn't matter. We're not or Notting Hill, that's a

Steve Kaplan 41:29
credit. And it's all about not how do you overcome these artificial obstacles? It's how do you figure out how to stay together with the obstacles that are there to begin with, you're two different human beings, your your, your you have different DNA, you your molecules rotate and vibrate at different frequencies. You know, the real problem in relationships is once we figure out how to swipe right and swipe left, you know is that when we meet? How do you how do you stay together? I mean, because 50% of all marriages end in divorce. So that's it. So staying together is not easy. You don't have to create an obstacle, you have to figure out how do we stay together? How do we figure out how to be one in a pair as opposed to the one that we know? So? So that's that's what I think a good romantic comedy is a good romantic comedy explores how we are in relationships and what we do in relationships and why we're so bad at relationships as opposed to, well, these two people are just gonna love each other unless we put some kind of wall between them. They're just gonna break through that wall and rough like animals. No, no, there, you know, people, people have a hard time being in the same room with each other. How do you get past that?

Alex Ferrari 43:01
I mean, When Harry Met Sally is a really great example of that. Yeah, that whole exploration was something Nora Ephron was probably one of the geniuses in the genre without question. And even Notting Hill, it's about it's not. They have obstacles, but the obstacles are just what pack what baggage, they bring each each of them bring to the to the relationship. Julia Roberts is a movie star. He's, he's a book store owner. How are we going to make this work? We love each other. But how are we going to stay together? It's about how do we stay together?

Steve Kaplan 43:30
Exactly. As opposed to how do we get them together? How do we keep them apart? For 90 minutes? Right. One of the examples that I use in my workshops when people ask me this question, I showed them a couple of scenes from Dan in Real Life, which was, yeah, yeah. Steve correct. And and Dan, in real life. This Steve Carell. So a widower, he's been depressed for two years, he meets this wonderful woman, Julia Benesch, in a bookstore and they chat, they talk. And he goes back to because they're having like a family reunion at this, you know, unbelievable. Perfect house with the perfect family, the perfect everything. And he goes back, and and everybody can tell that he's kind of hepped up about something and they say, what happened? He says, I might have met a girl, and then his brother who's Dane Cook. And by the way, when you're in a movie, Dane Cook is out acting you you're in trouble. I just want to say that Dane Cook introduces his fiancee and it turns out to be Julia pinos from the bookstore. And at that moment, the movie goes wrong. At that moment, Steve corral. Ly lies and says, Oh, Hi, what's your name? Okay, here's the result of that. Later on in the movie, about That's 40 minutes later, because they're trying to pretend that they don't know each other, he ends up fully clothed, in a shower pretending to take a shower. If your character ends up in a shower fully clothed, you've made a wrong turn. People don't do that. It doesn't happen in real life. Here's what would have been a better turn for them. She comes in the door. And he says, Well, we actually know each other. Well. She's the girl I met in the bookstore. And she might be embarrassed for a second. And then he would say, No, no, but now I can see Dane Cook while you love her because she's great. Congratulations, my brother. Alright, and so the movie becomes, how long? Can you fool yourself into thinking that you're happy for your brother? As opposed to really wanting her for yourself? And that becomes, to my mind much a much more interesting movie than winding up in a shower, fully clothed, getting wet, because Wouldn't it be funny if I had to? If I had to hide? Why is he hiding? Right? So he's talking to his brother's fiancee? Why is he hiding in a in a shower and somebody turns the shower on.

Alex Ferrari 46:20
And it's interesting, because they, a lot of times when when I feel like when writers and directors and even actors and performers when they, they they they don't have that, that hold on story, structure, or story or like what you're talking about, or character or character. It's exactly what be believable for the character, right? They then automatically lean on slapstick. They write and they lean on like, how can we get a gag out here? Like, oh, Wouldn't it be funny?

Steve Kaplan 46:47
Wouldn't it be funny if Wouldn't it be funny if there's a there's a great story about the making of Groundhog Day. And in one of the earlier drafts in Groundhog Day, when he wakes up, and it's the third day and it's third time in a row? And he's is it really happening? Am I going crazy. And in the script, they have him shaving his head into a mohawk, destroying the room setting fire to half the room painting the other room and de cloak colors. He goes to sleep. Six o'clock Sonny and Cher on the radio, he wakes up the same day. And they looked at that they look at those rushes and Harold Ramis. And I'm guessing I'm guessing Bill Murray or the producers looked at the looked at each other and said, Why would he cut his hair into a mohawk? Why don't we do that?

Alex Ferrari 47:45
I mean, visually, visually, it's funny, but it doesn't work.

Steve Kaplan 47:48
How well how does it help? It doesn't help this right? Why would this character do that? And so at great expense, they reshot the scene. And all that happens in the scene, if you remember is he breaks a pen. Right puts one down on the floor, and he puts one on the nightstand. And he wakes up the next morning and the pencil is whole. And he knows it's happening.

Alex Ferrari 48:12
Right? And it's so brilliantly simple,

Steve Kaplan 48:15
simple, honest and direct. As opposed to Wouldn't it be funny if and from that point on and Steve tap Alaskey, who has his own podcast relates that that from that moment on, the question always was what would they really do? what would really happen? In fact, at the end of Groundhog Day, there was this whole debate, because he ended McDowell wins him in the bachelor auction and takes him home. And there was this whole debate on how the last scene should go. Did Did they have sex? What happened? Did you know what he wake up? Like naked? Would he wake up? And they they, rather than thinking, well, wouldn't it be funny if we do this? They they put it to a vote. The entire cast and crew got to vote on what would happen that night. What would happen with these two characters? Because they were no longer fictional characters. They were real. They were human beings. And what would these two human beings do? And that's why spoiler at the next day, it turns out that all he did was fall asleep. And she you know, Andy McNally says, he just fell asleep. And he says, It was the end of a really long day. Just so

Alex Ferrari 49:34
brilliant. And the song is the song is different. Pop song. It was it was it was great. Oh, such I got to watch that movie again. It's so great. I do want to also touch upon dark comedies. Yes, specifically one of my favorite dark comedies Heather's which was arguably a comedy. Yeah, but it is. It is funny as hell, and you can't make that movie today, like that movie would never in a million years be made today.

Unknown Speaker 50:06
Why can't you? I think there's a lot of PC

Alex Ferrari 50:09
stuff that wouldn't get through like, I mean, like when I stopped bleeding,

Steve Kaplan 50:12
just just kill it just killing

Alex Ferrari 50:16
this school kid in the school killings with a gun in the school. I mean, there's a lot of stuff that just wouldn't fly today. Like when I saw Blazing Saddles for the first time, I was like, well, there's never there's no way in hell that movie could be made today. Like it just, just just not gonna happen. And I saw this years ago, but even then, and then Bharat showed up, I was like, Well, okay, apparently everything. Um, but, but with Heather's specifically that film, which is a it's a it's a genius piece of work, in my opinion. How, what are tips that you could give writers on how to write good dark comedies? Because again, I haven't seen a lot of good dark comedies lately, either. I mean, when was the last good dark comedy you saw? Um, it's a rarity in the genre. Now.

Steve Kaplan 51:01
I'm guessing. I'm thinking about things like wag the dog.

Alex Ferrari 51:08
Still 2025 years ago? Yeah. Dr. Strangelove,

of course.

Steve Kaplan 51:16
I think I think the the, the key I mean, listen, Breaking Bad is a dark comedy. So many ways it is it was really bad. Ben is a dark comedy and TV, the TV there is more of these existence. The Sopranos is a dark comedy. I, I think I think besides the fact that that, you know, it's one thing to make a television episode for $2.3 million. And it's another thing to make a movie for 40 to $200 million. But I think the the thing you have to do is you have to know what, who you're making fun of and what you're making fun of. And you have to punch up. Don't punch down.

Alex Ferrari 52:04
That's why Heather's was so smart. A punched so up above the genre of high school. Right comedy.

Steve Kaplan 52:11
Well, it's also it's also you're there. You're you're not making? Listen, we're all living in a dark comedy. All right, we're all we're all with. No, but not just today's political situation. We're all whistling past the graveyard. That's what all that's what all black comedy is. Oh, I guess this is also 20 years ago, A Fish Called Wanda is kind of a Dark

Alex Ferrari 52:36
Avatar. Yeah. And, and

Steve Kaplan 52:40
what it all comes down to is as we're whistling past the graveyard, we're trying to make fun of the things that terrify us. So, to me, the way to make a dark comedy is to focus on how the people are coping with it. How are they coping with it? Because in in a metaphorical sense, we're all struggling in a dark comedy. And, and the the end of all of dark comedies is not too funny, huh? You know, none of us as they say none of us get out of this alive. So or as Clint Eastwood says, in the Unforgiven you know, we all get what's coming to us. Yeah. So so so the the idea is that you're you're not pretending when you say that there's Death and Dismemberment out there waiting for you? How are you? How do people deal with that? How do they react to that? What happens to the living people as they grapple with these issues of death and destruction and extinction? So that so that if you're, if you're making a dark comedy, honestly, you're just finding what's ridiculous and absurd. In in what in what we're doing. To to deal with the fact that we're living you know, we're on this blue cinders spinning through a void. We don't know where we came from, we don't know where we're going to. And yet, we're gonna wake up tomorrow and have frozen yogurt. Because frozen yogurt at least make it a little better.

Alex Ferrari 54:23
You know, we are the only creature on the planet that knows that we will not be here eventually.

Steve Kaplan 54:28
Right? And what do we do based on that? Do we all sit home weeping softly writing haiku? No. We wake up, and we say Thai. Thai food

Alex Ferrari 54:39
Thai. Don't do it today. I think Thai,

Steve Kaplan 54:42
Thai, Thai or, or like dark chocolate, dark chocolate of

Alex Ferrari 54:48
course. 80% of the time, Starbucks every day Starbucks.

Steve Kaplan 54:52
I'm gonna spend 325 Because Starbucks will make my eventual descent into death and entropy, you'll make it a little bit more forth. That's great.

Alex Ferrari 55:05
That's amazing. Um, now another question I have for you is, and I'm curious to hear your answer on this the difference between comedy and funny, because there is a difference. There is a major difference.

Steve Kaplan 55:19
Absolutely. I start a lot of my workshops workshops off with a comedy perception test. I give them seven different versions of a man slipping on a banana peel, man slipping on a banana peel man and top hat slipping, man slipping on a banana peel after kicking the dog and slipping on a banana peel after losing his job. Blind man slipping on a banana peel blind man's dog slipping. Man slipping on a banana peel and dying. And then I asked them Okay, so like which one do you think is the funniest? The least funniest, the most comic and the least comic? And they'll go, somebody will go well, what's the difference? And I'll go Excellent question. I'm glad you asked. Select which one you think is the funniest, the least funniest, the most comic and the least comic? I don't answer the question. I just say select which one you think is they couldn't be different? They could be the same? And so then we'll start with, Okay, how many of you here whether it's 20 people or 300? People? How many of you here thought a man slipping on a banana peel was the funniest how many people thought the man slipping on a banana peel after losing his job was the funniest. And so we'll go through all of that. And then at the end, I'll go and I'll say. So here's the answer to which one of these is the funniest. You're all right. You're all correct. Yeah, it's like it's like, don't you feel affirmed? It's like the 60s.

Alex Ferrari 56:47
We all get a participation trophy.

Steve Kaplan 56:50
Because funny is subjective, completely. What you think is funny is different from what you think is funny. And you're both right. But comedy is not subjective comedy is the art of telling what's true, and specifically telling what's true about human beings. So that so that, even if I'm even if I'm creating a moment, with a character that you are not laughing at, if I'm telling the truth about a human being without white washing them, or would that just ignoring some of their defects? It's comedy, even though you might not laugh, at the end of Dr. Strangelove, when he's when slim pickins is writing the bomb down to what we know is our entire extinction. Talk about black comedy. There some people in the audience laugh there's a nervous tenor. Many people don't. But it's not a dramatic moment. Yes, he's got it right. It's a comedic moment, even if you're not laughing. So there's a difference between comedy and funny. Funny is what makes you laugh. And it's different from it for everybody. But comedy is telling the truth, telling the truthful story of a less than perfect person struggling against insurmountable odds with that many of the required skills and tools with which to win yet never giving up hope. And because of that, what I tried to tell writers and directors and performers and executives is don't chase funny. Because Because you're chasing a fraction of the audience. If it works, people will laugh. If it doesn't work, people won't laugh, then then then change it after your previous but tell the truth. Tell the truth in a truthful way, in an unexpected and yet. And yet ultimately. All the way authentic way thanks. And comedy will occur. Also make yourself laugh. I mean, you you're a human being. Right. So if you're not laughing, right, chances are, don't try to out think the audience don't try to think what will they find funny? Well, wouldn't it be funny if I did this? Use your own sense of humor only guided only kind of limited by telling the story honestly. And truthfully, through character and theme.

Alex Ferrari 59:28
I'm going to ask you a deeper question here. When you say and I think this is this is a question that will go through all all all writing, all storytelling, all art in general, is the ability to be honest, be authentic, be truthful, and what stops an artist from doing so? Because as an artist myself and the work that I do, you know, one of the reasons why this podcast has done as well as it has over the years is because I'm completely authentic, and I asked authentically And I want truth. And that's why people gravitated towards it. What stops the artists from doing so? Is it just pure fear of people making fun of them, or of you know, things like that. But I've always found that when I'm honest about my work, whether it be my writing, whether it be like my new book, which is as honest as I could possibly be a film that I direct, when I'm honest about it, that's when that's when the magic is, but it's scarier.

Steve Kaplan 1:00:31
Well, I'm not sure that there's one answer to that. But I think part of that answer is, is not trusting that your story is good enough that they are your that your point of view is good enough. worrying that other people won't enjoy it. worrying that somebody who really knows finances but doesn't know art is telling you I don't think it's funny. Okay, then then I'll look for somebody who does and you won't produce it or you won't. You won't be my agent. But but but I think it's it comes out of a fear is part of it. But it comes out of the sense that that there's the sense that on not enough. For me, a perfect example is the I'm going to pronounce her name wrong. It's the director who directed enough said friends with money. Please give Nicole holofcener Okay. I don't know. I think I think I'm mispronouncing her name. She She. She makes she makes these beautifully crafted. Beautiful movies, comic movies, and there's very little slapstick there's there's no there's there's no big gags there's no you know, there's not a lot of sex scenes. to 13 year olds are not drawn to her movies. And yet, her movies are wonderful. But it's it has a kind of a limited viewership so far. And I think people are worried that if they don't put in the big dick choke, that, that they won't make money or they're they won't sell or, or or the studio will be disappointed. So there's there's fear. And sometimes it's a justified fear. Because, I mean, how many five star restaurants are there out there? And how many McDonald's are out there out there? So if you're, if you're studying to be a chef, should you go to McDonald's and see what's made them so successful?

Alex Ferrari 1:02:57
Different, that are model different to everything?

Steve Kaplan 1:03:00
Yeah, I mean, you, you, you have to strive towards your own sense of excellence. And know that that doesn't translate into a into an economic model, necessarily. Wow.

Alex Ferrari 1:03:17
You've just honestly you've kind of blown my mind a little bit because it just there was that light bulb that just went off in my head when you said, if you're if you're trying to be a chef, if you're training to be a chef, why would you go to McDonald's to see how because they're very successful. Yeah, but it's a different kind of success, as opposed to why wouldn't you go to a Gordon Ramsay restaurant and and see how he's doing it and why you're fine dining restaurant that has the five

Steve Kaplan 1:03:42
let's not say Gordon Ramsay, because I don't think that fair. It's still that.

Alex Ferrari 1:03:47
Fair. It's one of the few chefs I know. I'm Wolfgang. I hate you you omelet? Yeah, exactly. But, but I think one of the issues with with Hollywood in general is to so many people go to watch studio movies, that are financial vehicles, they're made for money. They're not made, particularly for story. Every once in a while someone sticks sneaks in a store. Every once in a while you get one of these, you know that's has money behind it has big stars and has a story, but they're becoming rarer and rarer. much rarer.

Steve Kaplan 1:04:22
But you know what the studio system does so well, is taking stories that already work and visualizing them correct. That's why the that's why the Marvel Knights do so well. Yeah, because those stories were great when they were 10 cent comics. And these great craftsmen and technicians and great actors, visualize them for us. But the story's already there. The characters are already there and and to give them credit, they don't screw the characters up. The Marvel characters were screwed up human beings to start are off with when they were 10 and 12 cent comics and they're still screwed up human beings. All the movie said was honor that as opposed to justice DC movies in which they can figure out that the stories came out of where we do right. Where the Justice League we do right because that's the right thing to do. Guys not enough really, really. And so they they kind of veer veer between let's go as dark as possible. And let's or let's have lots of wisecracks they still have I haven't seen Aqua Man I understand Aqua Man is a little bit better

Alex Ferrari 1:05:37
than but Wonder Woman was wonderful. I thought Wonder Woman was wonderful. Wonder Woman was good. From the DC world

Steve Kaplan 1:05:44
that is from the, from the DC world. I mean, it was it was female empowerment. And it was in a in a period. That wasn't the modern day. So I think they they kind of solved it in a good way. But you know, I think what what what movies do so well is take existing stories, and and help us see them for who they are like Lord of the Rings. Whereas if you want to see a really good movie, take a look at an independent see what's coming out of Sundance. See, see what somebody has made? That wasn't made through the studio system, but made because this is the story I want to tell like eighth grade. Yeah,

Alex Ferrari 1:06:29
I haven't seen it yet. But I hear it's amazing. Oh,

Steve Kaplan 1:06:31
it's it's so good. And, and it obviously or maybe I'm wrong. Maybe I'm totally wrong about this. But it's but to me, it obviously wasn't made after a story conference at Sony.

Alex Ferrari 1:06:44
No, I'm almost positive. That's not since one of your books is called the hidden tools of comedy. Can you give us a few hidden tools?

Steve Kaplan 1:06:53
Well, I've already given you a couple. Okay, we start off with, with the paradigm what I call the comedy equation, comedies about an ordinary guy or gal, Jackie Gleason used to call him a Moke struggling against insurmountable odds without many of the required skills and tools with which to win yet never giving up hope. Now, from that paradigm, we draw usable, practical tools, the tool of winning comedy gives your characters that permission to win. Not that they're trying to be funny, but they're trying to when I do I do an exercise in my in my workshop, I asked three people who I make sure are not performers. And I tell them that they're lawyers, and the most important court case, in the in their careers began in a courthouse, four blocks away five minutes ago. I tell them, I say to them, what what would what what should you do to solve the problem? And they are people in the audience say they should run there? And I'll ask them, What would actors do. And they say, act as we talked about it, they'd create dialogue. So then I tell them, Okay, for muscle memory, just run out the door, your three lawyers, you're five minutes late, four blocks away, run out the door. So they run out the door, then I bring them each individually. And I say, Okay, here's the crazy thing, for some crazy reason. You have to be the second person out the door, don't tell the others now bring each of the three yen out to them, you have to be second. I'll bring them all in. Now, these are not performers. So I bring them all in. And I say most important case of the three lawyers most important case happened starting five minutes ago started five minutes ago in a courthouse four blocks away, go. And what will happen is they'll rush the door, and then begin this odd little path of trying to trying to get through the door. And occasionally somebody will figure it out. But most often I'll have to side coach and say, I give you the permission to do what you need to do in order to win. And what I usually do is I usually pick two big guys and a tiny girl, right? And at some point, one of the big guys gets the idea. Oh, I don't have to be a gentleman picks up the girl throws her outside leaves, so he can be second. It's an experiment. It doesn't work the same way all the time. It doesn't work all the time. But invariably the audience laughs and I'll bring the people back out and I'll say, who directed that? And they'll say no one. And I'll say to the audience, I'm sorry, Directors. I'm sorry. We don't need directors and I'll say who wrote that scene? And they'll say no one oh they'll say you did Mr. Kaplan because now I said I didn't write it. I just set up this situation. What happened at the door? That was that was you. And so I'll say you don't need you don't need directors. You don't even need writers you just need characters who are given the permission to do what they need to do in order to win. Because when they were doing that weird dance at the door, they weren't trying to be funny. They were simply trying to solve a problem and unsolvable problem as it turns out, but simply tried to solve a problem. So rather than trying to be funny, characters are given the permission to do what they need to do in order to win. Which is why when Woody Allen is arguing with some guy on a movie on the line in a movie, he's able to drag Marshall McLuhan out from behind a poster in any Hall to win his arguments.

Alex Ferrari 1:10:34
Brilliant. That was such a brilliant move I love

Steve Kaplan 1:10:37
ya. Although now that I find that that Woody Allen is really a creepy, yes, yes. You know, that's unfortunately, not all the best people are are great artists. And he happens to be one of the not great people. But right. But so, so winning, the idea that comedy gives you the permission to win is one of the tools non hero, not that not a comic, you're not a fool, not the ridiculous person, but simply somebody who lacks some if not all the essential skills and tools with which to win. Straight line wavy line. Most people think of comedians or comics as funny people, and then they're the straight man, the straight men who kind of just set the funny people up to do something funny, right? And, and what what the tool of straight line wavy line does is it recognizes the fact that that's a false dynamic. John Cleese once said that when they started Monty Python, they thought that comedy was watching somebody do something silly. They later came to realize that comedy is watching somebody watch somebody do something silly. watching somebody watched somebody do something silly. So that in in a, in a comic dynamic, you have somebody who's blind to a problem or creating the problem, like Kramer, and somebody who's struggling with the problem, but because they are not here, or they can't solve the problem like Jerry. So if you look at comedy, if you look at sitcoms, you're always seeing a straight line, somebody who's kind of blind to who they are, or what they're doing, like Joey friends, and somebody who kind of notices it, but doesn't quite know exactly how to deal with it, or what to say to it. Like Chandler. And so you have this dynamic. And and the dynamic can switch because it's not about character. It's about focus. Who is the story about at that moment? Who's in focus? And so, so those are some of the tools in the hidden tools of comedy, along with art types, comic premise, metaphoric relationships, a lot of stuff also, so 280 pages of genius

Alex Ferrari 1:12:55
itself, obviously, obviously, sir, I know you haven't mentioned it a few times. But let's talk about you two books that you have out there. The hidden tools of comedy, you

Steve Kaplan 1:13:03
mean, this book? Yes. This book?

Alex Ferrari 1:13:07
Yes, those two books? Yes,

Steve Kaplan 1:13:08
I should mention that.

Alex Ferrari 1:13:11
Tell us about your your older book is the for the book first came out was a hidden tools of comedy, which is done very, very well. So tell us a little bit about that?

Steve Kaplan 1:13:22
Well, like I said, it's a it basically talks about the things that are not taught at AFI, or USC, or NYU. Because people still think comedy is, well, let's do something funny. Let's do some gags. And it talks about the things that actually create, increase or decrease the comedic elements in a scene. And what you can do because it's not about, well, you just born funny. It's about if you give a character skills, if you have them be a hero, you're creating a dramatic moment. And a skill could be something as simple as awareness, kind of so in a character's aware of his situation, that could depress him. That's a dramatic moment. But if a character isn't aware that he's kind of lively, just going along, not realizing how screwed up they are, and how hopeless their situation is. That's a comedic moment. So you can actually increase or decrease the comedic elements in a scene or the dramatic ohms in a scene simply by giving or taking away skills for your character.

Alex Ferrari 1:14:32
Got it. And then your new book, The comedic hero's journey, we've kind of touched upon a lot of elements

Steve Kaplan 1:14:37
that, that basically it kind of is a riff on the, on the hero's journey, and talks about so what happens in the comic hero's journey, what what differences are there, what tweaks you have to make and how is that journey different either either in a great way or in a subtle way different from The dramatic hero's journey. And it's, it's, as I say, it's serious story structure for fabulously funny film.

Alex Ferrari 1:15:08
Now, I also heard you had a few workshops coming up. Yeah,

Steve Kaplan 1:15:12
um, what one of the things I do is I go around and do these, for the most part, their two day workshops. And you can find out all about them on my website, Kaplan comedy calm that's Kaplan with a K comedy with a C, because if I spelled comedy with a K, that would make me a hack. So it's got to be Kaplan comedy all one word.com. So we're doing one in Belgium, in Brussels on February 16, and 17th. I don't speak Belgium, but they speak comedy. So I think we'll be okay. And then I'm in Los Angeles in March, march 2, and third. And I'm in London on April 27, and 28th. And I think I might be going to New York or San Francisco later in the year, but those still have to be worked out.

Alex Ferrari 1:16:06
That's, that's amazing. And because you mentioned Belgium, in Brussels. What, how does comedy because comedy doesn't travel well, what's funny in one country is not funny in another. It does. But if you but funny doesn't a comedy does.

Steve Kaplan 1:16:23
Right? It you know what the language may be may be different. I've taught these workshops in Singapore, in Melbourne, in Paris, in Kiev, the language may be different. culture, customs government may be different. But people are the same. We all were all born. We all go to school. We all have secrets from our parents. Our parents have secrets from us. We all want to fall in love or get as much love however we define it any way we can. We have relationships or married we have kids. We have parents we have uncle's need. Human beings are the same all over the world even though we might use different words for different objects, even though some customs might be different. But but people are the people stay the same. And what I've noticed going around the world is that I can show a clip from an American movie, or or a American television show and people laugh because they understand what's happening to those people in that situation. And and and so so there's people all over the world can laugh at Groundhog Day, even if they don't speak English as the first language.

Alex Ferrari 1:17:44
Fair enough. Now I'm gonna ask a few questions. Last questions. I asked all my guests. Okay, what advice about Libra?

Steve Kaplan 1:17:50
My favorite color blue, long walks on the beach. I was born a small

Alex Ferrari 1:17:55
child.

Steve Kaplan 1:17:58
I was born in a very early age.

Alex Ferrari 1:18:01
That's great. That was actually that's a great line. That's a great.

Steve Kaplan 1:18:06
That's my that's from my palm reading. I see you are born in a very early age.

Alex Ferrari 1:18:13
I have to tell you, I will steal that for parties. Okay. Now, what advice would you give a screenwriter or comedic writer wanting to break into the business today?

Steve Kaplan 1:18:23
Okay, I would recommend three things. Buy your first five books obviously, that's actually not my recommendation. But thank you for thank you for putting that out there. I would recommend three things. One, take an improv class. Even if you don't want to perform even if you're not looking to be on SNL, or part of UCB. Comedy is an actor centric art form. It's about the character. So the some of the best training you can get is to be is to be in a class where you pretend you practice being a character seeing through a character's eyes hearing through a character's ears. So that's the first thing. The second thing I would say is that as you're writing, and we're talking about screenwriters, right, yes. Hear your stuff read out loud. You cannot figure out what's going what's happening just based upon you and your screen or you and your your legal pad. You have to get people in a room halftone reading parts, half of them just listening. Tape it because you're going to go into a coma at certain parts where it's not working and listen to what is happening when human beings say your words in context. I also I also suggest that you have wine and cheese,

Alex Ferrari 1:19:48
much wine and plenty one plenty,

Steve Kaplan 1:19:51
plenty one, but you have to you have to hear it read out loud because comedy doesn't exist in your head or in a vacuum and Third thing is, is that no one ever got a job because you they have, they have a great resume with a great font. It's, it's all about who you know, and who you have gone to college with, or went to summer camp with. So one of the things I tell people to do is, is all the stories that they've heard about, about some guy who, who went to a dentist, and the dentist also did the teeth of Jim Carrey, and they got those things are obnoxious, but something like that does happen. Oh, yeah. So that, so that, what you need to do is you need to make a list of everybody who you've ever known, or might have known or stood in back of a line at Starbucks. And you want to make sure that you you maintain those connections, and you want to maintain, you want to know that you have no idea where your next job is coming from. So your job is to be out there in the universe, say yes to the universe, I don't want to go to the screening co you don't know who you're gonna meet, I want to take this class, take it, you don't know who you're gonna meet. Because your next job is going to come from somebody who knows you. And that's not networking, just networking for networking sake, like, you know, the when you're at a party, and somebody is looking over your shoulder to see who else came in the door, because you don't have any idea who's going to help you. And the best way to figure out who's going to help you is for you to help other people. Be on a film crew. Yep. Help out. Be part of a reading. You know, hold it, hold, hold a microphone, hold a boom, and see where it leads you. Because there are a million ways to break into the business. But you can't break into the business sitting at home wondering how am I going to break into the business?

Alex Ferrari 1:21:57
I was talking to Daniel NOF, the creator of Carnival, and and he said he's like ours is the only business that has larceny in it. How do you break into the business? How to? And he's like, it's true. Like you never like how do I break into the cookie business? Like no one says that. People always want to break in or, you know, how do I break through the door? It's always larceny involved. Breaking into this business.

Steve Kaplan 1:22:23
Well, I'll say I'll say there's one other thing. Yeah, they're there. It's really simple. But there are there are only two rules. Rule one, number one be brilliant. Yes. Rule number two, let people know about it.

Alex Ferrari 1:22:41
That's, that's it, man that

Steve Kaplan 1:22:43
said, if you've got a story, and you've written a script, and nobody wants it, turn into a novel. Make it up, make it a podcast, write a blog, get it out there. Let people know about it. Because you don't know what's going to happen. I had a client, a guy I worked with on a trip to Australia through through Screen Australia and film Victoria. And he wrote this wonderful script about a guy on the Asperger's spectrum, who was who came up with a way of of getting relationship for himself. And he wrote the script. I thought the script was funny. Nobody wanted it. Especially Australia is the kind of place where you get government funding. And the government doesn't want to fund silly comedies. They want to fund serious works about itinerant inarticulate sheep herders who are on a on a lighthouse in Tasmania who haven't talked to anybody in 10 years. That's still fun. Yes, yes. Yes. So I so what he did was, he said, eff this. I think it's great story. I'm not getting anywhere. I'm not a young, I'm not a spring chicken. I've made the bad decision to be over 50. So I'm going to write this as a novel. So he wrote us a novel, it got published. And it got optioned by the same people who turned down his screenplay. And as part of his option, he gets to write the first screen. So so so there's, there's more than one way to skin a cat. So when I was doing a project for HBO, they had this performance space in Hollywood. I think now, it's gotten taken over by Comedy Central. And we we had this one actress who did did a show and she was pretty funny, but she for some reason, she wasn't getting any jobs. So she wrote a one person show for herself. And she did it at the at the HBO workspace, which no longer is there. So don't don't ask me to share sure to get you in into the HBO because they're no longer there. And we did it and people are making came to see it and people laughed it. They loved it, nothing happened. She didn't just say well, I guess I'll just have to work at Starbucks now for the rest of my life. She rented a theater on on Melrose, and ran it one night a week for like a year. And she went to the kind of groups that she thought would come to see it as she sold tickets. One night. A woman named Rita Wilson Kang, Rita Wilson is Tom Hanks wife, and Chris Rita Wilson was intrigued by her title, My Big Fat Greek Wedding wedding. Yeah. And she saw it, and she saw near Vardalos to this one person show. And she brought Tom Hanks the next week, and play till they made it. And it was the highest grossing independent romantic comedy ever made, because she had something brilliant. She wouldn't take no for an answer. She didn't just send the script, you know, to the same person over and over again, she said, if they don't want this, I'm just going to keep showing it till somebody comes along. Who does want it? So So Kalahasti brill, be brilliant. Let people know about it. And and while you're not taking no for an answer, figure out a way to not live on your credit card. Exactly. Please. That'll should come. That'll shit. We'll come back to bite you in the ass.

Alex Ferrari 1:26:27
Oh, and then some my friend and then some. Now, can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career? Besides drones, obviously.

Steve Kaplan 1:26:35
Wow I guess I guess I would, I would have to say, Lord of the Rings. Okay. I read that. I read that when I was a kid. And it took me to a different world. It took me to a different world when I was I was not a very happy kid. And it's it showed me the power of the amount of imagination. So I knew I knew even if the world wasn't working out for me a world in my imagination could so maybe that's what that maybe that's where I should go.

Alex Ferrari 1:27:18
Now what is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film business or in life

Unknown Speaker 1:27:29
yeah you can't force funny.

Alex Ferrari 1:27:36
Amen. Not spawning. Now. Um, what are three of your favorite films of all time?

Steve Kaplan 1:27:44
Ah, Godfather, okay, Groundhog Groundhog's Day. And I the three way tie between It's A Wonderful Life. Meet me in St. Louis. And oh, god dammit. Gene Kelly dancing in the rain.

Alex Ferrari 1:28:13
Okay, Singing in the Rain thing in the rain. Singing in the rain. And then just for you.

Steve Kaplan 1:28:21
Before we tie this thing

Alex Ferrari 1:28:24
Oh, such a great film. I love this thing. I see that's a movie that holds that hold still to this day. It's sad because

Steve Kaplan 1:28:31
it starts with loss. Yeah, no it starts it starts death Yep. And there's death is death near the near the end there's sadness and death.

Alex Ferrari 1:28:41
Now I normally don't ask this question but I have to ask you three of your favorite screenplays of all time that when you wrote your you know comedic stuff that you read, you're like Jesus, this is good. A

Steve Kaplan 1:28:53
Groundhog Day? Uh huh. But the finished script not not like right unfortunately Annie Hall

Alex Ferrari 1:29:04
Yes, I look I know that we all apologize for it. It is still a really he ruined it. He really ruined it but it's still a brilliant piece of art regardless of the artist.

Steve Kaplan 1:29:16
And every Billy Wilder screenplay ever

Alex Ferrari 1:29:24
pretty much Absolutely. Anyone listening if you guys don't not know who Billy Wilder is please do yourself a favor.

Steve Kaplan 1:29:30
How could you not know who Billy well? No, there's no muscle

Alex Ferrari 1:29:34
like there's a lot of look there's a lot of young uns listening or watching this. Please go watch something like

Steve Kaplan 1:29:42
the apart like at Sunset Boulevard. Please please go

Alex Ferrari 1:29:47
go go read a bit. Now. Where can people find you in your work sir?

Steve Kaplan 1:29:51
They can find me at Kaplan comedy calm. They my Twitter. Handle is At SK comedy you can find me on Facebook Kaplan comedy or you can find me. Now I have 3000 odd and they are they are odd but I have 3000 Odd friends your Facebook cuts you off at 5000 So you better another dozen 2000 come in I'm stuck on the other hand Facebook will steal all your information and sell it to other people so maybe don't

Alex Ferrari 1:30:28
fair enough

Steve Kaplan 1:30:29
and and all my books are on Amazon. Although you can you can if you're in the United States you can order directly from me and get an autographed copy. There you go Steve, which in some markets increases value and others decreases value.

Alex Ferrari 1:30:50
Save it has been an epic epic interview and conversation my friend. Thank you so much for for dropping some knowledge bombs on the on the tribe today.

Steve Kaplan 1:30:59
It has anybody ever told you that you remind me of Lin Manuel Miranda.

Alex Ferrari 1:31:03
No, that's the first one I appreciate that. Thank you very much but I've not I've never once gotten lynmarie

Steve Kaplan 1:31:10
if you if you spoken cockney a little bit I'm very Poppins return I

Alex Ferrari 1:31:16
listen, I'm a very I'm a big fan of Hamilton. So I take that with a great, great compliment. Thank you, sir. A pleasure talking to you, sir.

Steve Kaplan 1:31:24
Thank you. Same here.

Alex Ferrari 1:31:27
I want to thank Steve for coming on and dropping some major major comedy knowledge bombs on the tribe today. And I highly highly recommend his two books, The Hidden tools of comedy and the comic hero's journey. I'll put links in the show notes at Indie film hustle.com, forward slash BPS 034. And if you want to see Steve live and take one of his comedy intensives he has all his upcoming dates on his official website Kaplan comedy.com, which will also be in the show notes. And on a side note, guys, I just want to let you know that February 1, the price of indie film, hustle TV for screenwriters and filmmakers will be going up to the regular price of 1399. So if you have not tried indie film, hustle TV, please give it a shot, just go to I FH tv.com or indie film hustle.tv and sign up, because once it goes up to 1399, it will not go back down to 1099. So definitely check it out. I got new stuff coming every single week new interviews, new shows, movies, and workshops, and I got a ton of screenwriting content up there workshops, movies, about screenwriters, series, and so on. So definitely check it out. And if you have not heard, I've written a book, it's called shooting for the mob based on the ridiculously incredible true story of how I almost made a $20 million film for the mafia. And it takes this whole journey takes me through this crazy adventure through the mafia. And through Hollywood, I meet billion dollar producers, huge monsters, movie stars and even meet Batman and the stories in the book. So you can preorder the book on Amazon at shooting for the mob.com and it will be released February 22. So please check it out. It means so much to me If You Do. This book took me almost 18 years to write not I didn't spend 18 years and I only spent about a year writing it but it's an extremely personal book, very, very raw very in your face and it truly an allegory on what not to do when chasing your dreams. And hopefully it will help a few of you out there. So definitely check it out. And that's it for another episode of The Bulletproof screenplay podcast. Thank you so much for listening. And as always, keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you soon. Thanks for listening to the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay.com That's B u ll e t e r o f s CR e n PLA y.com


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BPS 033: Beat by Beat to a Better Screenplay with Jim Mercurio

Today on the show we have Jim Mercurio. Jim is a filmmaker, writer, and author whose screenwriting instruction has inspired tens of thousands of writers around the world. Creative Screenwritingranked him as one of the country’s top story analysts:

“The best example of how an analyst can give concrete help without veering off the track of your story… (Jim) is not just telling you how to rewrite a particular script… but how to apply it to future work as well.”

Jim works with Oscar-nominated and A-List writers as well as complete beginners. He adapts to each writer and script.

Jim is a true champion for undiscovered writers and filmmakers. He produced Hard Scrambled which, like the horror-thriller he directed Last Girl, was discovered in a contest. The film stars Kurtwood Smith (That 70’s Show) and indie stalwart Richard Edson. It premiered at Cinequest and won Best Dramatic Feature at Garden State Film Festival. His experience as a filmmaker informs his approach to the material. He helps you to execute your vision with vivid and cinematic storytelling that can attract allies like directors and producers.

He directed more than 60 hours of Screenwriting education including the first 40 Workshops in the Screenwriting Expo Series including classes by some of the other top screenwriting teachers in the world. His own course Killer Endings was one of the best sellers from the collection. He wrote and directed Making Hard Scrambled Movies, filmmaking tutorials, as bonus material for Hard Scrambled’s original release.

The Washington Post called them “a must for would-be filmmakers.” Inspired by his work on the Expo series, Jim applied his entrepreneurial “go big or go home” attitude to the six-disc DVD set Complete Screenwriting: From A to Z to A-List, a behemoth of screenwriting instruction. It is one of the most comprehensive screenwriting resources in the world. It’s a fast and furious ten hours with an hour of stunning motion graphics that help to explain seldom-discussed topics like theme, concept and character orchestration.

Jim wroteThe Craft of Scene Writing: Beat by Beat to a Better Script, the first-ever screenwriting book that focuses solely on scene writing. It will be released on February 1, 2019, by Linden Publishing.

Together, Jim’s course and book illustrate his forte, to illustrate advanced craft and nitty-gritty insight essential for mastery of screenwriting craft. Enjoy my conversation with Jim Mercurio.

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Alex Ferrari 0:00
I'd like to welcome to the show, Jim Macura. Oh, man, thank you so much for being on the show.

And he was so kind, and giving of his time to come in and share his knowledge and experience with you guys, the tribe. So without any further ado, enjoy my conversation with Jim mercurial. I'd like to welcome to the show, Jim Macura. Oh, man, thank you so much for being on the show.

Jim Mercurio 2:21
Hey, Alex. Thanks for having me. It'll be Well, I think we'll have some fun today.

Alex Ferrari 2:24
Absolutely. Man, I'm here to pick your brain, about screenwriting and how to write a better script.

Jim Mercurio 2:30
Sounds good.

Alex Ferrari 2:31
So first of all, how did you get into the film business in the first place?

Jim Mercurio 2:35
Oh, you know, I always wonder if I'm really like in the film business, you know, I spent a decade making these low budget films from like, 2000 to 2010 and didn't make a bunch of money. But, you know, it's like, the passions there, the experiences there. So I've kind of been like I'm outside of the Hollywood system. And you know, the last decade things have changed a lot. So I'm back to where like, a lot of writers are, you know, writing spec scripts, and, you know, taking a little assignments here and there. So I just saw, you know, I love filmmaking. I don't want to sound the cliche, I want to be director, I thought speed reading was definitely the way through. I got a master's in film, but it wasn't a huge emphasis on screenwriting. So when I first moved to LA in the 90s, I want to figure out between where to cut inside and out, like I had to kind of teach it to myself. So you know, kind of over the years of like, being the student and then, you know, segwaying into like development, and, you know, producing and teaching and stuff. I don't know, it's always been just about wanting to eventually direct and just be able to tell stories on this big grand scale on. Like, even as even as a kid though, like, you know, like my friends were watching Star Wars and I was watching like 70s Scorsese movies and conspiracy theories, I always came to film like, as an adult, like they can could do really smart stuff, and, you know, theme and like, you know, really gritty character stuff. So, I don't know, I've always loved movies, I'd love storytelling. And cinema just seemed like maybe the Hollywood that I imagined existed where I, you know, first came out to Hollywood never really was there or something like I missed by a couple of decades. But I just, you know, always wanted to tell, you know, be part of telling these great stories, great character studies, and like, great, exciting stories, you know, on this big grand scale.

Alex Ferrari 4:22
Now, how did you get involved in teaching screenwriting and your theories behind it?

Jim Mercurio 4:27
Well, like I said, part of my quest was I have to figure out the screenwriting thing for myself. So the first few years in Los Angeles, I was like, working another job, and I was just like, you know, reading every book, writing and then I started writing for creative screenwriting. And I said to him, to Eric, my buddy, who eventually produced a couple movies with me, I said, let me go take all these story guru classes. I was trying to like, you know, be smart and resourceful, save myself a few $1,000 You know, write a review about it. So I don't know 20 Some years ago, um, you know, I went to a I think I take him lucky.

Alex Ferrari 5:01
But I had everyone's advocate.

Jim Mercurio 5:03
I think I didn't before that. But then as part of this process, I did Truby and Walter and kitchen and Hague, and, and just just a bunch of people. So it was like, and then eventually, it was interesting. I ended up directing, like 40 DVDs with a lot of those people. So it's like, I was immersing myself as the student, but it's like to know something so well, you kind of have to, like if you can teach something, you know, better than if you can't you know what I mean? So, like, I was learning this stuff, and I was integrating it. And I wasn't thinking about teaching, I was just like, trying to learn it for myself. But then these chances came up to like, do notes for a friend, you know, write a script review. Oh, you like my notes? Someone else? Why would you notes. So as I started kind of figuring out for myself, I would call on what I learned from other people, because I started kind of like figuring out oh, wait a second, she there's kind of the rules or principles that I'm using for myself. They seem to be working, they seem to like, align or, or pull together 15 different theories, or three or four different gurus into a way that makes sense for me. So it just started kind of naturally like, oh, I can explain it to myself. So I can explain it to someone else fairly well.

Alex Ferrari 6:12
So why do most people and screenwriters when and where screenwriters fail at screenwriting?

Jim Mercurio 6:18
Well, you know, it's interesting. The thing with like, first time script writers getting script writers people always ask me, Well, what's the most common thing that's wrong with the script? And I'm like, well, kind of everything. Not only that as a slight, no, I don't mean, it's a slight. I mean, like, they don't know what they're supposed to know. Like, they don't know the care and the time and the attention that it takes. So it's like a lot of times I think like with beginning screenwriters, or from working with someone as a coach, or, you know, consultant, it's like, the first and best thing I can do is kind of open their eyes and say, This is what great screenwriting is, these are the expectations you kind of you have to have. And if I'm allowed to go on a little tangent, sure, you know, you shouldn't move with your rival. Yes, I did. A cool sci fi movie, they used a hyperbolic version of this thing called the dissapear Whorf hypothesis, it's this idea that language to like, your language that you have affects your worldview. So in that it was very hyperbolic. And that movie was like, if you learn their circular language, you'll be able to, you know, visit the future in the past. And that'll be super powerful. And obviously, you know, real life doesn't quite work that way. The cliche example, and I don't even know if it's true, or if this is scientific anymore, but like, let's say an Eskimo has 40 different types of snow they recognize. So when it snows, they see something different than say B, we're all C, because they know it exists. So like there's a different view of the world. And same thing with screenwriting. Like if you know, 30 different things, and you just have named for them, like, you know, whatever, and ellipses or exposition or reframe, just like little tricks that writers do, or craft principles, even if you don't know how to do them yet, but you're aware of them, you're already ahead of the game, because you're going to be learning them faster, you're going to recognize them and other movies, you're going to expect that you're you know, that your films and your story should have them. So it's like if I say, Hey, man, you opening image should always augur theme, and be like, right on on the nose or on point with what the movies about. And you've never even thought about that. But now that you think about it, you go back and watch your 10 favorite movies, and you're like, Oh, hey, wow, like, I didn't realize it. But Citizen Kane has an opening image. It does that exactly. And so does, you know, this movie is still the seven, which I know you're Fincher fan in these movies, it's all of a sudden, you're like, wait a second, every great movie that I've loved, I just realized, has a really profound and concise opening image that like augers theme, and sets up the character, and every time the character is introduced, it's like, the dilemmas right there. So it's like, if you start seeing things that you didn't even know existed, you know, like, you're already entered the game, you're going to learn faster, you're going to start having expectations for your script. So it's like a lot of it is, I mean, not to, you know, say, hey, those of you who aren't in the club yet, it's hard, you don't know what's going on. It's like, hey, no, just respect this. Like, there's a lot to learn structure and character in theme. And then when you get all that stuff down, then there's like rewriting a subtlety and nuance towards like, I just feel like it takes a while to do a lot of times. It's, it's not even that a beginning script is like, it is a problem. It's like, No, you're exactly where you're supposed to be. Like, there's there's talent, there's some intuition, there's some great moments, you know, you know, in depending on your skill level, or if you believe in innate talent, there might be different levels of where script is, but it's not supposed to do everything, like, the first time or the second time. It's like, that's why, you know, I respect and like, you know, like, it would be like, you know, it would be bad self esteem for me to say like, oh, well, I spent all this time trying to help people learn all the nuances in you know, and finesse is that can be done with screenwriting. If it's like, oh, yeah, it's kind of easy and like, you know,

Only 10 Things You Should Know. And if you know that and read one book, that's enough, it's like no, and this is, this is really hard. And like, you know, I'm still learning myself or, you know, or like in the last five years of my 20 years of figuring this out, there's still stuff I'm learning when I read like great screenplays.

Alex Ferrari 10:14
Absolutely. No, absolutely. And that's the thing, a lot of a lot of screenwriters and filmmakers, for that matter, think it's an easy process. And like, Oh, if I just, if I just put the hero's journey on everything, or if I, or if I just, you know, use troubIes technique, or if I just use this technique or that technique? It, there's no one answer.

Jim Mercurio 10:33
Yeah, but the thing is, though, like, will you want to talk about this later, but like, I have a kind of focus on sheet writing, and I write about it somewhat. And it's like, you know, that that specific approach is, it's not that, you know, to be structure or Syd field or save the cat. It's not that I have to say no to any of that. But just like, like, an improv is yes. And it's, but it's like, you know, one thing isn't going to answer at all, like, you know, like, volger stuff is really good, especially for some sorts of stories. But like, you can, I would say, like, look, a lot of older stuff for a lot of stories is what's, how do you phrase it? It's, it's necessary, but not sufficient. So it's like, you know, yes, every story will have some kind of reluctance in the first act, maybe. And there'll be threshold guardians, there'll be some kind of forces or people or elements that try to stop the person or the, the protagonist from going to that new world. But if it's just an obstacle, if it's just an ogre, in the road with a club, that's not going to be enough, it has to be also on a psychological level. So it's, it's, it's, it's true that yes, all these stories will have these obstacles. But if you have the obstacle, it's not enough. It also needs to resonate on a psychological level. It also has to be aligned to that character. So it's like, I'm very often saying yes, and like, yeah, we save the cat. Read Richard Walter Reed, Michael Hague, if Truby works for us, especially the genre stuff, yeah, use it. If nothing I say should really ever contradicted. It should just kind of enhance it, or maybe reframe it in a way that works for someone better.

Alex Ferrari 12:07
So you're what you're saying is that ogre with the club should be the long lost father of the character. That creates, and we're just

Jim Mercurio 12:15
playing rugby, so on the nose. Right, right. But it might be just the smallest hint of that, like, you know, I'm ready to I'm ready to leave town. And I'm driving out of my hometown in a policeman pulls me over well, that's, that's like over with a club. But wait a second, what if it's like a guy from high school, who kind of thinks I think of a big shot or kind of puts me down or thinks or kind of reminds me that, hey, you're not really supposed to leave this town, you're, you're destined to be this small town person that's supposed to go to Los Angeles, or who you have these big dreams. And all of a sudden, it's like, yeah, it's the negative father figure, or it's like, you know, your uncle, who's a foil character who failed at it, reminding you the stakes, it's like, it could be very subtle way. But like, I don't, I don't want you to get a ticket for a policeman, because you're going too fast. And that's the point I want, I want that to represent something. And if it doesn't, then that policeman doesn't belong in the script like that, that incident, that scene doesn't belong there, you have to find the thing that does two things, both story and character. And, you know, like, when I talk about, you know, seeing just like you want your scene to change at the story level, but also the character level, in pretty much your goal has to be always doing both, like, really, there's almost no reason to only do one of them. Or if you do it a few times, that's fine. But you know, you only have a certain amount of opportunities to get insight into character and to make these important changes in the story. So why would you pass them up, you're always looking for like, the internal and the external to kind of like move forward and change the same time. And that's a tricky thing to do as a beginning screenwriter, so it takes a while to learn as a skill.

Alex Ferrari 13:45
Now, what makes a character? Since we're on the topic of characters, what makes a character interesting to an audience and your opinion?

Jim Mercurio 13:54
I don't like that. That's interesting, because I don't necessarily, I don't necessarily like to, like have these rules of like, well, this is what makes them likable. This is, I'm more like, Here's how you make a good character. And the essence of a great character is very simple. It comes down to one simple dilemma. Look at a craft level. Like if you could ask the God of screenwriting or the muse of screenwriting, like one question that would pretty much define or help you write your entire script? It would be it can be phrased a couple of ways, but one of them is like, what is my character's dilemma? At his core? You know, what is it that he's afraid of? What is the hard choice he has to make? Because that will pretty much answer everything. So if you have that nailed down, really specifically, that's what makes a great and complex character. And I'm not going to be the one to judge like, what was he likable enough? Or what kind of traits does he have to have? I'm not going to say that I'm just going to be pushed. I push writers and storytellers to be like, I want you to be good at this. And I want you to be good at writing characters. I want you to understand what makes a dramatic character work like it all boils down to one thing And one time I was saying this to a class and they were like, you know, oh, why don't think Shakespeare but I'm like, okay, Shakespeare, what's the first thing that comes to mind? They were like, well to be you're not to be like, well, da, right? I mean, you know, like, one thing, you know, Godfather, Michael, you know, be in or out or the family's gonna fall apart. Pardon, that's horrible. I have to be I have to be a criminal, which will eventually lead to me killing my brother. But, you know, to protect my family and the legacy of my family, it's all going to go away. If I don't step up and do this. And obviously, you know, he has his own flaw. But, you know, even Napoleon Dynamite, like, the most important thing to Napoleon Dynamite is to be cool, right? But then what does he risk? Right, but what does he risk at the end? For Pedro, he does that dance in front of everybody. He's willing to be a dork. And it's like, that's actually huge. Like, if he's just like, hey, Vote for Pedro. Because I have this logical argument that that's that's not? Well, that's not good storytelling. But it also doesn't give me insight into character. Oh, well, the character is smart. And when push comes to shove, he's able to use rhetoric to defend his friend, he's running for president, I know, a guy who's so afraid of being unliked. And being a dork was willing to sacrifice to make the choice of I will risk not being like being so uncool, if, because of friendship, and support. In my alliance with a friend, it's like, you know, the idea of dilemma is kind of there at its core, and it'll basically help you write, I don't know, 90% of your script. So it's not so much I want to tell people what a good what like a good character should be. But like, I want to give them the power to bring to life the characters they're trying to aim for. And to know, kind of what their, their aim should be, like, how well they should know a character, because if you know, a character really super specifically, it then allows you to, you know, create the supporting characters that are more specific, it allows you to write great dialogue, everything stems from that really specific understanding?

Alex Ferrari 16:52
Do you agree that a hero is only as good as their villain that they're facing?

Jim Mercurio 16:57
Well, yeah, it's kind of back to what I was saying. It's like chicken egg. The perfect antagonist is the one who tests the weakness of the character. So if you don't know what that is, it's so like, Oh, hey, hey, I'd like to the protagonist and the antagonist I'm going to get in your way. I mean, does that mean like, I put my arms up and like, move to like to block you from taking a step forward? Yeah. You know, in a story, that's part of it, but like, but if I know your weakness, and if I can prey on that, then that makes you better antagonists. And that challenges you more. So now there's more conflict. So you have more, you know, you have more to kind of fight, you know, at the beginning of LA Confidential. You know, Dudley Smith is a great antagonist. He's a little bit like Darth Vader, and that he's like, he's more and full and more whole than Luke is. And he says, to actually his, you know, by the book, goody two shoes, he says, Would you plan evidence? Would you rough up somebody to get a confession? Would you shoot somebody in the back. And ironically, that's foreshadowing what has to happen later, but he's also saying, I know, you two goody two shoes. I'm reminding you as conflict, but I'm also for myself testing. I know, you wouldn't do those things. So I know, you already beaten like, you can never beat me because you're limited into what you can do. And, and once you know that, that specifically, then you can write better scenes, like for instance, there's a little moment like a second where I show it to my class. And the first time they watch it three or four times they don't get it. It's Christmas party at the at the precinct, right. And he goes off to the side to talk to him. And he grabs two glasses of punch from you know, someone he hands it actually, and he won't drink it, he doesn't take a drink. And it's like, oh my God, he's so British shoes, even at the Christmas party, the holiday party, he won't take a sip of punch, because it has alcohol. And that's breaking the rules. And it's like, do you see how that's why that script wins an Oscar because that moment and that specificity of character is able to be put on display. So you might in your head, think your character so well defined that you know him or her, but until you can use craft to reveal that, you know, it's it's back to intention, you're not doing great screenwriting until you find ways to express that.

Alex Ferrari 19:08
So, so I mean, I always use the example of the Joker and Nolan's Batman, which is as perfect of an antagonist as you can create, would you agree? Absolutely,

Jim Mercurio 19:17
absolutely. I mean, I mean, the way he wants to kind of break the value system of Batman wants to show people are corrupt and he wants to Yeah, I mean, yeah, I mean,

Alex Ferrari 19:29
he has his own. He has his own methodology methodology and his own his own his own his core beliefs that are counter and he wants to literally break Batman psychologically, as opposed to like the 1960s Batman, where the Joker was just a kind of buffoon in his way there was no depth there. If you're gonna compete if you're gonna compare like the same Carol

Jim Mercurio 19:51
was written to Sally I would say that's totally apples and oranges, but I don't it's not really fair. You may have done some this because I know I've seen Like, a lot of people go into depth about tab relationship and philosophy, and that's the thing like, you know, ideally, you have on, like, I don't believe that you have to write that 100 page on, you know, backstory for everybody. I actually kind of believe in precision, like, if you can do your antagonists dilemma in a sentence, like those values then become like a contrasting sentence for the, you know, for the antagonist. You know, it's like, almost exact values, like, you know, in a love story, you know, if he's, if this character supposed to believe in the power of love to overcome stuff, well, then the the antagonist is someone who obviously is negative doesn't believe that it is really kind of good at showing what convincing that person that love is can't overcome, and maybe isn't real, you know, saying like, they're challenging the exact most important things to the protagonist. So it's like, kind of chicken egg like, yes, your antagonists become stronger, your protagonist has to become stronger to fight them. So it's like, you need to align them kind of perfectly, because you might have a great antagonist this wrong antagonist for the story? Well, you might have a great protagonist, but it's wrong protagonist for the story. So you have to make sure that what the antagonist is good at challenging and making difficult, or the weaknesses he or she can pick at, or specific to align with the protagonist. Does that make sense?

Alex Ferrari 21:21
It makes perfect sense. I mean, and I want to ask you a question. This is now a personal question I have because there's a character that I found extremely difficult to write for, which was Superman. Superman is such a difficult character because he literally is a god. So it's so difficult to create an antagonist that could even right, even do anything against them. So you got the Lex Luthor with the real estate scams that's of two different movies, right?

Jim Mercurio 21:51
Well, a couple movies that are pretty well, yes. The Superman The Movie, The 1978. Renaissance. Excellent. Right. Right. Okay, so a couple things. It's set up with the who's the father, drill drill? Yeah. He says, you know, that you kind of you should, you must not reveal who you are, because then people will hurt the people you love. So it's like, okay, this is our setup. Okay, Superman is our vulnerable, but people who love could be vulnerable show. So what is Lex Luthor, he sends the two rockets in opposite directions. And Lois Lane is in one direction. And you know, New York's in the other. Yes, kind of the same thing as the Joker did it, you know, in, in Batman with, you know, with Harvey and yes, and that.

Alex Ferrari 22:30
Yeah, I never saw that. gacha. But it's the right he creates, he creates

Jim Mercurio 22:33
the dilemma. And then it's also set up and this is, you know, it's a little bit contrived, but you have to do the work, you know, you can't change the course of things. So Superman has to decide whether he'll go in circles and turn back time, which is a little bit out of the blue. But it's like it's at least some point, he has a big huge moral question. Will you tamper and play god, you know, as Superman or will you not do he makes a mistake, but don't mistake me he chooses it, which makes him imperfect and cute when human away which, you know, we kind of like and then in this in the, the Man of Steel, I some fluff stuff, a couple things. Like, it's really interesting that, you know, when Kevin Costner, the dad character says, You can't let people know about your news for slightly different reasons, because they won't understand Oh, yeah, you know, his face. But an interesting thing was he was so dad shall let those kids on the bus. I let them have died. He kind of said, and I forget if he says or if he just kind of implies it was kind of like, yeah, maybe it's like, Whoa, I go that's like that's pretty intense. So in that final scene, where you know, he breaks the neck of Zod. The dilemma is right there, Zod is fighting to hurt humans is like his, his his vision is right inches away. So he's fighting to pull his neck back. So it's like the only way he can stop him from killing those humans is to kill him. So Superman makes a choice that he never really makes her words very kind of bold and like, know exactly, but at least it's set up. So it's like, you can't say well, he killed him because it was all he really could do. Or he was mad. No, he killed him because it was either kill him or humans would die. So once again, it's like they they have to make var will people be important to him? And then the vulnerability to the bad guy comes through the humans that are vulnerable. And it's you know, it's I I'd say it's an effector Saturday because otherwise you know what else? What else you're going to do?

Alex Ferrari 24:29
I mean, that's what I loved about Superman to the Donner cut, not the original but the dot the Richard Donner cut, which he had literally three Superman versus him and he lost his powers. And he had to do all the things that he didn't need. And there was just a lot of complexity there. Which with which, arguably, I think one of the better Superman those two are probably the best still to this day.

Jim Mercurio 24:51
I'll tell you what, I mean, like story wise, and plot wise. Yeah, there's a lot of fun stuff going on here. But I have a question though. Like if I say like When you come out of Superman movie, the first one, would you kind of learn and look? And I say, Yeah, you know, like, Hey, man, he shouldn't play God shouldn't turn back time and, and you're really vulnerable humans. But like if I say what do you like, but what's the theme? What's the character arc? Or what? What's the thing he learned in Superman to, like, now I'm studying, we might go back and I might be there might be several, but like, like, do you have an answer? Like, like, like, it's I feel like, um, it doesn't resonate as much for me. And this is back to my, like, kind of telling you like, I can't have movies as an adult, you know, like, so it's like, I don't want to be simplistic and say, well, movies should only be deep, dark siematic character studies. But But also, I don't believe movies should only be obstacle course rollercoasters. Now, when I say that people always say what about waiters last car? I'm like, Okay, I tell you what, if one time in the history of cinema, like the most talented kinetic filmmaker ever was able to make a movie that was mostly roller coaster. That was amazing, you know, Steven Spielberg, but like, you can't be your goal. It's like, it's like a dilemma. So a lot of times writers think they have a choice, I need to make it the roller coaster. I need to plot, I need to have this cool twists. Or I need to be deep enough character and you know, like, in my kind of growth as a teacher, and as a writer is like you it's not either or, it's both you and it's a choice. You have to choose to attack your weaknesses or to make sure that the side that's harder for you to do that. You work on that and make sure that hey, my character study doesn't have to be boring in my genre piece doesn't have to be fluffy and light. I mean, LA Confidential, Lethal Weapon seven Silence of the Lambs. I mean, these are some of the best Hollywood movies, you know, and there's genre movies, they don't, they don't compromise. They're not like, well, you know, science a lamp, we take away some thrills because we're so thematically profound. No, no, it's, it's like, yes. And it's like, you know, and this is what screenwriters see, like, oh, well, I'm a first time screenwriter and I want to write something deep and dark. Fine, but this is fun. Is it hit the genre beats? Well, I don't have to because I I'm doing this extra stuff. It's like no, man, like, do that extra stuff. Do you want special to you, but but then don't like shirk responsibilities of like, what did everybody has? So it's like, you know, you know, my kind of thing is like, as a writer, you have a dilemma and Issue two choices, kind of like, No man do both. Like, like, choose the hard choice of, you know, movies can be both things. They can do more than one thing at a time.

Alex Ferrari 27:26
No, no, absolutely. So what are some of the story elements that you find in today's blockbuster films? That make it good? Because I mean, look, Marvel obviously, as you know, it has done something that nobody has ever done in the history of cinema. So they obviously are doing something right. Some of the movies are amazing. Some of them are not as good

Jim Mercurio 27:48
well, I've top your head what are your favorite ones? What which ones work the most? The ones

Alex Ferrari 27:52
that work the most are the the one on a story point, the story, you just on story and structure and script and screenwriting and storytelling. Winter Soldier is excellent. I thought it because winter soldier to me was just like, a just a good spy movie. Like, okay, kind of like the Dark Knight was a heist film. Right? You know, you do Batman out of it. It's just a damn good heist film.

Jim Mercurio 28:17
You know, it is but it's funny because I'm like, the things I love about dark night or like, lower the things that like I don't like what dark night or sometimes bog me down and watching it again is like is the actual sequences I'm like, the character stuff in the theme stuff and like a dialogue is so amazing. So good. Like, forget that JC like Yeah, I know what's gonna happen. Oh, yeah, no, well done. But like, I want to get back to this stuff. But about Winter Soldier though. Okay, so give me I mean, I've seen him once or twice, haven't tested it. So so give me like the one sentence log letter when her shoulder just just just refreshed me and then

Alex Ferrari 28:51
under soldier, he's got to fight his because I haven't seen in a bit. I just remember loving it. Um, he has to fight. Not only he has to stand up for his for his ideals, but he also has to defend his best friend.

Jim Mercurio 29:09
So okay, stop, stop right there. Hey, remember I said about a dilemma? Is their strong dilemma. They're very you said it but even even in your description, which were you know, which was unprepared and that's fine. It wasn't it wasn't perfect you it you really went to a resonated with us like man, a guy is caught between his values are fighting his friends versus his best friend defending him or defending his best friend versus what's supposed to be right. It's like, well, there you go. And so it's like, it's like once again, like I'm not unlike the super commercial guy that's going to tell you all these elements that make

Alex Ferrari 29:46
it these save the cat right? But

Jim Mercurio 29:49
but you know what, though, but but the things that make a story great rep potential be great. Are those deep things like lemon keratin theme they have to resonate? It obviously doesn't they're the earth Spider the Spider Man movies that Sam Raimi did yeah. Alvin Sargent wrote them, I mean, the coming of age aspect, but it's the dilemma and his uncle teaching them the lesson, you know, with great responders, great repetition comes great redundancy. I'm kidding. That shows up a few times, but actually, they somehow didn't make it this last one, but but their movies where the characters have something at stake, right, where it's real.

Alex Ferrari 30:27
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Jim Mercurio 30:38
Now, once again, if you do those movies, and they're boring, and they're just a drama, I'm not gonna I don't think that makes it like, you know, like, if I was the film snob, maybe I was in my 20s. And I said, Well, that's what makes great movies. Well, no, that doesn't really make a great superhero movie, right? But these, but these movies have like, like we do with Superman, especially Dark Knight, I mean, these characters have really crisp and clear dilemmas, things matter to them, you know, they relate to the real world. And it's like, these are the things that can make something powerful, that can anchor it. That can make it once again, I don't know how to say popular, I don't know how to say like, you know, commercial, but it makes it good at being story. It makes it being good at what like, you know, really pulls people in. So it's like,

Alex Ferrari 31:25
well, I mean, look at Iron Man, you know, that was pretty much launched the Marvel Universe. Right? That was remarkable. I mean, a lot has to do with with Robert Downey and his amazing performance of that character. But that character changes dramatically from the opening character to the one at the end of the movie. And he does have dilemma, and he does have, you know, issues with who's the antagonist is? And it was really well, well done. What's your opinion?

Jim Mercurio 31:55
Yes. And he has the full character like the father, who is the flat, I wouldn't say evil, but the flat morally, like the material morally ambiguous, rare deficient, I mean, the father made the choice of like, make this stuff so I can make money like this. Like he never had it. He never had the conscious, or the, you know, the doubt of his conscience. But But he does. So it's like, there's a foil character, are you going to go that way? You know, or are you going to go some, you know, perfect goody two shoe is for you don't do it all. And he literally becomes like, the Iron Man, he becomes the mixture. I mean, I don't even know if this is like on a conscious level. But like, he becomes the machines and technology, and it becomes human like he's the iron human. So he's a guy who find some way to bridge the technology and the power with humanity, guess what? Well with a heart, right?

Alex Ferrari 32:51
Literally, literally and figuratively.

Jim Mercurio 32:54
Exactly. Know Exactly. And the thing is, though, you're forcing me to talk about these things. You know, a lot of times I'll watch these movies and just have fun with them, like, but if it works, and you start thinking about why it should work, it's like, there's a dilemma. He's the, he's both sides, he represents them. He's the only character who can straddle that. So it's like, you know, like a protagonist, who can synthesize and be in two worlds at once. It's really kind of powerful. And it's really a lot of times what makes someone special. This isn't necessarily like some deep literary theory that like I smile, you know, it's, other people have talked about this, but it's okay. So Iron Man can be iron in technology and weapons. And he can be humor, you can have a heart, but you know, in Good Will Hunting will can be the blue collar guy who beats the crap out of Harvard. And he can be the most efficiently productive mathematician in the world, and solve problems that can save the world. And to have a character that can straddle things like that. We need the whole or they have the potential to be whole that's really you know, that's really kind of interesting. Because even like in a okay even like, you know, this isn't a superhero film, but like a great genre film with a weapon

Alex Ferrari 34:06
a rifle Shane Black at his best,

Jim Mercurio 34:08
right? But like okay, character dilemmas or character struggles, one character wants to live up to orphans or wants to die. Right right. Can you be more Can you be more concise you know in specific and it's like each of them has to grow to say the story so I would say like the pretty much one of the times we that you have co protagonist like right before the climax of the movie Did you know The daughter is taken and it's the all is lost moment when we're not only are you physically and this is back to the paradigms so like that all is lost rock bottom dark cat of the soul, whatever like Snyder calls it. Yes, you need to be as far away as possible from the goal. So in Lethal Weapon, they've kidnapped the daughter. That's pretty funny. But, but that's not, that's necessary. But that's not sufficient. You also need to have the character, the most furthest away psychologically the most regressed the most the furthest distance from the where they need to be in order to save the day. So like a love story, it's not only boy loses girl, boy becomes a girl becomes the worst version of themselves, that aren't worthy of love that that couldn't win that love back that don't deserve it. So So Roger, is lost his daughter or his daughter, you know, he's got her back, right? He's really far away from the goal. But he is by the book is safe, because he wants to survive. And he has this guy in front of them, who's presenting the attitude of lethal weapon, whatever to kill. And he says, you have to do it. Mine is really, you know, and it's really like, great craft is foreshadowing his alley setup. He's like, You have to listen to me, we shoot to kill, we take no prisoners, we can arrest this crap. That's the only possible way. And he believes them. And trust them, they go. And even though they get it doesn't work right away. Like he has to grow and learn from him in order to have a chance to save the day in order to kind of kick but at the end of the day, it's like, well, wait a second. Yeah, well, what what Riggs has to do well seen before that, when they fake his death, remember, right, he reason why they can fake his death. As he gets shot, he goes through the glass, and water goes over and worried about him. And he's like, surprise, you were the you were the bulletproof vest, you have proven that you love yourself in life again, that you're not self destructive, that you're not suicidal, I trust you now. So when you say we get a risk, it's the right thing to do. I can believe you now. Because now I don't think you're that self destructive suicide thing that I was like ready to, you know, kill or hate, you know, 3040 50 minutes ago in the story. So it's like, he needed to do that and have that growth, so that Roger would then accept his risk taking attitude as not as self destructive, suicidal stupidity, but as like a conscious, clear choice that he's making now as his friend. So it's like, you see how like, in this, Hey, man, it's just fun people getting shot and kidnapping and shooting stuff. No, it's also this character stuff. And it's like the same thing. Superhero Movies man, like, I don't know. Like, it's like I you know, there are people who probably specialize and talking about all the elements of the universal, they can compare movies, when a client comes to me with that kind of story. We'll pick two or three movies, and we'll look at them and I'll break them down. And I'll kind of like, you know, when I put my mind to something, to see something, I'll see stuff that other people don't see. And we'll find that. But like, all I can say is like, you know, what, if you want to write that superhero movie, here's what a good movie is. His Word of the story is, and don't think that you can't have themes and spoil characters, right after, don't think that it can't be unified. Because, you know, the dilemma, the specificity the character is what brings unity to everything. And that unity is what kind of, you know, brings you power. So it's like,

Alex Ferrari 38:02
I mean, it's a perfect example. And I use this example, a lot on the shows, I've said this before, is like you look at the Avengers, and then you look at the Justice League, right, and one failed, one launched an entire universe that made billions and billions of dollars. So to analyze the two of them and how both of those films, what led up to both of those films, you can obviously see so clearly, were one you were so emotionally connected to all the characters, because you had wery went on individual journeys with all of them, as opposed to the other one where you kind of knew somebody and then there was a new Batman that no one ever knew. You know, like,

Jim Mercurio 38:42
it's interesting. It's interesting, you say that, because you're talking about, you know, the level of how good a movie can be is based on the antagonist. Wasn't the attack. Stupidest antagonist ever. But eventually, he want to have some power and do stuff. Like I mean, like, what what was, right? Yeah. So so it's like, you know, the like, like, they were trying to rush it. They were doing they were doing fun stuff, like Superman coming back and being a temporary obstacle. You know, like, that was interesting, I guess, or scary or interesting. Sure. Then it's like that was more interesting, Then. Then. Then the dilemma or the meaning of trying to kill the other dude. I mean, the bad guy was like, Well, yeah, kill him, cuz he's a dude. And like, oh, yeah, you all have complementary skills, and you use different ones. Well, that's interesting for like a seven or 12 minute cartoon, but like oh, you're special skills. We're gonna come together and do it like the 80 that was the 60s Patrick Macnee Avengers, you know, like for 47 minutes British spy show,

Alex Ferrari 39:41
but it doesn't. It doesn't fly today doesn't fly. Yeah.

Jim Mercurio 39:45
It's just interesting enough we're actually you know, if you want to tangent on this, you know, Fincher in some of the genre stuff might be a great because I know I know your Finch, right. So in one of the movies, I was talking about a seven so we're gonna have to do this moment but like a Some point we can kind of like segue over because I think he's a good example of like, like the best genre Hollywood movie making. But that doesn't sacrifice these higher, you know? Oh,

Alex Ferrari 40:11
I mean, look at Fight Club. I mean, look at God girl, I mean, look at any of his work the game, you can create a spectacle, but yet have so much depth and character and theme and hidden things that you will see years later. Like I go watch Fight Club now, right? And it's a different movie than I saw when it came out.

Jim Mercurio 40:32
Right? I tell you what, Fight Club is a movie that watch once or twice, love it, I recognize his brain. I just never really kind of reason or like to like, I don't wanna say ruin it. But like, I just never started it to death like, like, I get it the legal stuff. In our second viewing, it has extra levels, because all the setup for the like, he'll do the fight scene with the guy and then he'll to the point of view, by themself, right. But that's but that's, that's brilliant. I mean that that's, that's how you like, if you can get surprised and twist in scenes that are completely based on setup from what you've already shown us, then that scene doesn't need to set up an exposition It just is. And then the power is that you're seeing it with already set of expectations and already an understanding of what you want to get from it and why the things you see are surprising. So rather than having to have the moment where you explain why this next scene coming up is interesting, or what people want in it. It's already in the texture of the movie and talk about what's it look, it's Taco Brewer Fincher, for a second, give me just let me let me disclaim this. I don't I don't think that my appreciation for venture, or my finding some common ground with with, obviously, where I feel like is his ethnos of filmmaking. I'm not saying I'm as good as that, or I'm worthy, or whatever. I'm just saying. It's like, I watch his stuff. And it's like, if I had written the perfect screenwriting manifesto, and put it out in the world, it was as if like, he embraced it, because he never ever violates a principle that I teach. And it's like, I'm actually more proud of myself that like, I've come up with, like, all my theories and stuff. And then one of the greatest filmmaker, storytellers, you know, alive working right now seems to kind of, you know, implicitly, almost prove or show that I'm on the right track in some way. Like, like, he just, he just wants to like, for instance, like I say, opening image is always right on, if you remember the opening image for a gang girl,

Alex Ferrari 42:29
I don't know, off the top of my head, I don't remember. It's in a

Jim Mercurio 42:31
book too. So good for her. Because, you know, the author was doing this, but it's the picture of the wife's head. And he's like, I want to get in that head. And it's like, Oh, my God, he mean, psychologically understand this even social path. But it might mean it does mean I want to crack it, open it, that's what you're supposed to think it means. It's like, oh my God, in like, an image in five seconds. This movie has already announced what it's about what it's gonna be about, like the irony of like, the two of like, well wait a second, is she getting in her head? Like, you know, you know, figuratively where's he break into our heads? So it's like, it's so right on. So like, like, it's simply an introduction to characters like in the game, which I haven't really studied that much. But like, one time, I said, you know, Fincher always introduces his characters very, very, very concisely. So I say one of the first images of the Michael Douglas character is that beautiful side of San Francisco, down the hill, and his car is smoothly in the grooves of the trolley tracks. It's like skies on autopilot. He's like, he's on the tracks. He's going straight forward. There's no whole lot of thought and someone said, Oh, my God, no, that's you're still reading into it. That's so like, stereotypically, you know, bad teachers during this like, okay, I'm okay. Okay, so let's just imagine that I'm wrong. And when you introduce his character, he doesn't make them so specific. It's so unique to the character. Okay. Well, how do they introduce the brother? Oh, on the phone call? Oh, line to your brother. No line to a guy named Seymour butts. So he's already playing jokes. He's already practical joker before we even see him. And the brother instantly knows. Okay, that's my brother, cuz my brother plays jokes. And then in the restaurant, and then this takes work. I don't know if it's in the script. But as he's walking up to him, Sean Penn has grabbed it off. Whenever he has it with him. He's a spray bottle with him. He goes up to and he sneezes, sprays, right. That's like a pretty extreme specific thing. Why is that? Because he's a trickster. He plays games. He's a practical joker, and you need that because you know what? The entire movie is gonna be based on you believing that this guy would spend I don't know $100,000 To play a joke, a game with his brother. If that's not the essence of the character, if he's not someone who lives and breathes and walks and talks like that. It's like well, yeah, believability. Here's the thing, you might say, well, that's too far and this non-credible Not that always lost me fine. But you know what? That filmmakers were good storytellers. They did everything they could do to make that kind of work. So it's like, so it's all there. So, so opening images and introductions characters can talk about that for a second. Sure, please. Okay. So, you know, I was talking about opening images being like, so powerful, so important. And then I tell writers, you know, writers say, Well, how long do I have to do another page, paragraph two pages, well, into Kevin Walker, and his draft of seven, created an OnPoint opening image that did what I'm telling you that they should do. In the first five words. He says, light fights through the suit, right? darkness, light, trying to find light. And and I think in his draft, at some point, Somerset takes a switchblade and scrapes away grime off the wall, there's a rose there. So this idea of, you know, light, trying to fight to the darkness, good trying to find good and through evil, all that stuff. That's right there. So so he did his job as a screenwriter, like he knew what his movie was about. And he did it in five words. Right? Right. I mean, I mean, you can almost say, you know, it's dark, you know, it's about darkness, you probably even know, like, it's a mystery, because what's, you know, what's shrouded in darkness and you know, a story about light and darkness, you know. So it's like it gives away it tells you the genre, it tells you the themes, it is going to actually tell you about the character second, too well, Fincher did something a little more specific. He, which is what you're supposed to do. And this is what you can do as a writer, like, you look at your first draft, and you say, Oh, well, it takes me a page and a half to get to my like, theme and all the stuff but Jim says it should be done in a couple sentences. And Susan Cain does it like in a couple sentences, Susan Cain, like no trespassing, right?

No trespassing. The fence, guess what the camera moves up and over and you are gonna get you invade this guy's life. And you're gonna like, you know, that was the whole point of the movie, like, you're gonna like violate this guy's life, you're gonna think that you can figure out what's going on. So it's a Fincher takes, what some of the ideas in that draft, and he does something really specific. So the very first shot is rather than trying to kind of, you know, I don't have to show and I'm not gonna let you into it. It has a shot where Somerset walks in, pours out, coffee walks out. But he's framed between two very peculiar specific things. The background is the window with the sounds of the city, in the script is set up that the sounds of the city were there, he was trying to block them out. And it was like chaos. And it was like the evil world and stuff in the front of it is something that I couldn't quite tell what it was. But they look really closely. And it's a chess set. So I'm just gonna lead you to it. So in the very first frame, the very first shot, you have a character who's visually caught between unknowing chaos evil that's out there, you can't know it's uncontrollable, or a finite, logical, complete information world where wisdom can win where there's a clear winner, and you can do it. Because like chess is like an interesting game. Because chess, you have perfect information, unlike poker, where you don't see the other person's cards. You see. I mean, how you got, right, right, right. But there may be effects it but like, you see everything that's available to anybody, right there in the thing. So right there, he sets it up. So it's like, sorry, I bumped the mic. It's all good. So, so merely sets it up. You say? Well, once again, Jim, you're being a little bit too much. Right? Okay. Just let's stick with me for a second, let's say if the chaos and the evil and the unknowing let's call chaos, versus the order versus wisdom, and experience and knowledge can win, right? This the say, chaos and order for second, right? Well, the very first order from getting ready for work, which is getting for work ready for work, showing he's a cop that's necessary, but it's not sufficient. You want to do more than that. It happens to show him picking a piece of lint off his jacket. So it's order and then the next shot, which is order, but ironically, his order it has cast within it shows the five or six tools of his trade pen, the bags, switchblade a notebook, right. And they're all lined up. So so as content, it's Oh, that's order he has these things all lined up. Right. So it's the first shot was chaos versus order. That's the question, Dennis order. The week is dressed in this order. The surprise within that order is the badge in the notebook and the pen versus the switchblade. Right. Right. Violence versus order or, or, you know, knowledge and taking notes in the pen versus a switchblade and then it goes back to him getting dressed. And it's once again what part of getting dressed it's him adjusting this time, right. So it's back to order. It's not just oh, I'm putting on my pants or this is my badge my uniform. It's I'm you couldn't show a more specific like, you know, orderly aspect of the dress. Right. So then if I'm right, right before he walks out in the sequence is over, we're gonna hit, you know, the note of overcast again, right? Well, as he walks by he walks by his bed, the camera pans and lands on something. Do you remember what lands on?

Alex Ferrari 50:13
Don't off the top of my head?

Jim Mercurio 50:15
It's on the metronome. Oh, yes, yes, yes. So, and actually, in the writers draft, the metronome is there, like, you know, or like, literally the most specific, unique, most powerful example of what order is right. And he's using go to sleep, I might even like resonate with like the way puppies, you know, you put a ticking clock with a group of puppies and makes it sound like the mother's heart, it might even have like more resonance, but he's sitting there listening to the metronome to block out the sounds coming in from the window. So all those ideas were there, but look up what Fincher did chaos and order and a shot, then order, then order which has some chaos and then order, then complete order, then the absolute next shot is a jaggedly framed image of a bloody dead body show in content and form. Chaos. Right? So metronome to bloody red body so so it's like, you know, kind of like in a true Roman so in my life when I say you know, tell me tell me for Lion like chaos and order that that unity and specificity is so right there in Fincher is like, he's like a precision surgeon where it's like nothing is is wasted in like, Iran will see that the floor of his of his kicks in is checkerboard, right. At one point, he gets frustrated, and he throws you throws his footplate and or the metronome on to the checkerboard, right. So he's colliding these things. And it's like, once again, this rule of like, well, if you know, we open a gym you're supposed to do, and you know how fast you can get to it. And you know, you can introduce characters, like the very first thing you see about them, you know, here's a guy who's struggling to keep things in order, and and believe that he can with Tick, tock, tick tock approach to the world, he can save things. Here's a guy who's struggling with that, right? And it's all there. I don't know, 3040 seconds, seven shots, 10 different paradigms. So like, if you see that specificity, and that's your job to be so specific. Right? So like, so you do it, your first draft, nothing to do your second draft, I'm not going to do it, then you guys sit around in like your beginning writer, your third time writer, you're like, Okay, well, I gotta aim for that. So then you write a version that's a little bit on the nose, but you're getting closer, but like, you're not gonna let that go. You're not gonna think, Oh, I'm done. Until it does, what that does. So it's like, you know, these ideas of dilemma in knowing things and specificity. They, they turn into magic, they turn into the elements in the in the scenes that make your stories kind of special and unique. Does that make sense? It makes

Alex Ferrari 52:55
it makes perfect sense. And I know a lot of people listening will partake. Oh, I think I think Jim's going a little too deep on Fincher. As far as like, I think he's, he's reading into stuff that Fincher is doing. But I would say from my point of view, that you are not because the only thing and everything that Fincher does has purpose

Jim Mercurio 53:13
will listen. Okay, so if Jim material can come up with this, and you believe some of it, so guess what, David Fincher is better at this than I did affect David Fincher the master I mean, I mean, he, I mean, some people even criticize him. He's two cores into intellectual, but like, okay, so, so already, you have a guy who working in commercials, he's already worked in the smallest sort of forms, known as like, you know, a monster for details. And it like, if someone in the world is gonna do a perfect movie, or perfect sequence, we're going to do something when nothing is wasted on why wouldn't it be one of the top two or three directors working right? I mean, so it's like, you know, no, no, trust me, he's doing that instead. Once again, if you think I'm wrong, go pick the top, take your top top 10 movies or, or be a film snob and tell me the top five movies you think are the greatest movies of all time. And I promise you, eight or nine of them will have that amazingly succinct introduction to character, that amazingly succinct opening because it's like, Wait a second. So you tell me the guy who has her head in voiceover I want to get inside that head as the very first five seconds of Gone Girl doesn't know what he's doing doesn't control? No.

Alex Ferrari 54:23
Right? All you got to do is what seven and fight club and social network and all of them

Jim Mercurio 54:28
know exactly, exactly. Same thing. Social Network, you know, he has an eight minute long scene, right? The Talking scene? Yes. And but then I see an opening image sums it all up. So you see my gym. That was an opening image that was a page of talk. Well, first of all, if you listen to the 10 things opening image is supposed to do that does eight of them sets up the world sets up the rules are okay. But then in the script, there's like four or five lines, three little paragraphs of him walking back to get to the dorm. And it says any place he feels comfortable fit Turn that into like a $3 million sequence. It's one of the biggest sequences in the movie. He goes to Harvard. Every single moment someone's doing something always in couples going the opposite direction. No one's ever going the right direction. Oh, that's, that's you picking that? Well, okay, look at the 17 shots and tell me how come never one person is alone, never one person is pointing the same direction or moving the same direction. He's going against all that stuff. He gives you the opening image second, but he goes through. And even though he kind of doesn't have to, because you probably nailed it in all the dialogue. Oh, he says, Sorry, spends 90 seconds for stroking does. But Fincher decided to spend two minutes of the film in like four days of shooting and a $2 million sequence of him going, right Rex, it was so important to get them crushed. And so that instead of up so it's like, once again, tell me I'm not lying like so yeah, he broke the rules about opening him just No, he didn't. He bent the rules, and then did exactly exactly what I said he, you should do. And he should do. So it's like, yeah, he broke the rules bent the rules. But guess what, he did everything we just said we should do? So it's like, you know, I playfully challenge you, you know, or some point to do a follow up. Like, you know, let's let's think about 10 classic movies of all time. And just ask yourself, Wait a second. Did they do that? Yeah, those filmmakers? And you're gonna find you're gonna find always that, you know? pretty much always that is right there that, you know, the filmmakers are doing that is funny because I sometimes do people say, Jim, you go too far because as a filmmaker, I definitely bring my my kind of filmmaking and understanding of like all the other parts of filmmaking, editing and lighting and you know, some photography, I bring that into my screenwriting teaching. If you were to say, well, here's where most people say screenwriting and directing and filmmaking kind of begin, you know, on a scale from one to 100. Let's say like screenwriters enter 40. And then the price filmmaking process takes over right now, there's definitely been times when I might talk, maybe somewhere else talking about movies, some of it is a little bit more of the filmmaker, stuff like that the checkered, the checkered floor is probably, let's say, I talk about stuff that's in the 80s 90s. Like, you know what, that's definitely director stuff. But I'll tell you what, almost are not on a 10 screenwriters would be better off, you know, misfiring in my direction, starting trying to put a little bit too much or a little bit too much details. Because in movies, what you see and what you hear, the only difference is on a screenwriter has the page, a director has the whole actual canvas in the screen to do it. But it's like most screenplays are not as visual as they could be. They're not using as many of the tools and understanding of what you know, kind of what film can do. So it's like, I definitely believe that on average, screenwriters need to come more my direction, and kind of take more responsibility for the visuals and images and details that they put on the page. If they overshoot by a little bit fine. It's really easy to cut back Oh, it's much easier,

Alex Ferrari 57:51
it's much easier to pull back than it is to push.

Jim Mercurio 57:53
i And the thing is though, I promise you almost 99 of 100 screenwriters would be better off if they err a little bit more, if assuming I'm wrong, or towards my side of like, well, wait a second, go a little bit further what the screenwriting books tell you as far as what you can do, because, you know, if you if you can nail how someone dresses, how it sums them up, then, you know, kind of put you know, put put that in there. And it's like, or if you even know Wait a second. I know that wardrobe is something that I can use so like in in Dark Knight. Remember he goes to Matthew Modine character, and he says it's not like I'm expecting you to walk down Main Street with your dress your dress, blues honor, you know, your your fancy, you know? Guess what, then the climb his climb actually run the movie, his character has on that blue outfit. He's walking down the street. So it's like, Oh, he did do the most audacious bold thing that he was challenged to do. He actually did that. So like the fact that you knew wardrobe could have meaning, but and actually what you did more so than the wardrobe was you use for shadowing, and, you know, worse to charge that item. But it's like you see how like, you can do something that maybe another person another way wouldn't event but like, like, I don't think that's outside the realm of screenwriting. That should be part of screenwriting. And if you doing those kinds of specific things, you're going to be a better storyteller than the average Dre, you know, the average writer and go on?

Alex Ferrari 59:17
No, no, no, go ahead.

Jim Mercurio 59:20
What is nowadays, a spec script, you just have to execute it. Like there's no development money. People don't want to develop stuff. They want to be on the page, you want to write like actor B, you want to write director Bay, you want to write scripts. They're like, Oh, hey, you know what? This is on a page. This can be shot in three weeks, I could send this out to directors, I could spin this out to actors, like so like my focus on scene writing, in the nitty gritty details, but I focus on it because the best thing I can do for you business wise, is help you write and execute the scripts in your head, the script you want to write, because if you can nail it, and make it really attractive to all the other allies you need, like an agent can say, Wow, this is really the set piece seems really showy. I could send this to a director or this role is really Fun it does monologues are great in this subset P scenes for the actor to do. I know actress who played this, if you didn't get that in your storytelling in the execution, you were you were so far ahead of the game because people don't want develop stuff and applying concepts anymore. He's done that the 90s were like a logline and a concept, you know, we'll get a million bucks. Exactly, exactly. So you have to, you have to know you have to be great. You have to be you have to be both sides. Yes. Genre. Yeah, transcends genre. Kiss was great characters. It's great themes. It's, there's roles that people would want to play. So like, you have to be all things.

Alex Ferrari 1:00:37
We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show. Without question, how do you suggest writers outline their screenplays?

Jim Mercurio 1:00:53
Of course, but once again, like it's it's a back and forth process. Like I think I listened to your podcast, and they were saying, someone were saying, you know, a writers make mistake because they don't do enough preparation. They don't, they don't outline enough. But here's the thing, somebody they don't, it's, that's true. But also, they can't, because like to do it right? To develop a story that's both working on the external level and the internal level, which is what your goal is, like, a lot of times, people talk different ways, like you want a story that has resonated with resonates, or that's deeper, or has meaning or steam, there really what it means is that every step of the way, is an eternal journey, an external journey. And it's like, you can't do that right away. So it's like writers should work on structure, they should be prepared. But then they write a little bit, and then they stumble upon in discover turning points, and things that come next. And then they can use that to augment and expand their outline in as long as they don't like, you know, write 3040 pages really fast. And they get stuck to and say, these pages aren't going anywhere, but are willing to look at that as like, that's kind of your outlining, you know, and you discovered, so you wait 1015 pages, you just you might discover a turning point, after reading 10 pages, you throw away all those pages. But now you know, the turning point you're aiming to with a Fincher like precision, and like that created your outline. So there's two days of writing what wasted, they help you write an outline that covers 10% of your script, right, but you had to write 10 pages and throw them away. So it's like, it's a back and forth. It's a chicken egg. So like, you always want to ask yourself, what happens next. But like, I'm just trying to build good habits, your scene should always have a change that has a story and the character. Also another way to think about it, what happens next, but also different way to think about is, what would my character do next. And if you can follow those things and align them. That's the skill it takes to be a good storyteller. That's not something's gonna happen the first time you sit down, it's not something that you're gonna be able to do for like outlining 100 page story. So it's like, if you know, that's your goal. He had the habit of like, well, okay, the next thing is he has to go after and target these people. Okay, that's generic. Well, how does he do it? Well, now, he's really impatient. Or now he's mad. Now he's willing to break the law, you know, so it's like a perfect example is another confidential you know, he was told earlier, would you rough up somebody to get you know, a confession? No, wouldn't do that, when he goes to rough out the DA with, with a bud white. But it's perfect. Because bud whites the mentor, leading the way, he's like, on your journey, to quit being the goody two shoes, quit being a super ego and getting your hands dirty. Here's the second or third step before the very end. So we're gonna take you on that journey, you're gonna get information from Da to turns the story, but you're gonna do it in a way that's really fun. Because it's new to you, like you haven't done it before. It represents growth. It represents like you moving like direction. So it's like, that's a perfect example of like, the story external stuff. And the inner journey internal emotional character arc stuff, you want to put those together. And yes, you do have to be prepared, you do have to have preparation. But don't lock yourself into thinking I'm gonna nail it all in the structure in the outlines, stage. No, you are working for I call it a phantom treatment or phantom outline. It's something that grows and builds as you're writing. But don't be afraid to explore a little bit then come back and explore but come back because it's gonna take work the first few times to get you know all these things working and that's back to the thing about a lot of times veterans don't know what to aim for your first chapter. You don't know you're aiming for that. You don't know like that the next step of all the capacity interrogate the people also has to have some personal character aspects specific to your flaw, or the antagonist has to make it harder in some way that's specific to that character. So it's like, you know, first time screenwriter, maybe they don't know that's, that's not like just a lofty goal. That's the bare minimum. Like that's what that's what storytelling is. That's what great storytelling is. So it's like, yeah, it's they have to but also You know, it's not about rigidly like, okay, just commit to it. And because you say you're going to do it, you can just magically have those skills they need to develop over time.

Alex Ferrari 1:05:10
Now, can you tell me a little bit about your new book, The craft of screen or have seen writing?

Jim Mercurio 1:05:14
Yeah, it's actually the first ever book that focuses, you know, just don't scenes. And at first, you know, I was defensive about it, like, Oh, it's just for people who do short form stuff, commercial stuff. But as I wrote it, I kind of realized, oh, no, no, a scene is, you know, really small unit. I mean, a beat is the smallest unit, like a little change a little moment. And then a few beats beat up to a change. And that's a scene. But it's seen as the first unit of drama, that's a story in and of itself, is storytelling is pure form, and you leading up to a change in the craft to turn that change, to understand the climax, like I just said, to make the character and story change. That's a skill. That's probably the most important skill in Screenwriting. And people will say, Jim, you're being too extreme. No, no, I mean, your climax of your movie is where your character arc comes. And like the clever solution, guess what that is, that's that story change. And that's the character change, I call the killer ending where the goal and the need the external and the internal, unifying the ones who seem to action that aligns and the pulls them together. So it's like, if you can turn a moment using both character and story, and you do it perfectly, that will perfectly means you've drawn from character you drawn from the deep recesses of the character you'd want from the clever setup you created. Um, you know, I'm saying like, like in Fight Club, we has that fight with himself. You see just him. Right, right. Well, that scene works. And the surprise comes from the fact that you saw the fight the first time, right? Without it, or, or I know, yeah, you know what? I know. You know, like an eight mile I knew everything you have to say about me. I know your favorite movie is Shawshank Redemption. Yes, but But look, I mean, that's the movie that that a lot that a lot of success is having great scenes is so carefully planned out. So think about how carefully it's orchestrated. They decide to switch over, they switch the perspective a few times, but they decided to show the escape from the wardens perspective. So it's a mystery. It's a suspense, right? And we see it come up. And so then we're ready to show it later on, which is a really conscious choice. It's like a scene reading choice. But also, like on one level, the scene or sequence where it's shown now has power because of the setup you created for it has a couple things, it answers the question of, Hey, how did that happen, but also, because Red's telling the story in voiceover, it actually has an extra level to it. So it's like, if you can nail scenes and understand how structure they work, that's going to help your scenes be sharper and crisper, that's going to help your sequences as can help your x, it can help the entire story. So it's like if I see three or four scenes, the first few pages are wishy washy, and the climax has fat after it. It's not concise. I know why would I think that your climax is going to be any difference? Because that's all it is just to change this reversal. So yeah, I feel like my focus in craft is something I do this kind of special, I think writers will get something really unique out of my really kind of microscopic approach. It's not a niche. It's really something that's really super universal. And I'm hoping that it'll kind of get people kind of excited. It'll be like a new canonical book. Because I mean, all the great great screenwriting books, like if I were to list them all but one or two from like, you know, I don't know 30 years ago, I'm used to go back right back to Walter Haig field in some ways, right? my keys, my keys book is solid, he's good, but it's hard to read. Like I can't say, Hey, first 15 minutes go read

Alex Ferrari 1:08:40
it. Yeah, McKee is not an easy day to me

Jim Mercurio 1:08:44
as a teacher, I gotta read it or someone who like is trying to synthesize all the stuff of course, or advanced screenwriter, you might you might do it, but um, you know, it's hard and very first thing my book now anyway, does EPA grant epitaph, EPA, EPA epigraph, the epigraph of my book, little quote in front of my book is from Renoir, Pierre Augustine Moore, he says, First learn to be a craftsman. It won't keep you from being a genius. So it's like learning this stuff, seeing what other people do. Like, it's not gonna prevent you from using intuition, or every piece of talent you have. If I tell you, your opening image has to argue the theme and be right on that book. What are you going to argue? Well, no, I thought I start my movie off with some junk that doesn't really, nail it doesn't really belong to it. Well, if that's the case, guess what happened? You cut that? You know, like, if you have that your script, well cut, cut, cut, oh, here's what the story becomes itself. Here's where the story presents itself and its themes in what it's about and its essence. That's where you start your movie. Why would you start with that? So it's like, even if you follow my rule and do that, you still have to have the magic. You still, you know, you still have to find a way to clever, unique way of being on point and saying, Hey, show me or I'm going to show you the essence of my movie. In a sentence, or an image, right, or three sentences in, you're going to go back on a second or third reading, you're going to know are you going to appreciate, oh my god, this movie is what it was about neuters about from the very first frame, their very first story. That's, that's something that is hard to achieve in your great movies that you love. Not you, but like the movies that like, you know, aspiring writers or beginning writers love, they probably do that and not even aware. And that's the very first thing I can do is say, Man, appreciate this craft. Look, let me be able to show it to you inside the Sapper Whorf hypothesis, if you know what exists, it should change your world. Like if you know that nine out of 10 of your favorite movies do these things? What are you fighting against? You know what I mean? Like yeah, it's hard. It'd be easier not to shortcuts are obviously shortcuts. But

Alex Ferrari 1:10:57
was you know, I didn't mean to interrupt you. But like, it's a perfect example of like, if you don't know what the hero's journey was, if the hero's journey has never been brought to you or even brought into your world. Imagine when you first heard about the hero's journey, Joseph Campbell, like it changed everything, whether you use it or not, you know, it's there.

Jim Mercurio 1:11:17
What's the can you steal from all this stuff? So it's like, okay, so we know stories go up and down. We know things have to go down. So okay, dark night of the soul and JoJo Tim's rock bottom character goes down. He's far away from the goal. Psychologically, he's regressed to be his worst self, like Budweiser. But what goes on punches girlfriend in the face, he becomes his father, he becomes the worst version of himself before he goes on, and then starts thinking and helping out with actually he goes from his very worst to his character. I think that's the twist. And that's the, you know, surprise reversal that I talked about my film with, like, you know, with great detail like, if you can do with line of dialogue, or a couple of words of ActionScript and then you can do it with entire story. So this is back to the USN. So like, you know, stories go up and down. And you know, at some point the characters are farther away from the goal and also regret for the worst self like the other confidential bud white punches girlfriend, the face comes as father becomes his worst self, the moment reflect the split second before he becomes the character arc of like, you know, helping out using his brain not being like this angry it like creature. So let's say you know that you haven't your story. But then you read Vogler, then you think about mythology, and then you think Phoenix, rising from the ashes, oh, well, that's a cool image. So like one of the Spider Man movies, something crashes in on Peter, and then boom, he jumps up, and all this stuff flies out. And like, to me, I always thought of like, oh, it's like the phoenix rising from the ashes. So like, you may get an idea for an image, or a beat from like, one of these paradigms. And it's, it's not like, oh, well, I was never ever going to know about this beat. But it might just give you like a specific idea, or might just give you a specific way through it, or my challenge to say, Okay, make him the furthest away possible from the goal. You know, if you're the guy who's writing a drama, you might be able to say, Okay, I need to push the story further away. Or if you're the guy who writes the story will coaster obstacle course movies, you might say, wait a second, regression psychology, I didn't think about that. But let's take, I gotta think about that for a second, what is the worst thing that could possibly you know, and it's like, some little paradigm, or some little specific insight, or example, might give you a scene, or visual, or just open up something for you. So it's like, it's to me, like, if any of these parents resonate with you, it just, it just means they're working. It just means because we're all metaphors. So like, if if it resonates with you just means there's some truth to the metaphors, it's mapping somewhat accurately, or some truth and honesty, storytelling thing. I don't think any of them are perfect. I don't think mine is perfect, or I don't think any of them are necessarily complete. But if like all of them do 80%, or all of them have some good things you can pull from them. Like, yeah, definitely learn from 10 different places that that's how, you know, I mean, that that's how I became a good teacher is like, I went down all these paths and different perspectives. And I said to myself, well, I'll take the best lead the rest of all these, I'll collide them, I'll compare them and like, I kind of came up with this, like creative like, way of like, you know what, I don't think my stuff violates or, or goes against or puts anything down that's out there. I just think I just think it also will add something specific and give you different new tools, no matter where you are, what paradigm you're thinking about, I believe Mitel complements it. So it's like, I'm kind of positive guy wants to be yes. And I want you to do all things. I don't want to do just one thing. I don't want to do just my paradigm. I don't want to say Michael Hayes better than Truby. I think this Hague stuff is good. I think it's tricky stuff. That's good. It is my stuff. That's good. Who cares at all, but I would rather you say yes, to like seven things out of us than say, Well, I say yes to three of those things with others. Things are kind of counterintuitive and hard for me. So I'm just not going to make that policeman Threshold Guardian, I'm just not going to give a big psychological resonance. I'll just make it funny. It's like no man, like, you'd lost the battle right there. It's like, you can't take away for every time you take away from something, you have to add more, and probably even add more than you take away. And even like, sometimes, like, you know, Robert, Robert Altman used to make these like deconstructions of genres where he would like, trim stuff down and take things away. But I would argue, as an art film, or as a smart guy, or as a experimental filmmaker, he was adding way more than he was taken away. So it's like you always you always want to look for like, you know, ways to say yes, then yeah, I'll do what everybody else does. And then I'll transcend it. And then I'll go deeper in these areas that usually most people don't do. It's like, you want to be able to set yourself apart. You want to aim, aim to be great. Your expectations have to be, you know, shouldn't be aiming to go I'm gonna do like a cool buddy cop movie, this kind of funny, or this kind of reminiscent weapon. It's like no, right? Nowadays, you get to write something this bedroom for what was good with a weapon, or that's the modern day version with a weapon. It's like, you have to kind of go for it.

Alex Ferrari 1:16:11
Alright, man. So let me I'm gonna ask you the same questions I asked. All my, all my guests. What advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today?

Jim Mercurio 1:16:22
Well, like I said, I mean, just go I mean, start writing. Understand that your writing process yourself is going to lead you to things like there are things you only learn from writing. Sure, right. Read screenplays, read some books read or reports or books, or recent blogs. And it just go back and forth with it. And it's like, you're going to do all these things at once. Because the more you know of the more you're aware of, if if you go and read an article, or analyze a screenplay, and like he points something out that Fincher does. Now, you know, it's possible you could do that, for another guy gives you a good idea about how to break in your second act. Well, that's cool. If you read three scripts, and you see, every single modern comedy has an inciting incident, the first eight pages rather than 11, then you can you know, I'm saying like, just just go blindly for for a while, and things will start catching up and kind of aligning and occurring and like, don't think that there's one way I can, I must outline and most rigidly plan, or I must just write for the seat of my pants because I'm a genius. The answer is no to that. No to this, it's yes. And yes, yeah, write some don't be afraid to throw it away. You know, discover, go back and let that be your structure. And then, you know, one of the people you come to is me, I had this big, huge 10 hour DVD set on my book eventually, or, you know, I work with clients that have made billions of dollars in box office and complete beginners. So it's like, you know, that is something I do, you can check, you can check out my website for

Alex Ferrari 1:17:51
that. Now, can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career, screenwriting book, either screenwriting or any other kind of book?

Jim Mercurio 1:18:01
You know, I mean, I don't know. I don't I don't know how to books did I mean, when I was in college and writing my first screenplay, like, I went to the bookstore, and there's two or three books on a shelf, so I picked up like, I think Walter and field and they were like, they were like, a complete but they were solid. And they were like, you know, they gave me a framework. You know what I don't I don't have a mantra. If

Alex Ferrari 1:18:28
you don't have a good answer, we can move on. It's all good.

Jim Mercurio 1:18:31
I think the screen already works. I think Michael Hague's reading screenplays that sell really started aligning theme and character with story. I love that. And I think Linda seghers book, yeah, making the script Great. Which is, which is actually in some ways, not because of her writing. But because of the complexity and the details, is a hard read, you actually need to watch the movie almost have in front of you almost outline it, because to really understand what he's saying is setups and payoffs and nitpicky stuff, you really have to kind of know it. In my book, I do the same kind of stuff, where it's like, I'm going to get five examples, and three of them are gonna be like, Oh, I'm not sure about that movie. But the two that you know, are going to be so specific. So on point so her book was very specific, and really about so you how movies were about setups and payoffs. I think that was very powerful. And then as a as a director, a friend of mine who produced the movie, said, You don't know the actor, actor language. You don't talk to actors yet. He made me read this book called audition, but Michael Shurtleff, and it was like, oh, actors prepare Yeah, for and, and what it did was, the book is amazing. It's helped me amazing helping my writing to take those principles, but the idea that you must consider the other perspectives of other people, cinematographer, editor, actors, if you understand their point of view better, it makes you better screenwriter, not just on some theoretical, like, intellectual level, but like a deep personal emotional level. If you You know, that extra that act of playing that small role is a person is invested into spend 40 hours making a backstory for the guy gives the tickets out on the boat, you're going to put more emphasis, you know, and, and details and thought into your minor characters. Because you know, an actor, a real live person is going to play it to like sympathy and empathy and understanding for those other things intellectually and emotionally. I think that that was a book that was like, first opened me up to that mindset.

Alex Ferrari 1:20:29
Very cool. Now, what is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film industry or in life?

Jim Mercurio 1:20:36
See, I think is that, that that Yes. And or do both like, like, for 10 years, I was making movies 2000 2010, a little bunch of movies. And, you know, there's this thing called deliberate practice, like, I was learning to be a better screenwriter, and I was learning to be a better teacher. And it wasn't like that time was wasted. But I think I wasn't running as much during that time. Because I said to myself, well, I'm making movies. So I don't have to be the writer all the time to, I don't have to crank out scripts, you know, as the guys who aren't also spending 5000 hours making movies. And it's like, no, no, you know what, man? It's hard. But you have to do both. Same thing with, I want to write action movies, what do I care about the main character? No, you have to do both. I write dramas where I care about twists and turning points. No, you have to do both. So this idea I think of like being whole and not, or I don't want to mark it, because I'm just a genius. I gotta admit, I don't teach anything about marketing in business. It's not my strength. I don't like it. So as a teacher, I'm allowed to do that. As a writer, guess what I have to come up I have to write the logline, which I hate, I'm not good at, I have to query people, I have to do everything. So it's like you got to do both things. You have to make yourself whole like you have to have your character arc as a writer as a person, write business and craft, character and story and you know, fun, internal external, you got to be whole you got to like kind of, because for you to put your best self out there, you have to access your wholesales

Alex Ferrari 1:22:04
and three of your favorite films of all time.

Unknown Speaker 1:22:06
Oh my god. Well, okay.

Alex Ferrari 1:22:08
Just the ones that come to your mind right now.

Jim Mercurio 1:22:10
Okay. Okay. I guess to give you two quick answers. The cliched version is everybody loves these and I feel like I'm boring Godfather Chinatown. Any hall like everybody. Yeah, Bicycle Thieves is that is probably like my favorite or the classical. I'm Italian. It just hits me movies that like I thought I appreciated it real personal that I found something surprising in breaking away. Being that cowboy angers not as a hunter. In movies, I say like, you know what, there's my voice. I wish I could have written that. Alexander Payne election sideways kind of comes to mind. Breaking Away Been a Cowboy are so jam packed with theme and coherency. They're just

Alex Ferrari 1:22:48
Well, that was like, that's like 10 movies. You did a good job.

Jim Mercurio 1:22:53
But it's all he can't be pinned down. It's like, No, I gotta, I gotta tell you what, though, if you think I'm going too far, like, you can watch the first like three minutes of Midnight Cowboy. And you could pick out 30 I'm not kidding. 30 things that point to theme, the way we talked about seven the way you think I went you are what you imagine that someone would say when you fart, you could look at the first 345 minutes of macabre and you could easily pick out 30 clearly defined craft, you know, techniques and attempts to make meaning and to set things up and it's it's so JAM PACKED is perfect. And where can people find you? My website? James P. Mercurial comm you can sign up for our newsletter there, which is free from back issues. My DVDs DVD set there is they're at a really super reduced price now. And if you want to, you know, talk to me about the coaching or script consulting, you can email me we can have a talk no pressure. I mean, my sales pitch usually is you've listened to me if you'd like what I said, you think I can help you? You know? So like, that's the there's the pitch. So like, if you want to talk about it, or if you want to check it out? Yeah, go to James P. mercurial.com. Jim,

Alex Ferrari 1:24:03
man, thank you so much. This has been an epic conversation to say thanks.

Jim Mercurio 1:24:07
But also, like I said, Man, it's an appreciation for screenwriting. Like, you appreciate it. And like, I think you get excited because sometimes you'll learn stuff too. But like, it's so fast. It's so fast, that you know the things you have to know, you know, and I appreciate you fighting the good fight to get that out there.

Alex Ferrari 1:24:22
And I appreciate him. And I look and I've listened, I've listened to or spoken to many of the people you've talked to almost almost all of them that you quoted in this in this interview. And it's true. Like I've learned so much over the course of the last three years of doing this. Because you learn from these different, you just learn it you I always look at it this way. We're all looking at different pieces of the elephant in the room. No one's got it all figured out. But if you start piecing all of them together, you get a much whole more holistic approach to storytelling, and I think it's beneficial to everybody to to learn from as many different things sources as humanly possible. So thank you for dropping some major knowledge bombs today on the tribe. I want to thank Jim for coming on the show and dropping some major knowledge bombs on the tribe today. If you want to get links to his course, his workshops on ifH TV, or if you want to get in touch with him for some consulting, head over to indie film hustle.com forward slash BPS zero 33 for the show notes. And guys, if you have not already, please head over to screenwriting podcast.com And leave a good review for the show. It really really helps us out a lot on iTunes. Thanks again for listening guys. And as always, keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you soon. Thanks for listening to the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay calm that's b u ll e t e r o f s CR e n PLA y.com


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BPS 032: How to Break the Dreaded Screenwriter’s Block with Matthew Kalil

Have you ever had writer’s block? We all have at one point or another and it sucks! Today’s guest, Matthew Kalil, has the cure. He has written a new book called The Three Wells of Screenwriting: Discover Your Deep Sources of Inspiration. Working from a writer’s perspective, the book explores these Three Wells and helps you consciously draw from them to develop new scripts or strengthen old ones. It includes 29 exercises and techniques that help you to write stories that contain fresh ideas, intriguing characters, original scenes, inventive dialogue, unique locations, and important themes.

Here’s a bit on Matthew.

Matthew Kalil is a writer, director and script editor. He has written and co-written over 40 produced episodes of TV and has received various grants, development funding and awards. Matthew’s productions have been screened and broadcast in Canada, Denmark, Morocco, New Zealand, Puerto Rico, Kenya, South Africa, Thailand, the United States, and the United Kingdom. Since receiving his MA in Screenwriting, he has been teaching, writing and mentoring students for close to 20 years.

Matthew has developed a unique system of screenwriting theory that helps beginners, as well as established screenwriters, get in touch with their creative cores. His workshops have touched and inspired thousands of participants. His gentle and insightful script editing guidance has helped many writers realize the stories they were always trying to tell.

Some books you read, some books you live. This is one of those books you live…a breakthrough in the writing craft. – Christopher Vogler, author of The Writer’s Journey

I had such a ball with Matthew that I had to make it a crossover episode with the Bulletproof Screenwriting Podcast.

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Alex Ferrari 0:00
Welcome to the bulletproof screenplay podcast episode number 32. A professional writer is an amateur who didn't quit. Richard Bach, broadcasting from a dark windowless room in Hollywood when we really should be working on that next draft. It's the bulletproof screenplay podcast showing you the craft and business of screenwriting while teaching you how to make your screenplay bulletproof. And here's your host, Alex Ferrari. Welcome to a special cross over edition of the bulletproof screenplay podcast. I am your humble host, Alex Ferrari. Now today's show is sponsored by bulletproof script coverage.

I'd like to welcome the show Matthew Khalil, how you doing, brother? Good. I'm really happy to be Alex. I am super excited, man. Thank you for being on the show. I know you are. I love doing international calls. I'd love it. I do international interviews. You are in South Africa as we spy out what time is right now. Right now. It's about 930 in at night. So you're all awake. And you're like, I'm like, Okay, I go to bed now.

Matthew Kalil 3:06
I'm always I'm always excited to do international calls. I just did an Australian call a little while ago. It's it's so cool to get to. It's amazing. The technology how it works. Yeah. It's incredible. I love it. I love it. I love it. I'm sitting here in Johannesburg. And it's like really hot. And it's a lovely day. So yeah, I'm dying. I'm actually one of the one of the places on my bucket list is I got to go to South Africa. I do. Definitely you traveled I love it. I would love to go down South Africa really is one of my favorite countries in Africa that I would like to want to go visit. And you must, you must Cape Town. So I'm originally from Cape Town, which is down south and it's so beautiful. You'll love it. And great to shoot in ever any excuse to shoot in South Africa, you should do it. Well, I it is on my list. Maybe I'll do a workshop next year, something like that down there. Maybe I get to fly down there. That would be great.

Alex Ferrari 3:54
So first of all, man, you have an amazing book out called the three wells of screenwriting, which is one of the reasons I wanted to get you on the show. And like we were talking a little bit off air. I'm always fascinated when new techniques, or new angles are created to try to tell stories. And at the end of the day, we're all just trying to tell a good story. And there's different flavors and how we get there, whether it's hero's journey, whether it's you know, troubIes way, whether it's you save the cat, whether the millions of ways and sometimes certain ways just click with certain writers. Absolutely. So I was really interested about your book. But before we get into your book, how did you get into this crazy business? Wow, that's a great, it's a great long story. I'll start from the beginning when I was a young boy. I was younger. I was 13 years old actually was and I remember wanting to be a film director from the youngest age. I don't know why I just love movies. My dad used to tell me stories, but movies. I used to watch a lot of movies with him. And I remember about 13 walking into the headmaster's office. And it was that careers day where you had to like choose the

Matthew Kalil 5:00
Korea. And this was a long time ago because I'm much older than I look. And I walked into into his office and he said, and I said, I want to be a fun director. And his response was not in this country. You weren't choose something else.

Ah, what does that do? So I went back and looked at the map of South Africa. So there were a lot of game farms. So I went back and I said, Okay, I'll be a game Ranger. And he said, much better do geography. And he took me off my list. And that was it. So I've wanted to make films from a young young age, you know, like, from, from as far back as I can remember, I remember the first movies I imagined in my head. And I've always been fascinated by it. And I guess, you know, once I left school in, they weren't many foam schools in South Africa at the time. So I kind of wandered around and did a whole lot of other things, which we won't get into, because there's not enough time. But eventually, I studied a master's in screenwriting in Leeds in the UK. And that was after doing. Yeah, after doing some work here in South Africa, I wrote some scripts, I just found that I, I don't know, I just found that I could do it in a way. And then and then when I came back with my master's in screenwriting, I started writing sitcom for South African television. And then it just took off from there. And at the same time, as I was working as a working writer, I was also teaching. So it was kind of a parallel teaching, writing and working in in the, in the writing in the writing world, I guess. Yeah. And I always try to make one film as well as a director. So I always used to try and make one short film a year. And that's, I guess, that's how I got into it. In South Africa, you maybe it's a bit like this in the independent scene in the US, you've got to be doing many different things. You got to be having like many different hats. So I'll be doing like edit, editing, directing, writing as many things as I could. But writings been there all along, and teaching writing as well as being there being there all along. So yeah, I think that answers your question. This crazy. And it is crazy. It's even crazy over here. No, I can only imagine. I mean, I come from a small market as well, in the US I came from, from South Florida. And during in that area, you have to do 1000 things to survive. Like just to be able to make a living, I made a living in south and south Florida for 10 years as an editor as a director as all that stuff. And it's it's very difficult. And if you are smart filmmaker, if you're smart, even screenwriter who wants to get into the business, you need to be able to do more than one thing. So you're in I'm imagining that's the way it is in smaller markets that are not Los Angeles. And even here in LA and the indie scene. If you don't do everything, it's gonna cost you money. That's why I can go out and make three or $4,000 feature film because I have a lot of hats that I could wear. Exactly. Yeah, I think you have to I think you have to. So yeah, that was the way I got in many different ways. But speedwriting was the kind of through line all the time. Yeah, well, that's where it starts. It all starts with it all starts on the page, it all starts on age. You know, it starts with a blank page, which is kind of what I talk about in my book and talk about a blank page that we face in screenwriters. And it that's it, it's you're facing infinity, every time you write, you're facing that flashing cursor. And that first ghost is looking at you saying you can write anything, but what are you going to write, you know, this is what we face every time as writers. And it's always fascinating to me that the writers are often the last person anyone thinks about, you know, like, down the line is like, you know, the screenwriter, God, we got to pay him really.

Alex Ferrari 8:25
Meanwhile, we're the ones that have like, made something out of nothing to start with. So yeah, it all starts with a story. You know, it's funny, though, like, I think that goes back to the early days of Hollywood where screenwriters were literally just treated like absolute crap. Not that it's changed a whole lot. But I think because of the the the studio system in the, in the glory days of the Hollywood studio system, where they were literally just technicians, and they were just treated like whatever it didn't matter. Like, it still kind of resonates like that today, where writers aren't treated with a lot of respect in this genre. And John screenwriting as novelist is different than in other areas. But I think that's one of the biggest mistakes we make as as filmmakers, and as an industry without question. Now, let's get into that. Let's get into your book a little bit. So let's discuss your concept of the three wells of screenwriting. Okay, cool. So it's really simple ish concept, and I'm going to explain it and then I'm going to ask you to do a little exercise so we can all experience Absolutely, that's the best. And your your listeners can also do the exercise. So it's really simple. As I was saying earlier, you know, when we creating we facing this flashing cursor of infinity, which, you know, and and we've got to when we write we draw from three wells within us, this is what happened to me is I've, I've kind of been teaching this for a very long time, screenwriting and I've taught it in the very traditional form. So I've taught, you know, three act structure, you know, writing major turning point documents, and I've looked at all the kind of theories of writing but a lot of the kind of theories of writing in terms of structure etc, is once you've

Matthew Kalil 10:00
thing, you know, you've got something out there not now you can structure it, or in the pre planning phase where you're doing a lot of planning and planning and planning, you get stuck in the plan forever and ever. But when you're facing that flashing cursor, and you got to write something, what's happening in that exact moment of creativity. And what I did is I kind of slowed down their creative process, which is why the cover looks very zen, like this cat matters, it have three wells, because it's about slowing down the creative process, and actually thinking, Where do my ideas come from? And when we slow down the creative process, we find that we draw it from three different wells within us. And the first one is what are called external sources, wells. This is all the movies you've seen any media, you've consumed, anything that you've watched, that's the external sources. Well, that's the Well number one, then well, number two is your imagination. Well, you just kind of make it up. So it's like a lightning bolt from above, it comes down bam, and get well where did this idea come from, or what's unique original, and you and you write it. And then the third well is your memories, your unique lived experiences, which you can draw from, and I think you from what I can see from some of your work, you draw a lot from the memory, while I've seen some of the features, you're there, you know, a lot of memories that you've just told me about something else, which is certainly coming from the memory. Yeah. And those are the three wells that we draw from. So to experience those when the idea with a book is that they're about 29 exercises, I call them exercises, they also experiences and explorations more than exercises, which you use to dig these wells deeper. So the idea is that you're never stuck again, because you can draw from these walls at any point when you're facing that fashion. Because the idea is you don't really face writer's block anymore, which is, you know, the ideal aim of the book, hopefully. And also that you can draw ideas that are unique to you, that you as a writer, can only access and through drawing from those wells, because they move you in there resonate with you, once you put them on the screen, they'll resonate with the audience. And so there's all sounds rather abstract. And the best way to experience that is to do an exercise. So you ask for an X. I'm all about it. Awesome. Okay, great. Fantastic. Cool. So the best way to explain it is to do one of the exercises in the book, which is, I call it the graveyard exercise. Also known as the you guys call them. Cemeteries more than graveyards. I think it's I think we call them graveyard cemeteries. Yeah. cemeteries, yeah. Cemetery. Okay, cool. So we go to the cemetery exercise. And in this exercise I asked people to think of, first of all, if you have to write a scene, right, so it's x exterior cemetery, say day, and you're sitting there and the first thing you think about so I'm not done think about it. Just any images that pop into your head when you say a cemetery scene. Just listen for me. What comes in a cemetery scene a zombie? Zombies popping out? Zombie pop now?

Alex Ferrari 12:49
That's your imagination. Well, it's great. But if you ran straight there, yeah, what else? Um, a cemetery. My if you want to go into the memory stuff when my

Okay, okay, just keep the first thing that popped into my head. Okay. I love the fact that you went to the imagination well, and the and the external and the memory Well, first, but like, generally, if you had to write a scene, the images that come to mind

if you think about a theme, so I'm going to go zombie zombies coming out of out of the graves. This is all very trite. And we've seen it a million times, but I'm just getting it out there. Yeah, go for zombies. There's a there's a, you know, a little girl walking around and a zombie on the leg. Yeah. And she's yelling, and then your hero comes in, who's not a really hero. He's kind of like an anti, he's just a normal dude thrown in a weird circumstance. And all of a sudden, zombies are popping out and he's got to grab it and help this little girl he doesn't know. And the moms are ready dad, who was visiting her her dead husband, it's all crazy. So I'm just rolling up. So that's kind of like that's,

Matthew Kalil 13:48
that's fantastic. So so what you're doing, man, I love the fact that you Your imagination is going. But but a lot of people when you say like cemetery scene, they're gonna say like, you know, trimmed grass, you know, moss on graves raining, maybe, maybe it's raining, you know?

My favorite story, which I love, and we'll get into that, but that's cool as well, because you were tapping into other zombie type movies. You know, so you your mind went to the movies that you've watched maybe in the movies that you love, which is you know, clearly horror and answer. So that's what you filled your external sources well with. So it's quite interesting. There's, normally when I say the cemetery scene, people will say things like I've said, from grass grave, maybe someone reading from little Bible, you know, a little group of mourning standing around the grave with one person standing aside. So there's all these movies we've seen in our minds being sort of colonized in a way about all these external sources that we've watched. So when you write a scene, especially if you have to write quickly, you just kind of draw from that stuff. And that stuff is it's unique to you in some ways, because your external sources was full of zombies. And

Alex Ferrari 14:54
that came to my mind when I thought of a

graveyard. I was like, well, zombies obviously.

Matthew Kalil 14:58
Of course.

So that's what you filled your external sources. Well, there's like all these aren't stories, which is why your external sources Wells is kind of unique to you as well. But that's the external source as well. So now we're going to try something something different. And this is the next world to try and experience this. And I want you to notice what it feels like drawing from these worlds because this book is very experiential. So you kind of experienced these worlds when you when you read the book.

So that was the first one was quick, it was easy. The ideas came it was just kind of popping out. Let's try the next one, which I call the imagination well, so now I want you to imagine the graveyard totally made up. See if you totally made up graveyard. Yeah, something that you just make, you know, anything images, it can be a scene in a graveyard, it can be any totally made up just invented out of the blue

Alex Ferrari 15:50
graveyard that has been designed by Leonardo da Vinci. So all the all the architecture around it, the gravestones are all in that kind of Da Vinci style. You know, design. It could be very peaceful. When people are walking around, enjoying the park, ask kind of things, the grass is trimmed, there is nice maths, the way people are dressed, could be a little bit more unique than then you normally do with would you be lean towards the Da Vinci design, I'm just using the core idea of the DaVinci I love it, design, and then kind of make make it a world around it. antastic that's kind of like,

Matthew Kalil 16:37
you know, addict, you're you're a natural at this. It's actually quite I've done this exercise often, people really struggle with you just like slide into each one. Anyway. The what you've done there is quite amazing is you've tapped into your your imagination. Well, most people when you say. So I'm hoping that your listeners also doing this when we when we doing this. So if you guys are listening out there, hopefully you've done the external source as well. And now you try to imagine a unique graveyard. A lot of people struggle with imagination, because they feel like suddenly they're being almost tested. They're like, Oh, is my imagination good enough? Have I imagined something unique? Oh, and there's a lot of pressure on us. And our imaginations often like suppressed. And we've been told like when we were kids, like stop imagining stop playing. So people don't really access the imaginations that easily. But what you've done is something quite cool. You've taken an idea, which is Da Vinci, and you've taken graveyards and you've collided them together. And you've sparked off this whole amazing idea of like, Da Vinci's graveyard. And what's cool about that is in the book, I talk about this thing of colliding ideas. You've jumped ahead, in a way sorry. Yeah, you know, the idea is, with the imagination, well, is that you can just you can make things up by colliding ideas together, that's one way of tapping your well deeper, but the imagination, you know, you can and it's sort of graveyard in space, someone's buried in the glass coffin, maybe, you know, the imagination is just you kind of make it up. And it's interesting. There's normally a moment of pause, where you waiting for the idea to come in, I saw you did it, you kind of look down. And then DaVinci came. It's quite amazing. So that's, that's the imagination well, and tapping into that, when we write feels different to tapping into the external sources, which was just like ideas, ideas, idea that yes, easy, easy, easy, because it

Alex Ferrari 18:21
was, it was interesting, if I may stop you for a second because the external Well, when I when I did the exercise the external Well, I went straight to movies, I went straight to stories, because those are all reference points. And I have a vast reference library in my mind, millions of hours of content that I've consumed in my life. But then when I went to the imagination, I was like, Okay, what would be really cool. I was like, oh, Da Vinci. I've never seen that before. About how about an entire graveyard designed by Da Vinci with those kinds of insane designs he did. And collider those ideas, it just automatic. And the one thing I want to touch before we move forward, as you said, this, which I think is something that everyone needs to listen to, is when you said like most people get test, they feel like they're being tested, or they're, they're, they feel self conscious about it. I've now gotten to the point that I don't give a crap anymore. I don't I don't care. I mean, you know, doing a podcast doing what I do with any film, hustle. I get bombarded with negative and positive all the time. So I just don't care anymore. I've gotten to that point in my life as an artist, I'm like, I don't care what other people think I'm just gonna do what I want. But if you would have asked me the same concept five or 10 years ago, I would have had much more difficulty and I would have been much more guarded with how I put put things out. So it's releasing yourself to become free. It's so helpful.

Matthew Kalil 19:44
Absolutely. You know, one of the things in the book I talk about as well is play and just have fun, you know, and like, and when you see kids playing and they're just imagining stuff, they're just going I'm like how where what is this world you created? That's the kind of ease with which they created because they haven't been like, you know, shut down by Less judgement and negative energy, like, you know, things are just like, you know, just Yeah. Like, like, you feel the world's assessing your ideas. Whereas I can see you don't you know, you don't give a crap anyway, I'm just gonna do it. That was great. Well done reaching that phase in your life, you're okay at any involved filmmaker,

Alex Ferrari 20:15
I try try try, man. It's not easy sometimes. But I try it at least

Matthew Kalil 20:20
tell me about it. Tell me about it. Anyway, so I'm just going to go on to the last well, and then we can talk about about, you know, more things. But so the last well, and again, this is an experience. So again, I want your listeners to try and experience this is, is the memory Well, now this well is I want you to try graveyard exercise or a cemetery exercise. And I want you to scan through your life. And and so and think about graveyards assemblies you've actually been to. And and, and think of some images, or people or encounters or stories that have taken place there. Anything coming to

Alex Ferrari 20:53
Oh, absolutely, when my grandfather passed, which was a very difficult time for me. And I was at a cemetery and he actually got into the mausoleum. And I'll never forget the sound of the coffin being dragged over the concrete, they had a plastic, they had a plastic kind of like tray, and then they put the coffin on it, and then they slid it in the sound is still in my it's in my head. And when they actually closed it off and sealed it, you know, finally, I remember all that so vividly. And I wasn't very young, I was still probably my 20s, early 20s or late 20s When that happened, but I still remember it so vividly. And the emotion that I was feeling that day, because it was such a powerful thing. But I can sense it, I can smell it, I actually remember looking in before they put them in. So when they opened it in the hole, and I saw the concrete hole before they put them in because I was curious on what the final resting place of my grandfather was gonna be like. So that's a memory. That's it straight memory.

Matthew Kalil 22:01
That's amazing. I love it. I love it. That's, you know, this is the feeling. Can you feel right? I don't know that 70 of the emotions are in the room? Oh, yes, there's like, you know, and like things are moving. And there's like, there's like this is this resonance that I talked about in the book. When we tap into our memory wells, we create scenes that are just unique. And they resonate with that memory, our unique memory. And interestingly enough, you again, you've jumped the gun. Yeah, because you're talking about the sounds. And and what happens when we when we write from our memories, is that we can we can activate all our senses. And of course, film is all about senses. You know, it's about the sound, it's about, it's not just about writing, you know, the visuals, it's about trying to paint a scene for a reader and eventually for an audience that's got all the senses activated. And so what I what I do in the book, as well as we talk about memory, writing and senses, so we've got, you know, we've got these five senses activated, and you've got the sound that stays with you. And I mean, can you imagine trying to even as a filmmaker, even if, once you've written the script, trying to describe that sound? As it scrapes in, you know, with the plastic on the concrete? Oh, yeah. And that's, and that's just the kind of unique, fresh take on a graveyard scene, right? So we so that's, that's what the memory wall gives us when we write. And you can see in the book, I do tend a little bit more towards the memory. Well, because I think people are really afraid of tapping into that. But yeah, that's that's, that's the well, that that's really unique. And it's got some really, really fresh things in it. And some really, really exciting stuff that you can draw from. So yeah, so that's it. So those are the three wells, the external sources, well, are the movies, you've seen imagination? Well, you make it up memory? Well, you tap into it. And what's really important to remember is, I'm not saying that you got to write a scene about your, your grandfather's passing. Sure, you may want to, but at the same time, if you're writing a scene where a superhero is, you know, I don't know, maybe Superman's died. And if they're burying him, and you arrive at the scene, you can still tap into that memory and just have that sound of, of the things shifting into the concrete. And if you draw from that one moment, and stick it in your feature film script, it's going to pop and someone reading the script will go like, Oh, ah, what is that that's unique, that's fresh, that that's interesting. So you can draw from your memory wall and stick it into any kind of thing you're writing, which is quite, quite cool. Actually, you don't have to write your story. And that's not what I'm really getting at with the book. It's that you can, you can draw from all of them. So you can write a zombie movie, except in the zombie movie set in your state, you're taking the sound and you sticking it into the zombie movie and setting you've got this unique moment and also really loved what you shared about the like, looking into the grave before it went in. That moment just seemed really fresh and interesting to me. And yeah, so that's that's the kind of power of writing from the memory.

Alex Ferrari 24:45
So those were so I can see how these three wells can really spark ideas. Yeah, very easily. If you if you're like this, if you're open and free, you know, we you know, just right here doing this. We've written a scene about out. If we, if we collide all three of the wells together, actually, we have a zombie movie that takes place into the VINCI designed graveyard with authentic sounds of a real of a real graveyard inside of it unique things that I've never seen anything like that before totally.

Matthew Kalil 25:19
Now, what I find amazing about this exercise is when I do it, and we find these unique ideas, and I think what's great about it is that they're just everywhere, you know, they're always around. And often writers are struggling. They're like, How can I write the screenplay that's going to be picked up? How can I write a screenplay that's going to be unique and fresh? And I mean, I've read a lot of scripts in my life, I've been a script reader a lot. And you know, you're waiting for that moment or something pops, and you're on the page, and you're like, Whoa, wait, what is this? And when we do these kinds of exercises, we're just always popping and ideas are just always coming, and they're always there. And the idea with the book is that I'm I'm really hoping that people can not be stuck anymore, because I think writers, we get stuck, you know, there's so much we're facing with so much we're facing, we're facing the infinity, but we're also facing all the pressure of the industry, you know, is this thing gonna make money? Is it you know, am I going to get you know, is it going to work and, and so people can get really stuck. And the idea with a Wells is people can just tap into them, and they can dig them deeper. That's the other thing. So the second part of the book, once you've identified these wells, is you can dig them deeper. In really, I mean, just to give you a really simple idea, to your external sources, well, you dig deeper by either reading more scripts, or watching more movies. Simple, easy as well to dig deeper. But obviously, you watch movies that are interesting to you and unique to you. And then your your well becomes unique. The imagination. Well, you do a lot of play, you do a lot of reading, you read up about the Vinci, you you know you you kind of you just kind of open yourself up to this, this imagination and bam, you can dig deeper. And then your memory well. Well, there's a lot of exercises in the book, which I won't really get into. But there's a lot of exercises around your, your fears, your your happiness, your happiest memory, your saddest memory, spend some time digging into your past and see what what lies there because there's probably gems there with everyone.

Alex Ferrari 27:00
Isn't it funny that Luisa Luis Manuel Luis Manuel from Nepal, Napoleon, Hamilton, who wrote who wrote Hamilton Yeah, yeah. I mean, who in God's green earth would have thought that a book about Hamilton, you know, would do would be a worldwide phenomenon as it was. And he took from his own experience as an immigrant, his father, and he actually tells his father, that's his father's story, coming from Puerto Rico, and they just put it all together through hip hop and MCs, and he just literally collided 1000 things. Absolutely. And when you watch it, you're like, Well, this is the greatest thing I've ever seen in my life. It's just just, it's just such a you want to talk about unique? I mean, and there was no on paper. It does not make sense. Yeah, it Yeah. It doesn't make sense. And if you don't know if the best story is when it was first introduced, it was at the at the Obama White House, where he was invited to do like a talk poetry. What did that talk was? Yeah,

Matthew Kalil 27:59
I know what you mean. Yeah. Like,

Alex Ferrari 28:01
like a spoken word spoke. Yes. Spoken word spoken word poet. Yeah. Yeah. And he's like, listen, I would like to do this little rap I did on on Hamilton. And Obama goes, well, good luck with that. He says like, well, good luck, because it doesn't sound like I mean, come on, who's gonna listen to a rap album here. And it just exploded. And when you saw it, when I saw it, because you see it on YouTube, you could see it on YouTube, that moment. And you could see everybody in the room just just, it's just you just, Oh, my God, when when you and it's really digging into these kinds of wells, where he dealt, he digs into his external he digs into his imagination, he digs into his memory, and combine them. And I think if you are able to combine these wells, you have something extremely unique. And something else you said earlier, which I want to touch on, is, you know, there's a lot of pressures on writers and was it gonna make money and all that stuff? And I feel that and I would love to get your point of view on this. As writers, if you ask us the question is, is going to make money? You're dead in the water? And you can't I mean, unless you're being hired to write something for a studio for $100 million. That's a different ballgame. And even then, you should think, is it going to make money? You should? Yeah. What is it going to be in service of the story? What can I do? You know, that's how that's how certain movies in the studio systems kind of sneak through, like, like, the whole Batman trilogy that Nolan did. Yeah. You know, they all made a lot of money. But boy, did he sneak him a bunch of stuff that normally he's not a studio movie. So would you would you agree with that? Oh, sir, was that would you would you agree with that, in regards to like, ask a question?

Matthew Kalil 29:39
Definitely, definitely. I think it's sorry, it's breaking up a little bit. No worries. That's Can you hear me? I can hear you. Fantastic. Okay, cool. I just heard some. Hey, it's so so yeah, I think I would agree with that. 100%. And actually, one of the things in my book is that I'm hoping that writers can write stories that kind of really matter to them, and they don't have to think about like, oh, is this gonna make money? Because, look, okay, this is a really big game, but I've got a feeling you may have some names is that I feel that a lot of the stories, especially feature films that we're seeing nowadays, not all of them, but a lot of them are just like, you know, the next, let's make the next look, I love the Marvel movies. But you know, let's make the next Marvel movie, let's make the next day and people don't always kind of scared of walking on a limb and telling something that matters to them. And the stories that we create are quite fragile. And and often these stories, the fragile stories are the ones that I'm hoping that the book will help tell, because we all have these stories that come to us sometimes. And they like these little golden chickens that come and they like chicken, or we've got to tell you, we got to, and we've got to kind of make this little chicken grow. And it's this kind of fragile thing that we create. And then we kind of, you know, we're afraid that as soon as you start, like you said, as soon as you start thinking about money, it's you know, is this gonna make money? Is this gonna, you're already in service of something else. You're not in service of what the Hamilton guy was in service off when he wanted to make Hamilton, that was something totally different. I don't think at any point, he was like, Is this gonna make money? Because if he really thought that he probably would have gotten no and he would have stopped, right? Right. But he was he was in service of something else. And this is kind of what I'm hoping the book will help his his people who are in service of the stories that matter to them. And that matter to the world. That's the other thing about the about the Hamilton stories were so timeless, because he was resonating with his own truth in that moment. And bam, there was an episode time. Yes. It was just kind of kind of kind of perfect. Yeah. So so it's a long kind of answer to your question. But I but I do think that, that yeah, it's not you can't ask, is it gonna make money? It's just gonna, it's gonna kill you. You're done. Is this something? You're done? You're done. You're done?

Alex Ferrari 31:43
Yes. I think you're putting too much pressure on the on the actual art. If you cannot allow the art to grow and be what it's going to be. To a certain extent, look, if someone gives me $200 million, I'm not going to just like, hey, let's figure it out. Let no I'm not that there's a real physical responsibility. But at the end of the day, if you are honest to the story, you are in service of the story, what you're trying to do, money comes, regardless of what you're trying to do. Without question, I feel so many filmmakers and screenwriters put so much pressure on the art, like this is the script that's gonna blow me up. This is the this is the movie that's gonna take get me that agent that I've been wanting or care that and but because I've been, I talked to so many filmmakers, and I see so many screenwriters and I and I see the guys who succeed and the girls who succeed, and none of them ask the question, is this going to be making money? They did it just because they didn't we wanted to do it. And that's where you need to. It's hard to be there. It's hard to get there. It really is.

Matthew Kalil 32:49
Oh, yeah. Yeah, that's right. I mean, I Yup, it's really readable. And I think it's like, you know, like you said, it's not like a fragile. I'm an artist, it's actually the almost the opposite of that. It's like, it's like I'm working hard at these wells. I'm digging in them all the time. I'm making them available. And he has my ideas. And he has my script. And it's great. And I love it. Oh, and he has another one. You know, and this is this do this one. And it's kind of like constantly working at being freer and loosening yourself up so that the stories come and that you can kind of keep on doing them in a way. Because yeah, otherwise it's just you know, it's just one script that you're holding onto for dear life and hoping for

Alex Ferrari 33:21
for 10 years. Yeah, anytime I see I meet a screenwriter. He's like, how many scripts have you written? He's like, I've got this one. And I'm like, is that it? is like, yeah, that's the one I'm like, yeah, yeah, that's the Yeah, that's that's that's a rough. That's yeah,

Matthew Kalil 33:33
yeah.

Alex Ferrari 33:34
You've got what you're basically telling you there. Yeah. I was told by a man. Yeah, I thought that one short film. I've had that one script. And it's like, then you're telling me you only want one swing at the bat? When you go up to basically you got one swing? And that's it. Yeah. You got no other swing?

Matthew Kalil 33:51
I think yeah. If there's one thing that I think you'll be your podcast also communicate really clearly is not one swing at a bat. No, always man, you got to stand up there, you got to hit that ball constantly. And then when you when you'd really exhausted and tired and you think you can't hit this ball anymore, and you want to give up, but you still want to hit it, then you know, you're a baseball player, or a screenwriter, you know if you know, if you know you still want to write the story. I mean, I've had you know, I've written quite a lot of features. And I've written a lot of television. And I keep thinking to myself, when is this going to end. But the but the stories keep coming, because I do want to keep telling them.

Alex Ferrari 34:27
And that's and that's a wonderful, wonderful place to be. Now I want to also talk to you about because I think this I think your book really touches upon this is authenticity, authenticity as a writer, and how and I would love to hear what you think of how writers can be more consciously write more authentically, as opposed to only digging into the external world, which a lot of writers do. They just rehash old stuff that they've seen again and again and again. Where I think the combination of the three and then because when you watch a movie that's authentic, You know, you watch something that just comes from a play field, just feel it, that that's the writer, director. You know, you watch Schindler's List, and you go, well that Spielberg doing what he like that is really personal, it just oozes off.

Matthew Kalil 35:17
Absolutely, absolutely.

Alex Ferrari 35:19
So what's, what's your thoughts on that?

Matthew Kalil 35:21
So my thoughts on that are that, you know, when I, when I started teaching, writing, sort of about 20 years ago, I've been teaching this, and a lot of people when they first start writing their scripts, I don't know why. But I mean, I guess I did it to actually probably is like, you know, I'm gonna write a story about a prostitute who meets a gangster. And then they're in you know, and and, you know, I'm in South Africa, so but in New York, and I'm like, I know nothing about New York and nothing on prostitutes for gangsters, right. And, but yet, I'm gonna write this thing. And then so what I do is I draw from the external sources well, so I get this half remembered idea of a prostitute from like pretty woman. And then this half remember idea of gangsters from like Goodfellas. And then like, I kind of want to know of New York. And it just, you know, it's fun. It's really fun. And you know, you can structure it perfectly. You can even make characters that are kind of okay, but it's lacking something. And this is this authenticity thing. It's just lacking depth. And so I always thought to myself, how am I going to teach this to students? How am I going to teach people to like, get depth? You know, is it something you just born with? Or what is it? And so what I realized is, I used to do these exercises with him. And this is kind of where the memory thing came from. I used to do this exercise where I was like, Okay, so in your life, there's been one moment where everything's changed. The one moment something happened in your life where everything changed, and students started and they started looking at their lives, and they'd go back in there go, okay. Oh, yeah, there was that time I was mugged. Yeah, that wasn't so nice. Or it could be anything like there was that one moment when I realized my grandmother was going to die. And I was visiting her in the old age home, and I knew she was going to die, and she was getting dementia. And that moment was when everything changed. And I get them to write that into a script. And what they started writing with these amazing things that were just full of so much authenticity, it was like, okay, so I was mugged. But it was kind of funny, the way the mugging happened. And it happened in this random place that you wouldn't think that like, you know, outside a train station, people walking by and this guy was mugging me, no one was doing anything. And he was just holding this knife out at me just showing me the knife. He wasn't like threatening me. What he did was show me the knife. And I'm like, ooh, that just suddenly it was a lot more authentic than someone taking out a gun and going I'm mugging you

Alex Ferrari 37:40
now. Right? Yeah. On the nose. Very on the nose. Yeah,

Matthew Kalil 37:43
you're putting on the nose. I was just like, I've got a knife. What are you gonna do? And and, you know, the old timers thing was like, you know, she opens the fridge and something in the fridge is gone moldy. And everything in the fridge is moldy. So she hasn't, you know, grandmother hasn't been in the fridge for a while she's losing it. And that moment had such authenticity. And then the students would write these scenes. And I remember, I'll never forget, when when the scenes are read, I make my students read out in the class, you know, you read out your scripts, because you can suddenly hear what it feels like, and what it sounds like. And I'll never forget that moment after that class. The room was vibrating with this authentic energy. And and people were crying and people were laughing and people were oh man was like colors were popping. It was just fantastic. Actually, I had to go lie outside on the ground. I lay on a bench I just watched the clouds drove by because it was just, it was this great moment of like, okay, this is authenticity, authenticity. Absolute authentic,

Alex Ferrari 38:37
authentic, authentic. Yeah, yeah.

Matthew Kalil 38:39
And so so I kind of in the book, I kind of that's why I kind of draw so heavily on the memory. Well, that's where the true stuff lies. And almost, you know, some people can write really imaginative stuff, and it can be really, really fun. But if you link it up to your, to your memories, in some ways, man, you've got that, that the way you get the content, I really think that's the way the the authenticity comes about. What's interesting, as well, just from a writing point of view, is it's happening in television, writing, in some ways now, like a lot of the TV series have got the slack. Ah, it's really kind of real, either because of the research because this is the other thing. Because of that story I was talking about in New York, if I actually went to New York and kind of reset and walked around the streets, and, and, and New York entered my memory. Well, I could have written with a lot more authenticity. You know, I always use the example of like the wire, you know, the TV series, the wire, it's like, it just had so much authenticity because those guys live the life you know, they were there. They were journalists, their reports like the you know, the guy was, you know, literally the guy who was the homicide division. He'd been there he knew that that space so well. It seeps with authenticity. Because the writers have activated all their five senses never lived those moments. So the idea, I think, with real authenticity is to live the moments and then put them in your script and be brave enough to to put those moments in your script and to slow down in that Moment of creativity. And go, Wait a minute, you can even revisit scripts you've written already. And you can go back and look at the scene and say, okay, so I wrote this breakup scene, and I said it in the bedroom, because that's where people break up. And look back at your life and say, where did I break up with people? Okay, wait a minute, it was actually a sushi restaurant. Or it was like, you know, on the side of the road in the car? Oh, yeah. It was in the shopping mall in the in the, you know, in the, in the parking in the shopping mall, in the parking lot. Oh, yeah. And then you change the breakup scene from the bedroom to the parking lot. And suddenly, you've got something that's fresh and unique and original. And so that's the way that you can also use the wells and I talked about in like locations, like changing your locations, locations from life, and then and then chopping your scenery. And suddenly, what happens is your script suddenly pops all these fresh, kind of unique, authentic. I mean, like you say, authenticity, something, these authentic occasions. Yeah.

Alex Ferrari 40:55
No, it's funny as you're talking, and I just, you know, just did a movie that I shot at the Sundance Film Festival. And that film is my many, many of my stories are in it, of like, you know, it's about filmmakers trying to sell their movie at Sundance. No one had ever done it before. And I was like, but I've been to Sundance eight or nine times. So I know the layout of Park City, like the back of my head. So when I was writing it, and putting it together, I'm like, oh, yeah, we'll go over to this restaurant. We'll go over that restaurant. We'll go into here. We got to take this trip over there. And then they're like, Oh, that one that one. Sundance, I went where I was completely depressed and even know where I was gonna go in my life. And I walked down Main Street at three o'clock in the morning, and I looked like backlot should we put that scene in. And you can sense that kind of stuff coming off the screen maze. It's one of them. It's one of the love that I've done. And ever, because of that authenticity of it, because it was yeah, it was authentic to my story, but also so many stories I'd heard before from other filmmakers, yeah, that I've met or dealt with in my life. Yeah. But that's what makes those kinds of stories so unique. Because and I think you're right, the memory Well, it is the it's kind of like the secret stuff. It's the stuff that nobody is the thing that puts you apart from the billions of other screenwriters out there trying to get a story told quickly, because just like we did in the earlier exercise, I don't know if anybody else early I've never seen it or heard about it have no sound of that not coffin on a plastic tray being drawn into that something's very uniquely mine. Until now. And now so feel it for me. But that's and that's fine, of course. But But that's something extremely uniquely my story, my memory, and if we could even just dabble that stuff on, you know, a Stephen King book like Stephen King puts out Yes, left and right. But I'm, I'm promise you, Stephen King probably is pulled a lot. Like when he wrote carrier, he wrote The Shining, there's things about everything. Yeah, his family, his life, his you know, all that stuff that's drizzled in there.

Matthew Kalil 42:58
Definitely. And what's interesting is that writers do it, almost unconsciously, you know, the good writers, just, I don't know why they just do it automatically. They just draw from their life, they just draw from their memories. It's a great process. And it's quite a liberating process. And it's actually quite a fun process. And I mean, I may even go so far as to say it's a transformative process. Because, you know, we can write, you know, from the imagination while grabbed from the memory. I mean, from the external sources, well, it's already fun in his life. And when you start writing from your own stuff, and putting some of your own stuff in there, it becomes transformative, not just as a writer, but as a human being. So I find that if people write with some of their own stuff in there, first of all, the scripts are great, much better. Stories of better characters are more interesting. But the writers experience of writing is better. It's quite amazing. If you kind of write the stuff that you is somehow linked to you in some way. It's just, it's transformative. It's almost therapeutic. I mean, I'm not a therapist. I wouldn't say I am. But you know, it is

Alex Ferrari 43:58
like it's therapeutic. Yeah, no, there's there's no question you exercise some demons when you do that.

Matthew Kalil 44:04
Totally. Absolutely. You do a great quote in the book about something about exercising your divine discontent or something it's in the book one of the quotes from another writer and it's just it's great you do your exercise Sunday exercise some demons

Alex Ferrari 44:17
and again it is that secret stuff so people listening you know out there you know if you're able to pull from your own memories and incorporate them in a creative environment and create a creative story Yeah, that is what's gonna stick you apart from everybody else if you if you're just if you're just making that prostitute Pretty Woman Goodfellas gangster in New York but you've never stepped foot in New York. Chances are even if you know structure extremely well even if you know character film it really well. It's going to be like you said very thin. But yeah, but a first time writer who lived in New York Well that's why Martin Scorsese his movies were so amazing. I mean streets and and taxi

Matthew Kalil 44:58
driver man,

Alex Ferrari 44:59
you Raging Bull raging. He lived in New York, he understood the gangster lifestyle because he was the guys he hung out with. You know? Yeah, totally. Totally. Yeah. It's remarkable. And,

Matthew Kalil 45:11
but, and it's the same as you know, it's interesting though. So you Woody Allen was also New York, totally different guy like totally same city totally different experience, because the memories of it is so different, their experiences are so different, that you have these totally, they both feel they're totally, totally different because their memories are different of these bases. And then but they both have authenticity, which is, you know, which is

Alex Ferrari 45:31
also very interesting. That's a really good point that they have both are known for their New York work. And they're both Yes. So different. Very different experience.

Matthew Kalil 45:45
Absolutely.

Alex Ferrari 45:46
Could you imagine just swapping those two in their life? It just like Scorsese's living reality. Now that would be an interesting movie, and Woody Allen's? Yeah, yeah.

Matthew Kalil 45:59
Woody Allen character walks into a Martin Scorsese movie, you know, oh, hey, sorry.

Alex Ferrari 46:04
Oh, my clown. Well, you're a clown because

it'd be a really short movie. It's a short film. It's a short film, obviously. Now, there's a couple other things I want to talk about is subtext is something that that writers and directors and filmmakers they forget about? Do you have any tips on how we can add some really nice subtext to our stories?

Matthew Kalil 46:34
I do, actually. So subtext for me is, again, I do I talk about it in the book briefly as well, is that when we, as I'm talking about the breakup scene, because I kind of, it's one of these, you know, our lives peppered in if you look back through our memories, there be certain blips that happen and and breakups and deaths. And, you know, angry moments are things that kind of pop up. So the breakup scene, I kind of use as an example. Often when, when someone has to write a breakup scene, so your job as a writer is very often like, Okay, this guy has to break up with this goal in order for the plot to move forward. So I've got to write a breakup scene. So you're not really you know, it's not the kind of central reason why you're writing the movie. But for the plot to move forward, you got to write a breakup scene. So you go, okay, they're in bed, and one of them gets up and says something like, you know, I've always loved you, but I think it's time we ended, whatever

Alex Ferrari 47:26
you're like,

Matthew Kalil 47:28
Okay, well, if you do really not know, please don't leave me, whatever, you know, these, I'm just drawing, the first thing that comes to mind. And the dialogue is really on the nose. And it's and it's like, you know, but you're getting the scene, right? And so you're writing and it's seeming like, okay, cool. I'm running a breakup scene. And like, structurally, you've written a breakup scene, but there's no subtext. It's all on the nose dialogue. It's all exactly what you know, kind of anyone could could write. But if you take a moment, think about Wait a minute, when did I break up with someone? What did I actually say? What words were you?

Alex Ferrari 47:56
Yeah, I'm going back to my own breakups. As you're saying this, I'm like, we weren't, we didn't actually say what we meant. We said other things.

Matthew Kalil 48:08
Hopefully, you would never, you know, you don't want to hurt the person's feeling. You don't want to say that. So you get up and you say, like,

Alex Ferrari 48:18
no, no, he's like, it's not you. It's me. It's like, you know, but you never like, I remember my one of my breakups, and I didn't even know it came. And it was like, and then like, literally an hour prior to the breakup, everything was fine. But underneath all of it, it was her, about to break up with me. And she and it just was brought broadsided me, because I couldn't read the subtext of her for obviously, for months of what she was doing. Obviously, for months, I didn't see what was going on, and her discontent with our relationship at the time. But you're right, it was never on the nose. If you do a breakup, it's never on the nose. It's never something that I'm breaking up with you. Because you leave the dishes out all the time. You don't make the bed, and you're horrible in the sack, like you never hear.

Matthew Kalil 49:12
But I see it in scripts first time scripts all the time and first drafts you like, No, this is just raw, what are you doing? And then you know, you know, you hear it. And often you know, you're the breakup happens with a look. Or like a moment where or somebody brings you a cup of tea every morning and one morning. They don't. And it's you look at them at all they bring it they just put it down. And you look at that one look. And you say I love you and someone says turns away. He laughed at the fact. You know, where's the where's the response? And and so for me, the subtext is and this is again, one of the things I wanted to teach writers. How do I teach subjects? I don't know. But we live it all the time. You know, we constantly decoding the world as human beings. We're looking at each other's faces. We're constantly reading the subtext all the time, you know the guy serving your coffee at the spa back You're looking at the subtext you realizing this guy's had a shitty day and your mind you kind of reading into everything all the time. And that is what writers need to write in their scripts, is writing that stuff that we we kind of calmed. And when you then when you see that on the screen, you're like, Ah, she's gonna break up with him. You know it already, because it's all in the subtext. And I think that's, that's my main advice is like, right from life write from what you've seen in life and then look at your script and go, Is this realistic to my own life? Has this happened? And then go to your memory wall and say, Hmm, can I draw from something else from there? Is there another way of saying this? And I'd say, yeah, that's that's the thing for me with subtext is it's, it's obviously not writing on the nose. But it's a lot more about what is unsaid. And, you know, one of the kind of estimate this isn't in the book, but because it's kind of one that kind of more obvious things is that just, if you can show it without saying it, then that's gonna be you know, that's gonna be the best that especially with subtext, you know, it's like, you know, and and never, people never say what they mean. I mean, it's, it's, like you say, even though it says, I'm breaking up with you, because you, you know, you're, you don't clean the dishes, and yes, never never ever happens,

Alex Ferrari 51:07
you know, it's always something else. It's always something else. And they always, you're right, and we are constantly decoding human behavior on a daily basis. But for whatever reason, when we write for the first time, you forget that, and you're so on the nose, and it took me a long time to realize what on the nose meant. Yeah, like, just like, cuz I would my first scripts were like, I got notes back, or I got coverage on it. And they're like, your dialogues on the nose. And I'm, like, I get I understand the concept. But like, What do you mean? Um, yeah, he's going from point A to point B, he's talking about point A to point B. Yeah. And that that's just the way the story is moving forward. I don't understand why it's not working. And then all of a sudden, something clicks and go do it. It's not about a to b, it's about Y to Z. And you gotta write about Y to Z while you're doing a B, there, you got, yep. And confused, confused, more people listening?

Matthew Kalil 52:00
Well, it's a really confusing thing. And actually, as writers, we are facing this dilemma, because we're not just writing dialogue that happened in life, this is the other thing we're not and I talked about in the book as well, I'm not expecting you to write your breakup scene, that's going to be boring, I'm sorry, it probably is, you know, it's really important to you. But you know, out of context, if you write a breakup scene from life, it's going to be boring, we we as writers have to also move the plot forward. So we're doing two things, we moving the plot forward with our dialogue. So we're delivering information that has to do with the plot. And then we're also trying to keep it real, like people speak in real life. And that balance, I think that's where people struggle a lot. Because we do have to move the plot forward, they have to break up at the end of the scene, you have to communicate to the audience, they have broken up that someone might have to say, sorry, breaking up. Yeah. Okay, that might have to be in there somewhere. But you don't put that in all the time. So that's the balance that we got to face as writers, keeping it real, keeping the data real, but then moving the plot forward. And very often people just move the plot forward, and then they stop keeping it real. And that's the balance. It is difficult. I think it's one of the most difficult things. I think it's kind of it's a really tricky question about subjects and why you're, you're you're reverting to things like a to b. And why does it because it becomes quite abstract in a way. And actually, that's a lot of what writing is, it's really abstract, and screenwriting, even though to craft no doubt. And there are a lot of books out there that tell you about, you know, if you plot from x to y, and a to b, and then the graphs and diagrams and all these things, and I'm like, you know, yeah, okay. But in truth, no one really knows anything. And and you've got to just, it's a fragile beast we dealing with here, this creativity, especially in screenwriting, and this is what I think is why my book is slightly different to the other stuff, is that it deals with the creative process in the moment when you're creating. And so it's that kind of, it's that kind of subtle, and, and often language fails. So at this point, language fails, and it becomes art again. And it's quite exciting. In a way, even though you know, I'm telling you a view, your view is now going, What the hell are these guys talking about? Just tell me how to do it. And I'm saying, yes, there are ways it's not that easy. It's

Alex Ferrari 54:07
not man. It's not and look, structure, a structure, you can you could do a three act structure. If you do a five extra, you could do you know, and that's easy to learn. I mean, it's not hard to learn a three act structure, they tell you, they literally are on you could Google the hero's journey. Yeah, you could Google three act structure and like, okay, from this page, this page should have something like this happen this page. Yeah, that's, it's just that's a roadmap. But what but how to fill that and how to get to that point. Because eventually you just will instinctually know the structure, you will get to the point where structure is not going to be an issue for you anymore if you outline things right. Absolutely. It's all this other stuff that makes it really good. You know,

Matthew Kalil 54:51
it's it's like those early playwrights, you know, you think of Tom Stoppard and these guys, I don't know like, you know, these are they the names escaped with

Alex Ferrari 54:59
these early Shakespeare. Look at Shakespeare. Yeah.

Matthew Kalil 55:03
I've never anyway, Shakespeare is another story. But, but like those guys who are grappling with life and their experiences, they're putting it on the screen. Like Scorsese. It does it as well, of course, but it's but it's that kind of stuff. How do you get that stuff onto this onto the script? And that's kind of what drawing from these wells are, is about in some way. But drawing from lads struggling with it, you know, and but yeah, keeping it real at the same time.

Alex Ferrari 55:28
So yeah. Now, do you have any advice on how to create memorable characters? I'd love to hear out about you. I do

Matthew Kalil 55:35
actually. Yeah. So creating memorable characters is, again, there's also a section in the book and I'll use the walls as a way of talking about it. Because first of all, you can draw characters from if you use the wilds, your external source as well. So you can say, Okay, well, I'm going to do a character that's just like Rocky, you know, you could, or I'm gonna do a character that's just like Luke Skywalker. Or you could do your imagination. Well, you could do a bit of Harry Potter kind of way where JK Rowling was sitting in the train, Harry Potter came to her like Zam lightning bolt from above, a lot of the characters just came out of the blue. And you can or you can, you can take like, if you want to create a memorable character, you could take like Rocky meets Harry Potter, and collide the characters together. Now you've got the rocky Harry Potter character. I've know what that is. I do want that genius.

Alex Ferrari 56:20
A boxer wizard, a boxer wizard. Shark shark NATO. I'm telling you shark NATO, it will work.

Matthew Kalil 56:30
And it's in my book. It's like shocking. It's like a tornado and shocks. Bam. Okay. But you can do the same with characters. You know, that's what they did.

Alex Ferrari 56:40
That's exactly what they did. What can we throw together? I love it. It's great.

Matthew Kalil 56:45
I love it. You know, but people do this all the time. They so one of the shows I wrote a long time ago was like, okay, so we got to, again, so Africa was rugby in America, it's American football. See what American football player and someone who's really camp, collide them together. And you got this cap, American football player. Interesting. He has a character that's kind of unique. That's using the imagination. Well, but memory Well, man, that's where the unique characters lie. Like no doubt about oh, yeah, I've got a whole a, I've got this whole system in the book where you, you go through your character list, even in the script that you've written. And you've written say, say you've written a character. So I wrote this scene in a script that I'd written. And I had a scene that was a music store guy working like a clerk in a music store, okay? He was just, he was music store clerk one or something like this. Right? He was random. And he had some dialogue, but he wasn't really unique. And then I went through my life. And I looked through all the people that I knew, and I went almost like a Rolodex through my life. And I was like, Okay, there's this huge guy. You see, yeah, this guy was Korean. And then I found this guy was like a golf. Okay, like a long haired, you know, depressed, golf, right, and tattooed everywhere, piercings everywhere. And I was like, wait a minute, put him in the music store. And suddenly, I had this character that was like, really memorable. Like, not really wanting to work in the store. And my, my main, one of my main characters was there. She was a young man. And she had this baby in her arms. And she was trying to get her CDs that she was trying to sell out of a bag. And she was, and she kind of handed the baby to the goth. And now this got back hoses, baby. And he's like, I'm sorry, madam, this is not. This is not, this is not policy in the store. And you know, in fact, holding babies or accepting your CDs, we couldn't really tell. But it became quite a memorable and interesting scene that left off the page, because I was drawing from characters in my life. And we see them all the time. I mean, I bet you, if your readers and your listeners and even yourself just thought back to today, and if you know, if you've left the house, and you think about who I bumped into today, it's like, oh, yeah, there was Uber driver. He was really weird. Now, what happens if that Uber driver, and we take him and you put him in a script in a character script, and that's the way I find really memorable characters come from? Because they're everywhere in life? Yeah, we don't open our eyes. And and one of the things that I really am calling for with this book, is that we open our eyes a bit more and get off the, you know, look at my cell phones, right? Yeah. But like, you know, get off the cell phone and look around us and open our eyes again, and like see the world, see the characters that are around all the time, and then draw from that. And look, it's a cliche, but you know, if you're the friend of a writer, he's probably gonna write about, you know, the characters. They come from a lot, you know, that's it. Thank you. I'm sorry. I'm writing about you. That's it. Oh, no,

Alex Ferrari 59:25
there's, there's no, there's absolutely no question. I've done that multiple times in my life where I called up my friend, I'm like, Look, dude, you're in, you're in the movie. You're in the release, like, not only are you in the movie, your name, I'm not even going to be that creative. Your name is in the movie. And I'm going to take elements of your life, I'm going to mix it with somebody else, but you're gonna see yourself up there. Sorry. And that's the way it is.

Matthew Kalil 59:50
It's kinda it's kind of what people do naturally. But I think very often when you run into a deadline or a writing with some pressure, we kind of forget that that's what we're doing. And and so we forget to kind of draw from life and draw from the characters from laughing guy. Yeah. So yeah, that would be my way of creating memorable characters. And it's, you know, what's great as well about about the three wells is when you combine all three, so Okay, you've got the Gulf, and then you've got someone from another movie. So I don't know why this thing. I'm thinking of like, the guy from bringing out the dead because I think you're Martin Scorsese. Now think of the taxi driver, Nicholas Cage's character and the Garth combined together. And now you've got some sort of a, I don't know, golf paramedic. Okay, cool, right. And we've got

Alex Ferrari 1:00:30
paramedic who's up on some stuff. So he's high. In now you've got me now you

Matthew Kalil 1:00:37
know, something going, then there's something going on. And so yeah, so that's how you do it. And if you combine all three, well, then we really cooking with gas. That's the way you know, that's the way to really do

Alex Ferrari 1:00:46
it. And another thing that you talked about a couple times here is colliding, colliding ideas colliding characters colliding stories. Can you just touch on that a little bit more, because I think it's so powerful, like we just did it with Rocky, and Harry Potter. I don't know what that character would be. But that couldn't be the germ to start something bigger. You know, it could be the genesis of another character, where you know, all of a sudden, Harry Potter learns how to fight and he's also a wizard. So MMA MMA Harry Potter. Yeah. But he wrestles dragons. Instead, he fights dragons physically.

Matthew Kalil 1:01:28
That's definitely imagination is I love the imagination was just going and this is what happens with colliding ideas. So the idea is, it's almost like a, like a physics thing, you know, you got these two atoms, and they collide together. And as they collide, they spark and is that spark that just gets ideas going and gets the creative juices flowing. And then you can create something that's just, it's quite unbelievable. Once that spark happens, but if you've just sitting there with one idea, and the other day, and you don't collide them together, you don't, you know, you don't create something. It's actually I mean, it goes back to the sort of idea of what thesis and antithesis create together you create synthesis is this kind of, you know, deep theory of this, which is kind of, it's very academic, but, but the idea is that when you collide two almost opposites together, it's a bit of a black juxtaposition. You spark off something that is then the imagination. Well, that's, I call it like a geezer like spirits up and it's like, oh, my, you can't stop it. I mean, that's Harry Potter rocky thing. I don't know, I'm probably never gonna forget it. Who knows where it's gonna end up one day. But you know, it's like, it's like, they took you random, but But you collide them. And then you've got this. And what happens is, it's data becomes not just a character, but a story. Because you started putting earlier you weren't even talking about the character. You're plotting a whole story with a man and man dragons. He's got to find the dragons. And so what happens is like it suddenly the blood starts coming from these characters that we've collided together. That's, that can be really, really powerful.

Alex Ferrari 1:02:50
That is, yeah, well, that was how like, Indiana Jones was created, like an archaeologist who goes around the world getting, like, oh, you know, whip wielding that was literally Spielberg and Lucas on a beach. Yeah. And they were just like, hey, why don't we make a movie about an archaeologist who goes around treasure hunting, you know, like, wouldn't that be cool? And he's got a weapon for Dora. And then from there, the rest was born.

Unknown Speaker 1:03:12
Exactly, exactly.

Alex Ferrari 1:03:14
It's pretty. It's pretty insane. Um, now I want to ask you a few questions. I asked all of my guests.

Matthew Kalil 1:03:21
I know, I know what's coming up, prepare

Alex Ferrari 1:03:23
yourself. But before we do that, you actually told me an amazing, it's a humbling story about how you heard about me. And I'm not and I want to just I just, I'd love for you to tell the story on air, because it's just something that was I've never had that happen to me. So I think it's a really cool idea. Yeah, really cool story. Yeah, tell me that would be awesome.

Matthew Kalil 1:03:44
Hello. Okay. I'm gonna draw from my memory well, and tell you a story. So I live in a place called Muhlenberg, which is basically like Venice Beach, in Cape Town in South Africa, except much smaller. But it's kind of wide streets. Lots of skateboarders, lots of surface, and there was this coffee shop that I sometimes work at. And I'm working there working on some courses from the book. And I see this guy next to me and he's got a laptop open and it's got a you know, it's got an editing suite on so it's got like, Premiere, some he's editing something. And you know, which is probably also a bit like Venice Beach or LA, it's everyone's always working on scripts, or movies or things. It's everywhere. And so he's working on this thing. And I say to him, Hey, how's it going? You know, because I always want to meet people. That's the other thing. I'm always just meeting people's really good advice. By the way, it's like meet people all the time. But if you saw I approach just gonna say like, are you doing some edit work? What are you working on? He's a stills photographer who is moving into video and we start talking. And I say, I've got this book and he goes, I It's amazing. Come take a picture Instagram and Instagram me with the book. And any I said that I've also got this podcast because I've also started podcasting because podcasts are amazing. And I've started I've started the three wells podcast, which is an anyway, as I mentioned to him, and he says, Have you heard of indie film, hustle? And I go, I don't think he's rings a bell, but I don't think and he says you've got to listen to it. It's amazing. So this guy Like the tip of Africa, in the small little town called Mutombo. He's telling me about Alex Ferrari. And so I'm like, okay, cool. I'll check it off. I guess my fun. And I started to see you. And I'm like, Oh, this is great. I love what this guy's doing. And he's far he's amazing. So I write Alex Ferrari on my whiteboard in the tip of Africa. Write your name.

Alex Ferrari 1:05:18
That's ridiculous. Like contact Alex Ferrari.

Matthew Kalil 1:05:21
So I'm thinking like, how am I going to contact him, I could email him out of the blue. And then two or three weeks later, I'm in this sort of joint session with other Michael Visser productions, who's my publishers, and they're really good. They kind of it's a bit of a family publisher. And we all we all meet with each other. And suddenly, this woman, Diane Bell, who's a friend of yours is on this, you know, thing with me. And she says, Oh, you guys should meet with Alex Ferrari. And I'm like, Yes. And that's how, that's how I ended up sitting here in Johannesburg, South Africa, talking to you,

Alex Ferrari 1:05:53
I It's I find it. It's, it's humbling. But I've never heard a story. And it just I wanted to, I wanted to bring it out because I wanted to make a point of it. Which is you never know, as a creator, as an artist, as a writer. What your work will do in the world where it will reach who it will reach our point, it will reach them. So I'm here in in Los Angeles, I sit here in my my cave, with this little microphone. And Yoda, Yoda is in the background. Yes, yes, my life size, Yoda is in the background. And I sit there and I talk on this into the into the into the ether. And yet, that story is so amazing to me, because some guy who I've never met in a coffee shop in Johannesburg, Cape Town, in Cape Town, and he's telling you about my podcast, which then, and then how everything worked out is amazing. So I always tell artists, I always tell writers and filmmakers, it is your responsibility to get your work out there. It's your responsibility to tell your stories because you have no idea the impact that your story will have on another human being it could be just one person who watches a movie you right? watches the television episode, watches a short film that you direct or a feature or whatever content you create, and it could change their life. And I'm not saying that you changed your life or anything like that. I'm just saying as a general statement, that our our our work has the potential to do something like that. So I thank you for nothing. That's amazing. I thank you for telling that story. I wanted to make that point. No, no, it's

Matthew Kalil 1:07:34
good. Because you know, the other thing is like when you're in the flow of creativity as well, these things happen. I don't know if you found this. But once you start just creating and doing and putting stuff out there, suddenly, I mean, what you've been doing is like you putting you just putting stuff out there, and like things start happening and the flow happens. And the next thing you know, I'm talking to you and like, that's just it's like incredible how that happens. But it's got to do with like unblocking and flowing. You know, I'll

Alex Ferrari 1:08:01
tell you, I'll tell you what, when I launched indie film, hustle three and a half years ago, I was blocked. I mean, I just did that the doors were shut to me, I couldn't talk to anybody anything all of a sudden, and because I decided to give back and start and start building indie film hustle up, I have now options to talk to people that I've never in a million years, would have, if I would have just maybe if I would have emailed you out of the blue, like, Hey, I'm a filmmaker, you know, and I talk to you for an hour and just like pick your brain. Like that's not something that you would do. But because of me just putting stuff out there constantly. doors swing open all the time. And I get to have this amazing experience with having a conversation with you on the other side of the world, about screenwriting, which is, you know, wonderful. And then on top of that, our conversation is not going to be shared with hopefully 1000s of 10s of 1000s of people around the world. And hopefully I will make an impact in their life one way shape or form. So it's a wonderful place to be.

Matthew Kalil 1:09:01
Thank you. It is and I feel very humbled and grateful to be part of this.

Alex Ferrari 1:09:06
So let's talk let me ask you a few questions. Got advice? Would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today?

Matthew Kalil 1:09:14
Okay, that's a great question. For it's a really good question. I think, you know, the first thing that came to mind was persistence. Yeah. And I wanted to say be persistently yourself if that's possible. So, so, you know, it's like, this is me, this is my voice. This is what I'm writing. This is who I am and being true to that is really difficult. And and then persistently doing it with precision. Okay, as well, because, you know, don't don't just write any old script and persistently give me that script. And the script is bad, right? ever be bad? But, but like, yeah, persistently be yourself with precision. So so so read other scripts actually go maybe that's, you know, I'm going to take all that back. And I'm just gonna say read scripts. Okay, read lots of scripts, because I noticed on your on your page, you've got like links to scripts.

Alex Ferrari 1:10:20
Oh, man, hundreds of scripts hundreds and 1000s.

Matthew Kalil 1:10:24
Just so look, if you if you're trying to break into the industry, I suppose. Look, if you're just trying to write a really good script, then then read many, many scripts. But if you're trying to break into this into the industry, then just persistently be yourself with precision. I think that would be my my bit of advice.

Alex Ferrari 1:10:39
That is an amazing piece of advice. Because I always tell people the same thing in the sense of be yourself. That's who you are. They can't make another you and I always tell people like I've meet directors who like I want to be the next Talentino I want to be the next Fincher. Next, Nolan. I'm like, Dude, I hate to break it to you. We've got a Fincher, we've got a Nolan. And we got a Tarantino. And I promise you, there's so much better at being themselves than you will ever be. So you've got to be the best Matthew, I've got to be the best, Alex. And that is it. And that is the secret stuff that isn't, because no one can tell you the secret stuff. No one can ever I will never be able to compete with Matthew kolel. No, in the same way that you will not be able to compete with me in the sense that I can never be you. Absolutely. And you can never be exact. And that you know exactly. It's we are who we are, period, in whatever we do.

Matthew Kalil 1:11:33
And I think we get very caught up as creative people by looking so I look at you and I go, Oh my god, Alex Ferrari has done all this stuff. And he just keeps, he keeps making stuff and he keeps putting, I've got to do that too. If I don't do that I'm not successful. Meanwhile, my book, the three worlds of spinata is like Zen and call me and that's who I am. That's a different winner.

Alex Ferrari 1:11:52
We're both very different energies. But like I look at someone like Gary Vaynerchuk, right. I love Gary Vee. I look at Gary Vee. I'm like, Oh man, I gotta do what more like Gary Vee is doing. I gotta get out there. I got to put more stuff. I like Tim Ferriss, I gotta do more stuff like Tim Ferriss and what he's doing. Yeah. But I, it's great to be inspired by other people. But at the end, at the end of the day, the race is with yourself. Always. Exact. Exactly. Now, can you tell me the book that had the biggest impact on your life or career? Wow.

Matthew Kalil 1:12:25
Hmm. That's a really good question. Sure. Okay. You know, what is? I think it is this. It's very bizarre, but I'm just gonna go with it. Is this really the book? I think it is? Okay, as far as Franz Kafka is the trial,

Alex Ferrari 1:12:49
okay. Okay. Sure.

Matthew Kalil 1:12:52
It's really weird. I'm just gonna, so so the reason is, I read that when I was really young, I was like, she's under like, eight 616 17. And I read this book. And I had no idea what it was. I didn't know what it was. I knew it was great. And I knew that it was like, I knew was a mystery. I had no idea what was going on. But I was fascinated by it. I was fascinated by the tone. And I loved being lost in that space of not knowing what it was. So I've kind of constantly looked at stories, I think, from that place onwards, in a sort of almost literary analysis kind of way to try and figure stories out. And so I think actually, that book, getting that book and reading it at a young age, I was I was too young for it. It kind of like

Alex Ferrari 1:13:41
Sir, I'm too I'm too young. I'm too young for it, sir. Please, we're all we're all too young. Too young. We're all too young for coffee. Maybe I'd at you could start.

Matthew Kalil 1:14:00
Exactly. Exactly. So I'm gonna go with that. Even though there are other books that popped into my head. But I think to be honest, that's probably Yeah, that's a great that's, it made me want to solve puzzles, which I think is my story. My Yeah, my story brain.

Alex Ferrari 1:14:13
That's awesome. Now, what is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film business or in life

Matthew Kalil 1:14:26
it links to what we were talking about earlier. And it's, I'm still learning it. Definitely, almost every day. And it's just I am enough.

Alex Ferrari 1:14:42
Yeah, I've heard that before. On the show. Many people have said that same thing. It's a great, great lesson.

Matthew Kalil 1:14:48
And I'm actually thinking of almost changing and just going I am yeah, not the enough because the enough has got a judgment to it. Mm hmm. And it's just, I happen That's an impossible lesson. But I'm not.

Alex Ferrari 1:15:03
It's very, it's very zen. It's very deep. And I agree with you 110%. Sir, if you can, if you can learn to be it to be in that space within yourself and like, look, I'm comfortable in my own skin. I am. Period is such a powerful place to be as not only a human being but as an artist. Oh, that's when the greatest artists, mainly some of the greatest artists may I mean, from people who just don't know who they are, and they don't care about anybody. Look at all the greats. Look at all the great writers. Look at Hemingway. Like Hemingway Shakespeare look at you know, King, all these guys. All of them. They just know who they are. They don't care about anybody else. And they just like, I'm just gonna do this.

Matthew Kalil 1:15:51
And and you know, what's amazing is and you can feel they're not coming from a place of arrogance. No, not like I am I am this I am that. It's like, just I am I'm doing this thing. And this is what I'm doing. And it's amazing. And we don't even say it's amazing. It's just I'm doing this thing. And like Lynch is, you know, he's a monster. He's just Lynch's doing Lynch

Alex Ferrari 1:16:10
Oh, man, does he do

Matthew Kalil 1:16:12
you ever know what I mean? This is it. I mean, Twin Peaks. Season three. I'm like, when I watched that, I felt just like I did when I was 18. Reading the trial. It was like, wow. And I was you know, it was a good it was a good feeling, though. But he does he does he just he's just in that and that's it. Just the I Am.

Alex Ferrari 1:16:29
And just to throw out a quick a quick plug. David Lynch is going to have a masterclass in 2019. Ah, amazing. So everyone listening, you got to indie film hustle.com. And I'll have a link for it there. But I just heard about it. Like yesterday, I was like, Oh my God, I want to hear David Lynch talk about his creative process. I've seen his documentary. He meditates. costumey. I love man. He's just such an amazing human being. And boy, does he, if he if there's a t shirt that says I am Boy, that man has it, and then some. Yeah. Okay, so, three favorite films of all time. Three of your favorite films of all time.

Matthew Kalil 1:17:12
Okay. Ah, do you? I knew you were gonna ask us. This is the worst question in the world. But I'm gonna try and answer it. Okay. So, you know, it's gonna be really sad, because I'm not gonna mention any Lynch films, just because but there's so many of them that I would put in there. But I'm not going to do it. Because what I've thought of is with this question, because I knew it was coming because I've listened to your podcast before. So I was like, okay, you know what? It's gonna be almost like when I was really young, I watched on VHS cassette, and they just left such an impression on me. So in my book, I've got this list where, where, where, where, where we use the external sources well to find your theme, and I list the top 10 movies that have influenced me and asked the reader to do the same and from that you find the themes you're interested in. It's a nice exercise worth trying but with this one, I'm going to say okay, the first one is The Blues Brothers.

Alex Ferrari 1:17:55
Love The Blues Brothers. Love the black brothers man they're amazing.

Matthew Kalil 1:18:01
First Movie I'm just like, I can recite that movie back with my brother and I we can just do the lion's mane we can just like for like just like that like like it's really uncanny I can watch the thing in silence probably and like say all the lines Sure. I love the the humor I love the acting I love the comedy pacing you know the pacing is it's basically like a big blue song. You know the pacing in the editing is

Alex Ferrari 1:18:26
it's a genius. It's genius. Yeah, I love them all sequence alone. Them All sequence along with the cars is just in the Spielberg cameo. I mean, come on. That was great.

Matthew Kalil 1:18:41
Later on in life, I watched it.

Alex Ferrari 1:18:44
Is that like a 19? Is that like a 19? Well, when was that movie made in 70 in the setting that was the 70s or 80s 80s 80s, early 80s. So that's early at Spielberg you know all go like you know, geeky and like with the glasses used was great.

Matthew Kalil 1:19:00
Great. Looks like the main character from Ready Player One. Pretty

Alex Ferrari 1:19:05
much pretty much. Pretty much pretty much all right, the second movie. Okay, cool.

Matthew Kalil 1:19:09
So maybe I'm gonna have to go with something again. It's really weird and out there you might wetter. So it's surfing movie called Big Wednesday?

Alex Ferrari 1:19:19
Of course. Yeah, of course. That's that's the director of Emily's. Yeah, of course.

Matthew Kalil 1:19:24
Yeah. Yeah. So so this is like after Apocalypse Now, which is what I could put in there as well. So I'm sneaking out the movies anyway. But, you know, makes this movie about, you know, buddies living and surfing together spanning you know, many years. And it's just like, I watched when I was younger. And it's just there's something about that film.

Alex Ferrari 1:19:43
I just, I super love it. I

Matthew Kalil 1:19:45
love to watch it again and again and again. I love you know, I think Tarantino once said about that film surface don't deserve this film, which is like,

Alex Ferrari 1:19:53
I get I get I get what he's saying. I get what he say. And the third one,

Matthew Kalil 1:19:58
okay. Should one. Okay, again, I'm gonna go with movies that I watched when I was younger on VHS. And that's North by Northwest. Oh, yeah, of course. So okay. Yeah, yeah. So it's like it's kind of Hitchcock. But what happened is the reason that it's so important for me is that, so in the movie, I mean, it's kind of a spoiler alert, but not really is like the first 10 or 15 minutes of the film, the the sort of setup phase is this guy, you know, most of this place and he gets almost killed. And you know, you kind of get put in a car and he gets tossed off a cliff. And then he goes to the police station, and he says, no, no, this is what happened to me. He brings them back to the house, and everything's been cleaned. And it looks like it looks like he's insane. Like, all of the stuff that happened to him hasn't happened. And that's VHS tape that I had in those days ended. Oh, so I watched first 15 minutes of the movie. And I didn't know what happened. Oh, my God. So then. Yeah. So later on in life, when I watch the rest, I was like, okay, and then I and then I kind of Yeah, and then I just loved it. Yeah. So I still, I still really enjoyed. It's one of those films that I could watch, again, the crop duster sequence, you know, that's just like, I can watch that crop duster sequence where you know, he's running away from the car, I can watch it again and again and again. But yeah, there's many other movies and I would love to choose, I would love to choose them. But those are the I think those are the three that had a real effect on me when I was younger.

Alex Ferrari 1:21:20
Awesome. And now where can people find you and your work? Now, where can people find you?

Matthew Kalil 1:21:26
Oh, the easiest place is probably the three wells.com my website and on that you got links to my everything my Facebook pages, my Instagram pages. Those are probably the easiest. I've got YouTube channels and stuff on I've got a podcast as well. The three wells podcast where we interview local, South African at the moment screenwriters, but also we're going internationally about the creative processes. So yeah, if you just Google the three wells, you'll find stuff, but you also start calm, it's probably the best place. And then to get hold of the book. It's everywhere. It's on Amazon. It's on me, wherever you want to find it should be in your local bookstores. And I And also, Michael Visser productions, their websites mwp.com. And so you can be on there. But yeah, I suppose homepage, the three wells.com.

Alex Ferrari 1:22:14
Matthew, it has been an absolute pleasure talking to you, man, thank you so much for coming on the show and dropping some major knowledge bombs on the tribe today. So thank you, man. Thanks, addicts. I told you it would be epic. I want to thank Matthew for coming on the show and dropping major, major major knowledge bombs on the tribe today. And you know, getting those creative juices flowing is not always easy. And by using this technique, you really can get things jumpstarted very, very quickly. So I want to thank Matthew from the bottom of my heart as well for writing this book, and putting this kind of information out there for filmmakers, screenwriters and storytellers to have as a resource to getting their stories out into the world. And if you want links to the book, and everything that Matthew is doing, please head over to indie film hustle.com forward slash BPS zero 32 for the show notes. And if you haven't already, please head over to screenwriting podcast.com And leave us a good review on iTunes. It really really helps to show out a lot. And if you want to see the video podcast version of this episode and see Matthew and I actually talk live on screen. It is available on indie film hustle.tv I will leave the link in the show notes. And as always keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you soon. Thanks for listening to the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay.com That's B u ll e t e r o f s CR e n PLA y.com


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BPS 031: How to Break into Television Writing with Steven Vitolo

Have you ever wondered what it takes to break into a network television writer’s room? Then this episode is for you. Today’s guest is Steven Vitolo and he did just that. His latest written episode is on the hit ABC show Black-ish. Steven has over 10 years of experience working in writer’s rooms, most recently as a script coordinator on the TV series Black-ish, where he co-wrote the episode “Dream Home”.

Steven Vitolo also is the CEO and founder of Scriptation, the script reading and annotating app for film, television, and video production. Steven developed Scriptation after seeing first-hand the staggering amount of paper that gets consumed onset and is dedicated to promoting sustainable practices that inspire productions to go paperless.

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Alex Ferrari 0:35
I'd like to welcome to the show Steve Vitolo. How are you doing, brother?

Steve Vitolo 3:23
I'm good. Thanks for having me.

Alex Ferrari 3:24
Thank you, man for coming on board. I've I don't know much about the television world and television writing overall

Steve Vitolo 3:31
happy to fill you in.

Alex Ferrari 3:32
So that's why you are on the show. I know. Exactly. So I'm, I'm dying to hear about all the inner workings of network shows in writers rooms and all that kind of good stuff. But first of all, how did you get into the film business?

Steve Vitolo 3:47
Well, I went to Boston University and graduated college human communication that a film and TV degree so did that whole thing. And as far as the actual degree? How useful is it? Not at all? Has anyone ever asked you in this industry to show you that? Oh, no one's no one's like, Oh, you got you know, here's where it does help. There. It helps in the connections that you make while you're there. So for example, I before I moved out to Los Angeles, I stayed at home for a year just to save money. So I could move out to Los Angeles to eventually blow that all in like three to six months, obviously. But, but where it where it really helped is that there was a contingency of people that moved out right after college. And they all got the crappy jobs that no one wanted to get. So there were all PDAs and interns and things like that. So there was such a big network at BU of current people and also alumni. So that's where it really helps you but no one's looking at your GPA for a film job and seeing what school You want to, although maybe maybe if you're a Harvard graduate that, you know, you kind of have a leg up anywhere in any industry.

Alex Ferrari 5:08
Really? Do you think Harvard film school really gonna open the doors too much?

Steve Vitolo 5:12
Well, it doesn't certain writers rooms for sure.

Alex Ferrari 5:16
Oh, no. And writers room is I actually saw that documentary about the Harvard Lampoon. And and those guys, it's almost like a club, a fraternity. If you're in the Lampoon, you automatically cut the line in a lot of ways.

Steve Vitolo 5:31
Yeah, that is true. I'm not all the time. But they have a big leg up, and they'll get meetings and they'll get signed and things like that. So if you're going to go to Harvard, yeah, you should put that on your resume.

Alex Ferrari 5:48
No, I mean, I went to Full Sail Film School in Orlando, and not once. Has anyone ever asked me in the entire time I've been doing this? Can I see your degree?

Steve Vitolo 5:57
Right? Yeah. I mean, you hope you get good training, and you're able to do what you want to do. I mean, I think if you're going to film school, you probably have an A, I don't think anyone go to film school is like, I don't know what I'm going to do. But usually when you go there, it's like, okay, I want to direct I want to write on produce, or maybe when do all those things. And hopefully, you get the training at the school to do that. And then you know, when you move out, some of your friends or schoolmates will be there helping you and then it's a connections game. Mm hmm. It really is. It really is. And Italian game, hopefully,

Alex Ferrari 6:31
it will, the talent is its has unfortunately, sometimes it's still like the lower, lower, lower on the totem pole sometimes. But a lot of times, it's like those connections do get you in the door, but you have to stay in the door. Exactly. And that's where the talent and experience and things come in. And

Steve Vitolo 6:49
you're you also have to get your foot in the right door. When I saw when I moved out here, I was, you know, I take any job. So I started in reality television, and award shows. My very first pa job was on Jamie Kennedy's show. What it was called blowing up. Yeah, it wasn't.

Alex Ferrari 7:14
I love what you said that, like it's called Love went up.

Steve Vitolo 7:18
I know, sell it, sell it. I think it was on MTV. I've really bad memory. But I think it was an MTV show. And I remember the first day I was there. My job was to hold an umbrella because we're outside. So my job was to hold an umbrella over Jamie Kennedy. So he wouldn't get sunburned.

Alex Ferrari 7:37
Nice as opposed to the star. So that's not bad.

Steve Vitolo 7:41
I know. And that so that was the glamorous I it was, you know, it's funny, I had that I got that job. It was like my second day there. And you know, my friend at college was like, Hey, you want to be a PA for this thing? And it's like, Great glamour is everything. And then yeah, that's my job.

Alex Ferrari 7:59
So from there, how do you parlay that into the next stages of your career?

Steve Vitolo 8:03
Um, yeah, so I kind of was a PA for a while, and I was working in reality and live event shows. I eventually, because I did a couple of, you know, Pa jobs like hearing there just for a couple days, because I didn't really have like a full time pa job. It's like, take a gig here, take a commercial there, that sort of thing. I eventually got on the Academy Awards as a PA,

Alex Ferrari 8:32
see, I wouldn't, I would have killed for a job like that coming up, I would have killed for that.

Steve Vitolo 8:35
It's a it's a it was a great experience. I mean, it's not like they prep three to four months before. It's crazy how long they've prepped for this show, I had no idea. So I was just and when you're when you're a PA on that show, for the production office, and there are so many different departments that don't have their own PDAs you're doing everything for everyone. So you're really you know, an errand person. And so that was my my first, you know, quote unquote, steady pa job, which was like three or four months. And then I actually kind of went back to that the next year and the year after, just because it worked out that I wasn't working at the time because that's, that's the life Right, of course. So, but eventually because I had that experience and because it it was you know, you're involved in so many different departments and it's it's kind of a harder pa job than most I would think I mean, I haven't had that many but it seemed like it. I was able to get a PA job on the pilot for the middle, which I wanted to get. I wanted to be a TV writer. So I wanted to get in scripted TV and a friend of mine who had moved on from pa found a job opening and referred me and I was able to get that job and it was actually not the not the middle show that was on for nine years or wherever it was on with Patricia Heaton. It originally started Ricki Lake. Yes. Wow. Yes, I was on that one. I think that was 2007. It started Ricki Lake, and a bunch of other actors and didn't get picked up. It went through a redevelopment they got Patricia Heaton, I think in 2009. And then it got picked up. And it went, but yeah, not many people know that, that it was not. It was not in its current form. And yeah, the script was actually pretty much the same. But yeah, I mean, actors, man, you got Patricia Heaton. And, and you're probably gonna go a little while Off, off off and running. Yeah, you're off and running. And what

Alex Ferrari 10:51
were you doing? What were you doing, and you just BPA still?

Steve Vitolo 10:55
Yeah, it was an office PA. And I was able to parlay that, you know, very luckily, into a writers pa job, which was, you know, people are dying to get into the writers office. And I was very lucky to get in there. Actually, my production coordinator was letting the PA go by picking names out of a hat, because she couldn't decide where to let go. And my name, of course, was the first name to get picked out of a hat. So like I was, because I'm on a pilot, you know, you're only working a certain period of time. And then, you know, pickups and all that stuff. So, so I was like, oh, first, my production coordinator said, I feel so bad. Because I was also like, brought on last. So I like the shortest amount of time. And she's like, but I'll find something for you. And I'm like, Okay, sure. And then, you know, to a day later, she got me an interview as a writers, PA on Hannah Montana. Nice. And the next day I was hired. And that was really a crazy whirlwind. And I was finally after a few years in the writers office, which you just want to get your foot in the door there. See what those people and it was a great show.

Alex Ferrari 12:14
So tell me, what is it like being in the writers room in the writers department of a network show?

Steve Vitolo 12:22
Um, well, you mean, as opposed to something that's a i You saying, as opposed to cable or just like,

Alex Ferrari 12:30
No, just didn't? Know, you've been specific about network TV? But like, no, Hannah Montana was cable, but I worked on network shows as well. I'm assuming they're not very different. Yeah,

Steve Vitolo 12:41
they're the same, especially now streaming services.

Alex Ferrari 12:44
Just there. How many scripted shows? Are there now? 250 300?

Steve Vitolo 12:48
A double that?

Alex Ferrari 12:50
Oh, is it? Is it? Is it really that much now? Like five or 600?

Steve Vitolo 12:53
It's, I believe it's over 600. Now. I think that, and that's just us. I mean, Netflix, I mean, you you turn on Netflix. And every week, there's something new that they've spent $25 million on Amazon, and Amazon. And you've had you had no idea you've never heard of it. Right? And like it has this star in it. Like why has a star in it? And and like it must have you must have skipped the trade that day. And it's like, oh, so they just made the show for like $25 million.

Alex Ferrari 13:23
I literally was just watching. I was on YouTube the other day, and I saw this trailer for like the outlaw King, starring Chris Pine. And it's like this Braveheart style. Epic on Netflix. Like I've never even heard of this. It's about Bruce. Oh, the something the Bruce was a Scottish guy. And it's basically Braveheart again, but different. And I'm like 10 episodes? No, no, no, no. This is not this not show. This is a movie. But there's shows like that that come up all the time. Like, who's this? How did this happen? Where did this come from? It's constant all the time. So it doesn't it doesn't surprise me that 600 episodes or six shows are being scripted right now. So it's a good time to be trying to get into the writers room.

Steve Vitolo 14:07
It's a good time to be working in the industry, for sure. There's definitely more opportunities. When I first started working, there was a certain cycle where you had pilot season, then you didn't work and then shows picked up and if it was canceled, which after Hannah Montana, I went to a show called Do Not Disturb. You probably haven't heard of it. It was the first show canceled that season. Of course. It was. We filmed six episodes, we aired three. And it was like it was at I live in Culver City. And it was at Fox and it was like a dream for me. I don't have to travel into Hollywood to work and like this is gonna be great. I'm gonna bike to work. And then two months later

Alex Ferrari 14:56
is there is there still a pilot season? I mean, there's some sort of pilot season now Like in January starts in January, right?

Steve Vitolo 15:02
Yeah. For network networks, they'll doing the pilot season. It starts around January, sometimes early pilots can go like November, December. But basically like, January, February, March, you shoot the pilots and then pick up so yeah, there's still that in a network. But with Netflix, they're not doing pilots. So they go straight to series. And with cable, because when I first started cable wasn't what it was either. Right now, there are so many shows on cable that SOS are all I mean, there's no set, seasonal thing for that their shows popping up all the time. So there's definitely more opportunity now than there was, you know, 10 years ago.

Alex Ferrari 15:41
So what is it like to be in a writers room and any kind of show?

Steve Vitolo 15:45
Yeah. Fantastic. It's fantastic. If you have nice writers and funny writers, and your boss is great. And I've had, I've been very lucky in that I've had great bosses. So my, I worked on blackish most recently, and Kenya Barris created the show. And he's just so brilliant. He'll just come in the room and just, you know, sort of Jedi mind everything into what the story needs to be. And, you know, a writer that has a clear voice is refreshing because you you know, you know exactly what he wants. And also Corey Nickerson ran the room. And she, you know, she's able to address notes and and just the way she can craft a scene and get us through the script, make it great and funny and get us out of there. So we're not working till two and three in the morning is a real talent. And everybody loves her for that. So if you're working in a writers room like that, it's great. You know, I've worked on some shows, when you work on a show, that's a first season multi camera show, for example. There's a lot. First of all, the multi camera schedule is not great for writers. It's fantastic for actors, but for writers, actors are often rehearsing at two, three, sometimes four. And then after that rehearsal in the writers room, you go back and you rewrite the entire script. So you're starting the rewrite at four or five. And it's not just your notes, but it's network and studio notes that you have to address. If something's really not working, it could be a problem. If it's a first season show, there's going to be a lot of scrutiny so that you can start working till you know one or two in the morning. But luckily, I haven't had that experience too much. And I've worked for great people like Kenyon Cory, Susanne Martin, I worked with, she created Hot in Cleveland, and a show called crowded Victor fresco, who I worked on for man up and Shawn saves the world. And now he's got Santa Clarita Diet on netflix. He's just a great guy, fantastic person, nicest boss you can have. So yeah, being a being in the room is great if people in the room are great.

Alex Ferrari 18:12
So what are like the politics of the room? Like you say, the show, the showrunner, the executive producer, pretty much is in charge. Right? Right. And then there is someone who is in charge of the room underneath them kind of like sometimes sometimes, or sometimes not.

Steve Vitolo 18:32
It depends on the show, usually on a multi cam show because of the way it's structured. The showrunner is running the room, because as writers on a multi camera show you do everything together. So you go down to the set together, you watch rehearsals together, you come back together. So the person who created the show, usually, the showrunner is running every aspect of it, if work on a single camera show, because it shot like a movie. Sometimes that person will be on set Sometimes. It depends how it's structured. And then there's a number two, so kind of the I don't know there's no like real title. But sure, the weekend later, basically kind of idea. And then yeah, and that person will be will be running the room. And then what happens is then the showrunner will come back to the room if they've been on set. And then we'll review everything that we've done in the room, kind of how it works.

Alex Ferrari 19:28
Now, how are ideas incorporated in an episode in the writers room? Like? Are people throwing out ideas to people go away, write an episode, come back and then get beat up? How does it work?

Steve Vitolo 19:40
Yeah, it's different. There's no one way to do it. But in general, everyone breaks a story together. That's how it's done. I would say for 90 something percent of writers rooms is that either someone comes in with a story or we just start pitching around funny. Live our comedy so we just start pitching around funny ideas or something that happened and if we could build a story around it, but but everybody, for the most part is sitting around a table breaking the story together. And it's done in stages. First, it's, you know, a rough outline or some notes. And then you make a more complete outline. And then on blackish, for example, we would all come up with the story together, we would have on whiteboards, we would write the scene, what happens in the scene and the jokes that we like. And it would be, you know, two boards full of the story, or sometimes three. And then we would give that to the writer. And the writer would turn that into an outline, the outline would be reviewed by the showrunner or some of the writers and the studio on the network, they would get notes, they would write a draft. And that draft then comes in to before it goes anywhere, the writers draft comes into the writers room. So it gets distributed to all the writers, the writers read it, make notes, and then we talk about the draft, and then we make changes in the room. So that's generally how it's done. It's not like a hard and fast rule. I've worked on shows, for example, crowded and Hot in Cleveland, we did it a little differently, where we broke the story together. And then we each took scenes. So all the writers would go home and they would write a scene, and then send it to the script coordinator, which was me. And I would put all the scenes together in a script, send it back out to everybody, everybody would read it, and then we'd discuss in the room. So that's how it's done sometimes, too. And on Hannah Montana. Stop me if I'm being boring.

Alex Ferrari 21:52
And I think everyone listening everybody, everybody listening wants to hear this stuff. So please continue.

Steve Vitolo 21:57
And on Hannah Montana, it was all room written. So I think that's the way it works on Chuck Lorre shows I've never been on one. But where everybody writes in the room, and then it's assigned to a writer afterwards.

Alex Ferrari 22:14
Okay, so everyone beats it beats the story down or breaks the story outlines and then they give it to one writer to like, go write the script.

Steve Vitolo 22:20
No, not for that one for for Hannah Montana and the Chuck Lorre shows, once you break the story, then the writer's assistant opens up a blank document in the room, and people are literally dictating the script. So it all gets written to get with everyone together in the writers room.

Alex Ferrari 22:38
That must be insane, though,

Steve Vitolo 22:40
kind of I mean, it, it works. I've seen it work on certain shows, it doesn't work on other shows. Like I don't think that would work on Blackish. Because it really like that show needs a point of view, yes to that. And it needs a writer to to sit with the material and really think through the story and scenes. But on a multi camera show, for example, when you're going beat by beat by beat. That's something that maybe is unnecessary. So it works much better, at least in a multi camera to have to be room written.

Alex Ferrari 23:17
Got it. Now you mentioned to you were script coordinator. Can you tell the audience what a script coordinator on a television network show does?

Steve Vitolo 23:26
Yes. And I'm so glad you said script coordinator and not script supervisor because pletely different fancy use nine out of

Alex Ferrari 23:33
10 so good to tell the difference between the script supervisor script coordinator.

Steve Vitolo 23:37
Sure, so script supervisor and script supervisors forgive me if I'm messing this up. But they are their onset. They they deal with continuity. They work with the director, they deal with timing and they get they make notes and give it to the editor. So they're on set. They're really important there with the director and the writer and making sure all they got all the shots and things like that. So that's what the script supervisor does. A script coordinator is not on the set a script coordinator is and it's it's kind of different comedy and drama. But the main job of the script coordinator is to be the liaison between the writers office and the production. So your job is to get the script in production shape. So scene numbers, scene headings, you deal with legal and clearance issues. So once a script gets gets distributed, it goes to the clarinets department and legal and they'll say what you can and what you can't say. And also your so I also want to say the liaison you are also dealing with the departments and helping them with clearances as well. So art departments will say, hey, we need to sign for this thing. Can you clear these five names? So that's a job as a script coordinator on a drama, that's mostly what they do their script coordinators are in an office, they get so many revisions on a drama, that that's kind of their whole job is to is to work, you know, in the script in that way, on a comedy a lot of times, and has been my experience, always, script coordinators also act as a writer's assistant. So there they are in the room working in the script, or taking notes when people are outlining or things like that.

Alex Ferrari 25:32
So what is it a writer? What does a writer's assistant do, then?

Steve Vitolo 25:36
writer's assistant, is responsible for taking notes. Doing some research may be working in the script for rewrites. So once a writer brings in a script, and we all talk about it, the writers assistant will take the notes that we've just talked about. And then once we go back into the script and room, write it together to do the, to do a pass, the writer's assistant will work in the script, changing the text. So you need you need typing skills for that. And you need knowledge of script writing software to be able to hop around in the script. And yeah, I mean, it's, it's not so easy. It's, it's something that you definitely get the hang of, and it's a skill, knowing who to listen to, because you get a lot of voices coming at you. So being able to get all the pitches down, and know which ones the show run or wants and kind of who to listen to in the writers room and who to definitely get. That's a that's a writer's assistant skill.

Alex Ferrari 26:41
Now, you, you've been going through all of this, you've been a script coordinator, you're a writer's assistant, and done all this kind of really heavy lifting throughout your career. And then all of a sudden, they point to you and say, you're going to get to write an episode. What was that, like?

Steve Vitolo 27:00
Amazing.

Alex Ferrari 27:02
And that's the end of the show. Thank you know, it's

Steve Vitolo 27:04
worked out different on different shows that happened on on blackish, where I was there for, like a year and a half. I didn't expect to get a script my first season. But the second season, I you know, it was one of those shows where you don't have to ask for it. Because that's been the culture of the show where they'll give scripts to the writers assistants, if they think the writers assistant or script coordinator is good. And yeah, on blackish, I had heard rumors around it, and then they made an announcement in the room. And when you're an assistant, the writers applaud for you. That happened. That also happened on Hot in Cleveland, where they made an announcement in the room, which was super great. And then on crowded. I had worked with Suzanne Martin on HUD and Cleveland. So when I was hired as a script coordinator on the new show, she was kind enough to let me write a script for the show as part of being a script coordinator. But yeah, it's it's a, it's a great feeling. And the great thing about blackish and sort of the humbling thing is that I was writing it with the other writers assistant on the show, and it was the finale of the season. And it was good episodes.

Alex Ferrari 28:25
That's a good episode.

Steve Vitolo 28:27
And it was a tough one. In the last episode of a four episode arc. We're getting separated and we're coming back together.

Alex Ferrari 28:35
Yes, it was a brutal, brutal Ark was brutal was a

Steve Vitolo 28:39
watch show is a perfect word. It was brutal. And it was necessary. And people didn't really like it.

Alex Ferrari 28:48
Nope, nope. Nope. did not like it. Thumbs up. I'm gonna be honest with you. i My wife and I are going, they're going too far. They need to stop this. I have enough troubles in my world. I don't need this.

Steve Vitolo 29:01
I know what that was a lot of the feedback on the Twittersphere Yeah, people was bawling. So it was bold. It was bold. And Kenya really wanted to show that because they never showed that thing. You know that that kind of thing on The Cosby Show. And he felt it was kind of, you know, that that's life. You know, you kind of go through these ups and downs. Yep. And but yeah, we were we were tasked in the in the writers assistant task with writing the finale. And it was one of those things to where it was obviously an important episode. They're getting back together, which is great. But also it was at the end of the season. So like we've done 24 episodes and like everyone's burnt out. So when we got the outline if you know we had in the writers system, we had some room to play with, because we knew like we knew the story wanted to tell and we had the outline and then like we noticed like okay, Like act three isn't as broken. And there's no tag, it's kind of up to us. So we can play a little bit.

Alex Ferrari 30:08
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Steve Vitolo 30:20
And, like, a lot of times when you get outlines, in writers rooms, it's like paint by numbers. And this we actually had some room to do some things. And luckily, we succeeded on most of them. And it wasn't a major rewrite coming in. And our tag, I'm happy to say, went all the way through. Shockingly, it was I don't know if you remember that the tag but it was pops in and Ruby in the, in the shared home that Trey was no longer there anymore. And they, they thought they should get it on? Yes, I do remember that? Yes. Yeah. So we're so happy that that sell through. Because a lot of times when you bring a script in, it looks stuff gets changed. That's the nature of the beast. And it's it's 99% going to get changed for the better. It's better when you have you know, 1015 writers that are smarter than you think here's how we can improve. So yeah, when something when something sticks past the goalie, and they're like, Yeah, okay, we'll go with this. That was pretty cool.

Alex Ferrari 31:23
Now, what does it what does it do for your career working on a show like blackish in such a pivotal episode as well? I mean, has it opened doors that weren't open before?

Steve Vitolo 31:33
No, not really. Fair enough. Fair enough. Yeah. I mean, you know, maybe in the future, I mean, it's a good credit, for sure. Sure. And as far as, you know, Writers Guild residual goes, it's gonna be fantastic. Because it's a syndicated show, and it reruns and so, but yeah, as far as like, agents, managers knocking on my door, not so much doesn't really happen. I would think you would,

Alex Ferrari 32:03
you would think well, that I wanted to kind of bring that up, because I want to make sure everyone listening knows the truth. Oh, they know the truth. Like all of a sudden, like most people like, Oh, you just wrote the season finale for blackish a huge show on ABC. You know, they must be just rolling up to your door with cash. Waiting for you for your like, what show would you like to run,

Steve Vitolo 32:26
sir? Yeah, exactly. No, it doesn't really work like that. Unfortunately, I was I was the most naive person coming out to Los Angeles. So I would have totally like, like, I, my idea was, hey, I'm gonna write a script for Two and a Half Men and show it to the showrunner and he's gonna hire me. Yeah, now, which is the exact wrong thing. Anyone listening out there? Don't Don't do that. Don't ever do that. Don't ever do that. What you want to do just for aspiring writers? Write a pilot. Some? Well, it's okay to write a spec for a show that everybody knows. And now that was kind of okay to do. Back then when I was writing specs. And there were only 20 shows? Like, I look, I wasn't, you know, I didn't I didn't start in the 50s. Right. And 10 years ago, there weren't that many shows. And people would watch it. So you know, so writers would write a spec for like, so I wrote a spec for two and a half men. And anyone who read it had seen Two and a Half Men and understood the characters and understood, like the voice of the show. Sure. But now, like, you'll write for a show no one's ever heard of, or no one's ever seen. So that's probably not the best idea to write a spec for a show, unless maybe you're doing monitor family, because what everybody's seen that show. But nowadays, write a pilot, and, and make it good. And get some good feedback and rewrite it and rewrite and rewrite it and try and do something with it.

Alex Ferrari 33:57
I mean, my experience in television from the directing standpoint is that it is a very much of a club. Because the it is a good job. If you get on a show and you get on a good show. Even if you do you know, as a director, at least, even if you do five, six episodes a year. You're good, like financially financially, you're doing very well.

Steve Vitolo 34:20
And a residual. So you're doing good. You're doing

Alex Ferrari 34:24
good, right? So it's so difficult to break in. I'm assuming that's similar to the writers because I do all the writers get residuals off everything or how does that work?

Steve Vitolo 34:34
writers get residuals on the on the shows that they write. And I don't know, I know the creator gets residuals on every offer on everything. But I don't know what other levels or how that works. I think only if you have points in the show. sure that you get you get that but yeah, for writers it's it's the episode you write and if it airs again in primetime You get half your script fee, which is fantastic, which is fantastic. And then you could get I mean, if you're a syndicated show, you could get a big check just because they made a big syndication deal. So so like

Alex Ferrari 35:12
the guys from friends and Seinfeld says friends and Seinfeld are doing okay. Yeah. All those writers in that writers room they did all

Steve Vitolo 35:20
right. Yeah, I mean, even like the I knew a writer that worked on The Cleveland Show and he was like, he said to me here, I want to show you something. This was he's like, I know you guys are, you know this. He's like, I know you're, you know, getting your first scripts and but I want to show you what it could be. And he kind of showed his Writers Guild residuals, and they were

Alex Ferrari 35:39
fantastic from from the Cleveland Show, the canceled on The Cleveland Show,

Steve Vitolo 35:43
and like some other shows, but yeah, I mean, like a show goes into syndication. Not even like a super successful show. Yeah, it could be pretty good. It's a nice career. And the Writers Guild benefits when you retire great, too. So

Alex Ferrari 36:00
can I ask you a question and I'm gonna be that guy. What is the range of like money that you get off of residual so people I'm in life standing?

Steve Vitolo 36:09
I'm not the right person to ask. Okay. Just because I've, you know, I've written three

Alex Ferrari 36:15
checks. I mean, yet?

Steve Vitolo 36:17
Yeah, it's hard to tell. I mean, one was, one was a syndicated show Hot in Cleveland was a syndicated show. Yeah, that has not been as good as you want it to be. Right. But finger you know, I'll just throw out numbers. Sharon is these are these could be totally wrong right out of the air. So let's say on a half hour network show, your you get paid if you write it if it's you know, story by written by you. You you've written the script, it's your name only. That for half our network that's $26,000. Bad. If it gets rerun in primetime, you get half that fee. You get $13,000. Okay. Okay, so there,

Alex Ferrari 36:59
that's good. Right there. That's good. Right there. You're doing really good. You're doing

Steve Vitolo 37:03
good. If it airs again, in primetime, it's probably half that. So maybe it's like 6500 or something. Okay. And then your guess is as good as mine. On syndication? On syndication? Yeah. I mean, you could get I mean, no one, like I've gotten a syndication check for on Cleveland. And I wrote, it was a cable show, and I wrote half the episode. And the syndication check was, like, not not even half of what the original fee was. So it wasn't it, I felt like that check should have been more, right.

Alex Ferrari 37:42
I mean, I always feel checks should be more, but that's just me. Anytime I get a check, like this check should be for more. I mean, well, I don't want to be the crass guy asking about money. But it was just, it's a lot of people out there who just don't even understand what people make. And there's all this information. A lot of this information could just find the Writers Guild Writers Guild.

Steve Vitolo 38:03
Yeah, if you if you go online, and do WG a schedule of minimums, it's right there, you can find out everything that you'll make for TV and for features too. But I don't even think the real. I mean, that's not even the real money is in the script. I mean, it's great. It's like bonus money. If you're, if your producer level or CO EP, I'll forgive your then forget. But even if your story editor, so again, you can look at this schedule and minimums. But if you're a TV writer, or a network show, if you're a, if you're a staff writer, it's something like three plus 1000 a week, if you're a story editor, it could be five 6000. So it's, that's the real money. If you can get on some of these shows, writers make a good living. I have not been a staff writer, or a story editor or anything on a show. So I don't have that experience. Sure. But it's that's the money.

Alex Ferrari 39:00
That's that's where that's But as always, you get paid to be there. And then you also get paid per episode that you write.

Steve Vitolo 39:06
Yes, that's just it's however, if you're a staff writer, and they're, they're just never gonna change this. You don't get a script fee, which is insane. I think just know, buddy. The people that are fighting just don't seem to care, because they're so upper level. But yeah, so for example, if, as a script coordinator, let's say you write a you got to freelance episode you get paid $26,000 is for the script. If you're a staff writer on the show, that's making 3000 plus a week and you get a script. You don't get that script fee. You get residuals, but not script fee. And it's for I don't know why, but it's still around. And no one seems to ever want to pay for that. It's, it's crazy. That's insane.

Alex Ferrari 39:48
Yeah, that's insane. Yep. So with all of this now, you've told us all this kind of work that you've done over the over the course of your career, you've then decided to jump into the technology game and come and invented an app called script notation to to fulfill a need that is desperately needed in the in the world of film and television. Can you talk a little bit about script station?

Steve Vitolo 40:15
Yeah, so being a script coordinator, I was the one responsible for sending out scripts and script revisions. And I come from the TV world. So I was working on this, it was a pilot, we had a, we it was a weird production schedule, we had 10 days from the table read to when we started shooting. And every single night, we're putting out a full 50 page script to 100 plus people. So I get the script together, give it to the PA, they make copies handed out to people, people make notes on them. The next day, same process all over again, people are rewriting their notes on the new drafts. And they're dumping the old draft in the trash, or hopefully the recycle bin. And that's a crazy process that we've been doing for years. And at that time, everyone on this show, at least in the writers office was feeling this is an incredible waste of paper. And I was I was thinking that too. And not only is it a waste of paper, but productivity, where you get one draft, you make all your notes, whether whatever department you're in, if you're a writer, if you're a set decorator, if you're in sound, if you're a director, you make a lot of notes, if you're a director, same thing with a DP. And you're making all of these notes on a script that is going to be obsolete in 24 hours. So I knew that we could annotate on an on a tablet. So people had iPads at the time and iPhones. And you could you could use Adobe write to you know, annotate PDF document. But the real problem was once you annotate the draft, so let's say you have a table draft of a script, and then you get your production draft, how can you move all of your notes and annotations from the table draft into the production draft? And that was the problem that we're trying to solve? And I hired a developer, I said, Can you do this? And he said, I think so. And that's what kind of launched discrimination we, we figured out this problem. You know, after two or three years, it took us a while to figure out how to transfer notes from a draft to a new draft and do so intelligently where we could tell you what change and if you handwrite, a note that's on the top of page three, and now is on the bottom of page two, we can move that handwritten note in that same spot. So yeah, that's, that's how we kind of came up with it. And, you know, we put it in the app store. And it's been pretty successful. And we've had directors that that tell us, it saves them four to five hours a week. That's a lot. And that's four to five hours in BS work. That they don't, is when you're directing what you want to spend your time recopy notes and figuring out what changed, or you want to see how it's going to look and get the right performances and set up the shot. Right. So that's the time that that we're saving. And it's it's been really great that not only have people on the crew been able to use it, but also agents and managers and studio executives are using it to because they've got a ton of scripts and that are carrying around a giant binder, they've got a tablet,

Alex Ferrari 43:38
in brain, of course, it's it's insane. When I'm directing myself, I have to carry around this huge binder full of you know, and I tried to put my notes in and it's, it's such a pain in the butt. And I was like, this is such an old fashioned way of doing things in today's world. But now your script scripts, as has alleviated that pain?

Steve Vitolo 43:58
Well, on your next production, you're going to need to use it

Alex Ferrari 44:01
obviously I know somebody's in the in the company. So hopefully there'll be no no. So so how much does it cost? Where can people get it?

Steve Vitolo 44:11
Well, I kind of have an announcement to share about that. So we script station for the past almost two years has been in the iOS App Store that you can get an iPad iPhone for 999. And what you get with that is you get annotation you also get no transferring, you got another feature called actor highlighting, which is useful for actors that table reads because instead of manually highlighting all their lines, they tap a button and boom, all their lines are highlighted genius. Also useful for sound mixers, which we found out I didn't know I built it for actors and then sound mixer say hey, we highlight lines too. And you do X, Y and Z. So yeah, so script has been in the store for 999. You get all those features and a couple other things. We're gonna make that free one. Yeah. So the core script tation, core of sortation, you're actually going to be able to get for free and use as much as you want with as many scripts as you want and transfer notes as many times as you like, no limit on,

Alex Ferrari 45:20
okay? And then what's the, what's the rub? They know you have to be a business. So what

Steve Vitolo 45:29
good to be free,

Alex Ferrari 45:31
it sounds too good to be true, is this should I just buy real estate with no money down.

Steve Vitolo 45:39
So what we will be offering is we're going to be offering script tation Pro, which is going to include cloud storage, and will be able to actually sync all of your script tation, metadata, actor highlights, no transferring deletions, etc. In the cloud, you can access it device to device, we also have our document editor, which lets you add facing pages to write notes. And actually, in the note transfer, this is really cool. So if you're a director, and you're at a table read, and you make all of your notes, and you insert shots and diagrams, and then you get a shooting draft, you can actually transfer all of those inserted pages into the new draft as well. The way the algorithm works is actually find the like page and then moves that page there. So you really don't have to do any work when translating notes. That's amazing. And we're also offering a reader mode for the iPhone, where sometimes it's hard to read scripts on your iPhone as a PDF, and we're going to make that easier for you. That's actually being included in the free version. But that's that's going to be launched with Scriptcase. Pro. And then we've got a couple of other features that we're launching with pro there. And yeah, that's

Alex Ferrari 46:57
that is that is the rub in a good rub it is sir. And then what and where can people find the app on just on the App Store?

Steve Vitolo 47:05
Sure, yeah, you can search, go to the App Store, search for script tation. It'll be there. You can also go to the Windows store and get some rotation. It's available on any sort of Windows device that you have.

Alex Ferrari 47:16
Fantastic, man. And I'm going to ask you a few questions that I asked all of my guests. What advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today?

Steve Vitolo 47:26
Right.

Alex Ferrari 47:27
Fair enough. You're next. I'm joking.

Steve Vitolo 47:31
Yeah, I'll elaborate a little but it's really simple. If if you want to be a writer, right. And if you have no outside responsibilities, like you're a single guy living in a city, right, because maybe you'll get a girlfriend, maybe you'll get married, maybe we'll start a family, maybe all bills you'll have to pay, and then you won't be able to do that anymore. So if you can do it, write write as much as you can write, rewrite. Find a group of friends who don't send your script to everyone to get notes, and then try and appease everybody. Find a group of people that you trust, you trust their opinion, you trust their taste. Three people for Max, send that to them, get their thoughts become a better writer with that.

Alex Ferrari 48:16
Now, can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career?

Steve Vitolo 48:21
You asked that to everybody, everyone and oh my god. Dr. Stephen. Let's see the New York Times crossword. I think it doing crosswords makes you a smarter person. Fair enough. And yeah, I'd recommend everybody to you can. You don't have to get the New York Times to do it. You can actually they have a crossword app in the App Store. So get New York Times crossword start with Monday. Be really upset that you can't get the easy ones, but eventually you will.

Alex Ferrari 48:54
Fantastic. All right now What lesson took you the longest to learn whether in the film business or in life?

Steve Vitolo 49:01
Oh, man. There are so many things I have learned. I've been so naive in this industry.

Alex Ferrari 49:10
What took you the longest to

Steve Vitolo 49:12
learn? Patience? Probably.

Alex Ferrari 49:15
So that's a very popular answer. On my that's my answer to No, it's

Steve Vitolo 49:19
It's true, though. You know, you can't do everything at once. Plans are gonna I mean, you know, I've learned this a lot with rotation too. But you got to be able to pivot, whether in a company or in life. If things like, like patients, but at the same time, be willing to change what you're doing. And I don't know all about you know, be mindful of things and have a good attitude. These are like, what am I saying right now? But all of these things are Yeah, I mean, all go to yoga,

Alex Ferrari 49:56
meditate.

Steve Vitolo 49:58
Do all of those things. You can't do everything for everybody. You can't do everything at once. Sure. Do what you want to do, do what you know, is right. And hope that you succeed and have faith that you will.

Alex Ferrari 50:11
And what are three of your favorite films of all time?

Steve Vitolo 50:16
This is gonna sound so cliche go for it. It's okay. Because it's so of my time. I know. I was in college, so that's why it's gonna sound cliche. Sure. Um, office space.

Alex Ferrari 50:28
Now I love that movie. I really Yeah, really. It's a it's a brilliant piece of cinema. It really is.

Steve Vitolo 50:34
It really is. It is so perfect. In almost every way. It's so ahead of its time. It's so ahead of its time. It's just so Mike Judge is just so brilliant. That movie I could watch over and over again

Alex Ferrari 50:49
and hit that other one. He did a video Krasny or, Oh, Idiocracy, Idiocracy. Oh

Steve Vitolo 50:54
my god. Oh, you mean what's happening right now?

Alex Ferrari 50:56
Exactly like where we are in the world right now. It was the writer I saw the writer or read the writer like he was when I wrote this. I never thought that this would actually happen. Yeah, it is scary. Scary. That's that's a frightening movie to watch now while we're

Steve Vitolo 51:11
watching it right now we're all watching rolled watches this movie. Another movie just because I can't think of my favorite that I can just put on and watch is Midnight in Paris. I I love them. I love wish fulfillment movies. I wish more movies were like that because that's what I want to go to the cinema for. And so I there's just something you know, it's just comfort food for me to watch that movie. And when I was a kid growing up, Superman.

Alex Ferrari 51:41
The original Superman is so good. It's good. It created Donner created without donner. There is no Avengers. Agreed. I mean 100% There is no Batman. There's no Batman. There's nothing without Donner setting up the entire genre. He's the first one to do the genre and in theatrical environment. Oh, and

Steve Vitolo 52:02
making it feel real everything I mean, no way. I mean, that's sort of what Chris Nolan did with the Batman movies is make it feel like this could happen right and and just make it feel grounded. You know, Chris Nolan took it to the next level Batman Begins that's up there one of my favorite movies. Yeah, but yeah, Superman man that as a kid and and today Superman one and two, I should say. Yeah, those

Alex Ferrari 52:25
two together are I look at about three are holy God for I mean, let's not go there, though. I actually was a kid when three came on. I love three when I was like, you know, 10 voted on

Steve Vitolo 52:35
Yeah, to like Richard Pryor when I was. I don't want to look for oh, maybe I didn't even love for and I was 10 I was like that

Alex Ferrari 52:42
I was already a teenager by that time. And I even I could go this is not right. There's

Steve Vitolo 52:49
there's something there's some weird there's some don't like that guy's fingernails. Why

Alex Ferrari 52:53
is why? Why can you cut Superman's hair? This makes no sense. It makes no sense. I don't understand what you're doing. Did you ever see the Donner cut of Superman to

Steve Vitolo 53:06
it? Yeah, it's the best thing I it's the best thing i i have that DVD or maybe illegally downloaded it.

Alex Ferrari 53:12
Wow. It's amazing, though. But it's amazing. This was

Steve Vitolo 53:16
like it came out like 10 years ago. Something like that. Right? It not that oh, it probably

Alex Ferrari 53:19
within the last 10 years it came out. But the Donner right was so much better. They got rid of all that funky, throwing the Superman signal that turned into some saran wrap.

Steve Vitolo 53:30
Oh, that was That was crazy. Like, where

Alex Ferrari 53:32
did that come from? Like, Superman can't do that.

Steve Vitolo 53:36
Yeah. How did you even think of that? That is that.

Alex Ferrari 53:40
That's when they lost? They ran off the rails with that one. But when you go back to the Donner cut, you're like, Oh, this is what it was supposed to be. We could have had more of this. Right? Yeah, it wasn't for those damn producers, which should be a t shirt in Hollywood. But anyway. Now, um, let's see, where can people find you, man?

Steve Vitolo 54:01
Well, I'm on. I mean, I'm not really on the social networks. I'm only on it through my scripts can handle that. So but you can contact me through there. So at script tation app, on all the on Facebook, Instagram and Twitter. And yeah, if you want to contact me then send a message through any of those social media services.

Alex Ferrari 54:24
Steve, man, it's been an absolute pleasure talking to you, man. Thank you so much for dropping some knowledge bombs on the tribe today, man appreciate Yeah, man.

Steve Vitolo 54:30
This was fun. I hope it's useful.


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BPS 030: RAW TRUTH Revealed: Showrunning, Writing & Producing For HBO & SONY with Daniel Knauf

Today’s guest is writer and showrunner, Daniel Knauf. Daniel Knauf had a couple of small credits to his name—a TV movie here, a stint on Wolf Lake there—when he managed to sell the intricate Great Depression-era genre show Carnivale to HBO.

The series, an intricate blend of meticulously researched period detail and secret-history fantasy, purported to tell the tale of what happened when the last two “Avatars”—superpowered beings of light and darkness—met in the United States on the eve of World War II. The series attracted a cult audience that remains devoted to this day, but a mass audience wasn’t sure what to make of the program, and HBO canceled it after two seasons, saying the show’s story was finished, in spite of Knauf’s plan for a six-season run.

We go deep inside the writer’s room, what it takes to be a showrunner and many of his misadventures in Hollyweird!

Enjoy my conversation with Daniel Knauf.

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Alex Ferrari 1:20
I like to welcome to the show Daniel Knauf. Thank you so much for being on the show my friend.

Daniel Knauf 3:53
Oh, I'm happy to be here.

Alex Ferrari 3:55
So first, first off, you have well you have a very impressive career and resume. So we're going to get into a bunch of the stuff you've done. But first and foremost, how did you get started in the film industry?

Daniel Knauf 4:06
Crazy story that? Yeah, whenever I whenever I do seminars, and inevitably, it'd be like, how do I break into film? Which is funny anyway, because it's like what, you know, because there's larceny is kind of hard baked into the entertainment business. And so the language reflects it. So it's like, you don't hear people say, Well, how do I break into accountancy? Or how do I break into plumbing or destruction? You know, it's like, we got to do A, B and E to get into this business. So that question will come up and in in, it's like, I'm singularly unhelpful in a way. I mean, I was insurance broker until my mid 40s. I did that for like 20 to 23 years I ran a business and And while I was doing it, I was, I'd always want to be a screenwriter. And I'd studied, I'd studied creative writing in college and grown up in Los Angeles. And so I kind of had, then I love movies. I mean, it just, it was my favorite thing in it, but I have three kids, I had to raise them and I had to make money. And there was a certain, you know, lifestyle, I wanted to have a house and you know, be able to pay my bills and that kind of thing. So I kind of set it aside. Um, around the time I was 22 and got married, it was like, oh, yeah, this isn't grownups do. And then, around the time I was, by the time I was 27, I was actually going insane. I mean, I was, like, like, literally, like, I was not a happy kid. And, and, and sighs going through this crushing depression, and I started writing. And it brought me out. And I realized, yeah, um, this isn't something that I want to do. This is something I kind of have to do. I'm just, my brains wired this way. And I need to be doing something creative in order to, in order to, it's like a shark has to swim, you know, I have to do this thing. And I mean, so when people come to me seek I've always wanted, right, I think, Well, I've always wanted to be a bird. It's like, I don't have any choice. So it's a so I started doing that. And I focused on really developing my craft and writing screenplays and reading books about screenplays, you know, Synbio, Syd fields, books, screenplay. And other books that were some of them were useful. So when we're completely useless, taking some seminars, going to UCLA, UCLA Extension here in LA has some great classes. And in just basically focusing on learning the craft, and, and I, getting some mentors, I had a, I had two very good mentors. My first mentor was Chad Fisher, who wrote the last voice we met when I was in a workshop at UCLA, and ended up writing some scripts together. And, and she kind of took me under her wing and really, really taught me a lot. And then and then I reached, I hit. Like, I hit my 40s. And I said to myself, and I put it off. You know what? I told myself, this isn't happening. By the time I'm like, 40 I'm just gonna do something else. I'm start reading how write novels because it's sort of a young man's game. And you know, breaking in is, is any 4040 Something year all you know, slightly overweight. Be an EEG, I'll tell you is probably a lot easier when you're in your 20s. And I, I come from a long line of like, really sore losers, like, we're the guys who flipped the Monopoly board, he throw tennis practice at people, right? Yeah, my brother, my brother always says, His fate, one of his favorite things is, show me a good loser. And I'll show you a loser. So I just said, yeah, it's gonna take one more real run at this, it created a website called movies.com posted the first acts of all my scripts that I'd written up to that point. And, you know, by then I'd had some success I had, I did sell a script in the in 1993. That ended up being a movie for HBO called the blind Cestus as a Western, but then, nothing after that. It was like, yeah, it was like, Dead was nothing. It was, yeah, it was kind of like, you know, check EEG or, you know, bouncing this x 15 off of the stratosphere, you know, it's like, wow, it's coming in too hot. And, and so, I was really, you know, the customer slump. So I, I just created this website and put the stuff on and I got a call from a guy, router kale BOD, who worked for a guy named Scott wine and in Scott was an Emmy winning director. And he had told Robert, you know, I'm tired of reading doctors, lawyers, and cops show me something different. And Robert found the first act of Carnival. And he contacted me say, I'd like to read the rest of your pilot, and I'm thinking what pilot and I remember Oh, yeah, you know, I I've taken this crazy 200 Page screenplay that didn't work and thought maybe this isn't a feature and I I collapsed, the first act of a pilot. And so I showed it to him and I met with them and they were very, they were very helpful and they told me I needed to do a Bible I didn't know the Bible was in a, I did this Bible for Carnivale. And then we took it to HBO and all sudden it was like, they bought it. And, and, and I was executive producing, and in writing an HBO series, so I started my career at the very top of the heap I came in. And, you know, it was weird because it was like, nobody worked with me, I'd never done another television show, I had no reputation in the business, I just came out of like, left field, and I'm running an HBO series, and they're, you know, they only would have like, you know, four or five shows on at a time, it was pretty, you know, kind of a high up kind of position in it for somebody who was really a nobody to be in. And I mean, I actually got to a point I remember reading on on IMDb, there was like a rumor going around that I didn't exist, and that I was under a pseudonym for David Lynch, which was like really flattering, but not good for the brand. And so I did the show for two years, and I really kind of hung on by my fingernails. So it was a it was it was, it was a kind of a terrifying experience. Because it's shark tank in there. And, and just to answer your question, it's like to, for me to give advice to someone on how to get in, I can't really say, I come in, you know, I was a baby writer for a while, and I got a story editor job on another show. And then I, you know, built that up and I went, I didn't do the same trajectory, as most TV writers do. I mean, I know what that trajectory is he graduated from film school, you pull every every favorite you can get, and you try to get into the into a writers room. Whether you're in there as a office, Pa and you're bringing coffee, or whether you're writer's assistant, you're just taking notes. And that's really the way into TV writer, it's in no TV writing, it's really very much. It's, it's very much like the old, you know, like, getting into plumbing issue making back. Joining the guild, it's, it's, you know, the mine, I just I broke right through it. It's sort of the top now that we're way down ever since.

Alex Ferrari 12:26
So you said it was it was a shark tank? Can you explain a little bit about what was about that experience? That was the Shark Tank? Because I mean, you have a very unique story. You're right. Most people don't start off running an HBO series.

Daniel Knauf 12:41
Well, I wasn't running it.

Alex Ferrari 12:42
I mean, I mean, but you know what I mean? Like, exactly producing it,

Daniel Knauf 12:45
The first year run was running. But well, really, the main reason what it boils down to is, is there's a lot of money on the line. And they were putting a bet on an untested talent. And that's kind of terrifying for a major corporation,

Alex Ferrari 13:07
it was, it was like 4 million an episode or something like that, right,

Daniel Knauf 13:10
is 3.75. And first season, as far as I know. And that was, at that time, the most expensive show on TV. And we had a huge cast, and we had extras and elements and a lot of outside days, and some special effects. And so it was it was a it was a hugely expensive undertaking. And they would have loved to had a season hand at the top. And that's what they kind of wanted to do. That it was like if we could find a guy who can take this this other guy's crazy idea and make it work. I'm sure they would have scraped me off at some point. But they found to their kind of their horror. And I'm not saying this, you know, Pat, myself on the back right here. This is what I've been told by other people who were involved at the time, they said, What they found was, nobody else knew how to write that show. So they were stuck with me.

Alex Ferrari 14:06
So you see you wrote yourself a niche.

Daniel Knauf 14:08
Yeah, I mean, really, what else? I mean, basically what I did was created it's like it's like sitting out creating a board game where everything you do well is something that wins that board game and it's custom designed for every single thing you do well and and they realized so I probably guessing to their abject horror that you know that they needed me and they couldn't get rid of me and it would have been easier to get rid of me because I was so green and from my standpoint, I didn't know the rules and we're getting into Hollywood and dealing with Hollywood people in the entertainment business is a lot like suddenly getting into Time Machine finding yourself in the court of King Louie the 14 and year there's a whole battery of sort of Kabuki like rituals and certain things that have to be said and how they're said and pecking orders. I remember my first I sent a memo out one time and the insurance business, you send a memo out and you just it's here it is here. Everybody hears what's going on. But you know, I got called by one of the executive producers who said, What do you think you're doing? It's like, what I mean, what am I doing? I'm setting up this memo, about, you know, some nothing. Oh, he climbed up my ass about, oh, you have to put this person's name first and this person's name Second, and this person's name third. And so it was really a lot about just learning these weird customs and rituals and expectations. I also didn't know, what was a reasonable ask, like, you know, was it a reasonable ask, you know, if I said, No, let's not do this. Yeah, it's pretty easy if you don't have a really strong knowledge of physical production. And I didn't back then, to step on the ant hill. And I did that pretty regularly. I learned very quick study, and I learned and I make, I generally don't make the same mistake twice. I just make every possible mistake, one. Fair enough. And so it was it was it was kind of a jarring, terrifying kind of experience in which I was kind of hanging on by my fingernails, you know, at all times. And feeling like a stranger in a strange land. But I, I did the full two years and in in those two years, I pretty much learned the lay of the land. And no, so after that, I knew, you know, exactly, how, how the sausage is made, and in how to I really had a love for physical production, and ask a lot of people who are very knowledgeable questions and learning about that. And, and so it was since then, that was Carnivale was kind of like film school. You know, it was like hell of a film school. Yeah, I mean, there's just there was a there was no, there was an immense amount of there was there was there was money and stature and everything riding on that. I mean, our The sad thing really is the expectations HBO had for the series were wholly unrealistic. And that's one of the things that killed us. If we went on the air on HBO now, you know, they'd be good. Consider. It's like an unmitigated success. But they were saying, Oh, we expect to score higher numbers with this show than the Sopranos. And when I, the day, I heard that I was going, Oh, God, we are so dead. Because the sopranos is mainstream drama. And whenever you get into genre stuff, even more so back then than now, where genre has kind of, you know, oozed into mainstream. Back then there were people where as soon as Ben heals a little girl at the beginning of the show, they're going to turn it off, and they're not going to turn it back on. Because that's not real, you know. And it's, there's some people no matter how well, it doesn't matter whether it listened to a super good jazz or really crappy jazz, they just don't, they can't differentiate because there's still like jazz or rap or country western. And for, you know, shows involve magic, or supernatural or whatever. If people aren't into that, no matter how good you you do, you're going to lose that audience.

Alex Ferrari 18:34
Do you think that carnival would have had a better chance in today's environment, like on a streaming service, like to have a longer run,

Daniel Knauf 18:41
I suspect we would have done our full run. If it came out. If it came out, I would say even if it came out, like, two or three years after we did come out, we were really on the bleeding edge of everything. And people just weren't really ready for that show. And it would have been easier to because allowed to a lot of what we were doing in the first season in the first season drags quite a lot. But a lot of it was about just teaching people the vocabulary of the show. So that they would understand and people is there never been anything online. It was just it was it was just a really weird thing. You know, I mean, it had kind of a cryptic aspects of Twin Peaks, but it was a period drama, and there was some historical aspects that were based on true, you know, situations and true events and other things that were that were made up and and so we really felt like we kind of had to handle the audience along for the, you know, the first first at least six episodes so they know what the rules were.

Alex Ferrari 19:49
No, can you you said, you said a term show Bible. For a lot of people who are listening. They might not know what a show Bible is. Can you explain what your process was being a newbie

Daniel Knauf 20:01
This so they don't feel you know it's there you know? So they're dumb or anything when when when Scott said yeah firstly you know we need to get a Bible and I'm thinking you're gonna kneel down and pray they buy it King James or the new American way what name your poison a show Bible is basically a document that goes into the, the mill you have, you know the world. First you start basically the logline, okay. You know, power is there is like a war between good and evil as far as in the man blasted landscape of the 30s, Dustbowl, or whatever. So you can't be your, your sort of three liner, or two liner log line. And then you start to elaborate on that you get into the world, the rules of the world, you know, the you might, like I like to put you images just to set tone and give you an idea of what things are going to look like. And you you, you talk about the history of all the backstory, you get into the description of the, you know, to full blown articulation of the bottom three quarters of the iceberg, and talk about the characters, character's history. You know, they'll descriptions of who everybody is and where they come from. And then, and then you go into, you know, first season, this is your first season arc that will be quite detailed by episode one, you do this, to this. And then, you know, later episodes, you're kind of, you know, increasingly shorthand and giving people an idea of where the, the thrust of the show is, what its destination is where, when the show kind of ends, if it fails, I mean, a lot of shows, and when nobody's watching them anymore, I mean, the most episodic dramas, and when people are just tired Watchmen, you know, but a serial, this is a serial. And is that's that's kind of what I put together for that matter. What I did was very complex thing to where people were looking at and going, Wow, is this based on like real people? Because I had, like, I got bored with it. I said, once I heard that description, okay, here's what you have to do. I got Sue, I started writing it now it's going cat. This is like watching paint dry. And if I'm bored, whoever's reading it, whoever's got the misfortune of reading this thing, it's gonna give you more I was, hey, can do so you know. And so I started going, let's have a little fun with it. And what I did is I created the whole thing, sort of, from the point of view of intrepid University professor who had heard about this carnival, and had done a bunch of research and gathered files about the actual carnival. And in it were fake police reports and fake newspaper articles and fake religious tracks and all kinds of stuff that he kind of gathered and put together, there was even an interview with Samson when he's like, 75 years old and old folks home, you know, and he says, this sort of, you know, angry karma Jim, you know, and, and, you know, just just like, you know, can be gone really suppose, you know, and so I just had a blast writing it in. So they saw Nick never seen anything like that. And I've done that since on almost every show that I've developed, because I always figure Hey, you know, why screw is success, but after a while you're doing it. I mean, it's like I'm getting I keep hearing different things. Some people say you need to come in with every dot, every i dotted every T crossed in man, you know, and in, you know, trailers, you know, you know, promos, you know, the shot, you know, whatever, you know, this whole thing, and then I hear other people saying the best best just to go in with a strong pitch. I don't know what the rules are anymore, you know?

Alex Ferrari 24:22
Well, yeah, that Netflix and Hulu, and those guys can throw everything off the wind as far as rules are concerned.

Daniel Knauf 24:30
Very much so. And he really you know, yeah, it's like it's they set up shop so far, you know, kind of upstream, that they wield immense thing in the world. And this isn't just in Hollywood. There's the golden rule, which is he who has the gold rolls in and in Hollywood that's very, very, very much operative. In you know, people I've met Netflix are sitting on billions. and billions of dollars. And they say, Okay, you get some and you get some, and you get some. And I don't know what they're, you know, which projects what, what makes them pick out what project or, you know, whatever. It's kind of, I mean, really, I mean, sometimes I feel it's like that there was this old show that was on, I think, in the 50s, before my time, but it was called the millionaire and it was about a guy who would just go out to random million million dollars you know, into buying island for a million.

Alex Ferrari 25:37
Now you can't even buy it. And then I came to buy a house in Burbank,

Daniel Knauf 25:42
me a four bedroom house and receiver. But the the, with a swimming pool. The sometimes I feel like that's what Netflix is now, you know, is kind of like, all of a sudden, boom, you know, you're gifted with it. So well, it's a very, it's a very chaotic market right now.

Alex Ferrari 26:03
It is pretty insane. And, you know, I've talked to, you know, I talked to a lot of people like yourselves who are in the business who were in the business before Netflix. And I've seen them just disrupt this entire industry. And now players like Disney are showing up with their streaming service. And Apple just talked, just said, Hey, we're gonna put ours in and Comcast or at&t, excuse me, they have one coming out. Like there's so many of these services coming out. And it's really just changing the way everything is done. Yeah. What's

Daniel Knauf 26:33
what's interesting, too, is the impact it's had on just the way people comport themselves. Like I think I don't know who it was, if it was Betty Davis, or one of those old actresses was quoted as saying Hollywood's the place in the one place on earth where you can get encouraged to death, you know.

Alex Ferrari 26:50
Very true. It's extremely

Daniel Knauf 26:52
true. Or, as I like to say, and when people say, hey, you know, it's good for exposure, and people die from exposure.

Alex Ferrari 27:02
I'm gonna, I'm gonna steal that line, I wouldn't steal

Daniel Knauf 27:05
a line on it. posit that he was exposed. exposure. So So you know, but it used to be that everybody was really super, super, super, I was talking to my wife about this this morning, I was just making this observation used to be the people were very, very sort of, sort of, sort of, sort of polite and genteel with each other. Mainly because you really didn't know whether this guy who was you just had every reason to believe it's a completely talentless hack, okay? Or just a straight up Bozo. For all you know, from your experience in six years, could be running a studio. He just didn't know or could be the guy that everybody wants to do business with. So people were generally very careful with talent relations. He didn't want to, he wanted to, you know, it will always be God will really love this, but it's just not right for us right now. We were developing something similar to it, or it's be always that kind of, there always be We love you. We think you're great. But my agent one time called me up. It's like the sixth thing that it's like, not sold. And he says, Yeah, well, they really love you. And I go, No, they don't love because if they love me, they would buy shit from me. I could wipe my ass on a piece of toilet paper and submit that they base it show on it. They'll tell me they love. But there was still that was sort of out of kind of out of out of not respect. I wouldn't say it's out of respect. I wouldn't say it was them being unkind. It's not kindness, it was out of fear. It was fear that the person who's sitting in this chair right now with us, maybe somebody we absolutely need to be doing business with later. So we don't want to burn any bridges. What I've found lately, in talking to other writers and stuff is Netflix. And maybe it's because I read a little bit about their, their internal culture of transparency, you'd say what's on your mind to be totally frank with people and that's the way we do things. Is there is a tendency for them to say, Huh, fuck off, we're not interested go away. I mean, it'll be just like, Fuck off, go away. What and you'll go What didn't you like? What? Fuck you we, you know, we didn't like it. You know? Some didn't work for us. So go stop out, you know, and, and they don't give you feedback. They don't say what they're looking for. They don't want a follow up meeting in and it's Curt and it's harsh. You know,

Alex Ferrari 29:39
I heard that too.

Daniel Knauf 29:41
And, and so it's like, it's like, it's like, Well, does that bode well for them? If they come sniffing around later, and you know, and they're not somebody I want to do business with. They're probably gonna Never throw more money at me to get me

Alex Ferrari 30:02
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Daniel Knauf 30:16
Because they've got the money, but I just think, you know, guys, there's a reason why there's so much as kissing going on in Hollywood before you got here. And that's because you don't understand. Somebody who's at the very bottom of the game living out of their car this week, in six months can be picking up an Oscar, you know, I mean, that's the story of the guy who wrote Dances with Wolves. He was literally living out of his car. And a year later, he got an Oscar, he's got a basically treat people well, because people who maybe you don't need this week, you may need desperately in six months or a year and, and you know, but again, I mean, it's like, like I said, some sort of part of the chaos right now. I don't really care, it doesn't affect me, doesn't really affect my game. My game is I just do the best work I can and move forward. And I'm not a peripheral visionary. I just don't look at what everybody else is doing can't kind of do my own thing. And hopefully somebody responds to it.

Alex Ferrari 31:25
I've always wanted to ask you and also just someone like you will have that experience that kind of lottery ticket when with carnival. What was it like when you got the call? Or were you in the room? What was that experience? Were like, we're your greenlit, we're going to make this show.

Daniel Knauf 31:44
Oh, I can remember exactly what it was like when I sold the thing. You know, because I was set up I was my I was at my literally I was like, at my daughter's softball game. I remember where I was standing. I remember that. Looking at my my looking at her mother and going, Oh my God.

Alex Ferrari 32:04
Our life just changed. Well, it

Daniel Knauf 32:06
was like they're doing it. The The problem was, I just I've never tried to get into TV before them. And so I couldn't fully appreciate how amazing it was, you know, it was kind of like, of course they bought it. It's good. I guess that's my money. I was like, when I was like 17 He took me to Santa Anita racetrack. Right. And I just beginner's luck. I picked seven out of nine horses on the note. And I remember sitting there and I was thinking these $2 bets, but it's give me two bucks and then go make a bet. Go home with a couple 100 bucks. And I'm thinking maybe this college thing is overrated.

Alex Ferrari 32:51
The track the track just seems much more easy way back

Daniel Knauf 32:54
the girlfriend, you know, expecting to impress her and I didn't you know, it's like, yeah, they were like, you know, my horses is like they were shooting them out there. It was like, Oh, yeah. Yeah, I totally humiliated realize, Oh, my God. And there were a lot of aspects of Carnival that were like that I, I wasn't, I wasn't, I hadn't gotten beaten up enough to really fully appreciate it. In the market, I hadn't spent a lot of time and trying to network or sell things. What I've done is I've spent 20 years really honing my craft, you know, and that was good. And if I was going to do it another I'd rather do it that way than the other way. I don't think Hollywood's a good place to learn how to write in.

Alex Ferrari 33:40
So you see, you're basically training for a fight that you never knew was gonna come or not come. But when it finally came, you read Oh,

Daniel Knauf 33:48
yeah, I've been doing like Brazilian jujitsu for 20 years with

Alex Ferrari 33:54
in a basement somewhere. You know, no one knew who you were

Daniel Knauf 33:57
on. Yeah, it's like, you know, bring Yeah, just bringing guys in and breaking their necks, there'd be no fucking witnesses. So by the time I was fully evolved, I mean, I, I really was I had, I had honed it to a fine point. And in utter total obscurity is a lot of people you know, you get into it. The problem. I see what like getting into, you know, graduated for college getting that first job. You reached a point where you're pulling out a six figure paycheck. And you kind of go well, I guess I know everything I need to know about writing and your development as an artist just stops. The other thing is, I had 20 I had 25 Well, but my dad has had for decades plus of living I'd done and I I had a lot of experiences. And then, you know, I had a lot to draw on versus some guy who's 20 years old and he has I had a really bad breakup in high school, you know, it was at time I got kicked in the nards in seventh grade. Seventh grade. I mean, there's just, you know, there's not a lot of complexity to what you can look back on it. 22 years old, whereas it 45 I had three kids feeling. There had been the health, there'd been health problems. We've been, you know, a million, a million things. And so it's like I can draw.

Alex Ferrari 35:30
Now you, you also acted as a showrunner and a few shows. Can you tell us which shows you worked on specifically as a showrunner?

Daniel Knauf 35:37
I was never really the showrunner on Carnival. But I was kind of the showrunner by default on Carnival because the second season Ron went away to do Battlestar Galactica. And I was basically the head writer, I was doing everything a show runner does. But you know, but but at the end of the day, there was another executive producer was was handling most of the post production and calling certain shots. So I wasn't really appear showrunner. But I was making a lot of creative decisions. And a lot of the crew were making end runs around the other guy to say, hey, you know, we're trying to get a decision has, you know, and he's putting this one to committee. And we really need to know now and I'd say, just do this, you know. So, I mean, I know what a shoulders job was. And so I know that in the second season, I was the de facto showrunner.

Alex Ferrari 36:30
Now, what does the showrunner do exactly for the audience. So they understand. The showrunner

Daniel Knauf 36:35
is basically responsible for First of all, pretty much all the scripts and the trajectory of what's going on in the writing room and the story of what's being submitted to the network, feeling low notes to come back from the network, dealing with the production issues that come up, looking at, you know, drawings of sets that are going to be built and signing off on those, you're signing off on everything, you're generally, you're generally, you know, working directly with your key crew, in your, your line producers, to just make sure that everything's running and all the trains are running on time. And in doing what you can do to, to make their job, I would say, I would say easier, but sometimes I think just to make their job possible. It's, it's really, it's really it, this is this is pyramid building, you know, and you're building a new pyramid every week, and you're building each pyramid from the factory floor up and, and so there's a lot of details needed attending to, you're also you're delegating a lot. You can't be you can't have your hand in everything. You just have to make sure that the right people who reflect and understand your vision for things are in the slots,

Alex Ferrari 37:56
you know, now can you talk a little bit about the writers room and what it's like to be in that writers room for people who have never been in a writers room?

Daniel Knauf 38:03
Well, there's I've been in both I've been two kinds. There's really only two kinds of writers rooms. Well, there's there's lots of different kinds of writers rooms. There's writers rooms of work and writers rooms don't work. Where, you know, the shows that I've run, the shows that I've been in charge of the writers room, I take great pride in when when I'm running a room, it's running on all cylinders. And you have five or six writers in a room. And usually writers assistant taking notes. You have you using cards or whiteboards in your breaking story. Your job is to sit as a group and break story. And to me the key is first of all, everybody has to feel safe. You know, they have to feel like they're not going to be ridicule that they come up with something silly. One thing that I really like Ron Moore have brought this to our room and carnival. And in according to him, it's it's an old Gene Roddenberry a tech trick is thing called a stupid stick. And you designate something it can be anything, it could just be an object. And if you pick this thing up, and you hold it and pitch something, nobody can make fun of you. It's got supernatural powers. That's awesome. So and often it's the stupid stick pitch that really picks kids breaks the dam, like usually the reaction is that vacation picked up the stupid stick that's actually really smart. Or it'll be Yeah, that's stupid. But you know, if we did that which flot gets every it just breaks a logjam? And I mean, really the the key to me of successfully running a room and I think the best I love analogies that the best analogy I've found for a writers room is you know, you're drawing you're drawing juice, you're drawing story out of the ether as a writer. It's bubbling up through your story. Well, it's being informed by your own experiences. It's being filtered by your own experiences and interpreted by your own experiences. But that story comes from somewhere else. I truly believe the more I do this, that writers and artists, artists of all stripes are the only people on earth that are actually in daily, who in daily communication was with supernatural. I mean, I just, there's something else. I can't tell you how many times I've written something about where the fuck did that come from? Oh, yeah. Holy shit. Like that's, that didn't come out of me, you know. And it's nothing I've ever seen. And it's nothing I've ever experienced, for God's sake. And it's coming from somewhere else. And so you're, you're basically likable, and there's a power station down, down, down the street, I look at it is, you know, to keep the power station thing going is like you're driving through the desert here in California, and there's your route towards Nevada, and there's these solar collectors, that's, you know, hundreds of mirrors on the desert for all of those mirrors focused on a heat element at the top of a tower. That is, you know, moving turbines down below. And I look at it as good writers room is all the people are taking that, that Mojo that story Mojo that juice and sort of focusing it on, you know, on on the person who's running the room. And, and it's like, it's amplifying everybody there, you can't, if you have a good well, we're on writers room. Nobody can really remember who came up with what it becomes, it becomes it becomes a pure hive mind in I'm not just saying it because I like Star Trek, but it becomes it becomes a hive mind. And there's only one writer in the room. There really is only one writer in the room, but he's, he's the combination of you know, the, the four or six or 1212 writers that are all sitting in the room, focusing their mirrors at that center point, which is just, you know, forging the story. And it all kind of melts together, you know? And so it's not, you know, the 12 equals 112 creates one writer, you know, and that that takes him that immense trust. And, and in the process in and in. Measure generosity in more than that. Just making sure it's fun. And because because creation is play creation is play at a very high level. Yes. But it's nevertheless it's no different than, you know, like six kids in a sandbox. Try playing with trucks, your army man or something. It's, you're in a state of play, and you need to make people feel like, good.

Alex Ferrari 43:14
If not that place. Yeah, cuz if you if you if you're making kids not feel fun, they're not gonna play in that sandbox.

Daniel Knauf 43:21
What they're gonna do is they're gonna retreat to their corners and pound it. I've seen that happen in writers rooms. I mean, there's writers rooms where it's like, it's just everybody's just staring a hole in the whiteboard. And it's like, what if we, what? It's like, just show constipated? Right? This Oh, my God, I've been in rooms like that. And it's just like, and usually it's a function of people at the top. a trickle down effect of and of the way that ideas are received. Shows like that are not fun.

Alex Ferrari 44:05
Now, let me ask you a question. How do you deal with studio notes or notes in general from people who have not sat and bled on the paper like you are on your laptop to build that story? Well,

Daniel Knauf 44:17
first of all, you know, I keep in mind that everybody, everybody involved wants to make material good. Now, you'd argue there's probably a few people out there that just want to get their fingerprints on it. There's a good argument. You know, it's like they want to be able to turn to their wife and see, hey, see that sweater? I picked that sweater out because that actress or something? I don't I don't I think it's more the exception to the rule. Everybody is just dying to make something great. And, and and sometimes if it's coming from people who don't understand the process, like executives, it may not be as well articulated as it would be if you're getting it from another writer. You know, and thank God for that because if they weren't capable of articulating it as well as a writer they wouldn't lead. So that said, you know, I, I'd say, you know, I read every, every year I see some article and some basically on the internet or whatever, some bloggers, screenwriting magazine and be like those snippets, will you ever go as much or read about the delicious food or whoever got it to this day, I've never seen anybody write when saying, the smartest note I ever got. Because I can tell you for every really stupid note I've gotten, I've gotten one where I'm kicking myself in the ass on the way home going, Why the hell did I think that? Sometimes people come up with with things where it's like, oh, wow, you're absolutely right. I think the biggest problem is a lot of them notes. They have a lot of executives, they want to pitch a solution, they perceive a problem. And they, they tend to frame their notes as solutions to problems they proceed. So it'll be Hey, you know, do this and you're kind of going, huh? Like, it feel. And it's like, it's, if there's any executives listening or any future executives, the best thing to do is just frame the problem first, you know, what I mean? Oh, the second hack, or, you know, and be as specific as you can I'm, this really bumps for me, you know, this particular moment, or this, the second scene kind of drags where it seems like this one character disappears. And, you know, in the second act, and, you know, frame the problem, don't try to just pitch a solution. Because the solution, it's sort of like, you know, you got a doctor, there's only one doctor in the room, and then you got a bunch of people are standing around the room. And they bring a patient in, and he's bleeding from the ears. And everybody sits, for God's sake, put cotton in his ears and put some band aids on his ears is usually when you're going. Now, actually, that's indication of like, you know, that's intracranial bleeding. And we really have to get them into an MRI see what's going on with his brain, you know, and it's not a bandaid on the ears situation. So, you know, sometimes it's better just to point out, Hey, he's bleeding on the ears. Not, hey, put some band aids on his ears. Right? It's just better to frame the problem or point out the problem and then propose a solution.

Alex Ferrari 47:40
You aren't good at analogies. By the way, you are very good at analogies.

Daniel Knauf 47:47
I should open up a little store,

Alex Ferrari 47:48
you should just sell analogies. Now, what is the biggest mistake you see, first time screenwriters make

Daniel Knauf 48:00
the biggest mistake screenwriters make, I would say the biggest mistake all writers new writers make and even a few they're like, along the way, is not recognizing a lot of people go, you know, if I can get really good the first time it'll save me time on editing, you know, I can edit and write at the same time I can multitask. I can work with my iPad and watch TV at the same time. So I can edit and write at the same time. And then they sit down which is really editing is using a completely different part of your brain than writing it's a completely it's as different as the difference between Oh, I'm stuck to an analogy. But it's it's different is the difference between skiing and eating a banana. Nothing to do with each other. Now I suppose you could ski while you're eating a banana? Well, the thing is, the thing is, is like it's really they're they're they're mutually exclusive activities in and what I find is the effect is like, when people do that, and they go that way. That's where you get into the it was a dark and stormy night. Oh, no, no, no, that sucks. It was a shadowy and rainy night. Oh, that's worse. This is the recipe for complete writer's block and paralysis, where you're trying to make qualitative decisions about things that are just jumping out of your head, okay, you cannot do it. You cannot do that. You can't do it. It is like, like pegging the accelerator and the brake on your car at the same time. You're gonna make shitloads of noise and last smoke, but the car ain't going anywhere. Okay, and so it's like, it's like under stand that, you know, when you sit down to write, you write like you're being pursued through the jungle by a bunch of guys with machetes, you don't think about it, you go, you can be thinking, Oh, this is shit, I know it shit, but I've got to get through the scene, okay, I know what the next scene is gonna be. And just get through it, get through it, get through it, get through it right forward, don't wait. For Christ's sake, when you sit down to write, don't sit down and read everything you've written before you write it because now you're editing again, stuff that you just sit down to read the last few words and you go, Oh, yeah, that's where I left off, and you just pick it up. And you you have to write like, you're just in now. And then so okay, if you're, if you go off of your outline, that's all right. If something happens, and the character takes you in the direction, you didn't expect to go, Great, okay, you know, and sometimes those are great moments. And so go ahead, but as long as you get back onto your, you know, onto the path again, and arrive at your trajectory and arrive at your ending, but just get that first draft out and get it out as quickly as humanly possible. And, and I can guarantee you that the parts that you thought while you were writing them, which is shit on ice, actually, you'll reread I mean, go, well, this isn't bad. And the stuff you thought where you were, oh my god, I must be channeling you know, ug to you. It's just garbage, you know. And so it's like, it's like, you have no way of knowing how well you're doing while you're creating you can't be here. So that's another reason. So So my advice to writers is understand that process and understand editing in, in, in writing and editing, the creative process, and the editing process are two completely different things. And, you know, in don't try to don't try to multitask that it never goes well.

Alex Ferrari 51:54
I actually heard I actually heard a great analogy from a songwriter, and which I think is amazing analogy for writing. Which is like when you go into an old house and you turn on the pipes, and all you see is that mud come out. You just got to let it go and let that mud keep flowing out of the pipes out of this faucet. And then sooner or later, it's gonna start while it starts getting lighter and lighter and lighter to the point where then you're getting clear water that you can actually drink but you have to get through all that other stuff first, or else they won't you won't get to the good stuff.

Daniel Knauf 52:27
Oh, you just have it you it's like it's like it's it's it's an ugly, messy, smelly process.

Alex Ferrari 52:34
There's nothing There's nothing. There's nothing glamorous about being an artist a lot of times it really is it not that when you're real creative.

Daniel Knauf 52:44
You know when I'm, I'm I'm one of those I'm one of those rare birds. A lot of people are like, you know, a hate writing. Torture. They're sitting in front of their I've seen guys sitting there, sitting there frowning at their screens. And in this. I'm happy and giddy and stupid when I'm writing. I'm just like laughing I'm like, great. I'm just sitting here making basically no, go. Here this is so great.

Alex Ferrari 53:12
Well, you actually just said that. Right? When we got on the on the on the line. You're like I'm writing a ghost story. Like you were so happy about it. Well, you said

Daniel Knauf 53:20
that's because I love this process. I there's tons of love on the page. I just adore writing. I'm not one of those guys. It's like there's all I like having written Yeah, it's like, I like the process. I like I like doing it. It's one. You know, it's funny, there's that I forget what it is that some recent in one of those self help business type books. They made this prop proposal legal. If you do any endeavor for activity for 10,000 hours, yes. And yes, I okay. So if you want to be if you want to be a concert pianist, you just have to play for 10,000 hours. What he doesn't say is that if you didn't like playing the piano, right, you'd have to be the world's dumbest asshole to waste 10,000 hours of your life doing something you don't like doing. People who spend 10,000 of their happy hours of their life mastering some art or craft or science or whatever they master. They have to love it. You have to love doing that.

Alex Ferrari 54:33
But there's a lot of people that don't a lot of people who go to school,

Daniel Knauf 54:38
you have to love some aspect should you know. But you know, I mean, a lot of people fall in love with the idea of being a writer, you know, but I meet writers every day. They've never written a word. They're just natural. retcon terrorists are really good at telling stories. They're just and it's like, where I go for God's sake, or we should sit down write a book or something because you're really good, you know, and then I mean People who are writers, and they're making very good money. You know, I've worked with people who are writers, and it's like, they're not writers. They've worked out the craft, they understand what follows what but they're not really writers. They're just, they're just regurgitating things they've seen in putting a spin on everything to make, you know, to make it a little fresh enough to where everybody doesn't, you know, get scared. Oh, yeah.

Alex Ferrari 55:24
That's an interesting, that's an it's very interesting, because you sometimes you see these movies, or you watch these shows, and you're like, wow, it's just the same, the same stuff. And I've met writers, too. I've met writers and filmmakers, for that matter, who do exactly what you know, they understand the craft their technicians. But, but kidding, like, you know, I could put the paint on canvas, and I know how to do it. And I know the technique. But I'm not Vinci. I'm not, I'm not Van Gogh, I'm not, I'm not being brave. I'm not being you know, I'm not going out there without a net.

Daniel Knauf 55:58
Well, yeah. But that's, you know, maybe that's the cards that are dealt yet, you know, not everybody is, you know, I mean, there's probably guys painting pictures from, you know, photographs down at the mall, that, you know, from a craft, and from a from craft standpoint, as far as mixing colors and laying down pain are probably, you know, highly evolved, you know, but the, there's directors like that I won't name any names, but there's directors that are absolutely masterful, but it's just not quite substantial. There's a there's an, it's hard to put your finger on it, but it's like, there's a sense of a missing depth to my mind. The somebody like Kubrick brings to the party in our or Scorsese or, you know, where there's, there's something really to it. And

Alex Ferrari 56:53
there's something underneath that there's like 50 layers underneath. And you will only see it in 20 or 30 years of watching. That you'll Yeah, Kubrick Kubrick's my favorite.

Daniel Knauf 57:05
You, you know, he was aware of what he was doing and everything, but he was aware of everything he was doing. And no artists really is a lot of it, you're just doing your best and it's coming in that way. But you really have no idea. You know, how, how, why it works that way. You know, you're just focusing on trying to articulate your vision as well as you can. Yeah, I mean, I, you know, I take you go to college lit class, and he gets some clown, you know, up in front. He's your college lit teacher, and he's trying to tell you what was going through Herman Melville's head, right? You know, Moby Dick Or Steven cranes head when he's writing Red Badge of Courage. And yeah, he was thinking about this. He's working with symbolism over here. And I tell people I go, I can tell you what's going through Herman Melville's head when he wrote Moby Dick. It was like, I don't feed my family. And this is due in a couple of months. That's what was going through Herman Melville. Right. You know, right. doing the best you can, you're running through the jungle with the guys with the machetes feeling you that's what's happening.

Alex Ferrari 58:12
You know, it's funny, because Cooper Kubrick's one of my favorite artists of all time, and there's so much I mean, there's volumes libraries written about what people think he was doing in 2001. And in the shining, and, and, and all of those, and I just just see the documentary film worker. I know it's, it's his assistant. Oh, I didn't see that. Yeah, it wasn't a wonderful, wasn't it wonderful. But you hear him and he was the guy that was literally next to him for 30 years. And he's like, you know, the twins in shining? Well, that was me. I brought twins in and Kubrick said, Sure. I guess they're twins now, where everybody's like, in their twins, because back in the day, he shot some photos of twins, and they're putting up like, No, it just

Daniel Knauf 58:57
was. It was the first episode of the first episode of Carnival. It's called millbay. Right? Then I decided you know, when I first created the show, I wanted to name each episode every city they were in. We didn't do that the first year. We did it the second year, you know, but I titled the episode No, no. And the way I found it is I got a period period map of the decimal and sort of looked at dots on the map and found a little tiny dot name no Fe and I went along like that. And so that's what I titled it. So then we make it like two years later, it's on TV and people are talking about it on the internet and going back and forth with interpretations and stuff. And some guy says we you know, and mil Fe is an anagram for family and I'm going homogeneous. I couldn't have been thinking about that, you know, I couldn't have done I couldn't, I'm not going to be thinking about stuff like that. And when I'm making creative, because I'm making 10 10,000 creative decisions in the course of a screenplay, you know, 10,000 decisions to make, you can't be thinking on that level about everything money never finished, she'd still be writing the pilot today.

Alex Ferrari 1:00:21
We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show. No, so good. So when carnival came out, the Internet was definitely off and running is already around for a little bit. And but then the message boards and all that stuff was going on back then heavily. And I remember people just, you know, because it wasn't, there wasn't as much content flying around as there is today. Yeah. And they really delved into the deep, the deepness of Carnival, how is it as a creator, I've always wanted to hear this as a creator to go on. And just like, you guys have no idea what you're talking about, like what he was like, you

Daniel Knauf 1:01:06
know, because, like I said, people have different interpretations for different shots. That's just nobody does that when they're talking about CSI. Right? Are those like house, you know, they're, they're not even really doing stuff, like down on the soprano so much. But the minute they start to interpret stuff, symbolism, and so forth, but things really mean connections between different elements. As soon as people start doing that, you're taught now, that's what people do about art. Okay. And that means, exceeded, you've made art. It's not just a TV show, you've made art. And so that was the biggest thing. I mean, I'm not gonna say, Oh, you're wrong, because they couldn't be right. I mean, to me, it's, it's, it's there's a collaboration happening between the artists in the audience, if the audience draws something out of it that the artist didn't intend. Does that mean it's not there? Absolutely not. You know,

Alex Ferrari 1:02:03
that's a great perspective.

Daniel Knauf 1:02:05
Well, yeah, why wouldn't it it should be if it's open to multiple interpretations, that's a good thing. It'd be that that's because you're reaching people, different people in different ways. It's almost like the story in the Bible of the apostles speaking tongues or something, everybody's different language. That's fine. That's good.

Alex Ferrari 1:02:28
Yeah, like go to go back to Kubrick, every one of his movies has been interpreted 1000 different ways, and will continue to be interpreted for them for decades and decades to come in different ways.

Daniel Knauf 1:02:37
That's because his work is hard. Which is, which brings me to my poetry, I should pitch my

Alex Ferrari 1:02:41
quote, please, please pitch your poetry. Well, I was gonna ask you what's next on your plate?

Daniel Knauf 1:02:46
Well, I'm doing a bunch of stuff. I'm, I mean, it's like I've been, I've been creating shows that don't go on. You can check them all out. I mean, it's a cool book will push you over. Anything since carnival, I was like, no one created like a bunch to show. And for I don't know why I read a bunch of webinars saying this is good. This could go tomorrow. I don't know what the deal is. But I've got a site called off TV. And you can see it's unusual, because you can see the actual pilots in their entirety on some of the projects. There's another thing called the Bible, which we talked about earlier in the show, and you very rarely get to see show Bibles on the internet. This will give you an idea of what a Bible looks like, like what a show by Oh, looks like. So it's a nice resource for new writers. And then, and then, and then there's these things we call decks, which are sort of like anywhere between an 11 and 15 Page version of a Bible like mostly sizzle, very little steak. Just kidding. It's kind of thing they call it leave behind, you might take it to a pitch meeting with you and leave something behind for the executives bass up the chain of command. So some of those two, so they're helpful selling things. And that's all on NOF KNAU f.pb.

Alex Ferrari 1:04:04
And I'll put it in the show notes.

Daniel Knauf 1:04:07
The other thing, the other thing is, I recently I got I started writing poetry, I wrote it, I wrote poetry and first started writing. As you know, when I was an art major, and then I flipped over to creative writing and, and I was drawn to that I did a lot of poetry and worked with a lot of really great, had a lot of great poets and teachers. That was where I sort of cut my teeth in. I started writing again, about six, seven years ago, and for like, five years, I was writing these these poems and just post them on Facebook. I would just post them on Facebook. And because it's like, who gets paid for writing plays What am I get submitted to?

Alex Ferrari 1:04:49
Poetry Poetry Magazine?

Daniel Knauf 1:04:51
Yeah, yeah, poetry. Yeah. jogs

Alex Ferrari 1:04:54
poet she the jugs of Poetry Magazine.

Daniel Knauf 1:04:58
So we we He may still even exist. I don't know it's so. So I just post them in is this this woman was actually collecting, and she contact me. So I've got, you've got like 35 balls in. And I thought, Wow, maybe we should do a book so called another person I knew is a publisher and she said I would love to publish poems by you. And so, we did this thing. It's called Noho glomming. If you go on the if you're on my Facebook page or Twitter, you'll find it. If you go on the net, you want to find it, just put it in Clash books is the publisher. CLA see UCLA sh books. And the book is no Whoa, in Oh, H O. glomming. GL o am ing. And there's links all over my, my web, my social networks, and so forth. And it's a, it's about as pure, I mean, it's like, when you do TV guy, like, we're not meant to know process is this your your vision is mitigated by a lot of people, you know, it's very rare, where you get really the raw stuff up, because it takes so many people just to make these damn things, you know. And, you know, everybody's, you know, it's gonna waver from the way you might have imagined, you know, down to props and camera angles. It's all in the myriad of details. And it was so nice to return to a form where I'm creating the end result right there on a page. And so it's very approachable. It's not, it's not poor, if you don't like, like, if you think of poetry the way I think of mine. And you're allergic to poetry. It's not this precious stuff. It's very relatable. I believe that if somebody I believe people read it, and they'll connect very deeply with it. There's one poem at the end. It's an epic poll. That's just crazy and kind of funny. And it's, it's the story of a guy in the witness protection program. It's not I mean, I'm not writing about ravens, and angels and, you know, dead king trees, right? Yeah. Writing about stuff like Citgo gas stations, right? My influences were Charles Bukowski, and this whole Los Angeles, brown broke school. And it's very down to earth and sort of grounded straight up stuff, and sometimes abusing and sometimes moving. So I urge you to check out my poetry if you like my TV, don't really like that.

Alex Ferrari 1:07:51
Awesome. Now, I'm gonna ask a few questions. I asked all of my guests. What advice would you give?

Daniel Knauf 1:07:58
The actor saying?

Alex Ferrari 1:07:59
Yes, yes, yes. Yes, exactly. Exactly. Just like we actually do

Daniel Knauf 1:08:02
odd types. Don't do that.

Alex Ferrari 1:08:06
If you were a tree, now I'm joking. What advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business today?

Daniel Knauf 1:08:14
I would say the best thing you can do is skip film school and just start shooting film. Because you can do that. I couldn't do that when I was starting out

Alex Ferrari 1:08:24
as a filmmaker as a filmmaker. Yeah, I would

Daniel Knauf 1:08:27
film school you will learn everything you learned in four years of film school in five days on a on a set, pretty much no, it's a film schools the world's biggest waste of money unless you go to UCLA or NYU or USC. And otherwise, if you're going to some other college to get a communications degree or film degree or that you're totally wasting your time. If you want to be a filmmaker, take take shit take 25 Tell your parents say okay, I want to take 25% of what you would spend on a college and I want to make a movie with it. Just make movies write them get your friends together. Sony has a good I make him the director now just make go out and start making movies in and you know, you might not mind that but you'll get from here to there much faster than you will if you go to film school.

Alex Ferrari 1:09:22
And how about screenwriting

Daniel Knauf 1:09:24
for screenwriting? You know, I think the most important thing I would tell a writer who wants to be a dramatist, which is a very specific kind of writing. People think novelists think I could not I can adapt this to a script. They usually can. It's very specific. Shakespeare was an actor before he was a writer and I really I didn't really learn how to be dramatist until I studied acting and I studied acting by accident. I thought I want to be a director. And so one of my second mentor who is really important in my development was a guy named cliff. Ozma was acting as an acting coach. He was Armand De Santis, kind of, you know, acting consultant. And I, I met him on a set. And we got to be good friends. And I said, I want to take some of your classes because I'm going to learn about the process so I can interact with actors as a director. And what I did was I ended up learning how to write, I really learned I was really good at pack in the trunk, and I knew how to, to break a story and in and figure out what follows this and what follows that when it came to my character work, I was faking it until I studied acting, and you'll learn. One thing you learned in acting is, is to act in the moment. Now if you still get stage fright, I have terrible stage fright. When I'm playing somebody other than myself, I can get up in front of a zillion people being Dinafem Yeah, but if I'm playing a character, it's scary. And, you know, I just can't build that fourth wall. But when I'm alone in a room I can in I'm writing in the moment, I'm mostly my scene work feels like, I'm just taking transcription. I know my characters, so Well, I know what they're saying. All I'm doing is just trying to keep up with them while they're while they're talking. Going through a scene. I never am going, hmm, what would he say there? Hmm, what would she then say? Another thing? I'd say the young actors or younger young writers is that sort of? So attached to that, is if you're going to a place like that, and you're going, what would I say? If I was in that situation? What would I say? If somebody said that to me? Is nobody really gives a fuck what you would say, Okay? Because you're really not interesting. Actors, aren't doers, actors, or watchers, if you're borings, just boring, boring people, and so nobody cares, what you'll see. You have to understand your character, and what the character would say. They all have to have different voices, they have to be real, you know. So, again, I would really strongly suggest studying spending at least a couple of years, you know, in any way you can, and whatever resources your town or city has. Getting up and studying, acting and doing scenes and seeing how hard it is. And it also helps you develop a really strong respect for your for the actor, and how hard they're, and that's something that's sorely lacking. With many writers in Hollywood, we're all here on guru Aegis sucks, and it's like, has it occurred to you that, you know, you're writing shitty stuff to say? No, there's no way to make work well,

Alex Ferrari 1:12:48
if Meryl, if Meryl Streep was saying, and it wouldn't have worked.

Daniel Knauf 1:12:51
Yeah. I mean, if you can get to where you write it, when you're there, you're doing you're working with actors, you know, actors, you get to understand the kind of stuff the actors want to say that the kinds of moments actors want to play. And if you know that, can you get them on your side? I mean, that's good. That's something that's gonna make you stand out.

Alex Ferrari 1:13:13
Now, can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career?

Daniel Knauf 1:13:18
The biggest? The biggest impact on my life? Or my career or mean?

Alex Ferrari 1:13:24
Or on or? Or either? Or?

Daniel Knauf 1:13:27
I would say at this point, you know, I was late comer to because I think there's also so many

Alex Ferrari 1:13:35
whichever one comes to your mind. The Alchemist of course, I love the alchemist. It's one of my favorite books.

Daniel Knauf 1:13:43
It's an astonishing piece of work. It's like everybody should everybody should read it. It should be required.

Alex Ferrari 1:13:50
It should be required for everybody in the world, but especially those who are artists.

Daniel Knauf 1:13:56
I think yeah, but I think for everybody, I think I think it's a good it's about as close a thing to like, if Homo sapiens came with an owner's manual, it would be the alchemist

Alex Ferrari 1:14:13
Good answer, good answer. Not what is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film industry or in life?

Daniel Knauf 1:14:21
Hmm. They are not always right. You know, that sometimes. I've been in situations where I'm absolutely sure something's not going to work in and in that person has a higher rank than I do. So once you get to call a shot, and I'm thinking he is gonna work, it's gonna work as well as the way I would have done it. And then often I watch it and it works beautifully. You know, and I go, You know what, I was wrong. You know, it's like, this is the way you're just because it's the way you Do it doesn't mean it's the best way to do it. In, in, in, in when it comes to a collaborative art, Passion Rules today, and you know what it boils down to is the person who's most passionate is probably going to win that fight. Don't get hung up on little stuff. If people want this change, the worst place you can go, the least productive, most toxic place you can go is to this place that almost every shitty writer goes, which is Detroit or read my work, you know? And it's like, yeah, they're dumping shitloads of money into this, and they just want to rack it. Because they don't like you. I mean, people should also come on forgot to say, you know, I mean, sometimes, sometimes another way does work. And sometimes it works even a little better than the way you had in mind. Just don't, don't think that you're ever going to watch something that is exactly the movie you had in your mind when you can see it and wrote it, it's always going to be a little different. Some parts are going to be better, some parts you might win sad. Hopefully, the you know, the former is more numerous than the ladder. You know,

Alex Ferrari 1:16:18
they're good. And then the toughest question of all three of your favorite films of all time.

Daniel Knauf 1:16:22
How that is North by Northwest I love I love. I think I'm the see, there's a lot of I'm just gonna see what pops into my head of Catholic course. And I think it's probably it's probably it is it's really kind of a dead heat between China Town. And, and, and, and the shining.

Alex Ferrari 1:16:55
I really love this shot.

Daniel Knauf 1:16:57
I mean, it doesn't work. Of course. Those four

Alex Ferrari 1:17:01
Right, exactly. That just came into mind right now. I agree with you, 100% and

Daniel Knauf 1:17:06
everything but David Lynch can Does that count?

Alex Ferrari 1:17:09
Everything by Kubrick everything by

Daniel Knauf 1:17:12
every other movie by the Coen Brothers. It's like that.

Alex Ferrari 1:17:18
You're right, it is almost every other movie because but when they hit it, they hit it out of the park. I know. But when they strike out, it's but you know what, though? No, strike out. It's

Daniel Knauf 1:17:32
an interesting strike.

Alex Ferrari 1:17:33
I was about to say I was about to say even when they strike out at least they're going to places that is pushing them creatively in places that we might have never even been to. So for every other No Country for Old Men, there might be a lady killer.

Daniel Knauf 1:17:46
And you do do editing on this thing after you're done.

Alex Ferrari 1:17:49
I do not. You don't

Daniel Knauf 1:17:51
go straight through. I'm gonna say hi. I'm on the radio.

Alex Ferrari 1:18:00
Know, my audience is used to this. It's all good. Don't worry. And then where can people find you

Daniel Knauf 1:18:04
Just dropped personson the table probably sounded like the like a bomb.

Alex Ferrari 1:18:10
It's all good. It's all good. Now where can people find you in your work?

Daniel Knauf 1:18:14
People can find all of these things I've done at North TV. And then you can find my stuff. I mean, you know, I mean, it's, I'm pretty active in in on Twitter and the social networks. There's interviews, you know, just Google my ass. And you'll pop up. Daniel Ross, don't google my. There you can find me all over the place. And as far as what I'm doing right now. Right now I'm kind of I finished up a good three years in the blacklist. And I'm kind of been doing a lot of development. So I'm right now I'm kind of I'm, I'm I'm kind of up between jobs. Okay. As Henry and Eraserhead would say I'm on vacation.

Alex Ferrari 1:19:06
Your sabbatical. Sorry, you're on sabbatical.

Daniel Knauf 1:19:08
Yo psychics about

Alex Ferrari 1:19:11
Daniel. It's been an absolute pleasure talking to you. Thank you so much for being so kind and generous with your time thank you.

Daniel Knauf 1:19:19
I enjoyed it.

Alex Ferrari 1:19:22
I want to thank Daniel for dropping some major knowledge bombs on the tribe today, and sharing his experiences his unique experiences as a showrunner and a writer. And guys if you want to get notes to anything we discussed in this episode, just head over to the show notes at indiefilmhustlecom.bps029. There I'll have links and contact information, all that kind of good stuff on Daniel and his work. And if you guys haven't checked it out already, please head over to indie film hustle.tv and check out the screen writing section of the streaming service, it is amazing. We've got new lectures, new courses going up every month, we now just added season three of the dialogue, which has some of the biggest screenwriters in Hollywood working today, sharing about an hour and a half interview about how they do their process, the insides and the ins and outs of the business and so on. It's a great, great series, and I've seen all of the episodes and we'll be putting out another three or four seasons coming up in the months to come. But it's really, really great among other interviews and other lectures and things like that, that we have on the surface. So definitely check that out, guys. And that's it for another episode of The Bulletproof screenplay podcast. If you haven't gone go to screenwriting podcast.com And leave us a good review on iTunes. It really, really, really helps the show out a lot and gets it out there to more and more people. So thank you again for all the support guys and as always, keep on writing no matter what, I'll talk to you soon.


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BPS 029: How to Pitch Your Screenplay in 60 Seconds

You walk into an elevator and just before the door closes Steven Spielberg gets on. You have 60 secs to pitch him your latest screenplay. What do you do? Your goal is to have your audience say yes, I understand, and I care” after reading or watching your brand story.

So how do you pitch  a movie idea?

If your audience just says “now I know” then you have successfully informed them but not enough to make them care, to make them stay to whatever you have to say next. Your career can be made in 60 seconds – if you make the right pitch!

Today’s guest is returning champion Michael Hauge. He is the best-selling author of Writing Screenplays That Sell (now in its 20th Anniversary Edition) and Selling Your Story in 60 Seconds: The Guaranteed Way to Get Your Screenplay or Novel Read

According to Will Smith,

No one is better than Michael Hauge at finding what is most authentic in every moment of a story.” – Will Smith

We discuss pitching techniques, the pitch story arch, and much more. After partnering with Michael on the best-selling Udemy Screenwriting course Screenplay and Story Blueprint: The Hero’s Two Journeys I wanted to work with him again. We came up with the online course Pitching Your Screenplay or Novel in 60 Secs

Enjoy my conversation with Michael Hauge.

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Alex Ferrari 0:00
I like to welcome back to the show Michael Haeg. Michael, thanks so much for coming back on the show. Oh,

Michael Hague 3:49
my pleasure. It's great to be back.

Alex Ferrari 3:50
You know, your your your episode was probably one of the most downloaded episodes in the history of indie film hustle, Jay, because it was one of the early ones I think I don't even remember what the number was. I think it was like 20 or 30. We're now getting we're closing in on 200 episodes. Soon. Yeah, I'm busy. And but that episode was very well received, and the course that that we partnered on the heroes two journeys, the story, storytellers blueprint has done extremely well. And a lot of the listeners have taken that course. So thank you so much for coming back and just sharing your knowledge.

Michael Hague 4:30
Oh, absolutely. And congratulations. I didn't realize the number had gotten that high. But it's an honor to be back. And and I'm looking forward to talking about this because this is this is a significantly different topic than the other one. This is this is in the selling arena rather than the creating arena.

Alex Ferrari 4:47
Exactly. Exactly. Because, you know, I brought you back because we're going to talk about pitching and I think that's a mystery for a lot of filmmakers, screenwriters, people in general, they just don't understand how to pitch and it's such an important skill. So we kind of put together wanted to kind of dig into, you know, a lot of the stuff that you work on on your book, which is called selling your story in 60 seconds. And I wanted to get into it. So what is a 62nd pitch Exactly?

Michael Hague 5:16
Well, this is a pitch that one would give either a novelist or screenwriter would give, or in this case screenwriter primarily when they have a very short amount of time, number one, and they have one goal and one goal only. And that is to get somebody to read their script. Or if you're a filmmaker in another arena, to get somebody to look at your short film or your piece of work that you want to use as a sample. But as opposed to say, a pitch meeting in Hollywood, once you reach a certain echelon, you might be invited to sit down in an agent's office, sit down in a production company's office, and discuss your screenplay or discuss your idea for a script. That's all well and good. But you're never going to get to that meeting, until someone has read your script. And they're not going to read your script unless you know a persuasive way to get them to take a look at it. So this is all about just that, will you take a look at this and read it? And then my script will stand on its own if you'll only take a look.

Alex Ferrari 6:19
Right? So it's basically the elevator pitch, if you will. Yeah,

Michael Hague 6:23
if you're going to a very high floor. Elevator, 60 seconds to get up there. Yeah, I mean, 60 seconds is not a precise shirt. But there's another context where it's not just elevator, but it's a phone call. But also, if you go to a pitch fest, or a pitch mart or if you're going to a writers conferences, screenwriting conference, and you're just have the opportunity to corner someone who has a degree of power in Hollywood, who's in the business, in the hallway or something. And and you can say, you know, I'd love to tell you about my script. Or sometimes if you're just schmoozing with someone in that context, they'll ask you, well, what am I working on, you can't take 10 minutes of their time to talk about all the nuances and details of your masterpiece, you've got to do it in a very short period of time. But in 60 seconds, you can give someone enough information about the script, but they can decide whether or not they want to read it. But you want them to decide yes or no based on an understanding of what the promise of it is. And not because they don't you, you told them, the start of it, and nothing more, because that's all you have the time for.

Alex Ferrari 7:37
Now, what are the top reasons why pitches go wrong? Well,

Michael Hague 7:42
to me without question, the number one mistake that screenwriters make when they're pitching their project is, no matter how short the time span, they try and tell their story. And you just simply can't do that. I say sometimes, if you've got a screenplay for a movie, that that you can tell the story in 60 seconds, then you've got a story for a 62nd film, because that's, that's what you're trying to do. You're trying to squeeze them, this is how it opens. And this is who the characters are. And then this happens. And then all once a body is found. And now we're and if you're at a pitch mark, where they say you've got, say 10 minutes, and you go longer than that, they're just going to take you away and you won't even finish, sometimes you're only given five minutes. But the thing to remember is even five minutes is too long when you have a five minutes like because you've got to have some time left after you pitch it. So the the prospective buyer of that script can talk about it and ask you questions, and find out the details they want to know not the details that you thought were so critical to put in the pitch.

Alex Ferrari 8:53
Now, how do you target buyers and target people who might be interested in either buying your script? Or watching your film or even giving you money for your film? How do you target buyers?

Michael Hague 9:06
Well, what you want to basically do is you want to follow in the footsteps of people who have been successful at marketing and selling or getting scripts optioned that are similar to yours similar meaning not they have the same plot, but they're in the same genre. They have the same general budget. If yours is a period piece you want to find out well, who who has produced period pieces in the past? If it's a horror film, who are the companies pursue, you know, making horror films. So the way you can do that the number one resource I always recommend is the Internet Movie Database. I am the b.com except that for a very small amount of money, you can get a subscription to I am DB pro.com. And when you have the Pro it means let's say let's say you've written a horror film, okay, and and you want to find out well who is making or who has made horror films recently that have been successful. And you find out that this Friday Jigsaw opens, which is kind of a spin off on saw series, okay, so you can go to imdb.com on your computer. And you can just put the search on jigsaw, and it will have pages or a lot of screens worth of information, the title, the name of every character, and who plays that character, the name of all the cast and crew. But here's the thing, it'll also list say, the producers and the production companies involved, not the studios. And we can explain that in a second. But you check out what are the who are the producers and production companies, then if you have the Pro version, which is I say, a minimal investment, then you can click on them, and they will give you contact information. So it will you will then find out well, this is the address and this is the phone number of this production company. And so then what you do either in that entry, or by calling the office, you find out who is the development director or the head of development, or the story editor, whatever the title is, who's in the business, who has the job at that company of getting scripts into the company, find out that person's name, and then you you call them cold or you send an email, you can send a letter, but letters aren't really, they're kind of passe anything

Alex Ferrari 11:31
like sending a fax,

Michael Hague 11:33
yeah, you can do a fax, that's still somewhat doable. But whatever it is, you want to try and track that person down and get them on the phone. And guess what you're going to do if you can get through to them and have them on the phone in their busy schedule. And they're only going to give you 60 seconds, guess how you're going to use it, you're going to give them your 62nd pitch.

Alex Ferrari 11:56
Now, can you discuss the seven steps of a great 67? Great 66/62? Pitch?

Michael Hague 12:03
No, because there's a well then there you go. What are the eight? So I guess the answer is yes, I can with a bonus. So here's here's how to look at it. A pitch is four steps of preparation and forceps of presentation. So there are four things to do to get ready to give the pitch. And then four things you need to do to actually give the pitch when you're on the phone or across the table at the pitch fest or whatever the situation might be. So the first four steps of preparation. Number one, you need to you need to review all of these steps begin with I apologize in the background, you hear a more my next door neighbor has to guard Yes, yes. No. Where else come to Los Angeles? Yes, no rakes leaves,

Alex Ferrari 13:07
if there was, if there was just one thing I could do in my lifetime is to find a way to get rid of those damn.

Michael Hague 13:17
Oh, I know. It's just they make the they contribute to noise and philosophy feels exactly the same time. Okay, so back to the issue at hand. Step number one is review. That means you will look at the story of your screenplay through a particular eye. And what you're looking for are the key elements of that story that your potential buyer needs to know to make the decision of whether they want to see it. So this is instead of telling the entire story, you're going to present your pitch in such a way that you reveal these, these things. So I what I need to do now if it's okay, as I should go through the list of what those keys, go for, go for it. Okay, so I'll make it very quick. And then taking the course, of course I go into detail of all of them. But here's what a potential buyer wants to know. First of all, who is the hero of this story? Who is the protagonist? Who are we rooting for? Next of all, where is that character at the beginning of the story before anything extraordinary happens when we are first introduced to that character? What are they doing? What's their job? What's the setting? What's their life? Like? What has their life been like for some time? It's the introduction of that character. Number three, why do we care about this person? Do we feel sorry for her? Do we? Is she in some kind of jeopardy? Is she a good hearted kind person? So she's likable? Is she very skilled, any of those qualities could create empathy but you have to create you have to let us know why we will connect with this character as we watch her on the screen. The fourth thing is what's the opportunity Unity, that's my term for the first key event of the story that is going to start it moving forward. It's something that happens to the hero about 10% of the way into the script that has never happened before, and is going to get them moving forward moving towards, into some new situations. So the next thing is, what where's that new situation. So it may be they start out in their home, and then they find out, they're going to inherit some money. So now they're going to move to they have to go to England and collect the inheritance or if Luke Skywalker starts off on his planet, and then he sees the the holograph, from Princess Leia, and that's going to take him into a new situation, wherever he'll meet, Obi Wan, and so on. Next point that you want to establish is, what's the hero's goal. This isn't just a situation, this is the visible finish line that this character needs to cross at the end of the movie. So is this a movie about stopping a serial killer, is that a movie about stopping an invasion is about when the love of another character isn't about winning a competition or escaping from danger. But whatever it is, it needs to be visible and specific and have a clearly defined endpoint. So what is that? Next? What is the conflict? What are the big obstacles the hero is going to have to overcome to accomplish that goal? If it's The King's Speech, the goal is to give a speech, but the obstacles are what make it enjoy it, you know, emotional and enticing, and that is he's got a terrible stammer he's going to have to take over his king, he's got to lead his country into World War Two. That's, that's the conflict. The next item is the plan. We need to know well, okay, so how is the hero going to go about stopping the alien invasion or winning the love of the other character. And finally, and this is not within the story, but it's something important to think about, what are a couple antecedents to your script. So what you want to do is in the pitch you're going to convey, or you're going to mention a couple of movies that you could point to and say, well, those two movies made money. So mine is likely to make money, it doesn't mean the plot is the same, it means they're in the same genre, they have about the same budget, they appeal to the same audience, they have a tone that's similar. Because there are romantic comedies that are dark, and romantic comedies that are silly and romantic comedies that are fairly dramatic, you want to pick a couple antecedents that fit into the subcategory of yours. And that's it. I think that was nine qualities of the story that you're going to convey. Now, I haven't talked about how yet, because the class will reveal that. But whatever you're saying, in the 60 seconds, you need to mention these things, because that's what's going to determine their decision.

Alex Ferrari 18:00
Go ahead. I'm sorry. Yeah. So another thing I think sometimes mistakes that I see too, as well. And I've done it in the past too, is when you pitch you when you when you compare it to another movie. They tell us a movie that was unsuccessful. Which was like, you know, my movies just like a star, like really? Suicide Squad all day, like?

Michael Hague 18:24
Exactly, yeah, you don't, you don't really want to go there. You got to be careful. It needs to be somewhat recent needs to be within the lifetime of the person. You're pitching

Alex Ferrari 18:35
it start you start dating. You start dating.

Michael Hague 18:40
And don't pitch Casablanca either. Even though you think it's a great movie, it's my favorite. It's not relevant. 10 years 10 years is a good time. But but the thing is that the mistake some people making their pitches, they'll say, Well, this is this is like up Titanic and and King Kong.

Alex Ferrari 19:07
Oh, yeah, they combined.

Michael Hague 19:09
Because well, like up it has a talking dog and like Titanic, it's a love story and whatever. And you can't do that they've got to be three, they've got to be two movies that that are in exactly the same genre. And and and the more money those movies have made, the better it is because subconsciously what you're doing to the buyer is you're you're saying without this as the subtext is, look, those movies made a lot of money. So obviously, you're going to be interested in my script because it's going to make the same kind of money. Because you you need to realize that in Hollywood, the people in power aren't necessarily story experts, but they do. They are good bean counters most of the time and they know what box office success looks like. They don't know why it was a box office success, but they figured well if this can be the next Titanic I'm all for it.

Alex Ferrari 20:02
Right? Now, what are a few things that people should never do when pitching an idea?

Michael Hague 20:11
Never Well, besides going on and on, don't, don't tell the person hearing the pitch, how great the story is, or why it's going to be successful. Don't say, this is going to appeal to the mass audience don't say this is this is going to be an earth shaking story. Don't make any comments or commentary or judgments about your own script. Let the story stand on its own. Let the pitch stand on its own. So if if this sounds like an emotionally involving commercially successful story, or when the could be, they will conclude that for themselves, you don't need to say, and I mean, I've had people pitch me things that says, I swear this is going to be bigger than avatar. No, it's not going to be bigger than avatar and our company probably isn't interested because that's not your job. It's my job to conclude that your job is to tell me just enough about your script that makes me want to

Alex Ferrari 21:12
read it. Now, how do you gear up for a pitch? Like what are the good things that you should bring into battle, if you will, with you besides the pitch?

Michael Hague 21:23
My suggestion is nothing. Okay, very pointedly, or a bet. See, here's the thing, when you go to a pitch fest, this happens a lot. They'll say bring a leave behind. So you have a one pagers, people bring treatments or something like that? Well, if they say that my advice is okay, go ahead and write a one page synopsis of the story. But here's what you don't do, you definitely don't put it on the table. As the pitch began, don't ever set anything in front of the person hearing the pitch. Because if you do, if you give them something to read, there'll be reading instead of listening to you, and you want them to pay attention to you. You can have it in your briefcase or backpack or whatever. And then if they say, Well, I really my boss insists that we take back an outline, then you can whip it out and say, okay, good. Well, we have this. And sometimes I'll even recommend that someone when they ask that question. The writers say, okay, look, I know you want to see a synopsis, but one page just won't do my script justice. How about if I email it to you, and you just read the first 10 pages. And if you don't like it went by page 10. Just trash it. Just delete it, no harm, no foul. But if it pulls you in, as I know it, well, then you'll get a much better sense of what the value is, they still might say no, that's against the rules at our company. And then if they insist, give them the leave behind, but don't show it or anything else. There are people who recommend taking to a pitch things like pictures of actors who could play the role. I'm not I'm not a fan, because for two reasons. One, I personally am not a multitasker. So I'm either looking at a picture of Matt Damon, which means I'm thinking about Matt Damon, and thinking to myself, Matt Damon costs a fortune, well, you're not going to get Matt Damon for this script. So I'm losing interest by looking at that. And, and instead, you want to create a movie inside my mind, that's what you want me looking at. So you want to tell this pitch. And as you mentioned, these elements, I'm picturing this character, I'm picturing this setup, I'm picturing the obstacles that your hero will face. So you want me in my head not looking at something else.

Alex Ferrari 23:48
Now, is there a big difference or a different approaches for pitching when you're pitching at a pitch fest versus a executives office versus an elevator?

Michael Hague 24:00
Well, in the office, it's different because in the office, they are expecting you to come in ready to have a 10 to 20 minute conversation. What I often recommend in those situations is you can start that meeting by giving the 62nd pitch and then letting that be the doorway into a longer conversation. Many times though, when you go into an office meeting for a pitch, it's more about something they've already been pitched, or a script they've already looked at. And the purpose of the meeting is to discuss it. And that's a different animal altogether. The one thing is in a pitch fest, you have a finite amount of time, but you've paid money to do it. And so they're expecting you to be there on an elevator in those you know, grab them when you can moments or even in a cold call. You always want to kind of ask permission you want to say geez, I I'd love to tell you about the script I'm working on, would this be a good time to do that? Or I don't want to intrude? Or when you get somebody on a cold call, you can say, Look, I know how busy you are. But But I, I just completed a script, I'm sure you know, it's something I really think you'd be interested in. Because because it's in the same arena as this movie, you just, you know, did, or you mentioned something you have in common? Like, I know, you're a graduate of University of Oregon, and so am I. And I thought you might be willing to let me take 60 seconds, but you need to ask if it's okay to give the pitch. If it's an unexpected confrontation, or connection, something like that. The the the one other difference in a pitch fest, that's to your advantage is if you paid money for 10 minutes, you get 10 minutes. And one of the other reasons to have a pitch that's, you know, 60 seconds, or at least under two minutes is, then if they say no, and you have another project that might also be of interest, then you can say, well, we still have, you know, seven minutes left, or even if it's a five minute slot, and you only took take 60 seconds, she's got four minutes left. And I have another idea that's for a romantic comedy. Could could, would you be willing to let me present that to you right now. And so if you truly have two pitches ready, that's the only occasion where you'd pitch twice as if they say no to the first.

Alex Ferrari 26:31
Now, do you kind of touched upon it earlier? But do you have any specific advice on how to establish rapport with the person that you're pitching with?

Michael Hague 26:40
Yeah, I kind of got I know, you asked me about the eight steps. And I took so long with step one, we got sidetracked. But anyway, it's, it's after you bury your story and figure those things out, then then you want to research the person you're going to pitch pitch to, you want to write out and script the pitch, and you want to rehearse it, rehearse, rehearse, that's the preparation, the presentation is that that first art is rapport or relationship. And there are two ways that are very effective at doing that. One is finding a common experience. If you've been recommended to someone on the phone, then you want to say, you know, Bob said I should give you a call, he thought you might be interested in this project. And he also said you owe him a lunch or something like that. So you mentioned the person who's given you the referral. If it's a pitch fest, or if it's a cold call, you don't know the person, but you do know that there are golf fan. And you you know, you were a caddy for Tiger Woods once or you went to the same school, or you have something in common. Great. Now, that's not going to happen very often. I mean, really? How many of us know people that are in power in Hollywood? Or? I mean, most of us if we

Alex Ferrari 27:55
do you do know a few people, sir,

Michael Hague 27:57
I know. But I don't. Okay, I could, I could use an abacus to count them. I don't need to count. Okay, so then what you do to establish rapport is you acknowledge them for something. And it might be because you've researched them, you know, that they, like I mentioned earlier, suppose someone has made horror films, you can, you can say, you know, I was a huge fan of this of the ring if they were produced a movie, let's say, but don't just say that. Just say Why say because it scared the crap out of me or because what I loved about that horror film was that that actually, it developed a relationship between the mother and Senator, don't just say, I'm a huge fan and let it go with that, because anybody can say that, but tell why you were a fan of the movie, or the or a movie that they represented the writer for or something like that. Now, a warning is when you go to a pitch fest, it's possible, you won't know anything about who you're pitching to, or it's going to be an underling at the company. But you can always acknowledge someone for this if they're listening to your pitch, and that is they're taking the time to do it. So you can say something like, look, you know, I know that you probably rather be doing something other than this pitch fest. But it means a lot to somebody like me, who flew here all the way from jerk water USA, just a chance to talk to you and I want to tell you how much I appreciate it. And and that should be gentle. You should really be grateful and no one on the planet is immune to an acknowledgment. It just creates a connection when you say I sincerely say I want to thank you for something you did. So that is probably your strongest tool for rapport.

Alex Ferrari 29:47
And can you continue with the rest of the steps after the report was the other ones of the eight or the eight steps?

Michael Hague 29:54
Yeah, so the next one is I IN OUR in my goal to make everything our sound like our which is the work right? An X is revealed this is when you actually give the pitch part of the pitch you reveal those nine elements of the story. And and I have a tip for that too. And that is or a contrarian suggestion. A lot of people recommend the way to start a pitches give the title and the logline. And I strongly recommend against that, because titles, until you know what a movie is about hearing the title is usually meaningless. I mean, it sounds ludicrous now because it's become part of the culture. But if you heard in 1974, that there was a or 72, before the book came out that there was a movie coming up called JAWS, you would have no idea what it was about. Right? Okay. But if you said it was about, it's about a great white shark, terrorizing the community, and now, three guys have to go out a little boat and try and destroy it. And then you end that pitch by saying so my. So my screenplay and titled Jaws is the story of three men trying to defeat a great white shark. So you put the title and the logline at the end of your presentation of those elements instead of at the beginning. And otherwise, it's pretty much going through them in the order I mentioned, a good way to begin might say it might be to tell them how you came up with the idea. So instead of just jumping in and saying, Well, Susan Smith is a nuclear physicist, he say, I've always been a huge fan of, of thrillers that have strong love stories underneath. And here's where you can add movies like Three Days of the Condor or trying to think of another or body mache, I'm dating myself was asked, because notice how now you're slipping in those antecedents without using the word Annecy, you're saying, I've always been a fan of movies like this, but in so my thriller, the difference is that the the the man the hare hero falls for is really a hitman who has been assigned to kill it. Okay, so you start with how you came up with the idea grew out of kind of movies you loved or grew out of a true story or something that happened to you in the past? And then you say, so I started thinking, what if, and then you get into the hero, and the setup and those other elements, and then you're sort of off to the races.

Alex Ferrari 32:37
It's so it's when you're when you're doing that it's because a lot of people have seen pitch a pitch Fest and and just pitch in general, they just kind of go right to it, they just jump right in. And just like, you know, it's like a machine and there's no warmth to it, there's no connection. They're just like, they're literally a robot because they've been trained to be that way. And they've rehearsed so much that it's literally just a machine where you're sitting down and making a connection with another human being. And by doing what you're suggesting makes a lot more sense to me to like, how you came up with the idea and what movies you like, because that's another way to connect with the person you're pitching with. Like it they like the movie of three, you know, three days in a condor, like oh, yeah, I love that movie. Is it kind of like that? And it starts connecting different synapses in their mind and emotions already, before you even start pitching. Is that a fair statement?

Michael Hague 33:27
Absolutely. Absolutely. I think the way to think about a pitch is it's not a speech. And it's not an ad, it's a conversation. And actually, it's a conversation that you and everyone listening to this has had before because all of us, and all of you have recommended movies to people. You said, Oh, I just saw the big sick. What's that? Well, it's about this guy. And he's from Pakistan and got it done. You tell the high points and you say I just loved it. And it was hilarious. But I love the relationship. You have just given a pitch for a movie you saw you've done it 100 times. You had that conversation. All you're doing in a pitch meeting, or on the phone here is you're having a conversation about a movie you love. It's just a movie that hasn't been made yet.

Alex Ferrari 34:17
Now can you please impress upon people how important a logline is not in the pitch because you asked to do it at the end. But just in general, people kind of forget the logline. They just write a sentence. It's very it's an art in itself, isn't it?

Michael Hague 34:34
Yeah, I guess I don't want to make it sound too lofty because that sounds something difficult. Sure what but but I think loglines this way a logline is a sentence that's going to come to convey the three foundation elements of any story and that is character, desire and conflict. When I said And so Jaws is a it's about a great it's about three guys in a small boat who have to stop a great white shark. That is that is terrorizing their the beach town. I didn't say it exactly that way, because I don't remember exactly. But that's it. All I was saying is character, three guys in a boat goal destroy a great white shark conflict. It's a great white shark and it's terrorizing their their village and wants to kill them. Right? That's it, I it's not so much about honing some magic with words. It's nice if you can do that. But it's much more important that you say character desire conflict, because without knowing or saying those three things, anything else included is not going to give me an idea of what I'm going to go see. Now you can pick, you want to think about the exact words to create a vivid image of it or be very clear about it. You can add a phrase or two to make it distinct from other horror movies or about also stopping demons or creatures or whatever. But but the main thing and the reason a logline is valuable for you to formulate is it forces you to think about those three basic things in your script. And I swear I've read scripts and talked to people and heard pitches by people who don't really have never really thought about what's the goal? They just have this is about a person in a situation and then they do this and then they do that. And then this happens. That happens. It's like but what do we want? What are we rooting for? So a logline forces you to identify those three elements.

Alex Ferrari 36:39
Now, in today's world, it's not only just about the feature film anymore, it's also about series, there's I think 450 series being produced this year alone. So what's the big difference between pitching a feature film versus pitching a series?

Michael Hague 36:57
Well, on one level, it's not all that different. Because it's it's kind of the way I think of it is that you're pitching a series, but you're pitching it by detailing a lot of what would be in the pilot or the first episode of the series, because that's when we meet the hero, that so that's when the heroes set up, that's when we first have to empathize. That's when whatever the opportunity is, that is going to drive that that whole series, if it's an ongoing story, like say, Breaking Bad or Game of Thrones, that opportunity has to occur to some extent in the first episode, because otherwise, nothing's happening, then it's just a one hour setup. If it's let's say you're pitching a more traditional series, you know, under the NCIS, or something like Castle, okay, then you're just pitching a pilot, because you introduce the characters, and they have a goal that they have to accomplish at the end of that episode. So what you do is you think about that episode, and then you kind of experiments say, so this is, so imagine these two people, a mystery writer and a woman cop. And when a body is discovered, and they're thrown together, now they have to solve the murder and each week, and so you then connect it by saying, and each week or if it's an ongoing thing you say so the over arching story is about a cop who has to stop a hitman from committing a series of murders in our town. That's that's the series of Fargo. So if you take the first season of Fargo, the overarching goal is the cop has to stop the hitman. And then, but then what you do is then the one thing you want to add is in so in one episode, this might be by hat might happen. But as but by the end of the first season, this will have happened. So you clearly convey that you've not just thought about three episodes, well, you've not just thought about the opening, but what the ongoing story is going to be and what some of the other characters are going to be woven through it. So I guess the answer would be there's some more detail to add. But you still want to make sure you hit those elements. And you still want to have seeds you still accept now you're not going to pick feature films you're going to pick successful series that are similar.

Alex Ferrari 39:29
Now, is there do you have an example of a pitch that was that blew you away? Or do you remember one at all? I mean, I'm probably not but I'm just asking.

Michael Hague 39:40
I didn't know there would be a test because to convey why it blew me away, I would have to really remember it and present it to you start to find out this is this is all the the reason. In the class I construct an example of a pitch that illustrates all of these things. But that's, that's when I made up for a movie that's never been written just as an example. Got it. But if I guess, I guess I can't keep stumbling along and try and pretend I have any answer. You can say. You can say, great pitch. I've heard great pitches, but I don't remember what they exactly. So

Alex Ferrari 40:22
now, do you have any final words of wisdom as far as pitching your story?

Michael Hague 40:29
Yeah. I have hundreds we don't have time for okay. But I want people to sign up for the course. Of course, I read the book, but because there's all that. Let? Oh, yes, I do. I do have one last thing I want to add. And that is some is about a couple of things in terms of the presentation. And that is notes, and nervousness. Okay. When it comes to notes, I strongly recommend that you take note cards, and on those note cards in big letters with a, what do they what do they call that a, you know, grease pan, they used to call it a Sharpie shirt with a sharpie, you just write down keywords that will remind you of that step in your pitch. So it might be how you got the idea is you're going to refer to two antecedents just write down the antecedents. And then on card number two is your so what if, in other words, it's not something you have to look at steadily. But you want to have that as a backup, even though you've rehearsed your, your pitch. By the way, what you absolutely never want to do is read somebody a pitch. Just when I coach people on their pitch, I won't let them read their pitch to me even when I'm coaching them unless there's no other choice because it is so hard to concentrate when someone's reading to you. You have to be ready to say it as a conversation, you have to really be like an actor have to rehearse it so much that you can just make it natural, you can make it into a conversation. But notecards are good idea. Because if you have that backup, then you probably won't need to use it. The other thing is when it comes to nervousness, stop worrying about it or trying to think of a magic way that you won't be nervous because you will be just excited to save yourself. Of course, I'm nervous. I'm not used to doing this. I'm meeting somebody, this is important to me, I they're in power, and I haven't met them before, etc. So of course I'm going to be nervous. And here's what I would tell you I have worked in Hollywood now for more than 35 years. I've talked to a lot of executives, a lot of agents, I've heard them speak and I've had conversations. Never in my entire career Have I ever heard somebody say, God, I heard this great pitch, this movie would make millions it's one of the best I've ever heard. Unfortunately, we're not going to option it because the writer was so nervous. Because they're right. To put it bluntly, they don't give a shit. Right? They are, they are there. Their job is finally a good story. They want your story to be good. They don't care one way if you're nervous, if you stumble, if anything, they're looking for a story they can take back to their boss, put a feather in their cap if they if you if they can say you got to look at this because this is a terrific idea. This is the terrific story or the or they'll go back read the script, and then they'll say that. So take note cards, and don't worry about being nervous because it's not an issue.

Alex Ferrari 43:43
Michael, thank you so much for sharing a lot about pitching today. And I know again, it's such a mysterious art form and hopefully, the course that we're putting out called how to pitch your story in 60 seconds, and your book store. Please name your book again.

Michael Hague 44:02
Okay. It's tricky because there's they sound the same. The story is selling your story in 60 seconds, right? Because the book is designed for screenwriters and novelist because they're both in the situation. I'm trying to get their material read. Our course is called pitching your screenplay in 60 seconds because the course is zeroed in specifically on screenwriters.

Alex Ferrari 44:25
Michael, thank you again so much for being on the show. Again. It's an absolute pleasure as always talking to you my friend.

Michael Hague 44:30
Yeah. And it went so fast. We probably we probably been talking for three hours. Like doubly done. There's so much more to say. Period myself. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to listen to myself. My greatest joy.

Alex Ferrari 44:46
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BPS 028: The Art and Craft of Writing a Comedy with Peter Desberg & Jeffrey Davis

If you ever wanted to know some of the secrets of how to write a comedy then today’s guest might be able to help. Peter Desberg and Jeffrey Davis are the authors of Now That’s Funny!: The Art and Craft of Writing Comedy, a new book that provides an intimate look into the minds of twenty-nine of Hollywood’s funniest comedy writers from movies and TV shows like:

  • Saturday Night Live
  • Frasier
  • The Simpsons
  • Everybody Loves Raymond
  • Monk
  • Modern Family
  • The Honeymooners
  • There’s Something About Mary
  • Dumb and Dumber
  • Cheers
  • Home Improvement

The writers were asked to develop a generic comedy premise created by the authors, giving readers a window into their writing process. There were no rules, no boundaries, and no limits. What emerges is an entertaining look—illuminating and hilarious—at the creative process behind hit comedy TV shows and movies.

Enjoy my conversation with Peter Desberg and Jeffrey Davis.

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Alex Ferrari 0:04
I'd like to welcome to the show Peter Doesburg. And Jeffrey Davis. Thank you guys for doing the show.

Peter Desberg 3:49
Thank you. Our pleasure.

Alex Ferrari 3:51
So let's get started. How did you guys first meet and well first, how did each of you get into the business? And then how did you meet?

Jeffrey Davis 3:59
How did we How did I get into the business either? Yeah,

Alex Ferrari 4:02
both of you guys.

Jeffrey Davis 4:03
Well, Geoffrey got into the business. I love it. When I talked to myself. Third person. I was born into it. I'm three generations. My uncle was a composer. My dad started at MGM in 1947. A lot of the stuff of cm Turner's stuff he wrote, he went into TV in the early 50s, and ended up producing things like The Odd Couple of that girl and, and forward and my stepfather was a producer of television felt movies back in the 70s 80s and 90s when they were going through that golden age of TV movies. And I had a stepmother who was a MGM player and who was one woman named Marilyn Maxwell best movie is champion with Kirk Douglas, which is an independent film you've ever seen it? So I kind of grew up around it. And I've been around it my whole life did go back. I was bi coastal before Peter Allen invented the term so

Alex Ferrari 5:07
Okay, fantastic. How about you, Peter?

Peter Desberg 5:10
Well, for openers since since this is a podcast and you have the power to edit, I'm going to answer the first part of your question about how Jeffrey and I met, okay. Um, I'm sitting up here in my house one day, and Jeffrey is down in his car. Our kids are having a play date. They're eighth graders. And he's waiting for a son to come down, honking the horn, the kid is not coming down. And he's dreading walking in and having another Oh, hi, what do you do? My name is here's what I do. organization. So he comes in, we start talking. And one of the things he tells me he's writer, but now he's working as an academic. Jeffrey is too much to tell you is the current chair of the screenwriting department at Loyola Marymount University. Very cool. So he says, but now they're asking me to do academic writing. Do you do any Well, being that I was a college professor as well. I started laughing, saying that's all I've done forever. And as we continue talking, I told him about a project that I did years and decades ago, that I got started with where I was working with a I'm telling you the long version of the story. If you want, I can edit it. Now. It's fine. Go ahead. So I was working with a some woman calls me up one night and said, I heard you do research on the psychology of humor. I'm doing my master's degree in that area, would you be on my committee? So I said, Well, what are you doing? So I get on, I'm doing a chapter on the psychology of humor, sociology of humor, Anthropology of humor, and I'm interviewing a famous Hollywood comedy writer. I said, Who was it? And she gives me a name of the fellow whose name is on the cornerstone of the Writers Guild building. Its first president. Okay. This fellow wrote a couple of the biggest Bob Hope movies Lemon Drop, kid. I mean, lemondrop kid,

Jeffrey Davis 7:12
obviously, oh, he wrote for Abbott and Costello,

Peter Desberg 7:14
Costello. And so I said, How do you know this guy said he's my dad. So um, his name was Edmund Hartman, for people like to know. And, and so I said, Well, I'll tell you what, I'd be glad to work with you. Let's throw out your three chapters. Could your dad get us some of his friends to interview and say, Oh, no problem. And so we did. For hers, as we started asking these people instead of just, you know, we wanted to avoid interviews, like, well, you know, what got you into comedy? Well, when you're a fat Jewish kid, on the Lower East Side, you got to learn how to fight or be funny. We didn't want that kind of project. So we constructed a bunch of situations and had them solve problems that comedy writers have to solve. So I'm telling Geoffrey the story. And all of a sudden, he said, who were the writers you interviewed. And as I'm telling them, each name, his eyes are lighting up bigger and bigger. Everybody you mentioned, used to play poker around my crib with my dad every week. And he'd literally jumped off the couch and said, Let's do it. So within 20 minutes, I met

Jeffrey Davis 8:23
at Tom Cruise style.

Peter Desberg 8:27
Being a psychology professor, he yelled at me for that. And, and so from, from 20 minutes of just having met, we agreed to write a book together.

And we changed the face of it. Notice we're suddenly shifting into now that's funny, the the book together, where what we did was we wrote a generic comedy premise, gave it to each of the writers we're working with, and we said develop it. And surprisingly, they did. What we were worried about is when you ask somebody, tell us about your creative process, you have no idea if they're telling you anything that's remotely accurate. One of our one of our favorite phrases is the highest form of fiction as the autobiography.

Alex Ferrari 9:16
It's very true. So

Peter Desberg 9:19
we were really lucky. We got these quick. We had show creators show runners, I mean, amazing people. And they did it. We got to give them this premise. And right on the spot, they just started making stuff up in the room while we're sitting there.

Alex Ferrari 9:35
Thomas have an amazing,

Peter Desberg 9:37
unbelievable,

Alex Ferrari 9:38
so you guys wrote this book. So you got that wrote this book, show me the funny and you basically interviewed some of the top and legendary comedy writers in Hollywood. Sorry,

Peter Desberg 9:48
but it's called. Now that's funny. Oh, now

Alex Ferrari 9:50
that's funny. Okay. Oh, that's funny. Okay. And, and you interviewed these amazing creatives. So what was the what was the biggest revelation? you guys found from interviewing so many amazing and talented people. If there's one or two that you can

Jeffrey Davis 10:09
well, there is one common denominator and that is we asked them, was it a story or character that they started? That's a great way to watch them do it. See, that's the great thing about the interviews, is they're really in a way not interviews, because we mostly we asked some questions, but we mostly stepped aside. And they develop the same premise 24 ways. And they all neither, they didn't say character or story, they said conflict. That, for me, that was the biggest revelation. And then also the, the diversity of stories, the how different each story is, and how many lessons there are in that it's kind of, that's kind of cool. I think, you know,

Peter Desberg 10:54
there are so many books on how to write comedy, or just how to write scripts. And yeah, each one makes it sound like, well, here are the steps you have to do. This is the way you write. And it was so nice to see that exploded in real life, where each person is taking a really idiosyncratic view. And we were just fortunate to be in the same room.

Alex Ferrari 11:15
I must have been insane. So which, let me ask you, can you discuss a little bit of a few of the Comedy genres or sub sub genres? Like, you know, fish out of water? Or, you know, is there are there a few of those that you can even discuss for the listeners?

Jeffrey Davis 11:31
I'm sure. In the book, you mean that when they ended up selecting? Yeah. Like that? One? I think that's the best one.

Peter Desberg 11:41
Um, yeah, what? One, what we told him at the beginning was, here's our premise, feel free to change it in any way. You know, our view was, Hey, your comedy writers, you're not going to, you're not going to follow rules anyway. It's not like they're accountants, they're going to do what they want. So we said, we'll just start out by stepping out of your way. And the premise that we we did was basically a 50 ish woman, husband passes. And they've always lived very well. So she assumes that they're going to continue living well. And she didn't know that they spent everything they made. Okay, so the sudden is an early 50s woman with no skills and no work experience. She's left out Nicole with nothing. So she has to move in with her, her young corporate daughter in New York. And one of the one of our favorites was this fellow threw out the daughter, and had the mother get into a work relationship with a man who ends up being a Bernie made off character. And so all of a sudden, she has to expose this horrible thing that he's doing. So I mean, they went all over the place. And, you know, in a number of cases, several male writers said, you know, I've actually never been a mother or a daughter. But I sure know a lot about fathers and sons. So that's what I'm going to do. We said, please go for it. And one of the things that we enjoyed the most, was that a lot of them thought out loud for us. And they actually narrated while they they work. The premise on one of our favorites was Walt Bennett. It's a little tough to use the C word now in any public forum, but he wrote for The Cosby Show, yes. And fair enough. And Walt was so incredible, he said, Okay. So let me see, typically, if somebody says they're coming to visit you, you know when they're coming, so I'm going to have the mother come unannounced, because that's going to create more conflict. So then he says, Okay, so if she's going to come announce, what's the worst time she could possibly select, to make her entrance? Well, it's late afternoon. The boyfriend's over at the apartment. They're in their little bedroom. There's a knock on the door. So it says how can I make this even worse? Well, she lived in a big house in the Midwest. And now she's coming to this little efficiency apartment in New York. And normally a person comes to visit with a couple of suitcases. She's got the moving band downstairs. And as she's walking up the stairs, the cousin is lugging up this huge sofa which will barely fit in the door, and certainly not in the apartment. So at each point, he's constantly saying it was Jeffrey was saying conflict using How can I create the conflict and how can I escalate it? How can I make it worse?

Alex Ferrari 14:46
That's a great that's a great tip for me cuz a lot of people will write comedy in that ad any conflict

Jeffrey Davis 14:52
you can have. I mean, that that's the problem with with comedy even more than drama, which I think We pretty much all know that comedy is harder to write because everybody has an opinion. I mean, there are more agreed upon standards of what makes a Drama Comedy is very much personal taste and what you'd like. I mean, like, I'm sure we would like same things.

Peter Desberg 15:16
Obviously, Jeffrey and I have proven that point. Many times.

Jeffrey Davis 15:19
The other one that I particularly like, is Lou Schneider, who was in the room on everybody writers room on Everybody Loves Raymond. There's grandparents in the premise, but they're kind of off to the side. And it really just says it, he took the grandpa and just says that they don't really understand. They relate more to their granddaughter than their daughter. And he made the whole story between the mother who's kind of a fish out of water with her parents there. And he had a whole wonderful bid, I think, like some of my students have said, I've taught them has taught them a lot about how you can construct character, where he has the 80 year old father teaching the 50 year old mother how to drive. You know what I mean? And how you, you

Peter Desberg 16:11
know, he took he took the standard joke of dad teaches his teenage daughter to drive and he switched it to 80 and 51.

Jeffrey Davis 16:19
One of the things that one of the things that I learned is that, and I've been, as I said, I've been around it, most of my life, but you know, you can help someone get better at comedy, you can give them a lot of techniques. But I think one of the things we learn from these people is comedy writers are different. They think differently. They think, as one of them said, I think Peter Casey said it's not in the book. But he said, he said to us before the interview, it's a matter of thinking to the left. And and drama writers don't have to do that. And I'm not putting down drama, right? It's just a gift. But to

Peter Desberg 17:02
give you an example, we interviewed Eliot Schulman who was the was the show runner for home improvement. And he told us a great story at the beginning. We said my, my father committed suicide. So I went back East. A few years later, got my sister, and we recreated the drive from his office to the bridge where he jumped on this cab and you can't imagine a heavier emotional moment. And I thought my father was a German Jew, and kind of cheap. I wonder how much he tipped the cab driver on the way to his own suicide.

Alex Ferrari 17:45
That is a that's a one. I mean, that's a wonderful line. That's such

Peter Desberg 17:49
and once again, it just shows you as Jeffrey was saying. They see things that a lot of people miss. Um, we had a comedy team, cinco Pauling, Ken Dario, they wrote My Dinner for Schmucks, there are a whole bunch of things. One of the movies they wrote was bubble boy. Oh, I remember bubble boy. So it told us a story that they went to producer with the script, said I really liked the script a lot. But do you think maybe by the first act, we can lose the bubble?

Alex Ferrari 18:20
The movie is called Bubble Boy.

Peter Desberg 18:22
So can turn to the whispered Yeah, we can call it boy.

Alex Ferrari 18:31
That's G. Know You Were talking to you, guys.

Peter Desberg 18:37
I'm just following along with what Jeff was saying about conflict. One of our favorite interviews, we interviewed Bob Meyer, who among other things, was the showrunner for Roseanne for a number of years. And tell him who he mentored. Oh, he

Jeffrey Davis 18:51
went to Chuck Lorre.

Alex Ferrari 18:55
Who's this? Who's this? Chuck? i You speak of? Yes, exactly. So anyway,

Peter Desberg 18:59
he he is such a consummate Pro, that it took him like, you know, some people sort of fumbled around to get started. He said to us, first thing I'm going to do is I'm going to take these characters, and I'm going to cast them so I can see the actors I'm writing for. Okay. And it took him maybe five or six minutes, and he wrote a perfect little sitcom, like a network sitcom version was unbelievable to see how quickly and fluidly he wrote. So Jeffrey looks at him and says, Could you darken it a little? And I'm, I wish that I could transmit the look, he got on his face that sort of impish grin. picture somebody with their hand on a dial saying, how dark Do you want it? Mm hmm. And so within a couple of minutes, he says, Okay, I'm going to kind of lose the mother. And I'm going to take this, this young corporate girl and I'm gonna change her occupation. She's Gonna be a private detective, because that constantly puts her in danger, which will keep a lot of conflict going. And she's very pretty an audience is like pretty people. But I got to give her a problem. So I'm going to give her a pretty serious drug habit, because that makes her an underdog and we like underdog or still, we're still comedy, right? Still comedy got it. And so she's got the big case that she's solving. And she finally has the opportunity to break the case, she's got a secret witness, who is going to reveal everything. So she's got this meeting set up, and she's on pins and needles waiting to go to this meeting. And to calm herself down, says I'm going to stop home and change, which means do some drugs. The minute she opens the door, there's everybody she knows, ready to do an intervention Jesus. And, and literally, and I mean, he was making this up in the room as we were talking to him. And as soon as he finished, he said, You know what, I'm going to pitch this story. You know,

Alex Ferrari 21:01
I was about to say, Why aren't these guys pitching these stories? These brilliant,

Peter Desberg 21:05
several people told us they pitch the ideas that they came up with. We told them everything they come up with is theirs. We just have the right to reprint it. Yes.

Alex Ferrari 21:15
That's awesome. Now you talk a lot about, you know, we're talking a little bit about structure and comedy. Is there. Is there such a thing as like, a comedic hero's journey, if we're gonna cause some sort of structure in regards to just writing either television, or feature films.

Jeffrey Davis 21:35
I'm not aware of one. I'm sure there is I'm sure there are people who try to sell that hero's journey. I'm not a big fan. I'm sorry, I'm not a big fan of the hero's journey. I understand there's valuable things in it. My, my problem is what's happened. And I think we're kind of leaving this period, there was a period in the early 2000s, late 90s, where there were all the gurus, you know, mentioned any other names, we all were they are where it became almost SDN, you know, where you had to follow, you know, I went to one, I remember, a producer sent me to one, I was working on something, I'm not gonna mention the person's name, who I went to, and I think the producer wants to pay $1,000 for my then partner, and I go and, and he got to, he got to a point in it, where he said, Well, now he had it. He had like, a bunch of steps. And he said, you know, he said, When you go to the studio, don't mention my steps. Because I remember calling up my father, who I went to, you know, for advice, because he was a great comedy writer, and he said, call the producer right now and get your money back get his money. Yes, comedy? No, I mean, I think, pretty much, particularly with this generation. I think, you know, they have seen so many movies have read so much television. I think they're starting to read again, hopefully, you know, they have, they have an innate sense of structure. The problem I have is when teachers put structure ahead of character and conflict, character and conflict is where structured comes from, not the other way around. And so often it's easy to teach strut, well, you know, it is easy to teach structure.

Alex Ferrari 23:34
Yeah, it's ABCs. Right?

Jeffrey Davis 23:36
What difference does it make? What happens on page 15? If you don't know who the characters are?

Peter Desberg 23:41
Now, I don't want to be divisive here. But I think we have to divide your question into two parts. Okay. So I'm hoping you'll tell me what they are.

Alex Ferrari 23:52
Okay. The two parts of my question.

Peter Desberg 23:56
Sorry, sorry. I was just messing with you. When you talk about comedy writing comedy, you have to distinguish a bit between writing for TV and movies. And your question really pertained to writing film comedy, where you have a story with an arc. And with it's the opposite in writing, like sitcoms, because although you have arc blitz for every episode, the characters have to kind of remain the same, because you're counting on those characters being there next week, with their same characteristics. And so the arcs of the stories are very different. And they're much smaller because everything has to kind of remain the same.

Alex Ferrari 24:41
Makes perfect sense. Yeah, yeah. Obviously, striding for films and writing for TV is two completely different worlds. And because you have a course of a season to kind of do arcs, but even writing comedies I don't, it's not like Breaking Bad, you know, which I could argue is a comedy, but But but dark. It's a dark, it's dark. Yes. But

Jeffrey Davis 25:04
yeah, I could I agree with that. But I would also point out that comedy off network comedy is more and more serialized. So so, you know, a lot of feature writers are writing for television now. And I remember as a kid, hearing my parents talk about, oh, gosh, we'll never get so and so because they only do movies, they don't want to do television. And that is all flipped now. Oh, it's complete. Everybody wants to do television now?

Alex Ferrari 25:33
Nobody. So what do you guys think of this whole new streaming revolution that we have going on with with the Netflix and the Hulu's? And, and I think

Peter Desberg 25:41
it's wonderful. I

Jeffrey Davis 25:42
think it's great. And I'll tell you why. I think it's great. More work, less money. When you're starting. I have two students who graduated two years ago, and are on the reboot of very successful the reboot of one day at a time, which is a Hispanic, we're gonna Moreno is in it. A lot of you know, an actress who was on six feet under for the whole run is the star of it, Rita Moreno is in it. And these two young writers are the junior writers on the show. And yes, they're making a lot less money than they would make this as us or other network shows. But they're getting the break, which would have been much harder to get before. They're learning their craft from the two showrunners. One is a graduate of LMU, many years ago worked on How I Met Your Mother and a billion other shows. And she and her co creator. It was on everybody loves right. And normally or comes in every day at 93 years old. And he is yeah, he's amazing. He is amazing. And so yeah, it's a wonderful. It's a really good reboot. I mean, I could say some not so great things about some other reboots. I think it's I think it's great. Because I think we have more. It's basically now who's not making pro product. Right?

Alex Ferrari 27:09
There's so much product going on, but it's insane. Yeah, I think last count was like 500 shows, wow, on on scripted shows on television right now are on. You can't even say television anymore. But on your

Peter Desberg 27:23
Jeffrey's comedy history was bad two really, really tightly controlled sitcoms, and six jokes per page.

Jeffrey Davis 27:34
But six to be like six,

Peter Desberg 27:37
you told me was six. Oh, I lied. And I quote.

Jeffrey Davis 27:41
Well, they used to make you put jokes in the head, nothing to do with the story. It

Peter Desberg 27:45
was a joke. Joke per page count.

Alex Ferrari 27:47
Really so so that structure it's

Jeffrey Davis 27:49
really an old school thing. You know, shows like taxi and cheers. And Frasier broke that, you know, and also the Mary Tyler Moore Show broke that because those were what you know, write writers say those were really beaut those were beautifully written shows did go broke fat

Peter Desberg 28:07
when, when we interviewed Peter Casey and he talked about Frasier said, we'd be in the writers room, and somebody will come up with a brilliant joke. And then somebody else would say, You know what, only 10% of our audience is going to understand that. And Peter Casey said, that's why we're keeping it in. We're keeping our 10 percenters the things that made that show so brilliant,

Alex Ferrari 28:29
you right, because there are a lot of jokes like over, you know, people's heads in that show. I remember that show, even when I was younger watching it. I would laugh, but like some things I just wouldn't get. And then as I watch it as an adult, I'm like, Oh, I get that now.

Peter Desberg 28:42
Once it went to cable and beyond, it's everything is unshackled now and you can do pretty much what you want. Yeah,

Alex Ferrari 28:50
I was gonna ask you, do you feel like because of these new opportunities for writers, they're really, there are the shackles are off. I mean, the creative freedom on some of these shows, these Netflix shows and Hulu shows, Amazon shows there. There's nothing that would ever go on network television.

Peter Desberg 29:05
I mean, if you go back to the days where, you know if the hero was going to kiss the arrow and one foot had to be on the floor,

Alex Ferrari 29:12
right?

Jeffrey Davis 29:14
Yeah, I'm surprised. The Netflix model is very different. They, they don't interfere in the same way that the network's do. And, you know, they'll give you notes but from what I understand from the people, I know who we're working with Netflix that they just love it. I don't know anything about Hulu. I don't know. I don't I know they, they did a wonderful. They took them out. This is not comedy, but they took the Margaret Atwood book. And they're doing that and she was happy with it. She's letting them do a second season, which was not the novel. So So Handmaid's Tale. Yeah, I think you know, is there always going to be crap? Yes, yes. Always good.

Peter Desberg 30:00
But it's much clearer crap now. Yeah,

Jeffrey Davis 30:02
I think the one thing that, you know, everybody says, Oh, the network's will go away. I do not believe they first of all the networks on a big chunk of basic cable, so they want something. The big hit on the networks right now is the show called this as us which is created by a comedy writer. And it's sort of melodrama has comedy and drama in it out the definition of melodrama, but has that. And I know somebody who is running the Jennifer Lopez show, which is a detective show. And this is the network's what they do, as opposed to, to Netflix and Hulu is they gave this guy who's a very successful guy, they gave him the note, make it make the scenes more like this is us, which is a family show. And he's writing a cop show Jesus was so that still goes on at the network's I think networks did Spartan up a couple of years ago, they put they went back to summer replacement. They realized they had to when I was a kid, you know, I forget someone would go off on the Smothers Brothers would come on or you know, they would be summer shows. Now we're back to that on the network's they have to to keep the ratings up.

Peter Desberg 31:22
But it's interesting and almost every writer that that we interviewed, managed to say something bad about who they had to write for. A number of them said, You know what, I've made enough money as a writer now I'm becoming a playwright. Because nobody can touch a single word in my script unless I permitted, right. And they were just so sick of the idea that somebody is always taking this stuff and rewriting them or reinterpreting them.

Alex Ferrari 31:53
Yeah, do you? Have you guys seen that show Grace and Frankie, that Jane Fonda is great. It's amazing. It's amazing when I saw that show come up. And obviously, it's not aimed at my demographic. I'm a younger guy. But I've had I've had millennials. I know millennials, who are huge fans of that show. Well, they were very

Jeffrey Davis 32:13
smart. And the way they wrote it is that they had they had a younger demographic because of you know, they don't pay attention to demographics. Anyway. For who's watching Sharon, what are they watching? So I can see as a form of demographic, it's not the network. It's not

Alex Ferrari 32:34
the deals. No, no, it's changing the bunch are seeing

Jeffrey Davis 32:36
younger generation in the show. Hmm. All I can say is there are so many shows on television that owe a huge debt to Neil Simon and the odd couple. If Grace and Frankie is not the odd couple of God, you know who created that show? Is a Grayson. Frankie is Martin Kaufman, who created co created friends. sort of see it's a deep version of friends.

Alex Ferrari 33:05
Yeah. And but yeah, the point was greats and Frankie's like that show would never I don't think ever hit network television.

Jeffrey Davis 33:13
Oh, no. Well, it would have during the time of the Golden Girls, The Golden Girls and look at that. You know

Alex Ferrari 33:20
that? You heard how have you heard that there is a monster, like resurgence in the Golden Girls like the fan base is all these millennials. It doesn't surprise me at all. It's great. I was watching it when I was a teenager. Yeah, I was in love with that show. I was just such a wonderful show was so well written. The characters were so well developed.

Jeffrey Davis 33:39
Susan Harris isn't amazing, right?

Alex Ferrari 33:42
I mean, it was wonderful. And you and then you go back and you go Oh, my God. I was a teenager watching The Golden Girls like how is that? But it's amazing. But when

Jeffrey Davis 33:52
again they made sure that the stories were universal. Yep. And then that works didn't want to make a show about older women past 50 You don't want Estelle Getty was doing that. I don't know if you know this when Estelle Getty was playing be Arthur's mother. She was actually younger than Bea Arthur.

Alex Ferrari 34:10
Really? No idea why it was good makeup on her part that

Jeffrey Davis 34:16
you well, you know, the great thing is now that's funny has all of these stories in it to about show business and about the history of showbiz? Peter tell the

Peter Desberg 34:29
one of the interesting things is that everybody practically that we interviewed said, You know what we find that we're telling you stories that we don't normally tell in interviews, because of the difference in format that we've done. And all of these things came up in really interesting ways. One of my favorite stories. You mentioned before you were a fan of Frasier. We asked. We asked Peter Casey about about the chair Yeah. And he said, We treated that chair like a character. Frazier was a spinoff character from cheers. And he was getting a chance to build a new life. He was now gonna be a minor celebrity in a secondary market. He had a building and the the coolest part of Seattle, he hired one of the best decorators and every style and curve of furniture and color matched and was coordinated. And then all of a sudden, at the last minute his dad moves in. And that chair was the reminder that you're never going to have the life you planned. It actually showed you a concrete version of the conflict. He said, we brought in a set designer to find the ugliest fabric that he could find. Then he brought in a swatch book of the every color that you could have of that horrible pattern. It picked the most clashing color. And then they brought it in they they created the chair, and then they they took a utility knife and slashed it, and then put in duct tape all over it. Oh, cheese. And there it was in every show. You said, see.

Alex Ferrari 36:15
That's brilliant. Now, what are some of the common mistakes you find writers making when they're writing comedy?

Peter Desberg 36:24
Go ahead. You're wrong. Yeah. I think common mistakes. I can I mean, okay, I can give you. One usually is that you create a joke that's too esoteric. Because a joke is based on shattering an assumption. And people don't know enough to make that assumption. It's not going to be funny. If I make a joke about a postal delivery guy, well, we have a whole bunch of reactions we have to the post office. And that's going to work. If I give you a joke about a pastry chef, and how we use the wrong kind of shortening.

Alex Ferrari 37:12
No, not so much. Only the pastry chefs in the audience will get it

Peter Desberg 37:16
exactly. And so that's one thing you're always going to do. Another is there's a level of tension you have to get in order to get a laugh too little and you don't get it too much. And you gross out the audience. So it's it's another place where we're terrible things happen.

Alex Ferrari 37:35
Okay, so So movies like There's Something About Mary, which arguably is a classic.

Peter Desberg 37:42
Well, we have a director who wrote that no wrote it,

Alex Ferrari 37:45
right. And that movie at the time, I mean, for the audience, for members in the audience who weren't around or didn't understand that time when that movie hit. It was a gigantic hit.

Peter Desberg 37:56
And 11 years to get made. Did you know that

Alex Ferrari 38:00
that did not know that. But it doesn't surprise me at least because that movie is

Peter Desberg 38:04
it was a great story that Ed told us that he took it around, couldn't get it made, bumped into one of the Farrelly brothers, who said, how did that move your viewers to reset it never got made? He said, You're kidding. When I give talks to students, I used that script as an example. We got to make that

Alex Ferrari 38:21
movie. And they were hot, hotter than hot at that moment in time.

Jeffrey Davis 38:24
Exactly. And they got it made, I think within months.

Peter Desberg 38:30
Again, you could see, we just talked, for example about how much tension do you put in there? The fact that you're making jokes about a person who has an intellectual deficit is a touchy subject for a lot of dowel movie,

Alex Ferrari 38:45
it was a touchy subject.

Peter Desberg 38:46
That scene where all

Alex Ferrari 38:49
the hair the hair seen?

Peter Desberg 38:51
Yeah, you've got gonna borrow some of that moose, right.

Alex Ferrari 38:55
I mean, in normally they teach you not to kick the dog, but they do more than that.

Jeffrey Davis 39:02
But the trick was that, and John talked a little bit, John and John Strauss wrote that with a director, and they had the script out there forever. But what Ed talked about was the fact that you liked these people so much that you liked everybody in the movie, except maybe not even that Dylan was such a nerd.

Peter Desberg 39:32
No, but they use such a great device. When when we when we interviewed Charlie Peters. He told us that one of the things he loves to use as a device called a third object, he gave us an example of Beauty and the Beast. Were at one point they're having this this lavish dinner outside and they see a wolf and the beauties their heart is pounding and She's frightened and the Beast is salivating looking at dinner. And it showed you immediately, there's their separate reactions to the same object, and you immediately saw their character differentiation. And so, in, There's Something About Mary, the, the, the intellectual deficit boy acted as a third object, where one character was really empathic, and went out of his way to be nice to him. And the other character would kind of kick them and push them around when nobody was looking. So saw their personalities, by the same way they treated the third object in this case, that boy,

Alex Ferrari 40:35
was just as you were talking about that I just think Franken beans just came in Frank impedes fracking, such a great movie.

Jeffrey Davis 40:47
That's my favorite scene, of course, this because, and then the other thing that this is about the stories you learn is that is, is that one of the fair, I think Peter fairly said, we're gonna we're gonna do this, Ben, with you playing yourself at 17. And he said, no one will ever buy that. And of course, we look at the movie now. And we say, it wouldn't work without that. Say it's funny how these decisions get made in comedy. And there's a lot of stories like that in in in the book.

Alex Ferrari 41:21
Now, I've been around and been working with stand up comics, probably for a better part of a decade. And I've, I've been around the sad clowns. Alongside, some of them are my best, some are my best friends. And just from your point of view, because I'm sure a lot of the people you interviewed, or we've talked to do some sort of stand up comedy, in one way, shape, or form. Do comics, in your opinion, need therapy?

Jeffrey Davis 41:51
Like that, because I'm a I'm a, I'm a client, or a patient

Peter Desberg 41:58
as somebody who has done that very thing. Okay. First, going back one of the, we found two interesting things. One is that a number of the people that we wrote, had graduate degrees in math and science. And what's interesting is, in when you're in a writers room, they kind of break down into two groups. They're either story guys or joke guys, and all the ones with math and science backgrounds. We're story, guys. And, uh, I have probably a third to a half of the the writers we interviewed had standup experience. And obviously, they were the joke guys. And it's a very different approach that they took. And you, you may find this interesting that we, one of the questions we asked, after all this was done was, how do you know if your stuff is funny? And, you know, I remember back to a guy interview decades ago, who said, you know, that's a really tough thing for me as a writer, because I sit in my office by myself working on a movie, and I come up with what I think is a good joke. So I walk out to my secretary 14 years and say, Do you think this is funny? And she says, yeah, that's real funny. He says, with stand ups, it's a survival skill, you tell that you tell the bit, you've got a half second to find out if it worked or not. And you learn to survive by getting that instinct of is this gonna work? And interestingly, we had four or five teams of writers. And they said, we find out instantly if something's funny if we make our partner crack up.

Alex Ferrari 43:35
That makes Yeah, that makes perfect sense. They're, they're their own bouncing boards.

Peter Desberg 43:39
And they're always trying to make the other guy laugh, and in their

Alex Ferrari 43:43
heart, and they're probably harder to make laugh than anybody else, because they know each other's techniques.

Peter Desberg 43:47
That's right. It's it's interesting that I worked with a friend of mine named Greg Dean, I don't know if you've run across him, who is a stand up coach in Santa Monica. We wrote a piece of software teaching people how to write jokes. Okay. One of the things we talk about is that basically stand ups rant, that's what they do. They talk about stuff that frustrates them that gets them angry that and so again, you have to find material that other people are also going to find kind of annoying, and then find a take on what you do. And so again, we get this idea that that stand ups are either angry people or they're a lot of people like you know, Louie CK, one of our favorites. mm x about personally painful stories, but makes them funny. Yes, he does. These people are depressed. But I'm telling the Louis black story but

Jeffrey Davis 44:48
Oh, I love Lewis. I mean to. He was, you know, his, his, his persona is he's a very, very angry guy. And I hurt a couple years ago i Some idiot journalist was, you know, who obviously hadn't prepared was asking him a question. It was one of those events and they were, he was probably getting interviewed like 20 times in this one red carpet event and they said, so are you this angry offstage as you are on stage? And he said, I hope this has distorted pewters thinking, Yeah, I'll be in big trouble later. He said, No, obviously not. If I were I would have had a stroke by now. You know? He's gotta be angry that no, he said it's his persona. And he just talked about he actually talked in that same interview about Jack Benny, who I worship and who was actually in real life and incredibly generous person work to with Rubenstein I think to save Carnegie Hall was incredibly generous, he would be helped so many people, but that's not funny.

Alex Ferrari 46:01
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Jeffrey Davis 46:12
Cheap is funny. Generous is not in a so that's what Louis Louis Black was saying. And also, I don't know if you know, Louis black started as a playwright.

Alex Ferrari 46:22
That makes sense. He's he's he so sharp. He went, he went to

Peter Desberg 46:25
Yale Drama.

He has a master's degree in drama.

Alex Ferrari 46:28
Wow. Hey, what

Jeffrey Davis 46:30
the hell no know I lay right next to me school.

Alex Ferrari 46:35
After being around stand up comics for so long. You, you see their stage persona, and then the guys off stage are not generally that very rarely do I see one that's on all the time. And if they are on all the time, they're gonna burn out sooner rather than later. I was

Jeffrey Davis 46:51
thinking about one because he died the other day, Jerry Lewis, Yahoo. God, yeah. Who was on all the time and needed to be the center of attention. And I'm sure that it came from an enormous insecurity and his childhood or something. I mean, don't have to be a psychologist to figure that out. But yeah, I was much sadder about Don Rickles. Because Don, life was a great guy.

Alex Ferrari 47:20
I heard that from people that he was he's just a very sweet man was a great guy. He was a sweet man. He was not nearly as not what's the word I'm looking for?

Jeffrey Davis 47:31
Sona. But if you really look at my I took my son six months before he died, I took my son to see Rickles. And he was still in a wheelchair, but his mind was clear. And he was really funny. And, and the thing is, is that if you really look at it from our perspective of 2017, it wasn't a lot that mean, you know, and it wasn't right. You know, the one thing I wanted to just go back for a second, one of the things that we did in the book is we asked a lot about process. Okay. And one of the things that I've noticed is that what most people say, I don't know, this always got into it, because we did a lot of editing we, the book would have been the Bible, if we have you know, it is once you start writing, don't go back. Keep writing, you know, on the first draft, if there are places missing, keep going. A lot of people liked outliers, but just as many didn't know, in television, I don't know if you're aware of this, but this might be of interest is people don't outline first in comedy. You sit in a room and this is what I thought that the great thing about now that's funny is that is that you actually are going into a writers room. And the thing Peter talked about, that Bob Meyer did is exactly what goes on in writers room. You just keep pitching ideas and stories. And and then you come up with something and you'll be in there 1213 hours in in, in the real world. But one of the things they've all said is yes, you can outline. But in TV, you break a story in a room. I know they did that even on breaking that you sit with the other writers, and you break the story. Then someone goes out and writes the outline, and then I know should madman which had comedic elements. All of the scripts were written. The scripts were written in the room with all the writers together, which I've never heard of before, but it worked. And guess what? All the writers except one on Mad Men had been sitcom writers, including that leader or whiner at an actor announces it. Who was on Golden Girls. That was his big thing. Break. The guy that created madman was a sitcom writer. You know that Alan Ball started as the sitcom writer that I made that makes a lot of sense. Yeah, he was uncivil. Okay, the play right like Sorkin you know, and but the big advice I've gotten over the years and that's in the book is, once you start, Don't stop, keep going to get a crappy first draft. And, you know, because otherwise you'll be on it forever. I, I have a colleague who, who keeps talking to me about a screenplay he's been writing for 20 years. Well, maybe if you're writing a novel, you might take 10 years, a screenplay? No,

Alex Ferrari 50:45
no, I've talked to numerous screenwriters on this show. And, yeah, the professional they're all obviously professional screenwriters. So when when I tell them stories of you know, I've had this guy who's been on a screenplay for three years, they're like, that's, they're not professionals. They're, they're professionals. Don't do that. No, one's there's no, there's no honor. In the struggling writer who took five years to write the movie that there's this, there's that's ridiculous.

Jeffrey Davis 51:13
I think you're writing a novel that is unique. That's

Alex Ferrari 51:18
really different for that's a different form. But as far as screenwriting, or sitcom writing or anything like that, it'll take that long to do IT professionals knock it out. And the best advice?

Jeffrey Davis 51:30
Yeah, and I think the thing you're saying is, and I completely agree with it, is they have to learn to manage the, the feeling that it sucks. They have to deal with that and that professional does,

Peter Desberg 51:45
to give to give a little empirical support to what Jeffrey saying, what's

Jeffrey Davis 51:49
the word empirical mean? I don't think

Alex Ferrari 51:50
that is it. That's a 52 cent word,

Peter Desberg 51:53
sir. Well, I'd like to say I'm bucking the trend, but you'll say that's 100 cent word.

Alex Ferrari 52:01
It's a phrase, sir. That's a phrase. He said you were saying?

Peter Desberg 52:04
Yes. Before I was what? There was a huge study on creativity at Berkeley. And they found two traits that cut across every field. In terms of creativity, the creative people, a have the ability to tolerate ambiguity, and be the important one. They've learned not to judge. They avoid judging, they suspended. And what Jeffrey's always telling me is students will write a draft or two and they say, Oh, this is no good. And they don't want to go on because they haven't created a masterpiece in their first draft. We, we like, we like Hemingway's phrase of right drunk, edit sober.

Alex Ferrari 52:50
That's a that's a great way. It's a great, great saying. And it's so true, is it I know Mamet said it but I think he took it from Hemingway. What writing is easy. All you have to do is sit in front of the typewriter and bleed.

Peter Desberg 53:04
Yeah, watch the blood spots appear on your forehead.

Alex Ferrari 53:07
I'm not sure who said it. But I don't Mamet said it. But I think he took it from me.

Peter Desberg 53:10
Right? It was Hemingway. It was it was anyway. Yeah. No, the

Alex Ferrari 53:14
best advice I ever got for screenwriting, or writing in general, was from and I say this story all the time on the show, but I'm gonna say it again. Jim Uhls, the writer fightclub Sure. He said, If you're going to begin writing, sit down, write a screenplay. Do not stop. Go all the way through, do not edit, just write it out. When you're done, put it in a drawer. Sit down, start writing the second screenplay, and then do the same thing. And then start writing a third screenplay. When you're done with the third screenplay, pick up the first screenplay and then start rewriting that because by now you're a better writer than you were when you first started. That's great advice. Isn't that amazing?

Jeffrey Davis 53:51
It's amazing. We had Pedro Almodovar to the University last year, and I love his process. He's amazing. He will write three things at once. And he'll have different desks which I think Freud was the one who started that he only has two. So he'll he'll have different desks. So if he gets blocked on one project, he'll go to the other he doesn't stop and and I think that's kind of what you're what you're saying is is if if you get frozen on something, rather than suffering over it, go to another project and problem will probably be solved when you come back. I always recommend even though it's not a screenwriting book, I always think the Anne Lamott book Bird by Bird, any writer should read

Peter Desberg 54:42
that before free go past this point. An old comedy writer that I interviewed, and this was before the days of computers we was writing on a typewriter said whenever I find myself blocked, what I do is I go back and I take the last two pages I wrote and I tear them up Oh God, I don't care how clever it was it got me into this corner.

Alex Ferrari 55:05
Yeah, that's so you purposely delete what you just wrote in order to get you to start writing again.

Peter Desberg 55:12
And you may not realize that you box yourself in but you did.

Alex Ferrari 55:16
No, of course. Of course. That's Oh, that's, that's brutal, but yet very effective.

Jeffrey Davis 55:21
Yeah. That's a good Yep. Peter, I don't think you've ever shared that with me.

Peter Desberg 55:25
But I have, but you don't pay attention when we talk.

Alex Ferrari 55:28
I'm glad. I'm glad I could bring you two together a little way. And

Peter Desberg 55:32
it'll be gone for lunch.

Alex Ferrari 55:35
All right, so I have a few more questions to ask you. What advice would you give a writer wanting to break into writing for television and today's world?

Jeffrey Davis 55:44
Well, my advice is going to be coming from my now 14 years at Loyola. And nine years. Oh, good. God is coming up on nine years as chair of screenwriting. I'm not talking about the grad students. Now I'm talking about undergrads are very well come out at you know, anywhere between 22 and 24. You take any job you can get some of them come out, and they say, Well, I want to be a writer's assistant in the writers room, because I want to write well, you got to earn that. That doesn't, it would vary what the story I told you about my two students who are on who were on one day at a time now they had one of them was Jeff Carlin's assistant for a year and a half, almost two years, and then worked on the TV show he's on now. And the other one made independent films and shorts and did temp jobs. And then this producer, a Creator, who had been their teacher at school, brought them together as a team and brought them on the show. But you take any job you can get as long as it's in the business. All of my seniors from last year are working.

Alex Ferrari 57:04
Let me see.

Peter Desberg 57:05
Let me just add something to what Jeffrey said, by using the N word networking. The number of jobs you know the number of people that get into a room because a friend of ours, you know, friend of his said, Hey, there's a vacancy in the room, come on in numbers, the people that get in because they're so wonderful. And so you know, meet as many people as you can work with as many people as you can. And be pleasant while you're doing it.

Jeffrey Davis 57:32
Yeah, I think the days when you could be a spoiled entitle person, or over, I'll tell you, JJ Abrams, who some of you know this, but JJ is like we're best buddies. JJ Abrams, dad was a big producer. AJ is not first generation, his dad was a TV movie producer. And so he was raised inside the business. And he, he says that the minute someone who comes to work for he and his wife looks entitled, they're out. They don't give them a second chance. Because there's too many people who want that chance. I couldn't be spoiled and entitled and difficult. I'm very proud of the students at LMU. Because they don't come out with that entitle level, they are willing to start at the bottom and pay their dues. The odds of I mean, aside from what happened to the two students I mentioned, that's mostly going to happen to grad students. And even then it's going to take a couple of years, you have to be prepared. If you want to be a writer in television, I can't speak to movies, because movies are entirely different business now. And and the majors don't make that many movies, right. But television, you have to be prepared to give it a minimum of five years. So you're where you think you want to be.

Peter Desberg 58:58
I moonlight as a clinical psychologist, and I only work with people who have stage fright. And I remember one actor coming in to see me. And his first words are, I'm an actor. I don't do commercials and I don't do soaps for suck now. That lie and I said oh, when you forgot and I don't work.

Jeffrey Davis 59:20
Absolutely say that or, you know,

Alex Ferrari 59:22
I did it well. Yeah, no, no, it's that that that kind of mentality is the I don't want to do this or I don't want to do that is that the worry the business will beat them out of that. Eventually, you know, because you're someone who never

Jeffrey Davis 59:37
says that. That's why everybody loves her except Donald Trump.

Alex Ferrari 59:42
Mm hmm.

Jeffrey Davis 59:43
Meryl Streep does not even today. Have that attitude. And she certainly could if she wanted to. Her attitude is she doesn't want to do something is she's very gentle. And she's very loving and she sometimes will even wear commend someone she thinks is more right for something. But that's why she's Meryl Streep is not just because she's a brilliant actress. You know, there is never a reason to be unkind to other people that you were. And you will be remembered for that. Other than Peter being unkind to me on a daily basis, which I've gotten used to,

Peter Desberg 1:00:22
if you have three or four hours, I can give you a couple of really good stories.

Jeffrey Davis 1:00:27
But he's unkind to me. Exactly. Yeah.

Peter Desberg 1:00:31
We've barely scratched the surface, I

Jeffrey Davis 1:00:33
think I think it's a really important thing for young writers to remember is you got to earn it, you've got to earn it. And even when you get into the room, if you get the room to sit, oh, I'll give you an example. I'm trying to think how can I not make myself the hero of the story? No. I had a student listen, because this is the first the best undergraduate joke writer, um, character that I've ever had in the 14 years of being there. She was 21. I mean, this is how good she was, she could look at somebody else. Because I run my I run my classes, like a writers room, particularly the upper division class. And because that's how I was taught, and, and she could look at somebody else's script and come up with like, eight jokes that fit the characters. She had studied their script, so much knew their scripts so well. And that's what you want in a writers room. And she said to me, I'm going to go out, and I'm going to get in a writers room right after I graduate. And I said, Diona, I don't think that's going to happen. And if it did, I think it would be a really bad thing for you. 22, you'll be looked at as the baby writer and baby renters are usually between 25 and 30. And you'll be you will be out of the business by the time you're 25. What about grad school. And so she on her own, looked up some grad programs. And they had just started the Harold Ramis Second City master program. That's where she is now she's finishing out I told you, it didn't work. I'm still the hero of the story.

Alex Ferrari 1:02:25
But giving her that that given her that extra time

Jeffrey Davis 1:02:27
with her in April when she was in town, because it's in Chicago, the program. And they you know, they were trying to honor her ramus and by naming it after, and she's a different person. She's calm. She's loving school. She loved being an undergrad.

Alex Ferrari 1:02:46
Well look at the instructor, she I mean seriously. And of course, she

Peter Desberg 1:02:49
is an instructor. So

Alex Ferrari 1:02:52
by giving that little extra time for nurturing, and just time to kind of develop a little bit even as talented as she might have been. It's kind of like it's kind of like throwing Michael Jordan or LeBron James into playing basketball when they're 15. They're really talented, but just give it a couple years. You know,

Peter Desberg 1:03:09
I told you the story before about wall Bennett. He told us a story that when he was a new guy in a room, he you pitched a joke. And it was like the wind was blowing. Nobody heard anything. 20 minutes later, one of the more seasoned writers told the same joke just pitched the same joke and everybody cracked up. And Walt said, Wait a minute. I just pitched that joke. They looked at him said Come on. Don't be like that. Oh, wow. And you know, it's interesting that Jeffrey talked about Lou Schneider before who told a great story that they're in the room. And the writer next to him, grabs them and pulls them down below the table and says pitch this joke for me it yourself because you did stand up your pitcher better

Alex Ferrari 1:04:00
Wow.

Peter Desberg 1:04:00
The nice thing about Lowe is he gave her credit.

Alex Ferrari 1:04:03
That's nice ever that's that's rare in this this

Jeffrey Davis 1:04:07
aliens are not

Peter Desberg 1:04:08
and it only took him four months to get around to it.

Jeffrey Davis 1:04:10
We interviewed someone that we have not yet found the book for but a stand up named Carrie snow is an old friend of mine. And when they she was she got a one afternoon she got a letter with a check for $500 in it from Robin Williams and he said I was doing stand up. This is maybe like 1020 years ago, and I inadvertently use one of your jokes so I felt I had to pay for it.

Alex Ferrari 1:04:41
Wow. Yeah,

Peter Desberg 1:04:43
such a sweet guy. Uh, he

Alex Ferrari 1:04:44
was I had I had the pleasure of meeting him once and he's, I did the thing with Robin when I met him is that have never met another human being whose energy you could literally feel the vibration off of him. And he wasn't on. He was calm. He was with his wife. You know, as his comments gonna be, he was not cracking jokes. He was just a normal human being. But you can sense that energy off of him. And I've never met another human being like that.

Jeffrey Davis 1:05:14
You know, his mentor was like that, because I grew up around Jonathan Winters. I knew him pretty well.

Alex Ferrari 1:05:20
I heard about that with Jonathan. He

Jeffrey Davis 1:05:22
was close friends with his close friends with my stepfather and I, I and I hope you weren't planning to use that piece of paper. You should never put blank paper in front of me. I'm going to write, you're gonna have to do some editing here, my friend.

Alex Ferrari 1:05:38
It's fine. We just let it go.

Peter Desberg 1:05:43
So did you have some I guess

Alex Ferrari 1:05:45
I have to have two more questions. I wanted to ask you guys. What is the lesson that took you guys the longest to learn whether in the film business or in life?

Peter Desberg 1:05:55
Oh, that's an easy one. You can give yours first and then I'll steal it.

I give me an answer. And Jeffrey will say me too. As far as life lessons are concerned,

he hasn't learned and he

says I'm still a student, huh? That's, that's a really tough one. Um, well, I I'm good at answering narrower questions. Uh huh. But, you know, the other day I did a podcast and somebody said, this was a screenwriter and she said, What's your favorite sitcom, your favorite comedy movie of all time? And I looked at her and I said, tell me your favorite movie? And she laughed and said, I can't answer that one either.

Alex Ferrari 1:06:41
That was gonna be my next question. So is there any lessons life lessons that you can think of that kind of really, that took you really long time to figure out do you like, Oh, my God,

Jeffrey Davis 1:06:54
so learning, Peter will back me up in this, but if he has any class, he won't say anything?

Alex Ferrari 1:06:59
Well, apparently no class,

Peter Desberg 1:07:03
easy. It's easy to keep learning when you have so much to learn.

Yeah, exactly. You ruined it. Okay.

He never takes notes when I talked to him, which is

Jeffrey Davis 1:07:13
really, it's really hard to study for a test when you don't know what the answers are gonna be. My entire college and grad school career. I got a new people got me the answers. But no, I think it is the same lesson. I think that the lesson in writing that you never stopped learning is the same lesson in life is you have to constantly teach yourself to listen, it's hard. It doesn't come naturally. Man, anybody most people love to talk. And listening is hard. And if you're going to be a writer, you have to listen and observe and that's true of any kind of writing any kind of acting any kind of stand up

Peter Desberg 1:07:49
is a great phrase. The opposite of talking isn't listening. It's waiting.

I tell you what, I'm

telling you. I'll leave you with my answer to that one before those experiences a lousy teacher it gives the exams before the lessons.

Alex Ferrari 1:08:04
Yeah, that's great.

Peter Desberg 1:08:06
Is it regular walking Bartlett's home quotation is

Alex Ferrari 1:08:12
alright, so name if you can't. Both you guys, one of your favorite sitcoms and one of your favorite comedy movies, or movies in general.

Peter Desberg 1:08:22
Well, I can't give you my favorite sitcom, but I can give you my favorite current sitcom. Fair enough. I'm a sound like I echo alien when I say I'm a big Big Bang Theory fan. But there have been so many great sitcoms, you know again, cheers Frasier, taxi Seinfeld. They just they're too many. And they go all the way back to I Love Lucy and just it'd be easier to tell you the ones I haven't liked. With there been so many great movie comedies yours. Where do you start?

Alex Ferrari 1:08:58
One that comes into your mind? Or do you start

Peter Desberg 1:09:00
I can tell you Jeffrey's favorite comedy was Porky's. Yeah, right?

I actually never saw Porky's, believe it or that? He's lived it?

Alex Ferrari 1:09:12
How about you, Jeffrey, Eddie answers?

Jeffrey Davis 1:09:14
Well, I guess my favorite classic comedy would have been married John Moore Show. I just love that show. I can watch it over and over and over again. I think one of the more recent it's off the air now three years, but I just thought it was much better than friends. And I'm sure it owes something to friends and is doing very well in syndication and on Netflix now ran nine seasons, and was written by two theatre guys and then they went on to work for David Letterman before they created How I Met Your Mother. I just think it's a brilliant show. I think it's so beautifully written and imaginative and risky for a network show just the way they did it going in and out of satire, double points of view and then I guess Chuck Lori's show. The only one that I watch. I'm not saying because Peter loves the Big Bang, and I like it too, is it's just not my kind of humor, but I like it. I appreciate it. But I love mom, which and I level Grace and Frankie. I think Grace and Frankie is amazing. And there's also there's, they're going backward to the shows that I unfortunately wrote in the early 90s. There's a show called the ranch on Netflix. Yeah, a new one with Kathy Bates. Yes. And, and I don't find either them remotely funny. They're like, it's the old three jokes a page thing. They're going back to her premises a woman who owns opens up what? Six years? Six jokes three jokes. But I don't I don't remember that rule. I only remember 340

Peter Desberg 1:10:56
years of old talks when you said that.

Jeffrey Davis 1:10:58
I lied.

Alex Ferrari 1:11:00
You guys could discuss it afterward.

Peter Desberg 1:11:03
Oh, no. during,

Jeffrey Davis 1:11:04
during Of course. We're a lot more entertaining when we're arguing. I think I get

Alex Ferrari 1:11:09
but yeah, I've heard both those shows are not doing very well. And that's probably good reason why.

Jeffrey Davis 1:11:15
And yet one day at a time is doing really well. Because the ghosts are all from character.

Alex Ferrari 1:11:24
Where are the where's that show playing?

Jeffrey Davis 1:11:26
Netflix?

Alex Ferrari 1:11:27
Is that Netflix? Second season? Yeah. Okay, I gotta look that up. I haven't even I didn't even hear about it.

Jeffrey Davis 1:11:32
Hey, Gemma here, Rita Moreno isn't anything I'm there. She's

Alex Ferrari 1:11:36
wonderful. She's wonderful. Now where can where can people find you guys online?

Peter Desberg 1:11:41
If you go to let's see now. That's funny dot lol. You can find us.

Alex Ferrari 1:11:50
Okay, fantastic. And then the name of your books. Now that's funny, though, which is available on Amazon, Barnes and Noble and all the fine. All

Peter Desberg 1:11:58
this bad or bad taste. I will plug my most recent joke book, go for it, which is the bad sex manual. I wrote my friend Tom, who wrote and directed Friday the 13th part six as big as you want. It's like, okay, but before we finish, can I just quickly say you have made this so easy for us? Yeah. Right. You asked great questions you wrote up with a lot. You're really good listeners. Well,

Alex Ferrari 1:12:28
thank you so much. I appreciate that.

Peter Desberg 1:12:30
So you've made this enormously fun and easy for so we appreciate that. Oh,

thank you. Oh, so when you when you turn off,

he wants to tell you what he really thinks once you turn.

Alex Ferrari 1:12:42
So once I turn once I stopped the recording, then you can tell me what you really think. Well, I appreciate it. Guys, thank you so much for taking the time out to talk to me in the in the in the indie film hustle tribe, I truly appreciate it. Thank you,

Jeffrey Davis 1:12:55
thank you, you made this really fun.

Alex Ferrari 1:12:58
Peter and Jeffrey, were an absolute riot. And I hope you guys have a better understanding of what it takes to make people laugh. And what it's like to actually write a comedy. I know when I was working on this as mag, which is a drama, drama, comedy. There are a lot of comedic elements in this as mag. And, you know, I just sat back and watch some of these amazing actors that were in the cast. Just come up with this humor and sometimes it worked. Sometimes it didn't we figured it out in the editing room. But it was just such a wonderful thing to be on a set where you're laughing almost all the time. It was just an a very enjoyable process. And I hope you guys can bring some comedy into your into your work whether even if it's the if a drama, you know some sometimes a little joke here or there brings the audience in and just and keeps them going in your story and in your journey. So I hope this was a benefit in value to you guys. And if you want to link to Peter and Jeffrey's book now that's funny the art and craft of writing comedy. Just head over to the show notes at Indie film hustle.com forward slash BPS zero 28. And guys, we will be launching indie film hustle TV next week. And I'm so so so excited to share everything I've got in store for you. We've got interviews with some of the biggest screenwriters in Hollywood talking about billion dollar screenwriters. We have the dialogue which is a series that does in depth interviews with Jim Uhls are at our fight club, David Goyer, the CO writer of the dark night and just you know, Paul Haggis Academy Award winning Paul Haggis, there's so many just like literally so many screenwriters and that that show alone, let alone a list screenwriting lectures, as well as Writers Guild sponsored lectures that are only available through ifH TV or at another places are extremely expensive if you want to rent or buy But here, they're part of the service. And I've got so many more things coming up courses by Linda shear is going to be on there the legendary script doctor, her courses on here, as well as documentaries like dream on spec, which is a documentary, specifically about screenwriters trying to get their screen screenplays produced, while being a while interviewing some of the top screenwriters in Hollywood. I mean, there's just so much stuff, guys, I can't even go into it. We've got hundreds of hours of content for screenwriters, filmmakers, and content creators. So if you want to sign up early again, head over to ifH tv.com to get early access. I'm going to be releasing and send you guys a private email with a private link to get in early if you want to jump in and explore before anyone else. So that's ifH tv.com. And that does it for another episode of The Bulletproof screenplay podcast. As always, keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you soon. Thanks for listening to the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay.com That's B u ll e t e r o f s CR e n PLA y.com


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BPS 027: How to Story Map Your Screenplay with Daniel Calvisi

Today’s guest is author Daniel Calvisi. Dan wrote the book Story Maps: How to Write a GREAT Screenplay. He breaks down stories and shows you how to map out your own by analyzing how the masters construct their screenplays. Here’s a bit more on today’s guest.

Daniel Calvisi is a story analyst, speaker, screenwriter and author of STORY MAPS: How to Write a GREAT Screenplay, STORY MAPS: TV Drama: The Structure of the One-Hour Television Pilot, and Story Maps: 12 Great Screenplays (Raiders of the Lost Ark, Up, Rocky, Sex and the City, X-Men, Black Swan, Juno, The Matrix)

He is a former Story Analyst for major studios like Twentieth Century Fox, Miramax Films,and New Line Cinema. He coaches writers, teaches webinars on writing for film and television with The Writers Store and speaks at writing conferences and book signings. He holds a degree in Film and Television from the Tisch School of the Arts at New York University. 

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Alex Ferrari 0:00
I'd like to welcome to the show Dan Cal VC, man, thank you so much for being on the show.

Daniel Calvisi 3:15
Thanks for having me.

Alex Ferrari 3:15
I appreciate it, man. So I wanted to first get into how'd you get into this crazy business?

Daniel Calvisi 3:21
Well, I went to NYU film school and like everyone there I wanted to be a writer director. And but I really got into screenwriting there, I really found that the screenplay was was really where my heart was. And I took a script analysis class that I really liked. So that was kind of the first time I ever really took apart like professional scripts, their structure and everything we studied, you know, Sunset Boulevard, and the silence of the lambs and really a wide swath of scripts and movies. So that really turned me on and I heard about this job of being a reader. So when I got out of college, I found my way to becoming a reader for various companies like Miramax, and Fox 2000, and I worked for Jonathan Demi's company, clinic estetico, and new line and other things. So that was freelance reader work that I was doing. But I was working for enough companies where I was supporting myself and I learned on the job, you know, quickly, I had to because they give you a bunch of scripts, and you have to return them two days, or maybe the next day, you know, maybe do an overnight job. So I had to do written analysis of all of these scripts and a lot of books as well. And so I really learned under fire and I started course finding patterns and similarities and the bad scripts and the good scripts and seeing what worked and what didn't, especially structure. And that's how I started to develop my story maps structural method as well. So

Alex Ferrari 4:55
so how how does a young screenwriter break into Hollywood? As a script reader, like, What's that process like? Well,

Daniel Calvisi 5:03
I think these days probably hone your craft a little bit, get your feet wet with contests. With contests and film festivals. They probably won't pay you at first. So I would say do some free reader work, you know, reviewing the first round of submissions to, you know, the Austin screenwriting conference or something like that, or the final draft contest. So contact them directly. Say you want to volunteer to be a reader. Hopefully, they'll give you a test script to do test notes on and confirm that you do know what you're doing. Then from there, I would say it'll either be word of mouth, you'll hear about an opening or contact directly agencies, management companies, production companies and studios. And if you contact enough and you send them in sample coverages, hopefully eventually there will be an opening and they will hire you for that I got my one of my first jobs, the way I got into Miramax Films was through their genre unit Dimension Films.

Alex Ferrari 6:12
This is and then you got in at a time when Miramax was at the height of its powers.

Daniel Calvisi 6:16
Yeah, they were absolutely at their peak, they were winning Best Picture. And I this was Dimension Films, they had the Spy Kids franchise, the screen franchise, they were huge. Yeah, they were huge. And it was funny, because I was told by a friend that he had been a reader there, he knew a guy there. But he said don't call them because I know for a fact that they don't have any openings. And so I call them anyway, the guy dimension and the first thing he said was, we have an opening for a reader Do you want to test for it? So the lesson there is be persistent. You know, somebody tells you not to do something as long as you're not a jerk about it. Go ahead and try and get your foot in the door. It doesn't hurt to make a phone call. That's one thing I always tell people is, you know, people still make phone calls in this town. Mm hmm. So cold calling can work. You know, it's it's

Alex Ferrari 7:09
pretty remarkable. You know, doing this show for so long. I cold. I don't cold call cold tweets. Or I cold email like I did to you. And it's amazing. You know, you ask and people will like Yeah, sure. I'll come on. Yeah, for sure. I'd like to have a meeting. Sure. It's, it's fascinating when you ask what happens?

Daniel Calvisi 7:28
Yeah, yeah. So what I find one thing, it's hard to do. But if you can give them something like a piece of information they may not have had. Or if you can stroke their ego to maybe in a unique way, like let's say, you're contacting a company that makes a lot of big blockbuster movies. But you're talking to an executive who happened to have made this really small indie film 10 years ago. And you tell them, hey, oh, my gosh, I saw that film. I really loved it. You know, I'd love to learn more about it. Because you're, you know, you're kind of appealing to them to their passion, you know, not just their their latest superhero movie, which they may not have had anything to do with, you know,

Alex Ferrari 8:11
yeah, that's something and now with IMDb, you can literally do that research fairly quickly. Mm hmm. Yeah. And do you agree that when you are reaching out to to gatekeepers or or people that you're trying to work with in one way, shape, or form, providing value of some sort is or, like you said, stroking the ego is one way in, but also providing some sort of value in whatever that might be? Whether that be free work, whether that be anything? Do you think that's a good rule of thumb?

Daniel Calvisi 8:41
Yeah, yeah, totally, totally, if you can offer them something, because Because I mean, really, they get, if they're getting 20 scripts a day, they don't really need your script, you know, or your whatever you're trying to send to them, you know, they don't need to give you your break. So if you can somehow offer them something of value, you know, a piece of information or I don't know anything, maybe a bottle of their, their favorite barbecue sauce from Brooklyn. You know,

Alex Ferrari 9:10
if you do that kind of research, I guarantee you if you do that kind of research, and you hit up an executive, and that they you that you found the favorite barbecue sauce, and you're like, Hey, I heard this was your favorite. It could be a little creepy, but yet it opened the door. Yeah, totally,

Daniel Calvisi 9:23
totally. I also find if you if you see them talk on a panel. Mm hmm. It helps to say Hey, I saw you talk on this panel. And I really liked what you had to say, you know, space and then given a specific example, because you know, people go to talk on panels because they want to be listened to, you know, and they want to be adored, and they want to, you know, feel like they made a difference in somebody's life. So they may not have actually taught maybe they had to leave quickly. So they didn't talk to anyone in the audience or maybe they were only approached by annoying people after their Talk, you know, God. So you guys, we all know there's there's always that person in the front row who just has the most inane questions, right? Una

Alex Ferrari 10:09
Yeah, like, how do you get $100 million? To make my first feature? I'm like, Oh,

Daniel Calvisi 10:12
yes, yeah. So you can show, you know, say something really smart and say, you know, you got some value out of their thing, then that sounds really nice to them, you know, they're glad that they did it.

Alex Ferrari 10:22
So what's the big difference between a script reader and a story analyst in regard? Are they the same thing in the studio system?

Daniel Calvisi 10:30
They're the same thing in the studio system. outside the studio system, I would say, a story analyst is probably more of a consultant like me, a writing coach. And also someone who feels comfortable analyzing any kind of narrative, whether it's a book, a movie, a TV show, or a video game, you know, or a myth or something like that. So that's something I like that term story analysts because it's kind of a universal thing, saying, I have years of experience analyzing narratives and you know, taking apart the structural differences between let's say, a fairy tale and a studio feature film, you know, so I analyze story.

Alex Ferrari 11:13
What are some of the common traits? You see, since you've read so many? Since you've read so many stories in screenplays? What are some of the common traits you see of successful screenplays?

Daniel Calvisi 11:25
Wow, well, um, well, I always say you got to come right out of the gate and suck in the reader. So your opening has to be great. Open with something unique, ideally, something we haven't seen before, or something that really endears us to your main characters. They need to have really strong motivation that we identify with them, and they have a really strong need. That's one thing that you just don't see enough in scripts and in movies as well. You know, someone, an actor, being a movie star is not enough, anymore game by Yeah, and not just at the box office, just when you're watching a film to gain my interest in following them. If their character is a total jerk, and just an immoral person. They still need a code of ethics that we believe in, they still we still need to believe in their goal. And root for them, you know, and so that can be tough to generate that rooting interest in the reader or the audience.

Alex Ferrari 12:27
Can you give an example of a movie that did it right? Like that opening? I mean, I'm thinking off the top of my head like Shawshank or diehard or lethal weapon or these kind of characters. Do you Do you know of a can you come up with a movie that has that kind of opening? Like you really just fall in love with that character? And that character, that leading character has that need? Mm

Daniel Calvisi 12:48
hmm. Wow. I mean, I mean, there's so many. The classic example is Raiders of the Lost Ark. You know, we see this guy do this amazing thing where he rescues this, you know, golden idol from from this temple. And then it's, and then it's taken from him by by this evil guy, so we really, we really, you know, feel for him, and then he makes this dashing escape so So and I think that that was necessary in that opening to have a Balog, the villain, you know, so we don't just think okay, this is just a random archaeologist who's just trying to get this golden idol because it's worth a lot of money. You know, you needed the villain to come in there and say, hey, you know, I'm, I'm the evil guy who, who wants this for myself, you know, where's your your the pure one. But trying to think of a more a more modern film, I would say, Well, let's look at this summer there was the Spider Man homecoming, you know, we do feel for Peter Parker because he's a kid. And he doesn't really know what he's doing. And he's struggling with, you know, kids stuff like he likes the pretty girl. And she won't give him the time of day. Although she does kind of like him too much. That was one thing about it. I thought it was kind of too easy for him to get the girl kind of already liked him. But um, so and that's something with like superhero movies, you still have to endear us to the character, especially even more because they have these superpowers. Right so they could be just a superhero. Not a regular person. But so in Spider Man. He wasn't normal kid with normal problems. Yeah, I thought that was really intentional on their part.

Alex Ferrari 14:36
I think they did it. I mean, out of all the Spider Man movies, I think they nailed and I do like to Tobey Maguire first and second one but I felt that that in Spider Man homecoming they nailed the comic book spider man there. He was a kid with me. It literally almost turned into a John Hughes movie. When you're watching it, you just feel like this really emotional attachment to his kid problems. By the way, he's also fighting villains and dealing with his form of puberty, which is superpowers.

Daniel Calvisi 15:07
Yeah, and he's not, he's not that powerful yet, you know, he's still figuring out his superpowers and making mistakes. So right,

Alex Ferrari 15:13
which was endearing. So you know, he doesn't just come out and he's perfect right away, especially with the character we have such history with, I think they did a fantastic job. But that's a really good, a really good example. Now, what are some of the common mistakes you see screenwriters make? Again and again?

Daniel Calvisi 15:31
Well, speaking of openings, you have a slow opening. Mm hmm. That just doesn't suck in the reader, it starts with maybe too much exposition. That's one description that explains too much. And it's too wordy. Those, you know, canyons of description, that black ink on the page, those super big paragraphs, that's just death to a reader, you know, that's a reason why they're going to stop reading the description and start reading only the dialogue, which I always tried not to do. But it's your job as the screenwriter to make them want to read the description, you know, to come out of the gate, because they're going to read everything, let's say the first few pages, you know, there's that bleary eyed reader who's up at 4am. And they've already read three scripts that day, and they're cracking your script. And they don't, the last thing they want to do is read another script, right. So firstly, you don't want it to be 127 pages, because they don't want to read that much. They're getting paid the same amount of money to read the 127 page script as they are to read the 95 page script. So if you can keep it lean and mean, that's great. Keep it in that 95 to 110 page range. And then if you there, so no matter the length, they're hopefully going to read at least the first two to five pages, you know, description, and dialogue. So it's your job in those opening pages that have such great, lean, terse, descriptive description that really captures tone and mood, and really makes them want to enter this world and explore this world with your lead character. And then endear us to their character. I hate to say it, but that save the cat moment. Blake Snyder was brilliant and identifying that, you know, that moment where we really do connect with the main character. And we really do root for them that rooting interest. So if you can nail that in the opening pages, that's great. That overall length is huge, having a really strong midpoint halfway through that, really ups the the stakes and the conflict and launches and new, through line unforeseen through line that's going to push to the end of the script, you know, a disaster that we didn't see coming, right? And then of course, hitting all hitting all those those great signpost speeds, you know, along the way.

Alex Ferrari 17:58
Right. And those are that what leads me to my next question, what is the structure that professional screenwriters use as a general statement?

Daniel Calvisi 18:06
Well, I call it the story map. And it's my estimation is 95% of commercial movies use this structure. Because pretty much 100% of movies that I study, and I've studied a wide swath of, and read a lot of professional scripts use this structure. It's always in the same order. So I'm not, you know, mixing and matching and placing beats all over the place. But to just mention the titles, excuse me, the titles of my beachy, my story map specsheet, it would be the opening, inciting incident, strong movement forward, end of Act One turn and decision, first trial, first casualty midpoint, declaration of war slash assumption of power, end of Act Two, turn and decision. And it's important to end those acts on a turn and direction and a decision that propels us and the main character into the next act. And then now we're in Act Three. And we have the true point of no return the climax and the epilogue, and you want to end as soon after that climax as possible. So obviously, there's a lot of lot of characteristics that go with those beats. But those are just the rough titles just to you know, get you thinking in that direction.

Alex Ferrari 19:23
Now, and this and this is the structure that you found that most professional scripts about 95% of the scripts written in Hollywood use

Daniel Calvisi 19:30
good ones, yes, professional, good ones. And there, there are professional bad ones as well. So then,

Alex Ferrari 19:35
so and I always like using this when I have when I have a screenwriting expert or story analyst on the show, I always like to bring up the script of Pulp Fiction. And what a genius script that was. And a lot of people feel that that script was not in the conventional beats. But because the story was thrown all over the place out of order but from From my understanding, it did actually hit all those beats in a weird way. And that was the genius of that script. Do you agree with that? And what's your? What's your analysis of that script?

Daniel Calvisi 20:10
Well, I haven't seen in a long time, right? I don't know. I'm guessing that it does hit every one of the beats. But the the overriding point to make is that even if a story is told, nonlinear out of narrative order, it still should hit the beats, you know, so an example I know better would be momento. No, I broke down memento, in my book story maps the films of Christopher Nolan, because I'm obsessed with Christopher Nolan, as you should be, as I should be. Yes. And so in Memento, obviously, it's told in this crazy backward structure, it's not quite backward, it's uh, it you know, it has its own unique thing going on. It's kind of a horseshoe structures is what he called it. But even though it's told backwards, quote backwards, it still hits all of those beats, you know, the inciting incident and the strong movement forward in the end of Act One and all those things. It's just the order that it's told it hits those beats. That makes sense. It makes

Alex Ferrari 21:20
perfect sense. And that that movie is, I mean, if you're a young screenwriter, he I mean, to watch to try to break down or try to analyze that movie with Will will screw with your head. Yeah, I think you should break

Daniel Calvisi 21:31
it off. It almost killed us. When we when we were doing that.

Alex Ferrari 21:34
It's it's just such a well, he's such an amazing filmmaker, and screenwriter and storyteller that he's on a different level playing field than the rest of us. Well, he's,

Daniel Calvisi 21:46
you know, he's saying, How can I make this different? You know, like, he just he just had Dunkirk this summer. And instead of telling an absolutely straightforward, historical epic biopic war film, he said, How can I make this different so he did a triptych structure where he was telling the sea air and land story. And he decided for better or worse that he was not going to give any real context to the battle, he was going to throw us into it and give us that you know, ground level view of the grant the troop, the troops view of the situation. So if they didn't know much, we didn't know much either. And he told us out of order, there was that moment where you realize that came together where you realize that it was told, slightly nonlinear, you know, because you had the the boat, the boat sequence was one day, the sequence on the beach with the Mole was one week and then the aerial sequence with with Tom Hardy and the plains was one hour, but they all did converge at a certain point, I think probably

Alex Ferrari 22:56
done 75 minute mark, and no support. Yes.

Daniel Calvisi 22:59
Okay. No problem. But anyway, you did. Without any spoilers. It's you realize the true structure. Well into the film. You know what I mean?

Alex Ferrari 23:09
It since we're on since we're on Christopher Nolan, I'm such a huge fan of his as well. What do you feel is his best screenplay and film? Wow, you had to pick one.

Daniel Calvisi 23:22
That's really tough. It's tough, but it would be between Memento the prestige. And I would have to say inception over the dark night. That dark nights amazing, but he wrote and directed inception. Right. He wrote and directed momento.

Alex Ferrari 23:45
Wow, Inception is it's such a unique film. It Yeah. It's basically the biggest budget. Independent Film. Oh, you think so? Yeah. Because of the concept. I mean, look at that, look, what he's trying to do. It does take big, broad strokes, you need big, you need a big brush. With that movie. You can't do that on an independent level. But to tell that story inside of a studio system is pretty remarkable on the last person I could even think of ever doing something like that would be Kubrick, you know, and what he used to do constantly with every one of his movies inside the studio system. And I think Nolan is one of those guys right now. That is probably the closest thing to a Kubrick we have currently in cinema Do you Would you agree with that statement?

Daniel Calvisi 24:32
I would say well, I like to say he's our modern day Spielberg just because he works with big budgets. He makes popular films with universal themes, but with incredible directing and visuals, you know? But yeah, he's a little bit more I guess cerebral than Spielberg was in his in his period when he was you know, in his 40s as as Christopher and also basically

Alex Ferrari 24:56
Kubrick and Spielberg had a kid and it's it's Nolan.

Daniel Calvisi 24:59
Yeah. He's British. He always wears dashing clothing and he looks very dapper.

Alex Ferrari 25:05
Yes, he does. Actually, I actually met him once at the powwow, I met him in the back lot of Warner Brothers. And he is he's always got a suit on. He now has no phone does not care to have. He's not on any he doesn't have email. Yeah, that's crazy. He does everything through his wife, and who's his producing partner, and she is he she's like, Look, if something's important, it'll get to me. And that's, and he goes, that way, I have more time to work. And more time to tell stories. I was like, Wow, that's so amazing. But he's in a different he's in a different world than the rest of us. In many ways. Yeah. So I'm back back to our interview. What is the what's more important in your opinion, structure or character? Which is the ultimate question in screen Wow. Or are they both combined? The same? What do you think? Well,

Daniel Calvisi 25:58
it's funny? Well, the great structure doesn't really matter if we don't believe in and root for your character and want to follow them, you know, right. So I like to say character equals action, because characters are defined by action. And then of course, the structure is the form in which you put their actions into it's not formula, its form. It's the shape of the story. So I don't know, I guess I would say, if I had to say I would say structure. If you're talking about unforeseen actions taken by characters surprise, you know, surprising us within the traditional classic structure. We don't want to be able to predict the beats you know, we don't want to be able to protect predict the turns that has to still be surprising. And that's good writing. Guy, but you know, character? Well, I guess it means you can't you can't root for

Alex Ferrari 27:03
structure.

Daniel Calvisi 27:04
you root for character. Yeah, yeah. But I if I really was pressed, I would say structure because that would mean an intriguing, surprising story that's compelling. You know, God,

Alex Ferrari 27:16
probably feel that I would probably feel that they're both without the structure. You you. I mean, can you have a movie with great characters and very loose loosey goosey structure and still be successful?

Daniel Calvisi 27:28
Yeah, I think you could, you know, if if we want to turn the page if we if we just really want to follow these characters. I mean, Paul fiction's a good example, Pulp Fiction. If you really want it to get nitty gritty, you could probably cut 10 to 20 minutes from it, you know, and still have the same story. It's definitely an hour or two or film that was made by a director who loved his dialogue and loved his characters and was willing to, to spend time with them, you know, just sit and hang out with them. But the editor in me and the script analyst, and he would like to cut time from that and pretty much cut time from almost every Tarantino film.

Alex Ferrari 28:11
Yes, he does. He does talk a bit sometimes

Daniel Calvisi 28:13
he does enjoy, you know, his his dialogue and storytelling a little bit too much. It's sometimes you know,

Alex Ferrari 28:21
I would I would I would agree with you as a critique of Tarantino if there's anything sometimes he just goes a little too far. And I think he's gotten worse over the years, like Hateful Eight. I thought he really let that go a little too much. In my opinion, but but he's still I mean, he's a once in a generation kind of filmmaker.

Daniel Calvisi 28:38
Yeah, yeah, he's still absolutely unique and and you're not gonna see anyone who's like him. You know, I didn't see Hateful Eight I was to the point where I'm to the point where I almost feel like I don't want to be tricked by him anymore into watching, you know, ridiculously long dialogue scenes and overly violent scenes. You know, I just I think he he almost is gleeful and his violence and it goes past. Like what it really needs to be you know, but he's got millions of fans and they love them. So

Alex Ferrari 29:15
yeah, and I'm looking forward to seeing his his Chuck Manson film. That should be interesting.

Daniel Calvisi 29:20
Yeah. Wow. That's interesting. So I say I will say one thing about Tarantino, which is a good exam, which is a good lesson to screenwriters is he he usually makes movies about movies or straight genre films that don't necessarily give us a lot of insight into the human condition. And that's my main problem with his him is I don't really know what he cares about in the world. You know, I don't really know who Quentin Tarantino is. I don't really get universal themes from him, other than making you You know, like, let's say the Kill Bill movies for example, I really enjoy the Kill Bill movies and they're really cool kung fu operas, you know. But I'm not taking away much about the human condition. I'm not really that invested beyond watching a cool revenge story.

Alex Ferrari 30:19
We'll be right back after a word from our sponsor. And now back to the show. But I think you know, I think that Tarantino in this is just my humble opinion, I think Aaron Tinos point of view is that he his movies are a complete reflection of who he is, which is that video store guy who loves movies and thinks he thinks of cinema as a religion. And he's not really interested in delving into the human condition. He's more interested in delving into cinema, and his his pure of a cinema, cinematic director as I've ever seen in the history of cinema. Because he you're right, he does all his films, you know, after you watch Django Unchained, there's really not a lot to discuss a little bit maybe about the human condition, but generally, you know, Kill Bill, Hateful Eight, these are all cinematic operas. Yeah, about cinema, or about the making of cinema. So I think that's Are

Daniel Calvisi 31:19
you say, I mean, are you saying, not in a bad way that he's a shallow person who only cares about movies? Because that's probably accurate, right?

Alex Ferrari 31:26
I mean, no, I think, look, I think his entire world revolves around cinema. I mean, everything in his life his cinema has been for since he was a child. And so ever since I've definitely since he was in Tibet, in that video store. Me being a video store clerk for four years, I feel him. I understand. I understand that completely. But I think that that is his religion, that honestly cinema is his religion, and whether it's shallow or not, it's his point of view. And it's such a unique point of view that there is literally no one else out there on the planet on planet Earth, that has Tarantino's perspective on anything. So whether it's shallow or not, that's that's opinion, but that he really lives for cinema completely. He will die with celluloid, wrapped around him. But that's but that's who he is. And that's what he wants to me. He owns the Beverly here, theater that only shows 35 millimeter here in LA he has an insane 35 millimeter print collection. Like who has. I mean, I know Scorsese does, but you know, but like, who has the collection, like his collection will be on archive? Because there's movies that he has, uh, nobody else has. I remember listen to a story that it was a or I forget who it was. I think it was from Wu Tang. When he was scoring Kill Bill told them. Oh, man, I got this kung fu movie. I just got it on VHS is super rare. He's like, Yeah, that's nice. I got the 35 print. And he's like, whoa, okay, so I'm on a different playing field. But that's who he is, I think that think about

Daniel Calvisi 33:11
and this is I know, this is we're getting off in it. No, no, no, no, it's

Alex Ferrari 33:14
Coco. Coco.

Daniel Calvisi 33:15
What if you had a painter who only painted referential works to other painters? At one point, wouldn't you want to say well, what's what's your what is it about you that you want to put into these paintings? Or what are you saying, really about the world? I agree with that not matter because there's already a million other painters that are doing that? Well,

Alex Ferrari 33:40
there's a difference between painting and cinema cinema has so many more elements involved with just painting. So if I had a painter that, I mean, if you had a painter that would just kept rehashing any Hall on any nanny Hall on Warhol and Basquiat and Van Gogh, and all these guys, and just kept putting his that wouldn't be as interesting. It might be for a little bit, it wouldn't be that interesting. But the wealth of cinema that there is and the the masters of different masters of art, that you need to be master of the different kinds of art forms that you have to be a master of to be a filmmaker is so so vast and deep that for someone like him, he could continue to make movies forever, and never get boring because of that, that debt and then he also has that knowledge. I mean, he has an encyclopedic knowledge of every movie he's ever seen it

Daniel Calvisi 34:33
Okay, well, here's okay. Then here's my conclusion. Yes. I want to see him do other genres. I want to see him do a character drama. I want to see a comedy. I'd love to see romantic comedy, you know,

Alex Ferrari 34:46
can you imagine?

Daniel Calvisi 34:48
If he truly is a student of all cinema, not just action films, thrillers, exploitation films, you know, I want to see him go on to try some really different things, you know, I would think that would be really fascinating.

Alex Ferrari 35:02
I would agree with you. And I think he has kind of, he has stuck to a little bit of of same genre films and but he has in recent years kind of moved on to me he did the Western, he loved the Western so much that he did Hateful Eight. And you can argue Django obviously is a form of Western but more blaxploitation. So he is going to different genres within the genre world within his likes and dislikes. I'm really curious to see what he does with the Manson murders like that is insane. I can't I mean, and he wants Brad Pitt to pay Manson. You know, so I'm really curious to see where he goes. But that's the thing that how many filmmakers, can you say I'm curious to see what he does next? There's very few filmmakers out there like that, in today's world, and he's one of those guys. So I'm glad that we've gone on a complete Tarantino tangent. But I think it's

Daniel Calvisi 35:59
I would say to bring it back to screenwriting. A good thing that he does is he does focus mostly on genre films, you know, yes. The thriller to action, Kung Fu westerns, exploitation, at least for exploitation, at least for his last like, you know, three or four films. And for a screenwriter, if you're looking to break in by selling spec screenplays, it's good to focus on genre, you know, you're the thriller guy, you're the horror guy, you're the romantic comedy, woman, you know, whoever, whatever your genre is, write five or six scripts in that genre. And maybe by the time you get to the fourth or fifth, you have something that's really, really ready for submission, and could really establish you and get your foot in the door, you know, so you

Alex Ferrari 36:46
do suggest that screenwriters stick within a genre at the beginning. So they could because if you got a and I know, that's, that's like, the common mistake a lot of screenwriters make is in there. They write five screenplays, but they're a comedy, a drama, horror thriller to show range. And that's wonderful, but that's very difficult for an agent to sell.

Daniel Calvisi 37:04
Yeah, yeah. Yeah, definitely. I would say, right, you know, be willing to write different genres to find yours that you're best at, you know, but if you're, if you come out of the box, and like you love horror, that's your passion. And that's pretty much all that you want to write. It's okay to stick to horror, you know,

Alex Ferrari 37:26
right, and MB. And then eventually, you either get locked into that horror, or you move into something else, but at least you're in the picture. You're in, you're in the business at this point, you're making a living. And then if you want to go off and make something else, you can go off and make something else later, but like, you know, Sorkin and, and all these big screenwriters that, you know, they were in one form, but then they started to branch out into, you know, like Charlie Kaufman, for God's sakes. Did you ever read? I mean, I'm sure you've studied Charlie's work, right?

Daniel Calvisi 37:56
Oh, yeah. Yeah, I've definitely seen his films. And I'm trying to think if I read any of his scripts, the the beast casually I didn't read any on the job. But I did. You know, I have read them.

Alex Ferrari 38:07
He's, he's pretty amazing. He's a pretty, pretty amazing screenwriter. Now, what is the difference between protect a protagonist in a film a feature film versus a television pilot?

Daniel Calvisi 38:20
Hmm, well, a feature film, the big difference between a feature film and a TV show is that closed ending that a feature film has a closed ending. So it's that it's that beginning, middle and end, and it does end. And it's a satisfying story unto itself. Whereas a TV pilot has to have some kind of open ending, some kind of cliffhanger that makes you want to come back for more, you know, as far as the main character goes, I would say probably the, the TV main character has more emotional baggage, which may not be, we may not and probably shouldn't see all of it in the pilot. So there's still stuff left to come that you can explore in the rest of season one, and then season 234, etc. So there's going to be more complexity and emotional baggage that will come out over time. I would say a nice sense of mystery also about your main character really, really helps. You know, even if there's something that you know, like, let's say in scandal, we know that she had a lie. We know that she had a an affair with the President, the United States, he actually says that he's still in love with her. But we don't know the particulars. We don't know Well, how did they meet? You know? How far did their relationship go? Where are they at at this point? Did they break up at some point? Does the wife actually know? Does anyone else know? So we're just hinting at that. And that's a pretty fascinating thing to find out. Okay. Well, she had an affair with the president United States. He's still in love with her. Wow, I really want to tune in to episode two and see see what this is all about. And then in season one they do explore when she was an intern at the White House and, or a new new hire, and you know how they actually develop their relationship? So yeah, so there's kind of more of a sense of mystery more to explore about them. That makes us curious about them. But it doesn't give us everything.

Alex Ferrari 40:26
So then would you say, like, one of my favorite television shows of all time is Breaking Bad, which on paper is the worst pitch ever? For a television show?

Daniel Calvisi 40:37
It's the best long term pitch long term pitch by Mr. Chips to Scarface, which Okay, over time, yeah, this is going to be a massive character arc.

Alex Ferrari 40:46
Right. So So can you kind of break down Walter White and how that because that pilot, honestly, I was listening to Vince Gilligan, talk about it. And they said, if you just change a few things that's in release, that's at Sundance, it's probably one of the greatest independent films of all time coming out, because it's just so brilliantly done. It was so wonderfully done. Can you can you talk a little bit about that? Or do you have enough knowledge about breaking bad to discuss it a little bit?

Daniel Calvisi 41:17
Yeah, yeah, well, I break down the pile. And in my book, story, maps, TV drama, so I have a full beat sheet of that. And I mentioned it a lot. So I'm definitely well versed on Breaking Bad. So that the famous pitch was for the show was Mr. Chips to Scarface, so basic, boring guy ends up becoming this incredible drug lord, who will kill at a moment's notice, you know? And we begin with, he's a high school chemistry teacher. And one of the great things is that motivation that he has cancer, so and, and the decision to keep it from his family at first, right? And he needs money, because he has, I think he had $7,000 in the bank, and he used all of that to buy this RV, which they're going to use to cook the method. So we know he has no money. He has cancer, he needs money. He's a family man. He has a son who has, is it cerebral palsy or something? Yes, yes. So I'm sure that that costs a lot of money. So he has a credible amount of motivation. And to the outside world, he's the nicest guy in the world, and the biggest just kind of wimp nebbish Mm hmm. And you say, Wow, this guy's going to become Scarface. That's, that's a journey I want to go on. Now, it's a risk because the executive say, Well, wait, he doesn't get there for another three, four seasons. And he's not going to get fully into, you know, murder or mode until Season five or six? Well, that's a big investment, you know. So it took someone coming off of a couple of hits shows like then scale again, in order to sell that, you know, I don't know if a completely new writer who just has one pilot is going to be able to sell that pitch, but it's still a great pitch, you know?

Alex Ferrari 43:14
Right. Right. And it's, it took it took a brave company, it took a great studio to do it, it took a very and it took them a while to find the audience. It took them a little bit, it took them a couple seasons before it started to pick up. So I didn't pick I didn't grab on to it to probably runs season four. Season Four is when I first like I'd heard about him, like let me just sit down and start watching and I binged it. And I actually got all the way to like half of season five, the last season left. And so I watched the last five or six episodes like everybody else did, but I binged everything up until that it was such an amazing script. And it says something to study, because it's such a remarkable footnote in, in television history, I think.

Daniel Calvisi 43:58
Yeah, yeah. For me, it was just the show that came on. It was either before or after, I think was after madman. Excuse me, because I was such a huge madman fan. It was Oh, what's this show? And I just started watching it and got sucked into it, you know,

Alex Ferrari 44:15
and it doesn't work without Cranston. I mean, he just was amazing in that character. Now what I'm

Daniel Calvisi 44:23
right there, the casting, excuse me. One second. Excuse me. The casting was perfect because they cast it a guy who was previously known for playing a dorky dad. Yes. Yes. So we can't imagine him becoming this heartless murderer, you know, right. That was the genius of the casting.

Alex Ferrari 44:45
They actually fit they actually said that Malcolm in the Middle was the I think it was the prequel to Breaking Bad and then that Breaking Bad was a bad dream. That he wakes up and he's like, what? I thought it was amazing. pin or something like that, and they actually shot it, they actually shot that scene like that, that Bob Newhart. It was all through the whole, the whole, the whole series was a dream. And he wakes up in bed with his old life from Malcolm in the Middle. Like I had this dream, I was a drug kingpin, and I killed people. He's like, just go back to sleep. Now, can you tell me a little bit about story maps and what you're doing with story maps?

Daniel Calvisi 45:24
Well, story maps is my structural method that I've written a number of books about. And a story map itself is a really powerful outlining tool that breaks down your narrative into its most crucial basic dramatic elements. And then the, the four to six main story engines. And the 10 to 15 major story beats those signpost beats in your plot. And you can use the story map to construct a new story, a new screenplay, TV, pilot, or even even a novel or short story. And you can use it to deconstruct an existing narrative like, you know, your favorite movie or a bunch of movies from your genre of choice to see how they were done by those professionals, or a bunch of TV pilots to help you learn how to write a TV pilot. The great thing that I always suggest that people say, okay, so structure is so important form is so important. Again, it's formula form, not formula doesn't dictate your choices. It just gives you a shape and a form to put your choices into that's based on years and years of successful structure of films and TV. Excuse me. Wow, okay, sorry about that yours. And so you can not only deconstruct your favorite films and stuff, but you can use them as structural templates. So let's say you want to write a crime John crime drama pilot, and you want your main character is going to be a guy from quote, the normal world, you can use the Breaking Bad pilot as your structural template. So you start with breaking it down into a story map, or you get my book story maps, TV drama, the structure of the one hour television pilot, and you look at that beachy for Breaking Bad. And you use that as a template to write your own script, at least the first draft, and then you can deviate from that as your story demands that allows, you know, so such a starting point, it's a great starting point. Yeah,

Alex Ferrari 47:37
I'm a big I'm a big, a big proponent of, of structure, because I feel it, it's like a roadmap for you to kind of like start tossing your characters into and start moving them around. Yeah, it just gives you, you know, posts along the way as your journey makes life a little easier.

Daniel Calvisi 47:53
Yeah, and being and having come from the world of being a reader on the job for for studios and production companies and, and, you know, professional companies, I was looking for those structural signposts, you know, I was looking for an act one that was around 30 pages now, a lot of act ones, and exactly on 30 pages. And that's great. And I would give them a standing ovation for that. And that would make me feel really great. Because that was familiar, but it could end on page 29, or 28, or 31, or 32. And that would be okay, you know, as long as it was working, and in every other way. So it doesn't have to exactly be, you know, a 30 page Act One, but you want to have those story beats in there that are the classic story beats that are in 95% of movies. And the thing is that the reader is looking for that. So if you have a 47 page, act one, then that reader is going to know their red flags is going to go up and they're going to say, okay, maybe this person doesn't understand structure. Maybe they are overriding because they're in love with their, with their words, you know.

Alex Ferrari 49:07
And that's when that's when story maps or structural guy kind of helps you along the way.

Daniel Calvisi 49:13
Yeah, cuz you can look at these other examples from so many other films and you can map out your own favorite films and say, Okay, well, they had a they had an exactly 30 minute Act One. Well, there's must be something there. You know, if Christopher Nolan and Steven Spielberg and and Darren Aronofsky had an exact 30 minute Act One, and every one of them was working in a different genre, there must be something about that 30 minute or 30 Page Act One, so maybe I should stick within that structure.

Alex Ferrari 49:45
And then once you get three or four or five or 10 or 20 screenplays and you want to start playing around with structure and making a little bit more artistic that's that's your prerogative but I think you need to learn the rules before you break them.

Daniel Calvisi 49:56
Yeah, yeah. And and even in in mapping popular films and scripts, you do find little anomalies and things that are interesting. Like I just mapped lala land I gave that out as a freebie to my newsletter subscribers. And if you want to sign up for that it's on its act for screenplays calm.

Alex Ferrari 50:17
I'll put it in the show notes. Okay, cool.

Daniel Calvisi 50:21
So, I mapped out lala land and I originally had the turn the end of that one turn coming right at 30 minutes, because that that 30 minute arc is when they're at the party. And she she's marked him because she sees him in the 80s, the 80s cover band, right. And he had previously always thought he was such a serious musician, and she sees him in this cheesy 80s cover band. And he confronts her, they argue, and he says, Alright, I'll see you in the movies. And he stalks off, and that's like, exactly 30 minutes. And so I thought, Okay, well, that's the end of Act One. But I ended up changing the end of Act One to 25 minutes. And I'm trying to remember what was the moment I don't quite remember what the moment was, but it was. It was an earlier moment, which I felt really capped off at one it was them. Oh, it was the moment when she we we seek we finally realize the fruition of what she was looking at when she heard that and chanting, jazz music, piano music and she comes into the club. And we originally had to see her eyes looking off camera, you know, really in trance, and then we cut away. So now we come back 10 minutes later, and we see what she was looking at. And it's him at the piano. So it's that big moment where they already had their quote, meet cute, which was her flipping them off, you know, in the traffic

Alex Ferrari 51:49
and lovely LA traffic. Yes, yeah,

Daniel Calvisi 51:51
yeah, but, but this was really the fruition of them, the first moment of them romantically coming together. So I said, You know what, this was a 25 minute hack one, which may not sound like that big of a deal. But when 90 95% of act one's around 30 minutes to change that by five minutes, it can actually kind of be a big deal sometimes,

Alex Ferrari 52:16
depending on the story, depending on the story. So now I'm going to talk ask you a couple questions. I asked all of my, all of my guests. So what advice would you give a screenwriter wanting to break into the business?

Daniel Calvisi 52:30
Okay? Does it have to be one piece of advice, you can get two or three, go for it. Okay? Well read as many scripts as possible that you can get your hands on, you can download a lot of them online, you probably have friends that can send you the PDFs, read as many scripts as possible professional scripts, and break down or StoryMap as many films as possible, to really see how the professionals do it. You know, use those as templates. Don't just watch movies and think about them do written analysis of the movies, even do your own coverage reports, you know, do do a page or two of actual notes, commentary critique of an actual film. And maybe you want to take that professionally and become a reader, you know, but do written analysis, whether it's a beat sheet, or your own little essay about film, because it forces you to really take it apart, you know, to really think about that. Okay, where is the end of Act One? Is it 25 minutes? Or is it 30 minutes. And if you force yourself to decide on that and map it out, then you're really going to see how how these things work and really take them apart and see how they run.

Alex Ferrari 53:51
Perfect. Now, can you tell me? Can you tell me what book had the biggest impact on your life or career besides story maps? Of course.

Daniel Calvisi 54:00
Yes. Um, you know, I have to go back to Syd field screenplay, because I got that. I can't remember I think it was my senior year of high school actually. I think my mom found it or something and and that just was my the first time I even learned about feature film screenplay structure, you know, so that just really blew the doors open for me.

Alex Ferrari 54:24
Same here. When I read that book in college, I was just my mind was blown. Like what? Every movie is the same what it just it kind of blew my mind as well. What is the lesson that took you the longest to learn whether in the film business or in life?

Daniel Calvisi 54:39
Wow. Well, it's funny, I will say something that I'm learning now is I'm pursuing more the independent route with my own scripts and pilots. I'm working with friends to ideally produce my own work, you know, we're just Still in the development stage, but because it is really hard to if you only have a script to convince that studio production company, network, agency, whatever to take a chance on you, because it's just a script, you know, you don't have actors attached, you don't have financing behind you, you don't have a director attached audience, an audience built up anything an audience built up a track record. So I think I'm coming to the point where I'm just like, you know, what, got to do it yourself. You know, and I've been getting that note for the past 10 years. Even more, you know, especially with the dawn of YouTube, and all these streaming streaming services. Everyone keeps saying, do it yourself, do it yourself, you know, you, you can get your hands on a camera, that's, that's cinema quality. If an iPhone can shoot a movie, Now, anybody can shoot a movie, you know. Now, the problem with that is anybody can shoot a bad movie that's unprofessional and never sells, you know, and maybe goes to 10 film festivals, and you have to pay to travel to 10 film festivals. And before you're done, you're $20,000 in debt. But you know, let's look on the bright side. And say you're going to make a good movie, you know, that is going to go somewhere, or is just going to become your, your sizzle reel or resume to get you a good manager and a good agent and really get you moving. But I would say it's the do it yourself thing, you know, a script. A single great, awesome script should be enough. But the reality is, it's so competitive, that isn't always enough.

Alex Ferrari 56:43
I mean, the block, the blacklist is a good example of that how many amazing scripts are on the blacklist? And it's still hard?

Daniel Calvisi 56:49
Yeah, it's still hard for them to get produced, you know. But the only thing that you have, the only thing you need, the requirement you need to start is a great script. Okay. So if you're going to produce it yourself, for $10,000 and shoot it with your iPhone, you still need a great script. If you're going to sell it to Warner Brothers for $100,000, you still need a great script. You know, if you're going to attach an indie producer who has a track record, who won Sundance, you still need a great script. And that means you're going to have to spend years developing your craft, you know,

Alex Ferrari 57:26
Hmm. Well said, sir, well said. Now, what are three of your favorite films of all time?

Daniel Calvisi 57:33
Well, that's interesting, because I have, I always say, my two favorites, I can't choose which is my, I can't choose which is my number one favorite film. So I actually have three favorite films. They are Raiders of the Lost star, Goodfellas, and the Wizard of Oz

Alex Ferrari 57:52
great combo.

Daniel Calvisi 57:53
They're incredibly different films. I mean, you can't get any more different. You think, but, but they're so different. You know, I mean, they're so amazing that those are kind of my top three spots. And depending on how I'm feeling at the moment, one of them may be number one, or they may all three be number one, but yeah, got it. They're amazing.

Alex Ferrari 58:15
Now where can people find you and your work?

Daniel Calvisi 58:18
Well, you can find me at act for screenplays.com That's my homepage and that is a CT fo you are screenplays.com and you can learn about my consulting and you can get my books and you can get a lot of free advice and downloads and things like that. You can also sign up for my newsletter there, and I give out exclusive articles sometimes leads from producers, and sometimes free story maps through my newsletter. So you can learn about that. You can also learn about my story maps masterclass, which is an eight week program that begins with an eight week program where you develop a TV pilot or feature from the ground up from concept and logline straight through to a finished draft. You probably won't finish the eight weeks with a finished draft, but you'll definitely be on your way you'll probably finish with a rock solid story map, a great scene list, you know, comprehensive scene list and the first 10 to 30 pages of your screenplay. So then from there, you're armed to, to you're well on your way to creating a great script. And what's unique about a masterclass is that I bring in channels to actually give advice on your loglines and to actually do q&a conference calls with my writers to give them career advice as well. That's awesome. So let's say you're workshopping to log lines. You're not sure which one you're going to write. I'm going to give you notes. If it's a group class, your peers will give you notes and then these two industry professionals like right now I have a Former studio executive who was at the studio level, he was involved with films like Groundhog Day, great movie, Lord of the Rings, you know, so he was really top like President of Marketing at big companies like newline and MGM. And then I have a very successful screenwriter Jeffrey Radek, who is responsible for the final destination franchise. He's big in thrillers and horror. So these guys are going to give notes on concepts from my writers for my next for my next class. Awesome. So you get this feedback from these people who are executives, managers, assistants to agents, screenwriters, they've been in the business for a long time and they say you know what, this first logline sounds interesting, but this is more of a passion piece. This is not something that in the current marketplace from a newbie is really gonna go anywhere. But this second logline feels more commercial to me, although you maybe don't have all the elements worked out yet. So then you have this information, and you're going to decide whether you want to go with the first concept or the second concept. Very cool.

Alex Ferrari 1:01:06
That really helps. Well, Dan, man, thank you so much for being on the show. You've dropped a bunch of knowledge bombs on the indie film hustle tribe, so I truly appreciate your time.

Daniel Calvisi 1:01:16
Well, thank you. Thanks for having me on. My goal was to drop knowledge bombs.

Alex Ferrari 1:01:19
And you did sir.

Daniel Calvisi 1:01:22
That was achieved.

Alex Ferrari 1:01:24
I want to thank Dan for coming on and dropping those knowledge bombs on us and I hope you guys got something out of it, you know, after he's been reading just 1000s of screenplays. Over the course of his career. I think he has a decent grasp on story. And if you guys want to check out his books, just head over to the show notes at Indie film hustle.com forward slash BPS zero 27 for all the links to all of his work, and that does it for another episode. So as always, keep on writing no matter what. I'll talk to you soon. Thanks for listening to the bulletproof screenplay podcast at bulletproof screenplay.com That's B u ll e t e r o f s CR e n PLA y.com


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